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BrightFeather Registered: Nov '05	Date Posted: 5/22 10:47pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 5/21/08
	Wow. Diane, you can't just leave it there. Please! Come back and give us another chapter! -----signature----- Padawan of Layren. Creator of Darth Cookie E-sis of DaenaBenjen42 and BrentusofGath. http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/22518786/p1/?3 http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/22764026/p1/?2
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jedidas3 Registered: Apr '07	Date Posted: 5/23 5:31am Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 5/21/08
	Another fantastic chapter, Master! When I read something as incredible as this, I realize how much I still have to learn! Good thing I have you to guide me! -----signature----- The Past Revisited http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28440949 Lessons Learned http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28580784 Remembrance http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/28009025 Padawan to dianethx
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Kivas Registered: Mar '05	Date Posted: 5/23 8:07am Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 5/21/08
	excuse me while I pick up my jaw - that was simply dripping with intensity. -----signature----- Spectres they may be, Your spectres they are Hurt you they can.
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Princess_Arulmozhi Registered: Nov '04	Date Posted: 5/23 11:30pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 5/21/08
	Ow, ow, ow, me biting my nails off, as others have commented before me. Evil author. How could you leave it a that! Sigh. At least you're writing. Its wonderful, as always, the tension rises, and Anakin is in (full) form. I liked how Windu keeps biting his head off.:) -----signature----- Perceptions (Xanatos/Obi/Qui/Anakin) AU:http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/25276178/p1/?7 - vignette Stones (Li'l Obi/Qui) - http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/23371821/p1/ Best Author, WFFA (BtS) 05/06 Lore-Master to 7
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bek Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 5/26 2:52pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 5/21/08 - Date Edited: 5/26 2:53pm (1 edits total) Edited By: bek
	Poor Anakin, wanting to find and help his surrogate family but knowing he must listen to Mace's instruction and help the older Jedi in taking care of this threat once and for all. The kid is being torn in two different directions. Hopefully this will end well for Mace, Anakin, Ben and his mother. Another tense chapter leaving us wanting more! -----signature----- Update 10/2/08- Chap. 40- Life Beyond the Code (Obi-Wan/Anakin) - http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/20820324 Update 9/3/08- Chap. 26 - Not Myself - (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon/Oc's) - Before the Saga Update 9/3/08 - Part 6 - Strength to Begin Anew
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Healer_Leona Registered: Jul '00	Date Posted: 5/27 7:14am Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 5/21/08
	Love the build up of tension as Anakin and Mace race to the house. Swallowing back the bile that had risen in his throat at the thought that they might be too late after all, he looked more closely at the house. In the thickening gloom, he could see eye-searing red light flashing through the windows. It looked like it was coming from the kitchen area. It looked like a lightsaber. Kriff. Exactly!!! "Anakin, think. What would Qui-Gon do?" The man was standing over him, pushing him to answer, frowning for a reply. "What would he do?" "His duty, damn you." Anakin snarled back. "Then do yours, Apprentice Skywalker." Mace is right, but, but... Before Ben could say anything else, a rough chuckle crawled down the walls, the sound dark and poisonous and so very sure. "I gutted her Please no... Arrrgh. Evil cliffie!! -----signature----- Still crazy after all these years.
