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JediGaladriel
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3/30/00 10:02pm
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Okay, right after making that post, I decided to take another turn. The Fab Four are crossing the desert, and Olan and Jastiss spot a cave that might or might not be a krayt dragon bore. Zemai gets "desert-head" (as Jastiss calls it) and zones out for a minute, but Jastiss pulls her up. Coris, for some reason that I don't know and will let Rogue fill in ( ), decides to put her through a little perception test. When she realizes that his mind is still on Akira and he's trying to figure out if she's still there, he closes off their mental link. She is annoyed at this, tells him that Akira isn't around and he should just ask for what he wants next time, then stalks off toward the cave, now ahead of the rest.
Some stuff we need to get to pretty soon (and this is just stuff I know about because it involves Zemai in one way or another):
1. (with a bullet) Jai'ana Din Ronin. How do we find out she's alive, and where is she, and how does she end up getting Coris to come after her, leaving poor, defenseless little Zem all alone in the big bad desert? (With a major comfort, of course...)
2. The Sith prophecy about Karik Otonna's descendents... Lord Sith? (We talked in e-mail)
3. Akira's mechinations for her dastardly plot.
4. The Council and the Senate dealing with the Sith and the Calmonians; we need to start setting up for a battle and a resolution.
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A side thought: This thread is getting slow to post to; should we open a new planning thread?
[This message has been edited by JediGaladriel (edited 03-30-2000).]
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JediGaladriel
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Another quick war interlude, on Ampinua. A would-be rebel is murdered by a Sith trying to claim the world in his own name (as opposed to the name of the Order), and another Sith comes along and kills him. Neither is named, and the viewpoint character -- the wife of the would-be rebel -- doesn't much care who they are.
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The Rover
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Okay people, here is another summary for you..sorry for taking so long, had a short case of writers block and wanted to try something different in this post.
The Calmonians invade Pelos and The Jedi has been sent to help drive them out. This scene involves Master Eil'leia Dawn and Si'enna Kidda-Lar. The Sith however, has other plans as an extremly violent battle erupts.
basically, thanks to Luke Severed Hand, I am now going to use this scene and the rest of the story, to show the Sith in all of their glory.
Hopefully you are not turned off from any of the graphic details I put in. Brace yourself, people, its gonna get wilder than this....
More to come soon
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Loka Hask
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4/2/00 1:35am
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Hey, Gala, don't you mention Ampinua in one of your stories? I just thought I recognised it...
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JediGaladriel
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Loka,
Guilty as charged. Ampinua's one of my "default" worlds... I use it because I'm too lazy to think up another one. But, as I'd already put an Ampinuan librarian in the Jedi Temple, I figured, why not? It's next door to La'azum...
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RogueLead11
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Summary of my last post (which I finally got up... aren't ya'll proud of me? )
Brendtan the Wookie is briefed by Jedi Master Dur Slew (I like using that guy). He is to be sent with two other Jedi to defend the senators attending a council on Alderaan about dealing with the Calomians and Sith. I'm trying to get Brendt involved in the war, and this seemed like the best way to do it. Brendt asks about Coris and Zemai, but Dur Slew refuses to tell him anything.
Meanwhile, Coris and the others are entering that cave Jedi Galadriel mentioned in one of her earlier posts. Both Coris and Zemai sense something wrong in the air Force-wise, and Coris finds something lying on the ground that has somewhat of a negative effect on him. He tries to distract the others by telling them he'll stand sentry for a while - to make sure the Sith don't come back - and has Zemai come with him, so they can talk privately.
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JediGaladriel
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I felt like writing an action scene, but I pretty much left us where Rogue did at the end of it. Basically, in the course of the conversation, Zemai and Coris yell at each other a little for shutting off the mental link, but that gets repaired, though they are still a bit snippy with each other. Then Coris gets into the Force push, and Zemai challenges him to teach her how she could have better handled two trained Sith at the same time. He answers by calling Olan, and the two of them attack her. She finally is forced to retreat, and she learns the lesson -- unfortunately, for the first time, it's not a lesson that she thinks is universally useful: she dismisses it with the thought that she'll remember to retreat, the next time she figures the Sith won't follow her (in other words, "Yeah, right, Coris... that's going to work in real time.") Jastiss was heard in the background accusing them of being crazy, and then he's the one who tries to clean up the scratches and scrapes she's got. She can't figure out why he's so surprised by any of this. At any rate, I ended with Coris again saying that they have matters to discuss, and that hopefully they can now do so without a duel breaking out.
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The Rover
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4/6/00 1:19am
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I just came on line and edited my post to correct alot of typo errors that I had. I dont know about everyone but,a new planning thread is in order....it took forever for this to get up.
Anyway I'm glad that the forum is back....still working on my next scene
Beautiful post Rogue and galandriel....hey gala, it seems like everyone at one point or another is writing poems into their post, I feel like I'm missing out on a new thing here
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Loka Hask
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hold on, i'm working on a post at home. (I'm at school now). It should be done by the end of today.
