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Darth Tristeza
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5/2/00 7:28pm
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*jumps up and does happy dance*
go Obi! go Obi! go Obi! WOOO HOOO!!
*looks around*
ahem...uh..I'll sit down now.
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Sith Vegeta
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5/3/00 2:19am
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Yea he did it!!!!
He figured it out!!!!
WAIT, no he didn't!!!!
He's got it backwards!!!!
AH that stupid hunk of a man!!!!
All beauty and no brains!!!!
AH what am I saying????
That shouldn't be in there!!!!
So what if it's ture!!!!
(Can you tell that I've had way to much sugar???? )
Oh, and by the way, before I forget cause I go into Obi-World, POST MORE!!!!
::sings happily It's Obi- World, It's Obi-World, Where Obi-Wan is the only think we see!!!! ::
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light_sabe_r
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5/3/00 3:27am
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Ha ha ha! He stuffed up!
I like where this is heading Keep on writing.
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jeditictac
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5/3/00 9:49pm
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woohoo!!!! excellant post! definately worth the wait. i can hardly contain my excitement for the next post.
~happy dance~
:-D
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Réka
Title: Ventura County CA FF Costumes and Props Expert
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5/4/00 2:49am
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Well, I finally relented and entered the forbidden confines of the fanfic forum, for the express purpose of reading this story. I must say, I am glad I did. Excellent work!
One small nit to pick: I think Qui-Gon would figure out the deception somewhere along the way. Remember, he is the expert in the Living Force, not his padawan. At the very least, he would be much more open to the suggestion that the "queen" is not what she seems to be.
Anywé, feel free to ignore my nitpicking. Carry on, carry on!
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Queen Sabé
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5/4/00 12:53pm
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Réka, thank you for coming! I also appreciate your feedback. I'll try to take care of that in the next post.
I just turned in my big huge costume design project yesterday! I was working on that thing up until the LAST MINUTE!!!! Literally... redface.gif
Anyway, I'll be posting more pretty soon.
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jeditictac
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queen sabe can't wait for the new post. and yay to you for getting done with that project! :-D just felt like saying that
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Queen Sabé
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5/5/00 1:00pm
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Sorry I haven't posted, but I'm now starting to pack to go home for the summer!!!!
I'm also a little stuck plotwise...
I'll do my best to post soon! Thanks for sticking with me!
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Cindé of Naboo
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5/5/00 5:40pm
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Oh!! I love this story!! I've been reading it faithfully, impatiently, and I can't wait to see what happens next Keep up the good work!
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Queen Sabé
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5/6/00 12:23am
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Okay, here is the next installment. I feel like I'm going over a rough spot, so please critique this segment! And be honest! Thank you.
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Her eyes widened and she opened her mouth to speak, but couldn’t. There was no need for her to do so, for Obi-Wan interrupted.
"So which one of you young ladies is actually the Queen?"
A sense of failure overwhelmed her as she realized that there was nothing she could do to restore the scheme now and her cheeks darkened with shame. I ought to have been
more alert. I let my fatigue get the best of me. His good-natured laugh reddened her
cheeks further.
"Don’t be so hard on yourself. You didn’t fail at anything. Remember that Jedi are a little more perceptive of human nature than most people."
"If you Jedi are so perceptive then how come you didn’t figure it out earlier," she asked with a slight sneer--she had very little to strike back with at this point. Obi-Wan only smiled again.
"I admit that I had my suspicions...ever since your reprimand."
Her eyes narrowed a little at this, but he continued.
"Of course, Qui-Gon never witnessed that particular incident and even though I presented the idea to him, he seemed distracted. This business with Anakin . . .," he trailed off.
"Anakin?"
Obi-Wan looked at her face...her lovely face...and felt that he could trust her.
"I do not agree with my Master’s desire to train the boy."
Surprised, Sabé replied,
"Why not?"
"There just something about him that disturbs me. I feel that training him would be dangerous."
"And not training him?"
Obi-Wan raised an eyebrow at her. She returned his look with one that almost dared him to answer her.
