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KrystalBlaze Registered: Aug '02	Date Posted: 2/3/07 4:40pm Subject: RE: The PT Scene Write/Rewrite Contest - 3rd challenge: Padme/Anakin dialouge!
	I am pleased to announce the winner of the 3rd PT rewrite challenge is Jedsithor! Congratulations! The next challenge will be posted tomorow. -Krystal -----signature----- 2008 Fanfic Awards Saga Hostess /We'll go together/
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Jedsithor Registered: Oct '05	Date Posted: 2/3/07 5:50pm Subject: RE: The PT Scene Write/Rewrite Contest - 3rd challenge: Padme/Anakin dialouge!
	KrystalBlaze posted: I am pleased to announce the winner of the 3rd PT rewrite challenge is Jedsithor! Congratulations! The next challenge will be posted tomorow. -Krystal waits patiently so I can implement my Green White and Gold (Irish flag) colours for all to marvel at Thanks for the vote guys, and Lily, I'm looking forward to reading more great stuff from you in future rounds. -----signature----- KOTOR Movie Trilogy Forums: http://z11.invisionfree.com/KOTOR_Movies
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LilyHobbitJedi Title: Apples to Apples and 20 Questions hostess Registered: Aug '05	Date Posted: 2/4/07 8:11am Subject: RE: The PT Scene Write/Rewrite Contest - 3rd challenge: Padme/Anakin dialouge!
	Congrats! -----signature----- Proud Master to eboneya & Alassë Eärfalas! Everybody Lies- House/SW Crossover! http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28032689/r28039379/ A Light In The Darkness http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b1047
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KrystalBlaze Registered: Aug '02	Date Posted: 2/4/07 10:30am Subject: RE: The PT Scene Write/Rewrite Contest - 3rd challenge: Padme/Anakin dialouge!
	Welcome to the 4th challenge! In RotS, Anakin says he has saved Obi-Wan's life ten times. You'll be adding a scene to the PT that details the first time Anakin saves Obi-Wan. You can borrow from canon or create a new world and situation where this happened. It will obviously happen between AOTC and RotS, but the timeline is up to you. You will have until Thursday at 11:59pm boardtime to submit a scene. Happy writing and good luck! -Krystal -----signature----- 2008 Fanfic Awards Saga Hostess /We'll go together/
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Jedsithor Registered: Oct '05	Date Posted: 2/4/07 3:39pm Subject: RE: The PT Scene Write/Rewrite Contest - Challenge 4: Saving Obi-Wan!
	KrystalBlaze posted: Welcome to the 4th challenge! In RotS, Anakin says he has saved Obi-Wan's life ten times. You'll be adding a scene to the PT that details the first time Anakin saves Obi-Wan. You can borrow from canon or create a new world and situation where this happened. It will obviously happen between AOTC and RotS, but the timeline is up to you. You will have until Thursday at 11:59pm boardtime to submit a scene. Happy writing and good luck! -Krystal Nice...action scene -----signature----- KOTOR Movie Trilogy Forums: http://z11.invisionfree.com/KOTOR_Movies
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Jedsithor Registered: Oct '05	Date Posted: 2/4/07 6:30pm Subject: RE: The PT Scene Write/Rewrite Contest - Challenge 4: Saving Obi-Wan! - Date Edited: 2/4/07 6:39pm (1 edits total) Edited By: Jedsithor
	Well here’s my entry. Definitely a lot more humour in it than previous scenes that I’ve done, anyways I hope you like it. It takes place not long after Obi-Wan has become a Jedi Master, so Anakin is a Knight at this point as well. ----------------------------------- The City of Razon, Planet Teliaz: Deep in the lower levels of the city, amongst the poor, and those whose lives had been turned upside down by the war, a hooded figure stalked the shadows, trying to remain unseen. Not an easy task considering who his companions were. “Master Anakin, are you sure that I have to accompany you? I am a protocol droid, not an infiltration unit…and this mud is ruining my new coverings.” “I need you to translate what Artoo is saying Threepio,” Anakin responded, “don’t worry, I’ll get you off this rock in one piece and you’ll be back on Coruscant helping Padme deal with the politicians soon enough.” Anakin turned to Threepio and couldn’t help