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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 3/19/03 3:44pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Qui/Obi AU - sequel to But on FanFictionArchives) Chapter 3 is now up
	Wow, more replies. I'm thrilled that you have stuck with this. Shaindl - I've always considered the Temple to be a major character in the Star Wars Universe. Its beauty and serenity came shining through in AOTC (I was thrilled when Obi-Wan was strolling through the halls). So I thought that the Jedi and its decay could also be shown by how the Temple is being treated. But don't worry...it's going to get worse before it gets better... As for Atel, she is a major character in this fic and will be there throughout the story. I hope the changes in her life and Obi-Wan's will seem true to my readers but you'll just have to wait!!! Jane Jinn - You are so wonderful to write such indepth responses. I'm amazed. Yes, I wanted everyone to see how badly the Jedi have decayed. And, of course, Atel would have grown up in the "new" Jedi Order and have vastly different expectations of what the Jedi were all about. Obi-Wan, being on the cusp of the changes, can see the old and the new and realize that new isn't necessarily better. I thought that the Room of a Thousand Fountains would be perfect for growing crops - it's supposed to be huge and such a waste of space for meditation when you could use it to grow things for money (sarcasm here!). I wanted a reference back to the Jedi Apprentice series (there will be hints of that series throughout this fic) and that room had always been pivitol in the JA books. I did want the room to be fruitful, though since it is full of living things but it is the loss of his past that has made Obi-Wan so despairing. Yes, Obi-Wan and Atel have been on back-to-back missions for quite some time. That's why poor Obi-Wan is so exhausted....they never get any downtime especially him since the Council seems to regard him as a rebel (tainted by association). Ah, Yoda. I must confess that I really dislike Yoda and have since TESB. He only showed up in one of my fics and he was a bureaucratic buffoon in it. You probably notice that none of the old Council members were in Chapter 2. They are all gone from the Temple - Palpatine couldn't have any older, more experienced Jedi Masters catching on to his little scheme, could he? It will be explained in one of the chapters coming up. Yes, Qui-Gon has got to have it better than this. Maybe....LOL. But...wait...there's more... Dyanne_Kindred - Don't assume anything yet!!! -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 6/28/08 Fragments of Illusion- http://boards.theforce.net/bts/b10475/28456473 updated 8/16/08 Freeze frame - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b10476/27820434 Master to jedidas3 Impeach Bush!
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LuvEwan Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 3/20/03 3:03pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Qui/Obi AU - sequel to But on FanFictionArchives) Chapter 3 is now up
	Another wonderful chapter. This is definitely one of my favorite works-in-progress, diane . I loved the scenes where you describe the temple in decay. It just deepens Obi's despair, as he reflects on the beauty of the past, while witnessing the horrors unfolding around him. he needed to...to break something very large and very expensive, preferably something that made a great deal of noise when it shattered. That line just made me smile. Very characteristic of Obi. And don't worry about your story getting long. Mine is getting close to 200, and I'm not quite half through, I think. What matters is the quality of the fic, and yours is excellent. I hope it's very very long!!! Fantastic job!!! Have a great weekend away!!! -----signature----- So it was Anakin's butt after all. He supposed he might take a modicum of comfort from that. -Star Wars Episode III: Revenge of the Sith, by Matthew Stover
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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 3/24/03 2:54pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Qui/Obi AU - sequel to But on FanFictionArchives) Chapter 3 is now up
	I'm back from my weekend and what a weekend it was!! I sold 2 art quilts and won a Judge's choice award. Yeah!! And now onto more important things.... Luvewan - What a lovely compliment. I only hope that I can live up to your expectations. As I told Shaindl, I've always loved the descriptions of the Temple in the books and wanted to use it as a major backdrop to the angst and despair that Obi-Wan is going through. I'm glad that it came across as I had hoped. I love that line about Obi-Wan breaking something as well. Poor guy... he really needed to but I'm sure that the rest of the Jedi would just look at it as a character flaw. As for length of fic, I love to read other people's fics that are really long. That way, they can explore their characters in more depth instead of a brief taste. My own flaw is that I get twitchy writing anything over 20 pages. But I'll try to curb it...LOL. The next chapter should be up tonight. -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 6/28/08 Fragments of Illusion- http://boards.theforce.net/bts/b10475/28456473 updated 8/16/08 Freeze frame - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b10476/27820434 Master to jedidas3 Impeach Bush!
