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For the love of a son (Jacen, Luke, Mara, Ben) - author's notes and apology
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Gabri_Jade
Title: Fan Fiction Archive Editor Emeritus
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Nov '02
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7/28/07 7:07pm
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RE: For the love of a son (Jacen, Luke, Mara, Ben) - AU, short story - update 7/23/07
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I've been meaning to read this since you first started posting. Finally got a chance to catch up, and it was well worth the time. Can't wait to see what happens next. 
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MirandaFair
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Jun '05
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7/29/07 6:16pm
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RE: For the love of a son (Jacen, Luke, Mara, Ben) - AU, short story - update 7/23/07
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Well, first I'd like to congratulate you on your Saga award wins!  Very deserving. 
I've caught up and am enjoying this every stage of the way. This chapter was thrilling and I found I couldn't read/move my eyes fast enough to keep up with the action. The fight between Luke and Jacen gave such a physical response that I think I held my breath while reading some parts. Good news, I've gone back to breathing.  Excellent pacing, characterization, everything was flawless.
Wonderful, absolutely wonderful.
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furrylittlebantha
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7/30/07 5:22pm
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RE: For the love of a son (Jacen, Luke, Mara, Ben) - AU, short story - update 7/23/07
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In the words of a character on a movie I saw once: Vunderful, Vunderful, Vunderful! I am in awe of your ability not only to create a lush visual setting but to craft an action sequence so perfectly. I was sitting on the edge of my seat the entire time. It's worth the wait for updates like this!
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Tahi
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Jun '02
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8/6/07 11:49pm
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RE: For the love of a son (Jacen, Luke, Mara, Ben) - AU, short story - update 7/23/07
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Breathtaking evocation of the battle between Luke and Jacen - between good and evil personified.
His nephew scowled, glaring at him, seemingly furious at the impending defeat and then his face smoothed into calm decision. Letting his lightsaber slip lower, Luke's blade following the movement, Jacen did something unbelievably stupid... or brilliant.
He turned his saber off.
It was madness but it worked.
Caught off-guard, Luke shifted forward, startled, his lightsaber scoring along the floor, sending molten sparks flying. It also put him squarely into Jacen's path.
As the Force screamed a warning, time seemed to liquefy and it was all Luke could do to twist away, to keep from being skewered as Jacen turned his saber back on. Even at that, there was a small blossom of pain across one arm. Luke hadn't been quite fast enough.
Ignoring the burn, he flipped backward, kicking at the ceiling as he spun around. With perfect form, he pushed off in a different direction, using the momentum to escape his nephew's unrelenting attack. Luke landed some distance away and he retreated as quickly as he could, down toward the far end of the balcony.
Jacen followed, droid-stubborn, deliberate, seemingly determined to murder one of his own blood. The man was relentless, his blade whirling faster than the eye could follow - an infinity loop of deadly green light. And behind it all, his face was set into a feral mask, his eyes glowing molten-red in the shadows.
Yes - it's the calm, cold, automaton-like Jacen that is scarier than the angry one! Wow!
I liked the sense of history being repeated with the allusions to the Anakin-Obi fight.
In the Force, there was sudden frenzy as corruption poured into the currents, a roiling mixture of black desperation and filth. Poisonous shadow-clouds billowed, obscuring everything. Although he could not feel Jacen in the Force, Luke could almost see the power twisting around him - a noxious whirlpool of slime and gelled blood, shrouding him in darkness.
Fantastic - horrible, but fantastic.
What a battle! Luke did it! I was really worried there for a bit. Whew. That was a an excellent chapter and the descriptions were wonderful.
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divapilot
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Nov '05
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8/7/07 8:54am
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RE: For the love of a son (Jacen, Luke, Mara, Ben) - AU, short story - update 7/23/07
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Jacen followed, droid-stubborn, deliberate, seemingly determined to murder one of his own blood. The man was relentless, his blade whirling faster than the eye could follow - an infinity loop of deadly green light. And behind it all, his face was set into a feral mask, his eyes glowing molten-red in the shadows.
