| Author |
Topic:
Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 6/28/08 and thanks for the noms
|
wolf_kenobi
Registered:
Nov '07
|
Date Posted:
3/10 7:27pm
Subject:
RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 3/10/08
|
Oh. Dear. Force. 
This is bad. No, not bad- terribly horribly evilly nasty!
Maul is so, so, so, so creepy here. 
Thank the Force Ben made it out! Now Le'orath just has to hang on until Anakin and Mace get there.  
They'd better hurry! 
Excellent work as always!  Can't wait until the next post- and it better resolve this nasty cliffie!  
-----signature-----
Is God willing to prevent evil but not able? Then he is not omnipotent.
Is he able but not willing? Then he is malevolent.
Is he both able and willing? Then whence cometh evil?
Is he neither able nor willing? Then why call him God. -Epicurus
Proud Vegan
|
|
|
Quote Reply |
Active Topic Notification |
Private Message |
Post History
|
jedidas3
Registered:
Apr '07
|
Date Posted:
3/11 4:40am
Subject:
RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 3/10/08
|
 I don't know where to begin. First off, you've managed to turn out another incredibly written post. Your talent amazes me. Second of all, the description of Darth Maul was chilling...I'm still shivering.
Wonderful job as always Master, and I'm looking forward to the next post. You can't leave us hanging like that!
-----signature-----
|
|
|
Quote Reply |
Active Topic Notification |
Private Message |
Post History
|
Valairy_Scot
Registered:
Sep '05
|
Date Posted:
3/11 8:07am
Subject:
RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 3/10/08
|
Good grief - no wonder you sought "mod approval." Holy cow. And you thought the torture in MY story was hard to read. <shivers>
I'm checking under my bed tonight and keeping the fanged one (cat) nearby (of course, he'd make me protect him).
-----signature-----
see bio for stories and links - silly and serious
[link=http://boards.theforce.net/b/b10476/25756073]Never Look Back[/link]
Self-proclaimed winner: of the best readers and
fans on the JC forums
|
|
|
Quote Reply |
Active Topic Notification |
Private Message |
Post History
|
LadyLunas
Registered:
Aug '05
|
Date Posted:
3/11 12:19pm
Subject:
RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 3/10/08
|
Oh my.
Darth Maul is . . . creepy. And that seems too mild! I looked over my shoulder at the doorway immediately after finishing the post. *shudders*
I'm eagerly waiting for the next post!
-----signature-----
Darth Real Life hates me. Therefore, I battle him constantly. Currently, he's winning. So I'm lurking. Beginnings: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/23441427/p1/?0 Normal students? In the Jedi Temple? Read USJS! Padawan of SakuraTsukikage.
|
|
|
Quote Reply |
Active Topic Notification |
Private Message |
Post History
|
AuroraDumalOfBoden
Registered:
Mar '08
|
Date Posted:
3/11 3:18pm
Subject:
RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 3/10/08
|
NOOOOOOOOOO!!!! Not Le'orath!!!!! 
I swear, you'd better let her and the little one live, or I'll kill you myself.
I just spent 2 days straight reading this story and ignoring my extensive Trig homework. You'd better come through!!!!
On another note, masterfully done, and I can't wait for an update. If it's not too much trouble, could you add me to your PM list? I understand you're getting overloaded, so it's okay if you don't.
....As long as you don't kill Le'orath, and don't let my Obi turn Sith!!!!!!
-----signature-----
Things to do today:
1) Get up.
2) Survive.
3) Go back to bed.
4) Repeat as necessary.
|
|
|
Quote Reply |
Active Topic Notification |
Private Message |
Post History
|
jedi7
Registered:
Jan '02
|
Date Posted:
3/11 8:17pm
Subject:
RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 3/10/08
|
|
I am so full of angst hopeing that something good is going to come of all this, I've been reading this story from the begining on another site and can't get enough . So to prevent this reader from having a heart attack, stroking out or developing an ulcer, POST SOON!!!!!!!!! 7
|
|
|
Quote Reply |
Active Topic Notification |
Private Message |
Post History
|
ardavenport
Registered:
Dec '04
|
Date Posted:
3/11 8:36pm
Subject:
RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 3/10/08
- Date Edited:
3/11 8:36pm (1 edits total)
Edited By:
ardavenport
|
Huh???
Well, that's quite a cliff-hanger. There is some need to get to the next part for this one. I'd really prefer to see Qui-Gon's family survive, but you've made that awfully hard. Maul's words imply that he plans on her surviving a little longer, but his actions don't.
I was pleased to see Anakin finally get his act together and Mace get over his snit with the kid, but they're quite a bit late, aren't they. Ugh. I certainly hope they can redeem themselves.
Looking forward to the next part......impatiently.
-----signature-----
Links to all fics -- http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=25405090&brd=10304&start=26223917 The Heart of the Jedi -- http://boards.theforce.net/b/b1/26013327 ---- Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan, JA and everything you wanted to know about lightsabers
|
|
|
Quote Reply |
Active Topic Notification |
Private Message |
Post History
|
Kivas
Registered:
Mar '05
|
Date Posted:
3/12 7:51am
Subject:
RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 3/10/08
|
|
wow... just ... wow.. the venom, fear, hatred it was all oozing from my screen very well done.
-----signature-----
Spectres they may be, Your spectres they are
Hurt you they can.
|
|
|
Quote Reply |
Active Topic Notification |
Private Message |
Post History
|
Ocelotl_Nesto
Registered:
Oct '04
|
Date Posted:
3/12 1:24pm
Subject:
RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 3/10/08
|
That was grim and nasty... You got into Mauls head really well...
