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DVCPRO-HDeditor Registered: Nov '06	Date Posted: 5/21 5:23pm Subject: RE: Community Fan Film Clearinghouse-- PART TWO DONE! (Take it away, Darth Ish!)
	Just checkin'. -----signature----- Editing out of the dailies. http://artists.ultimate-guitar.com/projectfreunleven/music/albums/321447 How about a magic trick? I can make a pencil disappear.
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DarthIshtar Title: Former CR Star Wars Trivia Hostess Registered: Mar '01	Date Posted: 5/21 5:27pm Subject: RE: Community Fan Film Clearinghouse-- PART TWO DONE! (Take it away, Darth Ish!)
	No problem there. Today, I'm just interviewed out. I had interviews in English and Spanish that all went much longer than they should have just because the people were thorough, obnoxiously so. -----signature----- I've finished reading Breaking Dawn! Morale officer of the ACWDBTTCAOT. "Forsan et haec olim meminisse iuvabit." ~Virgil, Aeneid "Ecce domino" (The pizza guy's here)
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DarthIshtar Title: Former CR Star Wars Trivia Hostess Registered: Mar '01	Date Posted: 5/23 10:54am Subject: RE: Community Fan Film Clearinghouse-- PART TWO DONE! (Take it away, Darth Ish!)
	Here's everything I've got for part III. Lemme know how badly it stinks. INT. SOLAR FLARE - COCKPIT Outside the windscreen, the mottled sky of hyperspace is still visible. LARSON is in the pilot's chair, obviously at ease with his booted feet resting on top of the navcomputer. BOT is sitting in the navigator's chair, head tilted attentively. LARSON Bestine IV's a pretty big place. Are you going to give me an address or just hope I guess where you're going when I get the landing permit? BOT I don't have an address, sir. My records of the place are far too outdated to be reliable. LARSON rolls his eyes at this as if he expected nothing less from a droid. LARSON Well, that's gonna be a bit of a problem. BOT I do not see why, sir. LARSON Well, see, you ain't in Theed anymore, tintype. You can't just tell me to hang a left at the third fish and expect me to be happy about it. BOT Indeed not, sir. Navigating by marine life is highly impractical. LARSON You don't say. So, how are you expecting to find this guy? BOT Well, sir, it's true that Bestine hosts many thriving metropolitan centers of industry... LARSON holds up a hand to stall him. LARSON Hey, shiny, can you just stow the thesaurus and give me a straight answer? BOT I believe I take your meaning, sir. LARSON And quit calling me sir. Makes me queasy. BOT I have no desire to induce nausea. I shall call you Captain when the need for formality arises. LARSON Good enough. BOT As for your straight answer, Bestine IV is a big place, but there are a limited number of medical facilities. At that, LARSON sits up a little straighter and looks at BOT as if he's lost his electronic marbles. LARSON You're looking for a doc halfway across the Mid-Rim? BOT In a manner of speaking, yes. LARSON grins uncertainly at the thought that maybe the droid has fried one too many circuits and this is a wild bantha chase. LARSON Don't mean to sound insensitive, but didn't you kinda...oh, I don't know...forget the patient? BOT turns his head towards the windscreen and if he were a human, his posture might have looked homesick. BOT No, Captain. I doubt that I'll ever forget this patient. (beat) There's a man on Bestine IV who can hardly be called a healer, but who has exactly what I need. LARSON Like a few thousand credits to pay your fare? BOT turns back to face him. BOT There are more useful things than currency, but I will find a way to compensate you. LARSON Just as long as you don't use that 'more useful things than currency' thing when I try to collect. EXT. BESTINE IV The Solar Flare exits hyperspace and begins its descent towards Bestine IV. INT. SOLAR FLARE - COMMUNICATIONS Alone in the communications room, BOT dials a number and on the holoscreen an image appears of the logo of the Imperial Medical Corps with the aurabesh equivalent of 'hold, please.' A moment later, a prim young woman in medical scrubs appears on the screen. DR. LYR Bestine Garrison Hospital. How may I assist you? BOT Greetings, madam. My master requires immediate medical attention. Can you receive him? DR. LYR Is your master a member of the Imperial Armed Forces? BOT No, madam. The Captain is an independent contractor for the Empire. His contract dictates that, in