but laugh as the droid struggled to find his footing on the rain-soaked ground. He had come to Teliaz with his friend and mentor, Obi-Wan, at the head of a Republic force, aimed at retaking the planet, which had been under Separatist occupation for the past four months. Unfortunately, during a hectic dogfight over the city, Obi-Wan’s fighter had been shot down and the Jedi Master had been captured. As Anakin tried to feel his friend through the Force, he felt a hand tapping his shoulder. Turning, he was confronted by a Rodian trader who seemed to be eyeing up the protocol droid. “How much?” the stranger asked in Huttese, a common language used across the Outer Rim. “Excuse me sir, but I am not for sale.” Threepio responded. Ignoring the droid, the Rodian spoke to Anakin again, “I’ll give you two thousand for the pair.” Anakin was about to decline the offer, but as he glanced at Threepio, he noticed that the droid seemed to be a little uncomfortable, and so decided to have a little fun. “Two thousand? The protocol droid alone is worth three. I built him myself.” “You wouldn’t sell me would you Sir?” Threepio cut in, clearly worried. “I dunno Threepio, you do tend to complain a lot,” Anakin replied, trying to hide the grin forming on his face. “But Sir…” “…Alright, 2 and a half for the protocol droid and two for the astro droid.” The Rodian said, interrupting Threepio. Anakin paused, looking at both droids for a moment, watching their reactions. While Artoo seemed calm, obviously aware that Anakin wasn’t serious, Threepio was anxious, muttering to himself, trying to figure out what he had done to deserve being sold. “Sorry, you know I just can’t sell them, my wife would kill me.” Anakin said to the trader, who continued to try to negotiate a price that the potential seller might accept. However, Anakin, knowing that they were pressed for time, decided it was best to end the conversation quickly. “You don’t want to buy these droids…” Anakin said as he waved his hand. “…I don’t want to buy these droids.” The Rodian responded, before walking off in a daze. As Anakin watched him leave, his thoughts were interrupted by Artoo who began to beep and whistle loudly, prompting Anakin to ask Threepio to translate. “He says that he has located Obi-Wan Kenobi’s tracking signal and that he has pinpointed it to that security tower,” Threepio translated as he pointed to a tall building on the other side of the main street. “Great. I want you both to head back to the ship and tell Commander Cody to begin the assault.” “Yes Master Anakin of course…uh Sir…you wouldn’t really sell me would you?” ********************* High above in the security tower, Obi-Wan Kenobi found himself being restricted by an energy field, suspended in the air, being watched by a Telosian mercenary. “The great Master Kenobi. I’m looking forward to inflicting great pain upon you.” “You realise of course, that I won’t tell you anything,” Kenobi replied confidently. “We shall see. I understand that you Jedi are very good at resisting torture. But believe me, my methods are very effective. Why not make this easy on yourself? I want to know the codes for the Republic’s communications network, fleet movements, how many clones the Jedi command, I want the co-ordinates for your base of operations in the Outer Rim as well as the commands to shut down the defence systems.” “That’s a lot…would you like to know my boot size as well?” Obi-Wan replied sarcastically, prompting the Telosian to jab him with a shock stick, sending electricity coursing through the Jedi’s body. “You don’t have to endure any more pain Jedi, just tell me what I want to know and this will be over quickly.” “What, and miss all the fun?” Obi-Wan relied with a wry smile, and as if on cue, the alarms in the security tower began to sound, as explosions could be heard in the distance. “Well it’s about time.” ******** Entering through the main door, Anakin walked casually towards a group of battle droid, who all targeted him with their blasters as their commander approached the young Jedi. “Halt, what are you doing here?” the droid asked. “I’m here to see a prisoner.” “No one may pass without authorisation.” The droid responded, unaware of who he was talking to. “Authorisation? Sure thing, let me just get security pass,” Anakin