Author Topic: Blood Trail (Post-LotF: Jaina, Tahiri, Ben, Jag, Han, Leia, Luke) Updated 10/14/08!
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Date Posted: 6/24 10:15pm Subject: RE: Blood Trail (Post-LotF: Jaina, Tahiri, Ben, Jag, Han, Leia, Luke) Posted 6/24/08!
canadianjedimama posted:
Does Victor still love Nikki?
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That's what I'd like to know! tongue

 

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Date Posted: 6/24 10:39pm Subject: RE: Blood Trail (Post-LotF: Jaina, Tahiri, Ben, Jag, Han, Leia, Luke) Posted 6/24/08!
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Date Posted: 6/25 7:08am Subject: RE: Blood Trail (Post-LotF: Jaina, Tahiri, Ben, Jag, Han, Leia, Luke) Posted 6/24/08!
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WOW!!!! A post-Legacy of the Force!! Fine!!!! And about Allana is!!! With impatience I wait for updating. You are simple a miracle!!!
*has immediately dragged off the chapter to itself and greedy reads* nerd

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Date Posted: 6/25 12:09pm Subject: RE: Blood Trail (Post-LotF: Jaina, Tahiri, Ben, Jag, Han, Leia, Luke) Posted 6/24/08!
Yobi,

Wow! A post-LOTF fic. I'm excited to see you venture this far into canon, especially since your knowledge of the EU is so incredible. It'll give your story wonderful depth. grin

I'm curious if you put Tahiri second to Jaina in the title bar because she's going to have a big role... thinking

Love the name of the story. I thought the blood trail idea in Inv was truly inspired. And your keyword coupled with the title. I'm pondering the immense possibilities.

Jaina Solo rolled out of bed and crouched, palming shapes in the darkness until she felt the leg of the trousers she'd tossed on the floor a few hours earlier next to a sleeveless undershirt made stiff by sweat and dried swamp water. She quickly dressed, pulling the shirt over her head and buttoned the waist of her pants, only to reach for the utility belt draped across the small table in her hut— there was a moment there where she expected to feel the weight of her lightsaber dangling from the synthleather loop, but it wasn't there, of course.

Great show right off that bat for what you'll reveal about Jaina's use of the Force later.

Jaina's boots squashed against the sucking mud of the marshlands as she passed the bubbling swamps and serpentine branches of Dagobah's gray trees. She paused when a vine snake dropped down and glided across the ground, as if being stalked by a predator.

Snakes! shock Oh no!

Seriously I loved the imagery here.

Taking a deep breath, Jaina pushed her apprehension away and wrapped herself in the battle-calm that she'd worn through too many wars, the armor of the Sword of the Jedi, and she crept inside, dropping into the darkness.

She can't seem to leave the SotJ behind, can she? sad

"You have to save him, Jaina."

Gah. Who's him?

Ah, but you're not going to tell us yet are you?

Great start. I can't wait to see where you take this wink

 

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Date Posted: 6/25 2:49pm Subject: RE: Blood Trail (Post-LotF: Jaina, Tahiri, Ben, Jag, Han, Leia, Luke) Posted 6/24/08!
YodaKenobi posted:
There was an intruder.

No matter how much she cut herself off from the Force, she couldn't stop the prickles of impending danger from needling her spine or the icy ball of fear that formed between her shoulder blades. There was someone out there, and she couldn't think of any innocent reason for that.


She's never heard Uncle Luke's stories about Yoda? tongue

YodaKenobi posted:
Jaina Solo rolled out of bed and crouched, palming shapes in the darkness until she felt the leg of the trousers she'd tossed on the floor a few hours earlier next to a sleeveless undershirt made stiff by sweat and dried swamp water. She quickly dressed, pulling the shirt over her head and buttoned the waist of her pants, only to reach for the utility belt draped across the small table in her hut— there was a moment there where she expected to feel the weight of her lightsaber dangling from the synthleather loop, but it wasn't there, of course.


She's handed in her lightsaber? raised_brow

I'm vaguely reminded of Leia getting dressed after her one-on-one fight with Khabarakh in Heir to the Empire.:p

YodaKenobi posted:
Making sure her blaster was, Jaina cinched her belt around her waist and fastened its buckle before creeping towards the door. Her hut was small, not much larger than the one that existed there decades earlier, and it took the lithe woman only a few strides to reach the door after ducking the low-arching passages.

