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darshaassant Registered: Mar '05	Date Posted: 8/17/05 6:59am Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) - authors note 8/13/05
	Ahhh missed a few posts.... stupid active notification.. But this is beautiful, beautiful.... Your fics always make me cry. -----signature----- An infrequent poster
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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 8/25/05 12:18pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) - authors note 8/13/05
	Reply time. I know it's been a while but I've been having problems with my leg.... astrovirgo Sorry it took so long to reply. I guess I'm trying to convey that I thought you were holding her in reserve to betray Obi-Wan and allow the excrement to hit the fan. But it's not that I don't like her, in fact, that fear came from wanting to like her desperately but still being afraid of some betrayal. I do like her! You never know with a fan fic writer. I could turn her into the worst OC ever. But you'll just have to wait for that. It's okay. Some people like her, some don't. Some are still undecided - well, the jury is still out, isn't it.. As for waiting to finish a story before posting, I agree completely. I wish I had done that with this story. But it's so long that I might have abandoned it a year ago if not for my wonderful readers! Thanks so much for dropping by. I really appreciate it. Nem I thought you had dropped off the face of the earth there for a while. And catching up is always fun to do. Gives you more to read, after all and you don't have to wait so long for posts when you do that. I'm glad you liked the sparring match. I had a lot of fun writing it - I'm not good with action so anytime something works out, I'm happy. I could just picture their relationship! I adore the pairing. But you knew that already. And the bumping into the kid was to let you know that the Jedi were not held in high esteem in this story. It was my way of showing that the regular folk were disenchanted. Ah the Council. Well, next post you will be even less happy with them. I know I was not! I hope you enjoy the next post. It will be out sometime today. Thanks for remembering me! mithrissa LOL on the escape. My updates are very sporatic so I could imagine you might miss quite a few. Glad you liked Le'orath. She is quite a match for Qui-Gon, with her own problems, her own way of looking at the relationship and trying very hard to do the right thing for everyone even if it wasn't possible. Let's face it, Qui-Gon isn't always the easiest person to love. As for the fabric and hair and skin, fabric I use quite a bit because I'm a costumer and love the feel of it. Plus hair, heck I'd love to run my fingers through Qui-Gon's hair anytime! The skin I usually use when I'm writing romance or else to show the horrors of death. Skin has such a nice ring to it and I get a really vivid picture in my mind whenever I write about stuff like that! Of course, with romances, you can get pretty lyrical. All those metaphors and similes and just plain poetry. Thanks for reading! Shadowolf Welcome, Layren is lovely to tell you about my little story. She's been there from the beginning and I really value her! I love Atel. She's a real person, with all the flaws and strengths needed to be Obi-Wan's apprentice. I just adore her. But, that doesn't mean she isn't annoying at times and even downright dreadful. But she's a great character to write. Ah, yes, Qui-Gon. I'm known for being an adamant Qui lover and I think it shows through. I just adore the man. As for Anakin, I really thought that Anakin's character would have many of the traits from the PT, just that he would be more softened by not being in the Jedi Order. Especially after ROTS, I thought he would have been better off not going to the Jedi. He was also fun to write. And he will be back eventually. Obi-Wan has a few more trials in store for him. Poor guy. He never seems to get a break. I certainly do know how to put a character through the wringer! As for the Council, they are coming up shortly and I think you will like them even less than before. Thanks. -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 11/2/09 jedidas3's Master Merlin - Diplomatic Immunity - http://boards.theforce.net/nswff/b10808/30459852
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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 8/25/05 12:28pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) - authors note 8/13/05
	LE Thanks but it has had a good side. I've been so bored that I actually wrote another post - a really long one. It will be up sometime today. Musing Thanks. Them's the breaks .. oh, bad pun. astraevirgo I do have some bad things happen on vacation but I've had great ones too. I guess it balances out. Kitara Thanks! Kynstar Thanks. I admit it. It was me chasing down Qui-Gon that got me the broken leg. Darn Jedi. He needs to stop running away. P_A Thanks. It's owwing me a bit right now - I've been up too long. A certain dark-haired Master would help! HHP Wow, a blast from the past. Glad to see that you are still reading. I figured I'd lost you a long time ago. Thanks. Jedi_Tigris I broke my leg outside of Provo, Utah and spent the rest of my vacation inside a house in Leadville, Colorado. Saw lots of curtains and ceilings but not much else. Well, until we drove back to Salt Lake City to fly back. That was a tale in itself. Thanks. darshaassant My stories make you cry???? You aren't reading the right ones then...LOL. Thanks, glad you enjoyed it so far. -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 11/2/09 jedidas3's Master Merlin - Diplomatic Immunity - http://boards.theforce.net/nswff/b10808/30459852
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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 8/25/05 2:24pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) - authors note 8/13/05
	See you people reaped the reward for my broken leg. I had time to actually write! When last we saw our intrepid band, Qui-Gon had just been hauled into the Jedi Council and Tharten threatened to sentence him.... Master Tharten sat there waiting for his reaction, and enjoyed the flush of outrage on his face as she repeated her question. Pausing between each word as though talking to a simpleton, she asked, "Have you anything to add to your report before we pass sentence?" "You cannot do this. Not without a trial. Not without looking at all the evidence that we have..." Leaning forward, her pinched face a mask of vulture-death and vengeance, taloned claws clutching at the Council chair, eyes space cold and just as dark, she growled out, "Just watch me." And now the next post and it's a long one - 10 pages. From across the dusty chambers, Xacor shifted abruptly, frowning his indignation at this turn of events. Speaking in clipped, decidedly-annoyed tones, he pointed out, "Master Tharten, you have overstepped your authority in this matter. The Arrest and Punishment Division has clear jurisdiction, in both arranging for a trial and determining the evidence to be presented. The Council is to sit as jury, but not before all evidence has been finalized as irrefutable. I..." But the Rodian Master, Veendo, spat back. "Enough of this. Sera is right. We've been debating this for far too long and the evidence is quite clear that Jinn is a murderer, a brigand and a filthy slaver. Corrupted beyond all redemption. Not to mention that he had lightsabers in his possession in clear violation of Republic law. Where do we draw the line if not with this felon?" There were several nods, a self-serving barrage of agreement that grieved Obi-Wan. After all this time, he had still hoped for justice among the Jedi Order. Even with all the heartache he had endured over the years, he had not realized just how truly lost the Jedi had become. And there was no one to stop it, no one to save what was left of the Order he had loved all his life. The loss of it was almost