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_Genivive_ Registered: Mar '05	Date Posted: 6/11/05 7:51am Subject: RE: Eluding What Will Come (AU fic updated June 11th)
	Hey, great new post! I just noticed that I accidentally "came out" from lurking twice! One time on page 4 then again on page 5 . I guess I forgot that I delurked your story already, sorry about that! -----signature----- May the horse be with you - Relient K
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Happy_Hobbit_Padawan Registered: Feb '03	Date Posted: 7/10/05 9:52pm Subject: RE: Eluding What Will Come (AU fic updated June 11th)
	I already told you I loved this, but here's me posting a reply on these boards like I said I would. (So what if I said that over a month ago? I'm getting older, and um, I move slower. Yup, that's it. ) Want more posty! Want more thranta! Want more Daven! Want more Atty!fic! More! More! More! -----signature----- Belaé, Handmaiden of the Crest Get jiggly with it at Jello Anarchy.
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Arin_Atona Registered: Jul '04	Date Posted: 7/15/05 8:52am Subject: RE: Eluding What Will Come (AU fic updated June 11th)
	I just found this fic while perusing the Saga awards excerpts and thought I'd drop a reply in to let you know I'm reading. I just finished the first story/part, and about to start "Rescue the Princess" in my next sitting. Daven and Nyssa's relationship was short-lived, but well done. I'm not much for mushy stuff, but the steamy scenes were, uh, steamy. I like the concept you had for them falling in love... her trying to kill him and then falling for him, which is backwards for most relationships. -----signature----- On the Shoulders of Giants http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=23575110 From the Empire, With Love http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=26258118
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Happy_Hobbit_Padawan Registered: Feb '03	Date Posted: 8/16/05 7:53pm Subject: RE: Eluding What Will Come (AU fic updated June 11th)
	That small thing called graduate school isn't going to affect your writing on this, right? Because, you know, in the grander scheme of things, college is so not important. Writing stories to please your avid fans is! p.s. I know! I'll offer to pay you to finish this! p.p.s. How about a nickel per post? p.p.p.s Ten cents? -----signature----- Belaé, Handmaiden of the Crest Get jiggly with it at Jello Anarchy.
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obaona Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 10/12/05 1:34am Subject: RE: Eluding What Will Come (AU fic updated June 11th) - Date Edited: 10/26/05 1:53am (1 edits total) Edited By: obaona
	huggles story and Atty [edit] I still love this story, Atty. I was just rereading this last post (when is the next? have you given up? ) and your writing style just ... draws me in. Not having read this for a while, I'd forgotten the clarity of your writing, the excellent pacing. It's funny, but it reminds me of your translation of that poem I'm trying to translate - it all just fit, very well, flowed naturally. That's what your writing is like. I adore it. -----signature----- MS Word is designed by sadists with masochists in mind. - teh atty my recent Atton (KOTOR2) fic: http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/30335989
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BrightFeather Registered: Nov '05	Date Posted: 11/23/05 11:12am Subject: RE: Eluding What Will Come (AU fic updated June 11th)
	More? Pleeeeeeeaaaaaassssssseeeeee? I just found this and I need more! -----signature----- Padawan of Layren. Creator of Darth Cookie E-sis of DaenaBenjen42 and BrentusofGath. http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/22518786/p1/?3 http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/22764026/p1/?2
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ladylaurel18 Registered: Sep '05	Date Posted: 1/9/06 4:09pm Subject: RE: Eluding What Will Come (AU fic updated June 11th)
	probably not the best time to kick a wonderful story up, but I have to try... -----signature----- Twich’s Twisted Sisters Pacis, Iuris, Libertas, Obsidis Shadow of the Suns- http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/22714582/p1/?14
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obaona Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 7/9/06 4:39pm Subject: RE: Eluding What Will Come (AU fic updated June 11th)
	Are you dead? (please, pretty please update? ) -----signature----- MS Word is designed by sadists with masochists in mind. - teh atty my recent Atton (KOTOR2) fic: http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/30335989
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G__Anakin Registered: Apr '06	Date Posted: 7/10/06 7:53am Subject: RE: Eluding What Will Come (AU fic updated June 11th)
	This is cool Please Update Can I be on the PM list if there is one -----signature----- Master to tahiriveilax - - - My fanfic - - - Fate of the Jedi - Abyss : http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/30246540/p1/ Yeah, I used the real title for the next book. Beware Omen Spoilers.
