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Author	Topic: Edge of Life: Drabble Series (UDC 3) (Week Sixteen)
Jade_eyes Registered: Aug '04	Date Posted: 10/5/08 3:12am Subject: RE: Edge of Life: Drabble Series (UDC 3) (Week Five)
	Wood LOL Socking Borsk would've been more gratifying Metal Cloth & Stone--num yummy!!!!! Glass-- great to see Iris--hee!!! I think Mara's over jello! -----signature----- I dedicate every num yummy love ballad to Mara/Luke as I completely melt Insatiable mush addict ginchy & IJJ: yours especially Certified Squee! maniac
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DaenaBenjen42 Registered: May '05	Date Posted: 10/5/08 5:51pm Subject: RE: Edge of Life: Drabble Series (UDC 3) (Week Five) - Date Edited: 10/5/08 9:41pm (3 edits total) Edited By: DaenaBenjen42
	path-seeker: Thank you. Glad you liked them visiting the memorial. dancing_star: It so is something Han would do. Thank you. Jade_eyes: Ah, but then Fey’lya would have cause to press charges… And yep. Mara is so over Jello that there aren’t enough words for how over it she is. Thank you, Jade_eyes. Week 5 (08.04.06) (UDC 1) (Neesta... and Elsie) 21. smell It had been a quiet day for a day off, until Neesta popped in unexpectedly with a question: “What’s it like to smell things?” Elsie blinked and turned from the bowl she was mixing ingredients in to look at the translucent little girl. “Why do you ask?” Neesta shrugged. “Ailee mentioned missing the smell of caf, and Momma said that the roses Daddy gave her smelled nice, and you smelling what you cooked… So what is smelling like?” Elsie sighed. Of all the questions she could have asked, Neesta had picked probably the hardest one… How best to answer it? 22. sound “Well… it’s kind of like hearing sound, Neesta. Only with your nose.” Neesta looked at her with an odd expression. “Does smell have a echo?” Elsie chuckled. “I guess it can, a little…” Neesta nodded, then looked at her inquisitively. “Can a smell be loud?” Elsie thought about that one, then nodded her assent. “Yes. Very loud. So loud sometimes that it’s hard to ‘hear’ anything else behind it… with your nose, though, if that makes sense.” “And it can be really faint so you don’t know it’s there?” “That, too…” Elsie was beginning to wonder where this was going. 23. touch “Is it like touching?” Neesta asked as she came to stand next to Elsie and tried to look into the bowl that she was mixing things in. “I understand touching a little.” Elsie turned away from the bowl again and saw that the little girl was standing on her tiptoes, trying to get a better look. She obliged her and tipped it so Neesta could see. “Yes, it’s a little like touching… only with your nose and not your hands. A smell can grab you, just like a hand can.” Neesta concentrated and smiled when her hand didn’t go through the bowl. 24. taste Neesta let go of the bowl when Elsie gave her a stern look. “And what’s it like to taste?” “Asking all the hard questions today, aren’t you?” This just got more interesting all the while, didn’t it? “Yes… What’s it like?” “A lot like sound, really.” “A taste can be loud and echo, too?” Elsie nodded, suddenly glad that this hadn’t been the first question. Thank the Universe for small favors. “Yes, it really can do that. Spicy things are really loud, and other things echo later, and some tastes are so faint that you don’t quite know they’re there.” 25. sight “Is it like seeing?” Elsie nodded. “Yes. With your mouth. The taste buds see, just like your eyes do, but in a different way.” Neesta was silent for several long minutes as she watched Elsie coax the mixture into something edible. Then she sat down on the floor and pouted. “I want to smell something.” Elsie glanced down at her and sighed. “I know, kiddo.” “It’s not fair, Elsie.” Elsie sat down and really looked at the translucent little girl. There was so much she wanted to say, but the expression in Neesta’s eyes made her stop. “You’re right. It’s not.” -----signature----- "Say it with me now. Postcard. Zoo. Not. Shopping." master to jackyyy17, micky-nikki & Trimaj e-sis to BrightFeather All cats are leopards after dark.
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ginchy Registered: May '05	Date Posted: 10/5/08 6:33pm Subject: RE: Edge of Life: Drabble Series (UDC 3) (Week Five)
	My heart still hurts for Neesta. As for the UDC 3 set, they were all great! I especially enjoyed "Stone". I love the idea of Luke, Leia and company finding out more about Padme, and I like the idea of them all standing at her memorial. -----signature----- ginchy's gambit: http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/29089731/p1 ** Ready for 2009.