She palmed the toggle control for the door and crawled through the narrow passage into the fog-blanketed mud outside the home she'd built here two years ago. The stench of Dagobah's sweltering bogs mingled in the cold night air, and Jaina could tell from the musty aroma and faint hint of electricity in the shadows that it was going to rain. She unclipped a glowrod from her belt to help light her way and snapped the device on, casting a beam of golden light through the roving mists.


Two years!? shock Yet she's still expecting her lightsaber? thinking She has some issues, then? raised_brow

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There was no sign of him.


... "him"? raised_brow

That's more than she should rationally know. Force instinct? Symbolism? Both? mischief

YodaKenobi posted:
Starting forward, she tried to think of who it would be. If it was anyone with good intentions— Uncle Luke or her parents— they would have just knocked. This person had come to kill her.


Paranoid, Jaina. Perhaps being alone hasn't helped you. Last time we saw a Jedi girl alone on Dagobah, at least some of the Yuuzhan Vong who showed up HAD come randomly in peace and were coincidentally looking for her. Don't you talk to Tahiri? raised_brow

And, then there's the Yoda analogy. mischief

YodaKenobi posted:
Jaina's boots squashed against the sucking mud of the marshlands as she passed the bubbling swamps and serpentine branches of Dagobah's gray trees. She paused when a vine snake dropped down and glided across the ground, as if being stalked by a predator.


She's not even consciously thinking. In spite of the metaphor, she's the top of the local food-chain.

YodaKenobi posted:
Instinctively she reached for her lightsaber and again felt silly. She'd dismantled the weapon when she left the Jedi Order and came to Dagobah to live in solitude. In order to defeat Darth Caedus— to kill her twin brother, Jacen Solo— Jaina had chosen to become something other than a Jedi. When it was over, there was no going back for her, and she was wise enough to know that if she continued, she would only be following her brother's path. She could feel that he had made a similar choice once, deciding that the Jedi way just wasn't enough, and that the ends justified the means to secure galactic peace...


</Ewok>"She's wise."

I never thought I'd call Jaina "Yoda-like", but there ya go. Your 'fic impresses me like that. grin

YodaKenobi posted:
There would never be peace for her, she knew, but she needed to be alone. It didn't matter where, Dagobah was simply the first planet that came to mind.

She left everything behind.


Nicely described.

What are the questions that raises? Jag, her parents, the Galaxy, the Jedi... does she have a ship, though?

YodaKenobi posted:
Jaina pulled her blaster from its holster and started forward into the murky grove ahead, her legs drowning in fog.


Another great line. Isn't that how Luke walked into the cave?

YodaKenobi posted:
To her surprise, she came to the dark mouth of a cave covered by tangles of coiled vines and gnarled tree roots— something about it sent a chill up her spine, and she knew that her intruder was waiting for her inside.

Suddenly she felt afraid in a way she never thought she would again.


tongue

I like the use of "her intruder", the intimacy it suggests.

YodaKenobi posted:
Taking a deep breath, Jaina pushed her apprehension away and wrapped herself in the battle-calm that she'd worn through too many wars, the armor of the Sword of the Jedi, and she crept inside, dropping into the darkness. She hit the soft ground and her glowrod seemed to dim, as if it couldn't peel the shadows from the cave walls of stone, mud, and frayed roots. It defied logic, but Jaina could feel from the energy radiating from this place that logic just didn't matter here.


She doesn't recognize it as "the dark side", though: something about it sent a chill up her spine; she felt afraid in a way she never thought she would again; the energy radiating from this place.

YodaKenobi posted:
She continued ahead slowly, as creatures she could not make out crawled and slithered across her boots with far more legs than anything should have. Eventually, she came to a dark shape in the center of the cave which the light of her glowrod would not illuminate. She dropped her shoulder and raised her blaster, pointing it squarely at the wraith.


Of course, the reader knows what's in there: "only what you take with you"....

YodaKenobi posted:
"You," she said. "Who are you?"

There was no answer.

For a moment she wondered if there was anything there at all, but she was beginning to see the outline of a man.


She's doubting herself? Of course, considering that it's arguably her own shadow, then perhaps the shadows really were playing tricks for a moment? thinking

This also reminds me of Riina and Tahiri in Force Heretic.

