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melino
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RE: Fly Well: The Rise of Jagged Fel (Post LotF Spec.) Chap. V Posted 05/16
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absolutly beautiful post!!! Every aspect was perfect  I'm so happy they worked through their issues and Luke and Jaina's conversation was very special as well! Excellent work!
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 That was absolutely beautiful!
The Luke/Jaina scene was precious. I think they ought to have a lot closer relationship than so far in cannon. You have done an awesome job portraying how alike they are. And especially with Mara gone, I imagine they would have gotten a lot closer. Jaina needed that emotional release, the connection that Luke had with Caedus in his last moments. And Luke definitely knows what he's talking about. Hope Jaina truly listens.
Loved Leia's reaction to Jag. It was a perfect synopsis, brilliantly done. I love how understanding she is. And then to Jag's introspection. It was so accurate! Sad, but true, and awesome, and very profound.
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
The changes his life had taken and the speed at which it had happened had been unnerving for even him. He would have never thought this to be his destiny. After Davin's death all he had wanted to do was fly claw-craft for the rest of his life…forever on the horizon, burning faceless enemies from the cockpit.
That dream was now dead like so many others.
WOW! Amazing..
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
He would leave the beard. He knew that the clean shaven young man from his youth was gone and would remain hidden for the rest of his life, just like his face. He might as well be honest about it; he had had enough pretending for a lifetime.
Heartbreaking...yet necessary. Beutiful job.
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
It wasn’t plain strategy like the Chiss Military Academy where the best and the brightest were taught. No, life wasn’t like that at all, and that was one thing he had not been prepared for. He had not been prepared to allow himself to feel…because that had never been allowed.
You only react to aggression, not feelings or passion. Those were only to be appreciated. That’s why he had failed Jaina for so many years because she was nothing but passion. That’s why she had chosen to leave his bed all of those years ago after the Yuuzhan Vong war. She had just hid it behind the excuse of duty.
It was because he had been inadequate in dealing with her emotions and feelings and her utter devastation after the Myrkr mission, even though he had desperately tried to understand and be supportive of her.
It was different now.
His child that she lost had taught him that.
Now he got it.
He finally understood her.
And there it is!! Wow, deep...so deep. It is amazing when you can pull off such...psychoanalysis...and it be so completely dead-on. This is AMAZING!   
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
When he looked in the mirror he didn’t see the man he had planned to be. Somewhere along the line he had slipped off track. He had lost his focus and his purpose, but he would have them back. He would find another way and destiny had given him another calling even if he sometimes didn’t think he could bear it.
Another amazing passage...how do you get this deep?! Anyway, I love the way he reviews all this. Its one of those "you can't escape destiny" things. amazing...
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
He had attempted to sleep for weeks day in and day out in the chair beside Jaina’s bed to very little avail, and he certainly hadn’t rested since he had quarreled with her. He thought he might never find true rest again, but then he looked at her and he knew that he would.
“I love you…I always will,” he said as he buried his face in her long dark hair and closed his eyes finally finding rest.
Awww Beautiful! and perfect line...
 That dream was awful yet wonderful at the same time. Powerful vision.
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
So she would resort to the second phase. Gently she began to tickle him directly under his arms and around his navel. Jag was very ticklish and she was probably the only person in the galaxy who knew that. She didn't have to wait long for the results.
"Stop it Jay."
"Awe, you're awake."
"I am now...thanks a lot." He said sleepily as he started to rub his eyes and he gently yawned. He laid there staring at the ceiling and then after a long moment he looked out the window, "Day break, I love it." He then got out of the bed, and as had always been his custom, walked over to the window to watch the horizon.
Jaina turned in the bed and just watched him standing there with his legs spread apart and his hands fastened behind his back. He was, of course, shirtless and his sleep shorts stopped just before his knees. She grinned, not a bad morning view at all.
He turned, smiled at her, winked and then turned back around. She started to giggle at him as he turned around again. This time he held out his hand "Watch the dawn with me?"
She pulled her half of the blanket back and got up, putting her hand in his. He took her under his arm and brought her to stand in front of him, bending down and placing his chin on the top of her head.
perfectly romantic . And extra sweet considering the circumstances.
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
"Jaina, I'm sorry about the other day," he said as he turned her to face him.
He paused then ever so slightly but Jaina knew he was fixing to say something profound. "I was never taught...it was expected that you would not show emotion, or at least only when it was beneficial to the cause… to the whole. You put the Ascendancy first, above all else including family. You don't allow yourself to feel pain or despair you send it away... you kill it...you control it, not the other way around.
Very different from the Yuuzhan Vong who embrace it or your own Jedi upbringing where your taught to accept it and have no reaction to it. I...somewhere along the way I put you above it all Jaina. I allowed the pain you've caused me to create a rage in me. I'm trying to learn to control it. Do you understand?"
