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Jedi_Jewl Registered: Sep '01	Date Posted: 2/4/02 1:34pm Subject: RE: The Right One 2!! (Romance RR, need LOTS of help!)
	Jacinta posted! And a good one to!!! GJ all of you! Spooky, midnight, very spooky!!!! Giving me chills! Well, since everyone's in a punctual mood, I'll post some: _____________________________________________ Nerad sat up streight in his bed. Some disterbance in the force had awakend him. He looked next to him. He saw Rand, deep in a troubled sleep. He looked across the hall. A bed. A bed with somone in it. He leaped out of his bed. Seorna tunrned as he entered the room. She knew he should be in bed, but her own grief had overtaken any concern for his well-being. It had taken awhile for her to wake up. She had fallen into a great blackness over her grief, and she had woken up on the sleep-couch. The reality had come back to her. She was alone. And Aralise was dead. She soon noticed the shaken look in Nerad's eyes. He'd never seen her cry before, but she couldn't help it. "What happend?" He asked quietly. "Oh Narad" Seorna breathed, barly able to keep her tears back. "Aralise. She's dead!" Nerad looked at the bed. There was a cloth draped over it. Tears welled in his eyes. "How?" "Cris." "Cris?" "He killed her." "Are you sure?" "He was caught with her. She was frozen from the lake, and there was a gash on her head. A big gash. There was blood all over Cris and- Oh Nerad! I can't believe she's dead!" "Seorna." Nerad said brokenly. He had nothing he could do for her. Nothing. He felt like a helpless child. He could only comfort her. He sat down next to her, and put an arm around her. He cried to. ******* Shadows! Shadows! He must get away from these horrible shadows! There was emptyness. Horrible emptness. Then- voices. They came faintly. As if through a mist. She was frozen from the lake, and there was a gash on her head. A gash. A gash. The lake? He saw somthing. A girl. A gash on her head. She looked frozen. A big gash. No! No! It couldn't be! And there was blood all over Cris, and- Oh Nerad! I can't believe she's dead! Cris? A gash? Dead. Death. Like the shapless shadows. No! "No!" Rand sat up in his bed, a cold sweat on his forhead. "No- no." He leaped out of his bed, and ran to the room. Nerad was holding Seorna who was crying softly. Nerad looked up. "Where is she? Who is she?" Seorna didn't look up. "Aralise. She's dead." "Where?" "On the bed." Seorna looked up. The tears that stained her before-pretty and joyful face hurt Rand, though he didn't know her very well. "May I look?" "Yes." Seorna closed her eyes. "But I can't." Rand pulled the blanket back, and Nerad stood next to him. "What is it?" "This gash on her head." He pulled back the dark hair from her sweaty forhead. He reached for a cloth soaked in bacta, and wiped the blood away from the wound. "No." Nerad looked at it curiously. "It looks kind of like- a 3? "Close. It's a half-star." "So?" "I know who did this. It wasn't Cris." Seorna stood up, but didn't look at Aralise."Who?" "My half sister, Emily." "Why?" "I don't know. But I must go find her." Seorna looked at Rand. "You don't even know where to look! If she's done it, she'll have gone into hiding." "L-level--D" They all turned to the sorce of the voice. Aralise opend her eyes. -----signature----- One Book to rule them all One Book to top them One Book to bring them all And in their tracks will stop them In the many stores where novels lie!
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Daya Registered: Feb '00	Date Posted: 2/4/02 7:50pm Subject: RE: The Right One 2!! (Romance RR, need LOTS of help!)
