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JediNemesis Registered: Mar '03	Date Posted: 3/27/03 8:13am Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) A new update on 3/26
	I only read the prequel to this (But) a couple of days ago, and I count myself lucky I didn't have to wait long for the sequel! Great writing - chapter 12 here I come... -----signature----- <- Fic in bio <- Before the Saga Best Author 2008! Thanks so much guys! BeTS Best Romance 2008: Spindrift - http://boards.theforce.net/a/b1/28478326 NEW Somewhere To Fly - http://boards.theforce.net/a/b1/28898463 + GM & Judge in the Mythology Draft +
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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 3/27/03 2:42pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) A new update on 3/26
	Dyanne_Kindred - hi again. I'm so glad that you are enjoying it. I also can have a one-tract mind - just ask my family as they try to get my attention as a scene is trying wildly to escape...LOL. As for taking out the cheapskates in the Senate, I think you'll have to wait in line. But, then, the Senate is so easy to manipulate as Sidious has found out. And you haven't seen the worst of it yet.... LuvEwan - I'm glad you're still with me as we discover just how bad the Order can get. Yes, Qui-Gon gives to a lot of charities. You should look closer... I did enjoy adding the stuff about TPM. It made me laugh about the way Atel couldn't believe the history (kind of mirrored how a lot of fans felt about it). As for Obi-Wan, I adore the man just as much as I adore Qui-Gon. I much prefer the two together as a team but, unfortunately, this fic demands that they be at odds with each other. Your fic is great and I look forward to more. It always amazes me that some people can write so quickly and so well. Me, it takes forever. As for more, all of my readers have been great so I'll post the next part tonight and you'll get to meet Qui-Gon at last. Hope you like it...author hesitates and is thinking of running for the door once the next part is posted.... -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 6/28/08 Fragments of Illusion- http://boards.theforce.net/bts/b10475/28456473 updated 8/16/08 Freeze frame - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b10476/27820434 Master to jedidas3 Impeach Bush!
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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 3/27/03 2:57pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) A new update on 3/26
	Jane-Jinn - I totally understand the loss of an almost post. There you are, trying to finish your thoughts and get them out and - bam - the computer locks up and everything is gone. It has happened to me more than once!!! As I've said before, Atel is an unfortunate victim of her environment. If she had been raised at the same time as Obi-Wan, I think she would be seeing things very differently. But, this miasma of distrust and history manipulation had changed her and not for the better. She does need to be watched and Obi-Wan needs to teach her lessons that he has not realized yet that she needs to be taught. He will find out in this fic eventually. As for strength, I agree that there are times when you must let go and leave. However, people tend to stay in situations that some outsider would question their sanity. I think that both of our Jedi have this problem. Plus they are always exhausted so they aren't necessarily thinking too clearly. Yes, Qui-Gon's sphere of influence...You are so right. Where else would they go? Dismissed, almost penniless, the banding together of the former Jedi would be a boon to them. And, of course, the Council would only see it as a threat. Darn Council. Yes, Anakin was very lucky that he didn't go to the Jedi. He's much better off where he is. I portrayed Qui-Gon as I perceive him. There are lots of fics out there that choose to use him as the bad guy. I can't see it but, as long as the motivation is there, I can accept it. However, I adore Qui-Gon and try to write him always with compassion and respect (even when I'm torturing the poor guy). As for Obi-Wan, the man is caught between a rock and a hard place. He cannot win here and I'm sure the Sith love the irony. See, a long reply and the computer hasn't crashed yet... -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 6/28/08 Fragments of Illusion- http://boards.theforce.net/bts/b10475/28456473 updated 8/16/08 Freeze frame - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b10476/27820434 Master to jedidas3 Impeach Bush!