Very nice apology, Jag that's the way to do it. Anyway, the way Jag is hesitating, almost unsure of how to say, makes it all the more moving. I love it. And I love how they are understanding each other more.
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
She looked at him then, noticing the sorrow on his face and she knew that she was responsible for much of it. But she was also responsible for the joy that she saw in his eyes when he looked at her. Maybe that’s what her uncle had meant by people who love each other hurting each other.
ohh, the maturity in that observation...
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
"Yes, I understand Jag. You had a right to those feelings but you need to know that you hurt no worse than I do. You're my rock Jag, my harbor in the tempest you always have been and you always will be. I'm truly sorry for the pain I've caused you. It was never my intent, even if that doesn't change anything."
And I'm very glad that Jaina apologized too...i mean they both have so much...baggage...idk. Brilliant.
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
He placed his forehead against hers, "It's forgotten. We shall start new Jaina...a new life of our own even if it can never be completely our own."
Aww Sweet, perfect, awesome!
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
"Will you marry me?"
She looked into his eyes. This time she allowed love to govern her answer not duty. "Yes," she said, "I will."
 YES! About time!! And beautifully done!
...  I am in awe of your talent....
That was absolutely beautiful, powerful, moving...and so incredibly accurate. Very, very nice post!!
I think that's about all I can say 
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Wow. Just wow.
I pretty much have nothing else to say. I'm speechless. That was probably the best thing you've ever written. Like... just wow.
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Jaina_and_Jag posted:
Wow. Just wow.
I pretty much have nothing else to say. I'm speechless. That was probably the best thing you've ever written. Like... just wow.
^Agreed * 50
Dana
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FIRST BEFORE I REPLY: ANYONE WHO HAS NOT READ INVINCIBLE GO OUT AND BUY IT IMMEDIATELY!!
I truely believe it is the best Star Wars novel ever written: It's better than Conquest, it's better than Shatterpoint, it's better than Fury, it's better than The Last Command.
And, yes, it's better than the novelization of Revenge of the Sith, and that is something I didn't think that I would ever say.
The book is simply awesome.
canadianjedimama posted:
First!
canadianjedimama posted:
See, nagging gets results! Kick, I can only imagine the racket in your basement right now....Tell those boys to pipe down, cause you have one mother-wicked book to be reading!
No, frigging joke! Hah finished, and I'm so pumped I don't know that I can sleep tonight anyway. So I'll let them drink their Irish beer, play their silly game and bang on the drum sets.
canadianjedimama posted:
INVINCIBLE RULES!!!!!!
Yeah, see my above comment. 
canadianjedimama posted:
Ahem...  sorry about that. I'm still composing my review for Lit...but I just re-read it, so I'm on fire right now.
Lit? Oh, good Lord. I'll pray for you. Give 'em hell Cyn. Give 'em hell.
canadianjedimama posted:
Anyways...hey looky...a post!
Love the introspection from both Jaina and Jag here. Very authentic.
canadianjedimama posted:
Brava, Kick'ika.
jadesabre75 posted:
That needs a tissue alert my dear.
Sorry, Chris. *hands tissue to Chris*
jadesabre75 posted:
I loved how she did the normal things with Allana. That was so sweet and probably just what she needed.
Yeah, I thought that important for both of them. Especially given the situation in canon, which I'll bring into tote when spoiler warning is lifted.
jadesabre75 posted:
Ah. The voice of reason. Enter, Luke Skywalker!
No, freaking joke! I'm on such a Luke Skywalker high right now......*explodes*
jadesabre75 posted:
"I doubt that, Jaina. I think he just needs some time and that’s understandable. He sat by your bedside nearly unmoving for over a month, if that’s not love and devotion I've never seen it."
Amen! Can I get a witness!?
Here, here...
jadesabre75 posted:
OMG I was practically bawling! Thank God Jake was asleep, he would have been freaking out.
Yeah, I wanted Jaina's split with the Jedi which will eventually have to happen in canon to be profound. However, I don't think it has to be..or will be, for that matter... an angry thing. See what I'm saying? 
jadesabre75 posted:
Loved Leia's gentle castising of Jag.
Awe man...LEIA ROCKS MY SOCKS!!!!!!!!
Please, once again, go buy Invincible now if you haven't.
Man, I'm just pumped. [face_pumped]
jadesabre75 posted:
Now he got it.
He finally understood her.
Hallelujah! 
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“I love you…I always will,” he said as he buried his face in her long dark hair and closed his eyes finally finding rest.
Welcome to reality Captain Obvious.
*laughs* Yeah, I suppose so. Although Jag isn't on the level of denial that Jaina is.
jadesabre75 posted:
Bad dream! Bad! 