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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 3/24/03 3:35pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Qui/Obi AU - sequel to But on FanFictionArchives) Chapter 3 is now up - Date Edited: 1/17/06 11:23am (1 edits total) Edited By: dianethx
	And now on we go with more Obi angst... Chapter 4 - Punishment doesn't always fit the crime His apprentice found Obi-Wan slumped in front of the ancient doors some hours later. Atel had become concerned when he did not return and, ignoring his strict orders to remain in their quarters, hunted him out. Something was wrong; she could feel it. "Master, it's time to come back." She pulled at him, grabbing onto his unresisting arm, tugging insistently. He just looked at her with exhausted eyes, shaking his head. "Come on, Master. You can't stay here. If you do, they'll just punish you again. And me with you." With a final upward wrench, she managed to get Obi-Wan to his feet. He stared at her, wounded and confused. Low, harsh, his voice raspy with unshed tears, he nodded towards the doors. "Did you know about this?" "Yes, of course. The rumor mills have been buzzing about it for months." "Why? Why did they do that? It was so beautiful." "You must be joking. Why? Money, of course. The Senate has just cut the allotment again. The Council needed the credits to maintain the Order. It was that or more dismissals." "Not again." "Come on, Master. We can't stay here and discuss this. I've got tea brewing, even as we speak." With that, Atel pushed her exhausted Master towards the living quarters. They could not discuss Temple matters in the monitored hallway; that might be considered seditious and they were in enough trouble with the Jinn mission coming up. Better to get Master Kenobi up to their rooms and let him talk there. Urgently she pulled and pushed and prodded him and, at last, they tumbled into the tiny common room of their apartment. Obi-Wan collapsed onto the small couch, giving a slight ooff sound as he sat down. Atel moved to the kitchenette and brought forth the promised tea, gently placing it into her Master's trembling hands. He just stared at it for a while, watching the steam rising in the cool air and then, dipping his face downward, took a small sip. "Thank you, my young Padawan. It's very good." Obi-Wan closed his eyes and leaned back as his troubled apprentice hurriedly propped a pillow behind his head. "How did you know where to find me?" She shrugged. "You often talk about that garden and I remember walking there with you many times. I thought that you might go there to meditate." She looked down and then into his bruised eyes. "I'm sorry about the gardens, Master. I know what they meant to you." "I suppose it's better than more dismissals." Obi-Wan's hand pushed against his temple again as the headache continued to pulse and throb. He needed to get a painkiller but, not yet, not yet. Not until he apologized for his behavior to her. "I..." "Yes, Padawan?" She knelt before him, a picture of perfect penitence, and bowed her head. "I'm sorry, Master. I should not have spoken so to you." "Atel, you did nothing wrong." "I must humbly disagree. I knew we were both tired and you were upset. I just didn't realize..." "My young apprentice, I repeat, you did nothing wrong. I had no idea that was how you felt about Qui-Gon." Atel looked up at him with violet eyes, haggard and worn. She shook her head. "I should have been more mindful. You never talk about him. I just assumed..." He pulled her up and gestured to sit by his side. His arm came around her in a sharp hug, then released her and took her small hand in his own. "Atel, I never talk about him because it hurts too much to do so. He was my mentor, my Master, almost a father to me. When he was dismissed, I was devastated, heartbroken and alone. I couldn't believe that they could do something like that to this great man." She frowned at that but said nothing as he continued. "He told me not to contact him, that it might hurt me to do so. Hurt me...hah. There he was, thrown out of the Temple, his only home, almost penniless, and he was worried about me. I ignored his advice, of course. How could I not?" He shook his head at the harsh memories. "At first, I requested information about him every day. And every day I was told to mind my own business and not be concerned with people no longer within the Jedi Order. After a couple of months, I grew frantic and began to make my own discreet inquiries. I guess I wasn't too discreet because they found out. I