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Agent_Jaid Registered: Feb '03	Date Posted: 4/30/03 6:05am Subject: A Darkened Day (AU; J/TK, J/Z/C, K/L/J) Post - 3/18 - Rosie!!!!!!!!!!!!! wails - Date Edited: 3/18/05 12:45pm (122 edits total) Edited By: DantanaSkywalker
	Okay, This is my first fanfic so please be critical but add a smilie face at the end. Rather stupid I know, but smilie faces make me happy. Detication: To my many friends but especially to my betas. Jo, my hyper, Zekk-obsessed-beta who always knows when to use a “;” instead of a “,” and KS, my other hyper-but-not-obsessed-with-Zekk-beta (she’s obsessed with Kyp) who inspired several of my characters. I am forever in your guys's debt. Thanks: My two former beta’s Soulwalker and Jacesolo1138. You guy’s were absolutely great. Thanks for helping me smooth out the rough edges and give me a workable plot. I’d also like to thank the Supreme Goddess, Trickster_Jaina_Fel for giving me a plot bunnie that spawned this story. - If I can ever write half as well as you Supreme Goddess, I will be amazed and thrilled beyond belief. Author: Jaid Rating: PG-13 [yep, I had to change it...] Genre: AU? Angst? Torture? I don't really know....... Well, Reader torture! Disclaimer: Yeah! I'm making millions out of this!! NOT! George Lucas has it all, blah, blah, blah...... Feedback: Mark up codes: //….// = bond speak, …… = Force Stone, italics = thoughts A Darkened Day By Jaid ~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~- links for posts: Page 1 – 1 post, Page 2 - 1 post, Page 4 - 1 post, Page 5 – 1 post, Page 7 – 1 post, Page 9 - 1 post, Page 13 - 1 post, Page 14 - 1 post, Page 16 - 1 post, Page 18 - 1 post, Page 20 - 1 post, Page 23 - 1 post, Page 29 - 1 post, Page 31 - 1 post, Page 36 - 1 post, Page 42 - 1 post, Page 45 - 1 post, Page 48 - 1 post, Page 53 - 1 post, Page 56 - 1 post, Page 63 - 1 post, Page 65 - 1 post, Page 66 - 1 post, Page 68 - 1 post, Page 70 - 1 post, Page 72 - 1 post, Page 74 - 1 post, Page 75 - 1 post, Page 79 - 1 post, Page 90 - 1 post [pertaining to first post only] ALL PARTS IN BROWN ARE DIRECT EXCERPTS FROM TIMOTHY ZAHN’S BOOK “DARK FORCE RISING” Prologue There was a snap-hiss from beside her, and suddenly the terrain was bathed in the green-white glow of Skywalker’s lightsaber. “Get behind the ship,” he ordered her. “I’ll hold him off.” The memory of Myrkr flashed through Mara’s mind; but even as she opened her mouth to remind him of how useless he was without the Force, he took a long step forward to put himself outside the ysalamir’s influence. The lightsaber flashed sideways, and she heard the double crunch as its brilliant blade intercepted two more incoming rocks. Still laughing, C’baoth raised his hand and sent a flash of blue lightning toward them. Skywalker caught the bolt on his lightsaber, and for an instant the green of the blade was surrounded by a blue-white coronal discharge. A second bolt shot past him to vanish at the edge of the empty zone around Mara; a third again wrapped itself around the lightsaber blade. Mara’s fumbling hand brushed against something metallic: her blaster. Scooping it up, she swung it towards C’baoth and pulled the trigger. The bolt of energy raced from the barrel of her small blaster, sizzling its way into C’boath’s flesh. With a startled cry of anguish he lashed out at Mara with Force lightening, oblivious to the fact that the ysalamir shielded her from his Force attacks. Luke strode forward, his lightsaber at the ready. Suddenly the scene erupted in a flurry of explosions that temporarily blinded and deafened Mara, as powerful wave of Force energy knocked Luke backwards into the ysalamir's ring of influence. “Skywalker!” Mara raged as his form plowed into hers. Mara’s breath caught as she saw a large blaster burn on his back roughly the size of both her hands. “Skywalker!” she yelled again, this time her tone almost pleading. Luke’s R2 unit