*nods*
jadesabre75 posted:
So she would resort to the second phase. Gently she began to tickle him directly under his arms and around his navel. Jag was very ticklish and she was probably the only person in the galaxy who knew that. She didn't have to wait long for the results.
"Stop it Jay."
"Awe, you're awake."
Love it! So sweet!
Aye.
jadesabre75 posted:
He turned, smiled at her, winked and then turned back around. She started to giggle at him as he turned around again. This time he held out his hand "Watch the dawn with me?"
*nods*
jadesabre75 posted:
"Will you marry me?"
She looked into his eyes. This time she allowed love to govern her answer not duty. "Yes," she said, "I will."
Yeah baby!
jadesabre75 posted:
Awesome Job Piper! I so wish this was canon!
*laughs* Yeah, I know. As far as J/J in canon? I can take the wait....it won't be long.
melino posted:
absolutly beautiful post!!! Every aspect was perfect
Thank you Melino, that means alot to me. And thank you so much for reading and the reply.
melino posted:
I'm so happy they worked through their issues
*nods* Me to. Jag is an incredibly stable solid person. He has been since he walked on stage in Ruin. I think it's like Aaron Allston said, that Jag and Jaina are just very different but thats what makes them work...like Han and Leia. I think it's just a matter of them getting to the point where they can understand that about each other.
They will be unstopable. 
melino posted:
and Luke and Jaina's conversation was very special as well! Excellent work!
Thank you. I needed to relay that Jaina had the support and love of her family through all of this which was extremely important to her being as though what happened with Jacen and then the loss of her child.
Jedimaster_JainaSolo posted:
That was absolutely beautiful!
Thank you Dana.
Jedimaster_JainaSolo posted:
The Luke/Jaina scene was precious. I think they ought to have a lot closer relationship than so far in cannon. You have done an awesome job portraying how alike they are. And especially with Mara gone, I imagine they would have gotten a lot closer.
Oh, yes, absolutely. Jaina now has the admiration and respect for Luke that Anakin once did.
Jedimaster_JainaSolo posted:
Jaina needed that emotional release, the connection that Luke had with Caedus in his last moments.
Exactly, which is why I did it. Thank you Dana as always your insight is spot on.
Jedimaster_JainaSolo posted:
And Luke definitely knows what he's talking about. Hope Jaina truly listens.
*nods* Touche.
Jedimaster_JainaSolo posted:
Loved Leia's reaction to Jag. It was a perfect synopsis, brilliantly done.
I wanted the scene between them to be powerful but in a subtle way.
Jedimaster_JainaSolo posted:
I love how understanding she is.
Once again: LEIA RULES!!!!!!!!
Jedimaster_JainaSolo posted:
And then to Jag's introspection. It was so accurate! Sad, but true, and awesome, and very profound.
Thank you. I tried to be true to him as I see him. The thing is we haven't gotten alot from Fel's POV...so you kind of have to go on his character...his essence.
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THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
The changes his life had taken and the speed at which it had happened had been unnerving for even him. He would have never thought this to be his destiny. After Davin's death all he had wanted to do was fly claw-craft for the rest of his life…forever on the horizon, burning faceless enemies from the cockpit.
That dream was now dead like so many others.
WOW! Amazing..
Jedimaster_JainaSolo posted:
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
He would leave the beard. He knew that the clean shaven young man from his youth was gone and would remain hidden for the rest of his life, just like his face. He might as well be honest about it; he had had enough pretending for a lifetime.
Heartbreaking...yet necessary. Beutiful job.
Yeah, I wanted to use Jag's beard as symbolism for what has come and is to come.
I hope it worked.
Jedimaster_JainaSolo posted:
And there it is!! Wow, deep...so deep. It is amazing when you can pull off such...psychoanalysis...and it be so completely dead-on. This is AMAZING!
Thank you Dana, you're far too kind.
*deep breath*
I've read every book Jag has been featured in the last month. I just wrote this as I thought this man would see things...experience things. That, and I'm a very emotional person so I can relate to people on alot of different levels. My husband will tell you thats not always a good thing, and I'm sure he's right. Like Jag...he usually is.
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THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
When he looked in the mirror he didn’t see the man he had planned to be. Somewhere along the line he had slipped off track. He had lost his focus and his purpose, but he would have them back. He would find another way and destiny had given him another calling even if he sometimes didn’t think he could bear it.
Another amazing passage...how do you get this deep?! Anyway, I love the way he reviews all this. Its one of those "you can't escape destiny" things. amazing...
Exactly!  That's the point I wanted to get across.
Jagged Fel will due his duty...Jagged Fel will live his destiny even if it's not what he might have always wanted.