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Pallas-Athena Title: TFN Fan Fiction Archive Editor Registered: Nov '00	Date Posted: 7/28/06 12:13am Subject: RE: Eluding What Will Come (AU fic updated June 11th) - Date Edited: 7/28/06 12:34am (1 edits total) Edited By: Pallas-Athena
	Okay, so it's been a year since I updated this. Yeah. Well, here's a new part. I'm going to reply to this feedback even though many people might have completely forgotten about this fic because, you know, it's the only way I have to express my thanks to my readers. _Genivive_: Teehee, twice is better than never I say! HHP: You're getting slower? Ha, I totally beat you this time in laziness. You're right though, stories are more important than graduate school, at least over the summer. Do I get interest on that dime? oba: as always. Thank you for your constant love for this fic. I hope this part's, um, clear, 'cause I was sort of tired when I reread it. I like flowing, anyway BrightFeather: Thanks! ladylaurel18: Thanks immensely. I'm glad you liked enough to kick it up G__Anakin: Thanks! A pm list, eh? I guess we can have a pm list. You'd be the only one on it, but at least it would be a managable size ... Alderaan – Part Six The Visma Bluff platform was not much compared to the giant machines operated in town; in fact, Daven wasn’t entirely sure he could even make out a replusor. The lift was also simple: a system of pulleys rather than the more typical gravi-field movers. It was wooden, adding to the rustic look of the place, and blended into the forest, which surrounded the bluff on three sides. The thranta lowered her descent, banking at a surprisingly sharp angle. Mara, sitting in between him and Nyssa, tightened her grip on his hand but squealed in delight all the same as the cold air blew roughly on their faces. As they neared, a harsh whine indicated the presence of a small replusor engine, painted brown, so it seemed, to resemble the wood. It had just enough power to hold the thranta in its air currents, Daven could guess, so he opted to grab Mara the second they paused long enough for her to consider jumping out. They moved easily off the creature’s wing, this time with Sisa walking along with them to help in case they lost their balance. Not likely to happen to anyone in that family – even Nyssa, without the Force, was quite a bit more graceful than Sisa – but Daven wasn’t about to let the sweet girl know it. He liked Sisa, despite her near constant, probably unconscious flirtations. She had a naivety and honesty that was rare in his world, even when he was a Jedi. Nyssa had often proclaimed that Daven himself was innocent, especially in the beginning, but he imagined that even she would agree that it was a different sort of thing all together. He knew the sufferings of the galaxy, and the cruelties, from the time he was a Padawan, but he had chosen to not let them affect him. For Sisa, though, it was as if she were never even aware of them. He envied her for a moment as they descend in the lift, not for himself, but for his daughter. It was doubtful that his little Mara would ever know a peace like Sisa’s, if only because of the birthright – perhaps curse, rather – that he had given her. Clearly oblivious to Daven’s thoughts, Sisa was staring off into the distance, looking towards the other side of the river. “There’s another thranta,” she said, confused. “Knoggles said no one else would be out today.” She frowned and squinted, trying to get a better look at the blurry dot. “A wild one, perhaps?” Nyssa asked as the lift came to a halt and their small party stepped out onto the grass. She glanced sidelong at Daven, her look betraying one meaning and one meaning alone – potential danger, I’m ready when you are. Daven sighed, returning his gaze to the skies. He sensed nothing wrong, but that was never a reason to be incautious. “No,” Sisa answered, sounding distracted but unconcerned. She pulled out her microgoggles, and confirmed what Daven’s Force-enhanced vision already told him. “It’s got a saddle. Can’t make out a rider, though.” Then, as if getting lost that morning had no lasting effect on Mara, she chose that second to bolt out of Daven’s arms and run, no wait – skip – towards the forest. “Mara!” Nyssa called out, running after her. Daven’s first instinct was to join his wife in the chase, but a tingling on the back of his neck caused him to stop in mid movement. Something was … well, not exactly wrong, nor even off. Something just was. It was an odd feeling, an almost good feeling, a feeling of completeness. He had felt it before, he knew, but he could not remember when or why. “Mara!” Nyssa’s panic-filled shout threw him out of his reverie, clearing his head. There was someone here, he could sense that much, and he knew he needed to protect his wife and child before over-analyzing Force currents. He trailed after them, leaving a confused and worried Sisa without so much as a word of explanation. The trees were close together, much more so than the aerial view had led him to believe, and the foliage was suitably dense. Simply following Mara’s presence was the best and