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The Fan Fiction Newsletter
Edition XIII
February 2005
The “<TOS VIOLATION>!” Issue
Page 1: Index & Newsletter News
Page 2: Reviews – Before the Saga, Saga, Beyond the Saga
Page 3: Reviews - Classic, Vignette, Locked, TFN Archive
Page 4: Editor Recommendation, Letters to the Editor
Page 5: Writing Tips
Page 6: Interviews
Page 7: Forum News, Advertisement, Past Newsletters, Credits
Page I
Newsletter News
Hi...
It hath been some time yonder...okay, it’s too hard to speak like that. Apologies for the delays with this issue, but I know there was plenty to keep everyone occupied. Like writing your stories...right?
First of all, with this Lucky Number 13 Edition, I would like to say a belated Happy Winter Holidays to everyone who celebrates them. Sadly, I did not receive my much-desired Padawan Kenobi, but I got the next best thing – a Jedi Academy t-shirt! Woohoo!
Secondly, a great big congratulations to all the Winter Fan Fiction Awards winners! May you not feel the pressure of now having to live up to people’s high expectations. Also, a tremendous thank you to the awards organisers. I hope your eyes have finally refocused after hours spent coding.
Thirdly, though this be the month of celebrating love, I’ve decided not to change the newsletter colors. One, because I’m too lazy to futz with markups. And two, because you poor people will already have to suffer the wrath of the Barbie Boards soon. Gah!
Fourthly, the New Story Indexes for each era are being managed by VadersMistress (Before), Pallas-Athena (Saga), and Lonewolf89 (Beyond). PMing these three or putting the story info in your fics will make it much easier for them to list your stories, and thus much easier for people to find them...such as myself...hint hint...
A special Get Well Soon to Durhelediel. Let us know how you’re doing. Our thoughts and endless support are with you.
And in other newsletter news, Shaindl once again forgot to send in excerpts with her reviews.
ANNOUNCEMENT
A call for contributors!
Perks: your name beneath bold darkcyan letters. This can be achieved through volunteering to review, or through submitting articles. Because articles are always fun, and the more reviewers, the more stories featured!
Requirements: Ability to read, string together coherent sentences, and most importantly, stay open-minded.
Those interested, please send me a PM, and indicate whether you have any era preferences.
Also, if you have review recommendations, would like your story reviewed, or would like to see or write an article on a particular aspect of fanfic, don’t hesitate to let me know!
Now, get ready, because this issue is loaded with all kinds of goodness, plus a special little thing that I found particularly amusing. It’s really obvious, so if you catch it, I will...give you Newsletter points of some kind. A bit like Jedi Master points – eventually good for something.
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Reviews
BEFORE THE SAGA
Title:Scars and Beginnings
Author: Indra
Timeframe: JA
Status: In Progress
Reviewer #1
Rating: Very Good
Comments:
This is a JA AU story. In it, senior Padawan Xanatos teaches a class on galactic cultures to a group of younger padawans, including Obi-Wan Kenobi, apprentice to Master Rin Calan. While teaching, Xanatos comes to some disturbing conclusions about Obi-Wan's master and the nature of the relationship between the two.
This story deals with the possibility of emotional and physical abuse in the ranks of the Jedi. It is done tactfully, with great attention to the after-effects of such treatment. The story moves right along, and avoids the common problem of artificially contrived angst. The emotions the characters display are entirely genuine and serve to drive the story, rather than the other way around.
I hope Indra soon finds the time to finish this story.
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They ate in silence with Qui-Gon contemplating how best to find out why the boy had run away. When they were finished he tried to approach the matter a bit differently than before.
"Obi-Wan, did you know that it was me who brought you to the Temple?"
The Padawan looked at him in surprise. He clearly hadn't known. Qui-Gon smiled gently at him and continued. "I was on a routine mission when I found you. Everyone at the Temple was cooing over you when we got back, marvelling at the small boy with the beautiful eyes."
Qui-Gon laughed lightly and Obi-Wan smiled a bit. It occurred to the Master that this was the first time since the mission had started that he had seen this expression on the boy's face. Feeling that it was the right time, he changed the course of the conversation.
"You know, Master Calan was also on that mission."
The smile vanished instantly and Obi-Wan looked at the ground once again.
Reviewer #2
Rating: Good
Comments:
This particular story opens with a seemingly innocent picture of Padawan Xanatos and Qui-Gon Jinn. Padawan Xanatos has been instructed to teach a Culture and Politics class to a group of thirteen-year-olds. It soon becomes apparent that Xanatos is concerned about one of the students in his class, Obi-Wan Kenobi due to his extremely shy, silent nature.
In the beginning of the story we meet Obi-Wan’s master, an original character by the name of Rin Calan and it quickly becomes apparent that he is the main source of fear and trouble of the young padawan. Xanatos and Obi-Wan develop a close friendship and Xanatos does his best to help Obi-Wan. It is a particularly moving tale of emotional abuse of a child tastefully done within the board regulations of a difficult subject matter to write about.
There were a few things that I thought needed a little clarification. I wasn’t aware it was an AU when I originally started reading it so seeing Xanatos as a good guy threw me off slightly, but Indra portrayed him as a good padawan very nicely. I especially enjoyed seeing the banter between Master and padawan in the very beginning of the story. The dialogue drew me into the beginning of the story. The charm of the story however is such that I could easily overlook the fact that Xanatos was being nice. I hope very much that Indra comes back to finish the story. A job very well done, Indra!
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"You know, sometimes I wonder where the enthusiastic boy from seven years ago went to." Qui-Gon Jinn said with an amused grin on his face.
His Padawan shot him a glare. "He vanished shortly after you started with your early-morning-what-a-great-day-wake-up-call."
Title: Should As Strangers We Meet
Author: Healer_Leona
Timeframe: JA
Status: Complete
Reviewer #1
Rating: Excellent
Comments:
This particular story is a repost of a story on the Classic Board but I personally had never read it the first time around and so it was a great delight to get to read it. The story opens with an intense sparring match between Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan, which was flawlessly executed. The dynamics of the duel and emotional intensity were very well portrayed there. Soon after Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon are given their mission: rumors of a time traveling device have been surfacing that someone has built and they are told to destroy the device as it could be dangerous in the wrong hands.
Upon locating the particular device they discover not that it is a time traveling device, but it can transport beings from one dimension to another. Even in alternate dimensions however some things never change, a fact which I found to be very enjoyable. Qui-Gon is still impulsive and rebellious and Xanatos still has unfinished hatred at his old Master. I can’t say more or I would spoil this marvelous story. It is one wild ride with the unexpected in every corner and I quite thoroughly enjoyed it.
I never have been a big fan of alternate dimension stories before, but after reading this one, I have become impressed with the genre.
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“Who are you?” Mace demanded viciously, raw anger almost totally uncontrolled.
Qui-Gon’s mind raced trying to discern the seething hatred he felt directed at him. What could possibly have happen to create such a transformation in the man advancing on him. Against better judgment, he extended his arms out stating, “Qui-Gon Jinn” in his most non-threatening tone.
“I should kill you for this vile masquerade.” Mace replied cold-bloodedly as he closed on the intruder.
“I watched Qui-Gon Jinn struck down over ten years ago.” With that, Mace raised his own weapon and pulled the trigger.