As far as getting deep? I just tried to get in his head. You have to consider Chiss culture and society in which he was raised and the times in which he grew up and his experiences in the YV War and afterwards. Then you just have to look at the person he is and make a judgement call on what this man might think and why he would think that way based on the above factors. And what he thinks will govern what he will do.
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THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
He had attempted to sleep for weeks day in and day out in the chair beside Jaina’s bed to very little avail, and he certainly hadn’t rested since he had quarreled with her. He thought he might never find true rest again, but then he looked at her and he knew that he would.
“I love you…I always will,” he said as he buried his face in her long dark hair and closed his eyes finally finding rest.
Awww Beautiful! and perfect line...
Awe, yes it is a very pretty line and one of my favorites, but I can't the credit for it. It belongs to Mr. Troy Denning.
Jedimaster_JainaSolo posted:
That dream was awful yet wonderful at the same time. Powerful vision.
*nods*
Jedimaster_JainaSolo posted:
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
So she would resort to the second phase. Gently she began to tickle him directly under his arms and around his navel. Jag was very ticklish and she was probably the only person in the galaxy who knew that. She didn't have to wait long for the results.
"Stop it Jay."
"Awe, you're awake."
"I am now...thanks a lot." He said sleepily as he started to rub his eyes and he gently yawned. He laid there staring at the ceiling and then after a long moment he looked out the window, "Day break, I love it." He then got out of the bed, and as had always been his custom, walked over to the window to watch the horizon.
Jaina turned in the bed and just watched him standing there with his legs spread apart and his hands fastened behind his back. He was, of course, shirtless and his sleep shorts stopped just before his knees. She grinned, not a bad morning view at all.
He turned, smiled at her, winked and then turned back around. She started to giggle at him as he turned around again. This time he held out his hand "Watch the dawn with me?"
She pulled her half of the blanket back and got up, putting her hand in his. He took her under his arm and brought her to stand in front of him, bending down and placing his chin on the top of her head.
perfectly romantic . And extra sweet considering the circumstances.
Yeah, I liked it.
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THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
"Jaina, I'm sorry about the other day," he said as he turned her to face him.
He paused then ever so slightly but Jaina knew he was fixing to say something profound. "I was never taught...it was expected that you would not show emotion, or at least only when it was beneficial to the cause… to the whole. You put the Ascendancy first, above all else including family. You don't allow yourself to feel pain or despair you send it away... you kill it...you control it, not the other way around.
Very different from the Yuuzhan Vong who embrace it or your own Jedi upbringing where your taught to accept it and have no reaction to it. I...somewhere along the way I put you above it all Jaina. I allowed the pain you've caused me to create a rage in me. I'm trying to learn to control it. Do you understand?"
Very nice apology, Jag that's the way to do it. Anyway, the way Jag is hesitating, almost unsure of how to say, makes it all the more moving. I love it. And I love how they are understanding each other more.
It was important to me for Jaina to understand why he had reacted the way he did because that was out of character for him. Remember though Jag the reaction he had on the Falcon did change him...it will prepare him for whats ahead.
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THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
She looked at him then, noticing the sorrow on his face and she knew that she was responsible for much of it. But she was also responsible for the joy that she saw in his eyes when he looked at her. Maybe that’s what her uncle had meant by people who love each other hurting each other.
ohh, the maturity in that observation...
*nods* That is especially true considering the source.
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THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
"Yes, I understand Jag. You had a right to those feelings but you need to know that you hurt no worse than I do. You're my rock Jag, my harbor in the tempest you always have been and you always will be. I'm truly sorry for the pain I've caused you. It was never my intent, even if that doesn't change anything."
And I'm very glad that Jaina apologized too...i mean they both have so much...baggage...idk. Brilliant.
Yes, Jay needed to apoligize as well...for alot of things.
Jedimaster_JainaSolo posted:
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
He placed his forehead against hers, "It's forgotten. We shall start new Jaina...a new life of our own even if it can never be completely our own."
Aww Sweet, perfect, awesome!
Thank you Dana.
Jedimaster_JainaSolo posted:
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
"Will you marry me?"
She looked into his eyes. This time she allowed love to govern her answer not duty. "Yes," she said, "I will."
YES! About time!! And beautifully done!
Thank you. It was mirrored after Mara's answer in VotF!
Jedimaster_JainaSolo posted:
... I am in awe of your talent....
 
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Jedimaster_JainaSolo posted:
That was absolutely beautiful, powerful, moving...and so incredibly accurate. Very, very nice post!!
I think that's about all I can say
Awe, I'm so glad that you liked it. Thank you Dana!
Jedimaster_JainaSolo posted:
Dana
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Jaina_and_Jag posted:
Wow. Just wow.
Becky Rules!!
Jedimaster_JainaSolo posted:
I pretty much have nothing else to say. I'm speechless. That was probably the best thing you've ever written. Like... just wow.