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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 3/27/03 3:07pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) A new update on 3/26
	Shaindl - Thanks so much for your comment. Oh..."brillantly done" - I like that. Yes, it's about time that Obi-Wan opened up about his relationship with Qui-Gon. He felt so guilty over the years, never knowing what happened to his mentor, that he just couldn't speak of him. I hope you like the meeting between them. It will be interesting...and I will be introducing new characters as well as some old. Sorry to disappoint, but you won't be seeing Padme. I just couldn't fit her in but you can assume that Anakin has been seeing her from time to time (off the page). This fic is more focused on Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon and their relationship. Hope you aren't too unhappy about it.... More coming up... JediNemesis - glad you could drop by. I know it was torture for some of my readers, especially when I continued to say that I would NOT write a sequel to "But". I'm still not sure I should but I got lambasted by my friends at work and my own daughter as well as my listsibs on the QGJDL. So here we are. Chapter 12 is a ways off...we're still on 5 and if I posted everything I had so far, you'd be happy initially but then you'd have to wait 2-4 weeks between each post. I'm sure you don't want to do that....do you? -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 6/28/08 Fragments of Illusion- http://boards.theforce.net/bts/b10475/28456473 updated 8/16/08 Freeze frame - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b10476/27820434 Master to jedidas3 Impeach Bush!
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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 3/27/03 3:23pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) A new update on 3/26
	Here's the second and third parts of Chapter 5. Hope you won't kill me.... The Jinn residence was located quite close to Naboo's secondary spaceport, an easy landspeeder ride over gently dappled hills. As they approached, Obi-Wan Kenobi could not help but admire the serene loveliness of the place. Colored in rich honeyed tones, low and rambling, the stone house was wrapped in a blossom-covered porch, feathery trees kissing the gleaming slate roof. Several windows peeped through the green shrubbery, reflecting the blued, ice-capped mountains in the distance. Everywhere, the air was incredibly fresh and scented with flowers, delicious and relaxing. It made him envious for a moment but he hastily shook off the unnerving feeling. As soon as the speeder powered down, Kenobi told his apprentice to scout out the area. He planned to meet with Master Qui-Gon alone, to gauge his reactions to this intrusive "visit". When he was more comfortable with the setup, he would contact her. The Padawan nodded and scampered away towards the larger outbuildings. Obi-Wan remained behind, patiently waiting for his former Master to appear, discovering for himself just what reception he could expect after all these years. He didn't have long to wait. "Hello, Obi-Wan." Kenobi closed his eyes for a brief moment, then pivoted slowly, the sound of that calm, beloved voice triggering a myriad of stunning memories, bright flashes of intense imagery cascading through his mind, Bandomeer, Telos, Qui-Gon laughing, screaming at him to get down as blaster bolts twanged past, gentle smiles, severe frowns, that last horrible day on Coruscant. It was too overwhelming, the emotions of a lost lifetime. Obi-Wan knew he must regain control and so he brutally suppressed the thoughts with an almost audible snap. He swallowed hard, finished his turn and stood there in typical Jedi stance, lifting his troubled eyes to the man that had once meant everything to him - Qui-Gon Jinn, his former Master. The years had been kind to Qui-Gon. Brown and silvered hair still cascaded down his broad shoulders and he remained bearded, but there was a lightness of being in his clear blue eyes, his body straight and tall. He was not dressed in Jedi robes now, but in a comfortable blue tunic and leggings, slightly stained from kneeling in the soil. Qui-Gon's hands were covered in dirt, a smudge on his cheek, but he seemed very content, at ease with the universe. Seeing Obi-Wan's face, he broke into a broad smile. "It's so good to see you again." Jinn strode forward, impossibly fast, and Obi-Wan was abruptly enveloped in a ferocious hug. The moment seemed forever as Obi-Wan eagerly leaned into the embrace, remembering the warmth and spirit that was uniquely Qui-Gon. His breath hitched once as he blinked away sudden tears. Finally, reluctantly, Qui-Gon stepped back a bit, his large hands still grasping the shoulders of his former apprentice. Grinning as he studied Obi-Wan, his intense gaze faltered slightly as Jinn looked more closely. Obi-Wan knew that he wore the stoic Jedi facade well but there was an unsettling shadow to his manner, his mouth tightly compressed, his