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2/14/00 1:19pm
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Yeah - Igraine, it was posted last summer. It's a little different than many of the stories on this forum so I thought it would be fun to post it here as a serial piece.
Since this is going pretty well, I will probably post something new soon.
Sorry to leave you hanging over the weekend...
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Then Qui-Gon felt something. It was an incredible sense of release and seeing open spaces for the first time. It was Obi-Wan, seeing the sky for the first time in three days. They’d made it. They were on top of the rock. He burst out of the room and returned to the cockpit.
The Governor and Dash-te now had new worries. Two small fighters showed on the scope and were moving to intercept them.
"Turn around," Qui-Gon said.
Dash-te’s face registered irritation mixed with sadness. "You must give up Master Qui-Gon. They’re dead and we’re under attack."
"I know they’re alive. Turn around. You must make another pass."
The Governor’s face softened in sympathy. "They say the Jedi are very closely bonded," he said to Dash-te as if in explanation.
Qui-Gon was determined. "Dash-te, if you don’t do this now, they will certainly perish. You trusted us enough to call us here. Trust me now when I tell you that this ship must turn around."
Dash-te shook his head. "I shouldn’t have called you. I was envious of you and your training. I did it to satisfy my own curiosity. I’m sorry you’re apprentice had to die for my mistake."
"You will turn around and make another pass. You can decide whether you do it of your own free will," Qui-Gon said.
"Are you threatening us?" The Governor asked.
"No. Make another pass."
The occupants of the cockpit were thrown off balance as the pilot banked the cruiser and set a new course for the forest.
Only a Jedi could climb this, Obi-Wan decided. Reaching for handholds and footholds that were barely there, he climbed higher and higher. The day before he’d been unable to walk without falling, but he banished that thought from his mind. The dizziness was still there, but he channeled his whole focus to ascension. Neither the weight of Menalu on his shoulders, the way the sharp stone wore the skin of his fingertips, nor the fever that still clouded his vision distracted him from his goal. He and the rock were one, a single entity as his head parted the leaves above and he saw the sky.
On the small domed mesa, he and Menalu hugged and shouted with joy. Two ships appeared on the horizon.
"There they are," Obi-Wan said, pointing. They jumped up and down waving their arms, and were shocked when the ships fired on them.
Obi-Wan grabbed Menalu and they scrambled down lower on the rock and into a small crevice.
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Trika_Kenobi
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Whoohoo!!!!
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Marie D Padawannabe
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AAAA!!! NOOOOO!!!
There MUST be more...right?
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mouse2
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NO! You can't stop there!
Please post more soon!
P.S. Get well soon.
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Happy day after valentines all.
Enjoy.
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The Liberation Front fighters, which had appeared on the cruiser’s scopes moments before, now hovered around the rock ahead of them.
"They’re firing on the rock face!" Dash-te shouted.
Qui-Gon turned to the pilot. "Do something," he growled.
Reluctantly the co-pilot manned the controls for ship’s guns and fired on the fighters. Instead of moving to attack, they took off for Talus.
"Not very brave," the Governor commented.
"It doesn’t matter. Move the ship over the rock and lower the ramp," said Qui-Gon.
Obi-Wan and Menalu covered their heads as shards of rock rained down on them. Then, as abruptly as the blaster fire had begun it stopped and the ships moved away.
"Now," Obi-Wan said. They climbed up on what was left of the rock mesa.
As the Talusian Cruiser hovered in close to the rock, Qui-Gon stood on the lowered ramp, holding the hydraulics for purchase. Behind him, nearly the entire population of the ship, which included several physicians and other Talusian officials along with the entourage from Rengaia, waited expectantly. Something in him got much lighter as he watched Obi-Wan climb up onto the rock top and then the Divine Prince after him. They looked worn, but they were both standing, albeit unsteadily. He was close enough that he could see their faces. The Divine Prince merely looked tired, but Obi-Wan’s face was a frightening mask of dried blood and grime. Qui-Gon reached his hand down.
"Hand him up if you can," Qui-Gon called. Obi-Wan lifted the Divine Prince up as high as he could and Qui-Gon caught his hands and dragged him aboard.
"Are you alright your High Holiness?" he asked. The prince nodded.
"Don’t forget Obi-Wan," he said.
Qui-Gon smiled, touched by the boy’s concern. "I won’t," he replied and handed the Divine Prince up into Sheniko’s waiting arms.
