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JediKyle23
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Great couple of chapters. Can't wait to read more.
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jadesabre75
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JediKyle23 posted: Great couple of chapters. Can't wait to read more.
Thanks and hopefully there will be more soon!
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Jag4Me
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jadesabre75 posted: Thanks and hopefully there will be more soon!
You said the magic words! More and soon!
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jadesabre75
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Jag4Me posted:
jadesabre75 posted: Thanks and hopefully there will be more soon!
You said the magic words! More and soon!
LOL Yes my dear the next few posts are pretty much done. Just have a few things to add here and there.
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jadesabre75
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Happy Meteorite Day! Remembering the 1908 meteorite crash in Central Siberia, which caused the largest explosion in recorded history.
Just a little filler before we start the roller coaster ride on the next post! BTW, I'd just like to publicly say that my beta ROCKS!
That's all. Move along.
Enjoy!
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Chapter 15
Later that night…
He was relaxing on her couch, going over some things on his data pad when his comm sounded.
“Paniz.”
“I have something you’re going to want to see.” Came Zoan’s voice.
“Why do I have the feeling I’m not going to like it?” He mumbled, becoming more worried when Zoan didn’t laugh. “What is it?” The lead detective asked, rubbing the bridge of his nose.
“A video.”
“Of what?”
“Mya Cortz’s murder.”
“Give me an hour and I’ll be there.”
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Even on the third viewing, he still heard Myri’s small gasp from beside him. It was extremely painful to watch, but he forced himself to do it. It was all they had right now. The quality sucked and it wasn’t that close, but you could see what was going on.
He looked up to see Zoan staring at him expectantly. Shaking his head no, he watched as the young detective turned the footage off, hopefully for the last time that day.
“Start throwing things out kids.” Ajani told the group, knowing they needed to start analyzing this now before someone found out they had it.
“Well, the person had a cape on and shoulder length hair.” Carwyn said, stating the obvious first.
“And they were using something that looked like a lightsaber.” Nori added, shifting uncomfortably in his seat.
“The wounds on the young lady’s body would support that line of thinking.” The Duros coroner said.
“The only problem is that could be anybody in that footage.” Zoan finally said what they were all thinking.
“Do we go to Skywalker with this?” Ajani asked her, knowing this was not easy for her in the least. She took a deep breath and let it out slowly.
“We have to.” She whispered. “He will probably have some additional footage, even though it will be just of the dumping of the body. It’s a start.”
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Next day…
She had just slipped the final piece of her saber into place when the knock sounded on her door. Smiling to herself, she absently told whoever it was to come in, but didn’t turn around.
“You finished.” Jarik said quietly, as he came over to stand behind her chair. She nodded and turned around to say something when she noticed he held a cylinder in his hand. Her eyes widened and shot up to his and he smiled. “Freaky, huh?” He said, holding his finished saber out for her perusal.
“Slightly.” Karissa responded shakily as she reached out for his, giving him a questing glance. He nodded and handed his saber over to her, perching on the end of her bed. She gripped the brushed silver hilt with both hands and smiled as she traced the symbols carved into it. It had to have taken him hours to put them on.
“What does it say?” She asked quietly as she turned the cylinder slowly, watching the line wind up the hilt at an angle along a ribbon of metal that stood out from the hilt. It reminded her of a vine twisting it’s way around a column.
“You have to have a darkness...for the dawn to come.” Came Jarik’s answer. She looked up and he smiled softly. “It’s in my mother’s language. I figured it was appropriate.” He added and she nodded softly. They held gazes and Karissa watched a bevy of emotions play over his handsome face. A knock sounded at the door, causing them both to jump and turn simultaneously towards the sound.
When it opened, Jag stood on the other side, a frown marring his face. He said nothing, simply motioning them out of the room. They traded a quick glance and Karissa handed him his saber as she walked towards her father. Voices carried from the living room and curious, her feet carried her in that direction.
She could feel Jarik’s surprise from behind her as she stopped at the end of the hall. Her father walked past her and Jarik and went over to stand behind the chair Jaina was sitting in. A little push from behind her persuaded her to walk further into the room, but not too far. All three families were present, except for the younger kids, and Luke rounded out the crowd.
Karissa suddenly realized this was not good. Jarik’s hand hadn’t left her back and she unconsciously leaned into it, bringing her into contact with his chest. She felt him take a deep breath and tried to relax.
Luke glanced at Kyp quickly, then cleared his throat.
