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Jane Jinn Registered: Jan '00	Date Posted: 4/17/00 11:36am Subject: Re: Divided we fall. A sorta JA fanfic.
	Good writing, powerful descriptions, interesting plot twists, excellent characterizations, WELL DONE, Jedi Gryph Grin! Keep going! -----signature----- Mostly retired now Just making the occasional guest appearance
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Jedi Gryph Grin Registered: Sep '99	Date Posted: 4/18/00 8:00pm Subject: Re: Divided we fall. A sorta JA fanfic.
	Sorry for the delay in posting, I've had a devil of a time just trying to connect for the last two days. Anyway, here's some more, almost at the end now. Comments please! ******** Rela watched the wookie’s progress across the cavern floor and noticed that its path had gone somewhat astray. What is the galaxy coming to when a Wookie can’t track? she wondered silently, kind of a chilling thought, that. Oh well, time for a course correction. She once again fired a micro bolt from her blaster, aiming just above the wookie’s left ear. “RRRROOOOWWWR!!!”, a scream of primal rage echoed across the cavern as the shaggy figure turned its path slightly and finally spotted Rela standing stock still, with her blaster still in her hand. The Wookie’s speed increased as it approached, bounding over the scattered piles of debris, its angry growling that punctuated its strides could be heard even at Rela’s distance. When the approaching figure was close enough to be seen from his vantage-point on the ground, Kason’s eyes widened slightly in surprise and concern. “Um...Rela, you do know what you’re doing...don’t you?” he asked, his voice more than a little bit strained, “I really don’t think that I’m in any kind of condition to fight off an angry Wookie.” The tall shaggy form was bounding even closer, both youngsters could hear its deep, guttural growling and occasional howl of anger. It’s definitely headed directly for Rela, Kason thought to himself, almost in panic, I’ve got to help her, that Wookie’s gonna tear her apart, what could she be thinking? He pushed himself up off the cavern floor and slowly stood up, his legs quivering with fatigue. He took one agonizing step forward and his knees buckled beneath him, sending him sprawling to the floor once again. Kason could only watch in horror as the Wookie ran past him as if he wasn’t even there. It reached out for Rela’s slight form and grabbed her in its huge, powerful hands. It swept her high up into the air with its massive arms, then brought her close in to it’s own body and...planted a big kiss right on the center of Rela’s forehead. HUH?!?!?! Kason thought as his mouth dropped open in surprise. His confusion only increased as he saw Rela wrap her arms around the Wookie’s neck and give it, her Kason’s mind told him, a heartfelt hug. {Little Rela}, the Wookie growled at the young human woman she held in her arms like a child, {how you’ve grown! I haven’t seen you in a gundark’s age. What are you doing so far out on the rim?} “Oh, a little of this...a little of that,” Rela replied in her usual evasive manner. She gave a close approximation of her usual impish smile, but evidently the Wookie knew her too well to be deceived. {My dear child}, crooned the Wookie, concern evident in her dark brown eyes, {whatever has happened to you?} “Too much to tell right now,” Rela almost sobbed, her eyes brimming with tears again, “I’ll tell you later, but for now we need to get out of here. We have a ship, but don’t know if we have a pilot. I’ve got one unconscious friend, and an exhausted Jedi apprentice who can barely hold his own head up. Will you help?” {Of course, dear child}, the Wookie replied softly, {truth to tell, I was looking for a way out of here myself. And besides, your friend Qui Gon would ship my scalp to Mandalore himself if I refused you.} The Wookie gave a deep grumbling chuckle. “Ummm, S’cuse me,” Kason interrupted from his place on the floor, “could someone tell me what’s going on here?” “Oh! Sorry,” Rela replied hurriedly as the Wookie placed her gently back on her own feet, “Kason, this is Hrruggla. Hrruggla, this is Kason. And the unconscious guy over there is Vicetta Mermil. Hrruggla and her family took care of me for a while, um...when for a while I was unable to take care of myself.” {You travel in auspicious company these days little Rela}, Hrruggla whuffed gently, {do apprentice Jedi no longer travel in the company of a teacher?