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Ibis Registered: Aug '00	Date Posted: 8/25/00 8:01am Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	Just a notice to everyone. I'll be posting soon. NOt like a week from now, more like today, as in a hour or so. Thanks for being patient and thanks to Talyn for giving me some ideas. -----signature----- Everybody needs a little chaos. "I never liked fate. He always cheats at cards."
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Kelly Kenobi Registered: Mar '00	Date Posted: 8/25/00 9:26am Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	Good news Ibis!
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Ibis Registered: Aug '00	Date Posted: 8/25/00 12:03pm Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	Sorry I know it's been more than an hour. I got side tracked. Here's another post. ********************* Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan waited outside the healer’s room in the temple, only this time they had the company of Mace Windu and Master Yoda. The two council members hadn't asked any questions yet but it was obvious they would have to explain later. The head healer, Jasd, entered the room. “She is going to make a full recovery, but it will take a while. I don’t expect her to even regain consciousness for a few days and it will be at least a week before she can get out of bed. You got her here in the nick of time, any longer and she might not have made it.” he said. “How long will it take for her to recover completely?” Qui-Gon asked. “I said she would recover, however it could take up to a month before all of her injuries are completely healed.” “What kind of injuries has this girl sustained?” Mace asked glancing at Qui-Gon. “Now that’s an interesting question.” Jasd said. “There is evidence of internal bleeding, but that has already almost completely healed. There are also many bruises that she sustained, I’d say a week ago maybe more. The bruises coincide with the internal bleeding and three cracked ribs, indicating she received them at the same time. In my opinion this girl was beaten, badly.” “We’re aware.” Obi-Wan said grimly, remembering what Raya had looked like after Lord Sidious found him in her room. “Really.” Jasd said lifting an eyebrow. “Any way those injuries aren’t the ones that have put her in this condition. The ones that have are much more... interesting.” “Tell us of these injuries you will.” Master Yoda said. “She has a lightsaber burn in her side. It went through her bottom rib, not to mention several inches of muscle. She’s lucky it missed her vital organs. Now to my knowledge, Qui-Gon, you and your apprentice were the only ones on the planet that had lightsabers in their possession, so how did this girl get wounded by one? She’s incredibly young, I’d say fifth teen.” “Her name is Raya, and she’s sixteen, not fifth teen.” Obi-Wan corrected. “Alright, sixteen. That doesn’t explain why she has a gash burned into her side.” the healer said. “It is your job to heal her injuries, not find out how she got them. I will explain that to the Council.” Qui-Gon Said sternly. “Know she is alright you do. Tell the Council exactly what happened right now you can. Go to the Council chambers we should.” Master Yoda said. With that the four left, Qui-Gon trying to ignore the smirk on Jasd’s face. ****************** Did you like it? -----signature----- Everybody needs a little chaos. "I never liked fate. He always cheats at cards."
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Ibis Registered: Aug '00	Date Posted: 8/26/00 6:47am Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	Hi everybody I'm starting school on Tuesday. Finally I'm not a freshmen anymore! I'm going to be really busy but I'll try to keep posting regularly. Like every other day and I'll probably post more of the story today. Bye! -----signature----- Everybody needs a little chaos. "I never liked fate. He always cheats at cards."
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Ibis Registered: Aug '00	Date Posted: 8/26/00 5:58pm Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	No feedback? Isn't anybody interested anymore? -----signature----- Everybody needs a little chaos. "I never liked fate. He always cheats at cards."
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Ibis Registered: Aug '00	Date Posted: 8/27/00 1:21pm Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	All I want is just feedback from one person. Is that so much to ask? -----signature----- Everybody needs a little chaos. "I never liked fate. He always cheats at cards."
