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Saga - Legends "Rage, rage, rage against the dying of the light" (drama about Palp´s niece, a mix of legend & canon

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by AzureAngel2, Jul 11, 2014.

  1. WarmNyota_SweetAyesha

    WarmNyota_SweetAyesha Chosen One star 8

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    Mara is a darling! Makes you think that any daughter she had would be just as outspoken and definite in her opinions ;)

    Appreciated her mother's understandable concerns and liked the natural air of teasing with Jalen and Lucius. Every one has their 'favorite' Jedi, rather like being a sports fan. :D
     
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  2. aleja2

    aleja2 Jedi Master star 2

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    LOVE toddler Mara!

    And I love how real your children are, and the true sense of caring and love between the parents and children and teachers. It's a wonderful community. So of course I live in fear for them....!
     
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  3. Cem_Fel

    Cem_Fel Jedi Master star 4

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    A lovely new chapter and little Mara is so cute :)

    Nagina is right, the part about taking babys and toddlers from their families was never something I liked about the Jedi-Order. I do get, why they are doing it but it still feels wrong.
     
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  4. AzureAngel2

    AzureAngel2 Chosen One star 6

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    @SWpants: You are such fun, dear pants. I am glad that you are out there and always put a fat smile on my face!



    @Tyranus230: But due to my holiday feeling, they do not flow so easily. I am also nervous posting them somehow.



    @earlybird-obi-wan: Even against Skywalkers without a beard! ;)



    @Lady_Misty: I do not know if she made fun of Master Yoda, but here in my fic she loves the little, green guy to pieces.


    @Nyota's Heart: I wonder if you like my next update that much... ;)


    @aleja2: It helps my fic that I am a kindergarten teacher... :)


    @Cem_Fel: Thanks for finding the time to comment and being my friend. And also drowning in a flood of photos on "whats app" that show the progress of my SW felt dolls or the SW puzzle that you gave me as a present!



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    The breakfast is mostly uneventful. There are the usual little quarrels about the food – friendly and, let us be honest, pointless.

    Shakti and I are watchful.

    And of course there is the typical citter chatter of our children. Since the Clone Wars have started it is about the names of the battle fields, the heroic acts of the Jedi, the bravery of the clones.

    “Mace Windu is not cool. Who has a purple light sabre anyway?” - “Blue is so ordinary.” - “But green looks like puke.” - “Make it yellow.” - “There are no yellow light sabres, nerfherder.”

    “I like Cody best! He is fearless and clever. Rex is okay, but Cody...” - “Rex could strike Cody down in no time.” - “Oh yeah?”

    “When I am grown, I will marry Ahsoka Tano.” - “But you wanted to marry me and Nyota...” - “Sorry. You have no lekku.”

    “One Skywalker sticker for seven Obi-Wan stickers...” - “Are you crazy? What sort of deal is that? Is your father a Toydarian?” - “No, he
    's a former Corelian smuggler!” - “Yuck!”

    After a while, Shakti and I get tired of listening. She leans in to me confidentially. “Hey, beauty!” she jokes.

    “This had better be about the educational program of our beloved senate,” I say with a huge grin.

    “Nope.” My colleagues grin is almost as wide as mine. “We have a date for you, my husband and I.”

    I try to stay calm in front of the children, but one of the framed paintings starts vibrating.
    “Nagina, you silly bantha cow,”I reprimand myself as the painting sails towards the floor. “Stay right in the middle. Between serenity and chaos. The middle way.”

    Shakti picks the frame up. Luckily, it is unbreakable glass. “Oh, I thought I really fixed that blasted gallery board yesterday.”

    “Blasted is a bad word.” Beaplli shivers visibly with disgust.

    “Really?” Shakti replies sharply. “Fancy that!”

    While she puts the painting back, I try to find a more neutral expression for my face.

    Little Mara looks at me knowingly. With a sweet smile she puts her hand on mine. I can feel her brain buzzing. “Middle,” she babbles. “Find middle.”

    I take a deep breath, do my best not to flinch away from the two year old. “Thanks, Shak, I really appreciate your effort.” I start stroking Mara's head with my free hand. But I have a busy schedule the next two weeks.”

    Shakti does not look convinced at all. “Rowan is a nice guy. You should give him a try.”

    As I open my mouth for a reprimand the entrance door opens likewise.

    Silence falls.


    The children stare ahead with their eyes wide open.

    Rowan is history before he even had the chance to meet me at all.

    My very unlikely rescue team has arrived. I recognize my uncle's body guards before I can set eyes on him, dressed in his favourite cloak with the hood on.