} Kason’s quick intake of breath belied his calm exterior and Hrruggla quickly fixed him with her penetrating gaze. {Ahh, young Jedi. I think I understand what has gone on here. My apologies for waking your pain anew.} “I...I just don’t want to talk about it,” Kason replied shortly, his voice muffled and his emerald eyes shining with new tears, “I just want to forget...no, I want to remember, but just not now.” {Young Jedi}, Hrruggla spoke softly to him, her furred hand cupping his chin gently and forcing him to look into her caring brown eyes, {memories are not glass treasures to be kept locked within a box...they are bright ribbons to be hung in the wind. I do not think that what your master left behind was meant to be kept secret or hidden. It was meant to be shared.} Kason closed his eyes against further tears as he pictured his master. A flawless, silver-haired vision as ephemeral as smoke. He knew the memory would always be there, just at the edges of his thinking. {Now then}, the Wookie said with vigor as she stood up and looked again at Rela, {time for us to get to this ship of yours, where is it?} “It’s not really mine,” Rela replied softly, she too had been touched by Hrruggla’s statements, “it’s a courier vessel, just over there.” She raised her right hand and pointed at the scarlet colored vessel standing barely twenty meters away. {Nice}, Hrruggla murmured, then turned her attention back to Kason, {young Jedi, can you walk?} “I think...” Kason made an attempt to stand and fell again. {Not.} Hrruggla stooped low and picked up the still unconscious form of Mermil and draped him over her left shoulders like a sack of chaffa, then reached down for Kason with her right hand and pulled him into a firm embrace as if she were carrying an infant. {Off we go then}, she growled, {Rela, you lead the way.} They made their way unchallenged to the hatch of the courier vessel, whether due to Hrruggla’s imposing presence or the continuing sound of falling debris, Rela wasn’t sure. “Kason,” Rela called over her shoulder, “what’s the code to open the hatch?” “Huh?” Kason replied, rousing from his half doze in the Wookie’s arms, “I’m not sure...Charsa always took care of that.” Rela came very close to losing her composure just then, but she closed her eyes and slowly counted to ten, then did it again for good measure. “Do you mean to tell me,” she said in a soft, dangerously measured voice, “that we are finally on the doorstep of the ship that will get us out of here...and you have no flippin’ clue of how to get inside?” “I didn’t really ever pay that much attention to...”Kason stammered, “wait...” In a small part of his mind he could hear Charsa’s voice whispering to him, speaking letters and numerals, he repeated all of what he ‘heard’ out loud and could see Rela punching in the code as he spoke. He closed his eyes in relief when the hatch irised open to allow them entry. Rela darted into the softly illuminated interior of the ship with Hrruggla one step behind. {Rela}, the Wookie said sharply, {get to the bridge and warm up the engines while I put these two someplace safe.} Kason could feel the soothing, thrumming sound of the ships engines warming up through the surface of the deeply padded shock couch as Hrruggla strapped him in. {Just in case we have to make any sudden maneuvers}, she warned as she turned and strapped Mermil’s still body in as well, {just try to relax.} He closed his eyes in hopes that the engines would cooperate as he sensed the Wookie leave the cabin on her way to the bridge. Kason smiled to himself when he heard Rela’s cheer of delight as the deep roar of the ship’s engines coming online and the repulsor lifts activated. {We’re outa here!}, Hrruggla roared in triumph. We’re going to make it, Kason thought as he felt the ship’s bulk rise around him, and begin to move forward. The -----signature----- ACCIO FIREBOLT!!!
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Jedi Gryph Grin Registered: Sep '99	Date Posted: 4/18/00 8:55pm Subject: Re: Divided we fall. A sorta JA fanfic.
	Where's my post??? -----signature----- ACCIO FIREBOLT!!!
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Kit' Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Oct '99	Date Posted: 4/18/00 10:01pm Subject: Re: Divided we fall. A sorta JA fanfic.
