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RogueLead11 Registered: Aug '99	Date Posted: 2/14/00 8:09pm Subject: Re: The Sith Order: Planning Thread
	An addition of love and loss and general heart-ache to the Sith Uprising thread. Not exactly ideal for Valentine's Day, but that's as close as I could get it to something even remotely romantic. As a summary: Coris and Brendtan have a chat about his search for Jastiss Otonna (Loka, could you tell me whether that seems like a feasible explanation for the ten year delay?) and the subject eventually drifts to Jai'ana Din. This part is a set up for another dream sequence I will write later, school and RL abiding. BTW, happy Valentine's Day, everybody! -----signature----- The lazy author that never finishes anyth
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The Rover Registered: Dec '99	Date Posted: 2/15/00 8:32am Subject: Re: The Sith Order: Planning Thread
	Hey Rogue, that was one of the most beautiful post I've ever read from you. I felt the vibe from the first sentence right to the last. If you was looking for romantic, you have succeeded ! I guess I have to come back on the romance angle myself, a little bit harder next time , huh ? we'll see..... But, Read the Valentine Post, that was started by Kirla'an Kenobi...you may find something interesting After I write this, i'm going back to read the post again By the way, Where is Luke's Severed Hand ? I am still waiting for the conclusion of your character's introduction ( tapping his toes ) seriously though, I really want to know whats happens next, so when you ready I'm quite sure it will be worth the wait. Galandriel, That is a very interesting name for Zemai, when she becomes a member of the Sith " Carrier of the dead " , very nice !
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Loka Hask Registered: Jul '99	Date Posted: 2/15/00 11:22am Subject: Re: The Sith Order: Planning Thread
	Im posting this for a couple reasons. 1) This will add a little more depth to both Karik's and Jastiss' past 2) Jastiss and Olan may refer to this from time to time and I want you guys to know what they are talking about 3) Its also to show basically the character of Olan and Jastiss. In this story, Jastiss whill have changed his values, and now wants to be a Jedi, convinced he will not turn out like his father, but Olan will hold him to his promise he made. Talis watched in horror as two dark mean leapt from a speeder that had just pulled up in behind her fairly large home on Tatooine. She looked at the first, both with her senses and with the force, and found nothing familiar about him, except for the dark waves of energy that seemed to emenate from him like the heat off of the twin suns of Tatooine. She looked at the other, and gasped. A dark billowing cloak shrouded his body like death himself, but she could recognise his presence anywhere. It was Karik, her husband. His visage struck fear in her heart as she backed away, back into the rear entrance she had come out of. As soon as Karik was out of her sight, she turned tail and ran straight for the living quarters up stairs. "Olan!" she cried as she fled up the stairs, "find Jastiss! His father is here!" Almost as soon as she reached the top of the stairs, she found Olan, of nearly thirty-nine years of age, and her son, Jastiss who was eight years old. He looked bewildered up at his mother, but she looked back down at him sternly, then at Olan. "Take him out the front, there's a speeder outside. Take it to that new colony Anchorhead which is just north-west of here. I have a hide-out there that you will stay at until I manage to get rid of his father." She watched as Olan nodded quickly and grabbed a protesting Jastiss. He sped off out the front door, and soon a repulser lift could be heard, whining to life. Satisfied, Talis ran to her room, and began to rummage through her storage containers. Soon, she came out with a cylindrical, metallic object. Please, she thought desperately as she heard soft footsteps begin to slowly ascend the staircase, Let there still be some charge left. "Talis," came a voice from the doorway. Talis whirled around, at the same time hitting the trigger stud on the object. With a snap-hiss a shimmering orange blade sprung forth and lit the room. The figure in front of him was Karik, his hood now resting against his shoulders. He had a look on his face that frightened Talis. He stared grimly at her with two steel grey eyes, and his lightsaber held, but not ignited, in his right hand. "Where is Jastiss." The phrase was more of a statement than a question, as if he knew where Jastiss was, but he still had to go through the formalities. "He's safe," she spat, lifting her saber to a defensive position. For a moment Karik stood, then all of a sudden he stumbled back, like something hit him. And, almost as suddenly as it happened, it stopped, and Karik had a new look on his face. A look of anger. Karik shouted in a mad rage as he whirled around, his cloak billowing in Talis' face. She stepped back in surprise, and in the split second it took her to recover, Karik was gone. Quickly, she ran out of her room and down the stairs, where she found Karik standing at the doorway, watching a small speck of a speeder heading toward the horizon. In a mad fit, Karik bent