was hauled before the Council and told in no uncertain terms to stop what I was doing. I bowed slightly and left and began again to make inquiries. I was more guarded this time but they must have had surveillance on me because I was brought again before the Council. This time they sent me for punishment." Atel made a small gesture of dismay. "Oh, the Council does not harm those people they wish to punish, not physically, at least. That would be barbaric and the Council is anything but that." The sarcasm was not lost on his young apprentice. He just shook his head at the chilling memories. "They sentenced me to a day in the cells at the bottom of the Temple." Atel looked confused again. "You've never been there, I know. I made very sure that you were never to blame whenever punishment was meted out. The cells are Force-shielded so that no Jedi could escape - at least that was their original intent. When you are put into the cells, it is as if the Force does not exist and you are alone. But, but.. it was more than that. They must have enhanced the shielding or put in some type of augmentation device for amplifying emotions in an escalating feedback loop, maybe as a test of will or control. I don't know. I would have thought that some inkling of that type of... device would have leaked out, the rumors should have been running wild but there was never a whisper. Maybe it was experimental...but whatever they did, whatever they used, it was extremely effective." He took a deep shuddering breath and stared straight ahead. "In there, blind and deaf to the Force, you feel smothered, unable to breathe, panicking in that awful place, intensely claustrophobic, your whole being screaming for escape. The walls seem to close in, ceiling collapsing, mind wailing from the panicked echoes of the fear and torment of those who have been there before, and you are alone, so alone. It drives some insane with that loss, especially those trained within the Order from early childhood." Obi-Wan shivered. "After a day in there, I would have done almost anything to avoid it again. Almost...but within a couple of weeks, I renewed my attempts to find out what I could about Qui-Gon. And again I was caught. Punishment this time was three days." He stared at her, pain scrabbling behind his eyes, pulsing, pulsing around his neck and temples. He shrugged. "After that, I became very sneaky. It took them almost six months to find out about my little investigations. This time, punishment was a week." Obi-Wan looked down, ashamed. "I am a coward, Atel. I couldn't... couldn't face that again. I stopped looking." "But, Master, you said in the meeting, that you had repeatedly asked about Master Jinn." "I have asked every week for the last ten years but the Council refuses any contact. I had hoped to talk with him, with or without the approval of the Council." He closed his eyes in pain and then looked at her with abject misery. "Ten years, Atel. The best man I have ever known and I let him down. How can I face him again after all that time?" "I don't know, Master. Perhaps he has changed." "No, not Qui-Gon." "Master Obi-Wan, it has been a long time. Former Master Jinn is accused of crimes against the Jedi Temple. Surely, he must have done something to merit this investigation. And he is, after all, a rogue Jedi." Obi-Wan stood abruptly, the fragile teacup tumbling from his hands and smashing on the floor, the dissonant sound of china shattering, hot tea flying everywhere. He towered over her, enraged, his head spasming with pain. "Never. Never a rogue. I told you no." Atel was almost crying in her bewilderment. "Master, please. We were told he was a Jedi gone bad and dismissed for that very reason. My last class in treaty negotiation went over the circumstances several times. It's the truth, Master. Qui-Gon Jinn went rogue and was thrown out of the Order because of it." He was stunned and stared at his apprentice with disbelief. Legs buckling, he sat down hard on the couch and tried to find the calm center that he needed so badly. He breathed deeply, once, twice. Then quietly, distinctly, he spoke, his voice firm. "Atel, listen to me. I was there all the time, for every mission. Qui-Gon Jinn never became a rogue Jedi. You have been taught a lie. The question is - why are they lying about it?" -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 6/28/08 Fragments of Illusion- http://boards.theforce.net/bts/b10475/28456473 updated 8/16/08 Freeze frame - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b10476/27820434 Master to jedidas3 Impeach Bush!