Reviewer #2
Rating: Very Good
Comments:
I liked how Healer_Leona took the reader straight into the action. A lightsaber training duel between Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon gave us an idea of what was going on with their lives, the time frame and how their relationship balanced each other at the opening of this fic. It is important because the device they discover tears their world apart. Qui-Gon Jinn is thrown into an alternate Universe – one where he has died, Obi-Wan left the Jedi and was involved with a group of space wanderers, and where Xanatos lived. Leona also introduces Danni, Obi-Wan's love interest and one with some Force sensitivity.
Healer_Leona makes the whole story seem logical and exciting at the same time. One piece of the puzzle gets resolved and two more crop up to keep the characters off-balance. It's quite an exciting ride and I'm curious to see how it all plays out.
I liked how her characters keep their basic well-beloved traits while other traits change with circumstances. In particular, Obi-Wan's personality is slightly shifted due to his leaving the Jedi and taking up with space gypsies. His use of the Force helps those he loves and he isn't above using it for ill-gotten gain if necessary. I think Obi-Wan is my favorite character in this story because of the balance between the old Obi-Wan and the new.
Healer_Leona doesn't use a lot of heavily descriptive language, mostly everyday words, and her style is simple, straightforward and easy to read. No long-winded paragraphs here but rather enough to give you an excellent idea of what is going on and satisfy as well.
All in all, a wonderful read. Well worth checking out.
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"Does the Council believe these rumors of a time machine?" the young Jedi asked, busying himself with the ship's controls.
"That's why we were sent here, to discover their validity." Qui-Gon answered, gazing out the front view port.
A small dot in space loomed directly ahead of them, growing larger with each passing minute.
“Do ‘you’ believe it possible?” Obi-Wan inquired, sparing a glance behind him.
"There have been beings technologically advance for centuries. Throughout that time there have been individuals who've spent their lives in the creation of such a device." Qui-Gon intoned ominously.
You didn't answer my question. Obi-Wan sent, turning his attention back to the control console.
"What I believe is immaterial. If such a thing exists it could be infinitely more dangerous than any weapon ever built. It could completely change the face of the galaxy as we know it."
SAGA
Title: Dark Skys
Author: darth_nemisis
Timeframe: ESB-ROTJ
Status: In Progress
Reviewer #1
Rating: Fair
Comments:
This story is an AU starting with Luke and Vader’s fight in the ventilation shaft in ESB. Instead of falling down the shaft, Luke instead decides to join Vader.
It’s obvious the author has some great ideas. The idea of Jabba on board the Falcon is amusing, and the action sequences aren’t bad. Relationships between characters are fairly decent as well.
The biggest problem with this story is the number of spelling errors, grammatical mistakes and structural issues. Especially problematic is the misspelling of character names, such as ‘Palpetine’. A good beta reader is needed to fix these, as well as to help with some of the characterization.
While there merits to the story, it’s hard to read with these problems. The story will have potential once these are ironed out. Good luck, nemisis!
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"He has turned, my master," Vader said to Emperor Palpetine. He knelt on a platform, staring at a large hologram of the Emperor.
"Yes, I have felt a strong surge in the Force. You have done well, Lord Vader. You must continue his training, and make sure that he never goes back to the Light ever again."
"I will, Master. He will be with us forever."
"Good. Now get back to his training." Vader bowed his head, and got up as the hologram faded.
Vader walked up to his son, who was staring ut of the bridge of the Executor. "My son, we must get back to our training."
"Do you believe in fate, father?" Luke asked.
"Of coarse," he replied.
"What do you believe my fate to be?"
"You fate is to rule the galaxy with me ."
"If it is just me and you, where does Palpetine come into all of this?"
Vader sighed. He didn't want to tell him of his plans, not yet. "You will learn this in time, my son, but for now, we must continue your training."
"Okay." Together, they walked off of the bridge and headed into the training room.
Reviewer #2
Rating: Good
Comments:
Instead of refusing Vader’s hand at the end of ESB, Luke accepts it. Though he stubbornly refuses to turn to the Dark Side, Vader wears him down little by little. At the same time, Lando, Leia and Chewbacca are attempting a rescue mission for Han from Jabba’s clutches.
The Falcon becomes a battleground as the heroes fight it out with Jabba’s cronies, and I would really like to know how Han reacts to his ship getting dinged up like that! The way Vader taunts Luke and pulls out his anger is interesting as well, and Leia’s sensitivity to the Force seems to be growing.
There are a lot of spelling errors, especially with names, and some character inconsistencies. But the story looks to have a ways to go, so the rest looks promising – especially a mystery Sith who has a history with Boba Fett.
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"Han is going to kill you," Leia screamed at Lando, each ducking behind objects--objects that have fallen from something, broken from something, or just something tipped over. There were even chunks missing from the Falcon's wall.
"I hadn't planned on this," Lando replied. Soon after he stood, ran backwards trying to find a safer haven, firing all the while.
Leia, did the same, but stumbled. She fell to the floor, unconcious. As she laid there, she had a dream, a vision. It was Luke, battling a dark figure. Darth Vader. But Luke wasn't the same, he seemed different, dark. His eyes were filled with rage, filled with despair. They stopped, and began talking. She couldn't hear the words, but could somehow tell that they were talking, not as enemies, but as...friends...allies.
Title: In the Shadow of the Chosen One: Episode II – A Master’s Legacy
Author: solojones
Timeframe: post-TPM
Status: Complete
Reviewer #1
Rating: Good
Comments:
This is a series examining events in the life of Obi-Wan Kenobi and his relationship with Anakin. In the words of the author herself the series is a “character study of some of the defining moments and eras in Obi-Wan Kenobi's life as the mentor of Anakin and Luke Skywalker.” Episode II revolves around Obi-Wan and Anakin immediately after their return to the Temple from Naboo and the beginnings of their life together as Master and Padawan.
Any character study is a delicate balancing act. On the one hand, an author risks getting too involved in their subject’s mind; on the other, not fulfilling the point of a character study by not explaining motivations enough. Generally, I found that the story was slow when it got into Obi-Wan’s long-winded inner dialogues, of which there are many. They could have been condensed and still gotten the point across. I had to take breaks in many of these sections as I lost the thread of what he was thinking about.
There are good things about the story – the dialogue is good, the relationship painted between Obi-Wan and Anakin is fairly strong. The author is also good on the technical aspects of writing for the most part, though there are some odd typos (‘reciprocal’ for a garbage can when it should have been ‘receptacle’, for example). These can be jarring.
Worth taking a look through if you have some time to spare, since it is pretty long.
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Swallowing his trepidation, Obi-Wan spoke gently but firmly. “I know you miss them,” he began. Anakin glanced up at him. “But a Jedi must never put himself before those he serves. He must be willing to forfeit his desires for the sake of aiding others.”
“I do want to help people,” Anakin insisted, “but how can I be a good Jedi if I’m always sad?”
“All pain passes in time, padawan,” Obi-Wan assured him.
The boy looked down. “I guess,” he mumbled, clearly trying not to be impolite but still coming across as grumbling.
Obi-Wan sighed inwardly. Perhaps this was simply not the best time to help Anakin straighten out his views, seeing as they were both tired and most likely edgy. But he could also not help wondering that if it weren’t now, then when would be the time? Furthermore, if his words were not getting through, how was he going to reach the boy?
Reviewer #2
Rating: Good
Comments:
Part of a character study of Obi-Wan that spans the films, this episode focuses on Obi-Wan’s transition from newly-knighted Jedi to Anakin’s master. It’s not an easy shift for him, as he is weighted down by insecurities about both his ability to be a good master and his ties, if there are any, to the Dark Side. At the same time, he is also concerned what his friends and other masters might think of his new responsibilities.