“I just found something out that all of you need to know. This is not common knowledge yet, but it will be rather soon. I thought it best to have all of you prepared.” He paused, taking a deep breath. “There was another murder this morning and the body was found on the temple steps. They believe it was the work of the serial killer.”
“Who was it?” Jaina asked before anyone else could.
“Mya Cortz.” He said in his typical quiet calm. It seemed that everyone started talking and asking questions at once. Karissa remained mute, her stomach filling with dread. Sure, she hadn’t liked Mya very much. Sith, she hadn’t liked the girl at all, but she never wished something like this on her.
“You ok?” Jarik whispered in her ear, pulling her to his side when she shook her head no. Her arms wrapped around his waist and he squeezed her slightly, his head coming up to meet Micah’s gaze. They both shared a puzzled look before the conversation drew their attention away.
The adults lost themselves in questions and theories so the three of them decided to retreat to the privacy of Karissa’s room.
She and Micah sat at the end of her bed, while Jarik started pacing in front of them. They sat silent for a few minutes, digesting what Luke had just told everyone.
“I can’t believe she’s dead.” Karissa whispered, shifting slightly when Micah reached over to grab her hand.
“Why did he deviate from his usual victim?” Jarik said, his friends’ gazes coming up to watch him pace.
“Something else had to have set him off. He apparently has control issues.” Micah commented.
“But why totally change his victim profile? It doesn’t make sense.” Jarik mumbled, finally coming to rest in the chair Karissa has occupied earlier.
“Maybe he hasn’t changed his MO.” Both boys looked up to pin Karissa with a confused look. “Well, it would stand to reason that he’s attacking women who fit the profile of one woman who wronged him somehow. Maybe this is his way of sending someone a message. Only now, he’s got two messages. One for the brunette and now one for the blonde.”
“That’s actually a pretty good theory Kissa.” Micah said, his surprise evident on his face.
“Don’t look so surprised nerfherder. I can use my brain.” She retorted, smacking him hard on the arm. Jarik laughed when his friend covered the spot and winced.
“Damn Kissa. You freaking hit hard.” Micah whined. Karissa just gave him a sly grin.
“Maybe Sari will kiss it and make it better.” She said.
“No clue what you’re talking about.” He responded quickly. Kissa and Jarik shared a glance, but let the subject drop.
“What could be so bad he would feel the need to strike out at total strangers?” Jarik asked, bringing them back to the main topic.
“He’s crazy. Logic doesn’t exactly apply to him.”
“Not everyone is as noble as you, Jarik.” Micah said, smiling when his friend glared at him.
“I’m not noble.”
Karissa rolled her eyes and fought to keep the smile off her face.
“Whatever helps you sleep at night dude.” Responded Micah as he stood to walk over to the window.
“I guess we’ll find out more when the holonews gets wind of it.” Karissa said quietly, not getting an answer from either boy.
She could feel Micah’s impatience and was about to ask him what was wrong, when he suddenly started towards the door.
“I’m going to check on Sari.” He mumbled, not seeing the smiles that followed him.
“Wonder when he’s going to admit his feelings.” Jarik mused aloud, then snorted when he realized he could ask himself the same thing.
“He will eventually. Just give him time.” She told him as he came over and sat down next to her.
“Three days.” Jarik told her, almost kicking himself when her mood darkened slightly.
“Don’t remind me.”
“Kissa, you’ll do fine. You know you can survive on your own for a few days.”
She sighed and leaned over, resting her elbows on her knees. “I know. I’m just not looking forward to it.”
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Sari was working on her essay that Master Skywalker had assigned her when her door chime went off. Her roommate was out tonight, so she was by herself. She sighed and put the data pad down, reaching out to see who was at the door. Feeling Micah’s familiar presence, she walked a little faster to answer.
The smile he gave her instantly improved her mood and she stood back from the door to let him in.
“How did you get past the warden?” She asked as she watched him walk across the room towards her bunk. He had a satisfied smirk on his face when he sat down and looked her way.
“I have my ways.”
“You’re gonna get me in trouble.” She told him, walking over to sit next to him.
“Probably.” The bed shifted as she plopped down next to him and he had to remember to not reach out and steady her.
“What’s up?” She asked. “Not that I mind you visiting, but it’s kinda late.”
Micah’s smile disappeared and she suddenly got worried. “What is it?”
“Is your roomie gonna be home anytime soon?”