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LuvEwan Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 3/24/03 4:32pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui AU - sequel to But on FFA) Updated on 3/24 - Date Edited: 3/24/03 9:25pm (1 edits total) Edited By: LuvEwan
	strokes chin thoughtfully Yeeeees that is the question, isn't it? Another amazing chapter, diane. I loved every word. The way the Order has been twisted by money is so typical, and the destruction of one of Obi's havens was heartbreaking. That the Council would actually subject him to the torture of the Force-repression cell is mind-boggling, and shows just how far the Jedi have fallen. But, at the same time, it proved Obi's dedication to his Master, in that he doggedly pursues him, despite the harsh, brutal punishment he receives. sighs Very, very good. I love this! More soon. Please? -----signature----- So it was Anakin's butt after all. He supposed he might take a modicum of comfort from that. -Star Wars Episode III: Revenge of the Sith, by Matthew Stover
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Jane Jinn Registered: Jan '00	Date Posted: 3/25/03 1:00am Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui AU - sequel to But on FFA) Updated on 3/24
	Oh, man, that is horrible! Not just the loss of the Force, but that device to augment feedback. What kind of Jedi would willingly have installed such a thing? I can't think of any, so it must have been the work of the Senate somehow, under Sidious' control. And keeping Obi-Wan (and probably other Jedi as well?) under surveillance? That's definitely the work of darkness. How many Jedi like Obi-Wan, good and pure and trying to do the right thing, are actually left? There can't be many, I think. It seems as though the changes in the Temple must have have brought out the worst in most people, and that either they are afraid to resist (like Obi-Wan) or they've slowly gone over to the other side because of Sidious' manipulations. The worst thing is that they are probably convinced they're doing the right thing, the only thing, that can keep the Jedi Order alive or at least functioning, and they don't realize they're the ones who are killing it from the inside. If the hallways are monitored, too, what's to stop them from monitoring personal quarters, listening to hear secret words that they can twist and use as an excuse to punish or dismiss even more Jedi? This is a horrifying thought! You've really described this situation well -- it's like Russia under Stalin. Poor Atel. She's learned what they want her to believe about Qui-Gon, and now she's bewildered because her master is telling her something completely different. Do I also detect a touch of selfishness in her -- she takes him away from the monitored hallway because she doesn't want to get in trouble, too? Or is it just fear? It's hard to tell the difference here, but I fear for her greatly, having to grow up in such a situation. What chance would she have to develop into a great Jedi in the tradition of Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan, if she was raised in such a different way? And yes. Why are they lying about Qui-Gon? Surely they must have dismissed hundreds of other Jedi over the years -- are they telling the same lies about them as well, or just about Qui-Gon? The picture you paint is terrifying, but you do it so well. I have to admire your creativity, too, in even being able to think of such things. -----signature----- Mostly retired now Just making the occasional guest appearance
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Shaindl Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 3/25/03 7:15am Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui AU - sequel to But on FFA) Updated on 3/24
	I'm with LE - this is one of the best WIPs going right now. So very realistic - not to mention depressing and scary. The Jedi Order brought down by money and greed and the need for power and control. And how very like Qui-Gon to tell his Padawan not to contact him because it might bring him trouble. I'm looking very forward to their first meeting after ten years. And your description of those cells was terrifying. Great work, Diane! Shaindl -----signature----- Halfway Moment - Qui, Obi, Anakin AU - http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/20110461/?0 - UPDATED JULY 3!
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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 3/25/03 4:48pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui AU - sequel to But on FFA) Updated on 3/24
	LuvEwan - thank you so much for your support and you even mentioned my fic in your Blurred Visions story. Wow!!! I was blushing from the lovely things you said. And now to comments - Yes, the Order has been twisted by money. There will be more revelations in the later chapters about just how twisted they have become. I have the whole story outlined in detail so that I can add hints in the earlier chapters and link them to later ones. I like a balanced approach in my writing - where almost everything is explained. So you will find out about the reasons the histories are being rewritten...eventually. The Force-suppressed cells is a time-honored fic tradition. However, since they used Force cuffs in AOTC and mentioned in the book that it suppressed Force abilities, I figured that I could use it as well. And, of course, the emotional feedback looping has been used in real life (for good, not evil). Just remember that the feedback loop feeds on your own fears so someone else would not fear the same thing. I made Obi-Wan claustrophobic, someone else might fear fire or arachnids or snakes. As for Obi-Wan being persistant about finding Qui-Gon, I wanted that to come across very clearly. They had a very strong relationship - one that transends the Council's punishment. That will make it all the harder for Obi-Wan when he finally sees Qui-Gon....in the next couple of postings. -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 6/28/08 Fragments of Illusion- http://boards.theforce.net/bts/b10475/28456473 updated 8/16/08 Freeze frame - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b10476/27820434 Master to jedidas3 Impeach Bush!