	OOoooo! Creepy!! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Night had fallen as Jaks sat at a small table in the students' lounge, trying to get some work done. His bad mood had increased with the persistance silence his sister was throwing at him and he had finally resolved to forgo trying to talk to her until she came to him first. About an hour into his reading, the padawan felt a presence. Looking up from his data pad, he saw it was Master Bish, Jaeni's master. "Jaks, have you seen your sister?" asked the tall Jedi Master. "No, Master Bish," replied Jaks. And I'm perfectly fine with it. he thought, privately. "I have tried repeatedly to contact her through our bond but....I cannot even locate her," said Bish, worriedly. Seeing the concern on the older man's face, Jaks quickly forgot about being angry with Jaeni and instead felt a small bubble of worry creep up. He tried more carefully to find his sister in the Force but only found a small muted spot where her Force-signature should be. "Padawan Aralise was found murdered today," related Bish. "And I fear for the safety of the other padawans. I tried to locate Jaeni but have not been able to reach her all day." "I haven't either," said Jaks, feeling guilty at having ignored her earlier. Had something happened to her? Who would.... Jaks narrowed his blue/violet eyes. "If something did happen to Jaeni, I think I have an idea of who would know." "Who?" asked Bish. "Ravv." +++++++++++ "Where is she?!" demanded Jaks, all but pouncing on Ravv when he answered the door. "Padawan!" Sharply, Bish grabbed Jaks by the collar from attacking the other boy. "Ravv, do you know where Jaeni Hillis is?" he inquired with a less violent but still firm voice. Ravv looked to his feet but answered, "No." "He's lying!" protested the twin. "You're lying!" he repeated to Ravv. "If she's hurt because of you-" "Wait, Jaks," ordered Bish, still keeping a firm hold on the enraged student. "Padawan Ravv," he said, coldly. "I have heard of your past behavior towards other students. Both you and Padawan Chun. If you have done anything to my student, I will find out one way or another and your punishment will only be more severe as long as you keep silent." Ravv bit his lip, visibly conflicted. After a few moments of weighing his options, he finally said, quietly. "We put her in a storage room. But only as a joke. We were going to let her out once curfew time came around." Keeping a firm hold on Jaks to prevent him from punching the other boy, Bish asked quickly. "Why is it we can't sense her in the Force?" "We put a Force-collar on her," said Ravv, meekly. Clenching a fist of his own, Bish forced himself to remain calm. "WHERE is she?" "Storage room 5 on Level B," answered Ravv. Bish visibly paled as he involuntarily let go of Jaks. "Padawan," said the Jedi Master, his voice urgent. "THINK, did the door look strange to you?" Looking frightened now himself, Ravv gave a small nod. "It had a level handle, I think." "When did you put Jaeni in there!?" thundered the Jedi Master. "T-this a-aftern-noon," Ravv stuttered out in fear of Bish's sudden anger. "Dear Gods! Jaks, come on!" Grabbing the other boy, Bish, forgetting all about Ravv began to run towards the nearest turbolift. "What? What's wrong?" Jaks demanded. "They put her in an old room the healers used to use for bacta bandages." "So?" "Bacta bandages had to be kept in an airtight room so they wouldn't ruin overtime." Jaks finally caught on. "That means...." "The room Jaeni's in is airlocked. She would only have had a few hours of oxygen."
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Sat'zi Registered: Jan '00	Date Posted: 2/4/02 10:34pm Subject: RE: The Right One 2!! (Romance RR, need LOTS of help!)
	Guys, AWESOME RR!! I'm on the edge of my seat concerning EVERYTHING! Please, keep it up! -----signature----- "Who cares about being right all the time when you have imagination?" ----Sam Wolf
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Midnightetak Registered: Sep '01	Date Posted: 2/4/02 11:06pm Subject: RE: The Right One 2!! (Romance RR, need LOTS of help!)
	WHHEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!! will post tomorrow..or tonight.
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Daya Registered: Feb '00	Date Posted: 2/5/02 1:19am Subject: RE: The Right One 2!! (Romance RR, need LOTS of help!)
	Thanks for the FB! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Not waiting for the other boy to catch up in his running stride, Bish tore down the empty corridors of Level B. Locating the storage room, the Jedi Master pulled the level handle, letting the door open with a faint hiss. The room was small and Bish immediately saw a small figure lying on the hard floor, not moving. Kneeling swiftly down beside his padawan, Bish easily broke off the Force-collar's strong lock using the Force. "Jaeni?" he called, gently pulling away the collar from the still girl's neck. Bish had half-expected his padawan's life force to return where it belonged in the Force's web. But all that was left was a rapidly fading light. Leaning over, Bish could only hear a faint wheezing sound as Jaeni struggled to breath. Not waiting another second, the Jedi Master gathered the girl in his arms and dashed out of the room. Firmly, he pressed his fingers to Jaeni's wrist, urging the faint pulse to keep going. //Hold on, padawan. I'm taking you to the infirmary// Bish thought he ran by Jaks, but he could barely register the boy's voice shouting something. All he could concentrate on was his rapidly fading student. Sparing a glance down at Jaeni's pale, unresponsive face, Bish felt his own heart skip as the pulse that treaded faintly beneath his fingers suddenly stopped. ++++++++++++++++++ Healer Izra was alerted from her station by sounds of students who had been with Aralise's boyd in the next room shouting something. But before she could go check, a Jedi Master came rushing in, holding an unconscious girl in her arms. "Help her!" he begged, handing Jaeni over to her. "She was suffocating. I can't find her pulse." Izra quickly confirmed that Jaeni's heart had stopped and rushed to the nearest empty bed and carefully placed the student on it. "Someone get in here!" she shouted behind her for a healer to assist.