Looking back out, Qui-Gon saw that the fighters that had been chased off so easily before were returning in greater numbers. They didn’t have much time. He reached down as far as he could, but he wasn’t low enough to reach Obi-Wan’s outstretched hands. Watching his apprentice swaying on his feet, Qui-Gon wasn’t sure if his apprentice had the strength to jump up onto the ramp.
"I’ll come down," he shouted.
"No, Master. I can do it."
"Are you sure? We haven’t much time." The fighters were much closer now and were beginning to break formation.
"Yes. Trust me."
Qui-Gon backed away to give Obi-Wan room and nodded. Gathering his strength and taking a few steps back, Obi-Wan took a running leap. It was more than he needed and he passed Qui-Gon and slid clumsily into the cargo hold. He dropped to his knees and let gravity take him the rest of the way to the floor. Obi-Wan realized that Menalu hadn’t cured him, but merely given him the strength to continue. The dizziness returned and with it the pain, only it was worse than before. He struggled to draw in a deep breath, but he felt like he was trying to breathe water. Obi-Wan closed his eyes and felt the cool metal deck plates against his cheek and sighed. This was exactly what he’d wanted for so long that the fact that they’d been rescued seemed secondary. So divine was the feeling of coldness and the lack of movement that Obi-Wan silently vowed never to move from this spot.
As the landing ramp rose Qui-Gon returned to the cargo bay. He watched the doctors whisk the Divine Prince away and then he and Obi-Wan were alone, save for a single guard. The way Obi-Wan lay unmoving on the floor concerned him. He knelt beside his apprentice and slowly turned him onto his back. It was like nothing Qui-Gon had ever seen. Blood flowed from Obi-Wan’s nose and mouth. It even trickled from one ear. Obi-Wan opened his eyes slowly and a single red tear fell to the floor. For a moment, Qui-Gon was at a loss for what to do.
His padawan stirred and tried to speak. Fresh blood trickled from the corner of his mouth. Obi-Wan was in a great deal of pain and Qui-Gon tried to speak to his mind, to tell him to relax and that he would be okay, but it was difficult to keep his attention.
It was the guard who spoke up. "I’ve seen it before, " he said. "It’s nearly always fatal. You haven’t much time. Bring him and I’ll show you to the sick bay."
Ignoring Obi-Wan’s weak protests Qui-Gon scooped him off the floor. "Show me," he said.
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Jane Jinn
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2/15/00 4:17pm
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What! Menalu did not cure him? Cripes, what a cliffhanger! You're turning into a regular little Lwyn'nya here, do you know that?
My enthusiasm for this story just went up another notch, or even two! Keep up the great work!
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Trika_Kenobi
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My enthusiasm went up another 20 notches! This story rocks the world!
Trika Kenobi
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Marie D Padawannabe
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KEEP GOING!!!!
KEEP GOING!!!
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AAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!
You stop there! You must post! You are Obi-Wan's only hope! Please post!
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2/17/00 6:12pm
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Sorry I was away. Here's a bit more.
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The sick bay was small and seemed bursting with people. The locus of the activity was around the Divine Prince who lay on one of the narrow beds. He sat up when Qui-Gon entered. From the way everybody was being thrown around the room, Qui-Gon could tell that the cruiser was now giving chase as the fighters closed in around it.
"Help him," the Divine Prince demanded.
Qui-Gon attempted to lay Obi-Wan down on one of the free beds when the ship bucked so violently that it threw them both on the floor. He stood up as one of the physicians reluctantly turned from the throng to help him lift Obi-Wan onto the bed.
"Why don’t we fire back?" Qui-Gon asked. The ship bucked and rolled again. This time Qui-Gon was prepared and kept Obi-Wan from hitting the floor a second time.
"Those are Talusian fighters and this is a Talusian ship. They won’t fire on their fellow pilots," Governor Laoul said.
"Even if their fellow pilots fire on us," Qui-Gon said. And then as abruptly as it started, the bucking stopped and the ship flew smoothly.
Visibly relieved, the physician moved to Obi-Wan’s side. He looked into his eyes and felt his forehead. Then he checked a few instruments and looked up at Qui-Gon.
"I’m sorry," the physician said, "It’s in the advanced stages. He’s bleeding internally. There’s nothing I can do."
Qui-Gon felt like he’d been stung. He was speechless. It was too much. He rested one hand on Obi-Wan’s shoulder and looked down at his apprentice. So much pain and confusion. He didn’t even know what was wrong with him.
Before Qui-Gon could think of something to say, Sheniko stepped to his side. She looked at the doctor with narrowed eyes. "How could you say such a thing to this man who loves him like a father does a child? You haven’t even tried to help. Go away." Surprised, the physician took a step backward. Qui-Gon couldn’t help but be amused by the way Sheniko shooed the doctor away with her hands like he was an annoying gnat.