	POST MORE!!!!!!! NOW!!!!!!!! Kithera -----signature----- Join the insanity http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/27996678 * One bad day and a temper tantrum does not a dark Jedi make! http://fanfic.theforce.net/fanfic.asp?action=view&ID=1060
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Jane Jinn Registered: Jan '00	Date Posted: 4/19/00 2:41am Subject: Re: Divided we fall. A sorta JA fanfic.
	"...memories...are bright ribbons to be hung in the wind..." Excellent line! Good action! It was also very believable, the way Kason didn't know the code to open the ship because Charsa always took care of that. Good idea with the Wookie subtitles, too. And the way that Hrruggla knows that Qui-Gon would send her scalp to Mandalore himself if she let anything happen to Rela. All in all, another excellent part of a completely excellent story! Keep up the great work! -----signature----- Mostly retired now Just making the occasional guest appearance
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HealerLeona Registered: Jan '00	Date Posted: 4/19/00 7:55am Subject: Re: Divided we fall. A sorta JA fanfic.
	Quite the surprise when the wookie turned out to be a friend, but I should have expected the unexpected with Rela. You keep mentioning being almost done and it's making me sad. I hope you'll have another story, a sequel perhaps.
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mouse2 Registered: Oct '99	Date Posted: 4/19/00 9:16am Subject: Re: Divided we fall. A sorta JA fanfic.
	WOO! HOO! That was soooo COOOOOOLLLLL!!!!!!!! cool.gif cool.gif Post more! NOW! Or I will make you watch Mini-Mouse after you fed her all that candy! -----signature----- Want to know what ANTAR and TLST are? Visit Hell's Chance! http://www.hellschancecantina.com Proud Master to Lola64! I've gone into lurking mode... If you need me feel free to PM me...
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Jedi Gryph Grin Registered: Sep '99	Date Posted: 4/19/00 7:41pm Subject: Re: Divided we fall. A sorta JA fanfic.
	Next post is in the works, I had an unbelieveably nasty day at work, so I'm running a bit behind. Thanks for the enthusiasm Kit'. Jane Jinn, the 'memories' part touched me too, alas, it's not 100% mine, I read something similar in a book and modified it to fit in here. Thanks though. And HealerLeona, a sequel? Hmmmmmm... Fear not, a new post will be here soon. Thanks for all of your support. -----signature----- ACCIO FIREBOLT!!!
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mouse2 Registered: Oct '99	Date Posted: 4/20/00 11:10am Subject: Re: Divided we fall. A sorta JA fanfic.
	upity up up upity up! -----signature----- Want to know what ANTAR and TLST are? Visit Hell's Chance! http://www.hellschancecantina.com Proud Master to Lola64! I've gone into lurking mode... If you need me feel free to PM me...
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Jedi Gryph Grin Registered: Sep '99	Date Posted: 4/21/00 9:26pm Subject: Re: Divided we fall. A sorta JA fanfic.
	Just sending this back up so it doesn't dribble off the edge of page 4. Post is almost finished, I'll have it up soon. -----signature----- ACCIO FIREBOLT!!!
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Kit' Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Oct '99	Date Posted: 4/21/00 9:34pm Subject: Re: Divided we fall. A sorta JA fanfic.
	More soon Gryph, please. Kithera -----signature----- Join the insanity http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/27996678 * One bad day and a temper tantrum does not a dark Jedi make! http://fanfic.theforce.net/fanfic.asp?action=view&ID=1060
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Jedi Gryph Grin Registered: Sep '99	Date Posted: 4/23/00 1:31am Subject: Re: Divided we fall. A sorta JA fanfic.