the case of an emergency, he may utilize the Empire's medical facilities for a considerable fee. We have the necessary datawork. DR. LYR brightens as if having an off-world patient is a welcome novelty. DR. LYR How bad is it? Is the patient conscious? BOT Oh, yes, madam. He will almost certainly survive. We simply ran afoul of those dreadful rebels and he is in considerable pain. DR. LYR I think we can help. We're not too busy today and Dr. Bel Maden just came on duty. Transmit the contract information and get traffic control to park you at the garrison's Docking Bay 215. BOT You have my most sincere thanks, madam. We will be sure to dock at Bay 215. DR. LYR Bestine Garrison Hospital out. The comm screen shuts off and the camera moves to a new position so that we see that Larson has been listening in on the whole conversation. LARSON Considerable pain, huh? BOT Their suspicions would be aroused if you made the journey to another planet to treat a stubbed toe, Captain. LARSON shrugs. LARSON Fair enough. I don't have to shoot myself to make it convincing, do I? BOT tilts his head in amusement. BOT Only if you feel it to be necessary, sir. I wouldn't encourage it. He leaves the communications center and Larson follows a moment later. LARSON Well, that's a relief... End of Part II INT. GARRISON MEDCENTER-TRIAGE AREA Dr. Lyr looks up as Larson and Bot enter. Larson is leaning heavily on Bot and moaning dramatically. He also has a stained wad of fabric shoved against his ribs as if he's trying to stop a bleeding wound. LARSON Doc, you gotta help me. DR. LYR Good stars, you said he would survive! BOT Yes, madam. I also said he was in considerable pain. DR. LYR Not to worry, Captain. We'll take excellent care of you. LARSON Good. Now, don't suppose you've got any medicinal whiskey on hand? Bot jostles him pointedly and he yells suddenly. DR. LYR looks rather alarmed by this and hurries to steady LARSON. DR. LYR Droid, help me place him on a gurney. I will call Dr. Bel Maden immediately. They get LARSON situated on a gurney and Bot begins pushing him towards an examination while DR. LYR heads in a different direction. BOT Captain, you're going to make them suspicious. LARSON You said to make it convincing! BOT Yes, very convincing that when shot, your first concern is inebriation. LARSON Hey, that'd convince me... INT. MEDCENTER EXAM ROOM LARSON makes himself comfortable on the gurney as BOT stands by. LARSON So, we got you in and your friend's probably convinced I'm braving a ruptured spleen or something. How do we want to play this? BOT We don't play anything. I will be doing the negotiating. At that moment, DR. BEL MADEN enters at a brisk pace and they both fall silent. He does not seem to notice this. Instead, he grabs a medscanner and powers it up. BEL MADEN I'm Dr. Bel Maden. What seems to be the problem? LARSON Damn Rebels. Try and do one easy run and they shoot ya for what you've got. Don't think it's too bad, but... He jumps as BEL MADEN probes his abdomen. LARSON Blast, doc! Whaddya do, soak your hands in ice cubes first? BEL MADEN (Impatiently) Lie still, young man. It will do no good to exacerbate things. LARSON Fine, fine. BEL MADEN Where were you shot? LARSON Nar Shadda, bantha brain! What does it matter? BEL MADEN I meant to say, where did the blaster bolt enter your skin? LARSON peels away the stained wad of cloth to reveal a blaster. LARSON Don't know, doc. Where do you want it? BEL MADEN immediately bolts for the emergency button on the wall, but runs smack into Bot on the way. He does not go down, but staggers back. LARSON I wouldn't do that, brainless. I've been stuck on my ship for two days with this walking dictionary and I'm just dying to shoot someone. I don't care who. BEL MADEN straightens and looks haughtily at them both. BEL MADEN I see. I am here to save a life. You are here to take one. LARSON Not really. I just think losing a few fingers would be character-building. BEL MADEN interposes Bot between him and LARSON. LARSON I really wouldn't do that. I think you're a stuffed shirt, but squeaky here's got an actual grudge. BOT That's not entirely true, sir. I am not programmed to hold grudges. LARSON Fine, if you want to be picky about it... BEL MADEN I don't negotiate with mercenaries and if you care to threaten me any further, I won't hesitate to bring the Constabulary down on your empty heads. LARSON Oh, I kinda doubt that. BEL MADEN Would you like to test your theory? BOT