“No. She’s spending the night with her parents. They got on planet today. Now tell me what happened.”
“They found a body on the steps of the temple this morning. I don’t know all the specifics, but apparently they think it was another victim of the serial killer.” Micah looked up at her sharp intake of breath and frowned at the panic he saw in her eyes. Sari tended to be a little bit of a drama queen but this was different. He could almost feel her fear. “I don’t think you have anything to worry about, as long as you stay in the temple unless someone is with you.” He rushed to reassure her, taking her hand in his without thought.
“They’re sure it was him?” She asked when she had regained some of her wits and the ability to speak.
“Yeah, unless there’s a copycat loose. I don’t even want to entertain that thought.” Micah said, feeling a slight tremble from her. “They’ve identified the person too.” He told her softly. She met his gaze, but found it difficult to ask the question.
“It was Mya.” He whispered, startled when she shot up from his side and pulled her hand out of his grasp. “Sari?”
Her hand had flown to her mouth at his revelation and he hoped she wasn’t going to get sick. Standing slowly, he walked over to her and turned her around to face him. Tears streamed down her face and he reached out to wipe them away.
“Hey. Nothing is gonna happen to you.” He told her quietly, closing his eyes when she wrapped her arms around him. They stood that way for a few minutes, until he felt her stop trembling. Pulling back, he tilted her head up and searched her lavender gaze. His eyes moved to her mouth of their own accord and before he realized it, he was kissing her. Sari’s hands fisted his shirt as if she would collapse at any minute. He tightened his hold, one hand still cupping her cheek.
Breaking the kiss gently he fought to control his breathing and couldn’t help but smile at the confusion in her eyes.
“Do I need to apologize before you force slap me?” He asked, his smile growing when she laughed.
“No. You need to do that again.” She whispered and he was more than happy to comply.
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All hell would break loose soon and he couldn’t help but smile. The old man didn’t know what he had done yet, but he was sure to be pissed when he found out. It deviated from their shared goal, but would still serve to achieve said goal. She wasn’t dumb enough to miss the message, but he would give her a few days to let it soak in before he contacted her. He almost hoped she would still be defiant. It would at least give him an excuse to kill again. Not that he needed it.
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The phrase on Jarik's saber is by non other than Han Solo himself. Mr. Harrison Ford is credited with coining it, which I found strangely appropriate.
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Jag4Me
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Stang, you are quick!
Jag interrupted them again...hmm. They didn't even get a chance
to admire Karissa's lightsaber.
Great suspense Sab! You are killing me here!
Oh, and I wanted the kissing to be Jarik and Karissa...but I'll take what I can get.
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angry_bendu1
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Geez, what is that, like three posts in two days?! You're good, girl!
And it was an excellent post! Hmm... dark haired and a cloak, that only fits the description of like a million people... but methinks they might look at Kyp?
Aww, but the end was nice...
Great job!
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iamobiwan1970
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I was gone for the weekend and now I have THREE posts to comment on! Girl, you do write fast!
OK, so here are my comments in order.
#1: Karissa is a bit annoying. I’m not into immature teens. But I understand that sometimes we have to create flawed characters or everyone would be a marysue!
She just wanted to thank me for the other night by ramming me through with a light saber. We figured it would be less messy in here than out in the hall.”
Kids got the Durron sarcastic humor down, but at 18, why’s he still hanging at “school”???
Let me just say...the way you have worked in the whole crime with Cutter etc...is really realy well written and thought out!
Yeah, yeah, yeah. I’m old.” Kyp said, finally getting settled and picking up Rika’s controller. Galven didn’t say anything as he unpaused the game and they started playing. It was an X-wing game and apparently his sister had been kicking Galven’s butt before Kyp had interrupted. After about five minutes, Kyp finally spoke.
Very cute and very sweet. Poor kids too empathic if you ask me!
What does it mean?” Galven asked, confused.
“I don’t know. But every time I get one, they find a body from the serial killer.” Kyp whispered.
A very interesting Force ability! But not one that would be comforting or necessarily useful.
You have to have a darkness...for the dawn to come
A very cool expression! I like it. Jarik is cool. Harrison Ford: is cooler!
Great writing and the story is intriguing!
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jadesabre75
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Jag4Me posted: Stang, you are quick! Hey, when the muse is in the mood, I obey. LOL I've learned not to question her.
Jag interrupted them again...hmm. They didn't even get a chance to admire Karissa's lightsaber. Maybe later...there's plenty of time for that.