only available option, but, as he ducked past branches and hopped over outgrown roots, he found her trail becoming as shadowy and blotchy as the forest itself. Finally, after what seemed like an eternity yet was, in reality, only a handful of breaths, Daven came across a tiny clearing. A small, wooden shack was the only structure that occupied the space, but it wasn’t what caught Daven’s immediate attention. Nyssa was suddenly running ahead of him, preparing to scoop up a very bewildered looking Mara, who was currently standing in the middle of the clearing. Without thought, Daven went for the next obvious target – the man that had just emerged from the building, who was just a little too close to his daughter for comfort. He crashed into him, knocking him to the ground. He heard the breath being sapped from the man’s lungs, so he positioned himself to keep it that way – he sat on his knees, with his full weight on the man’s chest. The man gasped but gave no other sort of struggle. Clearly not a well-trained bounty hunter, if he was one, but Daven thought it best not to let his guard down just yet. He pushed down, forcing a good bulk of his weight onto the man’s esophagus. Out of the corner of his eye, he could see Nyssa holding Mara in an intense hug, but he kept his focus trained on the man’s face, which was now racing with a torrent of emotions. Fear, shock, confusion, amazement; Daven couldn’t really tell – the buzzing in his own head prevented him from reading anything or anyone too clearly. “Who are you?” he asked harshly, letting up a little so the man could breathe enough to answer. “Dav … plea …” the man hissed in a hoarse rush. “Davick!” came an agonized scream, and Daven felt more than saw Sisa race to his side. “Let him up! Let him up! He’s my friend, a resident of the village!” She shoved Daven off the man, this supposed Davick, and Daven let her. He bent in a low crouch as Sisa helped Davick up into a sitting position. Davick took a few nervous gasps of air, rubbing his chest while Sisa still held one of his shoulders to support him. His eyes never left Daven’s. “What are you doing here, Davick?” Sisa asked, completely unaware of their dead stare. “The show? Is everything all right?” “Daven? Are you Daven?” Davick asked, ignoring Sisa’s question. Daven swallowed roughly, his throat going dry. No one, besides Nyssa and Mara, should have known that name. Years ago, they had taken the precaution of completely detaching the man from the name, legally at least. ‘Daven Staver’ had conveniently died in the first wave of the purges, even before Vader had attempted to kill him on Maylass. Then it was only a matter of slightly altering the genetic code, figure prints, and iris pattern in the dead Jedi’s official file so that they wouldn’t at all match the poor, uneducated, smuggler grunt that came from some backwater planet, the name of which Daven had never bothered to remember. Nyssa had some useful friends, Daven had to admit, but he did not allow the splicer who preformed the identity switch to remember that he did so, no matter how much Nyssa trusted the man. Now only Nyssa called him by his first name – neither of them wanting him to completely loose his old self – and Mara knew the name from Nyssa. Still, Nyssa never let the name slip in public for fear of someone putting the two pieces together and finding out that there was a Jedi still living. But this Davick, with his disheveled red hair and baggy tunics, didn’t exactly look like an Imperial assassin. “Please, if you’re Daven,” Davick began again, but paused to draw a ragged, nervous breath. “Daven Staver …” Okay, not even Mara knew his family name. “I’m … My name is Davick Staver,” Davick continued. Daven clenched his jaw, but his face remained impassive. “I have … had a brother. A younger brother. His name was Daven. When he was just a baby, he was taken away.” His eyes racked Daven’s features, as if looking for an unspoken answer, declaration, confirmation – any reaction whatsoever. Daven did his best not to even blink. “The Jedi took him. They told us he was going to be a Jedi. We saw his name after the Clone Wars, saying that he died… but, you. My mother saw you today in the village; she thought she heard someone call you Daven. And you look …” Like you, Daven thought, able to finish Davick’s assumption even as he stopped speaking. And it was true, too. He had initially written off the resemblance, after hearing Sisa’s story of the native redheaded Thranta Riders, but the similarity didn’t just end with their hair and eye color. Although it was of little consolation now, it seemed he had now found the man Sisa had originally mistaken him for back in town, and, not to mention, the reason behind the little crush she had been developing. But that didn’t necessarily mean that this man was his brother. Perhaps it was a clever ploy. Pick a target that looked to be a hunted Jedi, approach him or her, pretending that you are family, share that you know of the Jedi’s secret and are willing to protect it, get the Jedi to admit it, and you made yourself an easy bounty with an unsuspecting victim. Yet this