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Jacinta_Kenobi Registered: Sep '01	Date Posted: 5/17/02 9:12pm Subject: FINISHED!! Enemies of the past (Obi-Wan torture story, 17 years old) This is terrifying...it's done! - Date Edited: 1/28/03 9:18pm (28 edits total) Edited By: Jacinta_Kenobi
	HI! I need a new story, and this jumped out and yelled, "Write me!" So I did. Here it is, and I hope you enjoy. Oh, and BTW, this post is just a cute fun one. Torture will come later, I promise. Feedback please! ***** Obi-Wan followed his master at a discreet distance as they left the council room. //Another mission.// He gave a great sigh. They hadn’t had more than two days off at a time for almost 6 months now. He didn’t know how much more his body could take. //I didn’t even have time to unpack my bags this time.// He thought to himself dismally. The 17-teen-year-old was right. They had been back for barely an hour, but this mission had been top-priority, and when they had returned, the council had rushed to give them their new assignment. According to the council, a planet named Delbuort was being plagued by a very intelligent mass murderer who had already killed 23 of the planet’s inhabitants. The local security force had been unable to catch the insane man. The planet, in desperation, had called the council for help, asking for a Jedi team to come catch the killer. And so, here they were, going on another assignment. Obi-Wan rubbed his eyes wearily, trying to remember the last time he had slept. He couldn’t, and so he gave up. The mental activity was draining him too much. Suddenly, he slammed into his master’s back and knocked the breath out of himself. He stumbled back a few steps and rubbed his nose with two fingers of his right hand. He waited to be counseled on his lack of concentration, and bent his head in preparation. “Hypothesis confirmed,” came his master’s deep voice. Obi-Wan glanced up in confusion as his master turned slowly. “You are tired.” His master said. Obi-Wan nodded. “Yes master. I am sorry for bumping into you.” He answered meekly. Qui-Gon nodded back thoughtfully. “It’s alright padawan. I was just confirming what I was quite sure of. You need sleep.” Obi-Wan shook his head vigorously. “No, master, I’ll be alright, I’ll…” Qui-Gon cut him off. “None of that. As soon as we are on that transport, I expect to see you sleeping, do you hear me?” “But…I usually fly, and you need then sleep more than I do….” Obi-Wan started, but Qui-Gon held up a hand. “No buts, padawan. We’ll have a pilot this time. Don’t make me make that an order!” He said, towering over his short apprentice. Obi-Wan stifled a laugh at his master’s mock seriousness. “Yes..master..” He managed to get out seriously. “That’s what I thought…” Qui-Gon replied, straining to keep his own smile at bay. Obi-Wan stared at his master for a long moment, his face turning red, before bursting into laughter. Qui-Gon quickly followed him into hysterics, draping an arm over his padawan’s shoulder as the halls echoed with their laughter. “Let’s go.” Qui-Gon finally said, never moving his arm, after a long time laughing. Obi-Wan agreed rapidly, and they started down the corridor, grinning from ear to ear. *** “Padawan….Padawan, wake up!” Qui-Gon called at his shirtless apprentice, who was curled into a ball in his chair wearing only his leggings. Obi-Wan mumbled something unintelligible and pushed him away, rolling over. Qui-Gon sighed. Time to go into phase two. He grabbed up the container off ice-cold water he had gotten from the refresher, (space makes for very cold water,) and threw it on his padawan’s head. Obi-Wan’s eyes went wide, and he jumped out of the chair and fell onto the floor, spluttering heavily. When his vision cleared, he saw his master, doubled over in laughter. “You…should have seen….your face….Padawan!” Qui-Gon managed to get out. “Really?” The disgruntled padawan replied, and suddenly flew at his master, shaking the water out of his hair and onto his master while putting his now-freezing hands underneath his shirt collar. Qui-Gon gave a scream that seemed more befitting of a teenage girl than an over six-foot tall male Jedi Master, and grabbed at Obi-Wan’s hands, wrestling his padawan around and trapping him against his chest. “Do you give?” He asked, and squeezed slightly, making his padawan exhale quickly at the pressure. “Yes…master.” Obi-Wan grunted. Qui-Gon released him, and turned to start cleaning the mess of water on the floor. Obi-Wan knew that his master wouldn’t be so easy on him this time if he went after him again, so he resisted the urge. “Get to the ‘fresher and dry off. You’ve been sleeping for 12 hours, and we're landing soon.” Qui-Gon said. Obi-Wan started towards the back of the ship, but not fast enough, for Qui-Gon whirled and flicked his towel out at his apprentice’s backside. Obi-Wan danced out of the way. “Hurry it up! Move it!” Qui-Gon called, and Obi-Wan did, but his foot slipped out from under him as he ran and he landed on his bare back, sliding quickly across the room to crash into the wall. Qui-Gon broke out laughing, holding his sides as they began to hurt, and snorted loudly. From the corner, a weak call came from the fallen teenager. “Ow.” **** What'd ya think? -----signature----- "If the package says, 'Now with REAL chocolate!' what were you eating before?" "A conclusion is simply the place where you got tired of thinking." "Compromise means you admitting I'm right and you're wrong."
