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Darth_Pevra  105 posts
Registered: May '08
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Date Posted: 11/5/08 6:48am Subject: Dawn? AU/Drama/Humor/H-C Vader, L, L, Han, Sidious New Update 30/11/08 - Date Edited: 11/30/08 8:58am (8 edits total) Edited By: Darth_Pevra
Title: Dawn?
Author: Darth_Pevra
Timeframe: Post RotJ
Characters: Vader/Anakin, Luke, Leia, Sidious, Han
Genre: Drama, Humor, AU
Keywords: Secrets, Argument
Summary: Going back to the white side is a hard challenge and not possible in mere minutes
Notes: I’m new here and english is my second language, please don’t hurt me peace
Disclaimer: I’m merely borowing Lucas creations

Prologue


Luke was holding Vaders battered form. The scratches and other battle signs on his mask were indication how much Vader himself must be injured.
“Luke, help me take this mask off.”
“But you’ll die.”
He must really love me.
“Nothing can stop that now. Just for once, let me look on you with my own eyes.”
Is that really my voice? How pathetic.
Luke viewed his father, eyes wide. But suddenly he felt something, and it was certainly strange. His hand felt warm, as if it was glowing with the energy of the white side.
Luke held his hand up while still holding his father with the other hand. The hand was looking perfectly normal, but it was still engulfed in the white side. Luke acted instinctively, letting the force flow from his hand into his fathers broken body. In wonder, he felt how the force started to heal the injuries.
I remember this. Force healing. I might actually survive.
Suddenly they both felt imminent danger. As quickly as he could, Luke carried his father into the shuttle and took off.

Chapter 1

Vaders eyes fluttured open. He saw – darkness.
Am I dead?
But suddenly he felt a searing pain that made him groan. Quickly, he regained his usual discipline.
Where am I? Where did Luke bring me?
He noticed that his sight was blurry. Now that he concentrated he could make out that the darkness wasn’t total. Apparently he was on a ship. Obviously the same shuttle that his son used to escape.
He thinks the Alliance won’t look here. He thinks he can hide me. How is that ever going to work?
Frustrated he realized that he was pretty helpless. Sure, he still wielded the power to kill intruders, but the deaths would alarm the alliance of his presence.
Not that I want to use the darkside again.
“Really?”
Vader blinked. A ghost was standing right before him, and he was looking really familiar.
He doesn’t controll me anymore longer!
“I can feel your anger”, Sidious said with that sickening grin of his. “Some redemption.” He spat the words out with contempt. “Do you really think you can escape your nature? You are how I made you, and nothing is going to change that.”
Vader stared blankly. There was no reason to waste his anger at this – traitor.
He is dead. And I destroyed him. I should not forget that.
Sidious continued. “What kind of fantasies are you clinging to, I wonder? You do certainly remember what a treacherous being a human can be.”
Vader gritted his teeth behind the mask. His former master was of course right. Even Luke is capable of betraying me, and thus can’t be totally trusted. But if I don’t screw up we have a chance.
“So you chose to be destroyed once again as you were by Kenobi? You do enjoy pain Lord Vader.”
He – won’t do it. Not Luke.
“You should be afraid. You should be.”
“I may be afraid. But I can overcome my fears, more than you ever could.”
“You think you don’t need my guidance? Fine, so be it!” Sidious was now outright angry.
He will come back to haunt me. He thinks through me he can still manipulate the galaxy. It’s the only power he has left.
Now, how to achieve inner peace and everything else I need to remain a Jedi?
And what about the rebells and the consequences of his survival? They are not going to like this… and even less that Luke was the one who saved me.

 

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Vialco  286 posts
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Date Posted: 11/5/08 8:11pm Subject: RE: Dawn? AU/Drama/Humor/H-C Vader, L, L, Han, Sidious
Very nice, Vader survived, but then, so did Palpatine. Well, instead of wasting time taunting Vader, he should hurry off to Byss, and inhabit a clone, then return to Endor and crush Vader and his offspring. Nicely done, I like the fact that Sidious taunts Vader as a ghost, very amusing. I look forward to your next post.

 

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Darth_Pevra  105 posts
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Date Posted: 11/6/08 1:18am Subject: RE: Dawn? AU/Drama/Humor/H-C Vader, L, L, Han, Sidious
Vialco posted:
Very nice, Vader survived, but then, so did Palpatine. Well, instead of wasting time taunting Vader, he should hurry off to Byss, and inhabit a clone, then return to Endor and crush Vader and his offspring. Nicely done, I like the fact that Sidious taunts Vader as a ghost, very amusing. I look forward to your next post.