overwhelming. Ignoring the obvious pain in Obi-Wan's eyes, Sle'fey spoke up, his ruffled fur swirling in annoyance, his dark gaze flicking lightening fast toward the Republic representative almost as if to gather permission to continue, and then he stared squarely at the distraught Knight. His muzzle curled slightly, "We may have been debating this but it is an important case. Jinn has not had a proper trial." And his beady gaze grew even more pointed, watching Kenobi's reaction, dissecting it and him. Finally, the Bothan leaned back, shrugging his indifference, and huffed, "It would be in our best interests that it be perfectly legal." Master Tharten's eyes were as black as the emptiness between galaxies. "We have all the evidence we need, Sle'fey, and you know it. The murders alone are enough to send him to prison or worse." She glared at the Bothan, daring him to disagree but it was Xacor's voice that cut across the darkened hall. "Masters, you must realize that this course of action could be disastrous for the Jedi Order." Tharten turned slowly, staring at this fool of a Councilor who would dare disagree with her once she had made herself clear. She shot him a look that could easily freeze the planet's core. But he was apparently not interested in cold stares. Xacor held up his hand. "Masters, please...." He paused for effect, making sure that all were listening. There could be no mistake in this. Leaning forward, looking at each of the Councilors in turn, he pointed out, "If we sentence Jinn without the evidence to back it up, the Naboo Contingent could make our lives very uncomfortable. Senator Amidala has already contacted my office about it. She has told me that she is personally overseeing this case." The annoyed murmurs of thwarted agendas began to build but the Zabrek cut across the noise. "I don't need to remind you that she heads the Loyalist Committee and is one of the most influential Senators on the planet." "Does it matter how influential she is? This is a Jedi matter." The Rodian's green snout was wet with disdain. He dismissed the idea with a wave of one webbed hand. "Master Veendo, this may be a Jedi matter but the Senate has the final say in Jedi affairs." Xacor's face hardened with pique in remembrance of the heated discussion he had had earlier with that Naboo woman. "Do you think the Order is not without .. certain improprieties? It could make things quite difficult, especially with our budget coming up in committee next week." "And just why is she so interested in Jinn?" Tharten swiveled around, looking at Qui-Gon with narrowed eyes and harsh curiosity. But the Bendu stood there, silent as stone, his eyes looking beyond this sorrow, out into the clean night. Xacor shrugged, growling back with irritation, "Former Jedi Jinn here has been friends with the good Senator for several years. Apparently, good enough that she would think to interfere in Jedi business." Stepping forward abruptly, Obi-Wan pointed out, "It is only natural that Senator Amidala be concerned. Master Jinn was her security captain during the Battle of Theed. He helped to save her planet from invasion, something I believe that the Jedi Order should have...." But before he could continue, he was interrupted by the annoyed huff of the Bothan Master. "That information is irrelevant to this inquiry." Sle'fey barked out, "The Senator can make all the demands she wants but former Jedi, criminals or not, fall under our jurisdiction." He flicked out one paw, his claws pointing to the center of the chamber. His piercing stare was an unspoken reminder that Kenobi should remember his place in all this and that place was not to be lecturing his betters in the obvious. Reluctantly, Obi-Wan moved back. He did not hear the crunch of the broken tiles beneath his feet or feel the grit of uncleaned floors. He did not see the dusty corners of the room or the spider-crack along one window beyond Sle'ey' chair. He saw nothing but the petty maneuvers for power, for control. It was the very core of the problem that was now the Jedi Order - backstabbing, divisive and unclean. Gone was the pure oneness with the Force's will and the search for peace and justice. Here there was no justice. And, all the while, his Master was in grave danger of being sent to prison. He was thoroughly sick at heart. The ungracious voice of Representative Zaros interrupted the argument. "Gentle beings, please, there is no need for concern." He stood up, walking slowly towards Qui-Gon, his face scorn-dark with contempt as his eyes glided from the ever-silent Jinn to Kenobi and back again. As he stopped, crossing his arms and staring at the trio, he looked every inch the corpulent bureaucrat - greedy, self-serving, and overly impressed with his own importance. His bullion-encrusted coat glittered with gems flashing blood-red in the subdued light; by day, he would have been blinding. After a moment, he gave a half-grunt, then turned away. Moving with all the cocksure embellishment of a Telosian peacock among lowly mudfowl, he walked slowly around the Chambers, posing with each step. In any other place, he would have been dismissed as absurdity, but here all eyes followed him, waiting on his every word, and he knew it. "I don't think that Senator Amidala will be a problem. The Supreme Chancellor has already discussed this case with me. He is quite... anxious that the matter be settled quickly." The contempt in his voice made it clear that Senators, even ones as influential as Naboo's, were insignificant. Sle'fey was frowned at that. "But Chancellor Palpatine... isn't he sympathetic to Jinn's case? After all, Jinn did help free his people." Zaros waved off the Bothan's concern with a indifferent wave of his bejeweled hand. "I have been assured by the Chancellor....strongly assured... that he wants justice to be served, especially in this instance." Obi-Wan fought a shiver of icy dread that slithered up his spine. But as he watched the bureaucrat swagger through the chairs of the Jedi Council and stop beside Master Sle'fey's chair, his alarm only grew stronger. That corpulent rshhak, Zaros, leaned into the soft cushion and stared straight at Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan could feel the man' malice, bestial hunger of a rancor beast looking at hapless prey, all blood lust and clawed dishonor. "Jinn has been proclaimed one of the Heroes of Naboo." The insinuation in Zaros's voice made the title seem insignificant and tainted with corruption, "And, as such, must be held to a higher standard than another felon might warrant. He also heads a well-funded organization that is known for its seemingly charitable works. He is influential among the Lake People and others high in the Naboo government. If he has defied the law.... we cannot allow this. It would only encourage others." Tharten nodded regally, "Jinn has ever been a thorn in the side of justice, Representative Zaros. I am glad to see that the Office of the Supreme Chancellor has seen fit to recognize it." She turned to stare at Qui-Gon, her dark eyes glittering with sated satisfaction. "Has he made any suggestions as to... punishment when this Bendu is found guilty?" "Master Tharten," Protesting, Obi-Wan stepped forward once more, his hands clenched by his side in frustration. He had to do something; he could not just stand by and let them imprison Qui-Gon, not without a fight. "Masters, you have not tried Master Jinn as yet. He is not guilty of..." "Kenobi, you are out of order." Veendo's harsh rasp cut across Obi-Wan's protest and several other voices echoed his remarks. So much for a fair hearing. Obi-Wan stood there, trying to tamp down his anger at such a travesty of the Jedi Order. They had been the guardians of the Light for a thousand generations. He could not let that light die here, today. "I am not out of order if you have already decided on his fate. Without council, without solid evidence and the ability to show that the evidence in question may be tainted... Masters, this is not justice." Xacor