blue eyes hooded. He could not hide the unhappiness buried deep inside, not from his old Master. "Padawan, how I've missed you." "Hello, Master Jinn." "Obi-Wan, please. Not so formal. My name is Qui-Gon, in case you have forgotten." He teased, blue eyes twinkling. Stepping back, he wiped his large hands on his leggings and looked again at his former apprentice. Obi-Wan knew that Master Qui-Gon was remembering the last time he had seen him, ten long years before. Forced to leave the Temple, practically penniless, without friends or family, told to leave all behind, clothes, possessions, lightsaber, it had been a harrowing time. But the most damning thing of all was having to abandon his apprentice. The loss of that relationship had hurt both men deeply; they were still paying the price. As Qui-Gon continued to scrutinize him, Obi-Wan realized that he could feel the questions rising in his Master's thoughts, questions about where he had been for the past ten years and why no contact. But Kenobi remained stonily silent and Qui-Gon, ever the diplomat, turned and gestured for him to follow. "Come into the house. I need to get cleaned up and then we can talk." Looking around, Qui-Gon puzzled, "Where's your Padawan? You have one, don't you?" Kenobi shrugged. "Oh, yes. She's around somewhere, probably looking at the plants in your garden. She'll be along soon enough." Qui-Gon blinked, unasked questions flitting across his face and then he schooled his leonine features back into a broad smile. "Well, then. Come and meet the family." "Family?!" "Of course. I'm not a Jedi Knight any more. I'm a farmer with a wife and son." He grinned slyly, looking at Obi-Wan's startled face. "And a baby girl on the way." Kenobi's stunned look was priceless and Qui-Gon burst out laughing. "Come in." Qui-Gon strode up the broad stone steps, and paused in the cool shade of the long porch. He glanced back at his former apprentice and a warm smile lit his eyes, turning them a brilliant blue. "It's good to see you again, Obi-Wan." Nodding slightly, he turned and went into the house. His voice echoed through the open windows, "Le'orath, we have guests. Where are you, love?" as the sound of his footsteps faded into the far rooms. The Jedi closed his eyes for a moment, the troubled frown deepening across his face. This was certainly not what he had expected. When assigned this mission, the Council had said that Qui-Gon Jinn was a successful businessman, not a farmer. A farmer! And with a family. Blast!! I knew I should have said no. I just knew it. Kenobi growled deep in his throat, furious with that Sith-begotten Council. It was too much, the pain of potential betrayal too great. He snarled again. They did this for spite and now I'm trapped. How am I going to do this? Shifting into immovable stance, determined to control the careening emotions, he breathed deeply once, twice. Do what you must, Kenobi. Duty first and always. Obi-Wan looked towards the inviting house for a long moment, then lifted his comlink and contacted his apprentice. "Atel, be mindful. Things are not as they seem." A soft voice replied, "Yes, Master. I must agree. I'm almost at the barn now. And, Master....I think that there is a force-sensitive here. A very strong force-sensitive." "Be careful, young one. And cautious. Remember, at the moment, we are here for a visit. Nothing more. I will let you know when I want you back." Obi-Wan clicked off and followed his former Master into the house. --------------------------------------------------- The Padawan looked disconcertedly at her comlink. Something was definitely up with Master Obi-Wan. She had never heard him more unsure but she pushed it to the back of her mind. Duty first. Investigating the barn and the occupant were her main priorities at this moment. There would be time enough later for questions and answers. She looked again at the large outbuilding. More than two stories high, it appeared to be made out of stone and wood with earth mounded up along both sides. She thought, irrelevantly, that winters here must be brutal for such a strong structure but shrugged and looked for a way in. The front portals were immense and appeared to be locked but, off to the side, a small human-sized door beckoned. Pushed quietly, the door gave way to a large interior structure, almost cathedral-like in its size and scope, the light streaming though the upper windows. On either side, were tiers of droids and other mechanicals, obviously used for harvesting various types of crops. The center was wide and bare, but large enough for a gymnasium or salle. Large rings and bars hung from the distant roof; it was difficult to guess what their purposes could be, although, at the Temple, they would have been used in training exercises. Her eyes halted on a lone figure, sitting cross-legged on the floor at the center of the structure. Light pooled around him, seemed to set him pulsing with radiance, his bright blond hair shimmering. More importantly, he was ablaze in the Force. Here was the force-sensitive