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Well, in my story there is no clone inhabiting technique.
Vader is in for some annoyment. mischief


Chapter 2

Luke was sitting on a ledge, his legs hanging towards the ground. While everybody else was cheerfully partying, the look on Lukes face was that of worried concentration. Something was bothering him, that much was obvious.
Han approached him, bottle in hand and followed by Chewie, as always.
“Hey kid, you look like you sniffed at the rear end of a bantha.”
Luke sighed. How would Han understand his problems?
I can’t tell him. I must think of something.
“Well, it wasn’t easy, you know? I thought it would be straightforward, playing the perfect hero and coming out on top, but it was nothing like that.”
“You seem well. Not even a scratch, Luke. Now the only thing you need is a girlfriend, right Chewie?”
“Arrhnoo.”
Luke smiled at the thought of a girlfriend.
“It’s just that… ah how to tell you? Vader was my father.”
Han stared at Luke, an incredulous look on his face. Then he shook his head.
“It’s only genes Luke. You don’t want to know what hole I crawled out. You are nothing like that monster.”
Luke winced. Damn, that was definitely the wrong reaction. He put a solemn expression on his face.
“He saved my life, and risked his own in the process.”
This was one of the very rare incidents where Han was truly speechless. Deep in thought, he rubbed his scar.
“Oh crap. Well anyway we are having a good time partying. If you feel like it just drop by.”
“Thanks, I appreciate it.” Luke smiled cockily. “But I’m not sure that is allowed in the Jedi Master code of conduct.”
“Maybe it’s time for a rules change.”
With that Han left.
-
It seemed to Luke that Leia had carefully calculated the time between his meeting with Han and her visit.
They can’t stand me with a gloom face.
“Han told me,” she said as introduction.
Luke simply nodded.
After a pause he spoke. “It’s confusing me. And I wished he were alive.”
“Don’t forget all he has done to you.” Her gaze went unmistakenly to his gloved hand.
“Yes, yes you are right.”
“Luke, you are hiding something.”
Luke flinched. How does she know?
She continued. “It's quite obvious actually. I know you Luke.”
“I will tell you. Just … not now, OK?”
“Of course Luke. I will leave you to your deliberations.”
How can she read me like that? It was a disconcerting thought, but then Luke had always been an open book to his friends. It wasn’t in his nature to keep secrets for long. He always felt bad when he did.

Some more later today. happy

 

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Date Posted: 11/7/08 1:36am Subject: RE: Dawn? AU/Drama/Humor/H-C Vader, L, L, Han, Sidious - Date Edited: 11/7/08 2:20am (1 edits total) Edited By: Darth_Pevra
Chapter 3

Vader smiled when Luke entered the Shuttle. He had been missing his son, eventhough he hadn’t been gone for long.
Is my longing really that strong?
Yes it is you fool.
“Your rebell friends will not be as happy as you about my continued survival.”
“I know father. I’m working something out.”
“If you don’t think you are capable of carrying out the deed then let me do it”, Vader said in a casual voice.
“What are you talking about?”
“I don’t want my survival to cause you problems. Some of the hatred the rebells bear for me will fall upon you as soon as they find out you saved my life.”
He’ll probably turn my offer down. But after all there is a miniscule chance he will accept it.
“I didn’t bring you here just to have you die.”
“Your previous reasonings should not influence your assessment of the current situation.” Vader paused shortly. “You should be aware of the fact that it was I who killed your mother”, he said with a bleak voice.
It’s for his best, and I do owe him that truth.
Luke went completely pale, lips pursing. He was almost looking like a ghost.
“Why?”, he asked with restrained voice.
“I was angry.”
And that is all there really is to it.
Luke was silent for a long time.
Then he said with determination: “You will not manipulate me into killing you. Avenging my mother will not bring her back to life.” He eyed Vader curiously. “And I think that you already punish yourself for it.”
“Very well. If that is your wish I will honor your sacrifice.
That leaves the question what you will do about me and your friends. I am partially responsible for the destruction of Alderaan, Leia’s home planet. I am the public face of all the rebells despise about the empire.”
And that’s not going to change soon.
“I think I will need to explain to them what a corrupting influence the dark side can be. How it can control someone. Maybe then they will understand that you as a person aren’t too bad.”
“Hmm.”
It’s easy to blame the dark side. Taking responsibility is harder.
“Father it is true.”
“Perhaps, though I do hate to take the role of the victim.”
“Anyway, how do you want to be called now?”
Neither Anakin nor Vader fits well. Anakin’s character was different, and Vader was my Sith name.
Inhale, exhale, inhale, exhale. „I shall be called Anakin, in honor of my mother’s choice.“
-
“I have a surpise for you, my apprentice.”
“Indeed?” Vader’s tone was that of annoyance. “I have no desire to help you quench your boredom.”
Palpatine smiled sadistically.
“You should know that there is an explosive device inplanted in your lungs. The device was controlled from an external source. Every week a signal was sent automatically to the device.
If the device doesn’t receive it’s weekly signal, it will detonate. And now you may guess where the signal came from.”
Palpatine cackled softly.
Might be a bluff.
“You carried the signal source with you at all times.” It was a statement, not a question.
“Of course. I wouldn’t let my sharpest knife go to waste because some fool pushes the wrong button.”
“Why are you telling me this?”
“Because your death isn’t as satisfactory as to watch your family being torn apart.”
Because when I leave now and Luke leaves with me everybody will think he is a traitor. There won’t be any time to get Leia and Luke’s friends accustomed to my survival.
Vader fumed. There was nothing he could do to make Sidious suffer for this. He was dead and out of reach.
“When was the bomb installed?”
“Ahh, you would die to torture me now, wouldn’t you? But in rememberance of our special bond I shall tell you when it happened. Do you remember the time you were stationed in the Orbit of Alzoc 3?”
“Yes.”
Vader remembered. An artery in his lungs had burst from exhaustion. It had been caused by the long term sideeffects of Mustafar. He had collapsed after mere seconds right in front of his men, because the blood of the artery had filled his lungs and furter hampered the ability to absorb oxygen. When he awoke he had been told that he was in coma for four full days.
That makes sense. More than enough time for him to have this bomb inplanted.
Great, a common medic won’tl be capable of removing the bomb safely.
“Anything else you would tell me?”
“I would make haste, Lord Vader.”
“That name no longer has any meaning to me.”
Hopefully.