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Jedi_Jewl Registered: Sep '01	Date Posted: 2/5/02 9:58am Subject: RE: The Right One 2!! (Romance RR, need LOTS of help!)
	GJ!!!!!! _____________________________________________ Re-Shy came running up behind Izra. "What is it?" "This girl is suffocating. Get me an oxagine tank!" Re-Shy started to ruhn. "Wait!" She stopped. There were tears in Izra's eyes. "It won't be nessisary." Ra-Shy shook her head. "No." "No!" Bish ran to the bedside. "No!" Jaks stood still. Stone still. A tear formed in his eyes. "Jaeni." He whispered. ******** "Oh Lisa!" Seorna sank down next to her. "We thought you were dead!" "N--no. Seorna. I thought so-" "Shh, shh. It's okay now. But the meter said you were dead. It's never wrong, either." ******* "Wait!" Ravv came running into the room. "You have to save her!" Bish looked up, tears in his eyes. "We can't." Jaks said brokenly. "She's dead! You killed my little sister!" Jaks lunged at Ravv, knocking him to the floor. Ravv put up a struggle, but Jaks' anger was too powerful. Izra came running over, and pulled him off. Ravv was uncountios. "Izra! Ra-Shy!" Izra and Jaks turned as Seorna came running. She suddenly turned pale when she saw Jaeni. "What-" "She's dead." Izra's voice was soft, but very sad. "How?" "Ravv." Jaks said angrily. "How do you know she's dead?" "The meter said-" "No, no! You must save her! Ravv and Bruck dismantled the devices. They wanted you to think Aralise was dead. But she's not, and neither is Jaeni! We can save her, but we have to act quick!" Nerad came running out of the room. "Rand's gone!" ******* Rand's shoulder ached, but he kept walking. Stair after stair. Level D. He opend the door. There. Sitting on the floor. "Emily." -----signature----- One Book to rule them all One Book to top them One Book to bring them all And in their tracks will stop them In the many stores where novels lie!
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Daya Registered: Feb '00	Date Posted: 2/5/02 2:45pm Subject: RE: The Right One 2!! (Romance RR, need LOTS of help!) - Date Edited: 2/5/02 10:08pm (1 edits total) Edited By: Daya
	Nice Jewl! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Galvanized into action by Seorna's insistance, Izra re-checked for Jaeni's pulse using the Force. "It's faint," she stated. "It's barely registering and she's still not breathing." Grabbing an oxygen mask, Re-Shy fitted it over Jaeni's face. Squeezing on the attached bag, the healer forced air past the blue-tinged lips, into the girl's lungs. "Come on, padawan. Breathe!" urged Re-Shy, squeezing the bag harder. Standing on the other side of the bed, Izra gently pressed a hand over the student's chest. Using the Force, the healer sent small pulses, urging the girl's heart to keep going as Re-Shy continued to force air into Jaeni's lungs. After a few moments, Re-Shy re-checked. "Pulse is stronger," she stated with some relief but she continued to squeeze the oxygen bag. "She's still not breathing regularly. Wheel her into the examination room," ordered the healer to Izra. "Bish, do you have the Force-collar that was on her?" The Jedi Master nodded, anxiously. Re-Shy nodded. "Good. I'll need to take a look at it later." Frowning, she looked down at Jaeni's still too pale face as she began to push the medi-bed into the examination room. "It might have affected her with something. This isn't normal," she said, almost to herself. "And get someone to find Rand. He shouldn't be out of here yet," added Izra.
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Sat'zi Registered: Jan '00	Date Posted: 2/5/02 10:20pm Subject: RE: The Right One 2!! (Romance RR, need LOTS of help!)
	GREAT Job everyone!! -----signature----- "Who cares about being right all the time when you have imagination?" ----Sam Wolf
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Jedi_Jewl Registered: Sep '01	Date Posted: 2/6/02 2:19pm Subject: RE: The Right One 2!! (Romance RR, need LOTS of help!)
