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Joguy90
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Date Posted:
4/21/00 12:46pm
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Add on story for all of you
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Herman Snerd
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I've never had a sucessful round robin story. I was just thinking about a story of a bunch of young Jedi who are training in a temple long ago when there were many Sith. The Sith could invade and the Jedi could meat each other, form friendships, stuff like that. It's based on a dream I had about fighting Darth Maul a subconsious remake of Episode I. Make up your own characters and stuff. You could make up people that aren't Jedi. Just help me finally have a succesful add on story! I think this could be fun for you people too. Please reply.
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13 year old Rypic Hisha walked through the Jedi temple. The old pillars and painting facinated him. He looked into one of the huge rooms where a fire was burning twenty feet tall. Even though it was summer, the temple was on a mountain and it was rather cold. He knew the fires weren't for warming up but were a thing to be respected. He was too cold so decided to get toasty by the fire. He pulled his robes around him and sat down, pretzel style. Weird thing had happened that day and he didn't know why. Something felt weird...like someone was betraying him or an evil presence was nearby. Whenever he was scared he pulled out his saber and imagined suprising his enemy at how good he was. He wasn't suppsoed to thinka bout such things but just couldn't help it. He senced something aproaching from behind him. If it was a Jedi Master, he'd need to explain himself. He knew Jedi apprentices practiced around the fire with saber so he pulled out his saber...
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Sci Michaels
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4/24/00 12:26am
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"Young human Knights are always so quick with their lightsabers," the newcomer croaked in a nasal sounding voice. He was an Eeteasian, and like most of his race, was not wearing any clothing on his brown body, and thus did not appear to have a lightsaber.
Rypic knew that Eeteasians had slightly thicker skins than humans, but even so, this one should be freezing, but he appeared to not notice the temperature.
The Eeteasian extended his three-fingered hand for a handshake, a gesture that somehow looked very strange coming from him. "My name is Ree-Sez. What is yours?"
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Taryn
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4/24/00 1:09am
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A cloaked being approached the fire, feeling drawn to it like a Tusken Raider from Tatooine to water. She saw there were two beings near the fire already, and subconciously checked the lightsaber strapped between her long, thin, silvery-blue wings folded down beneath her brown cloak, comforted by the feel of it.
She sent the Force out toward the two beings, and felt they were no threat. As she got closer to the warmth of the fire, she lowered her hood, revealing her pale blue face, topped with hair to match her wings.
She neared the fire, carefully watching everything around her, thinking over what she had been through, supressing the fear she had felt as it tried to rise again to the surface. The Sith were so powerful. If her Master had only had wings like herself...
A loud snap came from the fire, and the startled girl lept into the sky, drifting above where she had just been. Seeing there was no threat, that it was mearly the fire popping, she settled back to the ground.
"I've got to calm down." she thought to herself. "I'm even more flighty than other fairies."
[This message has been edited by Taryn (edited 04-28-2000).]
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Jedi Knight Anakin
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4/24/00 1:33pm
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I love add on stories. Lucas Southring is the father of Anakin Southring, if anyone has read any of the other run-ons I contribute to. He was also best friends with Rohan, Anakin's master. It's a longo tale. I'm making a fan movie that will be two trilogies, focusing on Lucas and Anakin.
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34 year old Lucas Southring strode down the halls of the Jedi Temple, checking everything around him with his second eyes, the Force. He was a strong built man, with kind, green eyes and long brown hair that fell over his shoulders. He had a slight beard, and he preferred to keep it that way. His lightsaber was a mix of many designs, mostly exotic, and he wielded it with power and grace unrivaled by anyone in the Jedi Order. But he never wanted to brag. He found a perfect balance between humility and pride, and he was satisfied with that.
In a small side room of the temple, he spotted a cozy looking fire burning, with three beings around it. He glided into the room and looked around. He spotted the three beings, and, with the aid of the Force, knew they were of his kind, Jedi. He walked to the side of the fire, careful not to disturb the Jedi around it.
He sat down next to the young boy. He did not notice him at first, but he eventually turned around and smiled at Lucas.
"You know..." Lucas started. He always felt a need to tell stories of his travels around a fire. The beings turned to look at him. Then he started on a story of his travels on Aldeeran and Malastre, and the boy's eyes grew wider. And after he had finished and answered all of the boy's questions, he bowed and walked back into the hall.
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Taryn
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4/25/00 2:11am
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Young Cirani Hancas, scolded herself for being so jumpy. A Padawan would not be that way, she knew, and she sat, begining a calming exercise she had learned. Just as she found her center of calm, a being approached.