You can critique me freely, being new I certainly could use some advice. happy

 

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Vialco  286 posts
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Date Posted: 11/7/08 5:30pm Subject: RE: Dawn? AU/Drama/Humor/H-C Vader, L, L, Han, Sidious
Nice, I am enjoying your writing very much. If you want some criticism, I would reccomend using spell check, and possibly having some spaces, all in all, just watch your grammar. As for the actual content, you rock. This is amazing stuff, and I have always had that idea of Palpatine planting a bomb inside Vader, just in case he ever got out of control, though I always believed he would plant it inside the brain instead. So now Vader is rushing against time to try and save his life, only one week left. Great update, I can't wait to hear more.

 

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Date Posted: 11/8/08 1:59am Subject: RE: Dawn? AU/Drama/Humor/H-C Vader, L, L, Han, Sidious
Vialco posted:
Nice, I am enjoying your writing very much. If you want some criticism, I would reccomend using spell check, and possibly having some spaces, all in all, just watch your grammar. As for the actual content, you rock. This is amazing stuff, and I have always had that idea of Palpatine planting a bomb inside Vader, just in case he ever got out of control, though I always believed he would plant it inside the brain instead. So now Vader is rushing against time to try and save his life, only one week left. Great update, I can't wait to hear more.

Thank you very much! hugs
Spell check is a good idea, I'll start to use that.
They'll run into some real troubles finding that medic, I can tell you that. wink

 

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Date Posted: 11/8/08 6:26am Subject: RE: Dawn? AU/Drama/Humor/H-C Vader, L, L, Han, Sidious - Date Edited: 11/8/08 6:27am (1 edits total) Edited By: Darth_Pevra
This time more dramatic than humorous. rose
Unfortunately I discovered my word spellcheck has some sort of glitch. angry
But I won't give up in my crusade, my dear readers. wink

Chapter 4

"Luke?“
Luke suddenly had the feeling that his father was calling for him.
“Father?”
“There is an urgent matter we need to discuss.”
Oh no, he wants to discuss suicide again.
But still, Luke knew his father needed his support and he was ready to offer it. He entered the shuttle.
“Palpatine has plant an explosive device in my body”, Vader started without preliminaries. “Every week it received a signal sent by a transmitter. The function of the signal is to inhibit the device from triggering. Unfortunately the transmitter was destroyed during the destruction of Death Star two.”
Luke needed a few seconds to think this through.
“Is there a possibility to remove the device? Using surgery for instance?”
“I think that the device triggers when tampered with. We need to find a medic that specializes in these kind of things.”
“But you certainly know such specialists, right?”
“Considering the chaotic state of the galaxy I doubt I can contact them.”
“And you can’t risk flying to the wrong place because your time is running out”, Luke concluded.
“Precisely.” Pause. “On the upside I never liked the notion to decompose in the ground anyway.”
Luke’s mouth twiched in disgust.
Eww, are you always that morbid father?
“Where to go then?”
“Atzerri is the closest planet where we can probably find an appropriate medic. Money is irrelevant, as at least one of my accounts should still be functional.”
“Travel time?”
“Approximately two days.”
“OK, I’ll organize food and water.”
“Luke, I need a respirator that can be attached to the nose, otherwise I will be unable to eat or drink.”
“I can fetch one from the medical tent.”
Luke already turned to leave, body tense from impatience.
“What will you tell your friends?”
Luke’s face showed a pained expression.
“I can’t tell them! They won’t let us leave, and you have precious little time left.” He bit his lip, nervously. “I trust them. They will give me a chance to explain myself afterwards.”

-

Leia had a strange feeling about this. She knew that something was wrong with Luke, and now he had left without a word, taking the lambda shuttle he used for his escape with him. The only explanation she had for this rude behavior was that he might’ve been in a hurry. In such a hurry that he couldn’t spare a minute for a farewell.
Now she was investigating who saw Luke before his departure. Maybe she would find the reason.
During her search she entered the medical tent. She approached one of the doctors. It was a female Weequay. A species not known for being talkative.
“I am sorry for disturbing you, but have you seen Luke Skywalker?”
“Skywalker? No. But maybe you can do something about the thiefs.”
“Thiefs?”
“Yes, those ewoks steal medical equipment.”
“How do you know it was the ewoks?”
The Weequay made a sort of snorting noise. “More gone missing than usual.”
Being the helpful person Leia was, she made a note to herself to talk with the ewoks. They probably didn’t know that it was wrong to take medical equipment. Some species differed in their philosophy about individual property. Leia found nothing wrong with that on principle, but the medics needed their tools.
“What has been stolen?”
The Weequay handed her a list. Everything stolen was listed here, she even went so far to write down when she exactly discovered that it had gone missing. Leia noticed that a respirator had gone missing just a few hours ago.
No!
Don’t be ridiculous sister, this is just a coincidence.
While Leia had a strange feeling before, now it seemed to her as if her belly was filled with icewater. Somehow she knew it to be true, even if it was farfetched. She remembered how Luke had told her that he would try to save his father.