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dancing_star Registered: Feb '07	Date Posted: 10/5/08 7:42pm Subject: RE: Edge of Life: Drabble Series (UDC 3) (Week Five)
	25. sight “Is it like seeing?” Elsie nodded. “Yes. With your mouth. The taste buds see, just like your eyes do, but in a different way.” Neesta was silent for several long minutes as she watched Elsie coax the mixture into something edible. Then she sat down on the floor and pouted. “I want to smell something.” Elsie glanced down at her and sighed. “I know, kiddo.” “It’s not fair, Elsie.” Elsie sat down and really looked at the translucent little girl. There was so much she wanted to say, but the expression in Neesta’s eyes made her stop. “You’re right. It’s not.” Poor thing. Wow, wonderful job having Neesta describe smell and taste in terms of sound. That was really interesting, and it would be very hard to describe those senses to someone who can't experience them. Very nice job!! -----signature----- Merry Christmas!!! God bless America and our troops. "The LORD gives strength to his people. The LORD blesses his people with peace." Ps 29:11 ~~~ http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/29615415/p1/?2
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Jade_eyes Registered: Aug '04	Date Posted: 10/6/08 3:54am Subject: RE: Edge of Life: Drabble Series (UDC 3) (Week Five)
	Smell is an amazing sense all right... it's linked to tate very strongly--there are so many "food" smells I love--bacon, cookies, garlic!!!! Chocolate!!! LOL I can't imagine not being able to smell ... Very intriguing use of the prompts. -----signature----- I dedicate every num yummy love ballad to Mara/Luke as I completely melt Insatiable mush addict ginchy & IJJ: yours especially Certified Squee! maniac
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KELIA Title: The Pretty In Pink Fan Fic Manager Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 10/6/08 4:05am Subject: RE: Edge of Life: Drabble Series (UDC 3) (Week Five) - Date Edited: 10/6/08 4:05am (1 edits total) Edited By: KELIA
	“Would you have rather I punched Senator Fey’lya Actually, I would. Frey'la has been asking for it for years I loved Cloth Neesta is very sweet. I loved all the drabbles with her. Great updates -----signature----- "Do or do not, there is no try." Master Yoda A Light In The Darkness: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28150602/p1/?8 Undue Circumstances: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28530583/p1/?10
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path-seeker Title: Mafia Host Registered: May '08	Date Posted: 10/6/08 3:22pm Subject: RE: Edge of Life: Drabble Series (UDC 3) (Week Five)
	Neesta is such an intriguing character, and I like how patient Elsie is with her. These flow together so well, and your descriptions of the senses are great!
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earlybird-obi-wan Registered: Aug '06	Date Posted: 10/7/08 7:13am Subject: RE: Edge of Life: Drabble Series (UDC 3) (Week Five)
	Nice set and with Stone very touching And the other sets too. Great writing -----signature----- writer and Star Wars fan FANART [link=http://boards.theforce.net/fan_art/b10020/25793899]fanart[/link] stories in my bio
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DaenaBenjen42 Registered: May '05	Date Posted: 10/9/08 9:46pm Subject: RE: Edge of Life: Drabble Series (UDC 3) (Week Five) - Date Edited: 10/9/08 9:47pm (1 edits total) Edited By: DaenaBenjen42
	ginchy: Thank you, ginchy. dancing_star: It’s a tricky thing, there with the senses… and I mentioned the smell grabbing thing to mom. Her reaction was one of “Oh, yes it can!” Thank you. Jade_eyes: The odd thing here is that I CAN imagine not being able to smell. Had a job once where I cleaned a grill at night and got innured to the smell… Thank you, Jade_eyes. (And yes… bring on the chocolate! And the french toast!) KELIA: Fey’lya… oh, yes. He has. Thank you, and I appreciate it. path-seeker: Thank you. earlybird-obi-wan: Thank you. Week 5 (10.22.07) (UDC 2) 21. Burn “How’s your hand?” Leia asked after they’d been dismissed from the briefing. Luke frowned at her. “Why? It’s fine, Leia.” She motioned for him to show her, and her frown deepened when she saw how deep the scorch marks went. “I saw you get shot on the barge, Luke. In all the confusion, I didn’t think about it again, but this…” Han joined them and saw Leia looking at the exposed circuits, and frowned at Luke. “What happened?” Luke shook his head. “Not important right now, Han.” “It isn’t? You have an artificial hand, and it’s damaged like that…” 22. Rash “…and you say it isn’t important?” Han glared at him, and Luke winced slightly. “Of course it’s important, kid.” “Han…” Leia began to say, but he stopped her with a look. “No, I want to know why he thinks it’s not important that his hand is like that. Well?” Luke looked away. “I… did something rash. Impulsive.” “And this rash and impulsive thing was…” Han probed deeper, wondering why Leia had suddenly gone on the defensive for Luke. He got the feeling that neither one of them wanted to talk about it. Luke’s response was simple: “I went to Bespin.” 