Great suspense Sab! You are killing me here! I'm gonna start dropping hints soon. That should help a little.
Oh, and I wanted the kissing to be Jarik and Karissa...but I'll take what I can get.
You'll like the next few chapters...that's all I'm gonna say since I've probably said too much..
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angry_bendu1 posted: Geez, what is that, like three posts in two days?! You're good, girl! LOL So you'll complain if you get another one soon?
And it was an excellent post! Thanks!
Hmm... dark haired and a cloak, that only fits the description of like a million people... but methinks they might look at Kyp? No comment...you'll just have to wait and see.
Aww, but the end was nice... I had to throw the mush in there.
Great job!
Thanks!!!
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iamobiwan1970 posted: I was gone for the weekend and now I have THREE posts to comment on! Girl, you do write fast! Are you complaining?! LOL Like I said, when I get inspired I write until I can't write no more.
OK, so here are my comments in order.
#1: Karissa is a bit annoying. I’m not into immature teens. But I understand that sometimes we have to create flawed characters or everyone would be a marysue! Yeah, I know she's annoying. That's kinda an accident and kinda on purpose. Allow me to briefly explain. Karissa, for all intents and purposes, is a very sheltered child. Yes, her family is super famous and has saved the freaking universe a few dozen times over, but she's never really had anything to test her. There's one defining moment in everyone's life, at least I believe, that shows a person who they really are. Karissa has yet to have that shining moment. She will though, so all I ask is you put up with the 'princess' just a little bit longer. LOL I promise I'll deliver, or at least try.
She just wanted to thank me for the other night by ramming me through with a light saber. We figured it would be less messy in here than out in the hall.”
Kids got the Durron sarcastic humor down, but at 18, why’s he still hanging at “school”???
As I've said before, that apple didn't fall far from the tree. He's exactly like Kyp, with enough of Jade mixed in to temper Kyp's issues.
Let me just say...the way you have worked in the whole crime with Cutter etc...is really realy well written and thought out! Thanks. I thought long and hard about how I wanted to do this story. I wanted to do a mystery, but if it wasn't well thought out it would suck. So I'm glad to hear I'm successful so far.
Yeah, yeah, yeah. I’m old.” Kyp said, finally getting settled and picking up Rika’s controller. Galven didn’t say anything as he unpaused the game and they started playing. It was an X-wing game and apparently his sister had been kicking Galven’s butt before Kyp had interrupted. After about five minutes, Kyp finally spoke.
Very cute and very sweet. Poor kids too empathic if you ask me!
What does it mean?” Galven asked, confused.
“I don’t know. But every time I get one, they find a body from the serial killer.” Kyp whispered.
A very interesting Force ability! But not one that would be comforting or necessarily useful. Not particularly, no. Kinda ties into your above comment.
You have to have a darkness...for the dawn to come
A very cool expression! I like it. Jarik is cool. Harrison Ford: is cooler! Thanks. I came across it on accident and thought it fit. Then when I looked it up I was ecstatic to see Harrison said it.
Great writing and the story is intriguing! Thanks. There's lot more to happen, so I hope to keep it intriguing. Thanks for reading!
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Great, as usual... Can't wait to find out what happens next
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Trickster-Lead posted: Great, as usual... Can't wait to find out what happens next
Thanks! I'd jinx myself and say soon, but don't feel like going there. LOL
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Great update!
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ccp posted: Great update!
Thanks!
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Ceillean
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Micah and Sari are so cute.
And when will Jarik and Kissa finally realize what they mean to each other? To the reader it's obvious -- they're blind! Blinded by love?
So Cutter's using a lightsaber-kind-of-weapon?
What if he's minor Force sensitive? I'm still thinking Kyp has something to do with this mess.
You've got me thinking up theories!
Someone bent on revenge due to Carida?
A Force sensitive who wanted to be trained, but failed because the Jedi found him to be too ruthless? Although I don't think the Jedi would kick anyone out of the Academy.
Maybe Cutter's mocking the Jedi by using a lightsaber? "You kriffed up my life so here I'll show the public the other side of the Jedi".
How was his life messed up, though?
I need to stop! My heads spinning -- more theories.
Thanks for the PM!
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Jade_eyes
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Yay!! A video.... something they can actually work with now. Love Karissa and Micah and Jarik's conversation. Their mutual teasing is a good thing and sharing ideas is always great. Sari and Micah--wootness for the mush there.
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