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Jee-dai Registered: Jun '00	Date Posted: 8/30/00 10:26pm Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	Feedback? Nah. Encouragement? Yes!!! Yes!!! Please continue the story. I know you can write intriguing characters and Obi-pain. I want to know if Obi and Raya become best buddies, teach each other's fighting moves, and yes, even fall in love!! Will this be a tragedy or a happily-ever-after AU? Please post the rest of the story. Pretty please?? -----signature----- Some of my favorite (dead?) fanfics... Appearances http://boards.theforce.net/message.asp?topic=1203598&page=1 The Lost Children http://boards.theforce.net/message.asp?topic=3212597&start=4933048 Prophecies and Destinies
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Ibis Registered: Aug '00	Date Posted: 8/31/00 4:44pm Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	Thanks for the encouragement I can't write everyday because of my stupid teachers so here's a longer post to keep you going. ***************** Master Qui-Gon Jinn and his apprentice Obi-Wan stood in front of the council. “Like to know what happened on your mission and why you brought the girl back with you, we do.” Master Yoda said. “The first night we arrived we were attacked by a mysterious figure who fought with a lightsaber. The attacker escaped after wounding Obi-Wan’s arm. Obi-Wan was put on bed rest for the next three days. The next night the attacker sent Obi-Wan a letter to meet me in the gardens. Not knowing that I hadn’t written the letter he went out to the gardens and after a brief fight was captured by the attacker and held hostage. The attacker, which I believe was a Sith tried to use Obi-Wan to maneuver me into a trap. I refused to go along and with the monarch’s help tried to find Obi-Wan. A few days later Obi-Wan returned to the palace with the girl I brought back. He could barely walk and needed Raya’s support. After speaking with Obi-Wan I discovered this girl had saved him and helped him get back to the palace. The monarch gave Raya a place to stay in the palace so he could have time to think of a proper reward for her bravery. A few nights later we all took a walk in the gardens and were attacked yet again by a Sith. I was trapped, leaving Obi-Wan to fight the Sith alone. It knocked the lightsaber from his hand and prepared for a death blow, but Raya distracted him and freed me. Unfortunately the Sith attacked her before one of us could get to her. Then he ran off and we brought Raya back here.” Qui-Gon finished. There was a silence as the Masters considered what they had just been told. Qui-Gon glanced at Obi-Wan, he was the only other person in the room who knew that while Qui-Gon spoke no untruth he did leave out certain parts. “Why did you not leave this Raya on Mejdul?” Mace Windu asked. “The healers there did not have the resources to heal her, she would have died. I thought that since she saved our lives she should have a chance to survive.” Qui-Gon answered. “How did this mere girl rescue your apprentice from a Sith?” Ki-Adi-Mundi asked. “I never asked her. Obi-Wan was not well at the time, he may not remember.” It wasn’t a lie and Obi-Wan hadn’t yet told him exactly what had happened. The Masters nodded in acceptance, they wouldn’t know until Raya got better, or so they thought. “More to tell us you have, I sense.” Master Yoda prompted knowing there was more Qui-Gon intended to say. Qui-Gon waited a moment to collect his thoughts. “I learned some useful information about this Sith. It isn’t much but it might give us new insight. Apparently the Sith Master has a residence here on Coruscant.” There was a quiet gasp though the room. “He has a high political position in the government and he has recently lost his apprentice.” There was a long silence in the room, it was a lot to take in all at once. “This information, where did you get it?” Mace Windu asked. Suddenly all attention was on the Master. “A reliable source. It was from a person who had nothing to gain if they lied and all the reason to speak the truth.” “Trust this person you do?” Master Yoda asked. “Yes.” Qui-Gon answered. “Yet this person you give no name to.” Yoda responded. “You would not benefit from knowing the name.” “On the contrary. If we knew the name of this person we could then find them and question them as to how they got this information.” Ki-Adi-Mundi said. “I am sorry,” Qui-Gon said, “I can not tell you. I would loose the trust of this person.” It was obvious the council was not pleased with his decision, but they could do little about it. “May the Force be with you.” Yoda said, ending the meeting and Obi-Wan followed Qui-Gon as they left. When they were gone Mace leaned back in his chair. “He didn’t tell us who the person he gained the information from for a reason.” he said. “Agree I do. Hiding something he is” Master Yoda agreed, but none in the room had the slightest idea what it was. ------------------------------------- Back on Coruscant Darth Sidious was not pleased. The Jedi had his apprentice and he was sure she was still alive, if not well. They had already influenced her and the longer she spent time with them the harder it would be to convert her back to her original self. She couldn’t stay with them, she didn’t know much but it was enough to doom his chances of staying hidden. Not to mention he still had hopes for her returning to the Dark Side. But she was in the Jedi Temple and he couldn’t go there. It was too much of a risk. He had to find another way of getting her back, then once she was evil again he would send her out to murder Kenobi. What perfect revenge for what the little bastard had done. He pay for corrupting his apprentice, even if it took Raya five decades to find him, he would die for his caring heart. *********************** -----signature----- Everybody needs a little chaos. "I never liked fate. He always cheats at cards."