It was kind of hard to get into the story, since some of the thought processes were pretty dense, though the general idea was there at the end. The epiphanies that Obi-Wan had regarding his actions throughout were hard to pull from these contemplations, and it was sometimes difficult to even remember those parts. In that sense the best part was the dialogue, because it presented Obi-Wan’s emotions clearly through his interactions with others. This was especially true when it came to the way certain masters and his friends perceived him. The dialogue also gives some nice breathers from the longer passages.
What was a bit surprising was the way Obi-Wan sometimes snapped at Anakin, though it’s understandable given the circumstances – this all taking place just days after Qui-Gon’s death. He warms up to the boy near the end, however, and starts to believe they can both go through this training.
For me, one of the main drawbacks was that there were some heavy emotions presented within, but the story seemed detached from them. Still, as mentioned before, the dialogue keeps it moving along.
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“Well, that’s too bad. Your cheer and endless conversation will be missed,” the young man said with teasing sarcasm.
It was a joke, but Obi-Wan knew it was true. He wasn’t exactly the most talkative or light-hearted person to have around. Qui-Gon had always worried about him being too serious all the time. It would turn him prematurely grey, he’d said. Well it was a good thing now that he was more mature than most of the Jedi his age. It would take someone with a great understanding of the gravity of such a duty to train Anakin. It was a serious task and Obi-Wan took it very seriously.
“There you go brooding again,” Brandeis said, breaking into Obi-Wan’s thoughts.
The young Master shot his friend a glance. “What you call brooding, I call contemplation. I’ve always failed to see the flaw in wanting to think,” Obi-Wan rejoined.
BEYOND THE SAGA
Title: Dark Paths
Author: Thrawn McEwok
Timeframe: post-NJO
Status: In Progress
Reviewer #1
Rating: Excellent
Comments:
The opening was powerful, and grabbed my attention right away.
Slowly, she dragged her mind out of the darkness, unwilling to face the uncaring universe, but coaxed by the knowledge that she was no longer alone amid the shadows of her cell, spurred into awareness by the subtle, pressing presence of the man who had come to mock her.
I don’t want to give away anything, but I’ll just say that you should assume nothing! This author manages to surprise you time and again, without seeming contrived or artificial. In other words, the pacing is superb!
Thrawn McEwok manages to put wonderfully descriptive passages throughout this work, even when doing something as simple as describing a ship.
More than a generation after her mile-long keel had tasted hard vacuum for the first time, the Imperial Star Destroyer remained instantly recognizable - an icon of power. Even minding her own business in a parking orbit around a lifeless world like Avirandel, the mere sight of her would be enough to send the crews of most ships - military and civilian alike - scrambling to man the guns, raise the deflectors, and find the nearest exit vector from the system.
Who would have thought that a Star Destroyer could be so poetic? I loved reading this because every single post had something that struck me, that I’ll remember. In a work of this length, that says something about the skills of the writer.
The descriptions in this work bring the whole story to vivid life. You can see what the author is describing.
He smiled, waited for her to try again, and wondered how she saw him. A tall young man, his homespun robes and relaxed posture softening the blunt curves and hard edges of his fleet commander's throne. Long-legged, level-eyed, his fingers steepled easily in front of him.
A Jedi Master.
While at times I may have been confused, it was a good, anticipatory sort of confusion. As in “I can’t figure out what‘s going to happen next and I can’t wait to read the next post” type of confusion. I had to read some sections a few times to get it all clear in my mind.
Overall, I would rate this as excellent. The author is very skilled and has a fantastic knowledge of the EU, which is essential in this story. I urge you to read it, but make some popcorn and get ready for an entertaining evening, because this story is a long one!
Reviewer #2
Rating: Very Good
Comments:
This is a very intriguing AU, with a storyline that kind of parellels the OT. Admittedly I was a little put off on the story because of that, but I ended up really liking it, partly because of the amazing twist McEwok throws in, taking me by complete surprise. The villain is very creepy, because he truly believes he is doing what is right, and those kind can be the worst of all. He shows the true evil in taking away a persons right to choose right from wrong, and the consequences are terrible.
The prose is excellent, very poetic in some parts, and the characters are well portrayed.
Jacen crouched beside them in the mud, awkward and angular, as though unable to intrude in the grief-shaped geometry of the moment.
I LOVED this description here...very easy to imagine, and well said.
I also like this, I love any debates on the will of the Force or interpretations of it.
"But anyway... if you use the Force, then what you call... what would you call it? Anyway, when you say someone... someone like a Jedi... what you can do - isn't that just a different internal balance, weighted towards particular things? Instinct, energy, insight - which can be developed further in certain circumstances. There's no absolute difference that makes someone a Jedi or not a Jedi... just a difference of degree - in a lot of different areas. That contrast is useful, but it's really an artificial distinction - a simplification of a messy sprawl of... stuff."
"Um, maybe."
"Maybe that's an overstatement in itself, but it's the way I'm used to thinking about it. It doesn't make one man better or worse than another, more right or more wrong... it's different from what makes a great poet, or a skilled smith, or a canny moneylender, or what makes a man become a vagabond... none of which is to say that any of those things are necessarily incompatible with it, or inferior to it... but I guess it's what makes me a Knight of the Sword, rather than... than someone else, if you're following me."
The story gets perhaps a little too complicated in some parts, and has an odd chronological order, otherwise I would rate is as excellent. Otherwise, it is a very good story, and I would recommend it to any NJO fanatics.
Editor’s Note: Check out the cover for this story. Herein will you find that amusing thing I referred to in the Newsletter News section. Remember, Newsletter points! Thanks to the author for the laugh.
Title: The Courtship of Jagged Fel
Author: TKeira_Lex (TKeira_Lea & Darth_Lex)
Timeframe: post-NJO
Status: In Progress
Reviewer #1
Rating: Excellent
Comments:
I must admit that my expectations were incredibly high when I saw who wrote this story. Having enjoyed each author’s individual works, I was excited about them teaming up to write a story. My expectations were met and exceeded!
They managed to hook their reader right from the beginning and they never let go! Each post has something exciting in it and leaves you anticipating the next post. What more could you want from a story?
The characters are rich, complex, and multi-dimensional. No flat, insipid characters here.
Jaina huffed. In her attempt to not laugh at the serious diplomatic flub on their parts, she found an impish giggle welling up. The harder she fought it the more the laugh couldn’t be denied. She unsuccessfully stifled a snort. When Tyria lost control first with a giggle, the pair fell from Jedi seriousness to teenage hilarity in a matter of a second.
They made me care about the characters in this story, even the original characters.
This has proven to be an incredibly popular story and it’s no wonder! They never fail to delivery a well written update. Every minute you spend reading this story is well worth it.
The dialogue is especially well done; it is both witty and moves along at a nice pace.
“I do.” Jacen nodded decisively. “Yes, I do. Could be we’re worrying about all this for nothing. Maybe when she gets to Vikova and sees Jag again, that will be all it takes for Jaina to see how she’s gone wrong.”
Luke stood too, and held out his hands. “I think, Jacen, that this is one of those times when we can’t rely on the Force to be with us. I think we just need a little Solo luck.”
I could see and hear all of my favorite characters saying the words. This is a work in progress and I can’t wait to see what they offer us next.
All right, now as soon as you’re done reading the newsletter, get yourself over to the Beyond the Saga board and read this story! Go on now! Scoot!
Reviewer #2
Rating: Excellent
Comments:
(Taken from the story) One year after the treaty with the Yuuzhan Vong, peace at last prevails in the galaxy. Yet simmering disputes threaten to explode into open conflict at the edge of the Unknown Regions – and in the great unresolved love of The New Jedi Order.