Jacen’s depiction here is perfect, something that I don’t think the pro-fic has really explored enough. Perhaps that’s the price of having so many authors working with the same character; they lose the nuances. Jacen is beyond human, like a man possessed. The “old” Jacen was absorbed and destroyed. This Jacen is more like something programmed.
And I love the expression “droid-stubborn” – what a perfect way to describe it.
As he gathered in the Force, hoping to overpower Jacen's strength with his own, both blades dipped low. Brilliant green light scoured across the floor, melting sun-hot trails in the surface and peppering the air with sparks and burning metal. Acrid vapor billowed out.
What a brilliant action sequence! I could not only picture this perfectly, but I could hear it and smell it, too. Incredible!
As to the characters, this parallels the Obi-Wan/Anakin battle on Mustafar but it has some very significant differences, as others have pointed out. Luke is part of the New Jedi Order, where his heart and his mind work together to try to find a solution that preserves life at all risks. Obi-Wan was a compassionate man, but he followed an Old order that told him there was no return. Luke won’t give up on Jacen, even when the man is torturing him and luring him to certain death.
It’s going to be interesting to see what Ben will make of this. His father is clearly the injured one here. Will Jacen try to twist it? Or admit what he was doing and try to justify it?
Blinking down at his useless lightsaber, and then at Luke, Jacen straightened, "You think you've won but the Sith will rise again."
Eerie reference to Mara’s words in Sacrifice.
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Irish_Jedi_Jade
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9/21/07 10:03pm
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RE: For the love of a son (Jacen, Luke, Mara, Ben) - AU, short story - update 7/23/07
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DUDE!!! Diane, that was awesome!!! Rather, i should say, that IS awesome!!! I'm dying for more...that is just too good for words! I don't know how I missed it, but hey the index is lovely, I get to find all these lovely fics!!
Oh please oh please, make it a happy ending!!! PLEASE!! Where ONLY Jacen gets his sorry sith rear kicked and then kicks the bucket. Preferably by Mara...but Luke can kill him too...as long as he dies. And have Ben give his parents a HUG!!!
I'm loving it!!! Why aren't YOU writing profic?!?!?!
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dawn7191
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9/22/07 2:01am
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RE: For the love of a son (Jacen, Luke, Mara, Ben) - AU, short story - update 7/23/07
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Oh I love this fic. Please,please,pretty please put me on your pm list.
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Jedi Trace
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Date Posted:
9/26/07 10:52pm
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RE: For the love of a son (Jacen, Luke, Mara, Ben) - AU, short story - update 7/23/07
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9/26/07 11:17pm (1 edits total)
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Incredible fight scene, there! That's one helluva scary Jacen.
Mara had been right. Fool that he was, he had walked right into it.
He wouldn't be our Luke if he hadn't tried to save him , but even in the GFFA men don't listen to their wives, lol.
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dianethx
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7/10 4:35pm
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RE: For the love of a son (Jacen, Luke, Mara, Ben) - AU, short story - update 7/23/07
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A very overdue apology….
The Fan fic peeves thread had a lot of posters who were quite upset with authors that didn't finish stories and just let the fics die. Considering that I also don't like it when stories were left hanging, I thought I should make a very, very overdue apology.
I honestly thought I'd be updating soon after my last post. But unfortunately, Sacrifice came out right about then and I lost the muse – big time. Then I figured I'd get it back eventually, certainly by Invincible. But the horror that was that book and the awful way the series ended (with two major characters dead and my favorite non-canon characters at that), I just couldn't. I did consider abandoning this story. I'd never done that before and it would have killed me but I did consider it. But I've already written the next half of a post and I do want to finish it.
I've enlisted the aid of the ever-lovely Tahi to help. However, I can't promise that I'll update it soon. But I will finish it. I will. But because of the long, overdue nature of it, I'm going to finish writing the story before I post any more. I think you've all been waiting far too long for a short post and then nothing again.
I'm really sorry.
Now to long, long, long-over due replies….
Terje_Lisan – Thanks so much. I'm glad you liked the fight. I'm also happy that I was able to get the character of Jacen down well. He's a bit of a hard one to get just right, for me. I'll put you on the PM list as requested.