continued firing the X-wing's lasers in C'baoth's direction, a stay bolt catching the ysalamir, allowing the comforting feeling of the Force to wash over them. “Mara…” Luke’s pain tinged eyes fluttered open weakly, then slipped back. “Come on, Skywalker.” Mara’s voice was a strange combination of pleading and demanding. “You’re the only one who can help me.” “Ahh!” Luke cried in pained horror as he felt a sudden surge of Dark power. Mara’s brow furrowed as she felt the same rage. “Leia!” Luke cried out, his ice blue eyes flying open as he recognized the Force wielder as his sister. "Leia," he gasped softly, he squeezed his eyes tightly shut. "Leia, don't fall. Leia, please..." Mara's brow furrowed as her mind whirled. Pain, confusion, and death wreaked havoc upon her soul. Or what was left of her soul at any rate. "What is she doing?" Mara's heart was in those few words. "It's the Senate." Luke said, his voice barely recognizable as the pain from the deaths of Mon Mothma, Borsk Fey'lya, and the other members of the Senate crashed down upon him. "Leia is on a rampage. She’s killing members of the Senate." Mara felt a weak smile cross her face. "At least when she's done there'll be less politicians." Her tone was wry as she watched Luke's face carefully. Luke turned his head to face hers, their eyes locked. "How can you say that?" His voice was broken, "The Senate is made up of real, living beings. How can you joke about that?" "Oh, get off your high horse Skywalker." Mara's words were flippant but her tone was not. "Everything dies. It's natural." "Natural?" Luke's eyes flashed, "Is that what you told your self whenever you killed someone? That it was natural?" Even as he uttered the last few words, spikes of light pierced through the darkness that Leia was creating. Four spears of pure white light penetrated the blackness of evil. Just as quickly as they flared up, they were blanketed in a darkness that exploded through the Force. The massive amount of death was catastrophic to the already weakened Jedi Master. Gasping for breath from the pain, Luke begged Mara. "Please. Promise me you'll watch out for Leia. Please. Promise me." Caught off guard, her jade-green eyes blinked. "Excuse me?" "Leia." Luke grabbed her hand weakly and gazed imploringly into her eyes, "Please. Watch out for her and her children." "I-" Mara felt her excuses drowning in the depths of Luke's eyes. "I-" "Please." His voice caught at the end and her defenses crumbled. "Alright." "Promise." -You will kill Luke Skywalker!!- Her master's voice reverberated in her mind. Mara gritted her teeth and blocked out the voice. "Please." Luke's body longed to make its self one with the Force but he tenaciously hung to life. Mara could see the struggle that was going on inside him and uttered two words that sealed their fates. "I Promise." -+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+- Anyone feel like telling me how I did? ?:\| gulp -----signature----- Wasn't Enough: One-Shot http://boards.theforce.net/message.asp?topic=21015893
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Elven_Jedi_Maiden Registered: Apr '03	Date Posted: 4/30/03 6:40am Subject: RE: A Darkened Day: Massive AU; J/Z J/TK M/OC
	Ohhhh! Agent_Jaid wrote a fic! And it's J/Z, J/TK and it has Mara in it!! YEAH!!! dances around the room Hee hee, AWESOME so far. I can't wait to see where it goes. Luke died way back at Myrkr, huh? How sad... -----signature----- Save the Earth. It's the only planet with chocolate. Jag and Danni stink.. I love Legolas and Zekk!!! J/Z, J/TK, and L/M die hard Adoptee to LadyMairead
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GenOochy Registered: Jan '03	Date Posted: 4/30/03 7:04am Subject: RE: A Darkened Day: Massive AU; J/Z J/TK M/OC