I look foward to Maul experiencing the Force Tornado that is Anakin
|
|
|
Quote Reply |
Active Topic Notification |
Private Message |
Post History
|
Independence1776
Registered:
Feb '06
|
Date Posted:
3/13 8:34am
Subject:
RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 3/10/08
|
Oh, Force. You can't leave it there! You just can't.
Poor, poor Le'orath. She's hurt so badly, and she's definitely lost the child. She won't bleed to death, but that's scant comfort.
Maul is evil. Pure evil. There is no other word to describe him.
Let's hope Anakin and Mace take care of him- and fast.
Wonderful, heartrending post. I'm on the edge of my seat waiting for the next update.
-----signature-----
 "Independence forever." John Adams Padawan to Luna_Nightshade Fics in bio Ever wondered what would happen if some Padawans attended a normal school? Come find out: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28037486
|
|
|
Quote Reply |
Active Topic Notification |
Private Message |
Post History
|
Healer_Leona
Registered:
Jul '00
|
Date Posted:
3/14 5:22pm
Subject:
RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 3/10/08
|
Though I will alwys eventually open it, it just might tke a couple days to be able to give the fic the attention it deserves.
For a moment, the memories threatened to overwhelm her. Qui-Gon Jinn - fool, idiot, beloved. Every beat of her heart and she grieved for him, wanted him, missed him.
My chest just aches for her. Though of course she always knew how he was, it doesn't amke the pain any less. 
Oh my, a couple times I had to suck in breath because I was holding it while reading it. And then you go and leave us dangling!!!
Wow!
-----signature-----
So to my friends that even call but I don't call back
I want you deep inside my heart upon a hill
It seems to hide sometimes and run away and wonder
I'm really sick of saying sorry but I will
|
|
|
Quote Reply |
Active Topic Notification |
Private Message |
Post History
|
PadawanKitara
Registered:
Dec '01
|
Date Posted:
3/14 10:54pm
Subject:
RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 3/10/08
|
|
I think I stopped breathing while I was reading the end of that post. WOW
-----signature-----
Courtier of the Royal Order of Shambling Dufi
We are Dufi...Resistance is Futile!
UCLA BRUINS
|
|
|
Quote Reply |
Active Topic Notification |
Private Message |
Post History
|
Tahi
Registered:
Jun '02
|
Date Posted:
3/17 10:16pm
Subject:
RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 3/10/08
|
The air was heavy with warning. Twisting grey clouds were billowing up over the mountains and tumbling down toward the farm, the storm moisture-laden, full of wild light and the distant sound of thunder. As Le'orath stared out the kitchen window, she saw a jagged spear of lightning hit the mountaintop and then crackle down the stony cliffs. The noisy afterburst rattled the back door; she could almost taste the ozone.
Beautiful yet ominous - great beginning and mood setter.
Oh dear, poor Le'orath. It makes me realise the toll that having a Jedi husband can take. I love the way you have her following Qui-Gon's tradition even though she doesn't really know why. That's so human.
Mama, the bad man is coming." His eyes were huge in the darkness and he was shivering. "He's coming. We have to hide."
"Sweetheart, it was just a dream. You must have heard the thunder.
Yes, to your son you must listen!!!!
Golly - that build up to Maul's appearance was shivery. Great stuff - even though my poor old knees are knocking.
Oh boy - I really, really hate Maul. That torture was pure evil as in 666-Evil. Fantastic writing, as always.  I don't know how poor Le'orath will survive all that, or the poor baby. But I sure hope they do.
-----signature-----
|
|
|
Quote Reply |
Active Topic Notification |
Private Message |
Post History
|
Captain_Observant
Registered:
Dec '02
|
Date Posted:
3/18 3:01am
Subject:
RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 3/10/08
|
OMG Diane!!!!!
That last post was terrifying!! Poor Le'orath! Poor Ben! I just can't believe that you did that! I just hope Ani and Mace hurry up and get there and at least save Ben... and I just feel horrible for Le'orath...I am sure that she lost the baby, and there is a good chance that she might follow as well. I can only begin to imagine how Qui-Gon will react if/when he finds out....
I just...yea...well....I don't know what else to say except that I hope you give us more soon...please?
-----signature-----
"Tact is for people who aren't witty enough to be sarcastic."  Innocent, unless you get blood on your hands, then guilty until you find the bleach.  "I raised my daughters not to be afraid of anything - except spiders." My Dad
|
|
|
Quote Reply |
Active Topic Notification |
Private Message |
Post History
|
Obi-Odd13
Registered:
Feb '08
|
Date Posted:
3/23 9:00am
Subject:
RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 3/10/08
|
Man, that was intense! Maul was intensely creepy for lack of a stronger word. And he
killed the baby! and quite possibly Le'orath too! Run Ben run! And Ani, hurry up and
get your but over there!
... you know watching Jurassic Park 'till 1:30 Am and then going to read this post
had me so paraniod that either Maul or a velociraptor was gonna sneak into my room
that I had to wait till mornig 'till I had anything coherent to say. 
Please please update soon? I really can't wait for the next chpater, I just dying to
see it!
-----signature-----
Good friends bail you out of jail. Best friends are in there with you.
“We are one, after all, you and I, together we suffer, together exist
and forever will recreate each other.” ~Teilhard de Chardin
|
|
|
Quote Reply |
Active Topic Notification |
Private Message |
Post History
|
