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Jedi Gryph Grin Registered: Sep '99	Date Posted: 5/23/00 10:44pm Subject: Re: Divided we Fall : The Continuation
	Okey dokey, here is the promised dedicated post. I'm not going to re-type all of the people this is for, you can see that a few posts above. Besides, my brain has turned to mush trying to get this thing finished, tho I still think it's kinda iffy. Let me know what you think! ******** Kason came awake to the annoying buzz of an alarm clock perched on his bedside table. He flung his right arm out in the general direction of the grating buzz and swept the offending alarm off the table and onto the floor where it continued its awful noise, but it was now out of reach and Kason realized that he would have to get out of bed if he wanted to do anything about it. Might as well make the best of it, he thought to himself as he pushed his covers back and sat up in bed. The window showed that it was still the pitch black of night outside, though the lack of illumination mattered little to Kason because of the astonishing night vision he possessed. He started to flip the switch of the lamp next to his bed, then stopped. What’s the point? he thought bitterly to himself, it’s not like Charsa is here to stub her toes on something walking around in the dark. Without turning on a light, he strode over and picked up the alarm clock, turning it off as he gently placed it back on the table. He made his way to the fresher and got cleaned up, dressed in his Jedi robes, and completed his preparation by clipping his lightsaber to his belt. He looked around the room as he moved toward the door, making sure he hadn’t forgotten anything since he did not know if he would have a chance to check again before they departed for Coruscant. Satisfied that he had overlooked nothing, he opened the door and stepped into the hallway, making his way to the common room where he would meet up with the others. Qui Gon and Obi Wan were already there, both looking awake and alert, sharing a light breakfast of assorted fruits. They nodded to him in greeting without speaking since their mouths were currently occupied chewing their meal. As Kason joined the two Jedi and helped himself to a couple of melon slices, Hrruggla entered the room and passed immediately to a cupboard and poured a large steaming cup full of caffeinated stimulant. She finally joined the three Jedi and continued to sip gingerly from her steaming mug. A short time later Rela entered the room, yawning and blinking sleep from her eyes. “Good morning,” Kason said to Rela, greeting her as he had all the others. Rela snarled something unintelligible as she, too, went to the cupboard and poured a mug of the hot beverage. “Pssst,” Obi Wan hissed to Kason, his eyes glittering with humor, “be careful, Rela is many things...but a morning person she is not.” Rela glared dangerously at the two Padawans, her eyes glowering at them from just above the rim of her coffee cup. “Yikes,” Kason said back in a mock whisper, just loud enough for everyone to hear, “that’s the truth. And if looks could kill, we’d both be lying on a slab right now.” Rela growled something probably best unheard into her mug, and turned resolutely to stare out of the nearest window at the darkened cityscape. “That’s enough Padawans,” Qui Gon said with what sounded suspiciously like a chuckle in his voice, “I think it best if we all get to the ship and make our departure before the streets become too crowded, so if anyone needs to get anything from their rooms, now is the time to do so.” When several moments had passed and no one made a move, Qui Gon clapped his hands together decisively. “I think we should be on our way. As soon as the City gates open, I’m sure that there will be another influx of refugees. Hopefully we can get there before the gates open and avoid the rush.” He stood up to his full, impressive height and began walking towards the door with both Padawans right on his heels, Rela and Hrruggla bringing up the rear. The early morning air was crisp and cool as the five companions walked briskly down the wide boulevard leading to the main gates of the City, beyond which waited the ship that would transport them back to Coruscant. Even though the sun’s appearance was still some time away, Qui Gon was somewhat surprised at the amount of foot traffic this early in the morning. He watched in bemusement as the people seemed to melt from the shadows and reappear in the small islands of light cast by the evenly spaced streetlamps...only to disappear into the darkness once more. When the companions reached the entrance of the city, the enormous gates were still closed against the nighttime jungle; they would remain so until the first watch arrived to relieve the guards currently on duty. Qui Gon silently motioned for everyone to move off to one side, and they settled in to wait until the time came for the gates to be opened. At the first sound of a hushed conversation, Kason opened his eyes from meditating to find that the first watch had arrived and was evidently getting a report of the evenings events from the night watch. When the exchange was complete, the guards of the night watch saluted smartly, turned on their heels in