The Fairy lept up, staying on the ground, this time, and her hand reached for the hilt of her lightsaber dangling from her hip.
Once she realized the being was no threat, she began to relax a bit more, again.
The being began to tell stories, durring which Cirani meditated. She had to come to terms with what had happened. She needed to see that she was not to blame. That she and her Master fought at their best, but the Sith had been better.
She reached behind her back, feeling her Master's lightsaber securely in place.
"Oh, Master." She said sadly, and the tears began to flow.
"Allow yourself release, Padawan. When you cannot control your emotions, sometimes you just need to release them. Just be sure you never take it out on another being."
She remembered her master telling her these things long ago, but now, it was a comfort. A knowledge that it was okay to cry.
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Sci Michaels
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4/25/00 1:19pm
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Ree-Sez stretched out his hand and placed it on the fairy's shoulder. Instead of causing her to jump again, she found it comforting. The tip of his finger glowed with a soft, orange light. He didn't say anything, but she knew he understood.
***BTW, Joguy, you said you wanted this story when there were a lot of Sith, right? Before Darth Bane? About 2000 years before Phantom Menace?***
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Joguy
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4/25/00 4:05pm
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Odd...I wrote this huge part ot this story and I tried to post as Joguy90 and it said I couldn't. I found this message titled "Young Anakin and Amidala story" or something and I got banned. Somebody else must have posted that message. Does this place have many hackers? I didn't know you could hack this board but I was shocked. Anyway, you guys added on so I can't psot the part I wrote so I guess I'll make up something new...
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Rypic was amazed at everyone who was entering the room. The most odd was the fury creature, Ree-Sez. He had wanted to talk to him and ask why he was here. He appeared to have no lightsaber so he was curious. He had walked off and Rypic decided to be polite and lsiten to the stories of a new comer. When they were finished he quickly walked over to a bright blue light across the fire pit. It was a girl with a blue light surrounding her. She was incredibly beautiful and Rypic couldn't take his eyes off of her. Ree-Sez was standing next to her and Rypic badly wanted to be in his position. He walked up to the two.
"This place sure is filling up. Sorry I didn't get to talk to you. My name is Rypic."
Ree-Sez nodded.
"You don't appear to have any type of Jedi weapon...why are you here?"
Ree-Sez began to explain but Rypic was quickly won over when the blue girl smiled at him. His body listened to Ree-Sez and his mind was on the girl. He used the force to comunicate with her.
"Who are you?"
"I am Cirani Hancas.
"Why are you here?"
"I am a Jedi."
Ree-Sez stopped talking and Rypic looked back at him. Something felt wrong. It was centered around this girl. No...it was something within her...no! It was something by her...
"I sence something is wrong!" blurted out Rypic.
Lucas looked at the young boy and could tell he was getting used to the Force helping him out.
"Master Had-Sai is in trouble...I think," the apprentice paused, "...be careful today. I sence something is wrong in the meeting room. Our masters may be in trouble..."
Cirani shivered remembering her Master's defeat.
"I have to hurry," said Rypic.
The young padawan called upon Force Speed and quickly dashed out of the room.
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Joguy
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4/25/00 5:49pm
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Jedi Knight Anakin
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4/25/00 7:30pm
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Lucas quickly turned to follow the boy who darted out the door.
'If his master is in trouble, I must help...'
As Anakin ran, his green lightsaber blade snapped to life. He twirled it as he ran down the uninhabited corridor after the boy, hoping that the boy's master was alright...
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Sci Michaels
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4/25/00 8:18pm
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***Ree-Sez is not furry. Quite the opposite in fact, there is not a hair on his body. I guess you have yet to figure out what an Eeteasian is***
"You don't appear to carry any jedi weapon...why are you here?"
Ree-Sez shook his head. "The weapon does not make the Jedi," he croaked. "I am here because I was invited. I am the Jedi Ree-Sez from Fonome."
As he talked, he could see the young Padawan's attention was diverted to the female Padawan he had been comforting.
He felt a disturbance in the Force at the same time as Rypic. Immediately Rypic ran off, followed by the other human. The Eeteasian looked at Cirani to make sure she was fine, then followed after the humans as fast as his stumpy legs would allow.