She returned to the bed and pressed her palm against Obi-Wan’s forehead. He swallowed and opened his eyes. "You’re safe," Sheniko said to him.
Staring up at her with feverish eyes, he said, "We entrust the spirit to the love advocated."
Sheniko smiled and clasped his bloody cloth-wrapped hands between her slender fingers. "Very good, Obi-Wan. Did His High Holiness teach you that?" she asked.
"Menalu," he answered.
Sheniko put her finger to her lips. Then she leaned down and whispered at length in his ear. Obi-Wan listened intently and then nodded when she was done. He closed his eyes and sighed.
"What did you tell him?" Qui-Gon asked.
Sheniko smiled enigmatically. "Perhaps when he’s well enough, he’ll tell you," she said.
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You've been taking lessons from the Mistress of Cliffhangers haven't you, Hmmmm?
Great story!!
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I ah don't know what to say execpt....
*with a small voice*
More please?
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Marie D Padawannabe
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Man....why do I need the REAL JA books?!
This stuff is great! Um....there's gotta be
more around here somewhere...right?
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Trika_Kenobi
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No, see...this is really the mistress of cliffhangers writing this in another name...I know it!
Great post, Lwyn'nya! LOL...
Trika Kenobi
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You guys think I'm someone else?
That's very silly.
Thanks for the JA nod Marie. I delibrately wrote this to fit in with the style of the JA books. (Well, JA 1 and 2 anyway...)
And all cliff hangers must eventually be resolved, so, back to the regularly scheduled civil unrest in progress.
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The ship was once again parked near the outskirts of Talus City. Their fighter escort had followed them all the way down and now Qui-Gon could occasionally hear one buzz by. He sat in a small anteroom outside the sickbay. He had done so much waiting on this mission. He felt restless, but had been unable to remain in the room as Sheniko worked on healing Obi-Wan.
From his brief encounter with her skill days before, he knew her to be capable. He also knew that the Yebbi’s skill in the healing arts far exceeded anything he’d seen before. He trusted her. But, Qui-Gon had found it difficult to block out the agony and fear that his apprentice broadcast. The fact that he was delirious with fever only made the emotions more confused and extreme. As Qui-Gon grew closer to his apprentice, just as he found it difficult to keep his subconscious from Obi-Wan, he also found it increasingly difficult to block Obi-Wan from his mind. He’d tried to calm his apprentice and even put him to sleep, but Qui-Gon was aware that his presence distracted Sheniko. Finally Qui-Gon had excused himself and now he waited.
Sheniko let herself into the room quietly and sat down beside him.
"Obi-Wan has been poisoned by a tree known as ‘Rubu Riekee’. Roughly translated it means, ‘tree of bad luck,’" she said. Qui-Gon nodded. That was certainly a good name for it.
Sheniko continued. "The tree has very delicate leaves that wither and die if they are touched. To protect itself, it developed a powerful defense. The springy branches snap back with great force and impale anyone who comes near with sharp thorns. The thorns carry one of the most toxic poisons known on this planet. They inject it deep into the body. It causes a hemorrhagic fever. The cell walls break down and eventually the body bleeds to death. It is most serious."
"Is there an antidote?"
"Yes. We’ve given it to Obi-Wan, but he has lost a lot of blood. Most of the damage has been done. The most distinct symptom, the bleeding from the mucous membranes, the eyes and nose, is frightening to see, but not so threatening as internal bleeding. Many people drown in their own blood at this stage."
"He’s going to be all right, though," Qui-Gon said.
"I think so. He’s strong. He shouldn’t have been able to climb that rock. I believe he will recover."
Qui-Gon nodded in relief. Then he remembered. "How is His High Holiness?" he asked.
Sheniko smiled warmly. "He will make a full recovery. Your apprentice is quite a medic."
Qui-Gon laughed. "Obi-Wan? He has much to learn when it comes to healing."
"He set the fracture in His High Holiness’ leg. It is healing well. Perhaps you should pay better attention to what he already knows and not what he still has to learn," she said. "The Divine Prince has been moved into another room. Obi-Wan could use a friend to keep him company."
Qui-Gon smiled, impressed by her compassion and wisdom, and bowed his head slightly. "You have been very helpful," he said.
"You Jedi are not at all what I expected," Sheniko said. "Come, Obi-Wan is waiting." She took Qui-Gon’s arm and led him from the room.
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