    [​IMG]


    Usually our lives do not intermingle in public like this. I rise from the table, giving my best not to fall apart with joy or fear. “Let the games begin,” I breathe, sending a silent prayer to Shiraya.

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    (To be continued!)
     
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  5. SWpants

    SWpants Force Ghost star 5

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    Since the clone wars have started it is about the names of the battle fields

    See (and this isn’t your fault), I don’t understand why they were calling it that. Why the CLONE wars? What was up with Yoda saying that? How did it stick? It’s just some weird semantics I never understood.
    It’s so true - the names of the places and the people fighting.


    “When I am grown, I will marry Ahsoka Tano.”

    Excuse me while I vomit up everything I ever ate. Ever.
    I abhor Ahsoka. She shouldn’t even exist. Where in the bloody kriffing nine Corellian hells did she come from? IF SHE WASN’T THERE IN ROTS OR MENTIONED OR ANYTHING AND ANAKIN WASN’T A MASTER THEN SHUT UP LUCAS THERE IS NO WH*** APPRENTICE.


    It’s also a bit odd that they have action figures of real people. We see Presidential bobble heads and stuff but no Queen stickers or trading cards of the leaders of the world or anything.

    Wait. Shakti isn’t Shaak Ti, right? Their names are just similar?


    Ray is history before he even had the chance to meet me at all.

    Mph, I’m sure that was true before this moment too.


    well now, isn’t that a fun ending. :/
     
  6. WarmNyota_SweetAyesha

    WarmNyota_SweetAyesha Chosen One star 8

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    I love also the reviews of Pants. LOL [:D]

    I coincidentally was also wondering why they were called the Clone Wars. :huh? :p

    Nagina is thinking quit trying to fix/match me up.

    And yuppers, I just bet her uncle's unannounced visits or even announced and expected would throw things into a tizzy. [face_nail_biting]
     
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  7. Lady_Misty

    Lady_Misty Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Sounds like the school playgrounds that I remember from my four year stint in the public school system. Though you couldn't escape similar talk at church. Once my class's Sunday School teacher didn't come and it was three of us in our classroom and the two boys started talking some Star Wars, it was 1999, while I believe a fourth member of the class either went to another class or wandered the hallways due to a mental handicap. We had some fun before an adult discovered that we were unsupervised and sent us to another classroom. That was the Sunday that one of the boys broke a chair.

    The Separatists have arrived at Coruscant.
     
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  8. earlybird-obi-wan

    earlybird-obi-wan Chosen One star 6

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    Fun with the children at the playground and a date/fix;)
     
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  9. AzureAngel2

    AzureAngel2 Chosen One star 6

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    THIS THREAD IS CLOSING DOWN! I MIGHT NOT COME BACK TO THE BOARDS. I AM SORRY, BUT IT IS BETTER THIS WAY!
     
  10. Sith-I-5

    Sith-I-5 Force Ghost star 6

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    That first chapter was very, very good.

    If you return quickly enough, I will tell you what I liked about it. And the fact that you were able to tell us that you were going, tells us you were not banned.

    Good luck in your endeavours.
     
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  11. AzureAngel2

    AzureAngel2 Chosen One star 6

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    I might write on soon. I had some ideas recently. Nyota's Heart heart already helped me to change Chapter 1.
     
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  12. AzureAngel2

    AzureAngel2 Chosen One star 6

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    ****************************************************************

    Shakti is on the brink of passing out. As if Sheev is a womaniser like Prince Xixor. “The... chan... chan,” she yelps. “Here.”


    Some of the children start waving at the man they know so well from the holo news.

    “Ah,” my uncle begins and gives us his most winning smile. The one he usually reserves just for me in a much more private setting. “Good morning, children!”

    “Good morning!” they echo, their eyes bright.

    “I hope you still have some breakfast for me,” Sheev gives into consideration. His voice is cool and clear, like a stream over smooth stones. It reminds me of the shores of Convergence back on Naboo.

    “You can have my blue milk,” suggests Jalen helpfully.

    “I get back to you about that, my young friend.” My uncle steps towards me. His face gives nothing away of his true feelings. “Mistress Samye, I presume.”

    “Supreme Chancellor,” I reply politely.

    “I am so sorry for barging in on you like this.” His handshake is electric, his eyes manic blue. “But I was on my way to a senate meeting when my pilot passed this charming kindergarten.”

    I want to point out that he should get a city map of Corruscant. The senate district is not anywhere close to this place. But the feel of his hand in mine calms me down. I am with family now.


    A kind of blissful relaxation rolls through my body. We always had this effect on one another.