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Jaira Title: FanForce Arkansas PR Officer Registered: May '05	Date Posted: 5/28 9:54pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 5/21/08
	ARGHGHGH!!!!!!!!!!!!! Keep going with those 100 words a day! It's really working for you. -----signature----- Where has all the Siriwan gone? Need a fun break? http://z9.invisionfree.com/Jello_Anarchy/
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Tahi Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 6/1 2:39am Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 5/21/08
	Out of the corner of his eye, he could see that Master Windu had already stopped talking into his commlink, and now was sitting there, hands white-knuckled on the seat. Master Qui-Gon had often done that as well - whenever Anakin had been driving. Ha ha - loved that bit. I'm like that when my husband drives - he thinks he's Mario Andretti!!! But more importantly, the Force itself felt tainted, contaminated, streaked with pain and black desperation. Overlaying it all was a kind of sick glee. Yeees - Maul has that effect. Every second spent standing there arguing was time lost. Indeed. I'm glad they both realised that. But Windu's manner doesn't make it easy, especially for Anakin who is used to Obi's more cooperative approach. Maul is one sick puppy. I liked the way you had even Windu struggling to calm himself. And oh boy, this is going to be one mother of a fight. I'm hoping that Le'orath is going to be okay. Maul's obsession with gutting things is disturbing. [face_shocked] Awesome post - Anakin's emotional struggle was extremely well-written. -----signature----- Anahiri #6 http://boards.theforce.net/fan_fiction_resource/b10304/18446448/p33 The magazine for A/T fans Many Happy Returns http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/11018706/p81/?2011 Master to THE_PIED_PIPER
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Darth_Leia_6669 Registered: Apr '03	Date Posted: 6/2 12:35pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 5/21/08
	It's me again! Trying to catch up again, but I wanted you to know that I'm still reading, and enjoying. Will give a better review when I can! --later-- 6669 -----signature----- SOTH: When Worlds Collide http://boards.theforce.net/message.asp?topic=28532068&brd=10476 Chapter 17 up 10-8!! Master to Lisbev! Vader for Prez in '08! Check my profile for more stories and art!
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Darth_Leia_6669 Registered: Apr '03	Date Posted: 6/3 12:45pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 5/21/08
	Ok, so it only took nearly three hours of intense reading, but I did it!!! I caught up, for like the fiftieth time since I started!!! Yeah me!!! What can I say but, WOW! Especially the cliffie that you’ve left us all with. Evil, I’m telling you, just evil. Not to mention what you did to poor Le’orath, how could you? I thought you liked her?!?! I also believe that you had waaaaay too much fun writing Palpatine/Sideous. Seriously though, excellent job. I didn’t get to read too many of your posts other than the story, but I did see that you have challenged yourself to writing 100 words a day. It seems to be going well for you. Keep it up, and hope to see more from you soon! --later— 6669 -----signature----- SOTH: When Worlds Collide http://boards.theforce.net/message.asp?topic=28532068&brd=10476 Chapter 17 up 10-8!! Master to Lisbev! Vader for Prez in '08! Check my profile for more stories and art!
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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 6/28 10:22am Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 5/21/08
	Valiary_Scot – Yep, exactly. I wanted the post to mirror what had happened in AOTC. Glad you liked it. Jedi_Perigrine – Thanks. I also wanted to run down Maul but that will have to wait for a little bit first. I'm glad that I was able to up the anxiety for you. Next post will be a little quieter and then I'll be upping the tension again. It's my way of tormenting my readers. LOL. – Actually I'm trying to emulate the books a bit so there is tension then a backing away and then more tension until it all explodes! Musing – Working together…. I guess they are. LOL They were fun to write, though. They go together like fire and ice. As for survival, we'll just have to see. Thanks! Jinngerbread – I do love my cliff-hangers. I'm glad to hear that it came out creepy. I was going for that. Thanks so much for reading and helping me out with all those darned decisions! I really appreciate it. Kitara – LOL. Anakin not rushing in ahead? How could that be? LOL. You'll just have to wait and see. GunraysLawyer – I'm glad to see you back on the boards. I've missed your posting on your story. LOL on the edit. I would have been happy with the short one but the longer one is even better. Mace and Anakin. They are so much fun to play with since they are a