23. Surgery Ailee sat him down at a table. “How’d you get that gash? There wasn’t anything sharp out there, really.” Darvis shrugged. “Just happened like all things happen.” He wanted to shy away from the coldness of the topical anesthetic, then she pulled out a small but wicked-looking curved needle. “Tell me you aren’t going to use that.” “Of course I am, Darvis. This is what we use to fix flesh, though it be non-pleasing to the eye. You’re not afraid of needles, are you?” “Not really…” “Then there’s nothing to be afraid of.” “Couldn’t you use synth-flesh instead?” “No.” “Darn.” 24. Hurt Leia stayed behind when Han left to follow Luke out into the hospital corridor. She turned to Mara to find her staring at her hands, and Leia immediately moved to sit on the edge of the bed. She put a hand on Mara’s shoulder and Mara looked at her, the pain on unshed tears clearly in her eyes. “Want to talk about it?” Mara glanced to the window, shaking her head slightly. “I wanted to be happy today, Leia. I just…” “It’s a lot of take in, isn’t it?” Leia waited until Mara willingly looked at her again. “That’s expected.” 25. Heal “Is it?” “Yes.” Mara glanced toward the window again, wanting to believe it was that simple. Maybe it was, but right now it didn’t seem that way. “Thank you.” The door opened again, and Luke returned, Han behind him. He crossed the room and placed little Ben in her arms once more, smiling at her. Mara gazed down at the child in her arms, and then smiled back at Luke. Maybe things weren’t simple. Maybe the universe was complicated. But right here, and right now… all seemed right and simple. The rest could wait… this was a time for family. -----signature----- "Say it with me now. Postcard. Zoo. Not. Shopping." master to jackyyy17, micky-nikki & Trimaj e-sis to BrightFeather All cats are leopards after dark.
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path-seeker Title: Mafia Host Registered: May '08	Date Posted: 10/9/08 10:06pm Subject: RE: Edge of Life: Drabble Series (UDC 3) (Week Five)
	Wow, I guess Han couldn't have known about Luke's hand until ROTJ. Never thought about that - good job catching those details. I especially loved the last two. Maybe things weren’t simple. Maybe the universe was complicated. But right here, and right now… all seemed right and simple. The rest could wait… this was a time for family. Beautiful!
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Jade_eyes Registered: Aug '04	Date Posted: 10/10/08 4:04am Subject: RE: Edge of Life: Drabble Series (UDC 3) (Week Five)
	Rash and Burn... interesting that Han didn't know about the losing-hand-at-Bespin thing until his release, though of course that makes sense. Hurt and Heal--sweet duo there... of course Ben's birth would be a joyful occasion but also mixed with sad reflections on the loss from before. I'm glad though that Mara was able to focus on family there at the end. -----signature----- I dedicate every num yummy love ballad to Mara/Luke as I completely melt Insatiable mush addict ginchy & IJJ: yours especially Certified Squee! maniac
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KELIA Title: The Pretty In Pink Fan Fic Manager Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 10/10/08 4:15am Subject: RE: Edge of Life: Drabble Series (UDC 3) (Week Five)
	Maybe the universe was complicated. But right here, and right now… all seemed right and simple. I wish the Skywalkers and Solos could have had longer bouts of the right and simple. How very typical of Luke to brush off the seriousness of his injury Great update [face_applasue] -----signature----- "Do or do not, there is no try." Master Yoda A Light In The Darkness: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28150602/p1/?8 Undue Circumstances: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28530583/p1/?10
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dancing_star Registered: Feb '07	Date Posted: 10/10/08 8:07am Subject: RE: Edge of Life: Drabble Series (UDC 3) (Week Five)
	Oh wow! These were so well done! (as usual ) I loved them!! As you can probably guess, the first two with Han and Luke were my faves. Very well done and true to character. Yes, what Luke did was impulsive and rash, but I know I would've done the same. It really seemed like the right thing to do. Beautiful job!! -----signature----- Merry Christmas!!! God bless America and our troops. "The LORD gives strength to his people. The LORD blesses his people with peace." Ps 29:11 ~~~ http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/29615415/p1/?2