    Sly Moore glides in, giving me a shiver as usual. The tall Umbaran serves Sheev as his senior administrative aide. Zealously, she guards his secrets, but about me she is very much mistaken. She believes me to be his mistress and she could not be any more wrong.

    My uncle has been the centre point of my childhood. It was him who helped my mother, his illegitimate half-sister, to give birth to me. He shielded me from Cosinga Nero Animus Palpatine – his abusive father and my grandfather – as much as humanly possible. His affection for me was always deep and tender. Nothing acted out, nothing planned.


    After the massacre on the family yacht he hid me from his dark Sith master – Darth Plageius – and raised me in secret.

    Sly Moore does not know any of that and Sheev would never correct her dirty assumptions of me. He simple does not wish anyone in the universe to find out the nature of our relationship.

    My uncle drinks blue milk. He has some shuura fruit from Naboo and some local vegetable. I have to look at him over and over again. He really has breakfast with my kindergarten group.

    The last time I felt this detached from reality was the day my husband died. I had stayed numb for many weeks afterwards. Right now, I feel strangely alive though. I sense everything in the group room with startling clarity: the dance between light and shadow, the excitement of the children having the Supreme Chancellor among us, the smooth surface of the breakfast table, the displeasure of Sly Moore, the heat of my tea mug and the nervousness of my teacher colleague.

    And there is something else in the back of my mind. Mara shines in the Force like she has never shone before. The Kaiburr crystal incarnate.

    I take her little hand into my own, pray for her that Sheev is too busy to notice how special she is.

    My own Force powers are not strong enough to cover her up like a safety blanket. I am not good at deceit and masquerades. My uncle became a specialist instead. One of us had to be. Once he told me that I was stronger than him, more upright. There was no envy or greed when he said that. It was just a fact, shared between us.

    Mara's hand is so soft and pliable like I was once under my grandfather's administrations.

    I should not visit the past like this. It is a dangerous place to be. Besides, I am the total opposite of Sheev. While he plunged into never-ending night, I ran towards the light. Yet we have a shared history of pain, an eternal bond. We are both survivors of House Palpatine. For the better or the worse.

    My eyes scan his face. He prematurely ages by years of calling on dark powers. In his youth he was such a handsome man. Back then, I thought he looked like one of the winged guardians who brought our people to Naboo.

    My uncle is very aware of his choices. There is no insanity driving him. He is not a psychopath nor is he split into various personalities. The helpless child he once was craved for power and found it in unnatural sources. He will enslave the entire galaxy to make sure that he never is crushed by another being again.

    I sigh and drink a bit from my own blue milk.

    All the candour Sheev shows the children is true. But it is not directed at them, but at me. He agrees with me and my lifestyle, even though I am committed to education of young ones like a Jedi knight. There is no wish he would like to turn down. He always wanted the best for me, even when the darkness in him grows like a cancer. Since the death of Darth Plagious more than ever.

    I never asked what occurred between the two of them. Not that I was afraid of it. It is not my place to know. If my uncle wanted me to know, he would have told me. I am aware that there is no trust, loyalty and love between a Sith lord and his apprentice.

    I possess a place in my Sheev's withered heart that is unheard of in the history of predecessors. Due to me he has been able to be like an older brother and a parent all at once.

    My eyes cannot help to search his, for I want to know what brings him here, to the most unlikely place possible. He is a war monger, the destroyer of worlds. A master of puppets that hides secret plans within more secret plans.

    “Would you like to join our morning circle, Supreme Chancellor?” I ask him, immediately getting the darkest of looks from Sly Moore.

    “That would please me very much,” my uncle smiles, before his aid can point out how overcrowded his time schedule is. For me he will take time. Right now nothing else in the universe matters to him. Not even the war that he started out there.

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    (To be continued!)
     
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  13. DarthUncle

    DarthUncle Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    Great to see an update on this story, the start left me very curious where this would lead AzureAngel2!

    Always interesting to see an unexpected view on an iconic character. Wouldn't have pegged Palps for an affectionate brother, but so far you make it seem possible. Also, you make Star Wars in a kindergarten setting work; adding Palpatine in there is a bit creepy, with the contrast between the kids being kids and showing innocent friendliness, Palps public faced good nature, and the monster within. And then your protagonist, who seemingly has quite a bit of darkness surrounding here but also something of a ray of light for them both.

    Hope clone wars doesn't overpower life on Coruscant for the little ones - so much war, and new hope is far away!
     