-

“I don’t know how ugly I am. I didn’t look into the mirror for quite some time.”
“Shall I help you with the mask?”
“No.”
Vader could only use one hand, but it was no problem to manipulate the lock with the force. He removed the mask and Luke quickly attached the respirator to his nose. Luke smiled.
“It ain’t so bad. But you might not want to attend a beauty contest.”
Vader grinned wryly. “I could have when I was younger.”
Then they both grabbed a nutrition bar and had a tasteless meal.
When they finished Luke asked: “Why did you kill her?”
There was a long silence, broken only by the soft noise of the respirator. Vader’s brows were furrowed in thought.*
“Can’t talk very well with this.”
“Oh.”
Is this a lie, does he want to hide his feelings behind the mask?
Vader put his mask back on.
“After I killed Jedi in the name of the emperor she decided that it was her moral obligation to help remove me from the galaxy. She chose her integrity over her love.” Vader’s tone was matter of fact.
“For that reason she smuggled Kenobi on board of her ship when she rushed to meet me on the planet of mustafar. We had a heated argument because she didn’t want to follow me on my current course. In that, she was right. I had changed by then in a way which would make a future relationship with her impossible.” Inhale, exhale, inhale, exhale.
„When I was shouting at her Kenobi left the ship. Faced with her betrayal I lost control over the dark side and choked her. I must also have done something else with the force, because a collapsed trachea kills immediately.”
“Is that it?”
“Basically, yes.” Vader’s voice changed to hard and determined: “I later vowed to never lose control again.”
“Why didn’t you help her afterwards?”
“I was distracted.”
What? Too distracted to help his girlfriend?
Luke’s expression was hard. He would accept that his father lost control, but he would never accept a refusal to help.
“What could distract you so much that you wouldn’t help her?”
“I was laying on the operating table and fighting for my own life, Luke.”
Luke’s features went softer again.
“Do you still love her?”
“No. Sometimes I have sentimental thoughts about what could’ve happened, but I had a lot of time to forget her. Dwelling on the past has no use, in fact it can become a dangerous distraction to the present.”
Luke just nodded and fell silent. Are you a liar, father?

*)
I know Vader has no eyebrows in special edition, but I find it weird that he wouldn't regrow them.

 

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Date Posted: 11/8/08 8:50am Subject: RE: Dawn? AU/Drama/Humor/H-C Vader, L, L, Han, Sidious
Very nice, so Vader no longer loves Padme, that is a bit surprising, because in canon he is seen in his meditation chamber mourning the loss of the only thing he still loves. But like Luke thinks, maybe Vader is lying. Great update, you are beoming quite regulkar with these things, that is something many authors can't do, congratulations on that. I also noticed that you reviewed my latest story, thanks. Anyway this was a great post, and I hope that they can find a medic, only one week remains. Also, let's see more of Lord Sidious, too bad he can't return, but taunting Vader as a Force Ghost is pretty good revenge, and like Exar Kun, even though he is dead, he can still affect the physical world, because of the things he left behind, like the bomb. Nice work.

 

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Date Posted: 11/8/08 9:57am Subject: RE: Dawn? AU/Drama/Humor/H-C Vader, L, L, Han, Sidious - Date Edited: 11/8/08 9:57am (1 edits total) Edited By: Darth_Pevra
Vialco posted:
Very nice, so Vader no longer loves Padme, that is a bit surprising, because in canon he is seen in his meditation chamber mourning the loss of the only thing he still loves. But like Luke thinks, maybe Vader is lying.

Who knows, who knows. wink
Vialcon posted:
Great update, you are beoming quite regulkar with these things, that is something many authors can't do, congratulations on that.

That is because I enjoy it quite a bit.
It is also not my first attempt to write a long story, so I got some endurance. Aside from the language difficulties it is quite a bit easier because the settings, characters and their relations are already more or less defined.
Vialcon posted:
I also noticed that you reviewed my latest story, thanks.

You are welcome!
Vialcon posted:
Anyway this was a great post, and I hope that they can find a medic, only one week remains. Also, let's see more of Lord Sidious, too bad he can't return, but taunting Vader as a Force Ghost is pretty good revenge, and like Exar Kun, even though he is dead, he can still affect the physical world, because of the things he left behind, like the bomb. Nice work.

You're right, it's time for some Sidious talk soon. cool

 

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Date Posted: 11/9/08 4:08am Subject: RE: Dawn? AU/Drama/Humor/H-C Vader, L, L, Han, Sidious
Chapter 5