formation, and marched briskly off into the City. Qui Gon and the others stood and watched in silence as the guards prepared for the daily ritual of opening the protective and ceremonial gates. As the utter blackness of the night sky faded slightly into a rich and intense blue, a deep toned bell began to toll from high atop the City walls themselves, it’s shimmering resonance echoing throughout the city and the environs outside to announce the approach of sunrise, as well as the imminent opening of the City gates. The huge bar that ran horizontally across the inside of the gates and kept them secure began to slide into the very walls themselves and disappeared, evidently moved by some powerful, hidden machine. When the bar was completely retracted, the monolithic gates also began to move, each side swinging ponderously inward like a dam breaking in extreme slow motion, though instead of holding back water, this dam protected the City from the night creatures of the jungle. With an echoing, bone jarring THUD, the massive gates hit their respective bumpers and stopped their momentum, leaving the city open to the world until they were closed again when darkness fell the next night. Since Kason had arrived at the City unconscious, this was his first glimpse of the planet beyond the City walls and he had to admit to himself that he was more than a little intimidated by the dark, looming jungle that seemed to rear up hundreds of meters into the sky. He reached out to the Force to help calm himself, but where there was once flood of comforting warmth to sooth him, he now received only a trickle. He sighed in frustration, he had had difficulty reaching the force ever since Charsa...Stop!! Don’t think about that, his mind shrieked at him, mental barriers flinging themselves up to protect the tiny, raw place within him that threatened to overwhelm him with its misery, there will be time enough to dwell on that in the future. Just get home!! He clamped down savagely on his emotions and tucked them away in a corner of his mind where he could ignore them, then forced himself to continue his observation of the area outside the City gates to keep himself distracted. Kason’s exceptional night vision was dazzled by the hundred or so brightly burning campfires that ringed the periphery of the landing field, each surrounded by dozen or more figures ranging in size from toddler to adult. Another group of refugees and exiles, he thought silently to himself as he followed Qui Gon and Obi Wan onto the unsheltered expanse of the tarmac, a cool breeze flitting among the silent spacecraft ruffled the hem of his cloak slightly, I wonder how long they will continue to arrive? -----signature----- ACCIO FIREBOLT!!!
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Alli-Wan Registered: Dec '99	Date Posted: 5/23/00 11:06pm Subject: Re: Divided we Fall : The Continuation
	Epilogue! Epilogue! Or better yet, SEQUEL! SEQUEL! Excellent work JGG! (Now we will mourn for the story is over. ) Thanks for the adventure. --AWK -----signature----- “And occasionally, a handkerchief comes out to wipe away a tear of laughter. That is my reward. The rest goes to the government.” --Victor Borge http://www.geocities.com/alli_wan Like the truth, I'm still out there.
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JediKnight-Obi-Wan Registered: Jan '00	Date Posted: 5/23/00 11:47pm Subject: Re: Divided we Fall : The Continuation
	I knew it. I just knew she wasn't dead. YES! It would have been so depressing had she really died. sniff But she didn't! -----signature----- "The course of true love never did run smooth"---A Midsummer Night's Dream
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HealerLeona Registered: Jan '00	Date Posted: 5/24/00 12:15am Subject: Re: Divided we Fall : The Continuation
	[b]Jedi Gryph Grin[b], I started reading with a small hope in the back of my mind. I would never presume to push my wants on another writer but I continued to hope for a happy ending for Kason. As I watched the crowd with Kason my heart pounded with excitement. By the end I had tears of joy streaming down my face, so thrilled with his discovery. You promised a special post, yet far exceeded any expectations I could possibly have. The way you built up emotions as they were leaving was inspired. Your story was wonderful, a treat to revisit. Thank you for sharing it with us. HL
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Jedi Gryph Grin Registered: Sep '99	Date Posted: 5/24/00 12:39am Subject: Re: Divided we Fall : The Continuation
	Awww, HealerLeona, you brought a tear to my eye. Thank you so much! Thanks for the input Alli Wan, epilogues...yes, sequels...hmmmm, dunno yet. JediKnight-Obi-Wan, you have no idea how close I came to leaving Charsa...ahem...demised. But at the last minute, a new story idea popped into my fwagile wittle mind. (Plus I wanna see exactly how early my sis Mouse2 calls me in the morning, I've been evading the subject of Charsa's possible return with her for a while now). Remember, 2 epilogues coming soon. One dealing with unanswered questions, and another, insert creepy dark force music here. [This message has been edited by Jedi Gryph Grin (edited 05-24-2000).] -----signature----- ACCIO FIREBOLT!!!