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  14. AzureAngel2

    AzureAngel2 Chosen One star 6

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    Husband of mine. I am very pleased about your thoughtful comments. And very glad that you are no profiler. You will always catch me doing things, see right through me into the very core of my being. My stories are not safe from your sharp mind, nor are my paintings. Thanks for having taking the time to read that!

    I am looking forward to be re-united with you tomorrow evening. Have a safe journey home! :*
     
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  15. earlybird-obi-wan

    earlybird-obi-wan Chosen One star 6

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    Palpatine can be deceiving. He is a master at that
     
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  16. WarmNyota_SweetAyesha

    WarmNyota_SweetAyesha Chosen One star 8

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    Fascinating and unique perspective into Palpatine's motives and inner self! =D= =D= And let me say straight up AzureAngel2 - that I SQUEEEEEEEEEE [face_laugh] just over the exchanges between you and DarthUncle in your story threads! Very much L/M type feels. ^:)^ :* :*
     
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  17. AzureAngel2

    AzureAngel2 Chosen One star 6

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    This is exactly why I bought a certain legend SW book inside the railway station book shop. Just to make sure I understand his development.


    Dear Nyota, I am happy to report that DarthUncle roams our kitchen at present while I type this. About Palpatine, I have been watching too many episodes of "Hannibal" recently. I am also a big Dexter (Morgan) fan as my husband pointed out. And I fell in love with "Bates Motel", too. The Vader fan girl that I am will always seek light in darkness or at least try to understand evil.
     
  18. AzureAngel2

    AzureAngel2 Chosen One star 6

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    We all clean the table after breakfast and brush our teeth in the little bath room next to our group room. Then we all get pillows and form a circle.

    Sheev winks at me for a short heartbeat. He is reminded of the hideouts we had on Naboo. When we went to the grassland to have a secret picnic, he would take a pillow for me. These days he is very far away from the innocent pleasures of our common childhood.

    The morning circle starts with a song. It leaves my lips with ease and infects the children with joy.

    “Twinkle, twinkle, little star,
    How I wonder what you are.
    Up above the world so high,
    Like a diamond in the sky.
    Twinkle, twinkle, little star,
    How I wonder what you are!
    When the blazing sun is gone,
    When there's nothing he shines upon,
    Then you show your little light,
    Twinkle, twinkle, through the night.Twinkle, twinkle, little star,
    How I wonder what you are!

    In the dark blue sky so deep
    Through my curtains often peep
    For you never close your eyes
    Til the morning sun does rise
    Twinkle, twinkle, little star
    How I wonder what you are

    Twinkle, twinkle, little star
    How I wonder what you are”


    They sing along like they always do. Despite the stranger in their midst. The powerful politician who has chosen to come to this place of learning in a time of war. A Sith lord so perfectly hidden in the open, that even the Jedi Order is blind to his presence.

    I was always good at singing and memorizing things. This is perhaps why my uncle sought out for somebody like Sly Moore. But he bent and twisted her beyond recognition, something he never dared to do with me. For reasons only known to him, he left me as I was.

    Shakti takes over from me. “Today something is different, is it not?” she addresses the children.

    They all go, “Yeah!”

    “So what is different then?” my colleague continues.

    “The Chancellor!” beams Beaplli.

    Uninvited, my uncle takes over. “But I am not so different from you, children. I am a person. And I have dreams and fears like you.”

    I blink. He is not really speaking to the children. His words are for me. Only for me. Is this a kind of good-bye.

    Before I can ponder on it, little Mara leaves her pillow and scuttles over to him. Her speed is amazing. I cannot hinder her. Like a queen she thrones on his lap, her small face looking up at him. Is it possible that she realizes his hurt like I always did?

    Suddenly, a male Chagrian in expensive garments rushes in. Mas Amedda should be in the senate and not anywhere near us. “Supreme Chancellor...” he starts.

    Anger flickers over my Sheev's face, but then his features glide back into pleasant composure. “What ever it is, it can wait. The children and I are in the middle of something.”

    “But the Separatists...”

    He raises a dismissive hand. “Not here, not now.”

    Sly Moore starts shoving her colleague aside, pushes him wordlessly towards the entrance.

    “This dreadful war weighs heavy on me.” My uncle fully focuses on the children again. “It has been a time since I played some fun games. Do you happen to know any?”

    Of course they do and they start babbling all at the same time.

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    (To be continued!)
     
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  19. earlybird-obi-wan

    earlybird-obi-wan Chosen One star 6

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    Palps is sweet towards the children. Is it with a motive?
     