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PadawanKitara Registered: Dec '01	Date Posted: 5/17/02 9:29pm Subject: RE: Enemies of the past (Obi-Wan torture story, 17 years old) - Date Edited: 5/17/02 9:38pm (1 edits total) Edited By: PadawanKitara
	I get first reply A very amusing start Jacinta. -----signature----- Courtier of the Royal Order of Shambling Dufi We are Dufi...Resistance is Futile! UCLA BRUINS
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Jacinta_Kenobi Registered: Sep '01	Date Posted: 5/17/02 9:40pm Subject: RE: Enemies of the past (Obi-Wan torture story, 17 years old)
	Kitara - Yes, you did! Good job! Thanks! Oh, and BTW, I am going with my old system, since I have the nxt post written. Four replies, and I will post. See you then! -----signature----- "If the package says, 'Now with REAL chocolate!' what were you eating before?" "A conclusion is simply the place where you got tired of thinking." "Compromise means you admitting I'm right and you're wrong."
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Nat Registered: Jan '02	Date Posted: 5/18/02 6:51am Subject: RE: Enemies of the past (Obi-Wan torture story, 17 years old)
	Second reply, second reply! You could put half of your next post! That was a great start, Jacinta! It proves that sometimes Jedi can have fun. I can't wait to read more! -----signature----- Cueille le jour "You want to go home and rethink your life." Obi-Wan Kenobi - AOTC Garen Groper
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Jacinta_Kenobi Registered: Sep '01	Date Posted: 5/18/02 12:53pm Subject: RE: Enemies of the past (Obi-Wan torture story, 17 years old) - Date Edited: 5/18/02 2:23pm (1 edits total) Edited By: Jacinta_Kenobi
	Yep, second post. I don't think so... sings "With me, it's all or nuthin." Sorry...I'm going to try out mor the musical Oklahoma! soon. Anyway. Thanks Nat! Tell you what. If there aren't four posts by Monday, I'll post. -----signature----- "If the package says, 'Now with REAL chocolate!' what were you eating before?" "A conclusion is simply the place where you got tired of thinking." "Compromise means you admitting I'm right and you're wrong."
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BLADE_KENOBI Registered: Jul '01	Date Posted: 5/18/02 2:30pm Subject: RE: Enemies of the past (Obi-Wan torture story, 17 years old)
	Great Start! Here's one more post to add! Come on everyone, we need a post. So all of you lurkers (like me ) need to come out so Jacinta_Kenobi will post! LOL Okay, back to the story. J_K great first part, can't wait to see what happens. Blade
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sheleigh Registered: Jan '02	Date Posted: 5/18/02 5:55pm Subject: RE: Enemies of the past (Obi-Wan torture story, 17 years old)
	Ee! More! See... here is a fourth post... (unless someone posted infront of me...) UP! more! -----signature----- And In Conclusion... http://boards.theforce.net/Before_the_Saga/b10475/20582878/ Vader: The Force is strong with you.... Luke: Oh yeah? How strong... Vader: Uh... as strong as a small pony... - Eddie Izzard's Dressed to Kill
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TheFallen Registered: Nov '01	Date Posted: 5/18/02 8:17pm Subject: RE: Enemies of the past (Obi-Wan torture story, 17 years old)
	EEEEE! A JACINTA STORY! Yay! Oh le sighhh - tmorrow I'll be seeing AOTC and now a new jacinta story. I think I'm going to pass out. -----signature----- "That's no moon - it's a space station!"