she had sensed, a most powerful one, if she was any judge. He was turned away from her, with tools scattered about him and his arms and back moved as if he were struggling with something in his hands. She knew that he was aware of her, his breathing had stopped for just a second and he had shifted slightly. But he said not a word, just kept working as she moved towards him. Finally, not turning, he spoke quietly. "May I help you?" "I didn't mean to startle you. I was just exploring. I've never been on this type of estate before." With that, putting down the droid in his hands, he rose gracefully to his feet and turned to face her. Dressed in blue tunic and leggings, he was about 20 years old, tall, slim and quite good-looking, his hair cropped short in a shaggy style reminiscent of a Padawan cut. A small blue jewel glittered in his right earlobe as the sunlight moved across his face. "Estate? This is a ...." His blue eyes tightened suddenly, frowning, his whole body alert. "Jedi!" He scowled at her. "What in the blazes is a Jedi doing here?" She stepped back, startled as he moved towards her, posture threatening. Atel shifted into ready stance of the first defense, her hands hovering, waiting for the attack. He started to mirror her move, then stopped, realizing what he was doing, and stood up straight, hands clenched. "I repeat. What are you doing here?" "We are visiting former Master Jinn. I believe he owns the place?" She tried to make it sound light but he would have none of it. "Yes, he does. We...? Who are you?" She straightened, then bowed slightly. "I am Atel Sl'etah, Padawan Learner to Jedi Knight Obi-Wan Kenobi. And you are...?" He seemed distracted suddenly. "Anakin Skywalker. I'm apprenticed to Master Jinn. Kenobi, you say..." She nodded. "Yes, Obi-Wan Kenobi. Do you know him?" He looked at her again, growling. "Kenobi, Kenobi...yes, I've heard of him." He tried to push past her, rushing towards the side-door, but she stood firm. "Where are you going in such a hurry?" He snorted. "Back to the house. To make sure that Master Jinn is all right. Protect him from your blasted Kenobi if I need to." "What are you talking about? Master Obi-Wan wouldn't hurt him." She was clearly concerned at his attitude. What could he have heard about Master Kenobi? Did he suspect that our mission is not just a visit but an investigation? That's not possible. He looked at her with contempt. "You high and mighty Jedi. You think that I am a fool? You toss people out of the Order like so much garbage and then they get killed. Well, you won't do that to Master Jinn. I'll see the whole damn Temple come crashing down around your ears first. I swear it." He abruptly sidestepped her, then disappeared through the door, the backswing hitting the jamb with a loud crack. She just stood there stunned for an instant.What in the blazes was that all about? And then she moved hurriedly to catch up. She would protect her Master with her life, even against that brash idiot. -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 6/28/08 Fragments of Illusion- http://boards.theforce.net/bts/b10475/28456473 updated 8/16/08 Freeze frame - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b10476/27820434 Master to jedidas3 Impeach Bush!
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LuvEwan Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 3/27/03 4:51pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) Another update on 3/27
	It really frightened me when you referred to Anakin as handsome--yuck!--but you quickly redeemed yourself, already calling him an idiot. Hooray for diane! And it's funny, I never even imagined that Qui-Gon would be married when Obi-Wan found him. Especially with two children! How sweet! But I wonder how Obi-Wan will react to the family he has now, will he think he has been forgotten amidst Qui-Gon's intimacies. I love Obi's Padawan too. I'm glad she's so protective of him...but mostly because she doesn't like Anakin! Wonderful post, diane. And don't sell yourself short. You write beautifully and orginally. You give us posts pretty quick, too. This is a fantastic story. You should be very proud. -----signature----- So it was Anakin's butt after all. He supposed he might take a modicum of comfort from that. -Star Wars Episode III: Revenge of the Sith, by Matthew Stover
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Shaindl Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 3/27/03 5:02pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) Another update on 3/27
	Hi Diane, No, not disappointed at all, I was just wondering. I'll be interested to see what you do with Anakin in this story. I'm glad that Qui was so welcoming - we'll see how long it lasts. Your descriptions of Naboo were just lovely; made me want to go camping! Great work, you're doing wonderfully, and I can't wait to meet Qui's wife and child! Shaindl -----signature----- Halfway Moment - Qui, Obi, Anakin AU - http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/20110461/?0 - UPDATED JULY 3!