No need, doctor. I have all the information you require here. He opens the panel on his chest and removes the microchip before handing it over to BEL MADEN. The doctor inserts it in a panel of the medscanner usually used for medical history chips. Almost imperceptibly, something in his expression hardens and his face loses some of its color. BEL MADEN So, Meklis sent you. He's still on Naboo? BOT You should know, sir. You were the one who saw to it that he was sent there. BEL MADEN Don't jump to conclusions. He displeased Vader. He would have been sent there with or without my help. BOT Oh, yes. I'm quite certain that your role in his incarceration had nothing to do with the fact that he could confirm your hand in the death of an Admiral. BEL MADEN does not respond to the accusation, only sets the medscanner down. He looks accusingly at Larson. BEL MADEN I suppose you're just along for the ride? LARSON Naw, this is quality entertainment. BEL MADEN turns back to Bot. BEL MADEN What is so urgent that Meklis sent his droid halfway across the known Galaxy to blackmail a loyal son of the Empire? BOT His family thinks he has the Bonadan Cough. BEL MADEN (dismissively) Bacta and pamlycin can both be bought for the right price at any medcenter, even in a wasteland such as Naboo. BOT Sir, he requires a full regimen of methotrex, including associated antibiotics and prescriptions to prevent renal damage... LARSON coughs pointedly. Bot continues unfazed. BOT And you will be paying my pilot's fare. BEL MADEN A steep price. What makes you think that your little microchip is worth all that? BOT I confess that I'm not familiar with such things. Shall we ask the Emperor? BEL MADEN snatches his medscanner back and ejects the chip. He holds it between thumb and forefinger with a taunting smirk. BEL MADEN Regardless of how trigger-happy your friend here is, I could destroy this in a heartbeat and you wouldn't have a durasteel leg to stand on. BOT That is true, doctor. Are you confident that you are in possession of the only copy? BEL MADEN stares hard at Bot as if waiting for him to blink. LARSON lays back as if wishing he had a bowl of popcorn for this. Finally, BEL MADEN wrenches open the chest panel and shoves the microchip back into the compartment before slamming the door. He turns and glares resentfully at LARSON. BEL MADEN Take off your shirt. LARSON Hey! That wasn't part of the deal. BEL MADEN You came in here acting like a stuck gorrnt. If I let you leave without at least a pressure bandage, it will arouse suspicion. Sit up and take off your shirt. LARSON looks placated by this and shoves his blaster back into its holster before unbuttoning his shirt. BEL MADEN takes the "blood-stained" cloth and throws it into a waste disposal unit with a snort of disgust. He removes a sterile pad and a bandage from a drawer to his left and places the pad over a spot on Larson's abdomen before winding the bandage around his torso. DR. LYR passes by and BEL MADEN speaks loudly enough for her to hear. BEL MADEN You should be fine. If you'll meet me at the east exit in ten minutes, I should have your medicine ready for you. LARSON Thank you, doctor. You've been very kind. He scrambles to his feet much to quickly for a hurt man and pulls on his shirt. LARSON Pleasure doing business with you. EXT. GARRISON MEDCENTER - DAY LARSON is lounging against a pillar, watching the female pedestrians. BOT is standing stiffly nearby. LARSON Think he's going to do it? BOT Do what, Captain? Agree to our demands or bring down the constabulary on our empty heads? LARSON Either. BOT I think he'll do both. I suggest we beat a hasty retreat. LARSON No arguments there. The door opens and BEL MADEN exits, looking appropriately nervous. He shoves a large box into LARSON's arms with unnecessary force. BEL MADEN Everything you need. I trust we won't be hearing from your people for a prescription refill? BOT As long as you have kept your word. BEL MADEN Leave now, before I decide to report that an armed low-life and his protocol droid escaped from the medcenter with a few hundred doses of controlled substances. Neither of them bother to thank him or even say goodbye. They simply head across to Bay 215 and disappear through its door. BEL MADEN waits until they're out of sight before removing a commlink from his pocket and thumbing it on. BEL MADEN Bel Maden here. I need to be connected to the CO's office on the Exsanguinator. Code clearance aurek-99161. END PART III -----signature----- I've finished reading Breaking Dawn! Morale officer of the ACWDBTTCAOT. "Forsan et haec olim meminisse iuvabit." ~Virgil, Aeneid "Ecce domino" (The pizza guy's here)