seemed unlikely, even in a galaxy as cruel as this one currently was. First, he had yet to meet another Jedi living in hiding; chances were that there was too few left to bother hunting. Second, he was listed as deceased and so his was not the most obvious face to be posted on the newest wanted list. Third, the elaboration with Sisa and the thrantas … Oh, Force be damned, when did he become so rational? He reached out, not touching Davick’s mind, but, instead, feeling the currents around him – around them both. The soft ebb and flow – grace and chaos streamlined – greeted him. He felt the buzz, the tingle that had earlier touched the back of his neck. It was a strand, one of the many that made up the web of the Force, connecting one life to the next. All things were connected, no life could live without impacting another, but some were stronger than others. He could always make out his own, like fiery tether licking in between his shoulder blades. His and Nyssa’s strand – created out of rivalry and greed, cracked by suffering and pain, but mended with devotion and trust – was always visible. His and Mara’s – the bond of a parent and child – burned the brightest. Older than time, deep, and primal. Forged from a likeness in genetics, a part that made them two pieces cut from the same whole, and strengthened by selfless love. His and his brother’s. Yes, there it was. Weak and neglected, but there, burning gently and tirelessly, brighter than the other, common strands that linked those unrelated. “Please,” Davick spoke again, slowly loosing what was left of his composure. “I need to know. I just need to know.” Daven released a breath he didn’t remember holding, clearing his mind and taking in his surroundings for what felt like the first time. Davick was still sitting on the ground across from him, his face pleading, bordering on shaking. Sisa was next to him, still holding on to his arm but no longer offering a comforting touch. Her eyes were wide in shock, her expression confused, as she kept turning her head to regard one brother and then the other. Nyssa was holding Mara close to her, her arms wrapped tightly around Mara’s shoulders, as if she were afraid of her running off again. She held a look of suspicion mixed with surprise while Mara was merely smiling. Daven sighed. While he didn’t know what the truth would mean exactly, he had no reason, no right to lie to his brother. “Yes,” he said quietly. “I’m Daven.” “By the Force,” Davick whispered, his breath coming out in a slow, relieved hiss. He shot to his knees and crawled the meter separating them, reaching out to Daven and crushing him in a fierce hug. Daven had to fight the urge to struggle out of the embrace, despite the fact that physical contact had become second nature to him when he was with Nyssa and Mara. Davick’s hug was overwhelming, seeming to give and ask for love, admiration, and respect – all of the things he had worked so hard to show Nyssa and Mara in the months after he no longer considered himself a true Jedi – with one single touch. He pulled away. Perhaps not too harshly, because Davick didn’t seem to notice his reluctance. The older man even kept a hand planted firmly on his shoulder. “Where have you been?’ Davick asked suddenly, as if Daven could hope to begin to answer something like that. “What happened to you?” Maybe even slightly more difficult to form a response to. “Did you become a Jedi?” Easier. “Did you fight in the Clone Wars? Why was your death announced?” Daven opened his mouth and blinked a few times, not really sure what he could possibly say, but trying to find some sort of words anyway. “Force, look at me,” Davick finally said when Daven remained silent. “I’m sorry, this must be a lot to take in.” He took his hand off his shoulder and favored him with a friendly smile. “You probably didn’t even know I existed before now. This whole thing – conversation, I mean – isn’t exactly going the way I was planning.” He rubbed his forehead, as if trying to relieve stress. “Wasn’t expecting you to jump me when I was leaving the ’fresher, first off.” “Sorry,” Daven replied honestly, still incapable of saying much else. “It’s okay,” Davick said, his smile becoming more genuine. “I almost had myself convinced that it wasn’t going to be you. And then there you were. You’re … you. And now I’m babbling like the village idiot. Fantastic.” He ran a hand through his hair. “You said that Aiya saw him?” Sisa finally spoke up, wisely saving the more impossible questions for a later date and giving Daven some much needed breathing room. He even noticed Davick’s aura calm as she placed a soothing hand on his shoulder. “Did she send you?” “Yeah.” “We should get going and head back, then. I’m sure she’s waiting for your return.” Sisa smiled fondly at Daven. “And what a happy return it’ll be.” Daven could not bring himself to return the grin. His mind was whirling and nerves were piled atop nerves. He was going to meet his family. His birth family. And he didn’t even know how he felt about that … -----signature----- Do you ever get bored and find yourself scrolling down a thread just to read the signatures?