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JediNemesis Registered: Mar '03	Date Posted: 3/28/03 1:25pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) Another update on 3/27
	Can't imagine where I got chapter 12 from - probably something else I was reading. Still, this is absolutely brilliant, and I can't wait to see how it all turns out. In response to LuvEwan : Ani IS handsome, at least in his manifestation as Hayden. But yes, he is an idiot, and a brat to go with it. Waiting for next post. Keep going, Diane! - JediNemesis -----signature----- <- Fic in bio <- Before the Saga Best Author 2008! Thanks so much guys! BeTS Best Romance 2008: Spindrift - http://boards.theforce.net/a/b1/28478326 NEW Somewhere To Fly - http://boards.theforce.net/a/b1/28898463 + GM & Judge in the Mythology Draft +
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LuvEwan Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 3/28/03 4:00pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) Another update on 3/27
	HAVE to disagree there. Ewan could run circles and circles and circles around Hayden. Don't try to argue with me, because my opinion there is unshakeable! Hee hee. -----signature----- So it was Anakin's butt after all. He supposed he might take a modicum of comfort from that. -Star Wars Episode III: Revenge of the Sith, by Matthew Stover
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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 3/28/03 4:05pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) Another update on 3/27
	LuvEwan - ummmmmm, will you still like my fic if I tell you that I think Anakin is cute? I hope so...I got to see Hayden at Celebrations II and he was adorable. Plus all my friends think I'm nuts that I actually like Anakin - somewhat creepy that he is. He is such an interesting character to write and I feel more sorry for him than anything else. However, fear not. This is not turning into an Anakin story. He is here for certain plot points (some pretty important ones) but the main focus is Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon!!!My two favorite Jedi!!! As for Qui-Gon being married, a lot of the early Jedi were married. Besides, the Order had been very clear when they told Qui-Gon that he was not longer Jedi. So why not? However, never fear again. This will not turn into a family affair either... As for Atel, she is very protective of Obi-Wan, even when she is wrong. LOL. I'm very glad you have stuck with me so far. Don't worry, there's lots more going on that I haven't even hinted at yet....and things can only get worse before they get better...right? Thank you so much for your support!!! It's made it very worthwhile. And because my readers have been so good, you will finally get to meet the family tonight... Diane -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 6/28/08 Fragments of Illusion- http://boards.theforce.net/bts/b10475/28456473 updated 8/16/08 Freeze frame - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b10476/27820434 Master to jedidas3 Impeach Bush!
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Shaindl Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 3/28/03 4:11pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) Another update on 3/27
	Tonight? That means - gasp! - I won't be able to see it until Monday! How dare you tease me like that! Can't wait to read it, Diane! Shaindl -----signature----- Halfway Moment - Qui, Obi, Anakin AU - http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/20110461/?0 - UPDATED JULY 3!
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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 3/28/03 4:16pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) Another update on 3/27
	Shaindl -Glad you are enjoying it so much. I loved Naboo especially the hill country. I was actually at Lake Como and it is as beautiful as the movie showed. I don't think that Lucas has to change very much at all!!! Yes, I tried to show the differences between the decay of the Temple and the living Force of the hill country. I'm glad it wasn't too over-the-top for you. And you're right. I'd love to go hiking in the mountains overlooking the Jinn farm. Qui-Gon was welcoming for a little while, wasn't he....you'll just have to see how long it lasts, especially with a family to protect. I'm glad you like it so much. And you get to meet the Jinn family tonight. JediNemesis I think that I mentioned that I had just finished writing Chapter 12 so that is why you might have thought it was here ...my fault. I'm trying to pace the posts so that you won't have to wait too long between them. Hayden was quite sweet at CelebrationsII, answered all the questions with serious intent (or humorous if it was). I heard that one young kid asked him about the Force and he answered it very seriously, just as a Jedi would do. I think maybe my experiences with Hayden may be coloring my reaction to Anakin. Glad you are enjoying it. Next post is coming right up!! -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 6/28/08 Fragments of Illusion- http://boards.theforce.net/bts/b10475/28456473 updated 8/16/08 Freeze frame - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b10476/27820434 Master to jedidas3 Impeach Bush!