"That, too, could be dangerous," he acknowledged. They were silent. Sabé set her hood down on one of the plush sofas that occupied the room and then sat down herself,
releasing her hair from its tight bun as she did so. She tried to sit up straight but she was so tired... Her foot still ached. Her stomach hurt--she had eaten very little throughout the whole of their journey and she felt the deprivation fully now. Obi-Wan had followed her to the couch and was now seated at a respectable distance from the young woman. Their minds seemed to be linked: he could feel what she felt. Could she feel his emotions? his doubts about the boy? his fears? Did she have even the slightest hint of what he felt for her? Stop it! he told himself. You’re being ridiculous. He reminded himself of
his solitary night on Tatooine, circling the gleaming Marie Celeste. Forget it. How?
A sudden weight on his shoulder brought him out of his reverie. Sabé had slumped against
his shoulder, exhaustion flowing from her. She was likewise startled and jumped up,
fatigue forgotten, and mumbled her apologies. Sabé stared at the hem of her dress, cheeks
flaming as he stood up beside her. When she looked up at him, she was surprised at the
look on his face: embarrassment. She had expected one of his characteristic smirks or
perhaps an amused laugh, but no...she could see his jaw clenched tightly, as if he were
trying to quell the wave of red creeping up from beneath his tunic. A lump was rising in
her throat and she knew she would cry at the slightest provocation. Her heart almost hurt
as she thought of him, then she was angry at herself for behaving like a child. To be so
upset over a man! Ridiculous she told herself.
"It’s not ridiculous," said Obi-Wan. Sabé turned away and wiped at the tears spilling from her eyes with the velvet sleeve of her gown.
"Maybe not, but it is impossible."
"What?"
She didn’t go on. If he didn’t know, she wasn’t going to tell him. Obi-Wan stepped closer and placed his hand on her arm--he knew. A relationship. He had only asked to be sure. If she was thinking of something else, he certainly didn’t want to reveal his feelings.
The room was quiet but for Sabé’s violent sniffing as she tried to contain her tears. The only light came from the dim lamps that illuminated the doorway and from the glow of the hundreds of brightly lit buildings outside the window. She turned to face him, half because she wanted to and half because he had pulled her around lightly by the arm he held. He was taller than she, by at least a foot. Obi-Wan didn’t allow that to stop him, however. One hand remained on her arm while the other brushed her moistened face gently with rough fingertips, callused from years of rigorous physical training. Her eyes were full of uncertainty. What would this lead to? Neither had any idea but "nothing" was furthest from their minds. Sabé placed her hands on his arms. As the hand on her face curved around to tangle its fingers in her hair, she lifted herself onto her toes, the pain in her foot a distant shadow. He bent down slowly. Their lips met in a soft and gentle kiss and increased in intensity as each one allowed their pent-up feelings to surface. A commlink--Obi-Wan’s--shattered the moment, to the surprise and disappointment of both. Obi-Wan broke the kiss, resting his forehead on Sabé’s, breathing deeply. One more deep breath and he could answer it calmly. Qui-Gon had sent for Obi-Wan--the Council would be finished with Anakin any moment.
"I must go," he said quietly. She nodded and walked with him to the door. They paused
before it for a moment and Sabé quickly rose to meet his lips again in one more brief
embrace. He left and she was alone in the dark apartment.
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Alderaan21
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Date Posted:
5/6/00 11:55pm
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I can't believe I haven't read this story before now! (Even though you referenced me on the first page...) Cute story so far... spent the last hour or so reading it... but then anything Sabé/Obi I like. Course, QS already knows that, don't you?
Just one thing... how old is Sabé supposed to be in this? Until this last post I'd been under the impression Sabé was around 15... but then there she goes, kissing Obi-Wan! Confusing me! How dare she.
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Sith Vegeta
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5/7/00 11:04pm
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Ah!!!! You can't stop there!!!! You have to keep going, we need more than that, you can't leave us hanging!!!!
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Queen Sabé
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5/8/00 12:28am
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Thanks for your comments, guys!
I was feeling a little off--I'm glad you liked it.
Just to clear things up:
Sabé - 17
Obi-Wan - 23
Qui-Gon - 50
Amidala - 14
Rabé - 15
Eirtaé - 15
Saché - 12
Yané - 12
I just sorta made those up...
(except Amidala)
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Sith Vegeta
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5/10/00 2:02am
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More please.
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Queen Sabé
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Date Posted:
5/12/00 1:35am
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Hi all! I hope you haven't given up on my story... I am now at home and have been doing a lot of unpacking. I will post tomorrow night and then I'll be on vacation for several days. I'll try to have the conclusion for you when I get home.
Thanks again for reading!
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