YodaKenobi posted:
"Turn around," she ordered. "Slowly."

Again, there was no response, and the shape did not move.

But before she could repeat herself more forcefully, the glowrod was ripped from her grasp and sent sailing through the cavern, bouncing off the cave floor. She squeezed the trigger of her blaster only to see the stranger whip around in a fan of dark robes and catch the flare of red brilliance in the palm of his hand. Jaina's blaster was similarly wrenched from her grip and pinned against the cave wall before she could even think to fire another salvo, and suddenly, she found she could no longer move.

In a single bound, her attacker reached her and placed his gloved hand over her mouth— that was when his dark form was revealed. His body was twisted, so mangled by scorches he'd become slanted, and he moved with a limp, as if one leg was hanging on by mere fibers somewhere in the flood of his cloak. He had just one arm, the other having been cleaved off at the bicep, and his abdomen and chest still glowed amber in the darkness where he'd been stabbed with a lightsaber.

Jaina's eyes widened when they traveled up the man's body and found a face more familiar to her than her own.

Jacen.

His visage was a nightmarish maze of bruises and puncture wounds, the way she had left him when he died on the Anakin Solo, and his eyes were a frightening yellow wreathed in scarlet, like some feral animal.

She wanted to scream, but his hand tightened around her mouth.

Finally, he opened up his bloodied mouth and spoke, his eyes burning into hers.

"You have to save him, Jaina."


shock

And she LOST in the cave. What does that say - contrast with Luke? thinking

YodaKenobi posted:
Jaina woke with a start to find her sheets pushed down and tangled around her sweat-slickened legs. She tried to catch her breath, her eyes frantically darting around the inside of her darkened hut to find she was as alone as when she'd gone to sleep. There was nothing there, save the growl of Dagobah's rain drumming against the swamp and mud outside.


A Force-vision? I like that. It makes a certain sense of her focus - now it reminds me of Jacen on Belkadan in Onslaught - and the fact that she didn't recognize the cave from Uncle Luke's stories and lessons...

YodaKenobi posted:
She activated one of the wall crystals


Yuuzhan Vong tech?

YodaKenobi posted:
and made her way to the basin of bath water she had balanced in front of the fireplace. Dunking her hands in the water, she splashed some on her face and ran her hands through her hair, trying to wash away the horror of her nightmare. Looking up, she caught sight of something in the mirror hanging on the wall beside her.

Her heart seemed frozen in her chest, but somehow her legs moved, and she peered closely into her own reflection. Jaina's face was pale and dripping, but it was her neck that drew her attention. She tilted her head to see it clearly, and found the horrifying red stains blistered across her neck that she thought had vanished when she killed Darth Caedus two years ago.

But as she looked closely, she could see that they were not a random spatter of her brother's blood. She pulled her skin tighter to see clearly and gasped.

Burned into Jaina's skin were two words.

"Save him."


Who?! shock

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Date Posted: 6/25 5:42pm Subject: RE: Blood Trail (Post-LotF: Jaina, Tahiri, Ben, Jag, Han, Leia, Luke) Posted 6/24/08!
A new YK 'fic and nobody told me? shock

"Save Him" ?

Must mean Boba Fett. Save him from the terrible characterisation and writing that has been inflicted on him recently in profic mischief

 

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Date Posted: 6/25 7:50pm Subject: RE: Blood Trail (Post-LotF: Jaina, Tahiri, Ben, Jag, Han, Leia, Luke) Posted 6/24/08!
wow, that was a great start YK!

 

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Date Posted: 6/25 8:34pm Subject: RE: Blood Trail (Post-LotF: Jaina, Tahiri, Ben, Jag, Han, Leia, Luke) Posted 6/24/08!
Great hook of a start, YodaKenobi!

 

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Date Posted: 6/26 12:27am Subject: RE: Blood Trail (Post-LotF: Jaina, Tahiri, Ben, Jag, Han, Leia, Luke) Posted 6/24/08!
Awesome first chapter! applause
loved the fact that she left her old life behind after killing Jacen. shows a much more humane reaction than what was shown in profic. i hope we see more of Jacen (that his ghost/wraith is guiding Jaina and showing that a sith lord retains power even in death)cant wait for the next chappie. please add me to your PM list.
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Date Posted: 6/26 7:27am Subject: RE: Blood Trail (Post-LotF: Jaina, Tahiri, Ben, Jag, Han, Leia, Luke) Posted 6/24/08!
Interesting start to the story. I love the imagery you use.