leaned forward, pinning Obi-Wan with a stare that was only slightly less hostile than Tharten's ominous scowl. "Kenobi, need I remind you that your input is not needed at this moment? That it was your own evidence that has brought Jinn here for punishment? You have no one but yourself to blame for bringing this to our attention." "My evidence..." The fury began to gather behind Obi-Wan's eyes. That they could accuse him of this and do so without the least smattering of guilt, it was almost too unbelievable for words. He felt as if he were caught in some diabolical plot for which there was no way out. "How dare you suggest..." "Obi-Wan, don't." The gentle reproof cut through the younger man' anger, leaving him wavering in the deepening gloom. He turned to Qui-Gon and shook his head in frustration. Raggedly, he pleaded with his old mentor, "You don't know what you are saying." "Let it go, Obi-Wan." A rumble of affection, loss and acceptance, and, for a moment, there was quiet in the tiled Chamber of the Jedi Council. Then Zaros let out a discordant humpf and sat down abruptly into the center chair. Smacking his bejeweled hands together in a parody of applause, he brought attention back to the matter at hand. "Well, well, the great man himself speaks and his old Padawan immediately obeys. Trained him to jump at every word have you, Jinn?" A snort of derisive laughter and he opened his hands to let everyone share the joke. "Obedient to a fault or rather to a rogue." For a moment, the silence in the chamber was deafening and then a few half-hearted snickers fell towards the Senate representative. But he did not seem well-pleased with the response. Sle'fey sent an unreadable look towards Xacor and then leaned forward toward the trio, his white fur matted with distaste. "Have you nothing to say then, Qui-Gon Jinn? It is your fate that we are discussing after all." With a single glance toward a worried Obi-Wan and a wordless plea for acceptance of what he was about to do, he turned back to face his accusers once more. Serene, cool, and confident that he was following the will of the Force in this, his eyes were steady as he replied, "You have already decided my fate. Now you are merely putting the facade of legality upon it. I will not help you." Almost as one, the nine Jedi Councilors glared at Jinn and began to whisper among themselves. The frustrated murmurs and huffs of annoyance grew, echoing off the stained columns and chipped tiles, before settling down into a crowd of noisy dissatisfaction. It was apparent to the wisest of the Jedi Order that the so-called Bendu Champion was a madman and a fool. However, before discontent grew beyond all control, corrupt bureaucracy brought attention back to the matter at hand. Zaros threw his hands wide and sneered, "You see, he has said that he is guilty. What more do we need?" His muzzle curling in frustration, the Bothan pointed out, "Evidence, hard evidence, Representative Zaros." With a sharp slap onto the chair's arm, Zaros spat out, "Kenobi's report is good enough for me. In this case, the Supreme Chancellor has made it quite clear to me that Jinn's crimes must be punished to the fullest extent, the fullest extent..." Master Tharten's black eyes turned darker still but behind that opaque stare was the gleam of a predator's bloodlust. "And if he is shown to be a murderer?" Obi-Wan drew in a grating breath and tried to find the words to stop this before it was too late; Distinct words, spoken as sharp and quick as a blade slicing through air. "He is not a murderer. I have proof." But Kenth Zaros, Senate Representative to the Jedi Council would not be stopped, certainly not by a man who has clearly shown his bias. "Chancellor Palpatine would not object to the ultimate sacrifice. Death to all murderers, of course." Obi-Wan took a deliberate step towards the rat-faced fool, consciously opening his cloak to reveal his lightsaber, a reminder of just who and what he was. His words, if possible, were ever sharper. "He is not a murderer." Zaros was ever the fool. He did not know that even Knights can only be pushed so far before they pushed back. He rambled on, "He cannot be perceived to be above the morals and justice of the Republic. Not even for one of such a Hero of Naboo. The vibroblade of the Law must cut deeply in this case. We must rid the Republic of such riffraff, a gangrenous canker...." Obi-Wan's hands were balled tight in anger and his voice was rising. "If you are condemning him on my evidence, then you must listen to me." He began to move again towards the corrupt Senate clerk but Qui-Gon's soft murmur of "Don't" caught at him, holding him still. Frantically, he whispered back, "This is not justice, Master." "It is the Force's will that I am here, Obi-Wan." "Is it the Force's will that they condemn you without facts?" The younger man growled out, still only a whisper but growing louder as he tried to battle both the stubborn man he loved as a father and the injustice looming like a death-shroud over the Council Chamber. That his own Padawan just stood there, listening impassively through all this, did not help, no matter the expectations of the Order. Obi-Wan felt as if he were sinking into the abyss and there were no handholds. Master Sle'fey watched the pair's furious muttering from the corner of his eye, all the while trying to garner the attention of Kenth Zaros. Finally, with some delicate maneuvering, the Bothan was able to reassure him of the Order's loyalties. "We will do whatever we can, Representative Zaros, of course. But it may be difficult to come to some accord quickly. If Knight Kenobi's assertions are correct, the evidence...." The bejeweled hands waved off assertions. Zaros had his instructions in this case and nothing would stop him from carrying out the wishes of the leader of the Republic. "The Supreme Chancellor does not want this to drag on for weeks. Justice is served best when swiftly done." But Obi-Wan had had enough, of everything. His bitter voice filled the room. "This is not justice. Damn you all. He is innocent." Both Masters Veendo and Tharten began to speak at once, their words of "Absurd" and "Your own evidence shows that he is a murderer" did not faze the younger man. Even Zaros jumped into the fray with "Lies, ridiculous lies all of them" but Obi-Wan would not be silenced. Not this time. Not even for his Master. He waited until the cacophony of corrosive sound died down before cutting across all of the accusations. "I will be heard in this." Standing there, arms folded in immovable stance, legs spread apart as if he could remain there for an eternity of argument, he looked at the Masters before him and waited for their attention. At last, Sle'fey bowed his head toward the stubborn Knight. "Very well, Kenobi." And then he sat back, relaxing as if to hear a fantastical fable from a faraway land or some preposterous story that had no grounding in reality. Waving his paw in a gracious parody of royal condescension, the Councilor bared his teeth, grinning. "Let's hear what you have to say." For a moment, Obi-Wan was not sure if the Bothan was mocking him or merely playing some ignoble game of his own. But he would not forsake the opportunity to clear his Master's name. Not this time. "After my report to you two days ago, Padawan Sl'etah and I decide to pursue the investigation further. I knew that Master Jinn was not the type to murder anyone and, frankly, the datafiles seemed too neat, too complete to be real. It felt like a trap. We also had data from other sources that put Master Qui-Gon at locations across the Galaxy during the times of the killings on Telos." Zaros brushed off the idea with a diffident wave of his hand, muttering "Ridiculous"; there were several other whispered comments among the members of the Council but Obi-Wan ignored the restless audience. Justice would be done today. "As you know, my Padawan has exceptional slicing skills and, on closer examination, she was able to determine that the files were corrupted. An