	Well written!!! Leia takes out the senate.... Cool, dude! But, still... You killed Luke.... Why? -----signature----- http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/30387587/p1 A New Dawn Fades - A Wolatarian Story http://boards.theforce.net/role_playing_forum/b10328/30401245/p1 Shadowplay - Clone Wars Era RPG http://swfanon.wikia.com/wiki/Category:Wolatarians
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Agent_Jaid Registered: Feb '03	Date Posted: 4/30/03 7:25am Subject: RE: A Darkened Day: Massive AU; J/Z J/TK M/OC - Date Edited: 4/30/03 7:29am (1 edits total) Edited By: Agent_Jaid
	YAY!!! 2 Readers!!! EJM: And it's J/Z, J/TK and it has Mara in it!! What else would it be???? Luke died way back at Myrkr, huh? How sad... pulls on hair EVERYONE SAYS THAT!!!!! sigh eyes widen AWESOME? falls backwards wow. General: But, still... You killed Luke.... Why? It's simply this, if I let him live, he's going to try and turn Leia back which can't happen yet. And anyway's. If I did, it would take another book and a half to redeem Mara if I didn't. Luke is dead and that almost kills the emperor's voice, she'll stil hear it 'sept now it's "You failed me" but the pictures that Pulpy planted are dead and gone. His voice leaves when she meets "someone"......... ~+~+~+~+~+~+~+~+~+~+~+~+~+~+~+~+~+~+~+~+~+~+~+~+~+~ -+- Jaid Edit: I made a scrolly bar.......... Bad Jaid!!! -----signature----- Wasn't Enough: One-Shot http://boards.theforce.net/message.asp?topic=21015893
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jacen200015 Registered: Jan '02	Date Posted: 4/30/03 7:38am Subject: RE: A Darkened Day: Massive AU; J/Z J/TK M/OC
	aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhh hhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh hhhh. faints. -----signature----- If I review then PM me when you update. thanks so much. Send me your completed 'the saga' stories! Check out my new story Descent Into Darkness Don't quote me the odds. I shall do as I must. Do or do not, there is no try.
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Hail_Jaina Registered: Nov '02	Date Posted: 4/30/03 7:53am Subject: RE: A Darkened Day: Massive AU; J/Z J/TK M/OC - Date Edited: 4/30/03 7:54am (1 edits total) Edited By: Hail_Jaina
	WOW!!!!!! GO AJ!!!!!! Mara felt a weak smile cross her face. "At least when she's done there'll be less politicians." Her tone was wry as she watched Luke's face carefully. that's the Mara I know and love!!!! Is Kyp gonna be in it huh huh huh? Oh yeah: -----signature----- I DJ, Kyp, Tahiri, and Jaina "You couldn't channel the Force wearing that dress. There isn't enough room in there for it to squeeze through." -Kyp , Dark Journey until further notice, HJ is NOT Tahiri I am EEEEEVUL
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Agent_Jaid Registered: Feb '03	Date Posted: 4/30/03 8:16am Subject: RE: A Darkened Day: Massive AU; J/Z J/TK M/OC
	Master: leans over waves hand over her face Uh..... Master?? dumps ice-cold water on her Master?? Tahi: So you like it huh? Yeah, I'm trying to get Mara right........ She's going to be one of my favorite characters. THANK YOU FOR NOT COMMENTING ON THE FACT THAT I KILLED OFF LUKE!!!! BOTH of my Beta's got mad at me for doing that. Yes Kyp will be in it............. And he's evil. Thanks for the smilies!!!! ~+~+~+~+~+~+~+~ -+- Jaid -----signature----- Wasn't Enough: One-Shot http://boards.theforce.net/message.asp?topic=21015893
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Master_Ponta Registered: Feb '03	Date Posted: 4/30/03 8:26am Subject: RE: A Darkened Day: Massive AU; J/Z J/TK M/OC - Date Edited: 4/30/03 8:31am (1 edits total) Edited By: Master_Ponta
	YOU killed Skywalker, HOW COULD YOU DO THIS???? AHHHHH! I feel a little weasy... I think I'm gonna... faint. passes out on the floor. Like your fic though. -----signature----- The most beautiful thing we can experience is the mysterious. It is the source of all true art and all science. He to whom this emotion is a stranger, who can no longer pause to wonder and stand rapt in awe, is as good as dead: his eyes are closed.