Keep your boyfriend in line.
As always thank you for reading Becky, it means so much to me.
Jedimaster_JainaSolo posted:
Jaina_and_Jag posted:
Wow. Just wow.
I pretty much have nothing else to say. I'm speechless. That was probably the best thing you've ever written. Like... just wow.
^Agreed * 50
Dana
Oh stop that now you.
Thanks for the wonderful replies everyone. This chapter meant alot to me and I really hope everyone enjoyed it. Have a wonderful weekend; good golf, good tennis or whatever makes you happy.
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RE: Fly Well: The Rise of Jagged Fel (Post LotF Spec.) Chap. V Posted 05/16
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Sorry double post.  It was late and I was tired and distracted.
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It was worth waiting for this post
Great stuff
But that Dream or Vision was scary 
I'll wait for Invincible when it shows up as a paperback. 26$ for a 299 page book is way too much for my wallet, no matter how good the book is.
BTW Aaron Allston quote you mentioned earlier can be read in my signature
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Great chapter.
You have them all characterized so well.
How are Han and Soontir getting along, I can't wait to see how Valin is fairing.
I just finished Invincible I like your way better.
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THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
Ultima_1 posted:
I shouldn't laugh, because I've found myself in Valin's place more times than I can count,
Oh, really?  
What I meant was that I have trouble expressing myself when I'm attracted to someone.
Now on to this chapter. The Luke/Jaina scene was touching, especially her wondering if she was the one who had struck the final blow.
I'm glad that Jag and Jaina realized that he had just needed to blow off some steam.
The vision was kind of creepy, but made sense at the same time.
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YAY!!
I read this just before I turned off my computer last night. Then I came back this morning to read again.
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
Jaina Solo sat in her bed staring out the window of her med-ward room.
She had received many visitors that afternoon and they all had lifted her spirits. She had seen her parents of course, Tenel Ka and under very heavy guard, her niece.
Jaina had sat and drawn pictures with Allana and tied bows in her hair.
This is so sweet and fitting. Didn't Jaina braid Chewy's fur when she was little?
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
Her niece was pure and perfect. Jaina decided that she represented everything that was good in the universe. However she had still not seen Jag. He had not come back after their fight.
Yes, Allana does and I hope it stays that way.
Jag.
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
Her parents had assured her that he had not left the planet but that his parents had arrived and he had been in meeting after meeting with his father and many others. Or maybe, she thought he just didn't want to see her. Maybe, he didn't care anymore, she had cost him a son, and she could understand that.
She began to cry. Tears were not that unusual for her these days.
Damn...this is just what any woman would be feeling right now. She needs her man AT HER SIDE.
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
Clighal had told her that morning that due to the amount of damage her insides had taken when she hemorrhaged and miscarried, she would be left with horrific scar tissue, that even Jedi healing techniques could not completely eliminate. Her and Jag's chances of conceiving naturally were now greatly reduced.
"Naturally" being the keyword. <whew!> Baby Fel or Fel's are a must.
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
She was just as destructive to the people that loved her as her grandfather and brother, only in a different way. She angrily swiped the tears from her eyes. Maybe it was for the best, she'd probably be just as rotten of a mother as she was a lover.
No, don't think that!!
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
"I don't think that would be the case at all. Don't you even think that, Jaina."
Jaina jumped slightly in her bed and looked up to see her Uncle Luke standing there with flowers. He grinned, "I heard yours weren't very fresh anymore, so here are some fresh ones, Mara's favorite."
Right on time Master Skywalker to the rescue. I love how you write Jaina and Luke together. Am I making sense? You are able to
make them actually feel like Luke and Jaina and not a different "version" of Luke and Jaina. I need more caffeine I guess.
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
Luke was rewarded with a smile as she recognized the beautiful red velvet looking flowers that her aunt had loved so much and always kept about.
"Thank you Uncle Luke," she said taking them and then holding them up to her nose and inhaling deeply. "Lovely, just what I needed."
Reminders of Mara are all over the place. So sweet...
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
"I'm glad," he said and took the chair beside her bed. He was thoughtful for a moment as if not quite sure how to say what he wanted to. Jaina knew what was coming and sat quietly for it. Softly Luke said, "Sweetheart why didn't you tell anyone you were pregnant?"
"It wouldn't have changed anything Uncle Luke. I still had to go, I was the only one who could." She nearly began to cry again but somehow managed to choke back the tears and continued. "It was the most horrific choice I ever had to make, but I know it was the only one I really had, and I'll live with the consequences for the rest of my life. I'm afraid it may have cost me Jag for good this time."
"I doubt that, Jaina. I think he just needs some time and that’s understandable. He sat by your bedside nearly unmoving for over a month, if that’s not love and devotion I've never seen it."
