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obaona Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 10/14/04 5:22pm Subject: nothing in the vastness (a dark, strange little Obi/Siri vignette)
	Thanks for clicking. Title: nothing in the vastness Summary: A little, strange Obi/Siri viggie. A/N: Thanks to Gabri for looking it over and saying it's not weird and very much postable. Feedback is, as always and ever, appreciated and adored. "I didn't need anyone to turn me, you know. I did it myself." Siri leapt for her lightsaber out of her meditation position, a mad scramble that lasted less than a foot before a heavy weight fell forcefully on top of her, knocking the breath out of her. The lightsaber left the small table it had sat on, not by her use of the Force, but by his. She managed to inhale sharply as he turned her over, kept her still and settled. He smiled. "You found me," he whispered. "What are you doing, Obi-Wan?" Siri demanded, perhaps still a little breathless. He cocked his head, hair curling loosely around his neck, then held her still with the Force; it was as if she was held by air. He brought her lightsaber up to his face, caressed his jaw with the business end. "Visiting," he whispered. "Oh, is that all? Then why not let me up?" Siri returned. Obi-Wan laughed. "I'd forgotten your smart mouth," he said bluntly. "I've missed it. I've missed a lot of things." "I pity you." "No, you don't. You think it's all my fault I turned to the Dark Side, and that the Council forced you to take the mission of hunting me, poor little lost initiate," he said, and smiled. "You're right. I hope you know that. I figured it would either be you or Garen they would send, since you both – supposedly – know me well." "Congratulations," Siri said sarcastically, thinking, It's only been fifteen years. She tried to kick Obi-Wan off of her suddenly, hoping to take him by surprise. Trying to use the Force; damn it, he shouldn't have such skill. He had never even been a Padawan, much less a Knight, like her. She had to be able to do this. No one in this area of town would help her, assuming she was willing to scream for help, of course. "You figured it out. So what's with the visit?" "Because you're beautiful," Obi-Wan said, as if that were all the reason in the world. He looked up at nothing, pleased, like all was right with the world with the two of them in an obscure hotel room in a little dingy place off to the left of nowhere. "Who trained you?" Siri demanded. "They're dead," Obi-Wan said bluntly, looking down at her, blue eyes sharp with some silent sarcasm. "Have been for thousands of years, in some cases. Who knew a place called Yavin IV would have a Sith ghost? I guess I was lucky they left me for dead there, hmm?" He took a strand of her hair. "As golden fields, unsoiled," he murmured, twisting the blond strand beneath his fingers. "You’ve lost it, haven't you?" "Insanity is relative," Obi-Wan replied calmly. "Even I know that." Siri just exhaled. Decided not to answer. Obi-Wan was here and there in the conversation, never quite on the mark. There was no plan to this. "I like poetry," Obi-Wan said suddenly. "It's simple. Pure. I like that." "Because you aren't pure yourself?" Siri asked, and wondered if there was a pattern to this madness. "Because I like staining it," Obi-Wan said, with a sorrowful shake of his head. Another push, but the Force wall Obi-Wan had would not give. "There's still time for you to come back. Be healed." "Forever will it dominate your destiny," Obi-Wan stated in an absurd parody of Yoda, drawing out the words. "Don't lie to me. I don't like lies. The Jedi lie." "Obi-Wan . . ." "You know what's funny about the Temple, though? It would have beautiful; ships everywhere, missiles, Jedi dying, just crazy wonderful. I saw it. It won't happen that way now, it won't be as beautiful, because I won't have been there to teach. I'm . . . not there . . . " he corrected after a moment. Another smile. He stared at her intently, waiting for her reaction, like she had to have one before he could reply. "What do you mean?" Siri asked, alarmed. "He's found the child," Obi-Wan said wisely. "I don't know his name. But I know him. He's been found." He paused, then, "My mouth is full of sand It tastes so bland No blood in my soul No heat in your kiss I can feel nothing." "Was that a poem?" Siri asked, still