over and ripped a peice of debris from the sand, and hurled it toward the speck with super-human strength. Olan Tennaris glanced nervously at the small child sitting next to him, who was now quietly in his seat, staring straight ahead. The Jedi Knight looked over his shoulder at the house he had just left, which was now over two miles away. I shouldn't of left her, Olan thought bitterly, She doesn't stand a chance against Karik. Suddenly, the speeder rocked violently forward, then a small racket could be heard coming from the main engine behind him. Olan quickly turned forward, and tried to regain control of the vehicle. What the devil- the racket was suddenly interrupted by a loud thunk, then the stress of something blocking the engine. Almost immediately after, a loud explosion rocked the speeder, and sparks rained down on the two passengers. Olan desperately tried to steer the vehicle as it began to careen into a nearby sand dune, but to no avail. In a cloud of sand, the small vehicle plunged deep into the dune, nearly pouring overtop of the passengers. Olan glanced behind him, and swore when he saw that the house was still in view, although it was quite small. Karik saw the whole thing. He's most likely on his way now. Olan thought as he pulled himself out of the speeder, then helped Jastiss out of his harness. He looked behind him again, and his blood began to chill in his veins. A small speck of a speeder was rapidly getting closer, and there was three figures in the speeder. Frantically, Olan turned and grabbed Jastiss by the collar. Without a word, he heaved Jastiss into the air and over the sand dune. He could hear Jasitiss wailing on the other side, so Olan placed an image in his head that made him want to run like he had never run before. Soon, the speeder pulled up, and out came Karik, and his accomplice. Olan's fists clenched with anger as he saw Talis tied up in the back seat of the speeder. "Let her go, Karik," Olan said menacingly, drawing his saber, "I will not let you have either of them without a fight." Karik raised his eyebrows, then motioned to his partner, who was standing silently beside him. "Are you willing to fight both of us, just to save a child and a woman you have known for as little as a year?" "That's still longer than you've known them! You have become a maniac and a monster. You are not the Karik I once knew." Olan took a step toward Karik as he ignited his saber, a deep green blade. Karik swiftly pulled his saber, followed by his partner. "You are no match for us, Olan. Don't make us have to kill you. Hand over the child." Without a word, Olan charged the two, and lightsaber blades began to hum through the afternoon air. With a crack, Olan's saber connected harshly with Karik's, sending him back into his speeder. He immediately jumped back, and before Olan could prepare himself for a defense, he found himself trying to dodge a blow from Karik's partner. Blades clashed through the air with deadly presicion, cracking and humming. Karik brought down an overhead strike that forced Olan's saber into the sand, melting it into a fine glass that lumped around the super-heated blade. Olan brought it back, and struck at the other swordsmen before blocking another attack from Karik. This went on for what seemed like forever, until Olan landed a well placed Kick to the nameless swordsman's abdomen. As he went stumbling into the sand, Olan looked frantically for Karik. He was no where to be seen. Suddenly, from the speeder, Talis cried out. Olan looked, and realized that it was a warning. It was too late. There was a sudden flash of light, then Olan turned to look at Karik, who had his saber deignited and was smiling. Olan raised an eyebrow, as he watched Karik's perculiar behaviour. Now! Olan thought, Now is the time to strike, when he is not ready! Olan began to bring his saber up to bear, when, he came across a horrible ralization. His saber wasn't there. And neither was most of his arm. Olan stared at the sickening stump that used to be his arm, the looked at Karik accusingly. Suddenly, Karik brought his fist back, and landed it straight in Olan's Jaw. Olan snapped painfully around, and fell face first into the sand, blood pouring from his nose. As he rolled onto his back using his one arm, he heard Karik laugh. "And now, I will allow you to see one more thing before you die." Karik said slowly as he walked toward his speeder, where -----signature----- Me: "Yeah, I'm @#$%ing amazing." Darth: "And modest." Me: "@#$%ing modest." http://unfortunate-lizard.blogspot.com
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RogueLead11 Registered: Aug '99	Date Posted: 2/15/00 3:13pm Subject: Re: The Sith Order: Planning Thread
	That was great, Loka! You really should include that in the regular story - like a flash-back or something. BTW, Rover, your post in the Valentine thing was very sweet. Thank-you! Believe me, I'm working on having Coris save Jai'ana. But where is she, anyway? Have her send him a sign or something! -----signature----- The lazy author that never finishes anyth
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The Rover Registered: Dec '99	Date Posted: 2/17/00 4:31pm Subject: Re: The Sith Order: Planning Thread