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Bastet Registered: Dec '99	Date Posted: 5/24/00 1:03am Subject: Re: Divided we Fall : The Continuation
	Ahaha! I knew Charsa wasn't dead, I've been in denial all this time. Thanks for bringing her back, that last post was awesome!! Now, I eagerly await your two epilogues, and your next story! -----signature----- "Good night Mama. Good night Papa. Good night de cat Bastet." "Meow!" BTW, Obi-Wan is hot. Fics in bio.
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Kit' Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Oct '99	Date Posted: 5/24/00 2:19am Subject: Re: Divided we Fall : The Continuation
	And Gryph is you don't post those epilogues soon I will be wearing the finest pair or Gryph earrings around...or mabye not! CooooL! Kithera -----signature----- Join the insanity http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/27996678 * One bad day and a temper tantrum does not a dark Jedi make! http://fanfic.theforce.net/fanfic.asp?action=view&ID=1060
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mouse2 Registered: Oct '99	Date Posted: 5/24/00 10:36am Subject: Re: Divided we Fall : The Continuation
	I KNEW IT! and no I'm not going to call you too early, but I will call and pester you. What are little sisters for? hehehe I am really going to miss reading your story every day. Well at least I still have two epilogues I can pester you to post. I hope you do write another story sometime in the near (or far) future. I love the way you had Rela take Kason down a notch. hehehe A Jedi afraid of a small girl, and boy he better he afraid! -----signature----- Want to know what ANTAR and TLST are? Visit Hell's Chance! http://www.hellschancecantina.com Proud Master to Lola64! I've gone into lurking mode... If you need me feel free to PM me...
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Jane Jinn Registered: Jan '00	Date Posted: 5/24/00 10:55am Subject: Re: Divided we Fall : The Continuation
	Awwww, happy end all around! I'm so happy that Charsa came back, even though I had resigned myself to her death. Didn't you write something about the "sign" that Obi-Wan is supposed to be carrying? I'll have to go back and read the story again and see if you've answered that question in the meantime, because I simply don't remember. But if you haven't, I expect to see a good explanation in the epilogues! I love Rela! That threat with the cat's tooth earrings was so powerful! And Hrrugla, too, was a great character. "What is it about Wookiees and starships?" Great line! An excellent story, Jedi Gryph Grin! -----signature----- Mostly retired now Just making the occasional guest appearance
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Jedi Gryph Grin Registered: Sep '99	Date Posted: 5/24/00 7:09pm Subject: Re: Divided we Fall : The Continuation
	Jane Jinn, thanks so much for your comments! But, truth be told, I was desperately hoping that no one would remember the "sign" (I think it was "clue", but I'm not sure, I'll have to check) reference I made oh so long ago. The story took a completely different direction than I had originally intended, so I kinda glossed over that part. shrug Wow!! I'm bowled over with gratitude for all of the positive comments from everyone! My sincerest thanks to all! Epilogue I will be up tomorrow. -----signature----- ACCIO FIREBOLT!!!
