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Author Topic: Acceptable Losses -- SW car-chase fanfic - Now with *director's commentary*! (bumped 4/9/05)
Syntax 
Registered: Aug '01
6217_4-LOM
Date Posted: 8/17/03 1:20am Subject: RE: Acceptable Losses -- SW car-chase fanfic - re-bumped 2/6/03 - Date Edited: 8/17/03 1:22am (1 edits total) Edited By: Syntax
Thought I'd post my "director's commentary" for 'Acceptable Losses' - it's basically my "production notes" for the story, and helps explain why some things happen, and why I made decisions I made, stuff like that. grin

Note: DO NOT READ THIS COMMENTARY UNTIL YOU'VE READ THE STORY - IT's GOT SPOILERS!

"I had infinite problems starting this fanfic off - I wanted it to be *the* “carchase” fanfic, but I couldn’t come up with an opening for it, something to justify the chase. In the end, I decided to take the BMW Films approach: just start off with a chase, and explain it later, in the middle of the chase. I think it worked out pretty well.

Essentially, this story fills two roles. I wanted a definitive carchase story, but I also wanted to branch off from a plotline I alluded to in ‘One for the Money’ - the one time Syntax had failed a mission. Of course, you don’t know that he’s supposed to fail it until the very end (unless you’re reading these notes BEFORE reading the POV itself. Oops) This fanfic takes place before Syntax joins the Alliance, maybe a year or two prior to the events in ‘One for the Money’. Boba Fett is the main antagonist. I dropped him in as the main character just because he’s my favorite “real” Star Wars character, and I needed an excuse to use him in a POV. It also justifies why Syntax “fails”. Not much in the way of character development in the story - it’s pretty much all’s-to-the-walls action that happens to fill in some of Syntax’s backstory. Hope ya enjoyed it.

“Kevin Ray” is the name of one of my friends from school, as a matter of fact. On a school assignment, he wrote “Damon Dellamarggio” (my name in real life) in as a character in a story… and killed him off. This fanfic happens to repay the favor. Also, Kevin’s crime in the POV is being a “card shark” - Kevin in real life plays the Star Wars CCG pretty avidly, so that’s a nod to him.

A “red Jenkon 2800 convertible” is a nod to my father’s red ’97 Pontiac Firebird. Actually, the Jenkon 2800 is meant to be more like a Trans-Am, but you get the picture.

Yes, Corran Horn is *the* Corran Horn, from the X-wing series. I figured I could slip him in, because the setting and time was workable. I’m not much of a fan of Corran, and I figured this was an excuse to humiliate him a couple of times during the course of the chase.

Actually, the driver of the van that gets flipped by a disruptor shot was supposed to be Drake, from Wolfshead Squadron (a pilot in a SW flightsim fan group I'm affiliated with). He wanted his character in the story, because it seemed like it could work, but in the end I couldn’t do it while also staying true to the facts established in his pilot bio. Essentially, Drake had never left his homeworld prior to joining the Rebellion, but this fanfic would have put him on Corellia. I couldn’t make it work, unless I set the fanfic on Drake’s homeworld (and cut Corran Horn from the story), or have Drake alter his own pilot bio.

The scene where 9-LOM’s speeder loses a door is essentially taken straight from a scene in an episode of ‘Law and Order: Criminal Intent’ that I saw. It was cool, so I stuck it in the fanfic .

The shootouts in the train station lobby and on the top of the train take LOTS of liberties from the game “Max Payne”, with “shootdodging” and stuff.

Now, for the “edited/deleted scenes”. A LOT of stuff got cut from the chase; I had a whole scene scripted that takes 9-LOM and Boba Fett through a construction site a la ‘Gone in 60 Seconds’, and another scene that takes them off a pier and along a harbor (working under the assumption that landspeeders can also work on water. This isn’t entirely the case, as my research into landspeeders has revealed). In fact, the “harbor” scene was also originally intended as a swamp-speeder chase in ‘One for the Money’, when 9-LOM and the Rebel operative crash on the planet at the end. It didn’t work out, and it didn’t fit well in this one, either, so it was cut *again*. Rest assured, both “chase” sequences will be seen in future fanfics. There was also an extended fight in the train station lobby, but it was cut, because it was essentially the same thing as the fight atop the train, and it would have seemed repetitive. The whole chase through the train had a few other parts to it, with 9-LOM essentially blowing the train up one car at a time, but I really couldn’t justify him having a dozen grenades in his satchel, so in the end he only has three (one atop a train car, two inside another car).

My two favorite scenes have to be when 9-LOM rotates the speeder 180 degrees and fires on Fett, while going in reverse, and when 9-LOM hooks his arm on the guardrail, swings down, and smashes through the window into the interior of the train.

In any case, ‘Acceptable Losses’ was one I’d wanted to write for quite a while, and it was a lot of fun to write; I hope you enjoyed it, and I hope this “commentary” shed some light on some parts of it."

 

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Lieutenant Colonel 9-LOM "Syntax"
Corsair Squadron Commanding Officer
CRS Vigilant - http://www.bhorizon.com/renegade/1024.html
"That's me, the life of the party" -- 9-LOM, 'One for the Money'
"Flying is for droids" -- Obi-Wan Kenobi, 'Revenge of the Sith
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Syntax 
Registered: Aug '01
6217_4-LOM
Date Posted: 9/10/03 12:23am Subject: RE: Acceptable Losses -- SW car-chase fanfic - Now with *director's commentary*! (completed 8/17/03)
Probably worth mentioning - for those who wanted a "sequel" to this story... I think I can make it happen. wink

 

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Lieutenant Colonel 9-LOM "Syntax"
Corsair Squadron Commanding Officer
CRS Vigilant - http://www.bhorizon.com/renegade/1024.html
"That's me, the life of the party" -- 9-LOM, 'One for the Money'
"Flying is for droids" -- Obi-Wan Kenobi, 'Revenge of the Sith
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Syntax 
Registered: Aug '01
6217_4-LOM
Date Posted: 3/6/04 11:12am Subject: RE: Acceptable Losses -- SW car-chase fanfic - Now with *director's commentary*! (completed 8/17/03)
It's been six months. I figure I can bump this story so that people can read it. wink Also, it's kinda applicable in light of the "death and dying" challenge in the Writer's Resource -- I saw that thread, and immediately thought of this story.

 

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Lieutenant Colonel 9-LOM "Syntax"
Corsair Squadron Commanding Officer
CRS Vigilant - http://www.bhorizon.com/renegade/1024.html
"That's me, the life of the party" -- 9-LOM, 'One for the Money'
"Flying is for droids" -- Obi-Wan Kenobi, 'Revenge of the Sith
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Syntax 
Registered: Aug '01
6217_4-LOM
Date Posted: 4/9/05 10:25am Subject: RE: Acceptable Losses -- SW car-chase fanfic - Now with *director's commentary*! (bumped 4/9/05)
People should read this story. It's my personal favorite that I've written.

 

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Corsair Squadron Commanding Officer
CRS Vigilant - http://www.bhorizon.com/renegade/1024.html
"That's me, the life of the party" -- 9-LOM, 'One for the Money'
"Flying is for droids" -- Obi-Wan Kenobi, 'Revenge of the Sith
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