	Hey everybody sorry it took me so long to post, but here it is Rogue, im glad you like the valantine post,listen. you want me to send a sign, im in the mist of doing one better. setting up a scene between one of Odar Velisa's students and Coris to let him know that he felt jai'ana-din's cry for help, i hope i can do it before you all go off to war, heres the summary: Rimar has just told Seth and Drey that he has begun the attack on the galactic republic in two places. one a space station and one on a planet ( any one of you can make up another place where the war can commnece at, but for now this is where we starting from ) Drey and seth have an intense discussion on treachary and betrayal and in passing mentions General Rikkan and Jai'ana-Din Ronin before they go back to continue their plans to conquer Coruscant I am setting up more of the political povertones of the story now,...Lord Sith , this is your que , my friend, where are you at ? that reminds me...Luke's Severed Hand, where are you at...we need more scenes from you... more to come
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luke's severed hand Registered: Jan '00	Date Posted: 2/17/00 10:01pm Subject: Re: The Sith Order: Planning Thread
	here i am! after i finally got the time to edit my 2nd post, my computer froze on me! ( everyone all together now: AAAAWW, poor baby) Anyway, Friday and Saturday night, i shall get my act together ( standing on chair ), start my modem, and post like there's no tomorrow. story looks great! thanx for the concern Rover five finger salute!(except the middle one)
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The Rover Registered: Dec '99	Date Posted: 2/18/00 6:13pm Subject: Re: The Sith Order: Planning Thread
	Once again the Rover is back heres the summary so far Coris nd Zemai have a quick discussion on the turn of events. Coris thinks more on jai'ana-Din Ronin. he suddenly gets a visit from jai'ana-Din elder classmate, Lywin Xar-Vel . he tells Coris of the vision he received from Jai'ana-Din and that she is alive but captured. he doesnt have no avenue to go on , but willalert Coris when have a lead. the reason i wrote it like this so as to free you up Rogue,so you can find Jastiss Otonna first and then Ill bring you in to rescue Jai'ana-Din in that order. I would want her to be rescured towards the end of this story anyway more to come
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JediGaladriel Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Sep '99	Date Posted: 2/18/00 6:42pm Subject: Re: The Sith Order: Planning Thread
	Couple things. First, I forgot to summarize my last post -- Zem overhears Coris talking about Jai'ana, is annoyed but tells herself that she just doesn't want to "intrude," then finally goes out to join Coris and Brendtan. Coris tells her they were forbidden to look for Jastiss. She's terrified that the Council will end her apprencticeship before she and Coris have done this task they've always planned to do, so she comes up -- pretty much on the spot with no actual plan in place -- with a theory about the krayt dragon crystals and Tatooine. What earthly good she thinks this will do is beyond me, but she's still pretty young. She makes little secret of the fact that she'd pretty much have Coris blow off the whole Council. Second thing: What will happen to Zem if Akira uses her as a vessel (not permanently... heck, Zem's got a few things slated during this Tatooine trip...)? Sent out into the netherworld? Trapped in the same body and struggling to get free? Or maybe not struggling as hard as she might until it comes to a point where Akira's using her to do something really vile? What?
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JediGaladriel Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Sep '99	Date Posted: 2/18/00 8:59pm Subject: Re: The Sith Order: Planning Thread
	Does anyone have the first story archived anywhere? We should have a link to it. It doesn't really fit with the fanfic I have officially housed at Vader's Mask, but if someone can tell me where it is, I can pull all the commentary out of it and clean up the typos, and give it a place to live... just not a link, since it's not in the scope of my archive.
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JediGaladriel Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Sep '99	Date Posted: 2/18/00 11:20pm Subject: Re: The Sith Order: Planning Thread
	Okay, new post. Zemai goes back to her quarters, cursing herself for being so upfront with Coris (and refusing to admit why she wants him to give up the search for Jai'ana). She decides abruptly that "maybe it's the will of the Force for Coris to have a stubborn padawan who won't take no for an answer," and proceeds to meditate on her crystal (she gets distracted by science while she's trying to meditate, but she does finally get into a meditative state). While doing so, she sees a partial vision of Karik's visit to Jastiss -- nothing important; I'll leave that to Loka -- but more importantly, she sees Jastiss himself, and recognizes him instantly. She tries to spin a thread between them, and I left it off with her whispering his name along that thread. I kept it ambiguous whether or not Jastiss hears her, because I wouldn't presume to write Jastiss before Loka does! But it's open and connected, Loka, if you want to move into a Jastiss scene now.