This is a very good, kind of light story that I am going to assume parallels The Courtship of Princess Leia. I love the way the characters are portrayed in this story as well, it's one of my favorite interpretations of Jagged. (And it's just hilarious that they would make him a politician.) The plot is set up very well, and believable.
Loved these two parts:
Mara’s hands left her hips, one going to her chest, the other wrapping her waist. It was heart-wrenching to watch a mother’s love wrestle with the disciplinarian inside. In the end, Mara’s rational self won out. “Don’t do it again, young man.”
“But Snuggles –”
“No.” Mara held up a finger. “Next time ask for Mama’s help before you go rooting around in the flowers.”
Ben’s head drooped in acceptance. “Kay.”
Mara chucked her son on the cheek. “Go put away Snuggles and get cleaned up.”
The boy nodded before shuffling from the room. He barely made it a few steps down the hall, though, when Luke’s voice greeted his son. “Hey kiddo. What happened to you? You’re a mess!”
Ben’s response was muffled.
“I bet she was,” Luke’s disembodied voice said. “Go do what you were told and hurry back. Breakfast is almost ready.”
Shows Luke and Mara as parents...and very good ones at that, Mara's internal battle was excellent, as well as Jaina recognizing her mistake in dealings with Ben. Very real here.
Loved this part as well:
“I would have thought, Jag,” she replied, frowning, “that if you were going to decline my invitation, someone of your intelligence and strategic cunning could at least invent a more plausible excuse than this.”
“What?”
“Do not take me for a fool, Jag. We have seen it all on the Holonet.” All at once Iliana seemed to tower over him. “The Chiss prince and the Alliance princess. Such excellent publicity. Such great symbols of newfound ties.”
“It’s not –”
“Honor and duty, Jag. The Chiss are your people as surely as the Vikovans are mine. Your commitment to them is complete.”
“Yes, but –”
“You would do anything to further their interests.” Her stare seemed to bore straight into his soul. “Including –”
Before she could say more the loud beeping of Jag’s comlink intruded.
Iliana's a smart girl, I feel bad for Jag here, if it were anyone else he would have squirmed out of his seat. And defining relationships are always fun...mmhm.
Overall I liked this story very much, and would recommend it to anyone.
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CLASSIC
Title: Dark Star
Author: Lari
Timeframe: ANH
Status: In Progress
Reviewer #1
Rating: Very Good
Comments:
“Dark Star” by Lari is a very original story, in which Leia is raised to be the Emperor’s Hand, in place of Mara (who does make an appearance, if you were worried).
The story is well told, drawing heavily on the events of ANH, yet telling the familiar scenes from a different viewpoint, with genuine portrayals of all of the canon characters. The interactions of Leia and Han, and Leia and Vader were particularly true to life. Best of all were her AU interactions between Leia and Ben Kenobi, who never actually meet in the films. I greatly enjoyed her redactions of the various movie scenes, drawing as she did from earlier drafts and cut scenes from the film.
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“Don’t force your moves, Luke.” Leia looked up and found the old man's eyes on her, before he quickly turned away. “Give in to the energy that flows around you; let it dictate your movements.”
“You want him to be a slave to his own power?” Leia blurted out, before the thought had fully formed. She mentally cursed herself for her intrusion. So much for being trusted...
But the old man only smiled at her, almost as though he had been expecting her to join in. “Not a slave, Arica, a student.”
Leia knew she should be quiet, knew she should withdraw, but something about the old man drew her in. “A student or a slave—is there really a difference? Both are told what to do and expected to do it.” She needed to stop talking, her master would never approve. “Let him take control,” she heard herself say, “let him be the master over his power. Let him be free.”
“Is that what you are, Arica?” the old man asked, gently. “Are you free?”
Reviewer #2
Rating: Excellent
Comments:
This is a story about Emperor’s Hand Leia Darkstar, which goes through A New Hope. Leia’s mission is to recover the two droids and bring them back to Palpatine. When tracking the droids on Tatooine, she ends up joining the rest of the ANH crew there, under the alias of Arica.
Though the story itself is AU, Leia at times has the characteristics of her film and EU versions. The author makes it clear that though she has done some incredible things on missions, she is often drawing on her master’s power. Without it, her Force skills are rudimentary at best. There are some really nice scenes where she is completely in awe of Luke’s raw talent and wishes for that kind of power. Even more interesting are the ways Leia views the others through the Force – Luke’s presence is within himself, Ben’s reaches out to the whole universe, and her own disturbing and shadowy Force light.
There are, of course, moral debates that Leia has with herself. As an Imperial of an extremely high rank, she has her loyalties. But what good do they do her, when she’s on the Death Star and no one but Darth Vader and Palpatine knows her true identity? Not to mention the lessons from Ben Kenobi, plus the way that she’s considered part of the gang, though they barely know her.
Instead of just replaying the ANH scenes with Leia having different motives, the author takes her own twist on many scenes, such as Luke and Leia’s escape through the Death Star, the senator rescued from the detention block, as well as the trench runs near the end.
But the best part is the ending, which just leaves you wanting that sequel, and wanting to know what happens between Vader and the Emperor, between the Rebels and Imperials, and with Luke, Leia and Han. The most fascinating thing of all is the relationship between Leia and Vader. There’s a strange, quasi-father/daughter thing going on. Because of the way they have worked together in the past, Leia seems to almost trust Vader, and Vader seems to respect her. It would be VERY interesting to see how they would both react to being father and daughter.
And one can’t forget the great characterization of Han and Luke!
There was something about the kid that made you just want to run off and prove that you were brave and noble. By doing something stupid. Ha!
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“There were others with you.”
It was a statement, not a question, but Leia answered anyway. “Yes. Though I don’t think most of them were involved.”
Vader didn’t react outwardly, but she could sense his displeasure. “They became involved as soon as they allowed a Rebel sympathizer to join them.” He paused, then added, “Remember your loyalties, Emperor’s Hand.”
Leia bristled, as much at the use of her title as at the implication of his statement. When Vader referred to her it was generally as ‘Lady Darkstar,’ or simply, ‘my Lady.’ He was the only one who addressed her in that way and she found that it bothered her to have him use her actual title, instead. ‘Lady,’ at the very least, denoted some level of independence.
“I am always aware of who our master is, Darth Vader,” she answered, coldly, purposely avoiding the word ‘Lord,’ as if to remind him that he owed nearly the same level of servitude to the Emperor as she did.
Title: One Door Closes
Author: CYNICAL21
Timeframe: TPM
Status: In Progress
Reviewer #1
Rating: Excellent
Comments:
CYNICAL21 has long been one of my favourite authors on the JC fanfic forums, and without a doubt, the one I miss the most. Her deep understanding and appreciation of real tragedy always plays a role in her stories, and she draws the reader in with her to see the minute fluctuations of faith within a character’s deepest heart.
“One Door Closes” is an AU wherein Qui-Gon survives Darth Maul’s attack, follows through on his promise to train a growing –ever-more resentful Anakin, and Obi-Wan... well... turnsdownhisknighthoodwandersthegalaxygetshorriblyscarredfindssomethinglikehome…
All in all, it’s a good thing torture on these boards is defined the way it is, because CYN tortures everyone in her story, (especially us readers), in the best possible way.
