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TheDuelist
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8/4 3:29pm
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RE: The Character Designers Guild
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Kev-Mas_Colcha, I was looking through some of the earlier posts on this thread and came across the CS for your Templar character.
Thought it looked interesting, but just wanted to point out that Force-Blinding by it's nature is not capable of permanently rendering someone blind.
It can do so temporarily, but works more like a benign flare than anything else.
This is very much akin as to how you can't use Force Lightning to jump start someone's heart back to life - rather, you'll just end up frying it and making things worse.
I did like the work you put into your sheet though. 
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Kev-Mas_Colcha
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TheDuelist posted:
Kev-Mas_Colcha, I was looking through some of the earlier posts on this thread and came across the CS for your Templar character.
Thought it looked interesting, but just wanted to point out that Force-Blinding by it's nature is not capable of permanently rendering someone blind.
It can do so temporarily, but works more like a benign flare than anything else.
This is very much akin as to how you can't use Force Lightning to jump start someone's heart back to life - rather, you'll just end up frying it and making things worse.
I did like the work you put into your sheet though.
Yes, I found that out a while ago. I remedied the problem by making the Force Blinding trigger a genetic defect in which he went blind, instantly or over time, so that by the time he was found by the Inquisitorius, he was blind.
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LightWarden
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You couldn't have had him just stagger around and then fall unpleasantly on something?
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This character was created for The Shattered Galaxy rpg, an AU set post-Endor but the change happened at Yavin with Luke's death.
Name: Colonel Artemis Thane
Gender: Male
Age: 53
Species: Human
Homeworld: Coruscant
Known Languages: Basic, Coruscanti, High Galactic, and Huttese
Appearance
---Height: 6'
---Eye Color: Ice Blue
---Hair/Fur Color: Light Brown
---Skin Color: Caucasian
---Clothing: He wears the olive-gray uniform of an officer of the Imperial Army or the armor of a Stormtrooper officer when he is in service of the Empire. Otherwise, he wears a simple Coruscanti fashion of the common populace.
---Other: He was once considered a handsome man, but an exploding bomb that was meant for Emperor Palpatine, had maimed his left side and face. Plastic surgery and skin grafts have repaired most of the damage so he doesn't look hideous, but the scars are still noticable and have left him a little less than handsome.
Personality: He is arrogant, xenophobic, Jediphobic and loyal to the Empire.
Habits: He is politically incorrect when it comes to aliens and his xenophobia, in other words he is a bigot. He drinks a glass of brandy-wine every night before bed, it helps him sleep better and cope with the horrors of war in his dreams. He also drinks stronger liquors at least twice a week.
Likes: He likes fast things such as speederbikes and swoops as well as loose women.
Dislikes: He despises non-humans and Force-users, and the only reason he tolerates the Imperial Family and their guardians is his loyalty to the Empire.
Talents: He can drink any human under the table. He also has a talent for racing swoops though he doesn’t always come in the top three places.
Weakness: He has a slight drinking problem that is growing worse and which he’s trying to overcome with little success. Offer him a stronger drink and he won't turn it down. Get him drunk and he'll speak his heart out.
Limitations: Due to the bombing incident, he cannot run as fast or as far as he use to. He has a pronounced limp in his gait and his left hip hurts in cold weather. He also cannot lift heavy things with his left arm nor raise it above his shoulder for long periods without it tiring.
Racial Attributes: Average.
Affiliation: Galactic Empire
---Profession: Imperial Army Officer, R&D Developer, and Military Advisor
---Primary Weapons: BlasTech DL-44 Pistol
Personal Ship
---Name: Rogue Star
---Model: Luxury Yacht
---Accessories: Usual civilian permitted armament and accessories.
The Force
---Yes or No?: No
Background:
Artemis Thane comes from one of the prominent Coruscanti families that can trace their lineage as far back as half a millennia on Coruscant. Because of his family’s monetary and political connections, Artemis had a privileged life as a young man. He did not always enjoy this life, even though he had everything a young man desired. His parents sent him away to boarding schools for young men and then later enrolled him to the university on Coruscant where his degree was in business and politics so he could one day take over the family company.
He hated it and rebelled against his parents by joining a fraternity that was into fast swoops and loose women, strong drinks and death sticks. When the Coruscant Security Force raided and busted the fraternity for illegal substances, his parents sent him away to the Republic Academy on Carida to become responsible and take the life they had set for him more seriously.
However, his parents’ plans for him went awry when the clone wars broke out between the Republic and the growing Separatists. In need of officers, the republic commissioned their best recruits at the academies and Artemis soon found himself in command of clones as a Lieutenant. He soon discovered he had an aptitude for command and battle. The young man who despised his parents’ plans for him, soon found him self rising in the ranks as a clonetrooper commander and later with the rise of the Galactic Empire, a stormtrooper commander.