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  20. WarmNyota_SweetAyesha

    WarmNyota_SweetAyesha Chosen One star 8

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    An excellent bit of contrast between Palps' outward displays with the children and also how Nagina knows/knew him to be, but also his other true self-- [face_thinking] the one still hidden :eek: =D= You portray this dichotomy excellently without a hint of OOC-ness. @};-
     
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  21. DarthUncle

    DarthUncle Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    I like how you show a human side to Palpatine, and very interesting that he seems to be saying goodbye to this part of him, as represented by his kindergarten relative, literally coming by, playing a last time with the innocent before his big game will transform him into the emperor.

    I hope he didn't learn about little Mara just now, though I suppose we already know it is going to be bad for her for a while. Or would that all be only legend, which, while containing some truth, might not be the full truth?
     
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  22. AzureAngel2

    AzureAngel2 Chosen One star 6

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    Well, it is always hard to tell what he is up to, because he is a sith. :p



    Thanks for confirming that! The flaw in some of us Vader fan girl´s is that we always search for redeemable qualities, a pull of the light so to speak. With a character like Palpatine this is a thin line... ;)



    You are straight to the point as usual, husband of mine. You unveil/ unravel all my intends. [face_blush]

    Okay, here the update:


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    Throughout the morning circle little Mara stays on Sheev's lap. Now and then his hands wander through her red locks.

    Throughout the morning circle little Mara stays on Sheev's lap. Now and then his hands wander through her red locks.

    It is not jealousy that I feel. It is sheer panic, but I keep it well masked.

    My uncle stays the entire morning, taking part in the other group activities that follow the morning circle. He observes pictures being painted the old fashioned style. He watches complex buildings rising on the carpet. He gazes at role plays mirroring the battlefields of our galaxy.

    Even though I know he avoids looking at little Mara too long and too much, I know he is still smitten by her. And that worries me. The last little girl he took in was Sly Moore. A mercy kill would have been a better idea for the Umbaran.

    After lunch Sheev first takes his leave from Shakti, then he turns to me. His hand feels right in mine. It echoes the thousand times it did before. The sad moments, the fun ones. “Tonight,” he speaks straight into my mind. “In your place.”

    “Supreme Chancellor,” I say aloud. “It was a pleasure having you here.”

    “Oh no, Mistress Samye. The pleasure was truly on my side.” He pats little Mara, who sniffs against his robe. “Hush, little one! All will be well.”

    He speaks to both of us. I am not a fool.

    Mas Amedda pokes his large head in again.

    “There must be always time for politeness and good manners. The Republic owes women like Mistress Treboh and Mistress Samye a lot. Even in dark, desperate times they keep a light on. Look at all those happy children.”

    I do my best to decipher a lie, but I do not. My uncle is truly happy that I do my work, even though it opposes all that he is.

    There is an old legend on Naboo,” he muses. “There are six impenetrable gates that hold back chaos.”

    “House Palpatine is one of those gates,” Sly Moore cuts in, even though it is totally out of place. She glares at me in displeasure. “You seem to know about it, Mistress Samye.”

    “I read a lot,” I prompt, which is not a total lie.

    “You are from Naboo, too, are you not?” she goes on, sending shivers down my spine.

    Now Sheev has to interfere without losing his countenance. It costs him enormous strength. I can tell that. And so can Sly Moore. She is sorry, but that will not help her once they are alone in his private chambers. His anger is like a whirlwind of doom.

    “Mistress Samye is Corellian, which can be clearly heard in her refined accent.” He looks at her with kind eyes. “Are you losing your sharp wits? I hope that I do not need to find a new assistant.”

    My uncle says it like a joke, but it is a threat. In trying to solve the riddle that is me, she risked too much. Like Darth Maul, his unfortunate apprentice, she might get replaced any time soon.

    I am so glad that little Mara is too young to step in. But Sheev will watch her from now on. Like he watches Anakin Skywalker since the Battle of Naboo.

    My uncle and his entourage leave for the senate.

    I cannot wait to see him tonight. So many questions burn in my mind. Some urgent pleas even.
     
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  23. Sith-I-5

    Sith-I-5 Force Ghost star 6

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    Enjoyed the third chapter introducing the young Mara.

    Subtle little clues that we may encounter again much later - brunette, floating toys, risk of getting taken by the Jedi Order; but then you wonder if Nagina had discussed the little girl with her uncle...
     
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  24. earlybird-obi-wan

    earlybird-obi-wan Chosen One star 6

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    Palps and his manipulations[face_devil]
     
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  25. WarmNyota_SweetAyesha

    WarmNyota_SweetAyesha Chosen One star 8

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    Whew, you just know he noticed something interesting about Mara don't you? [face_worried] Looking forward to what happens that evening.
     
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