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Jacinta_Kenobi Registered: Sep '01	Date Posted: 5/18/02 8:42pm Subject: RE: Enemies of the past (Obi-Wan torture story, 17 years old) - Date Edited: 5/19/02 12:25pm (5 edits total) Edited By: Jacinta_Kenobi
	BLADE_KENOBI - Haha! Evil me, I know how to get replies out of you lurkers, don't I? Thank you! Here is more! sheleigh - You're right, that's four, you are correct! We have a winner! And your lovely prize is....A POST! TheFallen - FIVE? Awww...to be put in the same bracket as AotC in high points of life? I'm touched. Thank you! Here ya go! *** The ramp opened, and two now-serene Jedi stepped out of the ship and onto Delbuort. There was a group waiting on the other end of the docking pad, and Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan moved over to them as the pilot took off. The two bowed to the group, who gave a short bow back. One man with blond hair and green eyes stepped forward. “Gracious Jedi, we thank you for coming. Since we have called you, two more have been killed. The situation gets worse and worse. We need all the help you can offer.” He said quickly, the desperation clear in his voice. “That is what we are here for. My name is Qui-Gon Jinn, and this is my apprentice, Obi-Wan Kenobi.” Qui-Gon replied. The man nodded. “I am sorry, how stupid of me. My name is Nam Deracs. I will escort you to where you will be staying, and then tell you everything I know.” Qui-Gon nodded, and they were off. * “Are they satisfactory, Master Jedi?” Nam asked as Qui-Gon looked around the rooms they had been given. They were small, but clean, and it was obvious that this planet didn’t have much to offer. “They are more than adequate.” Qui-Gon replied. “Now, if you would be so kind as to tell me everything you know about this man we are to find.” Nam nodded, and gestured for them to sit down. “We have been unable to find out much, so I am afraid I will not be too much help. We know that he arrived on our planet a month ago. Since then, he has killed 25 people, 7 of which were from our local security.” “Do you have a list of these people?” Obi-Wan asked. Nam nodded. “It’s here. It also lists where they were last seen, where they were found, and when both those things occurred.” Nam finished and held a datapad out that he had pulled from his tunic. Obi-Wan looked at Qui-Gon, who gave an almost unnoticeable nod, and Obi-Wan took the datapad and started looking over it. “One of our detectives was able to get a picture and the name the man goes by before he was…killed. It’s the closest we’ve gotten.” Nam said with a small, depressing shake of his head. He handed Qui-Gon a holopic activator. Qui-Gon held the small device in the palm of his hand before pressing the button to show the image it contained. A holopic came up of a man in a dark bodysuit. He was of medium height and build; taller than Obi-Wan, yet shorter than Qui-Gon. His eyes were a dark, angry green, and his hair was a dark shade of brown. The face was thin, furious. The eyes held so much emotion that Qui-Gon had to look away from them. The pale figure had something about him that said he was determined, and would not be easy to stop. “He goes by the name of Krej Saila.” Nam said, shuddering as the words left his lips. Obi-Wan finished reading the list, shaking his head in heartbreak as he realized how many of them had been below age 8, and glanced up to look at the holopic. Qui-Gon turned it so he could see the man’s face, and something in the padawan’s heart froze as his eyes became dark and glazed over. * The small ginger haired boy clinged onto the robe of the sweet woman with her arms protectively around him, tears streaming down his face as he shook with fear and relief at the same time. “Shh…It’s alright….Everything will be alright, I promise. You are safe now.” The delicate voice drifted to his ears, and he clung harder to the symbol of safety that she had become. The dark man stared at the woman who seemed more concerned with calming the hysterical child then with him. The little lad saw his intense look and struggled to get even closer to the tall auburn-haired woman. He smiled to himself, his eyes narrowing. The woman looked up at him, and even in the dim light he could see the tears in her eyes as she held the child carefully so as not to hurt him anymore than he was already. “You’re an animal.” She growled as her voice cracked. The man merely nodded. “Whatever you say.” He agreed in a sarcastic voice, as he reached into his shirt for his blaster. “But while you are expressing your doubts of my humanity, could you explain to me how you, a mighty Jedi, are not even trying to capture me, kill me, maim me, or maybe a couple of the above?” The woman ignored him, and picked up the child from the floor, cradling the four-year-old against her chest, mindful of the welts and cuts covering his little body. “Because I am not so stupid as to come alone. I am a mind healer, and am merely here for this one.” She watch the young boy rub the eyes with the large, dark circles underneath them. As she said it, the door behind her flew open, and a beam of