said as he reached into his robe. Suddenly the droid commander was on the ground, cut in half as the shimmering blue blade of Anakin’s lightsaber cut through him with ease. “Uh Oh…” “Roger Roger…” The droids were in a panic as Anakin began to slice through them one by one, bringing his blade around to deflect the laser fire that was now coming from the ceiling turrets, pushing the blasts back towards their source. Leaping through the air, Anakin jumped over three battle droids, before landing and turning swiftly to cut them down. Within a few seconds, the floor was covered with the remains of a dozen battle droids, leaving Anakin to switch off his lightsaber and walk calmly towards the elevator. *********** “What’s happening out there?” the Telosian asked, trying to figure out what to do as he looked out the window, watching as smoke rose in the distance. “That would be the Republic forces targeting the Separatist base.” Obi-Wan replied with a smile. “If I were you, I’d get over here and let me go. After all you’re not only a traitor to the Republic, but to the Telosian people. If you surrender now, they may show you leniency.” “Shut up…just shut up…” the Telosian replied in a panic as he began downloading files to his datapad, while trying to figure out how to escape. “Wait, what am I doing? I’ve got a hostage. They won’t dare attack this place, not with a Jedi Master here.” “If you say so…” The Telosian didn’t respond. Instead he began gathering up his belongings, including a case filled with money, the fee that Dooku had paid him. “Ah, now I see,” Obi-Wan commented with a grin, “you’re a mercenary. Well your failure here will mean death if you return to Count Dooku. Your only chance is to give up. If you co-operate with the Republic, we’ll protect you.” Obi-Wan could see that the Telosian’s will was breaking. Obi-Wan was hoping that he might give up and work with the republic in exchange for leniency, especially since he might have valuable intelligence about Dooku’s movements and plans. *********** Republic gunships flew across the skies, firing rockets at the fuel cells of the stationary Federation ships, causing them to explode. The sound of laser bolts filled the air as small fighters cruised at high altitudes, shooting down the droid escorts, preventing them from protecting the Separatist ships trying to escape. Two Star Destroyers descended into the atmosphere, landing just outside the city and deploying troop detachments to help in the battle, as well as ground vehicles. A squadron of Tri-wing Fighters flew through the city, engaging droid fighters in an aerial battle, manoeuvring between buildings as they locked on to their targets, blowing the droid ships out of the sky. Meanwhile, another three Star Destroyers orbited the planet to catch any Separatist ships that managed to take off. On the command ship, the clone trooper, Cody, watched as a shuttle docked, and waited as its passengers, two droids hurried off, allowing more troops to get on board for another run to the planet below. ***************** Anakin could sense his friend’s presence as he stepped off the elevator. Turning a corner and walking down the main corridor, Anakin drew his lightsaber, igniting it and swinging through a collection of droids, cutting them apart with ease. He found himself confronted with a heavy blast door, and moved swiftly, deflecting a blaster bolt back at a security turret before turning and driving his lightsaber through the door, watching as the blade melted through, forcing the door to open. He was greeted by another squad of battle droids, who, raised their weapons and prepared to fire. “There he is, blast him.” The droid lieutenant said, causing Anakin to smile as he blocked the incoming fire with his blade. He’d heard that line many times before and every time a droid said it, the droid ended up being destroyed, barely salvageable for spare parts. This time was no different as Anakin sped down the corridor, chopping up the droids with ease, extending his hand to feel through the Force and rip a few of them apart. Finally, he came to the last door, and as he opened it, he noticed his mentor trapped in a security field and reacted instinctively as the other person in the room, a Telosian, raised his blaster and fired, forcing