Hmm, save him and Tahiri is the second on the character list in the subject. Anakin isn't particularly likely, but he is a possibility.

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Date Posted: 6/26 1:55pm Subject: RE: Blood Trail (Post-LotF: Jaina, Tahiri, Ben, Jag, Han, Leia, Luke) Posted 6/24/08!
Yobi:

Hello there grin
It is impressive how you manage to keep on time with your stories … applause it is just awesome … at some point you have to tell me your secret wink

Title: Blood Trail

This something to do with the blood Jaina was not able to wipe away from her face? tongue

Keywords: Intergalactic Rorschach Test

That is a very interesting Keyword .. once again .. tongue
But I think the walrus you do not beat wink

It will probably be a trilogy.

A trilogy?!
Is anything with you a short story? Or did you scratch that from your vocabulary? tongue



Dramatis Personae

Allana (Amelia); Heir to the Throne of the Hapes Consortium (female human)


Nice to see her in this grin
Still with her grandparents .. erm .. caretakers?

Boba Fett; Mandalorian bounty hunter, Mandalore (male human)

That is surprise

C-3PO; protocol droid

Ohh Han will be so happy about that grin

Jagged Fel; Grand Moff of the Imperial Remnant (male human)

love

Jaina Solo; former Jedi Knight (female human)

grin

R2-D2; astromech droid

When there is a C3PO there must be also a R2-D2

Tahiri Veila; former Jedi Knight (female human)

Now I notice that not only her but also Jaina is a former Jedi thinking


The list is unusual short for you tongue



Prologue: Blood Trail

There was an intruder.


Good start. There is already something dangerous around silly

No matter how much she cut herself off from the Force, she couldn't stop the prickles of impending danger from needling her spine or the icy ball of fear that formed between her shoulder blades. There was someone out there, and she couldn't think of any innocent reason for that.

Good descriptions of the feeling of dread, of this foreboding
Interesting that she can’t get rid of the feeling, no matter what thinking She never mastered the ability Jacen had with his hiding and making small in the Force *thoughtful*

Jaina Solo rolled out of bed and crouched, palming shapes in the darkness until she felt the leg of the trousers she'd tossed on the floor a few hours earlier next to a sleeveless undershirt made stiff by sweat and dried swamp water.

And she really slips into that again … ? uhh …
The girl must be desperate thinking And … *thinks*

She quickly dressed, pulling the shirt over her head and buttoned the waist of her pants, only to reach for the utility belt draped across the small table in her hut— there was a moment there where she expected to feel the weight of her lightsaber dangling from the synthleather loop, but it wasn't there, of course.

Why not? thinking Well does “former” Jedi imply to give back the selfmade weapon?

Making sure her blaster was, Jaina cinched her belt around her waist and fastened its buckle before creeping towards the door. Her hut was small, not much larger than the one that existed there decades earlier, and it took the lithe woman only a few strides to reach the door after ducking the low-arching passages.

Okay … Yoda’s hut? She has found the same place? Then there is the cave of fate not far thinking Maybe she causes the foreboding feeling … Jacen somehow? thinking *thinks*

She palmed the toggle control for the door and crawled through the narrow passage into the fog-blanketed mud outside the home she'd built here two years ago. The stench of Dagobah's sweltering bogs mingled in the cold night air, and Jaina could tell from the musty aroma and faint hint of electricity in the shadows that it was going to rain. She unclipped a glowrod from her belt to help light her way and snapped the device on, casting a beam of golden light through the roving mists.

applause Beautiful … though I think Jaina might think differently tongue

There was no sign of him.

I think that this is about Jacen … raised_brow

Starting forward, she tried to think of who it would be. If it was anyone with good intentions— Uncle Luke or her parents— they would have just knocked. This person had come to kill her.

Well if Luke let her go and leave … would he look for her?

Jaina's boots squashed against the sucking mud of the marshlands as she passed the bubbling swamps and serpentine branches of Dagobah's gray trees. She paused when a vine snake dropped down and glided across the ground, as if being stalked by a predator.

Nice detail grin

Instinctively she reached for her lightsaber and again felt silly.

Old habits die hard …
It was there for a very long time!