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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 3/28/03 4:26pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) Another update on 3/27
	Wow, you guys posted before my posts were up...LOL. LuvEwan - I have to agree that Ewan is quite gorgeous. I think I liked him best in AOTC when he was talking to Dexter. The twinkle in his eye was devastating!!! And a wet Ewan was something I really enjoyed! I still prefer him beardless. But I did like Anakin in the meadow scene when he was teasing Padme and he was really adorable in the (darn Lucas) deleted scene with Padme's relatives. However, have you seen the latest picture of Liam Neeson in a dress?!!! Apparently he was in a play for a single night yesterday(otherwise I'd be over there right now) - dressed in a 1860 gown and blonde wig - all 6ft4 of him. I burst out laughing. I usually think he's gorgeous but that was over the top. I did get to see Liam in the Crucible on Broadway - he is gorgeous in person plus I had 3rd row center seats and he took his shirt off and washed his face - the droplets trickling down his oh-my chest. I almost had a heartattack on the spot... Diane - needs to cool off.... -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 6/28/08 Fragments of Illusion- http://boards.theforce.net/bts/b10475/28456473 updated 8/16/08 Freeze frame - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b10476/27820434 Master to jedidas3 Impeach Bush!
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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 3/28/03 4:35pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) Another update on 3/27 - Date Edited: 5/17/03 5:34am (1 edits total) Edited By: dianethx
	Okay, here is the rest of Chapter 5. It's relatively short but I will post Chapter 6 on Monday. And now the family... Obi-Wan pushed the front door open and entered a large common room, beautiful in its quiet elegancy. Two comfortable couches skimmed the far walls, a scattering of fabric covered chairs, a low table near the sofas - all denoted that this was the outward facade, the meeting place for guests and business clientele. Done in cremes and beiges, there were also bright splashes of color here and there; the pillows strewn on the couches, artwork of people and places hung on the walls, a shawl cast over one chair. There were clusters of flowers everywhere, done in simple designs that spoke of wealth and style. Beyond the far right doorway, a whoosh of running water and the soft undertones of voices beckoned him. But then the sounds turned strident and he paused, torn by the twin problems of letting Qui-Gon have the privacy he deserved and the mission-imperatives that Obi-Wan must follow. Duty won and he moved closer. A feminine voice rang out, troubled and angry. "Kenobi's here!?" The sounds turned sarcastic. "Well, about damn time. Ten years of ignoring you and he just waltzes in here without a word." "Le', please. Can't you just let it be, just for a little while? I've missed him. Now, he's here. Let's at least pretend he's here to see me." "So, now, it comes down to pretense. Qui, love, he's hurt you every day. I could see it in your eyes, hear it in your voice. I won't let him hurt you again." The sound of water stopped. "All right, all right, for your sake, I'll be civil." Soft noises and a heavy sigh. "Why is he here anyway? A mission?" "Not a visit, not after all this time. Look, I've left him out there. Go and be polite while I change... Polite, mind." Another sarcastic "Yes, oh wise Master." The sound of footsteps coming his way galvanized Obi-Wan to step back into the center of the common room. The woman who entered was about forty years old, tall, with braided waist-length red hair and piercing green eyes, relatively thin, although her waistline had begun to thicken with pregnancy. Le'orath Jinn was not beautiful, but striking in the classic sense, so much so that, after a moment's reflection, mere beauty would seem unimportant. She filled the space with her presence, her emerald eyes staring straight into the soul. "Knight Kenobi, welcome to our home. Please sit down." Her voice was pleasant, seemingly congenial as she gestured to one of the far couches. Obi-Wan bowed politely. "Thank you, Mistress Jinn." He sat quickly, his tattered brown robes pooling around him, and turned to his hostess. "You have a very lovely place here." She settled next to him and, smiling, reached for his hand. Taking it in her own, she squeezed gently at first but with increasingly painful pressure. She leaned over, still smiling, her eyes stone cold, and spoke quietly, so that her voice would not carry. "Listen to me, you miserable gundark. I don't know why you've come. I don't know why it took you ten years to get your worthless Jedi carcass here to visit him. And, by the Gods, I certainly don't know why he still loves you like a son. But I swear to you, if