He turned his back on his parents and the future they had dreamed up for him and found his calling in the Imperial Army. But eventually all hyperspace lanes lead to Coruscant and found his career as an officer conflicting with an inheritance left to him after his parents were killed by a repulsor mine meant for Imperial troops on a rebel infested planet. Unsure what to do with the family company he had just received, Artemis was eventually convinced to leave the running of Thane Enterprises to the board of directors and bought out most of the shares to make sure it stayed in his name.
The fortune he spent on drinks, loose women and swoops; habits he hadn’t lost even with the discipline of a mandalorian lifestyle as an Imperial officer. These habits grew even more out of hand, particularly his drinking, when he almost became another victim of a terrorist bomb plot to assassinate the Emperor. Although he survived and recovered, his left side of his body was maimed and burned from the explosions. By accepting skin grafts, hours of bacta and physical therapy he finally was able to return to service.
But his career as a field commander was over.
He had failed to pass his physical exam due to a limp and an inability to lift heavy objects or hold his arm high for long periods. Angry at the rebellion and later learning that some of those assassins were aliens, he had developed a hatred for the Rebel Alliance and for anything that wasn’t human. He soon accepted membership to COMPNOR shortly after and although he did not attend the rallies, his membership helped back the organization politically since he comes from one of the prominent Coruscanti families.
Artemis spent the next decade on the sidelines, watching as men like Maximilian Veers rose above him in rank and received the glories and fame of victories over the alliance. Despising where his career was going and seeing his colleagues surpass him, he was determined not to be left behind because of his physical limitations. He soon made a career change that would have pleased his parents somewhat, and became both a military advisor and a developer of military technology using his family’s company.
When he wasn’t overseeing his company and developing new technologies for the Empire, he was traveling the galaxy advising magistrates and governors on how to handle military situations and sometimes seeing the action of battle again, but never participating in it like he would have preferred.
He was away on one such mission to the Outer Rim when the Empire broke out into a civil war. Seeing the Rebel Alliance was taking advantage of the Empire’s distraction, moved in on the Outer Rim and began seizing several worlds for themselves. Artemis tried desperately to keep them at bay on the world he was on with what few troops and armament he had available to him, but was eventually forced out after being overwhelmed by rebel troops. Those that survived, fled back toward the core licking their wounds.
Artemis soon pledged his loyalty to the victors of the civil war and somewhat regretted it later when he discovered they were Force-sensitive and reformed the Royal Guard into a group of lightsaber-welding Imperial Jedi. Artemis had not forgotten the betrayal and elitism of the Jedi and so felt both bitter and wary of them. But because he was loyal to the New Order, he suppressed his dislike for the Force-sensitive royals and accepted them as his leaders.
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Sith-I-5
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LightWarden posted:
Pet PCs might make you happy, but they won't make you a better writer because no one else will ever really care about the manifestation of your ego.
Only a Sith deals in absolutes (I think I have a new favourite phrase).
I would have to disagree with my learned colleague's statement there.
I am unashamedly fond of Agent Nifesta, but unless there is a 'Let's humour Sithy' conspiracy going on, I do come across readers who do care.
I think it is quite possible to improve your writing, or at least maintain quality of writing/RPing even if an "Pet PC" is your avatar of choice to get the job done.
I would also confirm that losing a character(s) can sometimes be much more personal and severe than the someone claiming credit for your work analogy, but then I have never written a full blown novel to get that experience in.
Sooo, what are you guys working on at the moment?
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What are Agent Nifesta's driving motivations?
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Sith-I-5
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At the moment, four years after Order 66, he has three, which don’t necessarily mesh:
He’s a cop. Created in the crucible of action and drama that was the Star Wars…007 Series, his whole sense of identity is wrapped up with him being a Republic security agent, even though that government, and the laws he enforces, no longer exist.
In thinking about how to answer this, I am reminded of an exchange on Homicide: Life on the Street, between a defense attorney, and a cop unfairly brought before a grand jury on corruption charges.
“Ah, you’re one of those.”
“What?”
“One of those people whose job is what they are, not what they do.”
He is missing – don’t hit me – an entire swathe of his past, and his main identity, and sense of worth, is tied up with when he achieved the trusted and coveted position of Agent with the Secret Galactic Intelligence Service, and the trust of his fellow agents.
That organisation is mostly gone, but he still flies the flag.
He’s a recent parent, so, keeping his boy safe. He had adopted a twelve-year old jedi padawan survivor of the Jedi Purge, who had already lost two masters. This tempers the excesses of high risk that he was willing to undertake before in the pursuit of truth, justice, and, well, cos it would be fragging funny.
Protecting the Jedi Order
As a pre-SGIS Force vampire, he happily consumed the life energies of Force Sensetives, regardless of jedi or sith.