She'd dismantled the weapon when she left the Jedi Order and came to Dagobah to live in solitude. In order to defeat Darth Caedus— to kill her twin brother, Jacen Solo— Jaina had chosen to become something other than a Jedi. When it was over, there was no going back for her, and she was wise enough to know that if she continued, she would only be following her brother's path. She could feel that he had made a similar choice once, deciding that the Jedi way just wasn't enough, and that the ends justified the means to secure galactic peace...

thinking She once decided already to be not a Jedi … not so really but she let allow her anger to take over after her brother died … she was not really a Jedi by then either.

There would never be peace for her, she knew, but she needed to be alone. It didn't matter where, Dagobah was simply the first planet that came to mind.

It has a history for Jedi wanting to be alone and not found

She left everything behind.

Must have been a tough decision

Jaina pulled her blaster from its holster and started forward into the murky grove ahead, her legs drowning in fog. To her surprise, she came to the dark mouth of a cave covered by tangles of coiled vines and gnarled tree roots— something about it sent a chill up her spine, and she knew that her intruder was waiting for her inside.

The cave of fate … you only find there what you bring along .. or something like that … worried

Suddenly she felt afraid in a way she never thought she would again.

That sounds bad …

Taking a deep breath, Jaina pushed her apprehension away and wrapped herself in the battle-calm that she'd worn through too many wars, the armor of the Sword of the Jedi, and she crept inside, dropping into the darkness. She hit the soft ground and her glowrod seemed to dim, as if it couldn't peel the shadows from the cave walls of stone, mud, and frayed roots. It defied logic, but Jaina could feel from the energy radiating from this place that logic just didn't matter here.

Another awesome description applause

She continued ahead slowly, as creatures she could not make out crawled and slithered across her boots with far more legs than anything should have. Eventually, she came to a dark shape in the center of the cave which the light of her glowrod would not illuminate. She dropped her shoulder and raised her blaster, pointing it squarely at the wraith.

"You," she said. "Who are you?"

There was no answer.


silly what did she expect?!

For a moment she wondered if there was anything there at all, but she was beginning to see the outline of a man.

"Turn around," she ordered. "Slowly."


Why should this shadow do so? silly

Again, there was no response, and the shape did not move.

As expected
I am pretty sure she would just love to have her lightsaber around right now

But before she could repeat herself more forcefully, the glowrod was ripped from her grasp and sent sailing through the cavern, bouncing off the cave floor. She squeezed the trigger of her blaster only to see the stranger whip around in a fan of dark robes and catch the flare of red brilliance in the palm of his hand. Jaina's blaster was similarly wrenched from her grip and pinned against the cave wall before she could even think to fire another salvo, and suddenly, she found she could no longer move.

Uhh… defenseless shock and that against a shadow
thinking worried

In a single bound, her attacker reached her and placed his gloved hand over her mouth— that was when his dark form was revealed. His body was twisted, so mangled by scorches he'd become slanted, and he moved with a limp, as if one leg was hanging on by mere fibers somewhere in the flood of his cloak. He had just one arm, the other having been cleaved off at the bicep, and his abdomen and chest still glowed amber in the darkness where he'd been stabbed with a lightsaber.

How right was I that it is Jacen tongue wink
Somehow disturbing that his wounds are that visible, a constant reminder …

Jaina's eyes widened when they traveled up the man's body and found a face more familiar to her than her own.

Must be a shock!

Jacen.

dancing I was right grin

His visage was a nightmarish maze of bruises and puncture wounds, the way she had left him when he died on the Anakin Solo, and his eyes were a frightening yellow wreathed in scarlet, like some feral animal.

Uhh … shock worried

She wanted to scream, but his hand tightened around her mouth.

Finally, he opened up his bloodied mouth and spoke, his eyes burning into hers.

"You have to save him, Jaina."


I get the twisted feeling he is talking about Anakin
raised_brow
Considering who the author is tongue mischief





Jaina woke with a start to find her sheets pushed down and tangled around her sweat-slickened legs. She tried to catch her breath, her eyes frantically darting around the inside of her darkened hut to find she was as alone as when she'd gone to sleep. There was nothing there, save the growl of Dagobah's rain drumming against the swamp and mud outside.

thinking She does not remember how she got back .. is not even sure if it was real or just a dream, right?