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Agent_Jaid Registered: Feb '03	Date Posted: 4/30/03 8:56am Subject: RE: A Darkened Day: Massive AU; J/Z J/TK M/OC - Date Edited: 4/30/03 9:06am (1 edits total) Edited By: Agent_Jaid
	Ponta: Oh dear.... Another one fainted. splashes ice-cold water on the top of her head Wake up!! Ty-Ty wouldn't forgive me if I killed you Ponta!!! ~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~- It's only been posted for 3 hours people!!!! It's going to get worse!!! Or better, depending on your point of view. <Sorry, I posted a spoiler > ~-~-~-~-~-~-~-~ -+- Jaid -----signature----- Wasn't Enough: One-Shot http://boards.theforce.net/message.asp?topic=21015893
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Master_Ponta Registered: Feb '03	Date Posted: 4/30/03 10:03am Subject: RE: A Darkened Day: Massive AU; J/Z J/TK M/OC
	it's gonna get WORSE?!? AHHHH! falls back on the floor. -----signature----- The most beautiful thing we can experience is the mysterious. It is the source of all true art and all science. He to whom this emotion is a stranger, who can no longer pause to wonder and stand rapt in awe, is as good as dead: his eyes are closed.
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Trickster_Jaina_Fel Registered: Oct '02	Date Posted: 4/30/03 10:31am Subject: RE: A Darkened Day: Massive AU; J/Z J/TK M/OC
	hugs jaid wow! you're doing me proud girl excellent beginning! i won't complain about you killing off luke cuz he's dead in all my fics and i'd be a hypocrite if i did mara was portrayed perfectly -- exactly how i imagined her just a quickie question: why is the beginning red? ?:\| is that bcuz it's taken directly from the book? you might want to explain it if it's on purpose so the slow people like me can figure out what's going on anyway, awesome start Jaid ~TJF -----signature----- The Reason Why (prequel to FaIC/IYC): http://boards.theforce.net/Boards/message.aspx?topic=30299388 If You Call (sequel to FaIC): http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/29705372/p1 http://moonlightrick.livejournal.com
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The_Standmaiden Registered: Jul '02	Date Posted: 4/30/03 10:43am Subject: RE: A Darkened Day: Massive AU; J/Z J/TK M/OC - Date Edited: 4/30/03 10:46am (1 edits total) Edited By: The_Standmaiden
	THANK YOU FOR NOT COMMENTING ON THE FACT THAT I KILLED OFF LUKE!!!! Ha, now you know how I feel. Great beginning, very ambitious. I think you captured Mara's character well (I was about to say I liked her, but that's not correct ) and a Dark Leia is always interesting . . . Ooh! Now I can bug you about updates! This will be fun . . . P.S. I hope they change the forum colours soon. Reading on this yellow is killing me. EDIT: Forgot to put a smilie face at the end
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Trickster_Jaina_Fel Registered: Oct '02	Date Posted: 4/30/03 12:41pm Subject: RE: A Darkened Day: Massive AU; J/Z J/TK M/OC
	flys in from RotJ rats...we're not going to get responses for four days are we? bump^ing time ~TJF -----signature----- The Reason Why (prequel to FaIC/IYC): http://boards.theforce.net/Boards/message.aspx?topic=30299388 If You Call (sequel to FaIC): http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/29705372/p1 http://moonlightrick.livejournal.com
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Soulwalker Registered: Mar '03	Date Posted: 4/30/03 1:43pm Subject: RE: A Darkened Day: Massive AU; J/Z J/TK M/OC
	Hehehe, you already know what I think of this, Jaid. Nice work, keep it up! -----signature----- Stolen Chance (NJO, J/TK, Updated 5/26): http://boards.theforce.net/message.asp?topic=10971166 Chiss Wing Commander/Chiss Lead of the NJO Fan Club "This is the shameful secret of the Jedi: There is no dark side." - Vergere
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jacesolo1138 Registered: Jan '02	Date Posted: 4/30/03 1:48pm Subject: RE: A Darkened Day: Massive AU; J/Z J/TK M/OC
	I love it Jaid. Will there be a new post soon? ~jacesolo1138~ -----signature----- Darkness Returns (YJK, Jacen/Tenel Ka) http://boards.theforce.net/message.asp?topic=10935977&replies=2
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Trickster_Jaina_Fel Registered: Oct '02	Date Posted: 4/30/03 2:31pm Subject: RE: A Darkened Day: Massive AU; J/Z J/TK M/OC
	bump^ ~TJF -----signature----- The Reason Why (prequel to FaIC/IYC): http://boards.theforce.net/Boards/message.aspx?topic=30299388 If You Call (sequel to FaIC): http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/29705372/p1 http://moonlightrick.livejournal.com
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