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Rypic jumped into the meeting room. Jedi lay around the room and his master stood fighting an odd creature. He had green skin with blue war paint. He wore black robs with an odd hat on his head. His face looked human but he had a breathing mask on. Master Had-Sai blocked the creatures attack. It was a Sith. The Jedi Knight backflipped into the corner of the room. The Sith stretched out his hand and used the Force to pull the Knight into his saber. A ball of anger and suprise burst in Rypic's mind.
"Noo! Aragh!" he yelled as his lgihtsaber flickered into life.
He used his anger, he didn't let the froce help him, he didn't plan his attacks, he only acted.
His saber spun quickly and slammed into the Sith's saber with a loud "bang!". The Sith kicked the apprentice in the stomach. Rypic dug with saber into the floor and spun on it's handle. He caught the Sith's chin with his foot. The creature stretched out his arm and Force Lightning caught Rypic in the stomach and trew him into the corner. In seconds, his robes were in threads. He lifted his hand and threw the teen out the door and into the hallway. Lucas(Anakin?) say the boy hit the wall and slide onto his bottom. The Sith jumped into the hall and flung the apprentice down the hall. Lucas' saber spun and his fist knocked the breathing mask off of the Sith. He coughed and fell to the ground. He stretched out his arm and sucked the energy from the angry Rypic. In a millisecond he was breathing again. This wasn't going to be easy...
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Joguy
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4/26/00 1:53pm
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Joguy
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Jedi Knight Anakin
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Lucas swung his saber again, barely missing the Sith. He ignited his saber again and attacked with a feriocity never seen by Lucas or any Jedi for that matter.
He parried a quick strike to the head, and kicked the Sith in the stomach. He fell back and Lucas gained the advantage. He pressed with all his strength, parrying every strike and delivering a counter-attack a milisecond later.
Every attack from the Sith seemed coordinated with a force that Lucas could only dream of handling. He was tiring out, and the Sith was not even flinching at his attacks.
Finally, he called back to the near unconcious boy without a glance back, for the Sith was relentless in his attacks.
"Run! Run and get help! Hurry!"
He could only pray that the boy heard him.
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4/27/00 2:05am
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Cirani felt comforted by Ree-Sez' touch. It had been so long since she felt truely safe, as she did now, but that did not last long. She watched as one after another, the others in the room rushed out. She reached out with the Force, and felt something that made her wings tremble with fear.
Summoning all her courage, Cirani followed the Force, finding one thing she never wanted to see again. A Sith battling Lucas. Rypic was down, and she heard Lucas call to him to get help.
Cirani realized she must help, and as she came to that conclusion, the Force flowed freely within her. She activates her lightsaber and felt strength form its violet blade, and she flew high, waiting for her chance to attack from above.
When the Sith knocked Lucas backward and he stumbled toward the floor, Cirani dove toward him, kicking the Sith over so Lucas could get up again.
She kept the Sith occupied for a while attacking, flying high, and diving toward him again, and when Lucas returned to the battle, she fought by his side, protecting her fellow Jedi with all her might.
'If I keep him alive, perhaps I will recover from failing to do so with Tahsh.' she thought.
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Rypic was barely awake. The Sith had sucked all his energy from him. He saw Cirani and Lucas battling the Sith. He didn't need to use his own strength, he could just use the force to help them. He shut his eyes and froze the Sith in place for a moment. The two fighting Jedi paused for a moment and the Sith recovered. That didn't work...he needed to help them. He ahd just murdered his master and many others. He must help. He strtched out his hand and a bright light shot into the Sith's chest. Rypic felt his energy return. The Sith used the Force to pull his breathing mask back on and he continued to fight. Rypic backflipped over the Sith and swung with all his might at the Sith's back. To his great suprise, the attack was blocked. Ree-Sez ran up to the fight and watched. He could feel everyone's weapon but he had no physical weapon of his own.
"Rypic, Ree-Sez...get out of here! Run and get help!" yelled Lucas.
"This thing just killed my master, I'm not leaving!"
"Go Rypic! Now!" yelled Cirani as she blocked an attack.
"I'm not leaving!" yelled Rypic.
"Fine, then I'll go!" yelled Cirani.
She took off down the hall and saw the Sith raise his hand. A bright red ball fired at her back. Rypic's reflexs kicked in. He jumped over the Sith. He was shocked as the dark fighter raised his saber. Pain exploded in Rypic's stomach and he slammed into the floor. Cirani pushed the ball back with the force and the Sith dodged it. It blew up the end of the hall and debris flew into the battle. Lucas slid on the lose peices of metal and the Sith barely missed his head.
Rypic put his hand on his side. He was bleeding. The shining, clean floor was turning red.
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