She activated one of the wall crystals and made her way to the basin of bath water she had balanced in front of the fireplace. Dunking her hands in the water, she splashed some on her face and ran her hands through her hair, trying to wash away the horror of her nightmare. Looking up, she caught sight of something in the mirror hanging on the wall beside her.

Okay she thinks it was a dream …

Her heart seemed frozen in her chest, but somehow her legs moved, and she peered closely into her own reflection. Jaina's face was pale and dripping, but it was her neck that drew her attention. She tilted her head to see it clearly, and found the horrifying red stains blistered across her neck that she thought had vanished when she killed Darth Caedus two years ago.

But as she looked closely, she could see that they were not a random spatter of her brother's blood. She pulled her skin tighter to see clearly and gasped.

Burned into Jaina's skin were two words.

"Save him."


What a message!

That is a really interesting start!
I still think Jacen is sending his sister to save their baby brother. I will see how wrong I am with that tongue

You are indeed a wizard of words applause grin




Ant:

Oh.. and Maggy's cover... how do you say awesome in six different languages? grin grin It's fabulous, like all her work. Compliments the story well. rose

*takes hat off to Maggy*


Thank you, dear hugs kiss
Glad you like it grin



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First I'll compliment Maggy on yet another wonderful cover! She never fails!

blush thank you
Glad you like it grin



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Date Posted: 6/26 3:02pm Subject: RE: Blood Trail (Post-LotF: Jaina, Tahiri, Ben, Jag, Han, Leia, Luke) Posted 6/24/08!
yes another YK fic grin please put me on the PM list grin

 

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Date Posted: 6/26 4:52pm Subject: RE: Blood Trail (Post-LotF: Jaina, Tahiri, Ben, Jag, Han, Leia, Luke) Posted 6/24/08! - Date Edited: 6/26 4:53pm (1 edits total) Edited By: YodaKenobi
Ant: First!

You are on a roll these days! applause

Holy moly! Another YodaKenobi ‘fic!! *does a happy, somewhat crazy little dance* I’m so on board with this!!!

Aww. Thanks for your enthusiasm happy

Awesome! Even better! I’m glad to hear it.

I'm not 100% sure yet. Maybe it will only be two fics... or one tongue

Fabulous title.

Thank you! I think it will work on a number of levels when we get deeper into the story.

And a fabulous beginning!! The descriptions of (looks below for name) Jaina’s reaction to the realisation of the intruder are spot on, just fantastic!!

Thanks. Glad it got you right in the moment.

More great descriptions here! I especially love the part about Jaina’s sweat-logged shirt -- the girl’s been busy training, obviously.

Hehe. Dagobah looks humid as hell. I imagine one would just sweat there all the time silly But we know Jaina would want to stay in shape wink

And an interesting fact that leapt out at me – “there was a moment where she expected to feel the weight of her lightsaber”… so, she obviously isn’t carrying it with her I wonder why?
(And if this is should be obvious, sorry.. I’m not exactly up on my Legacy books… I’m still waiting for Sacrifice to hit the bookstores here in Oz. )


Nah, it wouldn't be obvious from the conclusion of LotF. It's something I've made up in this story.

Ah. Dagobah. Interesting. Self-imposed exile?

Precisely.

Not necessarily. It could be Zekk, come to steal her away to a caged bedroom on a faraway island, ala Days of our Lives (Sorry, couldn’t resist!)

You don't expect me to know what you're talking about, right? silly And, big Invincible spoiler here (don't read if you don't want to know) The book leaves the impression at least, that Zekk is dead.

Ah. So my line of thinking was correct.

Yep, dead on.

Ouch. Glad she decided on exile then. We didn’t need another Caedus.

But he was so much fun silly

Jag, too? *lip wobble*

Apparently, though he might have left her first, given his new occupation. I'm sure we'll get something on that later.

Uh-oh… That cave has never been good for the Skywalker family… I don’t like the sound of this…

Anakin Solo made it through all right cool

Wait a minute… she’s not going to go in there and see herself in Caedus’ clothing, is she?

Too obvious wink

Gah!! See!! I told you that cave was bad news!!

If Jorj Car'das is to be believed, it's all Yoda's fault.

Ok, wonderful descriptions here again. I have a feeling this has something to do with the last Legacy book (if my suspicions of who the dark character is are correct), so I’m ignorant to what this implies.
Still, this is amazing!