	Sorry for the delay, my brain seems to have stopped working. sigh Here's a short bit. ******** The sun was sinking slowly past the distant horizon as Qui Gon and Obi Wan stood on a high balcony along with Countess Neila gazing upwards at the approaching ships that glided through the air in a corkscrew pattern, coming in to land on the tarmac before the city gates. There were easily a hundred airborne ships visible, the proximity beacons on their tail fins blinking fitfully amid the slowly emerging stars of the early evening. “A beautiful sight, don’t you think?” the Countess commented, her gaze still following the graceful paths of the descending ships, “but I guess this sort of thing is pretty common to you.” “The beginning of a new future is never a common thing,” Qui Gon answered in a deep, soothing voice, “and I think you’ve began a good one here.” The three of them, standing on the balcony of one of the tallest towers of the city continued to watch the downward spiraling pattern of the approaching spacecraft. Neila occasionally murmured aloud with appreciation of the airborne maneuvers, while Obi Wan and his Master scanned the multitude of ships with their minds, trying to find some hint of presence from their fellow Jedi. “Master,” Obi Wan commented quietly to Qui Gon, “I can feel nothing of their presence. Do you think Master Charsa and Kason may have not...” “Patience, Obi Wan,” Qui Gon interrupted his padawan in mid-sentence, “there are too many distraught life forms within the arriving ships to sort all of the life signatures out. Emotions and fear are running rampant among the refugees of Llakret. For the meantime, we must wait.” “Am I to understand that you had ‘friends’ present on Llakret?” Neila asked, one of her eyebrows arched elegantly in suspicious inquiry, “could they have possibly caused this situation. It certainly sounds like a rather convenient plan to take control of both the moon Llakret and Osiris at the same time.” “I assure you Madame,” Qui Gon replied with a slight chill in the tone of his voice, “we Jedi do not seek personal gain. We are protectors and peacekeepers, nothing more.” Neila raised her hands before her with palms up, and smiled slightly, “I believe you Master Jedi,” she said softly, “I only ask the question because I am sure the subject will come up again when the Congress next meets. I must warn you that there will be questions asked that may not be comfortable, especially about the young woman who attacked Lemur using one of your weapons.” She sighed softly, and looked again at the spacecraft that were spiraling in to land on her once isolated planet, then returned her gaze to Qui Gon’s, “most of us despised Lemur, and hated his tyrannical ways. But, there are some among the Council who became very rich because of his reign, they will be the ones who challenge you...and those of us who believe in this new beginning.” “I understand,” Qui Gon replied, “we will be wary. My thanks for your warning, Obi Wan and I will be especially vigilant...” “Master!” Obi Wan interrupted with a shout, his voice filled with joy as he pointed at one of the uppermost of the ships in the procession, “there it is!! They must be okay!” Qui Gon’s gaze followed the direction indicated by his padawan. Indeed, in the high reaches of the atmosphere of Osiris he saw the unmistakable scarlet colored needle-like bulk of a courier vessel. Is it ours though?, he thought as he tried to scan it for any familiar presence, too far away and too much interference to tell for sure. -----signature----- ACCIO FIREBOLT!!!
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Alli-Wan Registered: Dec '99	Date Posted: 4/23/00 2:05am Subject: Re: Divided we fall. A sorta JA fanfic.
	<BLOCKQUOTE><font size="1" face="Geneva,Verdana, Arial">quote:</font><HR>Originally posted by Jedi Gryph Grin: Sorry for the delay, my brain seems to have stopped working. Happened to me years ago. Sorry, I've been lurking. Too much to do. Your story continues to be excellent. The depiction of Charsa and Kason was excellent, in both life and death. Awaiting more, but will be sad when the tale ends. --AWK -----signature----- “And occasionally, a handkerchief comes out to wipe away a tear of laughter. That is my reward. The rest goes to the government.” --Victor Borge http://www.geocities.com/alli_wan Like the truth, I'm still out there.
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Bastet Registered: Dec '99	Date Posted: 4/23/00 3:14am Subject: Re: Divided we fall. A sorta JA fanfic.
	I love this story! I'll hate to see it end, it's been most excellent. -----signature----- "Oh yeah. Ooh, aah. That's how it always starts. But then later there's running, then...screaming." --Dr. Ian Malcolm "Okay fine. Go ahead and scream. Then when that tricycloplots attacks you, don't come crying to me." --Paul Kirby
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Flip A Coin Registered: Feb '00	Date Posted: 4/23/00 7:10pm Subject: Re: Divided we fall. A sorta JA fanfic.
	Well, its like they say..... "All good things must come to an end" ...I suppose. Meanwhile..... POST!!!
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