you hurt him again, I don't care who you are - Jedi Knight, Republic representative, Supreme Chancellor, I don't care. I will hunt you down and destroy you. Do you understand me, Jedi?" With that, she let his hand go and he shook it slightly to help circulation return. At first, her words had filled him with astonishment but the shame soon followed. Coward... Kenobi, you should have tried harder. It was clear that she loved Qui-Gon very much. To threaten a Jedi so was not to be taken lightly. "I understand, Mistress Jinn. Perhaps more than you know." He turned to say something else, maybe reassure her but at that moment, Qui-Gon returned. Dressed now in white shirt and dark-blue leggings, commanding and tall, he almost looked like a pirate or mercenary. Behind him stood a child, about four years old, red haired and blue-eyed, peering out from behind large legs. "Le'orath, I seemed to have misplaced my son. Has anyone seen him? Oh, dear, oh, dear. Guess I'll just have to go get another one..." The child giggled and looked up at his father. "Here I am, Daddy." Qui-Gon turned and caught up the little one in his arms, a patently pretend growl escaping his lips. "What's this? Oh, here you are..." Hoisting the child over his shoulder, the boy giggling as he is held upside down, Qui-Gon walked over to Obi-Wan and tapped his son on the bottom. "This is my son, Ben. Usually, he is right side up but it appears that today is an upside-down day." There were more muffled giggles, some wiggling and then, "Put me down, Daddy." With that, Ben was lifted and set down next to Le'orath. Putting her arm around his shoulder, cuddling him close as though for protection, she glared straight at Kenobi. The child looked at his mother and then at the stranger in their midst. Kenobi had some experience in the initiate's creche; all the knights must spend time there now that most of the staff had been dismissed. Outwardly, the child seemed quite ordinary as far as children go. This one, however, was strong, very strong, in the Force, powerful enough to have been sent to the Temple three years ago. Why he was here and not on Coruscant spoke volumes. Indeed there was something amiss. Kenobi bowed slightly to the boy. "Hello, young Ben. I am Jedi Knight Obi-Wan Kenobi. I am very pleased to meet you." The child's eyes grew wide with recognition as he buried himself deeper into his mother's arms. His voice trembled with fear. "Daddy, it's the Knight, the Jedi. Just like in my dream....it's Obi-Wan. Did you know that? Is he going to take you away now?" Obi-Wan was dumbfounded. "Why would you think that, child?" Ben drove himself behind Le'orath as though trying to disappear. 'Mommy, make him go. Please. He's going to take Daddy away." -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 6/28/08 Fragments of Illusion- http://boards.theforce.net/bts/b10475/28456473 updated 8/16/08 Freeze frame - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b10476/27820434 Master to jedidas3 Impeach Bush!
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LuvEwan Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 3/28/03 5:48pm Subject: RE: Betrayal (Obi-Wan/Qui-Gon angst - very AU) Updated on 3/28 - Date Edited: 3/28/03 11:13pm (1 edits total) Edited By: LuvEwan
	Awwwwww! I love little kids! How cute! And now, I'll reply seriously. THANK YOU for painting Qui-Gon's wife as a real woman, instead of some rail thin, gorgeous thing. You see that constantly in fics, and it just lowers the realistic feeling for me. You've written her as pretty, but in a 'classic' way, which is wonderful. And I couldn't help but feel a twinge of pain for Obi, seeing his Master with his blood son. Obi's a strong man, but jealous is a powerful foe. And what's with the boy's dream!? [face_shocked] Take Qui-Gon away? Whoa. It's getting real good, diane. And I can't believe you got to see Liam Neeson, shirtless and wet! I hate you! ... I loved the scene at Dex's too. His face just looked so soft, and his eyes never looked more beautiful...except for maybe in Moulin Rouge. Both men are to die for... But I'm sorry, I have yet to see Anakin as attractive. Ewan liked him, which probably means he's okay personality-wise, but he's just not my type. Everyone thinks I'm weird, cuz I don't go for the tall, young men, opting for those much older than me, and not so tall. I don't get that strange a reaction about Ewan, most of the time, but when I mention I like Jack Nicholson, people just think I'm insane. worries that diane is thinking the same thing. Runs off to hide, hoping I haven't lost a reader. Sorry such a long reply, but your story just inspires me I guess. Wonderful, perfect, beautiful job. Can't wait for more. -----signature----- So it was Anakin's butt after all. He supposed he might take a modicum of comfort from that. -Star Wars Episode III: Revenge of the Sith, by Matthew Stover
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