My appreciation of CYN’s skills stems from a shared introspective adoration of the truly tragic. And while the story of the Jedi, especially the Purges, is the epitome of real tragedy, she manages to find nuances of nobility-in-suffering in all of her works. This story is certainly no exception, as she explores the darkest possibilities for these noble characters, placed in such un-tenuous situations, and even manages to address one of the hanging threads that has always bothered me about the Jedi Order: where do all those failed Jedi, those children who weren’t chosen, end up? What becomes of them?
(The real tragedy is that CYN no longer posts on these boards. She occasionally stops in to check her PMs, but for more of her work, look her up on fanfiction.net.)
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[Anakin’s] eyes were wide now - and suspiciously bright. "Then you . . you think the Council was right. That I should have been sent . . ."
"No, Padawan," said the Master. "That's not what I mean, at all. A gift such as yours cannot be ignored. You must be trained - but there are many Masters among the Jedi. Many who are wiser than I. I don't regret insisting that you be trained - but I will regret for the rest of my life the method I chose to use to pursue it - for the cost was more than I could have imagined."
Once more, he turned to gaze out into the fading light of late afternoon. "I saw only what it was convenient for me to see - and I sacrificed a life . . . that was not mine to give. He was . . . the center of my existence - and I closed myself off from him. Almost - but not quite fast enough to avoid knowing what I had done to him. I destroyed him, Anakin, - then fooled myself into thinking that I could make everything all right, simply because I wanted it so badly."
Anakin sank to his knees in the center of the room, feeling a great weight settle on him. "You'll never feel that way . . . about me."
Once more, Qui-Gon sighed. "Is that what you think, Anakin? Is that what you conclude - from what I've said?"
The boy nodded. "I'm not him - and you . . .loved him. I won't ever be . . . who you want me to be."
Reviewer #2
Rating: Excellent
Comments:
Once again CYNICAL21 does not fail to amaze. The details rock and while some bits of the plot may seem familiar—Qui-Gon’s alive and is training Anakin—she takes the story off in a completely new direction. This tone of this fic is dark with glimmers of humor—not black, but perhaps battleship grey.
This fic is still a WIP, but it’s unquestionably worth hanging on the edge for each new chapter. More than one character from her other fics show up…but this fic is AU even to her own universe. The removal of one of her universal constants from her galaxy is almost a microcosm of how thoroughly this fic is different from her other stories—but it’s still one of her stories—as a reader you know (hope) that everything will turn out O.K. for Obi-Wan and company in the end…but because it’s CYN, we’re left hoping he’s not going to die. CYN’s attention to detail is superb, yet she never seems to sacrifice detail for pacing. Take the time to read it—and then read everything else by her.
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“And now the Jedi Order wanted to make him a knight. Obi-Wan could not quite suppress a rueful smile as he lifted his eyes to regard the ancient Master who had just made the statement that he had been waiting all his life to hear.
For the merest fraction of a second, he had a completely illogical wish to unlearn what he had learned - to NOT know what he knew.
Then he sighed, and knew what he must do.
"No," he said softly - and in that single syllable was the death of hope - the end of a dream. The shattering of a broken heart.”
VIGNETTES
Title: Shadow of the Past
Author: AthenaLeigh
Timeframe: JA
Status: Completed
Reviewer #1
Rating: Excellent
Comments:
Before destroying a ship to ensure that a war boils over, Count Dooku uses the security system to check on the occupants and discovers that former apprentice Qui-Gon Jinn is onboard with a padawan of his own.
I really liked this portrayal of Dooku. He reminds me a lot of AOTC Dooku, coming off as cold and distant: He cared for Qui-Gon, but there was no place for tenderness in the life of a Jedi. Yet the author shows he is capable of feeling, just through little flashes of memories. It’s clear he was very proud of Qui-Gon, and now he wonders if he could have done something more during their time together. Wonderful vig!
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Of all the problems Joran had with the Jedi, Qui-Gon was never one of them. He and his former Padawan may have disagreed about a few issues, but Qui-Gon had always been loyal to him and it had been a pleasure training such a talented student. If he had one regret, it just might be the loss of his relationship with Qui-Gon. He had enjoyed the younger one's company and youthful attitude, happy to see a Jedi with some defiance, even if it did challenge his own ideas perhaps a little too often.
Reviewer #2
Rating: Very Good
Comments:
The vignette’s focal point was when Count Dooku makes the decision whether or not to complete his mission, and kill Qui-Gon, or to let his former apprentice live. This fic did an excellent job of portraying the anxiety that a dark Jedi would have over killing someone he knew, admired, and loved. We also see a glimpse into Master/Padawan relations and what it was like, especially in the cases of Dooku, Qui-Gon, and Obi-Wan. All in all, a good read.
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[He] would remain hidden, a shadow in the Force's light, until the bright soul he had once known had gone from the space vessel. Then the darkness could emerge, and the once-loved apprentice would never know he had been so close.
Title: Stolen On the Wind
Author: LuvEwan
Timeframe: JA
Status: Completed
Reviewer #1
Rating: Very Good
Comments:
After Tahl dies on Melida/Daan, Obi-Wan blames himself for her tragic death, withdrawing from everyone and pushing himself harder. If there is one thing he still feels ten years later, it’s the guilt and the fear that he doesn’t deserve to mourn her.
I love the imagery and language in this vig, they’re beautiful. My favourite two are the opening scene with the falling leaves, and the way Obi-Wan always keeps his windows covered because the morning light reminds him of the funeral pyre.
The one thing that threw me off was that I didn’t really know what was going on, or what Obi-Wan had done to feel guilty for. Though that was revealed later in the vig, it took a couple of readings to really get it. But a haunting ending!
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What kind of creature functioned in that bland, disgusting state? What sort of demon would reduce a quick-witted, intelligent, compassionate woman to a mound of ash and smoke? And then have the audacity to stay in place, beside the man who had adored-and lost-her?
The Temple was buried in sorrow. Masters, Knights, Padawans and crechelings shuffled from the main building to the pyre, arms entwined, expressions severe.
And Bant. She'd been there, too, off in a corner, her braid clutched in quivering fingers. The flames had reflected in her wide, welling eyes. The fire…it was everywhere.
Later, when he tried to sleep, huddled in his bed, it sizzled and licked around him, the stench clogging his senses and filling his mind.
It would never leave him. It would never forget what he'd done.
Reviewer #2
Rating: Good
Comments:
The thing that stuck out the most of this vignette was the stirring imagery woven throughout the story. However, the story was a bit confusing. I couldn’t tell exactly what was going on and some of the quality of the story was lost due to that. Also the time sequence is rather disjointed and moves haltingly. The author does a wonderful job of capturing the emotions felt by Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan as they deal with false guilt and loss.
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Qui-Gon stroked the cropped spikes of hair, "And I choose you now, Obi-Wan. I choose you over complete desolation and the futility of a lonely life. I choose you because I know you still exist, beneath the false guilt." He reached out and, with acute tenderness, embraced his student. "I can't let you leave. I still believe we can find you, Obi-Wan."
Obi-Wan's head was tucked under his Master's chin, and for the first time in a decade, he felt…but then it vanished, under the mounds of ash. As he knew it would.
He leaned against Qui-Gon, and listened to his heartbeat, gradually bringing his arms around the man's waist.
Qui-Gon dissolved in his grateful weeping, so he didn't hear the tiny little murmur, stolen on the wind.
"I can't."