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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 3/25/03 5:09pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui AU - sequel to But on FFA) Updated on 3/24
	Jane_Jinn - So many questions and I can't answer them all because it would give away the whole plot..LOL. The augmentation device will be explained as to where it came from and why it is there. The Council has made much use out of it and they should be severely chastised for it. But it is useful for keeping their Jedi in line. As for the surviellence, I'm positive that the Sith agent was instrumental in getting them installed. That way, the person could watch for "incorrect" attitudes and use it as a manipulation device. It is definately a dark choice and instills a sense of mistrust among those Jedi left at the Temple. The worst thing is that they are probably convinced they're doing the right thing, the only thing, that can keep the Jedi Order alive or at least functioning, and they don't realize they're the ones who are killing it from the inside. - Jane you are absolutely correct. I'm sure that they are convinced that they need to stay with the Jedi and keep its spirit alive; otherwise, they would leave and they would be the better for it. But to leave might be considered selfish or ignoring duty and honor. And so they stay and sink further into the pit. As for the rooms being monitored, I deliberately did not have the rooms monitored. I thought that the Jedi Knights could be persuaded that monitoring the halls would make the Temple safer since outsiders would be seen easily. Monitoring the rooms, while an excellent way to spy on your Jedi, would have probably been resisted as excessive. However, this has been happening over 10 years so room cams might be in their future. Besides, Obi-Wan wouldn't have been able to talk to Atel if the cams were on. Atel- selfish. I didn't try to write her that way but I can see why you would think that. More, she is a product of her environment. She truly wanted her Master away from the monitors, not so much for her sake but for his. After all, she hasn't been sent for punishment (she didn't even know about it) so she would have less to fear. She really cares for him, as a father figure but her outlook is very different from Obi-Wan's and her behavior does and will reflect that. Sorry, can't tell you yet about why they are lying about Qui-Gon's history or if other histories are being rewritten. Just have to wait for that one. I am so glad you are enjoying this. I just hope that I can write fast enough. I'm almost done with Chapter 12 and there should be 16 chapters in all. But it's taking me a month to write Chapter 12...you may have to wait a bit when we catch up... -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 6/28/08 Fragments of Illusion- http://boards.theforce.net/bts/b10475/28456473 updated 8/16/08 Freeze frame - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b10476/27820434 Master to jedidas3 Impeach Bush!
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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 3/25/03 5:29pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui AU - sequel to But on FFA) Updated on 3/24
	Shaindl- Thank you so much for saying that you like my fic. Comments are like air to me - I need them to breathe. And how very like Qui-Gon to tell his Padawan not to contact him because it might bring him trouble Yes, Qui-Gon said that to Obi-Wan in the original story "But". I thought it needed to be emphasized here since Obi-Wan feels soooo very guilty about the whole situation. It's not as if he can do anything about it - he is thwarted at every turn but that just makes the guilt greater. I have always loved the Qui/Obi pairing and they have such a rich and deep relationship that it makes for great fic (even when things go wrong - oh, all right, especially when things go wrong). Yes, it appears that the Jedi Order has sunk pretty low but not low enough. That's in the next several chapters....I would imagine that this is how the Sith came into being - a war over power and control and right now the Sith are winning... I liked the cells. I was hesitant about them - I thought that my descriptions were a little subtle but obviously I was wrong. Good... because I didn't want to go over the top, just interject enough to make you feel Obi-Wan's psychological pain without it being too intense and turning people off. You probably won't see Qui in the next posting but definately in the one after. Hope you like how I portray him. The next post will be tomorrow. There is a bit of a brief homage to TPM. Remember that "But" takes place about 6 months before TPM timewise and we are now in the AOTC timeframe. Bye for now. -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 6/28/08 Fragments of Illusion- http://boards.theforce.net/bts/b10475/28456473 updated 8/16/08 Freeze frame - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b10476/27820434 Master to jedidas3 Impeach Bush!