embedded code in the files we found linked Qui-Gon to the murders. When the code was deleted, the files on the murders wiped clean and new data appeared. That there were no deaths. It was all a lie. From the very beginning." The Bothan Master's eyes darkened in dismay, "No deaths?"; And Xacor merely frowned and nodded, "Interesting..." But it was Master Thartan who was most opposed to the idea. In fact, she was furious. Her face a death-mask of dark ire, her eyes black with insult, she snapped back, "Are you telling me that there were no murders? That the files you found and produced for this Council were lies? That you were so incompetent that you and your Padawan could not even tell that the files were corrupted? Ridiculous. You are making this up." As her hands clawed at the nerfhide covering, she was half-rising from her chair. Then her mouth crabbed into certainty and she sat back with a thump. Her voice softened, asking almost of herself, "Or has he used his mind tricks on you? Can you even tell truth from the lies where he is concerned?" But Obi-Wan ignored her, was instead trying to quell the rising flood of questions, "Master, Masters, I know what we found. Do you doubt my word?" The blue-skinned woman seemed to recover her senses in time to say, "Yes, I do. Your foolish persistence in believing this rogue has lasted far too long." And before Obi-Wan could answer, Master Veeno, his glistening snout wobbling with impatience, spat out, "And why should we believe you? If the files were corrupted, you may have corrupted them on purpose, to save your Master." Kenobi jerked backwards, reacting as if he had been slapped. Drawing himself up, he faced his accusers squarely, as a true Jedi Knight should. "I would never do such a thing. Besides, my Padawan was there. You doubt her word as well?" Sera Tharten looked at him for a moment with abject pity, and then gentled her reply, as though speaking to a child or one who had just woken from a terrifying nightmare, "She follows your lead, Obi-Wan. Of course, she would agree to go along with this if she thought it would help you. She has only your best interests at heart as do I. I cannot say the same for Jinn." Pulling out the datacrystals from his pouch, he held them up, glistening stones pure as clear-water Naboo firegems, their prismatic colors flashing in the subdued light. "I have the files here, Master Thartan. They prove that what I am saying is true." Suddenly, Sle'fey put out his paw, "Very well, Kenobi. Hand them over." The conspicuous greed in his eyes was hard to ignore. "As head of the Jedi Council, I should be the first to view them. Not you, Sle'fey." Tharten was adamant. Her palm was also outstretched, reaching for the crystals and the avarice in her face was no less intense than that of the Bothan Master. As they stared at each other, Sle'fey gentled his tone but his paw remained open, ready to snatch the datafiles from Kenobi's grasp. "Sera, of course, you will see them. But, as we have often discussed, my people are better equipped to handle datacrystals than yours. Especially if they have been corrupted. Master Xacor and I will go over the information with every method at our disposal. We will get to the heart of the matter." Smiling, Tharten leaned back in her chair, fingers curled, waiting for the just right moment. "Don't be absurd, Trest. I have my own methods of cracking codes, much faster than your plodding assertions to the contrary. The datacrystals are mine by right." The paw remained steady and open. "I believe that in this case, Master Xacor and I have jurisdiction." The beady eyes of the Bothen gleamed with hunger and certainty. She stared at him for a long moment, judging whether to push for her custody of the crystals or to bide her time and retrieve them later. The room was crowded with possibilities but, in the end, the files mattered little. "I am confident that you will find nothing that we do not already know, Trest. However, I will let Obi-Wan decide who should see the crystals first - a being such as Master Sle'fey who has often scorned his achievements and stifled his growth or someone who has only wanted him to reach his full potential. In all ways." She smiled at the Knight, confident that that he would accede to her demands, and reached out her hand. "Decide, Obi-Wan." Obi-Wan blinked at the reversal of roles. Instead of argument and orders, he finally had a choice, a small one but it could mean the difference between life and death for his Master. Looking down at the crystals, he realized what a difficult decision it was. For he did not trust either Thartan or Sle'fey. Both had lied to him in the past, manipulated, forced him into roles that were repugnant and degrading. And yet... Closing his eyes, drawing in a deep breath to clear his body and his mind of emotion, he dove down into the currents of the Force. Deep, past the black swirls and red glows of darkness that were even now pulling at him within the Chambers of the Jedi Council, down into the clarity of pure energy, the wellspring of light. And yet still it was still hidden from him - the right choice. Perhaps there was no right choice; only the lesser of two bad choices.... perhaps... he had to rely on instinct just this once. And he opened his eyes and dropped the crystals into the paw of Master Trest Sle'fey. Looking almost stunned, the Bothan closed his fist around the datafiles, and nodded his head, "Knight Kenobi, you will not regret this, I promise you." But as Sle'fey stuffed the datacrystals into his pouch, Master Tharten was furious. She spat out, "Foolish boy, that is a mistake that will cost you far more than you know." She sat back, her face hard as durasteel, set in lines of reprisal and ire. She stared at him, glare snake-bright and unblinking. But Veendo seemed more annoyed than satisfied, huffing, "This will delay the case yet another day, a day that should have been devoted to more important matters." The Zabrek, Master Xacor, merely nodded, "I agree that we will need additional time to ascertain the truth about the murderers but the report should be ready tomorrow. Will that suffice, Master Veendo?" With a curt nod from the Rodian, Xacor continued, "However, the other charges are more clear-cut. Wouldn't you agree Kenobi?" Obi-Wan drew a deep breath. His instincts had told him that Master Sle'fey was the right choice to guard the datacrystals but that did not mean that he was not still afraid that he may have just made one of the biggest mistakes of his life in that decision. But the moment was gone and he could only press forward. There was no turning back now. Speaking carefully, he said, "I believe that there are circumstances where..." Grunting with annoyance, Representative Zaros looked from one Master to another before turning his attention back to the center of the room. He had had enough of being ignored, especially by Jedi who owed everything to the Republic. It was time to press on with the attack; he had his orders and that did not include Jinn going unpunished. Somehow... In a loud, flat voice, he interrupted Kenobi's explanation, "Jinn, your underling here," he ignored the blistering stares that several Masters sent his way, "has reported that you have been transporting slaves." Snorting in derision, he sneered, "Slaves, Jinn? That is certainly unexpected of a former Jedi, even with your rogue reputation. Clearly in violation of Republic law. Are you selling them on the open market or are you bringing them to a secondary broker for sale later?" Obi-Wan shifted uncomfortably. He knew that his old Master would not answer but he still hoped that the Bendu would change his mind. But that hope was in vain. Qui-Gon Jinn stood there, silent and serene. His hands were still manacled in the blue-haze of cruel cuffs, the slight lines of shock and color enveloping his wrists in harsh denial of the Living Force that had touched his life and given it meaning; he looked every part the very embodiment of a Jedi Master. But he was a Jedi no longer. For