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DaenaBenjen42 Registered: May '05	Date Posted: 10/10/08 8:46pm Subject: RE: Edge of Life: Drabble Series (UDC 3) (Week Five) - Date Edited: 10/10/08 10:28pm (2 edits total) Edited By: DaenaBenjen42
	path-seeker: He knew Luke was on his way to Bespin because Lando said so, but after that? Not so much… Thank you, path-seeker. Jade_eyes: Thank you. Kelia: Thank you. (Yes… so like Luke to brush it off…) dancing_star: I think I would have, too, really. Thank you, star. Week 6 - 10/4/08 - provided by Zonoma (Dark Star) 26. Arm She woke up feeling something furry laying on her arm. Not used to the sensation, she wanted to last out and get it away from herself. Investing in self control for the moment, Mara opened her eyes to see what the furry thing was… Dark Star was sleeping on her arm. Mara tried to get her arm out from under the feline without waking her, but stopped when Dark Star emitted a low yowl in her direction. Dark Star opened her eyes and they looked at one another for a long moment, and Mara smiled. This was going to be interesting… 27. Leg Karrde was overseeing the cargo manifest inventory when something brushed against his lower leg. Frowning, he glanced down to find a pair of gold eyes looking up at him. When had a cat come on board? “Karrde, have you seen… Oh.” Mara swept in and picked up the black feline. “Sorry about that. I thought I locked her in.” “She’s yours?” “Yes.” Karrde paused, taking in the fact that Mara was holding a cute, furry animal in her arms. Then he shrugged and scratched the cat behind the ears. “When did you…?” “Two days ago, coming back from the meeting.” 28. Antennae Her whiskers were twitching as she walked through the big building… it felt wrong here. She wasn’t certain what it was, but it didn’t feel right. Her companion had left in a hurry earlier, and now nothing felt right. It hadn’t before. Tracking the scent, she found her companion sitting in a chair in a room… and a familiar shape up on the bed. Even from down on the floor, she could see something was wrong. He wasn’t moving… She curled up on the floor next to her companion’s feet. A lot was wrong… but how much? She didn’t know. 29. Claw Dark Star hissed at the intruder and bared her claws at him. He was not getting past her. When he tried to move forward and around her, she swiped at him. He yelped and pulled his hand away. She stared defiantly up at him, as if to say: “You’re not welcome and I don’t like you.” Kyp Durron backed away slowly. “All right. I’ll wait out here.” “Wait out where?” Mara asked from behind him. Kyp turned to look at her, then down at the cat. “She wouldn’t let me by.” Mara nodded. “She must really not like you, then…” 30. Tail Mara had been watching Dark Star for a while as she sniffed at the various containers in the cargo bay of the Wild Karrde, waiting while the feline had her daily exercise. Karrde hadn’t minded, but it still felt odd. Aves had found a ball of sting and let Dark Star chase it. That was funny… a grown man playing a simple game with a cat and string. She noticed Dark Star’s tail had taken on a malevolent kind of movement, and glanced around to see what the cause was... Oh. Karrde’s pet vornskrs had entered the cargo hold. -----signature----- "Say it with me now. Postcard. Zoo. Not. Shopping." master to jackyyy17, micky-nikki & Trimaj e-sis to BrightFeather All cats are leopards after dark.
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dancing_star Registered: Feb '07	Date Posted: 10/10/08 9:44pm Subject: RE: Edge of Life: Drabble Series (UDC 3) (Week Six)
	26. Arm She woke up feeling something furry laying on her arm. Not used to the sensation, she wanted to last out and get it away from herself. Investing in self control for the moment, Mara opened her eyes to see what the furry thing was… Dark Star was sleeping on her arm. Mara tried to get her arm out from under the feline without waking her, but stopped when Dark Star emitted a low yowl in her direction. Dark Star opened her eyes and they looked at one another for a long moment, and Mara smiled. This was going to be interesting… I have four cats. I can relate. But only one's indoor now- the "baby", who just turned one. Great set! I love how they all centered around Dark Star this time. Lovely job!! -----signature----- Merry Christmas!!! God bless America and our troops. "The LORD gives strength to his people. The LORD blesses his people with peace." Ps 29:11 ~~~ http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/29615415/p1/?2
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