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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 3/26/03 4:40am Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi/Qui AU - sequel to But on FFA) Updated on 3/24 - Date Edited: 6/10/06 4:47pm (2 edits total) Edited By: dianethx
	And, now as promised, the beginnings of Chapter 5.... Chapter 5 - Old friends long gone The two day flight to Naboo proved to be a boon to the weary Jedi. With no badgering sycophants, no cryptic admonishments for proper behavior and no life-threatening stops along the way, there was finally time to rest, a surprising gift after the exhaustion of endless missions. "There you are, Padawan." Obi-Wan wore a slight grin as the still bleary-eyed Atel moved into the common area of their tiny accommodations. "I was wondering when you were going to get up. You've been asleep almost a full day and there is much to discuss." She just grunted in response and moved to get some juice from the table. "Master, how is it that you always seem so...awake in the morning?" Admittedly, when Atel finally awoke from her dreamless sleep, she had not been eager to vacate her comfortable bed. It had been so long since she could revel in anything so luxurious, so decadent. But immovable duty called and so she sought out her Master. He shook his head in fond remembrance. "You think I get up early? You should have seen Master Qui-Gon; he was always up with the dawn." The mention of that former Jedi brought a quick frown to Atel's features but she turned her head so that Obi-Wan could not see it. She was still uncertain as to how to take her Master's assertions that Jinn was no rogue. Could all of her teachers have been so wrong? Could the histories be false? She knew that Master Obi-Wan would never consciously deceive her but he could be mistaken. Loyalty could beguile and twist perception into lies especially when his bonds with Master Jinn were so powerful. She would have to wait and see. She clenched her jaw, for just a second. I will have to be strong if he cannot. I just hope it will not come to that. Schooling her features into one of calm concern, she looked towards the datapad, lying loose in his grasp, asking. "Maybe you should tell me about the information on former Master Jinn. I assume that it is complete." He snorted at that and frowned. "No, it is not." Tossing it to his apprentice, she grabbed it neatly out of the air and sat down to read. The information on the life and times of the former Jedi Master, one Qui-Gon Jinn, was frustratingly brief. For the first few months, he had been tracked incessantly, every job, every conversation monitored; it wouldn't do for a Jedi, even one dismissed from the Temple, to be behaving inappropriately. Discarded, yes but not unnoticed, Qui-Gon had gone from menial job to slightly shady dealings back to menial job. Finally, he obtained a position with the Naboo security forces and was moving up the ranks when, as per Temple policy, the half-year investigation ceased and Qui-Gon Jinn dropped out of sight. He showed up again eight years later, a successful businessman, residing in the hill country of Naboo. Going off-world several times a year for supposedly "mercantile" dealings, there were instances of spikes and ebbs in his cash flow accounts, unexplained and undocumented. He gave heavily to something called the "Bendu Philosophical Group", to the "Abolitionist Union" and the "Rescue Relief Fund" but also to many other charities, legitimate or otherwise. In addition, he had been called upon by several influential Outer Rim groups to negotiate disputes, not a bad thing in of itself, but hovering close to that of the Jedi's fiercely protected mandate. More damning was the gathering of several force-sensitive individuals within his sphere of influence, potential problems if they decided to band together and challenge the Jedi Order's place within the Republic and the powerful Senate. The Council did not take kindly to any threat, however insignificant, and these small coincidences were enough to warrant an investigation. Obi-Wan paced as his apprentice sat quietly and absorbed the information. He knew that there was not enough evidence on that datapad for outright condemnation of his former Master. Point of fact, there was little real proof of any misconduct. But the Order and his own conscience would demand that Obi-Wan investigate the allegations to the best of his ability and make some judgment as to whether to take Qui-Gon into custody. Misuse of the Force, especially for material gain or power, was a serious offense in the Republic. And the Council would be quick to mete out justice. Worry about meeting his old Master, long-buried guilt at letting Qui-Gon down and the more recent anger at the Council for forcing him to this subterfuge, swirled about his head like some malevolent swarm of demoniac ghosts. * Cursed by Master Qui-Gon if I do and condemned by the Council if I don't. I hate this...I hate it.* Atel must have felt some of his anxiety. Glancing up almost nervously, she watched his movements gain a jerky quality as he marched from wall to wall and back again, almost droid-like in his walk. And he was muttering to himself as well, not a good sign. This was not like her Master at all; she had never seen him so disconcerted, so anxious. Time to divert his attention. "Master, something about this isn't right. Have you read all of this? Especially the recent Naboo history?" "No, I skipped the history. What troubles you?" "Whoever wrote this expects us to believe that....it's just so absurd. According to the reports, about nine years ago, Naboo was invaded by the Trade Federation. At the time, they had a fourteen year old girl as an elected queen." She rolled her eyes at that but got a stern look from Obi-Wan, settled down and began again with some exasperation in her voice. "I know, Master, I know. I realize that other species develop early. The Tssek't are mature at three and dead at 20 and don't even get me started on the Neventhk. But we are