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DVCPRO-HDeditor Registered: Nov '06	Date Posted: 5/23 2:50pm Subject: RE: Community Fan Film Clearinghouse-- PART TWO DONE! (Take it away, Darth Ish!)
	Ooh! The plot thickens! Awesome work, Darth_Ish! -----signature----- Editing out of the dailies. http://artists.ultimate-guitar.com/projectfreunleven/music/albums/321447 How about a magic trick? I can make a pencil disappear.
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DarthIshtar Title: Former CR Star Wars Trivia Hostess Registered: Mar '01	Date Posted: 5/23 4:05pm Subject: RE: Community Fan Film Clearinghouse-- In the homestretch, we are. Take it away, RX_Sith!!
	Thank you for opening kind words. I just got from being hired at a new job, so it's a good day so far. -----signature----- I've finished reading Breaking Dawn! Morale officer of the ACWDBTTCAOT. "Forsan et haec olim meminisse iuvabit." ~Virgil, Aeneid "Ecce domino" (The pizza guy's here)
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LLL Title: TFN Fan Fiction Archive Editor Registered: Jul '00	Date Posted: 5/23 4:13pm Subject: RE: Community Fan Film Clearinghouse-- In the homestretch, we are. Take it away, RX_Sith!! - Date Edited: 5/23 4:22pm (1 edits total) Edited By: LLL
	I like the wisecracks and the fast pacing. The only problem I see here is that the droid finds its quarry a bit too quickly. It's within the realm of possibility that this person would work at the first medcenter the droid tries if there are only two or three of them, but it would seem more realistic if the droid can tap into staff databases and read crew rosters to find out where to go. The fact that they "ring up" just as the doctor they want comes on duty is too convenient to be credible, and the coincidence that they get assigned him as a doctor is even more incredible than that. Of course, if the droid can read staff assignments, then it can also read schedules, and that way they'd know precisely when to drop in. Other than that, I like this. Great job! Please be sure to post this on the Saga thread as well...hafta go look for link... Here's where it goes. I think the mods were pretty specific about posting finished material on Saga and not here. NOW, Since we've got everybody's attention: What I would like to see happen now is for RX_Sith to take the story as far as the droid getting back on Naboo and stop. At that point I think we should all read over the story so far and decide how we want it to end. Specifically, does anybody die or not? Who? When? And, what is the overall mood at the end of the piece? Then MJ and I will bring the droid home and write the ending. Unless someone else has a better idea... When I first envisioned this story, I didn't think of having the blackmailed Imperial be a doctor. I figured it was going to be someone in a position of authority on a military vessel. That way that person could hire the bounty hunter and even shoot the ship the droid is on, on his own orders, and would be a more dangerous individual into the bargain. But we've changed things since then, so what's needed now is an explanation for how this doctor knows about this bounty hunter. And a way to work in some backstory would be helpful, since we know something happened with an Admiral dying, but we don't know what it is or how the droid's master found out about it in the first place. Could make for an interesting story. Flashbacks? (Is that even possible for this film? You might need a "flashback crew.") I just think it feels too nebulous if people don't know what originally happened, but I hate to have the droid explain it. Show, don't tell, ya know. And, LAST BUT NOT LEAST Everyone please think about this one question. Is this story turning out to be too predictable? As a follow-up to that, does it need more complications? More plot twists and turns? A new character, perhaps, hunting the droid from the beginning? I'm just worried that it might feel...well, rote. What does everyone think of all this? I'm going to be gone Saturday, Sunday, and Monday. Back Tuesday! -----signature----- ''Overall, to get a real deep, nuanced understanding of human behaviour, art is the best way.'' --Natalie Portman. Have a question or suggestion for the Archive? PM me anytime.