Thanks, and yeah, I'm sorry if it's confusing. This story will probably ruin Invincible for you. If you're interested in staying spoiler free, you probably don't want to read it yet.

Now that’s gotta be a shock to the system! But at least I was thinking in the right direction for once… I so seldom do that.

Yeah, you were close.

Co-ool! More amazing descriptions -- this is fabulous!!

Thanks!

The real Jacen, or someone else?
LUKE?!?


Awesome guesses... What do you know about Invincible? Particularly Luke's role? thinking

Phew! It was just a hideously scary nightmare! That was lucky.

Yep, just a dream. Go back to sleep ;
Whoa!! Ok, so that’s one really creepy nightmare!! Jacen burning Jaina from beyond the grave? I love it!!

Well, it's not a burn exactly. It's a Nightsister Blood Trail. Jaina was spattered with Jacen's blood in Invincible and he used this technique to track her. She did feel like it was very hot when it hit her though, like it was burning. By the end of the book the stains have vanished.

This was a fantastic start, Yoda! I always love your work, but this was particularly enjoyable, even though I’ve not actually read more than a dozen pages of the Legacy books in total.

I wish I could recommend them more enthusiastically. About half of them are some of the best EU books around, IMO, but the other half, not so much tongue Overall, I found it disappointing. Not nearly as good as the NJO.

I’m looking forward to finding out more, you have me intrigued. At the moment, I’m betting its Luke she has to save, but like I said before, I’m seldom right.

I think that's an incredible guess, especially since you haven't read Invincible. Luke is definitely a strong possibility.

Anyway, it a fabulous read!!

Thanks so much blush And thanks for reading and replying!

Oh.. and Maggy's cover... how do you say awesome in six different languages? It's fabulous, like all her work. Compliments the story well.
*takes hat off to Maggy*


She makes really kick ass covers applause

I highlighted my speculation in case others didn't want to see it.

No need. Speculation is welcome grin







brodiew: 2nd! I'm finally on the ground floor of a YodaKenobi story!

lol. Remember this day well so you can tell your grandkids about it tongue

I'll return tonight with a review.

Looking forward to it peace Thanks for reading and replying.

Oh, and I love your sig, btw. Feel free to jump into the many Lost discussions corran2 and I will inevitably have throughout the thread tongue






Jag4Me: Amazing start!

Thank you grin

Your descriptions of Degobah are wonderful and I felt like I could hear the squishy mud.

lol! I'm glad you liked them. It's a fun world to write about.

I'll be watching to see where you take this.

Well, I hope you enjoy it happy Thanks so much for reading and replying.






corran: New Story!!! And a trilogy at that!

Possibly. I'm not sure yet. Glad you're excited though wink

First I'll compliment Maggy on yet another wonderful cover! She never fails!

Yeah, she does awesome work applause

Second, what a terrific opening chapter!

Thank you! grin

I got serious Lost vibes when Jacen tells Jaina she has to save him. Reminds me of Boone leading Locke through a vision quest in Further Instructions.

Ooo, good comparison. You could also draw a parallel to Ana Lucia's "ghost" telling Eko he needed to "help John."

Looks like this is going to be a mystery as well. I'm quite surprised by such a short DP. Does this mean this story won't be as epic as your other stories?

I'm keeping a bunch of people off the DP because I don't want to ruin where it's going, but I'm also writing this one on the fly, so expect to see some characters added as we go.

It will be a lot less complex story than my AU series though, which is why I feel comfortable doing it this way. It's fairly straightforward, just a few storylines to manage.

Yoda, I have to say this has seriously got my attention. Can't wiat for a new post!

Thanks so much, I'm glad you liked it. And thanks for reading and replying happy

Not certain when I'll have more, shooting for Tuesday!






jadesabre: Oh yeah, this is gonna be a fun one.

I hope so!

Excellent painting of the scene here. Very well done! Can't wait to see more!

Thanks so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Try to have more up next week.

Thanks for reading and your reply grin








star_writer: Looks awesome!

Thanks, and thanks for reading!






Lola: Good to see you hugs

Ok, who does Jaina need to save and why? Inquiring minds want to know.

You know I can't tell you that tongue

You're going to tell me I have to read the story to find out aren't you?