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JEDIMASTERYU Registered: Jul '00	Date Posted: 9/1/00 7:11pm Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	Hey! keep going. I won't quit reading, although I won't post as often as I used to because of school and everything, you know, But keep going, this is a really great story. -----signature----- "The first step to wisdom is recognizing your ignorance" - Yoda, Shadows of the Empire "Don't call me clumsy" - Obi-Wan JA #2 "Join me and we can rule the galaxy father and son" - Darth Vader ESB "I don't believe it" - Luke ESB "Be Quiet! All of you"
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LadyVorgunby Registered: Sep '00	Date Posted: 9/3/00 4:06pm Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	More please!! I am really enjoying this!! -----signature----- fear-->anger-->hate-->suffering-->angst-->mush-->happy readers So in the physics of the heart, distance is relative;it's time that absolute. --Cordelia Naismith, Shards of Honor
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Ibis Registered: Aug '00	Date Posted: 9/4/00 5:16pm Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	It's been awhile I'm sorry. Never take A.P. Europeon History when you're in tenth grade. You'll never have the chance of having a life out side of school. ******************* Raya’s eyes slowly opened. She was in a white room she didn’t recognize. She started to sit up but a jot of pain in her side made her quickly lay back down. She felt terrible. She didn’t even know it was possible to fell so bad at one time. Her whole body felt like it had been jolted with an electrojabber. She looked to her left and saw an IV in her arm. She didn’t like things being injected into her without her permission. She looked down and saw white bandages through a hole in her tunic. Where am I? she wondered. She remembered blacking out after being hit with the lightsaber, but everything after that was fuzzy. She heard a door open and saw someone come in. She propped herself up on her elbows to look at the young girl who had walked in. The girl stopped upon seeing Raya awake and stared back at her, surprise written on her face. Then the girl rushed out of the room, leaving the door open in her haste. That was weird, Raya thought. A few minutes later, what Raya thought must be a healer walked in, escorted by the young girl. “You were right Leena. I’m sorry I doubted you. You can go now.” he said to the girl who immediately left the room. The healer turned back to Raya. “You must forgive her for her reaction, we weren’t expecting you to awake for at least another three days. My name is Jasd, I am the head healer here.” Raya stared at him for a moment, not sure of what to make of him. “You’re Raya, if I’m not mistaken.” “How do you now my name and what am I doing here?” she asked. “Well you’re here because you nearly died and frankly in your condition I don’t see how you could even be conscious, not unless you were a Jedi, which judging by the way you’re dressed you’re not. And as for how I know your name, Obi-Wan told me.” Raya visibly relaxed. If Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon brought her here than it must be a safe place. “Where is here?” “The Jedi Temple of course.” At those words the relaxation Raya just felt evaporated. The Jedi Temple! She couldn’t be here. If they found out what she was... Raya’s fear was quickly building. “Where’s Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon?” she asked barely able to keep the fear out of her voice. “Speaking with the Council. They will most likely be back with in an hour. For now though you should probably change into a hospital gown and since you probably can’t do it yourself I’ll send a female healer in to help you.” She felt another jolt of fear run through her. She had a dagger hidden in