a moment, he ignored the crowd of eyes staring at him. Gazing out into the darkened night, he saw only the arrowed lines of light that was the lifeblood of Coruscant and beyond, the cold, clean depths of the Galaxy and the path home. But even that was denied him now. Returning back to the shackles of questions and punishment, of acceptance and service to others, he merely bowed his head and waited to walk the path that was his fate. After a few moments, Sle'fey asked quietly, "Kenobi, does your Master realize just what trouble he is in?" Obi-Wan closed his eyes for a moment, knowing that it was futile to argue with Qui-Gon once he has made up his mind, and then nodding toward the Bothan, he said simply, "Yes, he knows, Master Sle'fey. He... he refused to talk about it. But I believe that...." But Master Xacor was not so understanding. As head of the Hunter's Group and the division for Arrest and Punishment, he had years of experience dealing with those that broke the laws of the Order and the Republic they served. Most prisoners pleaded for mercy or made excuses but this man, this Bendu, this former Jedi Master, was only silent. It was beginning to unnerve him. "Your beliefs are irrelevant, Kenobi. I won't have this become a stain on the reputation of the Jedi Order. Without a defense, I will have no recourse but to sentence him to prison. Force-collared, naturally. We can't have him escaping with his... abilities, now can we? Perhaps you can get him to see the light..." "I have tried already, Master Xacor." Obi-Wan did not bother to defend his Master's stand. It would do no good, in any case. "Of course, if he gave us routes and buyers, we could lighten the sentence considerably." But Kenobi only shook his head. There would be no bargaining, not now. The Zabrek waved his hand to brush aside such stubborn foolishness. "Ah, well, silence is not always wise, Jinn. We will revisit this issue tomorrow when the files have been analyzed." An annoyed humpf cut off discussion. Thartan shook her head, dismissing these petty concerns as nonsense. "There is a more important issue than the slaves, Master Xacor. Lightsabers were found at his office in clear violation of Republic Law." "Yes, Master Tharten. But there..." As Obi-Wan began to protest, she cut him off with a sharp, "Do you have them with you?" Nodding slightly, he gestured for Atel to bring out the only hard, damning evidence of all the accusations this day. As she fumbled with the three lightsabers, their gleaming metal casings a subtle counterpoint in the darkened gloom, Obi-Wan said, "These were found in Master Jinn's office." It hurt to say it but it was the truth and he would not hide beneath lies at this late date. Tharten's black eyes watched with hunger as Atel displayed the sabers, the Councilor's blue hands reaching out and back again as if to capture the prizes for her own. But in the end, she said reluctantly, "They belong with Master Xacor, Padawan Sl'etah." Throwing a look of concern toward Obi-Wan, Atel whispered a quick, "I'm sorry, Master," as she handed over the lightsabers and moved back into place. He could only nod, knowing that there would be more questions and more accusations from the ring of Jedi Masters. And, to his sorrow, Atel was not on his side in this. But that knotted problem would have to wait for another time and place. What mattered now was how to get his Master out of this gundark nest alive. It did not take long for the confrontation to begin. "Any explanation, Jinn?" The skin on Tharten's face began to take on a purplish cast, as amusement replaced anger in her eyes. And her smile never wavered as she watched the Bendu Champion standing there silent and still. When no answer was heard and it was clear she had expected none, she leaned back in her chair and, steepling her fingertips against her lips in thought for a moment, she turned her gaze back on Obi-Wan. "Well, Kenobi, you seem to have all the answers today. Proceed." He sent a look of exasperation laced with sorrow towards Qui-Gon. He knew that there was no excuse that could mitigate the solid evidence against his old mentor. But he had to try. "Master Jinn has told me of attacks against the Bendu group, that they have been hunted down and murdered without cause. I could see that they might want to have weapons to defend themselves." Xacor would not let that pass. "Not relevant, Kenobi. He's committed a crime by owning these. And will be punished accordingly." "I must disagree, Master Xacor," the Bothan interrupted quickly, "I, too, am concerned about the so-called murders of the Bendu. This may tie in with the hundreds of other former Jedi killed across the galaxy." His voice rose in frustration, "The committee investigating this has only met a few times but the devastating losses must be stopped. And any information that Kenobi has uncovered may be of use to us." Obi-Wan was relieved to hear it, so very relieved. He had thought that Sle'fey was merely hiding the truth from the Jedi Order for his own reasons. After all, the Bothan had told him to say nothing to anyone within the Order and yet here he was, bringing all that pain, that incredible loss out into the light. The flush of hope began to rise in his throat. "I could not agree more, Master Sle'fey. I believe that if we contact the Bendu group, we should be able to exchange information and track down the killer." Perhaps, when he had handed over the datacrystals, he had chosen well after all. But his hopes were dashed a moment later when Master Tharten spat out, "Contact the Bendu group? Kenobi, that is.. have you any idea of how ridiculous.... Surely, you must realize that we think that someone in the Bendu group is the likely killer." As Qui-Gon closed his eyes in sorrow at this turn of events, Obi-Wan's startled rasp echoed through the rafters of the Council Chamber. "What?" He could not believe what he was hearing. Was there nothing that the Jedi Order would not twist into darkness? Her smile grew wider. She seemed to drink in their despair, almost as if it were fine wine and a rare vintage at that. "We have been tracking our own operatives ever since we became aware of this problem. None of them had the motive or the opportunity to kill former Jedi. Yet, lightsabers were used in the murders." Sle'fey protested, "Sera, we have come to no conclusion at this time." But she spat back, "Who else uses that kind of weaponry?" Her eyes glittered with fervor even as her finger pointed directly at Qui-Gon. Face flushed, she snarled out, "Only Bendu. And Jinn knows who it is." "That's ridiculous. The Bendu are being murdered as well. And why would Bendu kill Jedi? They were Jedi before the Order discarded them." Obi-Wan fumbled forward, voice rising in anger at this absurdity. Echoes of whispered questions and pointed retorts began to fill the room as the Jedi Council took in this latest accusation. But it was making too much sense. And Master Tharten's vindictive poured out. "We only have Jinn's word that Bendu have died. Perhaps he is making it up to divert attention from his secret society and their activities. As for killing Jedi discards, why would I know what they thought or planned? They refused to join in the Bendu plot, perhaps or they were going to expose the Bendu before they were ready to reveal themselves?" She flung out her arm in exasperation. "But the Bendu are the prime suspects. As head of the group, Jinn would have to be in on the plot." As Atel stepped away in confusion, Obi-Wan turned to Qui-Gon, one hand on his arm, pleading for him to say something, anything. But Qui-Gon already knew it was too late. His words would only add fuel to the fire in Tharten's eyes and there was no one left to believe the truth. No one here with the courage to go beyond the obvious, to see how far the Jedi Order had gone into shadow. No one except Obi-Wan. And he could not bear to drag his Padawan down with him. So he said nothing, standing in the heart of the Jedi Council Chamber, surrounded by the night and trying