Title: My Brother Sucks
Author: VadersMistress
Timeframe: inter-trilogy
Status: Completed
Reviewer #1
Rating: Good
Comments:
From the title throughout the vignette itself, the story reeks of Earth-ism. Is this a piece of Star Wars fanfiction or an entry of a web diary? However, the charm of this fic seems to be how many people can relate to having a brother who gets away with everything. This raised a few questions of my own: what did Leia think of having a brother who was so obviously talented than her? If you downsized the drama of the Leia/Luke sibling “rivalry”, what would it be like? In this sense, this story does a wonderful job of giving readers a taste of Leia’s feelings.
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“I am Force-sensitive as well but not nearly as powerful as Luke is.”
Reviewer #2
Rating: Very Good
Comments:
I have to say, I actually laughed out loud with this one. Makes me wonder how the author treats her brothers! Anakin seems to be encouraging Luke and Leia, and even Padme can’t help laughing. This isn’t the refined Princess Leia as a child, or even a Jedi youngling. It’s just a typical teenage girl always being annoyed by her younger (by a whole three minutes!) brother, and it’s hilarious. It’s also nice to think that they could’ve had a normal childhood – as normal as you could get in that household.
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I ground up a root that grows in our backyard that makes you itch and put it in his underwear drawer. Mom came into my room and I thought I was a goner, but as soon as she closed the door she started laughing. Dad was the one that was angry. Apparently it is not nice to make a guy’s nether regions itch.
Title: Why Couldn’t I Save Him?
Author: JediMaster_Jen
Timeframe: Inter-trilogy
Status: Completed
Reviewer #1
Rating: Very Good
Comments:
AU’s are always interesting in that they are different, but at the same time, very familiar. In this vignette, we are introduced once again to the time-old battle of good vs. evil, Light Side vs. Dark Side, and, too often, Padawan against Master…the description in this fic provides excellent imagery, from describing the setting of a watery cave to the characters themselves. The way this is written sets it up nicely for the twist at the end, which comes as a revelation, setting all the puzzle pieces into place. The author’s characterization of Anakin Skywalker is strikingly familiar, bringing back memories of his post-Tusken Raider massacre in AOTC. Overall, a delightful read.
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“Losing someone you love leaves a scar on the heart that never quite heals.”
Reviewer #2
Rating: Excellent
Comments:
It’s hard to review this without giving away the ending, but the ending is what really makes it heartbreaking. The loss of an apprentice, especially to the Dark Side, is never easy. But for this master, it doesn’t make the pain go away to hear that the boy suffers less in death than he would have as a servant to his Sith master. It’s a short vig but certainly moving!
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“What’s to tell?,” the Master asked conversationally. “My Padawan, a boy I first met when he was merely a child, decided that my teachings and my guidance weren’t enough for him. He decided that his new Master, a Sith no less, was more qualified to be his teacher, his mentor,” he said as if he were giving a simple mission report. “Several hours ago, I confronted my former Padawan Learner and we fought. Now he’s dead, and I’m alive and I can’t change that and neither can you, or Yoda, or anyone else!,” he yelled, his emotions finally boiling over. Tears were raining down his tanned cheeks as he dropped his head into his hands and sobbed for his lost student, a boy he’d raised and loved as his own son.
Title: Forsaken
Author: LianaMara
Timeframe: NJO
Status: Completed
Reviewer #1
Rating: Very Good
Comments:
To be honest, this story would have probably slipped by me had I not been asked to review it. Stories written from a first-person point-of-view can be risky since they tend to fall into one of two categories: really bad, or really good. Most fall into the former, but every once in a while you run across something that was written in first-person for a reason, and it has a very nice artistic effect on the story.
This vignette, which details the thoughts and experiences of a war refugee trying to find a home for herself and her daughter, has that rare artistic quality. To have written this touching story in third-person would have diminished its effectiveness, and lost the characters in the crowd of other refugees.
There is nothing special at all about the characters: They aren't Jedi, war heroes, pilots, soldiers, aristocrats, or even dancers. For all we know, the main character could be a fanfic author. This woman and her daughter are just everyday people, forced to live off the mercy of others because something bad happened to them.
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Goodbye peace and prosperity and stability. A fine performance, but the final act collapsed into chaos.
My family has been reduced from a loving husband and four boisterous children to just Aliya and me.
We have spent the past three years in countless refugee settlements. They’ve all blurred into one in my memory, crowded and unsanitary and permeated by a fear so intense that it seems a physical force. Full of people who have lost all hope of survival.
I refuse to relinquish that optimism. I want my youngest daughter to live, to retain the innocence I lost when the Vong first arrived insystem. I want her to grow up thinking that her sweet dreams of a quiet home and a peaceful life can become reality. I want her to be as naïve and sheltered and misinformed as I once was.
Not that she would ever be aware of it.
Reviewer #2
Rating: Very Good
Comments:
This poetic piece of fiction takes place during an unspecified time of the NJO series. It centers around a woman who is a refugee from the planet Garqi. She and her daughter are fleeing from the Yuuzhan Vong with countless other refugees in search of a safe place to call home. After trying planet after planet, the woman and her only remaining child have been turned away because of a medical condition her daughter suffers from. Now their last hope is the world of Kuat.
The story is a pleasant mixture of poetry and prose. The content is mixed with the internal dialogue of the mother as well as vocal interaction that helps bring out the hopelessness the woman experiences. This tale is a brilliant impression of what the millions of people fleeing the war had to endure throughout the NJO and gave a real look at some of the unknown people the war affected.
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I used to be an idealist, honestly believing that politicians cared about protecting the people they represented. That my little domestic fantasies would be safe from outside threats.
“—pending your transfer to a designated containment site—”
Apparently, whitewashed fences don’t stop foreign invaders.
Title: This Whole Memory Thing
Author: KnightedRogue
Timeframe: post-NJO
Status: Completed
Reviewer #1
Rating: Very Good
Comments:
The very first thing to grab me about this vignette was the story's summary: Han tells Ben about his deceased aunt. I will admit, I always pictured Leia surviving Han, not the other way around, so this was a very unique perspective of Han telling a very young Ben about a Leia the little boy never knew.
KnightedRogue does an excellent job of the first-person viewpoint, and captures Han's personality... as well as his likely reaction to Ben's inquiry. This could easily have been done in a third-person viewpoint, which I normally prefer, but KR manages to capture Han's mannerisms even in the way he thinks, not just the way he acts or talks... something a third-person viewpoint couldn't possibly capture.
There is no "quoted" dialogue in the story, which also lends to its uniqueness, although the dialogue is there. There is quite a bit more I could say about this vignette, but I would hate to spoil it for you. Instead, I'll let this quote stand on its own merit.
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Lemme tell you about your aunt, kid. Whadd’ya want to know? How she looked? How she lived? How she died? What?
He grinned and asked me to tell me how she lived. He told me that he’d seen a holo in his parent’s room, that he knew how she looked. He didn’t need to see her, he already did.
Maybe he didn’t need to see her, but I sure did.
Reviewer #2
Rating: Very Good
Comments:
The story consists of Han trying to tell his nephew, Ben, about his deceased aunt. It is told through Han’s point of view with several internal thoughts about his life with Leia and his perceptions about the boy on his lap. Seven-year-old Ben comes up to Han and asks what Leia was like. Han, obviously still grieving his late wife initially has trouble with the memories haunting him. After moments of reflection, he tells his nephew about the woman he loves.
This was a wonderful read and the author did a remarkable job with Han’s character. Han’s internal thoughts center on his life with and without Leia and comparisons of Ben and Luke. As a reader, you get a real feel for the pain Han has endured from the absence of his wife, and an idea of what Han’s life is now. It is wonderful story of lost love and family, and even a look at the innocence of a child.
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I thought for a sec, then told him she was a princess.