	Cool deal, Daya! And thanks for the FB, Sat'zi!!! Okay, More from me. ( 'Uh-oh' you say to yourself. ) _____________________________________________ Jesca shook her head in disbelief. "I don't think Cris did it." "I don't either." Obi-wan leaned back and groaned. "I've known Cris almost all my life. I know he wouldn't do this." "I'm worried." Kira said quietly. "About what?" Jesca turned and looked at her. "About a lot. Aralise is dead, and I heard that Jaeni and a girl named Emily are missing. I don't know what to think. Missing. Jesca sat streight up. ********* "So. You found me." Emily's tone was dry and unconcerned. "You didn't finish your job. Aralise is alive. How could you do that?" "She pushed you into the lake. I shouldn't think you'd care." "I told you, I'm through with this! You shouldn't have tried to kil-" "I didn't kill anyone!" "She could've died!" "I am not a murderer, Rand." Emily looked furious. "I know you hate me, but that's no reason to-" "I hate you? You're the one who hates me! You've been trying to hurt me ever since we were kids." "I never meant for Aralise to die. I hit her." "Ya. And threw her into the lake." "I did not. I just hit her, and ran. I came streight here." "Than who through her in?" "How am I supposed to know?" Emily shrugged and her charm-braclet rang. Rand had never forgotten that braclet. It had but one charm on it. "I won't be proven guilty." "Aralise can testify against you." "Aralise won't have time before Cris is exacuted. Or at least taken into custudey." "You said you didnt' want to kill anyone." "I won't. I'm not in charge." "Bruck won't-" "Bruck isn't either." "Than-" "That's right. I thought you knew. Our good friend Ravv. And he's in for a big surprise to." ******* Ravv came to, still on the floor. He got to his feet, and ran to Izra. "How is she? She's not dead! The macines were-" "Yes, Ravv. She's fine, and Seorna told us about the machines." "But how-" "Aralise isn't dead either." "Aralise?" "Aralise. She came in her awhile ago. She was nearly frozen to death." So that's what he was doing. "How's Jaeni?" "She'll be fine. Now please quiet down." She motioned to Jaks, asleep on the couch. "We're going to go check on Aralise. She needs help." Izra went quickly to the other room. Ravv stood up. A girl came walking swiftly out of the other room. "Ra-Shy, I think-" She stopped. "Seorna." "Ravv." She didn't say anything else. Just then, Nerad came walking behind her. "Seorna-" His eyes went wide when he saw Ravv. Ravv stared at him. He sent a message to Nerad through the force. It was angry. You told. Yes Nerad I- Their secret conversation was broken up when Seorna grabbed Nerad's arm. "Come on." She turned in pitty to Ravv. "I'll see you later, I guess." Only Seorna, thought Ravv, would bother to say goodbye to her enemy. He got up, and krept into Jaeni's room. She seemed so still. Too still. Bruck. He'd ruined everything! He'd almost destoyed the whole reason! Or maybe it was his reason. Ravv sunk down by Jaeni's bed, and sat there. For a long time. It was about midnight when he awoke, still next to her bed. It had been a long night. He suddenly heard her raspy breath shudder. Then.....it stopped. "NO!" Ravv stood up, and yelled "Somone help me!" No one came. "Help!" Still no one. There was nothing for it. Ravv put his lips to Jaeni's and breathed softly. He then pushed her chest as gently as he could. Over and over again he whispered "Hold on, Jaeni. Oh please hold on!" He kept breathing, and pressing. Soon, it felt as though he couldn't breath anymore, but he kept going. He felt dizzy, and soon began to stagger. He sunk to the floor, fighting to breath. He saw Jaks come running into the room. As if in a dream, he turned and yelled "Somone! Help!" Jaks knelt down beside Ravv. "Ravv? Ravv, are you okay?" Then everything went black again. *********** "What is it Jesca?" Obi-wan looked worried. "Caylana! Where is she?" "I don't know, but I suppose she's fine." "No. She has to be somwere." Kira thought a moment. "Last time I saw her, she was going after Aralise when she-" She stopped. "Before she got atached!" "We have to find her!" ___________________________ I know, some of that makes absolutly 0 sense, but it will eventually. -----signature----- One Book to rule them all One Book to top them One Book to bring them all And in their tracks will stop them In the many stores where novels lie!
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starlight_kenobi Registered: Aug '01	Date Posted: 2/6/02 3:01pm Subject: RE: The Right One 2!! (Romance RR, need LOTS of help!)
