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Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 9/22/08
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calimora
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5/9 5:33pm
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RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 5/9/08
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ah! It's painful to see Obi-Wan in turmoil. I love how Qui-gon and Atel were fussing. I also liked Atel in this chapter. She reminds me a lot of Padawan Kenobi.
I have a feeling that Obi-Wan's infamous feeling is spot on.
(Woot! First!)
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Valairy_Scot
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5/9 5:45pm
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Wow - I need time to digest all this but what a wonderful update!
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wolf_kenobi
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5/9 6:02pm
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RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 5/9/08
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Wow. This was such a well written post. 
I have to say I agree with Obi-Wan on this one- I wouldn't want to stay with the Jedi either. Not after what the Council has done... 
 They're going to fight a Sith Lord with both Obi and Qui injured... this doesn't look good.
Great job!
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Magier
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5/9 6:19pm
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At least Obi-Wan realizes that he is not where he needs to be to handle where they are going. He knows that he should not be harboring the anger and despair he is and he knows that his injuries aren't exactly a bonus to him.
That said, I don't think it brings me any comfort because he still has to go. Atel accompanying him, for all her good intentions, is not going to help all this fear he has.
I like how Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan still are close enough to see through the facades each was projecting.
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Musing
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5/9 6:28pm
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Fuss, fuss, fuss!
It's nice seeing everybody taking care of everybody else for a change. (Even if Obi-Wan seems to think Healer Leabe is almost on a par with Palpatine.  )
While Atel really seems to believe that Obi-Wan could help rebuild the Jedi Order, I don't think Obi-Wan has the objectivity to do so. And there's too much corruption on the inside at every level of the Order. It might be better to get help from the Bendu who were once on the Jedi Council, like Yoda, Mace Windu and Adi Gallia, to help sort things out. They have the experience and the knowledge of how the Jedi Order was before Palpatine started meddling.
Nice job, dianethx!
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Jedi_Perigrine
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5/9 6:49pm
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Holy moley, this is one heck of a long story! I just finished reading the prequel (LOVED it) and I can't wait to get started on this one! Keep up the good work!
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Cole_Kenobi
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5/9 7:57pm
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Brillant update! Thank you so much! There is nothing wrong with taking your time and doing something right, and you've written a wonderful story that has captured my imagination and fed my addiction. Ahah.
I love how you capture all the characters' emotions and portray them so effectively.
So glad Altel is trying to get Obi-wan to stick with the Jedi and maybe fix things for the better. I have a weary feeling Obi-wan might not be there to do it, but Altel has come a long way, maybe she would be the perfect canidate to restore the Jedi Order Qui-gon and Obi-wan knew.
Awesome chapter! Thank you for the PM! Can't wait for more! Execited to see what will happen next!
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BrightFeather
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5/9 9:31pm
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Let's hope that they can defeat Palpy. I mean, he's not decrepit yet.
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Gkilkenny
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5/10 1:57am
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Brilliant, and now they are off to battle a sith lord
"May the force be with them"
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PadawanKitara
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5/11 6:22pm
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Obi-Wan is in no shape to do this- Not Good
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Ocelotl_Nesto
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5/12 8:47am
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Obi appears to be procrastinating the day of his remorse. It was time for him to say sorry and he balked.
the suspense in this story is amazing.
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jedidas3
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5/12 9:11am
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How do you do it Master? How do you continually put out such beautifully written posts that pull your readers right into the story? What an incredible post and one that I've been looking forward to! Obi-Wan is in such turmoil and you portray this wonderfully. It makes me so proud to be your Padawan! 
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Independence1776
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5/12 3:56pm
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RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 5/9/08
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Healer Leabe was unspeakably cheerful for someone who was torturing him. He poked and prodded and nodded wisely as if he were pleased with whatever he saw in the saber wound. Healers and Obi-Wan=
Obi-Wan really needs time, everyone knows it, but they just don't have it. 
There was so much lost, never to be regained. That's life.
Shrugging, she gave him a tentative smile. "I know but someone has to protect you. You are always getting into trouble without me around." [face_smile]
"No, I'm a Jedi, like my Master before me and his Master before him." Atel said, softly, "It's all I've ever wanted." Wonderful twisting of a canon line.
It had been his dream as well, to be a Knight, to serve the Force, to bring peace and justice to all - foolish dreams that had vanished into ash. *nods* Here, in this universe, yes. But you can't just give up on them.
"He'll need someone whose hands are clean, who can see past all the political tricks and keep the Jedi and the Council from straying into the dark again." True. But I think Qui-Gon would be better at this point in time than Obi-Wan.
With Atel hovering over him, he pulled on his belt, and grabbed his saber. Qui-Gon was up and waiting for him by the door. Already feeling the effects of a lower pain dosage and injuries still not healed, Obi-Wan said sourly, "We wouldn't want to keep the Chancellor waiting." Of course not.
But when he looked into Derst's eyes, he realized that the man knew what was about to happen. There was fear there but there was also determination. Because that's what they have to do.
They were going to try and capture a Sith Lord.
Obi-Wan had a very bad feeling about this. So do I.
Wonderful tension-builder post.
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Kivas
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5/13 10:04am
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RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 5/9/08
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Great update, I think it also bodes well that Yoda is with the Bendu.
The end game is afoot and I can't wait for the next update.
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Healer_Leona
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5/13 7:25pm
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I feel so bad for Obi-Wan. Everything he once thought so highly of twisted at this feet.
YIkes and can't wait for the next post!!
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