He interrupted me and told me he knew that, too, and didn’t need to hear that. Asked me if I knew anything else besides what his mom and dad told him.
Kid, I could write a book.
LOCKED
Title: You Can Run But You Can’t Hide
Author: HaiGan
Timeframe: JA
Status: Complete
Reviewer #1
Rating: Excellent
Comments:
HaiGan has put together a fast-paced, heart wrenching story of trust and discovery. It takes place not long after Obi-Wan has been taken as a padawan by Qui-Gon Jinn, though those characters barely rate cameo appearance status. The two main characters, Barin Truthfinder and Thom Capella, are a stellar pair of wonderfully crafted original characters.
In the beginning Thom and two initiate friends are indulging themselves in practical jokes, only to be caught by a knight with a flare for dramatics himself. The knight absently tells Thom to ‘find out his name', unaware of the lengths to which the young man will go to sate his curiosity. The more Thom learns, the more he wants to know about this stiff, distant knight. The closer Thom gets to him, the more Barin fears the darkness he has fought so hard to overcome.
Never dull or slow, often angsty in a thoroughly authentic way, this story was a genuine pleasure to read and review.
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"Well now, what shall I do with you three miscreants?"
"Uh... let us go?" It was the tallest of the three Initiates who answered, a gangling, dark-skinned pre-teen with a shock of black curls and very white teeth. The knight's attention focused on him.
"Let you go?" he enquired, with as much astonishment as if someone had just suggested spit-roasting an entire Bantha. "Whyever should I do that?"
"'Cause you're a nice person and you like a good laugh?" the tallest Initiate hazarded.
"I am not a nice person and I had my sense of humour surgically removed in early childhood." The blue eyes narrowed suspiciously. "You."
The tallest initiate put on his best 'who, me?' expression.
"You were the one who painted my refectory chair with adhesive last week."
The tallest Initiate gave a boneless shrug. "What's the problem? You didn't sit in it."
"I do not appreciate practical jokes."
"Not even the good ones?"
Reviewer #2
Rating: Excellent
Comments:
A plucky initiate, Thom Capella, and an aloof and distanced knight, Barin Truthfinder, are the stars of this story about “friendship, healing, and Corellian fast food.” In their first meeting, Barin discovers Thom and his equally entertaining friends throwing syrup bombs in the gardens, but his intimidating stares of Jedi Smug do nothing for Thom.
There’s even more drama when one of Thom’s friends is badly hurt in a fall. When foul play is suspected, Barin, who is a regular Jedi undercover agent, is asked to investigate, and Thom is assigned by Healer An-Paj as a kind of psychiatric treatment for Barin. These two are clearly meant to be master and padawan, and even Thom and Barin know this. But these things are never so easy when emotional scars get in the way.
Thom is such a loveable character, a cheeky clown with a very big heart. When he gets in trouble to protect his friends, you want to cheer for him. And when he gets in trouble just because he’s Thom, you still want to cheer for him. Barin, the big enigma with an obviously disturbing past, seems determined to avoid not just Thom but everyone in general. Without even thinking about it, he starts teaching Thom how to be a good detective and how to be a good person – which includes not dunking people’s lightsabers in the sink.
It’s so much fun to read how these two interact with each other. Thom is outspoken, even sometimes disrespectful to his elders, and he doesn’t always consider the consequences of his pranks. Barin is haunted by the memory of a bad master, his own brush with the Dark Side, and is unwilling to trust himself. Though terrified that the Council will refuse his request for a padawan, he nevertheless is touched by Thom’s adoration, as Thom thinks of Barin as “his knight.” One of the best parts is a treasure hunt Thom comes up with in an effort to get normally stone-faced Barin to have a little fun.
As they work together and stand up to their nemeses together, Thom realises the importance of fully committing himself to the Jedi Order, and Barin learns that even if he doesn’t think of himself as the best master, Thom will always have faith in him. It really is, as the author describes it, about friendship and healing. And a lot of glow-in-the-dark jelly worms.
Best of all, the story’s being revised and reposted on the Before board!
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It didn’t register with the initiate. He was too busy considering might-have-beens. If he hadn’t gotten his friends involved then maybe Dan wouldn’t be in the infirmary now. If they’d thought about things instead of just walking through a ‘keep out’ sign then Dan wouldn’t be hurt either. He’d been stupid, and Dan was hurt because of it.
Another hot drink was pressed into Thom’s hands. He sipped at it once or twice, but it was soon forgotten. The initiate’s thoughts were running in circles, like a wamprat in a cage. Consequences. He’d never once thought about the consequences of what he was doing, not really, and now his friend was hurt and maybe he’d even helped to stop someone ever becoming a Jedi.
An-Paj left the office, but Thom barely noticed. A familiar voice in the distance touched the edges of his consciousness, but he was too pre-occupied to make the connection. A pair of boots made their way into his field of view. After several long moments, their presence registered on the initiate. He blinked them into focus, then looked up. An-Paj’s earlier remark finally filtered through to him, but he didn’t feel as if he’d won anything. He simply felt a rush of immense relief. His knight would know what to do to make everything turn out alright.
Barin opened his mouth to say something, but before he could speak a distressed initiate barrelled into his chest and clung to him more tightly than a Mynock on a power-cable, sobbing and babbling incoherently by turns. The knight stood there, unmoving, glancing at An-Paj in astonishment. It was the first time the Healer had ever seen him utterly speechless.
Title: I Listen to the Silence
Author: Obi the Kid
Timeframe: post-TPM
Status: Complete
Reviewer #1
Rating: Good
Comments:
This is a look into Obi-Wan's feelings a few days after Qui-Gon's death. The first person voice gives it a strength and immediacy that strike right to the heart. How do Jedi deal with grief? Read this lovely short story and see.
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I enter your bedroom, which now belongs to me. I will allow Anakin to take the one I have lived in for so many years. Memories flood my mind, one after the other. Memories of our life together. When I was hurt, you were there to comfort me. When I was scared, you where there to hold me. When I needed to cry, you offered your shoulder. You laughed with me, yet you were strict about my training. Everything I learned, I learned from you. Everything that I am, I owe to you.
Reviewer #2
Rating: Very Good
Comments:
The first thing that hits me as I read this for about the millionth time is the raw emotion. The second is the simplicity of the language – allowing the reader to see Obi-Wan as human as human first, Jedi second. Her words paint Obi-Wan’s emotions, the shades grief, of sorrow, and of anger showing through clearly. Her use of parallelism lets the story flow naturally, as if the reader is swimming in Obi’s thought stream, humanizing him again. The only thing I would like to see changed is the pacing towards the ending. I would like to see it slower, but that’s entirely personal opinion.
She chooses to show the relationship between Qui and Obi as father and son and it works very well for the fic—Obi’s pain is almost tangible. This isn’t how everyone sees their relationship, but she does a good job of convincing the reader that it is so.
I am always impressed at her ability to write so much into so little space, whether it be humor or drama.
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I listen to the silence and wonder how I function with its monotonous sound. There is nothing there, yet there is. When you died, part of my own self did as well.
TFN ARCHIVE
Title: Shades of Grey
Author: jmann06405
Timeframe: OT
Status: Completed
Rating: Very Good
Comments:
Jmann06405’s story, “Shades of Grey,” should delight even the most obstinate readers who like to exclaim, “I never bother with space battle stories.” And those who want “more explosions!” will be satisfied as well.