her boot and another strapped to her forearm. She almost always relied on her lightsaber, they were only there for emergencies. But if the healers were to find them which they almost certainly would she would have a lot to explain. “Do I have to?” she asked. “Yes you have to.” Jasd said. “It’s healers policy.” Some how she doubted that. She also knew that he was most likely force sensitive so she couldn’t just use a mind trick. “I’m very modest.” she said putting on her sweetest most innocent face. “I don’t really have to change, do I?” with the last part she used the force to lightly brush his mind, so lightly that he didn’t notice. She silently prayed it would work. Jasd looked undecided for a moment. “No, I guess I could bend the rules this once, but if you make a fuss over anything else forget it.” Raya relaxed slightly. She had avoided one obstacle but she was still in the Jedi Temple, that was bad enough. Another healer poked his head in the door. “Master Qui-Gon Jinn and Obi-Wan Kenobi are here.” he said. Jasd looked annoyed. “You think they spent enough time here already now one of them isn’t hurt and they still come back. Very well, let them come in.” A few seconds later the two appeared. “You’re awake.” Obi-Wan said, surprised. Qui-Gon too looked startled. Raya was relieved to see them. “Surprising isn’t it.” Jasd said. “I’ve only seen Jedi who can put themselves into a healing trance awake so soon after almost dying.” he said regarding Qui-Gon suspiciously. “She’s a determined girl.” Qui-Gon said. “Unfortunately, I have to be elsewhere, don’t stay to long she needs her rest.” he said as he walked out of the room. Raya laid back down and stared at the ceiling. Her fear of being in the Jedi Temple had been replaced by anger towards the two people who had brought her here. “You look angry.” Obi-Wan said, seeing her face. “I wonder why that is. Hmm, maybe it’s because two people that I trusted left me alone in the place Sith apprentices are told never to go.” “You shouldn’t let yourself get so angry. Anger leads to hate. Hate leads to-” “I know what hate leads to Obi-Wan!” she snapped. Obi-Wan silenced immediately. Qui-Gon started, “We’re sorry we left you alone. We didn’t expect you to wake up for some time. If you would like one of us will stay with you at all times.” Raya felt her anger release. “Thank you. Obi-Wan I’m sorry I snapped at you.” “It’s alright, your not feeling well.” “What did you tell the Council?” she asked. “They don’t know you were a Sith and we don’t plan on telling them any time soon.” Qui-Gon said. “I’d feel better if I wasn’t here.” “There aren’t that many places that could heal a wound like yours.” Obi-Wan said. “Where’s my lightsaber?” Raya asked. “Obi-Wan has it and I think its better if he holds on to it for a while.” “It’s really beautiful. I wanted to ask you about it.” Obi-Wan said. Raya yawned. “You’ll have to wait till tomorrow. I’m too tired now.” “Get some rest.” Qui-Gon said, but Raya was already asleep. **************** I'll try to post more with in the next 2 days. I'll post faster if I get feedback. -----signature----- Everybody needs a little chaos. "I never liked fate. He always cheats at cards."
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JEDIMASTERYU Registered: Jul '00	Date Posted: 9/4/00 8:30pm Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	Great!!! More. -----signature----- "The first step to wisdom is recognizing your ignorance" - Yoda, Shadows of the Empire "Don't call me clumsy" - Obi-Wan JA #2 "Join me and we can rule the galaxy father and son" - Darth Vader ESB "I don't believe it" - Luke ESB "Be Quiet! All of you"
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space case Registered: Apr '99	Date Posted: 9/4/00 10:04pm Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	Like your story just read the whole thing today.