Anakin to deflect the blaster fire back at him, killing him. “Sorry I’m late Master,” Anakin said as he walked to the main terminal and shut down the security field, freeing his mentor. “What kept you?” Obi-Wan relied with a sarcastic tone. “Well you are a Master now…I thought you didn’t need my help?” “Well if I did everything, you wouldn’t learn anything would you Anakin?” The Jedi Master responded with a grin, forcing Anakin to smile as well. “Well this is what…the seventh time I’ve had to save you?” “Sixth…Cata Nemoidia was an entirely different situation. My drink had obviously been laced with something.” “Sure it was…” Anakin responded, rolling his eyes, before both men started to laugh. “Come on Master, we should get moving back to the command centre. Cody may need our help.” "Oh, and did you have to kill him?" Obi-Wan saod, pointing to the dead Telosian. "He shot me..." "But I wanted him alive, he may have had had valuable intelligence." "But he shot me...what was I supposed to do?" "Duck..." Obi-Wan replied as they left the room. The Jedi moved quickly, heading back towards the elevator as the battle raged on outside. By the time they had reached the ground floor, the sounds of war had intensified, and the Jedi were anxious to get back to the command post to secure victory for the Republic. However, as the elevator doors opened, they were confronted by a destroyer droid that had rolled into position, ready to open fire. Obi-Wan had spotted it first, and thinking quickly, he reached out with the Force, grabbing Anakin’s lightsaber from his belt, using it to deflect the blaster bolts back to the droid, only to find that it had a shield, enabling it to absorb the hits and keep firing. As Obi-Wan deflected the bolts, Anakin focussed, extending his hand and using the Force to the smash the destroyer into the wall. Breathing a sigh of relief, Obi-Wan shut down the blade and handed it back to Anakin, who was now looking at him, speaking in a sarcastic tone. “Thanks…and your lightsaber is…” “It was lost when my ship was shot down.” Obi-Wan responded, almost sensing what his friend was going to say next. “But Master, that weapon is you life…really, you should try not to lose it…” “You know no other Knight would dare talk to a Master like that.” “Yeah but they’re not as quick-witted and funny as I am Master,” Anakin responded with a cheeky smile. Laughing, Obi-Wan shrugged his shoulders in agreement as they walked outside, making contact with a squad of clones, ready to follow their orders. -----signature----- KOTOR Movie Trilogy Forums: http://z11.invisionfree.com/KOTOR_Movies
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LLL Title: TFN Fan Fiction Archive Editor Registered: Jul '00	Date Posted: 2/4/07 9:52pm Subject: RE: The PT Scene Write/Rewrite Contest - Challenge 4: Saving Obi-Wan!
	A thought: Is it possible to detail the current challenge in the first post via edits, so that a person looking for it doesn't have to scroll through miles of old posts? Many thanks! --LLB. -----signature----- ''Overall, to get a real deep, nuanced understanding of human behaviour, art is the best way.'' --Natalie Portman. Have a question or suggestion for the Archive? PM me anytime.
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KrystalBlaze Registered: Aug '02	Date Posted: 2/5/07 10:54pm Subject: RE: The PT Scene Write/Rewrite Contest - Challenge 4: Saving Obi-Wan!
	LLL posted: A thought: Is it possible to detail the current challenge in the first post via edits, so that a person looking for it doesn't have to scroll through miles of old posts? Many thanks! --LLB. Well, not miles. I can honestly say I don't it's necessary yet. We're only on the fourth challenge. Somewhere down the road, I'm sure it should be availiable, but I don't see the point as of right now. Also, I'm not in charge of editing the first post - I have to ask the mods for that. Thank you for the suggestion and I'm positive it will be implemented in the future. -Krystal -----signature----- 2008 Fanfic Awards Saga Hostess /We'll go together/
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LLL Title: TFN Fan Fiction Archive Editor Registered: Jul '00	Date Posted: 2/6/07 4:26pm Subject: RE: The PT Scene Write/Rewrite Contest - Challenge 4: Saving Obi-Wan!