not to snuff out his Padawan's light in a sea of darkness. As Master Tharten stood and began to pace the room, pausing at each of the Master's chairs until she stood tall and straight beside Senate Representative Zaros. She smiled down into his sweating face, all sneers and rancor-rabid smiles. And with each step, she fired off her accusations. "Really, Jinn, this silent treatment is wearing thin. We want answers. Who made the lightsabers? Do all the Bendu agents have them? What are the Bendu planning to do with them? Have you been hunting Jedi? Have you been killing them for revenge? Death to all those who would oppose you? Or perhaps an overthrow of the Jedi Order itself? Obi-Wan could not stand by and listen to this. "Master Thartan, surely you can't believe that Qui-Gon would do that. Surely..." She spread her hands wide, gathering all attention to her. Around the room, the silence was deafening. "Oh, but I do, Kenobi. And I'm not sure you aren't in the plot as well. It would fit. The murder victims were easily killed and someone knew just where they were. How much easier it would be to use insider information." And she was staring straight at Obi-Wan. He stepped back, stunned at such a ridiculous accusation. It was not possible that they could think this of him. He had done their bidding for over a decade, following the will of the Council, trying to find a way to fulfill his oath and still walk in the light. He had been loyal to the Order, and yet, and yet, when he looked around the room, the shuttered faces and hard eyes told a different story. He let out the breath that he didn't know he was holding. "Master Tharten, Masters, I would never do that. It would go against the Code, against my honor and my duty to the Jedi Order. I..." But she was not listening. She turned away for a moment and then, smacked her hand down hard on the back of her chair. The sharp sound ricocheted around the room like blaster fire. "Don't lie about it to us, Kenobi. Your sad devotion to that old fool has earned you nothing but pain in the last ten years. You have sacrificed a place on this Council for him, you have gone against our wishes again and again because of his tainted teachings. Foolish boy. Even now, you show yourself to be nothing but his puppet." Obi-Wan drew himself up, durasteel strong, "I am no one's puppet, least of all yours." He had never seen the woman so furious. For a moment, the clouds of darkness were alive in her eyes, coal-red rage seeping into her skin. She sank down into her chair, her hands playing with the nerfhide, tearing into the covering with ferocious claws. But as he watched, she grew still and the fiery anger was wrapped under shields of ice. Flat, unemotional, her voice was sharp as an obsidian blade. And as precise. "Since the Jedi Council must be fully informed about the Bendu and since Master Jinn has been unable or unwilling to tell us about his past and his present dealings with the Bendu, I suggest that he be given some time to think about his position." Obi-Wan could feel the danger approaching, lightening fast and just as deadly. He took a quick step forward but Tharten was not quite finished. "It is the judgment of this Council, my judgment, that Master Jinn be placed in the Force-dampened cell, AA23, until he is willing to answer any and all questions put before him." Qui-Gon turned pale, his face lined with furrows of past remembrances. That cell, where the Force was no comfort, where every fear swallowed reason, the cell where there was no hope, only terror. He swallowed hard and said nothing. There was nothing to say. He would not betray his Bendu brothers, not even in a thousand days of darkness. But he was human enough to be afraid. "Master Tharten, you can't be serious." Obi-Wan was more afraid for his old Master than he had ever been before. That dark place could lead to madness. "Oh, but I am, Kenobi." She seemed to delight in the idea. "And if you are not careful, you could join him there." Even as Obi-Wan snarled out, "You can't do this", Master Sle'fey was already protesting, "Sera, I don't think...." She snapped back, her eyes blazing with inner darkness, "No, you don't think, Sle'fey. You cannot let this kind of rebellious behavior pass. It is more than just about a mission gone bad. This is about the very Order itself. We must know what the Bendu are planning. And Jinn is the key." As she signaled for the Hunter's group to enter the room and escort the prisoner into the depths of the Temple, Obi-Wan was still trying to prevent this travesty, "This is not justice. You can't.." But Atel was no longer silent. She had never known the terror of that awful place but her Master was reacting as if it were one of the seventh hells of Ryloth and she did not want to see him punished for Jinn's mistakes. Grabbing onto his cloak with both hands, she was frantic with worry, "Master, please. You can't help him like this. You will only get into more trouble." He snarled back, jerking out of her grasp and looking at her with loathing, "Padawan, if you believe that I would stand by and let an innocent man be punished because of me, because of my report, then you don't know me at all." Stepping back abruptly, her eyes were filled with sudden tears, "Master, please don't..." But Obi-Wan turned away, just in time to see the phalanx of the guards roughly herd his old Master from the heart of the Council Chamber toward the door. He looked frantically about the room, trying to stop this somehow. But the faces that stared back were without mercy. And hard as stone. He had to try. Spying the Bothan Master gazing thoughtfully at Tharten, Obi-Wan called out to him, pleading for a return to sanity, "Please... Master Sle'fey, please you can't allow her to do this. It is not the Jedi way. Please." Turning back to Obi-Wan, Sle'fey looked... odd, resigned but with a hint of satisfaction gleaming in the depths of his dark eyes and the slow furred swirl of anticipation. The curl of his muzzle was cruelty itself. He shifted his shoulders, leaning into his Council seat as if settling back for another boring hour of Council meetings and began to study his clawtips, ignoring Obi-Wan's panicked face. Finally, he drawled out, "I'm sorry, Kenobi, but Jinn will survive. And it may bring out the truth at last." And then he deliberately looked away and began to whisper some nonsense to Representative Zaros. And with that, Qui-Gon Jinn was pushed out through the bronzium doors. As the portal began to close, he sent back one final heartfelt glance of acceptance and love to his old Padawan before he stumbled out of sight. And then the grinding clank of shuttered metal boomed in the vaulted Chamber of the most wise Councilors of the Jedi Order. Obi-Wan stood, stunned, staring at the gleaming doors as if he could somehow melt his way past them, past the guards and rescue his Master before it was too late. Too late. Pale, shaking with disbelief, he murmured, "No, don't do this." But all his appeals were in vain. And as he stepped back into the center of the Chamber of the Jedi Council, he knew he could do nothing else. Pulling out his lightsaber, he placed it on the gritty floor. "I will not be party to this. To your need for vengeance, to your disdain for the rights of others, to your lust for power. I will not submit to this, this travesty of injustice. I will resign from the Jedi and seek justice in the courts." As he backed away, Sle'fey stared at him, a astonished universe of concern glinting in his dark eyes. Clearly, he had not expected this turn of events. He started to rise but Tharten waved him back down. Breaking through the wall of silence that crowded the room, she spat out, "Don't be ridiculous, Kenobi. We can't let you go." She looked around at the other Masters, her arms flung out in annoyance, "You are too valuable a resource to the Jedi Order. You will get over this foolish emotional attachment to that old rogue in due time." But he was not listening. He was about to turn away and leave when Atel