“What?”
I must be dreaming.
“No, you are not dreaming boy.” Sidious spat the last word. He was thorougly disgusted. Not only was the boy weak in mind, he was also stupid.
“What are you doing here?”
As if ben wasn’t enough, now I’m also seeing my worst adversary.
“I am telling you the truth. Your father killed the person he loved more than anyone else. And he can do it a second time.”
Luke rubbed his eyes. He had been trying to sleep, as he knew he needed the energy as soon as they arrived on Atzerri.
“I’ll help father deal with his problems and then he’ll be in control and…” Luke yawned.
Palpatine was angry. How could this insolent thing give him an answer like that?
“You are not listening. His temperament is dangerous, his wrath more powerful than you can possibly imagine.” He smiled wickedly. “He will destroy one of your friends, it is but a matter of time.”
Luke blinked.
“I think you underestimate him, your highness.”
And he underestimates me!
“Fool! It was I who shaped him, who created his very self.”
“He desires control more than anything else”, Luke countered.
“His control will never be absolute. His anger is constantly fueled by his pain, and he can only surpress it so long.”
Luke fell silent. I only know so little about my father. It was a saddening thought. He had never felt as much anger in him as Sidious described. Probably because he was never really angry at me.
Sidious continued in a lower voice. “He tried to save your mother, because he thought she would die. And to save her, he sacrificed everything. He sacrificed his dreams, his order, his destiny and his soul.”
Luke gulped. That was hard to swallow.
Sidious laughed. “And it seems he has found another attachment!” His glee was boundless.
The ghost vanished, and Luke was left shocked. He fought it. I need to sleep.

-

“Han!”
“What is it sweetheart? You already missing me?”
Wait ‘til I tame you.
“I believe I found out why Luke vanished.”
“Yeah?”
“I think Vader survived, and now Luke left to hide him somewhere!”
“Wait, wait. There’s a hundred other reasons why Luke could’ve left. Maybe there is a girl…”
Leia showed him the datapad.
“Rhoo gneuuu.”
“Oh crap.” Han knew very well from his time as smuggler that the worst possible scenario was always the most likely scenario. “Luke’s crazy enough for that stunt. You know where he went?”
“How should I? I didn’t track him.”
“Well, we can always call him.”
“And warn Vader?” Leia had a cool stare.
“Got a better idea?”
“No”, she conceded. “But let me do it.”
A short while later: “Hello Luke!”
“Hi, Leia! I’m sorry I left so abruptly, but I got an emergency call from an old friend. Good ol’ Bill got in some trouble with a bunch of thugs.”
“Luke, please stop lying.” Leia’s voice was neutral. “I am your sister, you can trust me”, she said more softly.
Luke knew he got caught, and his face was showing it.
“Ok, no more lies.” He sighed. “I happen to like him. And there is a bomb in his chest ready to explode. I’m just trying to save him.”
“Luke, do you have any proof aside from his words that this bomb really exists?”
Luke was dumbfounded. “No…”
“Maybe he does love you, but he is also a devious strategist. You should at least consider that he might be lying to you.”
Poor Luke. Who knows what Vader is planning. I need to save him.
“Where do you take him?”
“Sorry Leia, I can’t tell you. I don’t want the Alliance to capture him and put him to trial.”
“But the people of Alderaan and all the others he hurt deserve justice! We can’t make excuses, otherwise we will soon be as corrupt as the empire.”
“It was the dark side that forced him to do all these horrible things. And I’m sure he’ll try to make up for his past deeds. As a Jedi, I don’t believe in execution.”
He can’t be so blind!
“Luke, we can work something out. I’d rather see him answer for his deeds, but you are my brother. And I’m worried for you.”
“Again, I can’t tell you where I am going. I will keep contact, I promise. May the force be with you.”
“May the force be with you.”

-

Leia’s eyes were widened, an indication of worry as Han already knew. Han was worried as well. He had listened to the conversation, and it seemed as if the kid was in Vader’s clutches. Of course, Han didn’t show his emotion openly.
“This bomb, whoever inplanted it must have been powerful.”
“I am guessing the emperor.”
“Wroo nhii woohahoo.”
“You’re right Chewie, that’s not something a common medic can remove. I’m guessing Lord Vader is going to a place where they have the proper equipment.”
“A close place.”
“Wruuf oo.”
“He can’t trust the other Imperials because of the power struggle. So he’ll need some black market doc.”
“And where can you find such service? After all you are the professional here.”
Han smiled. “Ah, so now you need me! I dunno, lets look on the navigation map.”
“Why did I waste my breath again?”
It didn’t take them long to find the right charts.
Han pointed at a system.
“Atzerri”, Leia murmured.
“They got everything there, for the right price. I guess his Lordship can afford it.”

-

“Something is bothering you.”
And I don’t know what it is, because Kenobi has taken you away from me for such a long time.
“Yes, you.”
“Me? Why?”
“I know so little of you father.”
“I don’t understand. I’m a public figure, and it is easy to…”
Luke interrupted him: “That’s not what I mean. I talk about your heart, your feelings.”
Vader eyed his son curiously under that mask.
“I am not one for idle chatter.”
“And how am I supposed to know you then?”
“Don’t judge me on my words, judge me on my deeds.”
Luke nodded slowly.
Vader wasn't pleased. I'm doing something wrong.
“Father, is there a bomb?”
Vader was surprised.
“Yes. Although I would be fully capable of deceiving you in such a manner.”
Luke definitely didn’t like that answer.
“Did Sidious bother you as well? Because he disturbed my sleep.”
“Yes. You best not listen, because he will warp the truth until it fits his point of view.”
“What about you?”
“Only if I deem it necessary for your wellbeing.”
Or if discussion of the truth hurts more than it is worth.

