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Lonewolf89 Registered: Sep '01	Date Posted: 12/16/07 10:37pm Subject: In This Place - Date Edited: 12/20/07 8:22am (1 edits total) Edited By: Lonewolf89
	Title: In This Place Author(s): Lonewolf Timeframe: NJO Her skin is soft beneath his fingers. The scent of vanilla lingers on her body, filling his senses, lighting his mind with memories. Her body is lithe and strong in his arms. Her muscles are hardened by battle, and her curves are perfect and soft. Her hair is silky to the touch, and slides through his fingers like water. Golden and beautiful. He loves her hair. But the golden strands are disappearing into the pool of red. They're vanishing into the crimson liquid before his eyes, staining into rust colored locks. He clutches her to his body as a feeling rushes through him that he can't describe. It's something hot and desperate, and it's taking over his mind like the red that consumes her beautiful hair. Her eyes, those green eyes, stare at him lifelessly beneath long lashes. He realizes how many different colors make up her gaze; flecks of honey and grey are mixed within the emerald shade. Why hadn't he noticed that before? His grip tightens around her tiny form. Squeezing his eyes closed, he can almost making himself believe they're alone in the dark, tangled in the sheets of their bunk, whispering in the shadows. But, then he feels the warmth dripping out of her, sliding between his fingers, hot and sticky. He opens his eyes and he can see, for the first time, the chaos surrounding him. Fire has cast the valley in red. The sound of explosions rip through the air around him, and debris rain from the sky. For the first time since he saw the thud bug slam into her body, he feels his heart beat again... and then rip apart in his chest. Waves of agony crash into him, and suddenly, he's screaming. He's screaming and hurting and pulling her impossibly closer to him, desperate to feel some glimmer of life through their bond. But that light inside of his mind has flickered and died. The familiar hum of her thoughts had vanished. It wasn't supposed to be like this. She couldn't die. Others could. He could, but not her. Her heart couldn't stop. Her eyes couldn't fade. Her blood couldn't pour from her body like it had from so many others. "Anakin!!" He hears his sister's voice over the din of battle. Through the fire he sees her face, dirty and wild. "Anakin, we have to go!" Her words echo through him, and by instinct he responds. Hot tears streaming down his face, he forces himself to his feet. He holds her body in his arms like a sacrifice, a sacred thing. Through the fire fight, he carries her, oblivious to the pain shooting though his own exhausted body. All he can do now is carry her away; carry her away from the darkness and death of this place. She doesn't belong here. She made up all the light in his world. But now, he knows the darkness, the death that surrounds him will become all that he is. And, in a moment, he says goodbye to the scent of vanilla, and the warm feel of her skin. He says goodbye to his Tahiri. -----signature----- Nom Anor: I witnessed the death of perhaps the greatest of them all, the one called Anakin Solo. Anakin Solo: You want me to move? Come on and move me! Jacen: Count on Anakin to be the last Human to get out of Duro space alive. Member of the FADA & ATF
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Klimt_Of_Tornesdal Registered: Dec '99	Date Posted: 12/17/07 1:51am Subject: RE: In This Place
	Wow, powerful stuff, Wolf! Sad, but very moving, well done. -----signature----- "It's not, 'Oh, they killed Anakin Solo and I always loved that character,' it's 'Oh, they broke a story engine that could have told a thousand stories in order to publish a single 'important' one.'"
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Ceillean Title: Scattergories and 20 Questions Hostess Registered: Nov '01	Date Posted: 12/17/07 3:06am Subject: RE: In This Place
	Beautiful! Totally enjoyed this. -----signature----- All for one and one for all: JC MUSKETEER!! I claim Kyp Durron.
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Jade_eyes Registered: Aug '04	Date Posted: 12/17/07 4:13am Subject: RE: In This Place
	Powerfully heart-tugging. Bravo!! -----signature----- Spock/Nyota, woven forever together in gorgeous bonds of Nyota's "Cherished Moments" diary's gonna be hawt, hawt, melty! Squggles! [face_melting into 10 buckets!]