whirled around, grabbing his cloak, and blinking up into his stormy eyes. "What do you think you are doing? Have you gone mad?" It hurt to speak. He could not remember just who she was or what hold she had on his conscience. He could only see the resignation in the blue eyes of the only father he had ever known. Frowning down into her pinched face, he sighed, "No, I have finally become sane after years of madness." She tightened her grip, shaking him. "You are throwing your life away for a criminal." Her voice rose in indignation and frantic desperation. "Wake up to this, Master. He is not worth your sacrifice." Jerking back, he stepped away from her and gestured wildly toward Sle'fey and Tharten. "They stain the very name of the Jedi Order. They, those rshhak fools, would sacrifice him on their altar of control. They speak of nobility and honor and duty, fair words, but there is no substance there - just control." "He broke the law, Master. Surely you can understand this." She was frantic, pulling at his sleeve, trying to get him to calm enough to see his way clear. But he just laughed. "You think this is about Qui-Gon? No, Atel, no, not any more. They sit in their crumbling towers and let Jedi die, the people they have sworn to protect. They have discarded thousands of beings, thousands, all the while they pursue security and control. They speak well of honor and duty but the lies shine through. They know nothing of the ways of the Jedi." But even as he turned once more towards the doors, there were guards there and Masters Xacor and Sle'fey and Tharten. And their eyes all burned with determination. He was trapped. The harsh rasp of Tharten's anger coated her words with venom, spitting poison into the air. "Obi-Wan Kenobi, you have insulted the most high Councilors of the Jedi Order. You have shown that you are in league with Qui-Gon Jinn, a known criminal and potential murderer. We may also bring charges linking you with the rogue group of Jedi known as Bendu." She narrowed her eyes, gesturing for Atel to move away. Obi-Wan stood there swaying slightly. It was so unreal, a nightmare from which he could not awake. Blinking furiously, he tried to listen as Tharten intoned, "Because of your long association with the Jedi Order, we will give you time to think this over. If you will confess your actions and cooperate, you may be reinstated with the Order at our discretion. Until then, you will join your Master in cell AA23." He began to shake. The walls of the rooms seemed to swim in wavering patterns of reds and greens and turn sickeningly inward. He couldn't. He couldn't go back there. Not again. Oh, Force, not again. But he did not resist when the guards grabbed his arms and thrust him through the door. He did not pull away as they shoved and prodded and forced him further and further from the room. And as he looked back one last time, he could see his Padawan, face streaked with tears, sobbing against Tharten's arm. Beyond, Sle'fey leaned down to pick up Obi-Wan's lightsaber and then stared after him, black eyes unreadable and flat. And, with a bone-deep metallic groan, the sound burrowing into flesh and heart and spirit, the doors clanged shut. -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 11/2/09 jedidas3's Master Merlin - Diplomatic Immunity - http://boards.theforce.net/nswff/b10808/30459852
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LuvEwan Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 8/25/05 2:33pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) - Updated 8/25/05
	The thing about your posts diane is that even though I really want to dive into this right now, I'm going to wait until later tonight, so I have something to look forward to for the rest of the day. -----signature----- What Light Breaks-AU Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon Anakin angst (collaboration with Spiritweaver) http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/29979222/p1/?0 You want an Obi-Wan epic? We've got it right here.
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Shadowolf Registered: May '05	Date Posted: 8/25/05 3:36pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) - Updated 8/25/05
	The council is EVIL! Who needs the Sith when you've got these sacks of banth poodo destroying everything that was ever good about the Jedi Order! How DARE they accuse Obi-Wan, throw Qui-Gon in that horrible cell?! And Atel! I can't believe she's going along with it, Ithought she was wising up! You're right, Diane, you said I wouldn't like the Council anymore than I already did and you're right. They must be stopped, destroyed, something! I really hope we get more soon, I can't stand the thought of Obi-Wan & Qui-Gon in that awful cell! -----signature----- Love is more than a candle. Love can ignite the stars. - Matthew Stover Happy to be Layren's Padawan! From My Point of View http://boards.theforce.net/message.asp?topic=21027412 updated 12/23 - finally! Happy Holidays one and all!
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Yodan Registered: Feb '05	Date Posted: 8/25/05 4:54pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) - Updated 8/25/05
	Well, I'm glad they didn't kill Qui-Gon, yet anyways... (You'd never kill Qui-Gon would you...? ) I find it ironic that countless Jedi have been kicked out of the order, but they won't let Obi resign... Poor Obi and Qui, at least they have each other... I can't wait for more! -----signature----- My wise and old Master is JadeSolo. (Emphasis on OLD ) Join http://www.JelloAnarchy.com Great Times are had by All! Escape, a Poem: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/24665411/p1/?0
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Layren Registered: Oct '03	Date Posted: 8/25/05 6:02pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) - Updated 8/25/05 - Date Edited: 8/26/05 6:53am (3 edits total) Edited By: Layren
	I just read the post on the e-mail list and now I get to read it again. By the Force Diane! Every word is flawless and every thing is perfectly executed -- and that's why I keep waiting even between months at a time for a post because I know you'll deliever a flawless piece when it's finally done I'm in awe of your ability to recreate George Lucas's environment so well.. it makes me wish that this is what we should have seen on screen instead Poor Obi-Wan finally had to wake up to the fact that the Jedi were lost and had been just as Qui-Gon had said. He still had hope up until the beginning of the meeting I think. dianethx posted: See you people reaped the reward for my broken leg. I had time to actually write! "It is the judgment of this Council, my judgment, that Master Jinn be placed in the Force-dampened cell, AA23, until he is willing to answer any and all questions put before him." Qui-Gon turned pale, his face lined with furrows of past remembrances. That cell, where the Force was no comfort, where every fear swallowed reason, the cell where there was no hope, only terror. He swallowed hard and said nothing. There was nothing to say. He would not betray his Bendu brothers, not even in a thousand days of darkness. But he was human enough to be afraid. I think you really show the very human side of Qui-Gon here in these particular paragraphs. Qui-Gon is larger than life sometimes on the screen and with that sometimes we might think he's immune to feelings of fear. I really enjoy the way you portray him Marvelous work, m'dear and maybe you should break a leg more often Edit -- I agree with Yodan. It is rather ironic that Obi-wan wants to leave and they won't let him. Probably because he could spill all sorts of dirty secrets about them that they don't want going public because then they'd lose even more money somehow -----signature----- Proud Master to Ara-gon The Triad Chronicles http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/25934993/p1/?177 (OC's) Into Another Day http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/27926050/p1/?0 2008 Dear Diary Challenge I am Jinngerbread.
