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Norbooboo
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4/1/00 11:30pm
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This is great. Your writing is so suspenseful. You are doing such a great job of drawing us in bit by bit. Wait is that a good thing. The state of my house would say not. Thanks for the great story!!
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Jedi Milan-Kenobi
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4/1/00 11:46pm
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Before I post the next segment I would like to get a quick poll going but email me with your answer. What should I do with Portia? Anyway back to the story:
Portia walked to the room where they held Obi-Wan. She stood before the door trying to calm herself before she went in. It wouldn't help him any if she was a nervous wreck. Her hand reached for the door handle but Mace Windu took it before it could be reached. "I must warn you." He told her.
"What?" Portia asked him.
"If he attempts to attack you again...you can no longer supervise him." Mace said.
"I knew there was a catch." She twisted out of Mace's grasped and opend the door. Like the day before he was curled up tightly on the floor. Portia could notice that he was shivering like mad. She took off her pilot jacket and held it away from her expressing that she wanted to give it to him. With no response from him she walked over to him and put it over his shoulders. He looked at her with his blue eyes that wanted to make Portia weep looking into them. But suddenly, he spoke.
"Th...thank you." Obi-Wan told her. Portia sat next to him. This threw Obi-Wan off that she would sit next to him. "Wh..."
"What?" Portia asked.
"Why are you sitting next to me?" He asked almost child-like. "Aren't you afraid?" Portia pulled her right armsleve up to reveal a tattoo of numbers and letters. Obi-Wan jumped back from her. "You? You..."
"I've been there Obi-Wan." Obi-Wan looked almost shocked. "The tests, the drugs, the pain..."
"Stop!" He stood up and backed into a corner. His padawan braid whiped back and forth as he shook his head no. Not believing what was happening.
"I know it hurts to think about it." Portia stood up cautiously. "I know what happend to you Obi-Wan. It happend to me." Obi-Wan locked eyes with her and tears were streaming down his face.
"I was so scared." He admitted. He was giving into her. "I never..."
"Felt that kinda pain before." She finished. "You've never seen that kind of evil." He nodded as he slumped back down to floor, she joined him. "You were taken by a group of men in black."
"They knocked me out cold."
"They draged you to their labortory." Portia remembered way too clearly. "They put you in a cage. They treat you like an animal."
"You wish that it's just a nightmare." He added. "That you would wake up warm and safe in your room. But when you wake up..."
"The nightmare is still there." Portia herself was now shivering. Because of his outburst the put Obi-Wan into a straight jacket. Obi-Wan was as scared as she was. "Let me help you Obi-Wan."
Obi-Wan looked into Portia's stormy grey eyes. He looked into her mind to see if she was speaking the truth, she was. He sighed. "I welcome your help Portia." Obi-Wan put his head into Portia's shoulder and began to weep sliently. "Please help me."
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To be continued...:P
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Jedi Milan-Kenobi
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4/2/00 12:19am
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I am so glad that people like this! I am so happy. With TPM on video Tuesday and now this! HEhe...I will post more soon..
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Jane Jinn
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Jedi Milan-Kenobi
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4/2/00 12:08pm
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Jane Jinn...
I like your choices, I'll post later. eek.gif
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JSkywalker
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You've got me hooked! What happened to poor Obi-Wan???? Qui-Gon didn't do anything to him, did he? Ahhhhhhhhh, Post soon!
Jess
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Princess Jedi
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ooooo...cool story! Keep going!
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Jane Jinn
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Personally, I vote for H. She falls madly in love with Qui-Gon, they have Obi-Wan committed, then they flee the planet and live happily ever after.
There Jane Jinn thinks to herself, rubbing her hands together in glee, if that doesn't get a reaction out of her, nothing will!
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light_sabe_r
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Qui-Gon is scowling. <see!>
Jedi Milan-Kenobi please write more!
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Jedi Milan-Kenobi
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Hi there! I'm not Milan, I'm just using her computer. I'm ZfileB, and I come in peace!! Sorry, couldn't help it. Milan owed me a favor, so I forced her to let me write w/ her, but no one else! Ya hear?! Or else I get in trouble. And now...
As Obi-Wan's supply of tears ran low Portia untangled herself and got up.
"Don't leave me." Obi-Wan cried in panic
"Don't worry, I'll come back. I need to go collect any information about you that I can find. I'm on your side. I'll be back soon."
"C can you get them to take this jacket off? My arms are tingly."
"No, I can't take the jacket off, then they might know that you are more coherent than they think. But I can make the tingling go away."
Portia knelt by his side and breifly touched his arms throught the jacket. Instantly Obi-Wan could feel his arms again as the soreness of unuse left his muscles. He gazed up at Portia in gratitude.
"I'll be back soon," she whispered "don't go anywhere."
"K"
Portia pressed a light kiss to his forehead and sliped silently from the room as he slid slowly into the void of sleep. As she stole down the silent corrodors of Temple Portia couldn't help but remember the warning she had given herself earlier.*Too late, I've already fallen in love with him.*
As she stepped arround the corner she felt the whoosh of air just soon enough to avoid the blow by tucking herself into a ball and rolling to the other side of her attacker. As she bounded back onto her feet and into a deffensive possition a flame and a glowing red dot was all she saw. But it was what she heard, not what she saw that scared the force out of her.
"You have seen enough Master Kai, you needn't trouble yourself any longer with Kenobi's problems."
Portia's blood ran cold, then hot, then cold again.
"All I seek is the truth."
The truth you seek may very well kill him and get you killed in the crossfire. I advise you for your own safety to back out and stay out."
"I made him a promise, that I would help him."
"What makes you so confident Master Kai? Just because you have traved the same road and ended with your life intact dosen't mean the Kenobi will also. yes Master Kai, I know all about you, there are those that would go so far as to say that I know everything."
At Portias look of utter shock and disbeleif the man who was smoking added.
"And you owe me your life, the only reason that you do still have your life is because of my interferance, you should be thankful."
"Of what," Portia snapped "if you saved me then why didn't you do it sooner? And why don't you save Obi-Wan?"
"Sometines for the good of the flock one sheep must be sacrificed, we all have our own agendas Master Kai, what's on yours?"
With that disturbing question he faded back down the hallway, and was swallowed up by the darkness. As he turned the corner Portia saw the red tip of his Bunta light, and then he was gone. Leaving Portia wondering who he was, how he had gotten past Temple security in the middle of the night, and just what was he doing slinking arround the halls.
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Jane Jinn
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light_sabe_r
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MORE! MORE! MORE! MORE! MORE!!!!!!!!!!
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Jedi Milan-Kenobi
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Ummm yes well let us just say that the man is um... an equivalent of a X-File character... THAT IS ALL I WILL SAY! And don't worry...all questions will be answered. Now...back to the story!
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Jane Jinn
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Jedi Milan-Kenobi
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I will post soon I swear!
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