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LLL Title: TFN Fan Fiction Archive Editor Registered: Jul '00	Date Posted: 5/23 4:24pm Subject: RE: Community Fan Film Clearinghouse-- In the homestretch, we are. Take it away, RX_Sith!!
	And congrats, Ish, on the new job. Hope it was the one you wanted. -----signature----- ''Overall, to get a real deep, nuanced understanding of human behaviour, art is the best way.'' --Natalie Portman. Have a question or suggestion for the Archive? PM me anytime.
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DarthIshtar Title: Former CR Star Wars Trivia Hostess Registered: Mar '01	Date Posted: 5/23 4:28pm Subject: RE: Community Fan Film Clearinghouse-- In the homestretch, we are. Take it away, RX_Sith!!
	LLL--Glad you like the wisecracks. I realized as I went along that this character in my way of writing him is a cross between Mal from Firefly and my little brother Reed. As for the finding of the quarry, I'm definitely willing to rework and add some stuff, but it was 14 pages long in my document reader and I was terrified that I was going too long. What I'm assuming is that they would first try the garrison medcenter since the Admiral on Naboo knew this person from the military and it would stand to reason that he would probably be at the main military hospital. It's like deciding whether to go to Johns Hopkins if you know that you're going to find your guy at Bethesda Naval Hospital. I'll put in some database searches and narrowing down things. And I'll definitely have the less convenient thing. Thanks! NOW, I agree that we need to have a consensus based on the story so far as to what happens at the end. The comm from Bel Maden at the end is supposed to lead into the fact that he can pull some weight in the Empire through his powerful friends and/or hire a bounty hunter to conveniently pick off the Flare. Backstory is desperately needed at this point, either in the form of a Larson/Bot infodump conversation or flashbacks or even what Firefly does and flash a personnel file on the screen at a convenient time. -----signature----- I've finished reading Breaking Dawn! Morale officer of the ACWDBTTCAOT. "Forsan et haec olim meminisse iuvabit." ~Virgil, Aeneid "Ecce domino" (The pizza guy's here)
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LLL Title: TFN Fan Fiction Archive Editor Registered: Jul '00	Date Posted: 5/23 4:34pm Subject: RE: Community Fan Film Clearinghouse-- In the homestretch, we are. Take it away, RX_Sith!!
	I suppose we should then... (gasp! decide what the backstory is. Anybody want that one? How much we use is debatable, but we at least need to know whutthebleep happened. I am soooo not in favor of an infodump conversation. We gotta work stuff in some other way. It could be that this will end up more than 60 pages long. Filmies, is that going to be a problem?? Ish, when you get your version finalized, email it to me at UPSTARTLL8@msn.com for inclusion in the master copy. I'm going to have to do a Script Weekend coming up here soon. -----signature----- ''Overall, to get a real deep, nuanced understanding of human behaviour, art is the best way.'' --Natalie Portman. Have a question or suggestion for the Archive? PM me anytime.