The author’s own summary is short and to the point: “An Alliance turret gunner and an Imperial pilot are trapped on a drifting hulk after a battle.” Readers first meet Cairn Natayn as he is racing his Imperial TIE fighter towards a small flotilla of Rebel ships. The author has formed a complex character in Natayn. Most followers of events in Star Wars stories know TIE fighters only as faceless entities; jmann06405 has given one a name, and a personality, and most importantly of all, emotions.
Of course, as the summary relates, there is another character involved in this story. Helena Mastaire is Natayn’s opponent, a turret gunner that cripples his ship. That definitive event eventually forces them together. To the author’s credit, readers will identify with Natayn's and Mastaire's feelings as their ships are destroyed and they fight to stay alive. Luckily there is refuge after all, as a derelict Rebel ship comes into view….
The moments of wry humor and internal dialog, with absent family members, open the story up to very human interpretation. As Natayn and Mastaire interact with each other, as antagonists and then a shaky partnership, both characters fight the demons and disappointments of their past, situations as important in a story set in the GFFA as in any other locale. The author handles the unfolding of the drama deftly.
The tension ratchets up and down as the game of survival plays itself out for both characters. Jmann06405 has a steady hand at this, keeping the reader involved while moving the story along at a fast pace. The ending is imminently suited to the story, and to the characters. The author doesn’t veer away from, or “pretty up” the conclusion. It’s perfect in a story that should be enjoyed by anyone who appreciates detailed characterization, story development and familiar situations.
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Can you get this gunship at least partially functional?"
Cairn looked at her face. The Rebel was serious. Cairn tested his bonds again. No dice. He was going to have to give her some sort of answer. Sitting on the deck with his hands bound looking up at her, he struggled to maintain some semblance of control in his dim situation.
"I can. I was on my way to do just that. The question is…why would I want to now?"
He watched her head shake. She flexed her free hand. Cairn glanced at her palm, at the round scars dotting them. She was a StimTar addict. Cairn smiled. Maybe that would be his ace in the hole. He had seen the junkheads back on Ord Veica walk around in Temple City hopped up on the black liquid. Most of them lost use of their hands after a few years. The Rebel shifted, closing her fingers.
"Because it beats freezing to death with a Rebel, doesn’t it?"
"Not necessarily. What happens when I get the engines started? Let’s just say, purely for arguments sake, that I am successful. What then? You drag me in to be interrogated by the high and mighty Rebel Alliance? C’mon lady, what kind of a DooPaa do you think I am? At least if I froze to death I could do it in peace."
Cairn was lying through his teeth. The last thing he wanted to do was freeze to death. He wanted to get the gunship functional, wanted to get back to the Fear…wanted to do his job, retire, and die in a warm bed. Far from here. In all of his Academy training, there had not been a course titled ‘What to do when you are stuck on a drifting hulk with a Rebel 101.'
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EDITOR’S RECOMMENDATION
Title: ’Til the End
Author: djcati
Timeframe: NJO
Status: Completed
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Hobbie! We know him as the dour-faced, mournful, and pessimistic ace pilot. The Gloomy to Janson’s Happy. And when it comes to the Fab Four, the often under-represented Rogue.
But not in this vig! The author has done a fantastic job of portraying a Hobbie who’s still rather glum but manages to see the funny side to life. It’s also rather poignant and brings up Hobbie’s thoughts on the necessity of war, being away from his friends, and which is the worse enemy – the Empire or New Republic bureaucracy.
And yes, there’s a mention of Ewoks. Yub yub!
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“Colonel Klivian, sir, did you sign those forms?”
“What? You only gave me them a minute ago!”
“No, sir, the other ones – about my transfer.”
“Oh, those ones. I lost those.”
“What?! … Sir.”
“Kidding. I’ll get them to you in a couple hours, when I find them.”
“It takes you two hours to sign forms?!”
“Sure. Dismissed, Lieutenant.”
Most people would say there was nothing good about war, especially this one. People dying: not good. Worlds being destroyed: not good. Aliens from another galaxy, hell bent on destruction and domination: not good.
A lot of people said there was never anything good about any war – what did it achieve if not more pain for all concerned. Hobbie figured those people hadn’t fought in the Rebellion – or the Empire, come to that. Sure, war had more than its fair share of bad points, but how the hell else did these people expect their freedom?
LETTERS TO THE EDITOR
Dear Editor,
I’m writing to you on behalf of my sister-in-law, Leia Organa Solo.
That’s former Chief of State youngest person ever elected to the Imperial Senate not bad with a lightsaber key figure in the Rebel Alliance and more importantly somehow able to control Han Solo for more than 20 years Leia Organa Solo.
You know what? To hell with formality.
When are people going to give this woman the attention and accolades she deserves? Come on, she used to be a princess – much as she denies it, she loves a little pomp and splendour once in a while. Sure, I see stories where she’s one of the main characters. What I don’t see is a lot of discussion going on about her. Is it hidden in those stories, maybe? Look, she’s a lot more than just Lady Vader or Luke Skywalker’s twin sister or Han Solo’s wife. She’s quite a classy lady, and if those <CENSORED> people out there have any sense at all, they’ll shine a little light her way.
Sincerely,
Mara Jade Skywalker, Jedi Master
P.S. Sorry about the language. Feel free to censor it.
Dear Master Skywalker,
Clearly you are a staunch supporter of your sister-in-law, and with good reason! She seems to have led quite an impressive life. You’ll be happy to know that there is indeed a place for extolling her many virtues. A Princess and More will hopefully remind people of this strong woman’s presence among us.
Veritably,
The Editor
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February Writing Tips
And now, the adventuring duo of Ray Terr and Questa Nanser bring you…
Punctuation
Part II: Periods, Colons, and Semicolons, oh my!
Dear Readers,
Questa and I are in the middle of a jungle at the moment and are therefore unable to communicate to you the depth of our feeling on the matter of correct punctuation. However, we can tell you that we've observed two major problems here in the wild: the complete absence of periods, and the terrible confusion of semicolons with colons.
These are grave dangers to the continued existence of humans and other Basic-speakers throughout the Galaxy. Please forward this message to anyone you perceive to be using punctuation incorrectly. You will be doing a great service to sentients everywhere.
Without the period, we would be wandering through life without any sense of where things began or ended. Our sentences would just look like long strings of words and would flow into one another without any clear sequence of ideas. Period placement is so important, in fact, that I'm going to take the time to show you an example of text written without periods:
Even before his X-wing's sensors had time to scan and identify the new ship, Corran Horn knew it was trouble that knowledge was not based on the ship's unscheduled, unannounced reversion to realspace in the Pyria system in the month since the Rebel Alliance took the planet Borleias from the Empire, more ships than Corran cared to remember had popped in for a quick survey of the place
Illegible, right? You can't tell where one part ends and another begins; the whole thing hops around like a TIE in an asteroid field. Not the greatest simile, but you get the idea.
Take that same passage, this time with the proper placement of full stops:
Even before his X-wing's sensors had time to scan and identify the new ship, Corran Horn knew it was trouble. That knowledge was not based on the ship's unscheduled, unannounced reversion to realspace in the Pyria system. In the month since the Rebel Alliance took the planet Borleias from the Empire, more ships than Corran cared to remember had popped in for a quick survey of the place.
Now it makes sense. There are, essentially, two things to remember when using periods: (a) they end a statement or close an idea, and (b) the sentence beginning after a period always starts with an uppercase letter.
So now you're saying, okay, I get it, right? But wait, we haven't even begun the tricky part yet…. Can anyone tell me what a semicolon is? Or a colon, for that matter? What either one is used for? Well, in case you wer | |