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VaderLVR64 Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 12/17/07 8:16am Subject: RE: In This Place
	It wasn't supposed to be like this. She couldn't die. Others could. He could, but not her. Her heart couldn't stop. Her eyes couldn't fade. Her blood couldn't pour from her body like it had from so many others. "Anakin!!" He hears his sister's voice over the din of battle. Through the fire he sees her face, dirty and wild. "Anakin, we have to go!" Her words echo through him, and by instinct he responds. Hot tears streaming down his face, he forces himself to his feet. He holds her body in his arms like a sacrifice, a sacred thing. Through the fire fight, he carries her, oblivious to the pain shooting though his own exhausted body. All he can do now is carry her away; carry her away from the darkness and death of this place. She doesn't belong her. She made up all the light in his world. But now, he knows the darkness, the death that surrounds him will become all that he is. And, in a moment, he says goodbye to the scent of vanilla, and the warm feel of her skin. He says goodbye to his Tahiri. Incredibly sad and moving. -----signature----- R.I.P John, Alex, Jason, and Christian Never forgotten Soldiers' Angels http://soldiersangels.org/ 2114 soldiers waiting for someone to care
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Lonewolf89 Registered: Sep '01	Date Posted: 12/19/07 9:33am Subject: RE: In This Place
	Klimt_Of_Tornesdal: bows Thank you. Ceillean: Thanks! Jade_eyes: VaderLVR64: Muchas Gracias! -----signature----- Nom Anor: I witnessed the death of perhaps the greatest of them all, the one called Anakin Solo. Anakin Solo: You want me to move? Come on and move me! Jacen: Count on Anakin to be the last Human to get out of Duro space alive. Member of the FADA & ATF
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Kidan Title: TFN EU Staff Registered: Jul '03	Date Posted: 12/19/07 10:28am Subject: RE: In This Place
	sad, powerful, and all too brief. Great job, Lonewolf!! can we hope for more? -----signature----- You sadistic Yank!! - McEwok http://www.TheExpandedUniverse.com Don't blame me, I voted for Ron Paul
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mara_jade_rox Registered: Jun '07	Date Posted: 12/19/07 2:24pm Subject: RE: In This Place
	Powerful. I like it. MJR -----signature----- What happens when everyone you love leaves? Do you waste your time grieving? Do you love others? Even when the don't love you? What happens?
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TheOnlyJediPrincess Registered: Jul '06	Date Posted: 12/19/07 5:21pm Subject: RE: In This Place
	Wow!...that was very emotional! Excellent job! -----signature----- "The truth is always greater then the words we choose to describe it." http://jediseeker1.deviantart.com/ http://boards.theforce.net/fan_art/b10020/24991271/p5/?120 Padawan to Aiel The Key http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/27627057/p1/?7
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Tahi Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 12/19/07 8:59pm Subject: RE: In This Place
	Lovely - although heart-wrenching. She made up all the light in his world. So true, so true. And vice versa. Another nice little snippet, Lonewolf. -----signature----- "To every thing there is a season, and a time to every purpose under the heaven." Ecclesiastes 3:1 Master to THE_PIED_PIPER
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Jade_Pilot Registered: Dec '05	Date Posted: 1/11/08 11:37am Subject: RE: In This Place
	Oh my land! That was heartbreaking and wonderful. I love your writing style! Bravo! -----signature----- BOO!
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Maggy Registered: Oct '04	Date Posted: 6/26/08 2:11pm Subject: RE: In This Place
	that was heart wrenching! awesome catch of the emotions -----signature----- The Revenant - http://boards.theforce.net/a/b10477/28313064 - co authored with Jedi Ant "Maggy rawks " - YodaKenbi Proud Recipient of the Golden Elegos™
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iamobiwan1970 Registered: Aug '05	Date Posted: 6/26/08 2:58pm Subject: RE: In This Place
	Very beautiful (but sad) imagery! -----signature----- Whatever tomorrow brings, I'll be there, with open arms and open eyes.
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Ubersue Registered: Sep '08	Date Posted: 10/4/08 12:28am Subject: RE: In This Place
	I just found this fic and I love it! Her skin is soft beneath his fingers. The scent of vanilla lingers on her body, filling his senses, lighting his mind with memories. Her body is lithe and strong in his arms. Her muscles are hardened by battle, and her curves are perfect and soft. Her hair is silky to the touch, and slides through his fingers like water. Golden and beautiful. He loves her hair. I love this passage in particular. Just gorgeous. It captures how time seems to have stopped for Anakin in his moment of trauma, and how for this one moment he can hover in denial. A wonderful vignette. The title caught my eye too, being so stark and evocative, and I think it suits the fic perfectly. I'm looking forward to reading more of your stuff! -----signature----- "A friend of mine once sent me a post card with a picture of the entire planet Earth taken from space. On the back it said, 'Wish you were here.'" - Steven Wright Proud Padawan of Kurdt_Kobain!
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Jastal Registered: Aug '08	Date Posted: 10/5/08 12:15am Subject: RE: In This Place
	Beautifully written. So sad, so emotionaly powerful....Amazing.
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