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mouse2 Registered: Oct '99	Date Posted: 5/26/00 2:17pm Subject: Re: Divided we Fall : The Continuation
	upity up up upity up! -----signature----- Want to know what ANTAR and TLST are? Visit Hell's Chance! http://www.hellschancecantina.com Proud Master to Lola64! I've gone into lurking mode... If you need me feel free to PM me...
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HealerLeona Registered: Jan '00	Date Posted: 5/29/00 9:29am Subject: Re: Divided we Fall : The Continuation
	Hi there. Can we say epilogue???? Still wanna read it.
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Jedi Gryph Grin Registered: Sep '99	Date Posted: 5/29/00 5:53pm Subject: Re: Divided we Fall : The Continuation
	Oopsie!! I got sidetracked with the holiday weekend and all. I'll have it ready soon. Thanks for the reminder H.L. -----signature----- ACCIO FIREBOLT!!!
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Kit' Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Oct '99	Date Posted: 5/30/00 6:26pm Subject: Re: Divided we Fall : The Continuation
	Uppers~! Kithera -----signature----- Join the insanity http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/27996678 * One bad day and a temper tantrum does not a dark Jedi make! http://fanfic.theforce.net/fanfic.asp?action=view&ID=1060
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Jedi Gryph Grin Registered: Sep '99	Date Posted: 5/30/00 8:14pm Subject: Re: Divided we Fall : The Continuation
	Okey Dokey, here's the promised Epiloge. There's only going to be this one, since when I started the other one it kinda blew up into a new story idea. This deals with a character that was only touched on briefly, so if you haven't read the whole story you might be sorta lost. Heck, even if you've read the whole thing you may still get lost. Let me know what you think. ****** ~~~~~~~~~~~~EPILOGUE~~~~~~~~~~~~ Another night... The inky black of the night sky was unbroken save for a few bright pinpricks of starlight. Countess Neila tossed and turned in a restless sleep; the expressions on her face a mixture of scowl and frown. Her dreams were dark and nebulous, nothing specific...threatening. The Force surged and writhed throughout the City and spilled over into the surrounding jungles. Anyone who had training in the ways of the Force would have recognized the underlying current of the waves of emotion that lapped at the edges of consciousness...Anger. But, alas, the Jedi had already departed. The twenty guards of the Night Watch exchanged nervous glances among themselves each time they passed one other while walking their rounds atop the City walls. The jungle was alive tonight; it’s denizens raising a cacophony louder and more frenzied than any heard in recent memory. The roaring and howling of several prowling dzur was almost constant and the guards continued to jump in startlement as each animal voice called out repeatedly in the predatory serenade. If there had been anyone trained in the ways of the Force, they would have realized that the wildlife was only responding to the waves of emotion that spilled over the City walls and crashed upon the surrounding jungle...Hate. But, alas, the Jedi were no longer here. A dark, gangling figure crept silently through the City streets toward the Great Gates, making every effort to avoid the small islands of light cast by the orderly line of streetlamps. The young man walked...awkwardly, as if his limbs were not quite in tune with each other. If there happened to be observers, the kind of heart would call him ‘slender’...the honest would call him ‘skinny’. His protruding Adam’s apple bobbed almost spasmodically as he muttered to himself under his breath while continuing on his journey. A tousled mop of dishwater brown hair completed the awkward teenagers appearance in such a way that the kind of heart would call him, ‘not the brightest star in the sky’...the honest would call, ‘way off in the shallow end of the gene pool’. Except for his eyes of course. His eyes were blacker than the night surrounding him and they burned with malicious intent. If someone who had been trained in the ways of the Force had looked into the young man’s eyes, they would easily have read what was written there...Death. But, alas, the Jedi had already left. * The boy hunkered down in the deepest, darkest shadows next to the closed City Gates. It will not be much longer now, a sibilant whisper hissed in his mind, the voice coming to him from across a vast distance. Time passed quickly in the pre-dawn chill, more and more people gathered within the Gates, waiting to be allowed to