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DarthIshtar Title: Former CR Star Wars Trivia Hostess Registered: Mar '01	Date Posted: 5/23 4:46pm Subject: RE: Community Fan Film Clearinghouse-- In the homestretch, we are. Take it away, RX_Sith!! - Date Edited: 5/23 4:53pm (1 edits total) Edited By: DarthIshtar
	LOL, wait, you're giving me license to drag my story out... Never thought I'd see the day. Punk. Gotta love ya for putting up with all of us. Proposition 1 for the backstory: the one I came up with during the development info on Bel Maden. This is the one where, in the early days of the Empire, an up-and-coming Imperial officer wanted to put himself in a higher position of power. He is allies/friends with Bel Maden and at some point, the Admiral gets injured on a mission. It's not that serious, but they falsify his medical records and euthanize the Admiral. It looks like he's died from his wounds, but was actually conveniently assassinated. The droid's master discovered this and had the proof on that microchip when he made a wrong move and got sent off to Naboo before he could get it to the right people. He knows that because of what he did to piss off Vader, he wouldn't be taken seriously if he decided to throw the blackmail info in their face. It's like McCarthyism less effectively. So he's been holding it in reserve and the droid is entrusted with the family secret just in case. The droid, seeing a family need, takes its own initiative. Oh, and if you couldn't figure out the code, I did a lot of research on various diseases this morning and came up with the guy basically having bronchitis by his family's reckoning and actually developing lung cancer. Methotrex is a takeoff of the chemotherapy drug methotrexate. Edit: No, it's not the one I was earlier hoping for. But they sat me down and handed me a ton of forms to fill out, one of which let me pick what kind of health, vision and dental benefits I wanted. THat is something that I battled with my old company about. And this is an evening job, so if I get the other one, I can do that in the mornings and get more money. -----signature----- I've finished reading Breaking Dawn! Morale officer of the ACWDBTTCAOT. "Forsan et haec olim meminisse iuvabit." ~Virgil, Aeneid "Ecce domino" (The pizza guy's here)
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LLL Title: TFN Fan Fiction Archive Editor Registered: Jul '00	Date Posted: 5/23 4:58pm Subject: RE: Community Fan Film Clearinghouse-- In the homestretch, we are. Take it away, RX_Sith!!
	Only problem... That begs the question of how anyone knows what this guy's got. I figured if some sort of epidemic was sweeping Naboo, then it would be obvious. They can't know what he's got otherwise because the whole plot revolves around how they're too poor for medical treatment. -----signature----- ''Overall, to get a real deep, nuanced understanding of human behaviour, art is the best way.'' --Natalie Portman. Have a question or suggestion for the Archive? PM me anytime.
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DarthIshtar Title: Former CR Star Wars Trivia Hostess Registered: Mar '01	Date Posted: 5/23 5:02pm Subject: RE: Community Fan Film Clearinghouse-- In the homestretch, we are. Take it away, RX_Sith!!
	Well, the family thinks he's got Bonadan Cough. They basically think he has a chest cold and not double pneumonia. Picture that. But yes, we need to know how the droid knows when the family does. -----signature----- I've finished reading Breaking Dawn! Morale officer of the ACWDBTTCAOT. "Forsan et haec olim meminisse iuvabit." ~Virgil, Aeneid "Ecce domino" (The pizza guy's here)
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Jedsithor Registered: Oct '05	Date Posted: 5/23 10:07pm Subject: RE: Community Fan Film Clearinghouse-- In the homestretch, we are. Take it away, RX_Sith!!
