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LLL
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2/20 8:09pm
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RE: Community Fan Film Clearinghouse--Story Treatment for Part One posted.
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WHAT'S HAPPENING! 2/20/08
- As you can see, a story treatment for Part One has been posted. Please feel free to comment!
- Sad to say, our poll request has been denied. Backdesk, since you started the original thread in Fan Films, can you see if they'll let you post it in that thread? Thanks.
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DVCPRO-HDeditor
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2/20 8:21pm
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Wow - this is unpredicented depth for a fan film story. 
Keep goin'.
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LLL
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Date Posted:
2/20 8:23pm
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RE: Community Fan Film Clearinghouse--Story Treatment for Part One posted.
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I had posted that before I realized that we've got TWO stormtrooper raids.
Is this potentially a bad thing? 
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drewjmore
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Date Posted:
2/20 8:59pm
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RE: Community Fan Film Clearinghouse--Story Treatment for Part One posted.
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2/20 9:01pm (1 edits total)
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LLL posted:
MJ and I have gotten far enough to post a treatment for our part. NOT written in appropriate screenplay language at all, it goes as follows:
...laboring to pave the road and being brutally treated by guards.
Any chance of a Cool-hand Luke homage? If you don't know, that movie chronicles a prison-chain-gang doing that sort of work. "What we have here...is [a] failure...to communicate..." I don't want to use that line, just to get that film in your mind...
LLL posted:
...Stormtroopers ransack...Those people are being arrested for Rebel sympathies! They don't want to be associated with them.
This part feels like you are dwelling on minor characters (the family), instead of establishing the droid's role in the family. Like, bring the scene into the family's shack, and have the droid pull the daughter away from the window and draw the curtain...
The rest I like wholeheartedly!!
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LLL
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2/20 9:35pm
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Hmm. Well...my main concern is that in only a few moments the film will focus only on the droid, and we have only a very short time to connect with the important people in the droid's life--the people it is doing this for--and only a very short time to see evidence of what's become of Naboo under Palpatine. Also, if we're right up on the action, it's more dramatic and involving.
But that's my perspective. You could be right, which is why I posted this up here to begin with. Critique away!
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DarthIshtar
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Only suggestion I would have is perhaps less focus on the "establishing shot" of the living conditions of everyone and focusing more quickly on Melora's family. A lot of what is the initial setup can be accomplished in passing from the droid's POV later on.
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LLL
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It will be dark.
Let's see what MJ comes up with and how long it is. If the sequence takes three minutes or less, that's not too long. Five or ten minutes...too long.
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Yeah, plus there's always the possibility of editing, right? :0)
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True. And the filmies can rewrite if they think it's not going to work.
But, you don't expect a story to be about a droid, right? So you set it up, and then this droid wanders out alone and takes you on an adventure.
*said by the last person who ever wanted to write a story about a droid*
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LLL posted:
But, you don't expect a story to be about a droid, right? So you set it up, and then this droid wanders out alone and takes you on an adventure.
Yeah, and he wanders into an escape pod, lands on a desert planet, gets captured by Jawas . . . . 
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The Musical Jedi
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2/21 8:44am
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I'm functioning under the 1 page = 1 minute idea, right?
I'm working on the dialogue first. I'm rather intimidated by the script format and the what to include/what not to include question.
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backdeskproductions
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I like the Aurra sing idea, but if we cant find one, then we'll have to completely change the character into some original character of our own minds.
I can try to see if a poll can be organized in my 'ol thread.
I like how the story is expanding a bit.
Keep up the awesome work guys!
Yes, the 1 page= 1 minute... sometimes we filmies will stretch out a few battle sequences and suspensful parts, but 1 page does equal 1 minute. (while following the correct format of course) 
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2/21 1:14pm
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I'm doing my best on the format part.
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The Musical Jedi posted:
I'm doing my best on the format part.
That's what counts. 
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