green light illuminated the room. The dark man saw it as well, and flew to open the window as the figure holding the beam of light leapt at him. He pushed the dresser in the room in front of the Jedi, causing him to trip. He started out the window, but not before calling a parting shot over his shoulder. “I have never lost before, and know this child, you will not be the first. You may have escaped for now, but we shall meet again.” He yelled, and then he was gone. The child shivered violently, knowing somehow that the man was right. The figure holding the lightsaber extinguished his weapon before flipping the light on with the force and pulling his hood back. Qui-Gon Jinn shook his hair out quickly, his blue eyes flashing. “Is he alright, Callula?” He asked quickly. Callula Toval ran her fingers through the short hair of the boy who had been missing for three days, and nodded her head slowly. “He will live, but he still needs medical attention.” She said. Another figure burst through the door to run straight into her. The young man pushed the black hair out of his blue eyes. “Sorry, Master Toval.” He said. Qui-Gon gave him a disapproving look. “Xanatos…” Xanatos looked angry. “I lost sight of you! Your legs are so much longer, that I can’t keep up!” He cried. The he noticed the open window. “He got away?” He asked, downtrodden. Qui-Gon nodded sadly. “Who was he, anyway?” “Zeron Einaem. A perverted killer who specializes in children.” Calulla said, hugging the small body tighter to herself as he whimpered. “It’s alright, Obi-Wan. Everything is going to be alright.” * //And, in a way, it has been….until now.// Obi-Wan thought as he realized that he couldn’t breathe through the fear. “Obi-Wan?” He heard his master ask. “Zeron Einaem.” Obi-Wan whispered. Qui-Gon just raised an eyebrow. “Who?” “Zeron Einaem. That’s his real name.” Obi-Wan said, his voice still dull. “How do you know?” Qui-Gon asked his apprentice. “I’ve met him before.” Obi-Wan said slowly, as memories he had always hoped would stay in the past surfaced. *** And so, we begin. Same as before, so hurry and reply! -----signature----- "If the package says, 'Now with REAL chocolate!' what were you eating before?" "A conclusion is simply the place where you got tired of thinking." "Compromise means you admitting I'm right and you're wrong."
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ewen Registered: Jun '01	Date Posted: 5/18/02 9:03pm Subject: RE: Enemies of the past (Obi-Wan torture story, 17 years old) UPDATED 6/18/02!
	Just found this and I think it could be very,very good.Will keep checking for another post.PEACE Ewen -----signature----- Only when we are FORGOTTEN, do we cease to exist!!!
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Jacinta_Kenobi Registered: Sep '01	Date Posted: 5/18/02 9:17pm Subject: RE: Enemies of the past (Obi-Wan torture story, 17 years old) UPDATED 6/18/02!
	Hey Ewen! Long time no see! Thank you! -----signature----- "If the package says, 'Now with REAL chocolate!' what were you eating before?" "A conclusion is simply the place where you got tired of thinking." "Compromise means you admitting I'm right and you're wrong."
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OBI_JEDI Registered: Oct '01	Date Posted: 5/18/02 11:48pm Subject: RE: Enemies of the past (Obi-Wan torture story, 17 years old) UPDATED 6/18/02!
	LOL. Jacinta you are the greatist. Keep it up. -----signature----- They keep saying the right person will come along; I think a truck hit mine. I pretend to work they pretend to pay me! Before giving someone a piece of mind be sure you have enough to spare Who died and made YOU Darth Vader?. Disappointed? Too bad!
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PadawanKitara Registered: Dec '01	Date Posted: 5/19/02 12:06am Subject: RE: Enemies of the past (Obi-Wan torture story, 17 years old) UPDATED 6/18/02!
	Ok this is number three The story is starting to get creepy- why doesn't Qui-Gon remember him? -----signature----- Courtier of the Royal Order of Shambling Dufi We are Dufi...Resistance is Futile! UCLA BRUINS
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Cascadia Registered: Apr '02	Date Posted: 5/19/02 12:30am Subject: RE: Enemies of the past (Obi-Wan torture story, 17 years old) UPDATED 6/18/02!
	Interesting, so far. I want to know why Qui-Gon doesn't recognize him, too. -----signature----- It is only when we have risen from beholding the creature into beholding creation that our mortality catches for a moment the music of the turning spheres. --Owen Barfield
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Aurora_Kenobi Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 5/19/02 1:00am Subject: RE: Enemies of the past (Obi-Wan torture story, 17 years old) UPDATED 6/18/02!
	This story's really great!!! Looking forward to the next post!!
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jedi7 Registered: Jan '02	Date Posted: 5/19/02 4:29am Subject: RE: Enemies of the past (Obi-Wan torture story, 17 years old) UPDATED 6/18/02!
	Oooh a serial killer. Post more please. 7
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