*Hopes for a few more readers* praying

 

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Date Posted: 11/9/08 9:29am Subject: RE: Dawn? AU/Drama/Humor/H-C Vader, L, L, Han, Sidious
Nice update, yay more of my second favorite dark lord, lord sidious has returned to taunt oth Skywalkers, now all he has to do is go see Leia. He is still a master manipulator, even as a ghost. Perhaps he can still get his revenge, even without a clone body. Great job, and I hope to see more.

 

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Date Posted: 11/10/08 8:49am Subject: RE: Dawn? AU/Drama/Humor/H-C Vader, L, L, Han, Sidious
Vialco posted:
Nice update, yay more of my second favorite dark lord, lord sidious has returned to taunt oth Skywalkers, now all he has to do is go see Leia. He is still a master manipulator, even as a ghost. Perhaps he can still get his revenge, even without a clone body. Great job, and I hope to see more.

More tonight or tomorrow. happy
Leia taunting? Well, we'll see. Currently she's moving exactly like Palpatine wants though.

 

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Date Posted: 11/11/08 3:47am Subject: RE: Dawn? AU/Drama/Humor/H-C Vader, L, L, Han, Sidious - Date Edited: 11/12/08 3:22am (1 edits total) Edited By: Darth_Pevra
Biggest update so far!

Chapter 6

“This is Atzerri Air control. State your buisness, destination and identity.” The voice on the other end was definitely bored.
“I am Kral Brien. I have a load of hydrospanners on board that I wish to sell at Talos.” It was of course Luke Skywalker who spoke these words. It was far too dangerous to give his real identity as he had no idea who could take an interest in him. He was also wearing normal clothes, hid his lightsaber and wore a blaster so that he could blend in with the crowd later.
“Permission to land granted. Have a nice stay and enjoy our luxurious goods!”
Luke took the ship down to the ground of the nicely looking green-blue planet. His father was sitting next to him, insisting that Luke needed a copilot in case of emergency.
It was hard for Luke to find a space to land the vessel. The port was stuffed with ships of all kind, some even standing so close to another that it would be impossible to leave the planet without scratching one of the other ships. Luke muttered a few curse words. They didn’t have any time to waste. But finally Luke sighted a spot and landed the shuttle artfully.
“Have faith father. See you later!”
“May the fo…” Luke was already running out of the shuttle. Eventhough the Lambda shuttle was a vessel that would draw a lot of attention, Vader wasn’t ready to walk long distances yet and so he would remain until Luke found an apropriate quarter.

-

Luke had a hard time rushing through the crowds on the market. Everything had slowed down to a crawl which almost infuriated Luke. He couldn’t just go to the nearest medicenter, since that wouldn’t offer the service his father needed. That service would only be found in the right circles.
After a short while walking Luke noticed a foul stench in the air. He recognized that the stench came from a nearby cantina, just across the market road. He wondered how anything could smell as foul from such a short distance.
This is it. If I want to find gangsters, that’s the right place.
Luke entered the cantina, just to find a lot of heads turn towards him.
Great, looks like someone will get sliced again like in the Mos Eisley cantina. What is it anyway about me that makes everyone think I’m just a boy? Maybe I should grow a beard.
Luke went to the barkeeper. It was a Dug, who balanced on only one of his arms and used the three others for various duties.
“What can it be?”
“A corellian ale please.”
The barkeeper fetched Luke an ale. Luke put a few credit chips on the counter, much more than the ale was worth. The barkeeper eyed him interested and took the credit chips.
“That’s a bit much for an ale.”
Luke leaned forward. “I need some information. A friend of a friend of mine got a little problem. There’s a something in his chest and he needs special surgery to remove it. Do you happen to know anyone who deals with that kind of thing?”
“No. But I know an information broker that kind of knows about everything here. He can certainly find you the medic. But I must warn you, Blah Swinder is a mad lil Sullustan, that’s for sure. Ha, you’ll find out soon enough about that! Anyway, he lives in apartment 97 of the Geith Building, at the end of the market.”
“Thanks.” Luke left his ale and made his way to the Geith building. He was relieved that he was on the right trail and at the same time a bit worried that his contact was mad.
Well, I can always use the force to drive some sense into that Sullustan’s skull. I’d do him a favor anyway.