This is why I love Luke. He got his point across without making her feel worse. Even though he is all powerful
Luke is still such a gentle man.
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
"He was waiting for me to wake up so he could give me a piece of his mind."
Luke frowned at his niece, "No, that wasn't it. I saw the look on his face and in his eyes. He loves you...I know."
More likely he was out of his mind with worry.
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
She smiled at him and then turned thoughtful herself, "Uncle Luke can I ask you something?"
"Of course Jaina you can ask me anything."
She took a deep breath, "How was he in the end? Darth Caedus, I mean...what was he like? I'm sorry, normally I wouldn't ask you to relive that, but I must know."
Luke Skywalker took a deep breath, "He died in my arms Jaina, he said to tell you that he was sorry. At that point it was complete insanity, and a void that just overtook his soul."
She blurted out, "Yeah sure he was sorry." She felt her anger and hatred rise. Blowing a breath out, she purged the emotions from her mind. "Do you think he found redemption?"
"I hope so, Jaina...Force, I hope so." The Jedi Grand Master then took a deep breath and took his nieces hands.
So sad...did I mention you do such good work Kick?
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
“It wasn’t you was it Uncle Luke?”
She didn’t wait for an answer, “it was me who gave the final blow wasn’t it?” But Jaina didn't need to hear him say anything because she knew.
Luke Skywalker looked at his niece, his emotions showing nothing in the Force, “Jaina I want you to promise me something. I want you to let it go…all of it. I want you to go with Jag and build your own life and leave the tragedies and pain behind you and serve the Force well. You have a destiny Jaina, and it will take you away from the Jedi Order. Don’t fight it…accept it.
“Uncle Luke...”
He tightened his grip on her hands, “Promise me. Promise me that you’ll go and not look back Jaina. Don’t look back.”
Jaina knew that she would never forget the look on her Uncles face. The acceptance, the pain and the finality of it all was written in the lines on his face.
“Yes, Uncle Luke, I will.”
Very nice. Nothing else I can say about that except everything I said before applies double.
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
Even then Leia had known it was nothing more than a joke. There had only been one man who had ever held the heart of Jaina Solo.
She had felt her daughter’s knees go weak and her pulse rate rise the first time she had laid eyes on him all those years ago on the Tafanda Bay. All Jaina had spoken about for days is how she wanted to meet the Chiss leader who kept shooting her down in the sims.
That night, he had walked through the door like he owned the universe leading the Chiss pilot’s up to the dais. He had bypassed Borsk Fey’lya, walking straight over to Jaina without flinching and introducing himself. His green eyes had burned with passion and intelligence that night as he stared Jaina down to the core of her soul, causing her cheeks to flush. His eyes still burned like that, even if the tragedies that he had endured had slightly aged his handsome face.
In spite of his privileged upbringing and education, he was somehow completely unspoiled and level headed. Some said he was arrogant and standoffish, Leia didn’t think so. She saw it more as a quiet subtle strength that wasn’t overly trusting of anyone. He couldn’t afford to be and that would only become more so in the years to come.
Never doubt Leia!
My daughter is reading Ruin right now and she squealed when that part came up. It was what she was waiting for. It's one of those moments that will live on like how people recall where they were when Kennedy was shot...except in Star Wars. "Where were you when
Jag met Jaina on the Tafanda Bay and the world stod still?"
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
“She's been asking for you for days now.” Leia said, as she gave the young man a reproving look.
“I came soon as I could.”
She gave him another look of reproach and said, “The conferences must have been busy. I’ll leave you alone, goodnight.”
Just like her brother! She can get her point across with a few gentle words...powerful!
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
He went into the fresher to remove his clothes and prepare for bed. A wise young Chiss had once told him that Thrawn would have been impressed with him. He snorted at the irony of that and wondered what it even meant anymore. Somehow he thought Thrawn would be amused at Jag’s lifelong obsession with him, and the path that it had now ultimately set him on.
Love this!
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
He had not asked for any of it. He had been prepared to allow his father and younger brother to carry forward with the plans. He would have been happy to remain in a supportive role bringing about justice in the military as he had promised to do the night Jaina lay dying on the Milleniumm Falcon.
However, fate had twisted and the Jedi and Moff's had asked him to serve before his father had even arrived. To refuse would bring dishonor on his family, and he could not do that. He would not do that.
Another example of Jag's greatness...never arrogant, just greatness.
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
He removed his clothing and stepped under the sani-stream, allowing the boiling hot water that was his preference to wash over him. He sponged off with Corellian Spring and continued to stand, allowing the water to run over his face.
How can Jaina be that sound asleep?? I would have to peek...never can get enough you know.
LOL on the Corellian Spring.