lot alike. I had a great time with them yelling at each other. As for the scene, yes there is flying farm machinery but Maul doesn't do small debris. Anakin, however… is a master of it. We'll see how that plays out. Thanks so much for reading. Gkilkenny – Thanks. Glad you liked it. EGKenobi – Thanks. We won't see Mace and Anakin for a while, not for a couple of posts. Just happy to have you reading. Magier – This is a huge test for them both. They don't like each other and fighting as a team will be difficult. They are going to need to work together just to survive! I did have fits with this post. Initially I was going to have Anakin go after Maul without the discussion about Le'orath but I wasn't sure if that was his nature to do so. He's a natural hunter but he also loves his surrogate family so I was torn between what he would do. I even asked on the Vader thread and it was kind of 50/50. So I went with the one that gave Anakin more empathy. Thanks. Independence1776 – Thanks. I'm really glad that the creepiness came through with Maul. The Zabrek is a demon but also a cunning one. He loves torturing and murdering people – he probably gets off on it and I wanted to show how deadly he can be. LOL on the Anakin/Mace conflict. They are really too much alike and it hurts their relationship, especially since Mace can't seem to unbend even a little bit and help Anakin realize what he has to do. Yes, I wanted the cortosis gauntlets to give them a small advantage. Of course, I'm sure Maul has seen them before so he knows what not to do. Gotta love cliffhangers. However, the next one won't resolve it. It will be a couple of posts before we see them again. Thanks. wolf_kenobi – Thanks. I really liked writing Mace and Anakin. They are so much fun to torment. LOL. Worried about the outcome…. why whatever do you mean! Thanks. Ocelotl_Nesto – Thanks. I'm trying to get the tension up by making the scenes shorter and more tense and then backing off a bit and then going for another tense scene. Yes, you guessed it. Next scene will be with Kenobi and Jinn. Then we'll see what Palpatine has been up to… Thanks. BrightFeather – LOL. Of course I can leave it there. In fact, the next couple of posts, I will certainly leave it there. Thanks for reading. jedidas3 – Thanks. I think you are doing just fine yourself. I really loved the last chapter with Obi and Qui at odds in your sequel. It was great. Kivas – Thanks. It was a bit intense, if I do say so myself. It was also hard to write since I tend to get into the action myself and end up exhausted. LOL. Thanks for reading. Princess – Evil indeed. I love cliffies. Plus it was such fun to write the last line and know my readers would be upset. I loved writing Mace and Anakin. They are so energetic. Yes, I'm writing. I've been writing a bunch of drabbles. It seems to keep the juices flowing – even if it's not about this story. I hope you get your muse back because there are so many stories you have to write about ::cough::The Learner and SoS::cough:: Thanks. bek – Poor Anakin. I did have fits deciding which way he should go. I even asked on the Vader thread what Anakin would do and they were about evenly divided. I finally decided to go with the more empathetic Anakin. As for ending well… you'll just have to see. Thanks. Leona – Glad you liked the buildup of tension with Mace and Anakin. Such fun to write. LOL on the evil cliffie. Gotta love those. Thanks for reading. Jaira – LOL. Thanks. Yes, I've been keeping up with the 100 words/day for the most part. I've had a few RL problems so it's been harder than I would have liked. Glad you liked it. Tahi – I'm glad I gave you the feeling of driving fast. LOL. I figured Anakin would drive everyone crazy with his flying, including Qui-Gon. Maul is a great character to write. He's vastly underused in the movies so it's great to fill in the gaps with him. Maul is indeed a sick puppy. He does love to see blood and guts. I would imagine he can feel the pain through the Force and enjoys it. LOL on Mace and Anakin. They are so at odds with each other. Loved writing them. And yes I'm hoping to have this be a great fight. Keeping my fingers crossed on that! Thanks so much! Darth_Leia_6669 – LOL. Hurray. You caught up. LOL on the evil cliffie. I do love them. I am evil, I must admit. LOL on Le'orath. I do like her but I'm willing to kill off characters if they need to be killed. But you are assuming she's dead…. Yes, I have way, way, way too much fun writing Sid and Maul. They are so deliciously evil. Yes, the 100 word a day is working somewhat well. I've had RL problems but I'm trying to keep it up. At least I can do drabbles. Thanks so much for reading. -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 9/22/08 Fragments of Illusion- http://boards.theforce.net/bts/b10475/28456473 updated 8/16/08 Freeze frame - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b10476/27820434 Master to jedidas3 Impeach Bush!