exit and get to their ships and be on their way. The influx of refugees had slowed to a trickle, and now those whose ships had been repaired were taking their leave of the planet Osiris. Despite the myriad ships available, along with their culturally and racially diverse crews, the boy had made his decision days ago; he had a target and a plan...now he just needed the right time. The ceremony of the Gates’ opening held no interest to the boy and he kept his concentration fully on his target, a four-man crew of a small ‘merchant’ vessel, as they made their way onto the still dark tarmac. He had chosen this group because all four were human, and therefore most likely to take ‘pity’ on him and help him on his ‘quest'. The boy’s mind whispered to itself in dark glee as he followed the crew at a discreet distance, almost time...almost time. Just as the crew arrived at their small, sleek vessel the boy made his move. He ran forward in his awkward, stumbling gait, panting theatrically and grabbed the shoulder of the man that he knew to be the Captain of the ‘merchant’ vessel. “Sor...please...I beg ye’,” the boy said, his words interspersed with what he hoped sounded like gulps for air, “take me with you, help me get ‘way from this place.” “Why would we do that, lad?” the Captain/pilot replied, his voice tinged with good humor as he returned the amused grins of his companions, “you act like you’ve got a rodian on your tail, who are you running from?” “No one Sor,” the boy answered, keeping his tone steady so his voice wouldn’t crack in excitement, “just runnin’ from me own future iffin I stays here, a life of mucking out th’ cess pits hereabouts, t’aint no life for anyone! I wan’ ta’ be a pilot...’n space...jes like you!” He widened his eyes and looked at the spacer with innocent hero worship in his gaze. “Well then,” the pilot said in a slightly embarrassed voice and raised his hand to scratch idly at his beard stubbled chin, “but, what about your family...” “Ain’t got family, Sor,” the boy replied, now allowing his voice to crack with suppressed emotion, “jus’ me an’ th’ cess pits. I wan’ t’ make better of meself. Please take me with ya’, I promise I won’ be no trouble, I c’n clean an’ cook an’ all. Teach me what ya’ need an’ let me learn to do wha’ you do.” For the first time since the voice had come to him, the boy used his mind to lean on the older man’s thoughts, pushing for acceptance. “Well then,” the spacer repeated, looking to his crewmates for help. As one, they all shrugged their shoulders to signify their indifference; the pilot looked back at the boy with a somewhat confused expression on his face. “What’s your name, boy?” he asked, his voice gruff with indecision. “M’ names Clem,” the teenager replied, hope shining in his young eyes, “please, Sor...” “Enough with the begging, young Clem,” the pilot said, suddenly feeling as if a great weight had been lifted from him, “get yourself on board, we’ll figure out a list of chores for you to pay your way once we get off planet.” “Oh, Sor...Sor...thankee so much, I promise I won’ dis’point you,” Clem blinked rapidly as if struggling to hold back unshed tears of relief. “Go on then, get your gear stowed, we take off in ten minutes,” the pilot said gruffly, embarrassed by the boy’s emotional outburst. Soon, the sleek vessel ‘Stormbringer’ passed out of the atmosphere of Osiris and into the glittering vacuum of space. Clem was seated on a passenger couch in the rear of the cockpit of the small craft behind the four crewmembers, the aft corridors of the small vessel echoed metallically with the humming vibrations of the ship's engines. “Sor...” Clem said meekly, “may I take a’look at what’Cher doin’ with th’ controlls?” “Sure kid,” the Captain/pilot replied as he stood up from his seat at the main piloting console, “come here and take a seat, get your first look at space.” Clem rose quickly and made his unsteady way to the Captain’s side, his plan momentarily forgotten as he gawked unashamed at the endless starfield visible through the ships main viewport. “It affects all first-timers like that, lad,” the Captain said with his voice tinged with good natured laughter, “go ahead, take a seat.” Clem took the proffered seat and wondered silently what he should do next. You do it like this, the sibilant, outside voice hissed into his inner thoughts. Unbidden, a vision arose in the boys mind and suddenly...he understood. The Force boiled and surged around him, accompanied by four loud CRACKS and one thud that momentarily drowned out the powerful hum of the -----signature----- ACCIO FIREBOLT!!!
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