Now, and for a while, he subsists only on dark siders, which is a bit like you cutting out half your diet for whatever reason.
He still misses eating jedi, and will wistfully refer to how they tasted, but to maintain his good relations with Master Yoda, forebears.
In a galaxy with the Emperor, Vader, Emperor’s Hands, and a host of dark side hangers on, Yoda recognised in his friend that the being could be an asset to Light or Dark, and the padawan adoption was a bit of manipulation to bring Nifesta more firmly around to the idea that jedi are more than food. They are people too.
Mitch is a bit of an *** hole too, but that side of him has been tempered in recent times since I risked the survival of the whole jedi order by having him and his kid moon the Emperor over holocomm, from the Imperial garrison they had blagged their way into.
Ah, happy days. 
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LightWarden
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You're absolutely right Sith-I, I shouldn't have made that statement that "no one else will ever really care about the manifestation of your ego", because that wasn't true. As CAD proves time and again, you don't need anything resembling talent in order to build up a fanbase. I am not putting you on the same level of artistic failure as I reserve for that comic's creator, but I do not think handing your character that many superpowers is a particularly good idea. Apparently, neither did the internet, considering you managed to score a hundred on that test, and didn't do so hot on any other Mary-Sue litmus test you ran him through. Grass grows, birds fly, sun shines, your character is overpowered for conventional tiers of play. These are facts of life, but they are not immutable facts of life.
You seem content with this, having denounced every critique I've made of your character's power. Fine, there is nothing I can really do about it. The GMs of Galaxy At War don't seem to care, you don't seem to care. I believe you are doing yourself no favors by being this ahead of the curve as a player character in a Star Wars game, but that is your decision. I do not understand how your character's personality and motivations will be adversely affected by powering down, but I do understand the general reluctance of people to change their Pet PCs. If you do not wish to power down your character, then he will remain as he is, as I have no power over you.
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blubeast1237
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Mitthy...
I like the character alot(check your PM box). The only qualms I have are small ones.
Personality: He is arrogant, xenophobic, Jediphobic and loyal to the Empire.
I understand the phobias, but not the arrogance. There's not really anything in the bio that seems that he should have to be particularly over-confident about. Most of the things he based his life on have failed or turned on him. And he's a drinker, a bigot, and a chaser of women. He's old and has a limp. Nothing in these things would inspire him to be vain about anything.
The only other thing is that the bio seems like its missing parts where it jumped from one event to another and they were unrelated. But it makes sense in the end, however, so good job.
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CmdrMitthrawnuruodo
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scratches head
Good point. I guess the arrogance could come from being a bigot. Lots of bigots think their superior than whatever they are hating.
As for the bio, hmm... I was trying to highlight key points without writing a novel and I was writing it at like 1 am too.  But I'll go over it if it doesn't sound like events are going together. Any particular ones?
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blubeast1237 posted:
Personality: He is arrogant, xenophobic, Jediphobic and loyal to the Empire.
I understand the phobias, but not the arrogance. There's not really anything in the bio that seems that he should have to be particularly over-confident about. Most of the things he based his life on have failed or turned on him. And he's a drinker, a bigot, and a chaser of women. He's old and has a limp. Nothing in these things would inspire him to be vain about anything.
It's funny though, but I find that some of the most arrogant people in life are those whom (it would seem) have the least to be arrogant about. Is might just be me, but I meet a lot of them.
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Is might just be me, but I meet a lot of them.
Get a new social circle. 
Oh and Mitthy, I get what you're saying when you said that you wanted to highlight the big points of his life. But where is the growth in him? Has he learned from his past experiences? Since he ended up doing exactly what his parents wanted him to do, does he take advice better? And even though old habits die hard, is there anything that will stop him from being an old bigot and woman chaser? Or is he, like most old people, just set in his ways and wont change?
You don't have to answer all these questions, of course, I was just throwing the character growth card out there. 
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Now what?
Edit: Well since I don't know what the current activity is here, and I don't want to be accused of spamming the thread, I'll reveal that I have been allowed to resurrect a jedi's disembodied hand.
In its first incarnation, it had been lopped off a jedi character's arm, just before he was incarcerated aboard a Separatist flagship, and then due to unknown RL issues, the player disappeared, and I was instructed/permitted to take the character on.
In order to get him out of his predicament - floating Force field, surrounded by droideka, drugged to suppress jedi abilites - I had to bring in the ghost of his old master, who, on finding his student's hand being used by a CIS publicist to research his book, 101 Uses For A Dead Jedi's Hand, took control of it in order to retrieve the imprisoned jedi's lightsabre from a glass case, and that done, found he was unable to leave the hand.
Primary motivation: to have a physical presence to retrieve a lightsabre, and effect the escape of his student.
I will print up an old post as soon as I find it.
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Now, Sithy, we wait.
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That's pretty cool...
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