VaderLVR64 - I'm glad you liked the fight. It was hard to write, too. I was exhausted after writing it. Thanks.
saber_death – Jacen is scary but he's also insane at the moment. I think the dark side has scrambled his brains. Thanks for commenting.
RebelMom – Thanks. Glad you liked the fight.
G_Anakin - Thanks.
Leona – Thanks. I'm not sure waiting a year is worth the wait in this case but I am happy that you liked it.
iamobiwan1970 – Thanks. I'm glad you liked it. Jacen is quite a wonderful villain to write, I must admit. Jacen is indeed crazier than Vader (although I think Anakin/Vader was pretty darn crazy at times). As for apprehending him, you are assuming that they will be able to. Thanks for reading.
azizah – Poor Luke indeed. He's always seen the better side of people and to be attacked by someone he'd known since he was a baby must have been quite a shock. Thanks.
Jade_eyes – Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Jedi-2B – LOL. Well, he isn't Grandmaster for nothing. Luke has a lot of strength, not just in his body but in his spirit. His hope and belief in people are the things that endear him to me. Thanks.
ginchy – A battle is over but Luke still has to get Jacen into custody. That might be a problem. Thanks. I'm glad the love came through.
Jade_Pilot – Thanks. I had fun writing the pair. Jacen and Luke are lovely characters to play around with. Thanks.
Flowerlady – Thanks. I'm just happy it worked for you. LOL on crazy Jacen. He is a bit insane at the moment. Of course, we shall see if Luke can get him back into the Light or not. Thanks for reading.
Itachi-Uchiha – I did really enjoy showing Luke in all his glory and his sadness at how things turned out. Glad you liked it.
Magier – The fight was fun to write. Luke was indeed desperate to reach Jacen, both physically and emotionally. As for Ben's reaction, it does look like Luke is at Jacen's throat so he might see things not as they are but as they look. Thanks.
Gabri_Jade – Glad you liked it. I just hope I can deliver the rest. Thanks.
MirandaFair – I'm happy that you were holding your breath during the fight. Just what I was looking for.! I like both characters so it was fun to play with them, putting them at odds with each other. Thanks.
furrylittlebantha – I'm happy that you enjoyed it. Action can be a lot of fun to write. Plus I like to add visuals to make the scene more intense. Thanks so much for commenting.
Tahi – you are such a wonderful person to help me out with this.
I tried to give a feeling of déjà vu with them returning to Mustafar and the use of some of the saber moves. I did want Jacen to feel colder and more droid-like, just to show off his insanity. Jacen was always a warm, caring individual and the LotF series really made him into a monster. Thanks so much for your help.
divapilot – This Jacen is really insane. He's shut down his emotions and is acting purely from intellect but a crazed intellect. The longer the series lasted, the worse it got, too.
I did want to parallel some of the fight scenes with Obi/Ani but as you said, Luke has his heart into trying to find a way to redeem Jacen where Obi-Wan was so devastated by what Anakin had done that there was little left for him to do but try and kill Anakin.
Ah, Ben is such an innocent in some ways. He sees what he wants to see and Jacen is a master at twisting things.
Thanks.
Irish_Jedi_Jade – LOL on the happy ending. Sometimes I write them and sometimes I don't. I can't promise that there will be a happy ending but I hope it will be better than the real ending. As to why I'm not writing profic, because I can't write that fast. And I lose my muse more than I would like. But thanks for the praise. I really appreciate it.
dawn7191 – I will put you on the PM list. Thanks.
Jedi Trace – Jacen is scary. Very scary. And you are right. Luke would be OOC if he didn't try to save Jacen. That was another of my complaints about LotF – Luke was soooo OOC in that regard. Thanks.
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Zardi
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8/31 10:01am
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Yay! I'm glad you're going to finish, even if it takes a little while. If you have a PM list, will you add me to it?
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it would be amazing if you would add me to the PM list as well
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dianethx
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9/3 6:07pm
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Zardi - thanks. You are on the list. I am working on it.
Allana_Djo_Solo - Thanks. You are on the PM list, too.
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9/9 1:42am
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Good to know that u'll update this great story...add me to the PM list please!
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