	Am I still doing the rewrite/second draft? I'd like to take a shot at writing the ending if nobody minds. Also...there's a problem that will have to be dealt with in part three...Larson can't take "BOT" back to Naboo. In part 2, he essentially stole his own ship when he took it out of impound, so the Dock Administrator on Naboo is going to be on the look out for him. i don't think Larson is going to want to go back there and get arrested. And then there's the fact that part 2 ends with a space fight as the Solar Flare escapes from a planet and part 3 is set up begin with a space fight as the Solar Flare escapes from a planet. So the first thing I would say is have the ship go up against the Star Destroyer and not TIE Fighters to make the battle different. As for the Larson problem...I have an idea. Use the problem to our advantage. It's established that Larson may have been a smuggler in the past, so it would stand to reason that he could change any ID tags on the ship...the equivalent of changing license plates. have BOT convince Larson to go back, then have the Dock Administrator recognise the ship and have Imperial troops start searching Theed for Larson, leading to a final "showdown" at BOT's home. Another idea is to have the ship be captured, have BOT and Larson put in prison, where they meet a rebel. Obviously they escape, Larson says he's not going back to Naboo and so BOT makes a deal with the rebel to be taken to Naboo in exchange for the information about the doctor. Either way, I do have an ending...though I don't want to reveal it yet -----signature----- KOTOR Movie Trilogy Forums: http://z11.invisionfree.com/KOTOR_Movies
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DarthIshtar Title: Former CR Star Wars Trivia Hostess Registered: Mar '01	Date Posted: 5/23 10:21pm Subject: RE: Community Fan Film Clearinghouse-- In the homestretch, we are. Take it away, RX_Sith!!
	If he's anything like the other smugglers we know, yes, he can change ID tags. Heck, even members of Rogue Squadron know how to do that. If he needed to, he could just make it a quick boot-and-scoot delivery of bot. -----signature----- I've finished reading Breaking Dawn! Morale officer of the ACWDBTTCAOT. "Forsan et haec olim meminisse iuvabit." ~Virgil, Aeneid "Ecce domino" (The pizza guy's here)
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Jedsithor Registered: Oct '05	Date Posted: 5/24 8:31am Subject: RE: Community Fan Film Clearinghouse-- In the homestretch, we are. Take it away, RX_Sith!!
	You know what my biggest worry is? We have one more part and then a finale. But the story feels like it's still just getting going rather than winding up. I just feel like there's another 30 or 40 pages, aside from what's still to come, that could easily be put in there. In fact it might even give the story a better pace. The droids adventure just seems a little to linear. The only time he goes off course or the prospect of failing comes into play is when he's captured by the thieves near the beginning. Sure, there are a couple of space fights later on, but it's all a little too straight forward. I think there's room for something else to happen to the droid to delay him or seed the idea that he might fail. One idea is to have him get captured...another would be to have him stranded on a strange world. Something like that. It may even be necessary. If it means that the film goes over an hour then so be it. It also brings up another issue...the whole idea of the film is that it's a collaboration. This is evident in the writing, but when it comes to shooting it...right now we don't need four primary crews. Let's break it down. Crew 1: Shoots all of the stuff on Naboo with the family. Crew 2: Shoots the stuff on Naboo with the thieves. Crew 3: Shoots the stuff with Larson...this includes all of parts 2 and 3, probably most of part 4 as well. And that's it. You could have crews shoot the internal stuff on the Star Destroyer that's been set up for part 4, and things like the news broadcast in the scene in the cantina, but it's more second unit than a primary collaborative crew. You're going to have one crew with a hell of a lot of work, shooting the cantina scene, the market scenes, the docking bay scenes, the internal scenes on the Solar Flare and the Bestine scenes, because that crew will have the actor playing Larson. Which means of course that they will have the largest cast as well....bartenders, doctors, dock administrators, storm troopers, lots of extras at the market (some could be shot separately and composited in I suppose). This is going to mean multiple sets...green screen is fine, but it doesn't solve every problem. The whole point of using a droid was so it could be cg and therefore be able to interact on multiple shoots. I think some of that has been lost. I know you guys want to concentrate on writing and not worry about shooting yet, but this is something that needs to be dealt with sooner rather than later. I also think work needs to get going on designing the droid and creating a 3d model. This is something that can be started now, we don't have to wait until the script is done to start work on the look of the droid. -----signature----- KOTOR Movie Trilogy Forums: http://z11.invisionfree.com/KOTOR_Movies
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