[This message has been edited by Loka Hask (edited 04-06-2000).]
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JediGaladriel
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Ah, but does it have poetry?
Rover -- I cheated; I just used the same stanza that Stephen King used in his novel "The Waste Lands." I have actually read the whole Eliot poem, but it was a long time ago, and I didn't feel like going back for it. I'd just kept using rock shadows, and I remembered the "Come in under the shadow of this red rock" line. I threw in the "handful of dust" bit at the end of the scene as a tip of the hat to the poem; it's a little heavy-handed, probably. But I just love the line "I will show you fear in a handful of dust."
Anyone who wants to throw in an "Ozymandias" reference... (Sorry, reference to some other threads. Seems to be a popular poem at the JC.)
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Loka Hask
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basically had a little thing between Olan and Jastiss. Olan got upset that Jastiss wanted to be a Jedi, so he tested Jastiss himself, and well, to put it bluntly, Jastiss failed miserably. Olan did this to prove how hard it would be to not only become a Jedi, but to continue to be one.
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JediGaladriel
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Okay. I wasn't sure what Rogue11 wanted to do with the conversation, so I hope I'm not spoiling a plan here. I basically had Coris admit to Zemai that he knew Akira had been in the cave, though neither of them can tell when. She shows him her dream, though manages to justify to herself that he doesn't really need to see the beginning of it. They go back to the cave.
Zemai is not overly thrilled with Olan's idea of a test (and misses its point, basically because she has no concept of deciding whether or not one should go into training; she never had to make such a choice). She picks up Karik's saber and puts it directly into Jastiss' hand, saying that what was given need not be taken.
Hope I'm not stepping on Loka's or Rogue's toes here. If for no other reason than that I need them to be able to hobble over to "Strange Angels"...
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luke's severed hand
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Hey, guys and gals.
I’m sorry that I haven’t posted to the planner in a while, but I was concentrating on getting my characters and key situations set up before I would actively push the plot along.
Now that all of my characters have been introduced, I can get down to the dirty work. I will post to planner more often.(promise)J
Don’t worry, though, I have kept abreast of the stories progress and have to say that I am extremely pleased.
Aspects rocks! (I liked it very much and would read it twice more!-very old joke)
I was initially concerned, in the beginning, about Aspects’ set-up and us being able to maintain fluid transition (in its storyline and with all of its diverse subplots) and I have to say that it (and all of you) all have exceeded my expectations. I don’t believe that there is a better round-robin out there. (exception to Strange Angels)
Galandriel, Rogue and Loka have me stuck on Tattoine and I don’t want to leave. The life lessons and emotional interplay of Coris, Zemai, Olan and Jastiss are both inspiring and delightful to read. I tended to forget while I was reading their recent adventures that there was a bloody war going on across other parts of the galaxy. (that’s a good thing!) Great job.
Special honors should go to Rover for developing an intriguing plot with such a wealth of characters in Lord’s absence. You’ve picked up the ball, as they say, ran with it! I hope I can keep up. We are in your debt.
O.K.
As the story stands:
1. Koenis and maapaa have unexpected visitors on their trip to Coruscant. Koenis will be separated fom Maapaa, which forces the little guy to make his own plans.(I swear that I’m not trying to sound mysterious, here.)
2. Sedoc and 4 other Sith disciples of Master Kirasis are headed to Golean for a bit of mayhem I’m afraid.
3. Grimm and Tumir are going to tackle on to tackle the Senate. they will try to find out where theirheads are at with the whole jedi vs. sith thing and make them see the Calmonians as a real threat. Little do they know that theyy will also be in the presence of the two founders of the Sith in disguise.
I am going to try to mention your characters in my posts so that the posts seem more attached to the overall story.
Ya know, If I posted more often to this planner, I wouldn’t have such a long post, would I?
Five finger salute.
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blackjedi
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Yup. I'm still alive.. I'm sorry that I haven't added anything.. school has been really busy and I've been at a writer's block for SW for a long time.. -.- Does anyone want me to try and add my characters in (or is it too late?) or to try and wait for the next story.
Ozymandias.. hm.. Hey, is that the one that goes "And on this shattered visage lay.."?
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JediGaladriel
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Yup. This is the whole thing... think of it with thoughts of the Gungan sacred place, with all its fallen statues.
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I met a traveller from an antique land
Who said: Two vast and trunkless legs of stone
Stand in the desert. Near them, on the sand,
Half sunk, a shattered visage lies, whose frown,
And wrinkled lip, and sneer of cold command,
Tell that its sculptor well those passions read
Which yet survive, stamped on these lifeless things,
The hand that mocked them, and the heart that fed:
And on the pedestal these words appear:
'My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
Look on my works, ye Mighty, and despair!'
Nothing beside remains. Round the decay
Of that collosal wreck, boundless and bare
The lone and level sands stretch far away.
- PB Shelley 1789-1822
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