talking humans, here, after all." Another severe frown. Shrugging, she continued. "Somehow, this young girl managed to fend off the Federation with a brilliant maneuver, capturing the Viceroy. But, that's not the ludicrous part, although it does seem a bit farfetched. A nine-year old boy, piloting a Naboo starfighter, managed to blow up the droid control ship and save the day. Nine years old! That has got to be wrong. Maybe they meant a nineteen year old boy....?" "I've heard more unusual things in my life. Perhaps the Force was with the child?" He sounded unsure, unable to dismiss the tale but not ready to believe it either. Atel snorted at that, dismissing the thought. "Surely a boy with that much Force potential would be at the Temple. Must have been dumb luck." Obi-Wan softly replied. "There's no such thing as luck." "So you always tell me." She sent a sly smile his way. "Well, then, perhaps, your old Master knows him." "I wouldn't be in the least surprised. He was always picking up strays." The Padawan just grunted again, and turned back to her reading. Obi-Wan looked at her fondly for a moment, realizing that all too soon she would be off on her own missions, a Knight of the Jedi Order. He remembered wanting that name, that position as a young boy, as if reaching for a dazzling star, his longing pulsing bright. Such happiness when Qui-Gon finally chose him, so much joy and intensity in the training and the missions. His old Master had been a puzzle at first, stoic and inscrutable. But, once you got past his brusque exterior, his abiding affection and patient understanding ran parsecs deep. Obi-Wan had adored his Master, had hoped for a long and illustrious career with Qui-Gon there as mentor, father, friend. And yet it had all turned to ash. He looked again at his apprentice. It was time to make amends, time to tell her about his Master, time to make her understand the truth of Qui-Gon Jinn. "Atel, my Master's inexhaustible talent for acquiring strays was the stuff of legends. I remember one incident where..." tbc -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 6/28/08 Fragments of Illusion- http://boards.theforce.net/bts/b10475/28456473 updated 8/16/08 Freeze frame - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b10476/27820434 Master to jedidas3 Impeach Bush!
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Dyanne_Kindred Registered: Nov '02	Date Posted: 3/26/03 9:17pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) A new update on 3/26
	Have I forgotten to say how much I enjoy this story?! Well I do! I tend to have a one track mind sometimes. It is good to see Obi back to his old self. He had me worried there for a while... Although I am making plans to have some of those cheapstakes at the Senate put away. :: Did I say that aloud? No matter. :: -----signature----- Kindred - Jedi Thief
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LuvEwan Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 3/26/03 10:31pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) A new update on 3/26
	Fantastic post, diane. What a great detail, that Qui-Gon would give to various charities. And excellent way to slip Anakin & Padme into the story.. Obi-Wan's character is beautiful and compassionate, perfectly done. Can't wait for more. (And thank you for the responses to my fic. ) -----signature----- So it was Anakin's butt after all. He supposed he might take a modicum of comfort from that. -Star Wars Episode III: Revenge of the Sith, by Matthew Stover
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Jane Jinn Registered: Jan '00	Date Posted: 3/27/03 2:26am Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) A new update on 3/26
	I wrote a long reply this morning, but it didn't go through, and right after that, the boards went down. Argh! Let's see if I can remember what I wrote. I will have to be strong if he cannot. I just hope it will not come to that. Atel worries me a lot. What is strength? Sometimes it takes more strength to follow your instincts and leave an organization if you have the gut feeling that it's headed in the wrong direction. I think she wouldn't see it like that, though, because the idea that the Order could be wrong wouldn't have a chance of getting through to her, at least not yet. Maybe there's hope, though ... I like the way Qui-Gon is gathering Force-sensitive individuals into his so-called "sphere of influence". Why not? Where else would they go, after being dismissed from the Order? Why shouldn't they stick together? I'm sure the Council will be quick to dispense 'justice', though -- more than quick. No, there's no such thing as luck, otherwise I would say that it's lucky the nine-year-old boy is NOT at the Temple. Definitely the will of the Force there. And I really liked the way you portrayed Qui-Gon as being stoic and inscrutable on the outside, but with abiding affection and patience underneath. That's how I see him, too, and I get sad when people portray him as cold, unfeeling, and completely clueless. Poor Obi-Wan, betraying somebody no matter what he does. I'll bet he does hate the situation. More soon, please? -----signature----- Mostly retired now Just making the occasional guest appearance
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Shaindl Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 3/27/03 8:07am Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) A new update on 3/26 - Date Edited: 3/27/03 9:20am (1 edits total) Edited By: Shaindl
	Gack! I forgot to reply yesterday to your post. Brilliantly done, as I'm coming to expect from you. I'm glad Obi-Wan is finally opening up to his Padawan about his Master - I really can't wait for their first meeting. I also liked how you fit in Padme and Anakin. Will we be seeing them more in this story? Great work, Diane, can't wait for more! Shaindl -----signature----- Halfway Moment - Qui, Obi, Anakin AU - http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/20110461/?0 - UPDATED JULY 3!
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