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HHP Registered: Jan '04	Date Posted: 7/28/06 2:25am Subject: RE: Eluding What Will Come (AU fic updated July 28, 2006)
	Eeeee!!!!! A postyyy!!!!!! Yay! Daven's gonna meet his family! I'll be back later after I've refreshed my memory of what's going on in the fic. It has been nearly a year, you know. Hey, what's the interest rate? I think that dime might be up to a dollar by now at least ... -----signature----- Happy_Hobbit_Padawan's too-lazy-to-type-out-full-name sock. ~ What should have happened in AOTC: Anakin: It's all Obi-Wan's fault! I'm better! Boo-hoo! Padme: thwack! smack! thwack! a la ROTK Gandalf.
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G__Anakin Registered: Apr '06	Date Posted: 7/28/06 5:52pm Subject: RE: Eluding What Will Come (AU fic updated July 28, 2006) - Date Edited: 7/28/06 5:54pm (1 edits total) Edited By: G__Anakin
	Yeaay Thanks for the PM My 800th Post!! -----signature----- Master to tahiriveilax - - - My fanfic - - - Fate of the Jedi - Abyss : http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/30246540/p1/ Yeah, I used the real title for the next book. Beware Omen Spoilers.
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obaona Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 7/29/06 3:57am Subject: RE: Eluding What Will Come (AU fic updated July 28, 2006)
	Not likely to happen to anyone in that family – even Nyssa, without the Force, was quite a bit more graceful than Sisa – but Daven wasn’t about to let the sweet girl know it. Talented!family. Nyssa had often proclaimed that Daven himself was innocent, especially in the beginning, but he imagined that even she would agree that it was a different sort of thing all together. That was one of the things that I loved in the original Eluding (I mean, besides loving everything in general) was how Daven did have an odd kind of innocence to him, even though you know, really, he's not. At least, in the majority of ways. Daven can be such a contradiction, and I love that about him - you've really created an amazing character in him. One of those I wish really existed. sighs happily Did Mara run off because she felt what Daven was feeling? I like Daven's quick reaction, and that he just heads off before analyzing the Force - for some reason, that just struck me as amusing (but smart). There are a lot of discussions about what the Jedi should be (in the EU and among fans), but damn girl, in my humble opinion, Daven is it. (Okay, stopping.) And I like how you contrast Daven and Davick - Davick is just babbling, glad to his brother, but wow, oblivious, was my first thought. The fact that Daven is thought to be dead and yet isn't, um, isn't the reason why obvious? In the sense that, well, Daven's hardly likely to correct that error. I like that Daven is kind of confused and overwhelmed. Even having not reread the earlier posts, I remember the kind of family Davick comes from, how they interacted, and it's different than all the undercurrents Daven and Nyssa (and to a lesser extent Mara) have. At least, to my mind. There's got to be tension and suspicion always in the background for them. His and Nyssa’s strand – created out of rivalry and greed, cracked by suffering and pain, but mended with devotion and trust – was always visible. His and Mara’s – the bond of a parent and child – burned the brightest. Older than time, deep, and primal. Forged from a likeness in genetics, a part that made them two pieces cut from the same whole, and strengthened by selfless love. I love these lines. How his and Nyssa's strand was created, him and Mara - genetics and love. Awesome. huggles madly -----signature----- MS Word is designed by sadists with masochists in mind. - teh atty my recent Atton (KOTOR2) fic: http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/30335989
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G__Anakin Registered: Apr '06	Date Posted: 8/9/06 11:01pm Subject: RE: Eluding What Will Come (AU fic updated July 28, 2006)
	upping -----signature----- Master to tahiriveilax - - - My fanfic - - - Fate of the Jedi - Abyss : http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/30246540/p1/ Yeah, I used the real title for the next book. Beware Omen Spoilers.
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sabers12 Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 8/17/06 12:14pm Subject: RE: Eluding What Will Come (AU fic updated July 28, 2006)
	this story is good! plz post soon!! -----signature----- ~~Jedi Code~~ There is no emotion; there is peace. There is no ignorance; there is knowledge. There is no passion; there is serenity. There is no death; there is the Force.
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