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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 6/28 10:46am Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 6/28/08 and thanks for the noms - Date Edited: 6/28 7:48pm (1 edits total) Edited By: dianethx
	First and foremost, I'd really like to thank my readers. You've been a very patient lot, amazingly so, and I'm so happy that I've been able to keep you at least slightly entertained. I'd also like to thank those who nominated this story for the Saga awards. I was surprised and very pleased! Thanks so much. Finally but not least important, I'd like to emphasize how much help Layren (aka Jinngerbread) and Shaindl have been. Shaindl, although she is no longer on the boards, some time ago calmed me down and got me to think about how to end this story - I was panicking because it just didn't work the way I'd planned it. It is because of her that I think it's much more tightly organized, the characterizations are better and I'm ever grateful for her understanding and her brainstorming ideas. And Layren has been so patient with me, answering my 'what if' questions and in general helping me to choose which path to take. I can't tell you how many times I was frozen in the middle of writing something and she helped me get over it. Thank you all so very much. Last time we saw Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon and friends, they were leaving the Healer's ward. I wonder what they are doing now.... Chapter 35 - Jedi's Choice The tension in the shuttle was formidable. There were twelve of them there: Atel and Qui-Gon, Sle'fey and Xacor, Derst and the guard from the Hunter's Group, Rostak. The rest Obi-Wan didn't recognize but that was not uncommon. Over the years, the Council had kept him so busy that, unless he or Atel were in the Healer's ward, he'd rarely stayed at the Temple more than a few days. There had been no time for growing friendships. Even the occasional social gathering of Knights and Masters organized to discuss problems in the field had been curtailed; it was too much of an expense according to the Senate accountants. So he'd had no real connection with the remaining Jedi and most of his friends had been cast out early in the first few rounds of dismissals. Now he wondered if the constant missions had been deliberate, not so much that he was needed in the field but to keep him isolated from the other Jedi. He couldn't dismiss the idea. Sle'fey and Xacor and Tharten had all used him in their own ways and isolation would have kept him from finding out the truth too soon. He wasn't the only victim in this. Atel had been a young girl, not quite ten years old when she'd been assigned to him. He'd tried his best to keep her safe. But with her studies and the pressures of mission imperatives, he'd often had to leave her behind. Tharten had 'helped' her with her studies while he was away. In hindsight, it was obvious what a very great mistake that had been but at the time, he'd had little choice. Now it was too late to repair the damage. Now if they survived this debacle, he might never see her again. He was already mourning the loss. She must have caught some of his unease because she leaned into him, wordless comfort in her touch. He sent her back a half-smile. Memories of other missions, of other times when she'd sat next to him before going into battle, caught in his throat. So often they'd relied on each other in the field - for strength, for courage, for the warmth that comes from family. Now he could not bear to see the worry in her eyes. He turned away and glanced at the other Jedi in the shuttle. Most of them were gathered in the back, obviously lost in thought, staring out the window or else looking at nothing at all. There was nervousness there and concern. He could feel dread troubling the air. At the front of the shuttle, Masters Xacor and Sle'fey were deep in conversation, whispering heatedly but not so loudly that he could hear what they were saying. It didn't matter. It was none of his concern. But it was disconcerting that Sle'fey kept glancing at him and then at Qui-Gon and away again; his dark eyes were opaque, his fur flattened and still. Xacor, too, would look their way and then mutter something to the Bothan. It was obvious that they were plotting again. Obi-Wan just hoped it didn't include him or his old Master. He'd had enough of their conspiracies to last a lifetime. The only one truly at peace seemed to be Qui-Gon Jinn. He was cool serenity in a maelstrom of growing darkness. Qui-Gon sat next to him, eyes closed, deep in meditation. Obi-Wan was not surprised. He thought back to all the times his former Master had found his calm center in the midst of battle, drawing in the Force with complete ease. Now, likely going to his death, Qui-Gon was again reaching to the Force for strength. Obi-Wan could not. Tainted by fear and the fury of being pushed into something he knew would only end in disaster, he was loathe to touch the Force as Qui-Gon had done. So he sat there and tried not to think. The respite lasted only a few moments. The frantic whispering at the front of the shuttle died down. Obi-Wan looked up to see Master Sle'fey walking over to him, halting a step or two away, just out of reach. Xacor was right behind him, frowning. "Master Xacor..., " the Bothan Master nodded back