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
You only react to aggression, not feelings or passion. Those were only to be appreciated. That’s why he had failed Jaina for so many years because she was nothing but passion. That’s why she had chosen to leave his bed all of those years ago after the Yuuzhan Vong war. She had just hid it behind the excuse of duty.
It was because he had been inadequate in dealing with her emotions and feelings and her utter devastation after the Myrkr mission, even though he had desperately tried to understand and be supportive of her.
It was different now.
His child that she lost had taught him that.
Now he got it.
He finally understood her.
Good. They can each take responsibility and no get on with being a couple for good.
THE-PIED_PIPER posted:
“I love you…I always will,” he said as he buried his face in her long dark hair and closed his eyes finally finding rest.
<sigh> This is how it should be.
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
She knew that Jag spoke the young man’s name, but the Force wouldn’t allow her to hear it. However, she could hear the young man as he spoke, "I'll not leave you grandfather. I'll not leave you." And with that he wiped the blood from Jag's face and turned around.
Jaina's heart stopped. The young man that stood in the vision was the mere image of her father in his youth and his ice-blue eyes burned with the same blue fire that Anakin's once had.
His hair was the same black as Jag's had been and he even had a white shock in the exact same place in his hair line. The young man had a cold rage on his face and he ignited a light saber that burned true white light. He screamed to the unseen assassins, "Die in the name of the Emperor!"
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
She looked to her right and he was there sleeping soundly, peacefully and he was young again. He was on his back with his arms spread out at full length taking up way more than his half of the bed.
 Men, but we love'em.
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
Jaina turned in the bed and just watched him standing there with his legs spread apart and his hands fastened behind his back. He was, of course, shirtless and his sleep shorts stopped just before his knees. She grinned, not a bad morning view at all.
Nice view...
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
He turned, smiled at her, winked and then turned back around. She started to giggle at him as he turned around again. This time he held out his hand "Watch the dawn with me?"
It's all going to be OK.
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
She looked at him then, noticing the sorrow on his face and she knew that she was responsible for much of it. But she was also responsible for the joy that she saw in his eyes when he looked at her. Maybe that’s what her uncle had meant by people who love each other hurting each other.
"Yes, I understand Jag. You had a right to those feelings but you need to know that you hurt no worse than I do. You're my rock Jag, my harbor in the tempest you always have been and you always will be. I'm truly sorry for the pain I've caused you. It was never my intent, even if that doesn't change anything."
He placed his forehead against hers, "It's forgotten. We shall start new Jaina...a new life of our own even if it can never be completely our own."
She rubbed her nose against his and said, "It sounds perfect."
"Will you marry me?"
She looked into his eyes. This time she allowed love to govern her answer not duty. "Yes," she said, "I will."
Well worth the wait Kick. I just loved it and will probably read it a few more times.
I like where you are taking Jag, he is as strong and powerful as a Jedi...just in a different way. Thank you.
Hope you have a great Saturday!!
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Date Posted:
5/17 1:31pm
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RE: Fly Well: The Rise of Jagged Fel (Post LotF Spec.) Chap. V Posted 05/16
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Chimpo_the_Sith posted:
It was worth waiting for this post
Great stuff
Thank you Chimpo and thank you for reading.
Chimpo_the_Sith posted:
But that Dream or Vision was scary
*nods* Yes it was.
Chimpo_the_Sith posted:
I'll wait for Invincible when it shows up as a paperback. 26$ for a 299 page book is way too much for my wallet, no matter how good the book is.
Awe, I understand. I bought my three copies at Barnes and Noble. They had it for 30% off.
Chimpo_the_Sith posted:
BTW Aaron Allston quote you mentioned earlier can be read in my signature
Aye, I see that my friend. You have great taste in .sig's.
ccp posted:
Great chapter.
You have them all characterized so well.
Thank you ccp, and thank you so much for reading and the reply.
ccp posted:
How are Han and Soontir getting along,
Han and Soontir will get along great.
ccp posted:
I can't wait to see how Valin is fairing.
Awe, yes, our valiant Knight Valin Horn will probably apear next post.
ccp posted:
I just finished Invincible I like your way better.
Thank you my friend, and thank you for reading.
Ultima_1 posted:
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
Ultima_1 posted:
I shouldn't laugh, because I've found myself in Valin's place more times than I can count,
Oh, really?
What I meant was that I have trouble expressing myself when I'm attracted to someone.
Oh, I understand Ultima. I still get when I talk to my husband sometimes, and he knows how to make me that way fairly quickly.
Ultima_1 posted:
Now on to this chapter. The Luke/Jaina scene was touching, especially her wondering if she was the one who had struck the final blow.
*nods*
Ultima_1 posted:
I'm glad that Jag and Jaina realized that he had just needed to blow off some steam.