Exactly devil

So will Tuesday be the day you'll be posting updates? You usually have a routine right? Just want to make sure I note my calendar so I don't miss anything.

I'm not sure yet, but that's the plan. It might be every other week or a little more erratic than my other posting since I'm writing another really large story.

And btw, loved the Prologue and look forward to the next chapter.

Thank you very much. And thanks for reading and replying happy






Jaina_and_Jag: Woah! Awesome. You've already got me hooked.

Aww, thanks! I'm glad you like it.

I wonder who this 'he' is that she has to save...

That's the question. thinking My money's on Raynar Thul.

Can't wait to see more.

Thanks and thanks for reading! grin






Draconarius: Yes! Finally, a YodaKenobi story I can catch from the beginning. I always seem to have to marathon read to catch up with your fics... I still haven't caught up with the others.

Hehe, yeah. One of the draw backs to writing really long fics is that it makes it difficult for new people to jump in, I guess. Glad to have you along for the ride peace

That was one freaky nightmare.

Yeah, much worse than that whole "going to school in women's underwear" thing... Wait, was I the only one in women's underwear? worried

Can't wait to see where you take this. If you're PMing for updates, could you throw me on the list?

Sure thing, thanks for your interest.

And thanks for reading and replying happy







PIPER: Wes, this is greatness, not that I'm surprised at all considering the source.

Aww, thanks blush I'm glad you like it.

The way you capture Jaina's mood and the dreams is......compelling? I guess, is all I can really come up with.

Hehe. Thanks, it was fun to write and seemed like a good way to open things.

Your writing is always so pure and perfect, you write the characters how they are as human beings...no more and no less.[/]

That's very sweet of you to say, thank you happy I try to make the characters true to who they are.

[i]I can't wait for more.


Hopefully there will be more next week.

Thanks again for reading grin






zonzo: No PM? Thanks much.

Sorry about that tongue I'll get you next time peace

Very good, though. I hope Jaina can save this mysterious person.

What if it's not the sort of person you would want saved? ;
I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for reading!






TheOnlyJediPrincess: Wow! What a great beginging! It gave me chills down my spin.

Thanks! grin I'm glad you found it so chilling mischief

I can't wait to read more! If you have one, Please add me to the PM list!

Sure thing happy Thanks so much for reading and replying.






Cyn: Nice to see this up Wes!

Yeah, I should probably explain why you got a sneak preview, eh? wink

I actually wrote this about 3 weeks ago and PMed it to my beta in the middle of the night. Last week I noticed some similarities to it in CJM's new posts for "Reluctant Princess" so I screencapped my PM to jagsredlady and sent the pics to Cyn so she would know I wasn't stealing her story ideas when I started posting it tongue

Most intriguing....I wonder who it is that Jaina has to save. Will she get there in time? Does Victor still love Nikki?

I had to look up what that means tongue

As for who it is, there are several good possibilities, I think skull

Sorry about that last part...I'm a bit punchy right now.

No, need, I'm always that way. silly

Can't wait to see where this goes.

Thank you and thanks for reading and replying happy







Stroja: Great start! Dagobah has so much potential for spooky stuff like that. I'm very interested in this story.

Thank you, I'm glad you like it. I have to agree, Dagobah is a really cool planet and I've never gotten a chance to write about it before, so it was a fun post for me.

I'll be curious to see who it is she has to save.

We'll find out at some point, I'm sure silly

Thanks for reading and replying!




Ant: That's what I'd like to know!

I feel so left out... like when you crazy kids talk about Harry Potter tongue







Sticks: This is intriguing! Please add me to a PM list, if you have one.

Will do grin Thank you for reading and replying. I hope you find the rest of the story to your liking.







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Date Posted: 6/26 6:41pm Subject: RE: Blood Trail (Post-LotF: Jaina, Tahiri, Ben, Jag, Han, Leia, Luke) Posted 6/24/08!
Hey, Yobi! This looks like its going to be very interesting. I wish I had more energy to reply with at the moment, but I'm wiped out. sleep Looking forward to more! hugs



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Date Posted: 6/26 7:18pm Subject: RE: Blood Trail (Post-LotF: Jaina, Tahiri, Ben, Jag, Han, Leia, Luke) Posted 6/24/08!
Wes...you know the fic is awesome when you get both a Days of Our Lives and a Young and The Restless reference!

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