toward his counterpart and then said softly, "disagrees with me on the timing but I feel that it needs to be said, now, before we reach the Senate and things become complicated." Taking a deep breath and letting it out slowly, Sle'fey settled into ready stance, looking as if he were about to go into battle, even if it was only with words. Looking at Obi-Wan with a steadfast gaze, he said, "Knight Kenobi, when this is done, I would like you to consider accepting an appointment to the Jedi Council. The others and I have discussed this and we would be honored if you would join us." Beside him, he heard a little gasp from Atel; her hand fell onto his sleeve, warmth and hope in her touch. Clearly, she wanted him to change his mind and stay with the Order. She was too naive for her own good. She would take the offered bait and never see the price. But he did. Once he had been as gullible as Atel. Ignoring the decay of the Order, he'd assumed that he was doing the right thing by remaining with the Jedi but all he had really done was enable them to use him for their own agendas. Manipulation and the lust for power drove Sle'fey and Xacor and the others, not to make things better for all but to control everything and everyone around them. They were little better than gundarks he'd faced so long ago, full of teeth and claws and ravenous hunger. They were power mad and did not think anything wrong in it. "Are you trying to bribe me, Sle'fey? With the honor of Councilship?" It took all of his strength not to spit in their faces. "Or is this just another of your games?" "No games, Obi-Wan." Master Xacor said quietly. "Trest is a little premature in bringing this up - it should have waited until after Palpatine's capture, but we do want you on the Council." Sending an annoyed glare toward Xacor, Sle'fey then turned back to Obi-Wan. "The truth is that we need you, not just the Council but the Jedi Order. If we are regain a little of what we once were...." The Bothan had the gall to look both ashamed and thoroughly earnest. "We need you." Obi-Wan felt out of control again. Long ago, before the dismissals and the loss of so many Jedi, he would have been elated to be asked to be on the Council. They had been the wisest of the Jedi Order after all and he would have considered himself fortunate to sit among them. Now with everything that had happened, he could only feel contempt at their obvious manipulations. "You're lying. I don't think you know what the truth is anymore." "Obi-Wan, I know that our choices hurt you in the past but we did what we thought was right at the time. I didn't like lying to you but I would do it again if I thought it necessary." Folding one paw over another, Sle'fey stood there, unrepentant. "I had to think of the Order above my own conscience." "And that is why hundreds died? Because you ignored your conscience?" Obi-Wan could not keep the disgust out of his voice. "I didn't kill them and we did everything we could to stop it once we realized what was going on." Drawing in a deep breath and letting it out slowly, Sle'fey said, "I cannot change the past but I would like to change the future. With your help." The Bothan Master sounded so reasonable, so calm that Obi-Wan could almost feel himself listening to the bold-faced liar. If he'd been in his right mind, he'd have turned away, dismissing them without another thought. Instead he sat there, tired, confused and bitter. The pain medication only kept the sharp agony of his wound at bay but the pull of repaired muscles reminded him of betrayal and the terror of almost losing Qui-Gon, reminded him of mind-rape and the unclean memory of Tharten's final moments under his hand. And now the Master who had used him for all of those years, was as much to blame as Tharten had been, wanted a favor. He would have smiled at the irony if it weren't so absurd. Beside him, Atel shifted, spoke up, "Master, this would be a...." The hope shining in her eyes reminded him again of what he had lost and it hardened his resolve. "Don't!" She jerked back, clearly startled at his vehemence. "I'm leaving the Order as soon as this is over. I'm done with their tricks." "But he seems sincere." "He always does." The cold contempt in Obi-Wan's voice frosted the air but it didn't stop Sle'fey from saying, "I ask that you consider it." The Bothan Master drew back, nodded toward the Senate building in the distance. "When Palpatine is captured and we have time to discuss this further, I would welcome your concerns. Perhaps we can negotiate terms." "Negotiate? When did anyone ever negotiate for a seat on the Council?" The implications were staggering and yet he was not surprised. Before everything changed ten years ago, such a suggestion would never have been considered; the image of Master Yoda and Mace Windu haggling like Corellian smugglers over the price of a Council seat was so far beyond the realm of possibility that Obi-Wan could not even wrap his mind around the concept. It was preposterous. He waited for a protest, waited for Sle'fey to tell him that he had misunderstood, waited for an explanation that could indicate that at least one aspect of the Jedi Order had remained pure. But silence was its own answer. "Ah, I see." Even the words left a bitter taste in his mouth. Not surprisingly, Sle'fey did not blink at the loathing in Obi-Wan's voice, merely