*nods* Very true. Plus, I think Fel was having some kind of....reconking? But, yes, you are definately correct. He had some things to let go of.
Ultima_1 posted:
The vision was kind of creepy, but made sense at the same time.
*nods* Always in motion is the future.
Thank you so much for reading Ultima, and for the great reply!
Jag4Me posted:
YAY!!
I read this just before I turned off my computer last night. Then I came back this morning to read again.
I hope you slept well.
Jag4Me posted:
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
Jaina Solo sat in her bed staring out the window of her med-ward room.
She had received many visitors that afternoon and they all had lifted her spirits. She had seen her parents of course, Tenel Ka and under very heavy guard, her niece.
Jaina had sat and drawn pictures with Allana and tied bows in her hair.
This is so sweet and fitting. Didn't Jaina braid Chewy's fur when she was little?
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
I believe so yes.
Jag4Me posted:
Her niece was pure and perfect. Jaina decided that she represented everything that was good in the universe. However she had still not seen Jag. He had not come back after their fight.
Yes, Allana does and I hope it stays that way.
Jag.
Me to. And no worries, it's like you said the other day...Hold on Jag's on his way.
Jag4Me posted:
Jag4Me posted:
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
Her parents had assured her that he had not left the planet but that his parents had arrived and he had been in meeting after meeting with his father and many others. Or maybe, she thought he just didn't want to see her. Maybe, he didn't care anymore, she had cost him a son, and she could understand that.
She began to cry. Tears were not that unusual for her these days.
Damn...this is just what any woman would be feeling right now. She needs her man AT HER SIDE.
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
*nods* It makes things so much easier and better.
Jag4Me posted:
Clighal had told her that morning that due to the amount of damage her insides had taken when she hemorrhaged and miscarried, she would be left with horrific scar tissue, that even Jedi healing techniques could not completely eliminate. Her and Jag's chances of conceiving naturally were now greatly reduced.
"Naturally" being the keyword. <whew!> Baby Fel or Fel's are a must.
Well we know that it's most likely that Jagged and Jaina will produce at least two boys. Gien Roan and Morhgan it is highly indicated that Fel II had a brother.
Jag4Me
Right on time Master Skywalker to the rescue. [/quote posted:
Isn't he always.
Jag4Me posted:
I love how you write Jaina and Luke together. Am I making sense?
You make perfect since Connie and thank you. That dynamic was very important to me.
Jag4Me posted:
You are able to
make them actually feel like Luke and Jaina and not a different "version" of Luke and Jaina. I need more caffeine I guess.
 ? I understand what you mean and again thank you.
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
Reminders of Mara are all over the place. So sweet...
Always. LONG LIVE MARA JADE SKYWALKER!!! JUSTICE FOR MARA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Jag4Me posted:
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"I'm glad," he said and took the chair beside her bed. He was thoughtful for a moment as if not quite sure how to say what he wanted to. Jaina knew what was coming and sat quietly for it. Softly Luke said, "Sweetheart why didn't you tell anyone you were pregnant?"
"It wouldn't have changed anything Uncle Luke. I still had to go, I was the only one who could." She nearly began to cry again but somehow managed to choke back the tears and continued. "It was the most horrific choice I ever had to make, but I know it was the only one I really had, and I'll live with the consequences for the rest of my life. I'm afraid it may have cost me Jag for good this time."
"I doubt that, Jaina. I think he just needs some time and that’s understandable. He sat by your bedside nearly unmoving for over a month, if that’s not love and devotion I've never seen it."
This is why I love Luke. He got his point across without making her feel worse. Even though he is all powerful
That's because Luke Skywalker is victorious on all fronts!
Jag4Me posted:
Luke is still such a gentle man.
And kind. He is truely the son of Amadala.
Jag4Me posted:
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
"He was waiting for me to wake up so he could give me a piece of his mind."
Luke frowned at his niece, "No, that wasn't it. I saw the look on his face and in his eyes. He loves you...I know."
More likely he was out of his mind with worry.
*nods* Yes, and grief...I think. But I guess when it's someone you love the two run together?
Jag4Me posted:
THE_PIED_PIPER posted:
She smiled at him and then turned thoughtful herself, "Uncle Luke can I ask you something?"
"Of course Jaina you can ask me anything."
She took a deep breath, "How was he in the end? Darth Caedus, I mean...what was he like? I'm sorry, normally I wouldn't ask you to relive that, but I must know."
Luke Skywalker took a deep breath, "He died in my arms Jaina, he said to tell you that he was sorry. At that point it was complete insanity, and a void that just overtook his soul."
She blurted out, "Yeah sure he was sorry." She felt her anger and hatred rise. Blowing a breath out, she purged the emotions from her mind. "Do you think he found redemption?"
"I hope so, Jaina...Force, I hope so. | |