-

Vader tried to put himself in a regenerative healing trance. Vader had to use much more concentration than he had expected, the white side of the force still flowed to him reluctantly. His loss in power was angering him. Just a few days ago that technique would’ve been a nonissue.
But now the conflicting emotions in his mind and the lack of his inner peace blocked him from accessing the force. Even more frustrating was the fact that he knew that the dark side would come freely to him if he just reached out, that he wouldn’t even need to concentrate.
All beginnings are hard, so stop making excuses.
Then he thought about his son, and suddenly there was the inner peace he needed. Just like on the death star, Luke was the anchor that pulled him towards the light. And he fell into trance.
A few minutes later Vader awoke from his trance. He had heard something besides his breathing, there was a screeching noise. And Vader knew better than to distrust his senses. He stretched out with the force. There, five beings tried to break into the shuttle. Vader concentrated harder, but no, again he couldn’t use the force as he was used to.
Anyway, I don’t need the force to know that those are some curious thiefs.
Vader smiled when he thought about their future reaction.
Finally the fools made it. They entered the darkness of the shuttle, holding small lights in front of them. One of them found the button for the lights.
Oh yes, those reactions were worthwhile.
“Maybe you should overthink your career choices.” Vader’s voice was completely dry, despite the fact that he was inwardly amused.
The leader, a female human needed a few seconds before she could reply.
“Let’s take him. He is injured and I’m certain there’s a fat bounty on his head.”
Vader’s amusement faded.
“I assure you that I am still capable of swating you like bugs. I recommend to take a wiser course of action, namely to leave and pretend this meeting never happened.”
And then I’ll flee because thugs can’t be trusted.
“So, who is with me?” The woman’s voice was hysterical, like the voice of someone who tried to push herself to do something.
“You want to leave.” Vader tried to influence them through the force. He didn’t know if it was his failing abilities or the hardheadedness of the thugs that caused it to fail.
“Your mind tricks don’t work!”
Vader used his most menacing tone: “You all heard the tales about me. Don’t make me destroy you!”
But the group pulled out their blasters and started to fire.
Two shots hit the mask, harmlessly deflecting on the surface. Vader stretched out his left hand, absorbing the energy of a blast before it could hit his torso. Shot four barely missed his shoulder, but shot five went through the armor and tore the skin of his ribcage open.
Angered about the attack Vader made a force push. The push was very powerful, the five thugs flew back with devastating speed and hit the walls of the shuttle. Two of them were instantly dead, their necks broken. Three, including the female leader, went unconscious, some of their bones broken.
I used the dark side. Damn! I’m yet still a Jedi, but this better not happen again.
Vader centered his thoughts on memories of peace, like when he was with his mother. He then collected their blasters and woke them up with a gentle nudge of the force.
“I believe you have suffered enough for your lack in judgement. Now you will leave, immediately!”
The thugs took their dead comrads and left the shuttle in utmost silent terror.
I can’t stay here.

-

Vader was collecting their stored supplies. He wouldn’t leave them here. Instead of exhausting his body through carrying them he simply levitated everything.
“Is this your way of serving the galaxy?” The voice was raspy.
“What do you want?” Vader knew this conversation wouldn’t be pleasureable.
“I just want to talk with you my old friend. I know that you are momentarily angry that I followed the Sith tradition. But be assured that I valued you far more on a personal level than I did young Skywalker.”
And you think that works, you old fossile?
“Stop the peacetalk.”
“Very well. Do you think this thugs will stop to sow chaos and discontent in the galaxy?”
“No.”
“And do you agree with me that they will sooner or later kill somebody?”
“Probably.”
Ah, so that’s where you are going.
“Why did you then spare them? By removing them you could have reduced the future suffering of innocents.”
“It’s not the Jedi way.”
Sidious chuckled amused. “So now you follow the Jedi tradition blindly, without sparing as much as a thought to the consequences.”
“I can’t know for sure whether they will continue their lifestyle.”
“Oh come on”, Sidious spat in disdain.
Vader smiled.
“Wait, why so amused? Unless this wasn’t your real reasoning that is.”
“My real reasoning is that any such deed would bring me closer to the dark side. And the consequences of my fall would be far more desastrous than anything this thugs can do.”
“I see. So now you are doing the wrong things for the right reasons.”
“Yes.”
“I am certain that will be fulfilling”, Sidious said asinine. Sidious vanished.
I am strong. I shall not fail just because my duty isn’t enjoyable.

 

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Date Posted: 11/11/08 8:14am Subject: RE: Dawn? AU/Drama/Humor/H-C Vader, L, L, Han, Sidious New Update 11/11/08
Nice update, and Vader is injured, and he used the dark side. Oh, one little note, you use the words white side, technically, it's the light side, sorry just nit-picking. But great job, Vader gave in to his rage, maybe he isn't so redeemed after all. this could prove to be trouble, especially with Lord Sidious still there, whispering in his ear. Nice job, I look forward to reading more.

 

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Date Posted: 11/11/08 8:39am Subject: RE: Dawn? AU/Drama/Humor/H-C Vader, L, L, Han, Sidious New Update 11/11/08
Vialco posted:
Nice update, and Vader is injured, and he used the dark side. Oh, one little note, you use the words white side, technically, it's the light side, sorry just nit-picking.

Ok, I'll exchange white side with light side, no problem.
Vialco posted:
But great job, Vader gave in to his rage, maybe he isn't so redeemed after all. this could prove to be trouble, especially with Lord Sidious still there, whispering in his ear. Nice job, I look forward to reading more.

*snickers*
My thoughts are that saving Luke didn't wipe away the old flaws that must still be overcome.
There'll be even more struggle when the plot further unfolds. devil
I'm not so sure myself how I will decide in the end. thinking

 

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Date Posted: 11/12/08 5:22am Subject: RE: Dawn? AU/Drama/Humor/H-C Vader, L, L, Han, Sidious New Update 11/11/08
Chapter 7

“I hope the hyperdrive works.” Leia never stopped to doubt the ship she was on. Too many bad memories.
But also a few good ones.
Han gave her an angry glance. “Look sister, if the falcon…”
“Stow it, I have heard it all. As long as the hyperdrive works I won’t complain.”
“How rude!” That was C3PO’s voice.
But the hyperdrive indeed worked and they were soon in hyperspace with their course set to Atzerri.
“You’ll like it on Atzerri, Leia. Many scoundrels.”
Leia laughed. Han is really something.
Han smiled. Seeing Leia happy was a rare sight nowadays. Since Luke had gone missing she had never stopped worrying.
She had already lost most of her family when the death star destroyed Alderaan. If Han could help it in any way he would make sure that she didn’t lose her brother.
Han viewed the planetary map he had opened up on the boardcomputer.
“They’ll likely go to the city of Talos. There’s a lot of medcenters and illegal working docs.”
Leia nodded in agreement.
“Roonoo kreewnoo.”
C3PO translated: “He says that Atzerri was really stuffed with people when he went there.”
“So I take it that it will be hard to find Luke”, Leia said.
“You can bet on that”, Han answered.