stood there looking down at him. Finally, he shrugged, his paws spread wide in a motion that might be considered contrition. "The Jedi have not been on the right path for some time. It is.... difficult to change overnight." Sle'fey looked down, then turned away, avoiding Obi-Wan's eyes, staring out the shuttle window into the distance. Whispering half to himself, he said, "It is certain that some of us will not survive this mission, myself included. I thought you should be aware of our plans before it was too late." Obi-Wan followed the Bothan's gaze, noticing for the first time just how quickly they were approaching the Senate dome. It swallowed the horizon, looming large, growing closer with every heartbeat. The late afternoon light cast a reddish stain over the building's surface, the color of dried blood. Shivering at the sight, he glanced over at Qui-Gon. The man was sitting there, calm, unruffled by arguments, quietly waiting for the final act in this desperate holodrama. Although he wanted to get past that calm exterior and shake him into fighting this travesty, Obi-Wan knew it would do no good. But he had to try one last time. Besides, Sle'fey wanted something from him. Perhaps he would negotiate with the Bothan Master after all. "Very well, I'll consider it." There was stunned silence for a moment. Apparently, no one hadn't expected him to give in so easily. "I ask a favor in return." A deep frown cutting across his face, hands cramped from tension, Obi-Wan ignored the astonished stares. Instead he focused all his attention on the Bothan Councilor. He wanted Sle'fey to know just how much they would have to negotiate if they wanted him on the Council. He said, flatly, "Send Qui-Gon back to the Temple. I'll come with you to arrest Palpatine but let him stay behind." There was a soft reprimand in Qui-Gon's voice. "Padawan, no." Obi-Wan ignored him, stared instead at Sle'fey, waiting for his answer. "You are persistent, stubborn and, at times, more focused than anyone I've ever encountered - all traits we will need in the coming months." There was a glint of satisfaction in Sle'fey's eyes and he looked almost pleased. For a moment, Obi-Wan thought that he'd succeeded after all but then Sle'fey shook his head. "But no, I will not compromise this mission even for you, Obi-Wan." He felt defeat settle into his skin. There was nothing else to be done, not with Qui-Gon so adamant and the Council members opposed to it. Sending a sharp glare in their direction, he turned away. Frustrated, dreading the moments ahead and knowing that they would only end badly, Obi-Wan sat there, silent, and stared out the shuttle's window. Sle'fey must have realized that their conversation was at an end. Obi-Wan heard him say, "Master Jinn, we sent the message you requested. I am not sure how long it will take to reach Naboo but it was sent." "Thank you, Master Sle'fey." Qui-Gon sounded relieved. There was a jangle of metal and Obi-Wan glanced up to see Force cuffs dangling from Xacor's hands. The Zabrek seemed resigned, almost ashamed when he realized that Obi-Wan was staring at him. But all he said was, "I regret that it has come to this but we are nearing the Senate." Sle'fey nodded. Looking at Qui-Gon, he reached out with one paw, palm open, waiting. "We need your weapon, Master Jinn. It would look odd if a prisoner were armed." When Obi-Wan opened his mouth to protest, Sle'fey hurried to say, "We will keep it safe until it is needed." "I will take his saber," Obi-Wan said sharply. "You will be busy with other concerns." It remained unspoken that he didn't trust them with it, that he didn't trust them at all. With a gleam of reproach in his eyes, Qui-Gon handed the lightstaff over into Obi-Wan's hands. It felt odd, the weight of it awkward and yet there was a sense of his Master's warmth in it, almost as if the man had infused something of himself into cold metal and duraplast. Clipping it to his belt, he nodded to Qui-Gon and waited for Xacor to finish setting the stage for this little farce. It didn't take long. As the Councilor stepped forward, Qui-Gon said nothing, merely lifted his hands, and Xacor slipped the binders onto his wrists. There was an audible snap and the soft crackle of blue energy began to shimmer around the cuffs, leaping from one to the other, a cruel radiance, shutting off his connection to the Force. His Master gave a little grunt of pain and his face paled. But Qui-Gon made no protest, merely nodded his acceptance. "I thank you for your help, Master Jinn. I will do my best to make sure that you are protected for as long as possible," Master Sle'fey said softly. "I'm sorry." "Not sorry enough, Master," Obi-Wan growled, his voice harsh with censure. Then there was no more time for regrets. The shuttle's windows darkened, the sunlight morphing into artificial gloom as it slid into the landing bay. As it settled down onto the platform, the transport lurched a bit and then stilled; the background noise of engines died into silence. For a moment, no one said a word. There was no need. They had arrived at their destination. -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 9/22/08 Fragments of Illusion- http://boards.theforce.net/bts/b10475/28456473 updated 8/16/08 Freeze frame - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b10476/27820434 Master to jedidas3 Impeach Bush!