	-----signature----- ''Overall, to get a real deep, nuanced understanding of human behaviour, art is the best way.'' --Natalie Portman. Have a question or suggestion for the Archive? PM me anytime.
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KrystalBlaze Registered: Aug '02	Date Posted: 2/7/07 8:26pm Subject: RE: The PT Scene Write/Rewrite Contest - Challenge 4: Saving Obi-Wan!
	You only have until tomorrow to submit a scene! Winning by default is no fun. C'mon, folks, let's get some more scenes! -Krystal -----signature----- 2008 Fanfic Awards Saga Hostess /We'll go together/
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Jedsithor Registered: Oct '05	Date Posted: 2/8/07 6:38am Subject: RE: The PT Scene Write/Rewrite Contest - Challenge 4: Saving Obi-Wan!
	KrystalBlaze posted: You only have until tomorrow to submit a scene! Winning by default is no fun. C'mon, folks, let's get some more scenes! -Krystal Shh....I'm so close, don't ruin it -----signature----- KOTOR Movie Trilogy Forums: http://z11.invisionfree.com/KOTOR_Movies
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KrystalBlaze Registered: Aug '02	Date Posted: 2/8/07 10:17pm Subject: RE: The PT Scene Write/Rewrite Contest - Challenge 4: Saving Obi-Wan!
	only one entry? Sadness. You still have until midnight tonight to get an entry in. C'mon - you've got two hours! You can do it! -Krystal -----signature----- 2008 Fanfic Awards Saga Hostess /We'll go together/
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Jedsithor Registered: Oct '05	Date Posted: 2/10/07 9:06am Subject: RE: The PT Scene Write/Rewrite Contest - Challenge 4: Saving Obi-Wan!
	Uh, did I just win by default? -----signature----- KOTOR Movie Trilogy Forums: http://z11.invisionfree.com/KOTOR_Movies
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KrystalBlaze Registered: Aug '02	Date Posted: 2/10/07 9:48am Subject: RE: The PT Scene Write/Rewrite Contest - Challenge 4: Saving Obi-Wan! - Date Edited: 2/10/07 10:26am (1 edits total) Edited By: KrystalBlaze
	Ack! Sorry about the tardiness of this post - I'm an idiot. Congratulations to Jedsithor on his win! Question - would there be more participation if the writing time was extended? Or are the prompts just not fun enough? Because I'd really love to see more participation in this thing. The next challenge will be posted tomorrow. -Krystal EDIT: Thanks to Jedsithor's generous offer below, I have extended the deadline until 11:59pm SUNDAY, FEB 11th for scenes. C'mon, guys, I know you can do it! -----signature----- 2008 Fanfic Awards Saga Hostess /We'll go together/
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Jedsithor Registered: Oct '05	Date Posted: 2/10/07 10:02am Subject: RE: The PT Scene Write/Rewrite Contest - Challenge 4: Saving Obi-Wan!
	KrystalBlaze posted: Ack! Sorry about the tardiness of this post - I'm an idiot. Congratulations to Jedsithor on his win! Question - would there be more participation if the writing time was extended? Or are the prompts just not fun enough? Because I'd really love to see more participation in this thing. The next challenge will be posted tomorrow. -Krystal As much as I want my colours back, I personally feel that my entry is the best one I've done so far in either the PT or OT contests and to be honest, I'd prefer to win against competition rather than by default. I'll probably regret this...but I'd be willing to decline victory if you wanted to extend the deadline for the weekend, say 11:59pm Sunday or something. Though since there seems to be little interest in this round, I don't mind winning by default if you want to just move ahead with the next round. It's up to you, but as I said, if it comes to it, I'll be happy to wait. -----signature----- KOTOR Movie Trilogy Forums: http://z11.invisionfree.com/KOTOR_Movies
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