	You're not gonna make my girl the villain are you??? Well, I guess it had to be somebody if you are. Great story guys! -----signature----- I'm strange. What more do you need to know? Check out my story : Qui-Gon adopts a baby girl in... The Gift of A Destiny http://boards.theforce.net/message.asp?topic=3874972&replies=41 Princess of Snap of The Fortress
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Daya Registered: Feb '00	Date Posted: 2/6/02 11:37pm Subject: RE: The Right One 2!! (Romance RR, need LOTS of help!) - Date Edited: 2/6/02 11:39pm (1 edits total) Edited By: Daya
	GJ! ~~~~~~~~~~~ Carefully, Ra-Shy studied the Force-collar Bish had given her. Pushing it away from her, across her office desk, the healer could make out the faint lettering on the inner lining of the collar. Definitely Corellian. While not being blatant, the faint lettering explained the purpose of the collar enough. While it did cut off the wearer from the Force, the metal on the inside was also built to trigger the release of a toxin that seeped in easily through the person's skin. With prolonged contact, the toxin could lead to death. With a small look of disgust, she tossed the collar into a nearby box and sealed it neatly. "How is Padawan Ravv?" asked the consult Corellian healer Ra-Shy had contacted through a telecomm. "He is doing better of the two," replied the healer with controlled tones. "The toxin does not seem to be as virulent if caught by being in contact with another infected person. We had a suitable antidote for him. He should be fine as early as tomorrow." "And the other?" asked the Corellian. "How long was the collar on her?" "My guess is nearly five hours," replied Ra-Shy, grimly. "I'm too afraid to give her anything. The toxin is making her body system behave much too irregularly. The muscle stimulant I gave her to help increase her heart rate after Padawan Ravv tried to revive her nearly made her diaphram muscles seize and cut off breathing again." "You do have an antidote for this?" inquired the healer. "It worked on Ravv. He only had brief contact with Jaeni. The toxin barely had time to settle in before it was flushed out. It's been in Jaeni's system for almost six hours now. It'll take much longer for it to be cleaned out." "But that is the only choice you have," advised the Corellian healer. Ra-Shy hated to admit defeat but she nodded, her mouth a worried line. "You will have to moniter her carefully. She could crash again but if she survives the remaining toxin in her system, she should recover." Ra-Shy nodded. "I will speak to her Master and give him the details." ++++++++++++++++++ Having discovered what ailed Jaeni, the girl had been put in a sealed off isolation room. No one, other than properly trained healers were allowed in. Standing just outside of the Force-sealed room, Jaks' fingernails bit angrily into his palms as he clenched them into fists. He wanted to be in there. At least be able to stand next to Jaeni's bed or hold her hand. Just seeing her through the Force wall was driving him insane. Staring at his sister's still figure, he fought back the earlier wave of tears that had nearly spilled out. It was true what they said about infirmary beds, they dwarfed the occupant. Jaeni looked so small surrounded by variously beeping machines what were all set to go off the moment anything went wrong. Leaning into the room as far as the Force-wall would allow, the other twin quietly spoke to the pale figure. "Don't die, Jaeni. Please don't die. You can fight this. You can."
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Sat'zi Registered: Jan '00	Date Posted: 2/7/02 10:38am Subject: RE: The Right One 2!! (Romance RR, need LOTS of help!)
	Cool! Keep writing everyone!! -----signature----- "Who cares about being right all the time when you have imagination?" ----Sam Wolf
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Daya Registered: Feb '00	Date Posted: 2/7/02 5:19pm Subject: RE: The Right One 2!! (Romance RR, need LOTS of help!)
	Thanks Sat'zi! UP!
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Sat'zi Registered: Jan '00	Date Posted: 2/7/02 11:13pm Subject: RE: The Right One 2!! (Romance RR, need LOTS of help!)
	what? no update today? Sniff -----signature----- "Who cares about being right all the time when you have imagination?" ----Sam Wolf
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Midnightetak Registered: Sep '01	Date Posted: 2/8/02 6:22am Subject: RE: The Right One 2!! (Romance RR, need LOTS of help!)
	Rand suddenly felt a wave of nausea overwhelm him and he sank to his knees trembling. "You shoudn't have come, everything will be discovered soon enough without your interfearance Rand," Emily comments looking down at him with a detached look "Ravv is a fool, none of us should have ever agreed to this. We have all made a very big mistake and the punishment is something we both dread. Dispite everything that seperates you and i, Emily. We both do not want to leave the protection of the Jedi Temple." Rand breathes slowly, he felt as though he was being constantly dunked in hot then cold water. "Afraid Rand?" Mocks Emily, "How ironic, even now you still pretend to play the good little Jedi Apprentice even though before all of this you were a cold blooded killer." "I am not a killer Emily!It was an accident! Is it my fault our mother chose to be with my father rather than stay and be abused by yours?!" "HAH! If it wasn't for you and your bloody cursed father, My mother would still be alive. It was you who caused him to loose his mind and become obsessed beyond reason by his love for her!" Emily spat back stepping closer to Rand like a dangerous animal ready to pounce. Rand looked up into his sister's eyes and saw not the normal distaste but instead the full fledged hatred for him. If you strike at me Emily, then we will both fail. Rand thought glumly remembering his Master's words.
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