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Valairy_Scot Title: PT Rewrite Winner Registered: Sep '05	Date Posted: 6/28 11:05am Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 6/28/08 and thanks for the noms - Date Edited: 6/28 11:08am (1 edits total) Edited By: Valairy_Scot
	Diane - <shakes fist at you> here I think we see the confrontation - and now - we're not there, plus I'm sure the next chapter is back on Naboo. You evil, cruel, utterly magnificent author (and friend) you! Also - I got first reply?!?!? Congratulations and best of luck: I hope you win in all your categories - I'm rooting for you! You deserve all the noms. He wasn't the only victim in this. Atel had been a young girl, not quite ten years old when she'd been assigned to him. He'd tried his best to keep her safe. But with her studies and the pressures of mission imperatives, he'd often had to leave her behind. Tharten had 'helped' her with her studies while he was away. In hindsight, it was obvious what a very great mistake that had been but at the time, he'd had little choice. Now it was too late to repair the damage. Now if they survived this debacle, he might never see her again. He was already mourning the loss. What a palpable sense of impending loss and tragedy. She must have caught some of his unease because she leaned into him, wordless comfort in her touch. He sent her back a half-smile. Memories of other missions, of other times when she'd sat next to him before going into battle, caught in his throat. So often they'd relied on each other in the field - for strength, for courage, for the warmth that comes from family. Now he could not bear to see the worry in her eyes. Yes, family. It was obvious that they were plotting again. Obi-Wan just hoped it didn't include him or his old Master. He'd had enough of their conspiracies to last a lifetime. ... Obi-Wan could not. Tainted by fear and the fury of being pushed into something he knew would only end in disaster, he was loathe to touch the Force as Qui-Gon had done. So he sat there and tried not to think. I have this vague memory of a number of chapters back that the Force wanted Obi-Wan to stay in the Order. Has he forgotten that - his role in this "charade" was desired by the Force? He played the part, no matter how hard personally, the role the Force gave him. So, no doubt, did the others. His anger should be directed at the Force, at Palps, not the Jedi IF they were listening to the Force's direction. Instead he sat there, tired, confused and bitter. The pain medication only kept the sharp agony of his wound at bay but the pull of repaired muscles reminded him of betrayal and the terror of almost losing Qui-Gon, reminded him of mind-rape and the unclean memory of Tharten's final moments under his hand. And now the Master who had used him for all of those years, was as much to blame as Tharten had been, wanted a favor. He would have smiled at the irony if it weren't so absurd. See above - he did what the Force asked of him, as did others. -----signature----- http://boards.theforce.net/fan_fiction_resource/b10304/25405090/p3/?52 Prolific Author thread: list & links there. Muse fueled by coffee. Often AWOL despite frequent sipping. Writes on inspiration, not a schedule. Proud master of several padawans
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wolf_kenobi Registered: Nov '07	Date Posted: 6/28 12:40pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 6/28/08 and thanks for the noms
	The totality of Obi-Wan's disillusionment is painful to read, from someone who used to have such trust in the Jedi and the will of the Force. But how can you blame him, after all that has been done? It seems to me that after all of this is over, it might indeed be better to go with the Bendu, start over from scratch rather than try to root out such corruption. And now they enter the belly of the beast... Uh-oh. Powerful writing- looking forward to more! -----signature----- Is God willing to prevent evil but not able? Then he is not omnipotent. Is he able but not willing? Then he is malevolent. Is he both able and willing? Then whence cometh evil? Is he neither able nor willing? Then why call him God. -Epicurus Proud Vegan
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Musing Registered: Oct '03	Date Posted: 6/28 1:03pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui angst - very AU) Updated 6/28/08 and thanks for the noms
	Is it just me, or do Xacor and Sle'fey seem overly optimistic in operating under the assumption that Palpatine will be captured? Not to mention asssuming that the Jedi Order is still salvageable or that Obi-Wan will help them in the process? Some people are still wearing blinders it seems... dianethx, you can be really cruel - replacing one cliffhanger with another. But, seeing that you always do such a great job, you're always forgiven.
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