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Ibis Registered: Aug '00	Date Posted: 9/5/00 5:39pm Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	Listen everybody, I'm having a real bad day so this post might not be too good. If you don't like it just say so and I'll re do it. ********************* The next few days Raya stayed at the healers. Qui-Gon had kept his word, one of them had always stayed. She was feeling much better now that she was receiving the proper treatment, better than a normal person should. She’d been putting all her energy into two things, healing herself and learning more about her new friend, Obi-Wan. She found herself telling him things she never thought she could say to anyone or even admit to herself. Talking to him made her feel at ease even though she was in the Jedi Temple. Obi-Wan was feeling the same towards Raya. He enjoyed the time they spent talking. He was drawn to her even though he wasn’t exactly sure why. She was beautiful, he couldn’t deny that, but he doubted that was the reason he liked her so much. Qui-Gon arrived to take Obi-Wan’s place to allow him some training time when Master Yoda walked in, nearly bumping in to Obi-Wan. “Excuse me, Master Yoda.” Obi-Wan said slightly embarrassed. “Alright, it is.” Master Yoda replied. “Qui-Gon, go you may.” “Forgive me Master Yoda but I told Raya someone would always stay with her. She isn’t comfortable here.” Qui-Gon said. “Go you will. With her I shall stay. Keep her company I will. Questions for her I have.” Raya visibly stiffened at this. She didn’t want to be alone with the oldest Jedi in the order. “Master Yoda, Jasd has said that she shouldn’t be doing anything strenuous or anything that might upset her.” Qui-Gon tried again. Jasd stuck his head inside the door. “Please Qui-Gon, she and Obi-Wan talk for hours at a time while he’s here, a few questions aren’t going to hurt her. Besides she’s doing better than she should be. I saw her walk over to the window earlier to point out a building to Obi-Wan.” Qui-Gon gave Jasd a lethal look. “Wow, if looks could kill I’d be rotting in the ground by now.” he said as he walked away. “Go now you will Qui-Gon.” Master Yoda said. Obi-Wan gave a concerned glance at his Master, but they both left. Raya was not happy and she got even more nervous as Yoda pulled up a chair to the side of her bed. “Lay back you should.” Master Yoda said in a gentle voice. “Hurt you I will not.” Raya did as she was told. “Ask you many questions I will not.” Raya relaxed some what she wouldn’t have to make anything up on short notice. “See your memories of the events on Mejdul I will.” Suddenly all of her fears came back. As Master Yoda touched his hand to her forehead she put her mind shields up with all her strength. She felt him draw back surprised. “Strong in the force you are. Few can block their minds as well as you do without training.” Inwardly Raya was beginning to panic. “Let down your guards you should. Wish to help you we do.” he said. Raya started to believe him, his voice calmed her and made her loosen her mind shields slightly. She knew what he was doing, he was using the force to persuade her to put down her mind shields. She fought back against it and again she saw his surprise. Her strength in the force was to strong for someone so young that had no training. Raya may have been healing but she wasn’t completely better, her mind shield wavered for a moment and allowed Master Yoda to see her mind, but only for an instant. He immediately backed off and Raya felt relief wash over her. “Tell Qui-Gon he may return, I will. See you later I shall.” he said as he left. -------------------------------- Master Yoda walked back to his quarters deep in thought. He had seen her mind for just an instant but it was enough and he didn’t like what he saw. The girl’s mind was a vortex of misery, guilt, and fear. She hid her emotions well, but he had a feeling Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan knew how she felt. There was darkness in her but also some light. Her fear was centered around a person, most likely the Sith who had attacked her. But he was far away, why should he still frighten her... The realization hit him, Qui-Gon had said the Sith had recently lost an apprentice. What a coincidence that a Sith looses his apprentice and Qui-Gon comes back to the Temple with a girl who has great control over the force. Isn’t it also interesting that this girl managed to save Obi-Wan from his Sith kidnappers and save both of them from a Sith Lord. It would also explain how Qui-Gon got his information about the Sith. He almost couldn’t believe it. The great Jedi Master Qui-Gon Jinn had brought a Sith Apprentice into the Jedi Temple. For now he would keep his suspicions to himself, but he would watch this girl very carefully. **************** I don't mind if you don't like it. -----signature----- Everybody needs a little chaos. "I never liked fate. He always cheats at cards."
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LadyVorgunby Registered: Sep '00	Date Posted: 9/5/00 6:27pm Subject: RE: The Sith Rising Again( JA FanFic)
	I like it...I really do. Please don't redo it, it's great the way it is! Please keep going! -----signature----- fear-->anger-->hate-->suffering-->angst-->mush-->happy readers So in the physics of the heart, distance is relative;it's time that absolute. --Cordelia Naismith, Shards of Honor
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