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blackjedi Registered: Jul '99	Date Posted: 2/19/00 8:53pm Subject: Re: The Sith Order: Planning Thread
	I know, I know.. there's no excuse for me.. -.- I've been busy w/ school stuff all week and this is the first break I've had!! But now I don't know if I can write an intro for my characters.. maybe I shoudl just try and incorporate them into what's happening now?... Could a little more experienced writer help me?.
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RogueLead11 Registered: Aug '99	Date Posted: 2/20/00 4:43pm Subject: Re: The Sith Order: Planning Thread
	I have a link to the first story, Jedi Galadriel. Here's the address: Forum9/HTML/001727.html Forum9/HTML/001727.html -----signature----- The lazy author that never finishes anyth
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JediGaladriel Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Sep '99	Date Posted: 2/24/00 8:30pm Subject: Re: The Sith Order: Planning Thread
	<JG clears her throat and calls out into the void> Hulloooo.... <it echoes back...> Rogue and I are having a lovely little family drama, including nightmares and the impending end of Zem's apprenticeship. Where are the folks writing the war? Loka... what happens next with Jastiss? We're on the way. Sort of. Lord Sith? blackjedi? Rover? LSH? [This message has been edited by JediGaladriel (edited 02-24-2000).]
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luke's severed hand Registered: Jan '00	Date Posted: 2/24/00 10:38pm Subject: Re: The Sith Order: Planning Thread
	Whew! Editing is no joke! After finally getting my thoughts down, I had the, unexpectedly, daunting task of editing the beast. If any knight out there is looking for part time work, editing posts, I have a job for you! J OK. I have posted my overdue baby. She is raw and plump, but, I love her. Enjoy. A summary: Koenis, with wavering faith and indecision about his future as a Jedi Knight, confront the Grenouk clan in an effort to rescue his frend, Maapaa, who is being held captive. There he is confronted by a young and arrogant Sith disciple who forces him to fight. At the conclusion of the duel, Koenis rediscovers his faith and accepts his future role in the coming war. The story ends with Koenis and Maapaa journeying to Coruscant. Next post summary: The cargo vessel that is transporting Koenis and Maapaa comes out of hyperspace right in the middle of the surprised attack by the Calmonians. They are just outside of the sensory range of the fleet but a patrol ship gets the drop on them. Tumir Sagedust runs to the Jedi Temple to offer her assistance in the war. She wants to stress to the Council her belief that the Sith is an enemy that needs to be vigilantly dispatched or they will amass at a level that will soon overpower the galaxy. After the meeting, she comes across Ular-Grimm and they discuss the course of action that they believe the Republic should take. I also have some questions that we need to answer in order to create a more satisfying approach to the attack on Rimar’s stronghold: 1. What kind of world does he rule? One where the people love or resent him? 2. What will the cue be that we are about to attack Rimar? 3. Has anyone seen the omni-present Lord Sith??? I am a fan of this storyline, as well as a participant, so I want it to be the best that it can. When a round robin turns into an epic, it can easily get bogged down by uninspired and selfish(not serving the better good of the overall story) suplots and characters that dilute the stories overall effectiveness. One of the strengths of Sith Uprising, I feel, was the diversity of the few characters in the story and the unpredictability of the storyline. I hope that that isn’t lost. Any thoughts on this or are my concerns unwarranted? BTW: Rover, your posts are always compelling! JediGaladriel: Zemai and Coris dance divinely with your continued manipulations. I was afraid that I might be clueless about how to recreate their, usually, smart interplay in my posts, but, you lay a clear trail upon which others can follow. Great stuff. Rogue: Always a pleasure to read your stuff.
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blackjedi Registered: Jul '99	Date Posted: 2/26/00 11:07pm Subject: Re: The Sith Order: Planning Thread
	Believe it or not, I'm still here.. I just hven't had the time or the creativity to write something.. :-( School's been really busy, especially since I joined an after school thing.. I don't know when I'll be able to post again.. sighs
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