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Musing Registered: Oct '03	Date Posted: 8/26/05 4:18am Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) - Updated 8/25/05
	Evil, truly evil, dx. The so-called Council and the cliffie. Things look really horrendous for our heroes, but...Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan experienced cell AA23 individually, each on their own. Wouldn't being in there together make a difference? I'd propose shoving the entire Council into a sarlacc pit, but the poor thing would probably suffer a massive stomachache from so much indigestible dregs. A black hole would be better. As for Atel - talk about frustratingly blind loyalty. Open eyes, closed brain. I have to remind myself that she's only started to see things differently for a couple of days as opposed to the lifelong brainwashing she's been subject to all her life. It doesn't keep me from wishing that someone would slap some sense into her, though. A wonderful piece of writing, dianethx. Any chance of more coming soon?
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Princess_Arulmozhi Registered: Nov '04	Date Posted: 8/26/05 4:58am Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) - Updated 8/25/05
	Loved every piece of it. You've outdone yourself, m'lady. What I loved about this episode... 1. The stellar description of the Sith Council. (yes, that's how I think of them.) The depths to which they've sunk to, as Obi-Wan said, betraying their own. This isn't just the betrayal of the Jedi Order to Jinn...they've betrayed their own. Nice to see, though, that some of them retain enough sense to know that the question of their budget's coming up, and that they need to have 'evidence', before they condemn Jinn wholesale. Oh, how very fair and just of them. 2. Obi-Wan. Lovely, lovely. I melted away when I saw his outrage of how far the order had really descended to. After having followed their every bidding and assignments for years, now to be slapped like that...but oh, how I loved it when he finally threw down his sabre, and told Atel that he had 'come to his senses at last'. Good for you, Obi-Wan! He’s been sentenced to that cell along with his Master - and even though I'm glad they'll be together, will they really help each other? Obi's already worn enough, and Qui isn't in any better shape. I wonder if their combined strength will break through the insanity??? 3. Great descriptions, especially the jeering friend of the Chancellor, with his dripping gems, and the way they’re so prepared to refute evidence that might clear Jinn. Oh, why couldn't Anakin destroy 'this' Order???? Loved the idea of Jinn not wanting to drag Obi into the 'sea of darkness'. Beautiful, beautiful, as usual. I would have been very satisfied, if you hadn't left us all dangling at the very steepest precipice I've ever known. Be a dear...and start thinking about the next, won't you??? In the meantime, I’ll simply re-read the post. -----signature----- Perceptions (Xanatos/Obi/Qui/Anakin) AU:http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/25276178/p1/?7 - vignette Stones (Li'l Obi/Qui) - http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/23371821/p1/ Best Author, WFFA (BtS) 05/06 Lore-Master to 7
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LuvEwan Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 8/26/05 9:33am Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) - Updated 8/25/05
	NOOOOOOOOO!!!! That was so...your writing is the best around here. So often while I was reading this, I was struck by the sheer beauty and flow of the passages as they were woven together, the flawless characterization and description. The last bit of the scene nearly killed me. I don't know if I feel worse for Qui-Gon or Obi-Wan. But, as P_A pointed out, at least they'll be together. You're so evil, woman. Get back here and fix this immediately! Gorgeous, gorgeous job! -----signature----- What Light Breaks-AU Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon Anakin angst (collaboration with Spiritweaver) http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/29979222/p1/?0 You want an Obi-Wan epic? We've got it right here.
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Kynstar Registered: Mar '04	Date Posted: 8/26/05 10:45am Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) - Updated 8/25/05
	Only things I can say is wow...wow and poor Obi and Qui!! Specially Obi and Atel. Poor girl...she's at a loss now. I don't think Qui is going to be very happy when Obi is put in there with him. But I can sympathize with Obi. He's had enough and sees how bad the Order has fallen Excellent work! And such a masterpiece this is! -----signature----- Paddy sis to t_s & SarkaVrae/Master to hyperspace_police Member of Rebel Legion and Jedi Assembly (Kynstar Lans) Only thru fear, hatred, and pain will the true power of the Force be revealed. See stories/viggies in bio
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PadawanKitara Registered: Dec '01	Date Posted: 8/26/05 10:52pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) - Updated 8/25/05
	I feel like I am trapped on a rollercoaster with a car full of madmen- oh ... I forgot to breathe while reading this. No wonder I feel so lightheaded. -----signature----- Courtier of the Royal Order of Shambling Dufi We are Dufi...Resistance is Futile! UCLA BRUINS
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River_Stone Registered: May '05	Date Posted: 8/26/05 11:41pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) - Updated 8/25/05
	I don't know how you have the ability to write so seemlessly and with such edge. Obi-Wan was just brilliant (I loved that the evil-council-who-should-be-bashed-with-a-stick refused to accept his resignation and just threw him into the conspiracy), my heart bled for Atel, who is only doing what she believes is right, and Qui-Gon's sacrifice... The imagery you produced in this scene was incredibly vivid and really gave power to the story. The Jedi have indeed lost their way How you manage to write so well with a broken leg when the rest of us struggle to acheive the same in full health is a complete mystery to me, but I am thankful for it. -----signature----- "May it be a light to you in dark places, when all other lights go out." Galadriel, FOTR, LOTR trilogy Padawan to the wonderful dianethx
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Jicky Registered: Aug '05	Date Posted: 8/27/05 2:33am Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) - Updated 8/25/05
	Wow, just... wow. This is... amazing. I like your characterisation of Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan, they're very human(though not to the point that they're no longer Jedi/Bendu). I can only reiterate what everyone else has said. Just... wow.
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