-

Luke rang the doorbell. With a slight hiss the door opened and Luke entered the office. Sitting in front of a desk was a Sullustan dressed in extraordinary purple clothing. His right ear starred a big black tatoo. It was the first time Luke saw a Sullustan with a tatoo.
Luke was just walking towards the figure when the figure spoke.
“No, no, no, no. You are not doing it right. Go back.”
What the hell is he talking about?
Luke took a few steps back.
The Sullustan continued. “And now you put your chin upwards, straighten your back until it is like a stick and push your ass outward.”
Luke did it. Of course he was more than a bit surprised. He walked towards the Sullustan a second time.
“I greet you human. My name is Blah Swinder and who might you be?”
“I am pleased to meet you, Mr Swinder. My name is Kral Brien.”
“Please do take a seat. But wait, where’s the human model?” He continued to mutter “human model, human model” and went to a door that connected his office with another room nearby. Luke could see that the room was occupied exclusively with different models of chairs, one model to accommodate every important galactic species.
I have a bad feeling about this.
Soon Luke was sitting on the right chair.
Finally.
“A friend of mine needs your help Mr Swinder. He got a bomb inplanted in his chest which could explode at any moment. We fear that any attempt to remove the bomb could provoke an explosion. Do you happen to know anyone who can take care of this problem?”
“Do you want some tea?”
“No thanks.”
“But tea is really good for you. The antioxidants might protect you from a future cancer.”
“Err Ok I’ll take a cup.”
Luke almost wanted to jump up an down at the delay. His fathers life was on the line and here he was drinking tea!
“Which sort?”
“Just take your favorite!”
Luke was struggling to keep his composure. Patience has never been one of his strengths.
“What were you inquiring about before?”
“The bomb.”
“Ah yes the bomb. Mmm, do you smell the aroma? It is grown on the volcanic hangs of the Ridgeroo Mountains on Devaron.”
“Please, Mr Swinder. Do you know anyone who could help us?”
“Yes, yes. I do know such a person. He works for Radaz the Hutt here. But there is the matter of payment. I hope you will apologize my impoliteness to ask.”
“How much?”
The Sullustan smiled friendly, but it was the same smile he used before and that was worrying Luke.
“I don’t appreciate money very much. I already have enough to live my happy little life. I am more interested in rare goods.”
“Very well then. What are you interested in?”
The Sullustan sighed. “I always wanted to posess one of these Stormtrooper armors. If you just watch them marsh, clack clack clack on the ground.” His voice trailed off in sentimentality. “But I am very little, I need one my size.”
Luke almost fell from his chair in shock.
“Listen, my friend is dying. And I have no idea where I could get such an item. None. Isn’t there anything else you need?”
The Sullustan shook his head. Luke sighed.
“You want to accept credits as payment.”
It’s worth a try.
“No. You see I am pretty determined about this armor.” He paused. “A real Jedi! Oh how most exciting!”
Luke grinned as he saw the opportunity. “Actually I am a Jedi master. Fighting against evil, rescuing the princess, that’s what I do all day.”
This time the princess is rather black and bulky.
“Do you carry one of those pretty lightsabers?”
“Indeed.” Luke pulled it out from under his jacket and turned it on. “See?” He made a few artful swings and slashes.
“I’d so love to be a Jedi!”
“Maybe I can teach you a few tricks? I feel that you are pretty strong in the force.” The last sentence was a lie of course. Leia would know instantly what I am up to.
“Yes, yes. Who needs the stormtrooper armor anyway when I can be a Jedi?”
“I will learn you two tricks and then you will give me the information I need.”
“Three tricks, my master.” The Sullustan stood up and bowed down. “It is my utmost honor to become your apprentice great master Jedi.”
“Then let’s go.”

-

The pain was intense, but Vader was determined. He took small steps, because he was well aware that he could faint if he pushed his body over the limit. Meanwhile he was levitating all of the crates with him.
After his transformation he had developed a liking to this most simple technic as he had began to value substance over flashyness. While shooting lightning or turning a body inside out was far more impressive to watch, it was indeed not inherently more useful than killing someone with a fast thrown object.
Anakin was indeed a different man. He always sought to impress.
Then he needed to take a pause. He was exhausted. Luke’s healing abilities were impressive but the new technique was still difficult for his son. Besides that the process was also time absorbing, and there wasn’t much opportunity to heal him. He used the pause to contact his son.
“Son?”
“Yes father?”
“I have been attacked. In my current state it would be too difficult to hold prisoners, so I let them go.”
“Are you well?”
“Yes, but I had to leave the shuttle in case they sold their knowledge.”
“I see. I think I might be able to obtain a quarter pretty quickly. Just give me a few minutes.”
“Good.”

 

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