struggling, Obi-Wan still happily ignoring it. "A bad one," Obi-Wan said with a shrug. "That will be him. He'll never escape his past, as I cannot escape mine." He did not blink, was unfazed in his stare. "The ocean never still, grace of life . . ." "Obi-Wan –" "I saw you here," he whispered. "I have no meaning. I am nothing in the vastness. I don’t want to be nothing." He paused, a still moment, an ode to a beginning. "I will be remembered." The pressure of the Force on her disappeared, and she scrambled back while simultaneously pushing Obi-Wan away. She heard him laugh, and saw his eyes glint in the darkness; everything else was matte, blended into the black of the night. He moved fast, too fast. Too fast for her. For a moment, she wasn't sure if the blood she felt was hers or his. He smiled, but he would have smiled regardless. The pain told the truth, and she exhaled. [finis] -----signature----- MS Word is designed by sadists with masochists in mind. - teh atty my recent Atton (KOTOR2) fic: http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/30335989
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Jedikma Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 10/14/04 5:36pm Subject: RE: nothing in the vastness (a dark, strange little Obi/Siri vignette)
	He killed her!!!! This is a strange little story. I can't decide if Obi-Wan is evil or mad...maybe both. Liked it though. -----signature----- Twice in a Lifetime 7/31 http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/16813029 A Quiet Afternoon http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/23305946 follow up vig to: A New Order http://boards.theforce.net/The_Saga/b10476/17525231
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dianethx Registered: Mar '02	Date Posted: 10/14/04 5:50pm Subject: RE: nothing in the vastness (a dark, strange little Obi/Siri vignette)
	That was very odd indeed. I loved that Obi was an initiate gone bad and Siri was there to try and bring him back to the Light but that was really odd. Liked it a lot. -----signature----- Betrayal - http://boards.theforce.net/s/b1/10935143 updated 11/2/09 jedidas3's Master Merlin - Diplomatic Immunity - http://boards.theforce.net/nswff/b10808/30459852
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Altaira Registered: Nov '02	Date Posted: 10/14/04 7:16pm Subject: RE: nothing in the vastness (a dark, strange little Obi/Siri vignette)
	I liked that and agree I’m not sure if he’s mad or not... he did start spouting out poetry. I’d say yes for all the mental flipping he was doing and I loved it. He did have a nice creepy feel to him, well placed smiles and thoughts. And great cover for it too, l liked the lights, dark water, swirls, sharpness and colorful ordered confusion... like him -----signature----- Is someone calling me? I hear my name! That icy breath, that whispers screams of pain!
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JediMaster_Jen Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 10/14/04 7:39pm Subject: RE: nothing in the vastness (a dark, strange little Obi/Siri vignette)
	OMG, he killed her? Wow. I'm speechless. -----signature----- "Qui tacet consentit"~~ (silence implies consent) NY Yankees!! 2009 World Champs!!!
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Vivid_Scripts Registered: Jan '04	Date Posted: 10/14/04 7:50pm Subject: RE: nothing in the vastness (a dark, strange little Obi/Siri vignette) - Date Edited: 10/14/04 7:51pm (1 edits total) Edited By: Vivid_Scripts
	Siri tries to save Obi-Wan from the darkness (or is it insanity?) and... fails. Obi vs Siri... is it old rivals duking it out or a lovers' brawl? That dynamic of the "Jedi Affair" has always been intresting to me and I think AFD was my attempt to explore it. Is this your attempt to open it up? I must say that I did enjoy it- the chaotic nature of this AU Obi-Wan is conveyed very well by his abrupt shifts from silent brooding to derranged smiles... "You know what's funny about the Temple, though? It would have beautiful; ships everywhere, missiles, Jedi dying, just crazy wonderful. I saw it. It won't happen that way now, it won't be as beautiful, because I won't have been there to teach. I'm . . . not there . . . " am I the only one to think this is an off hand reference to anakin skywalker/the chosen one? It's very dark to think that this AU Obi-Wan would realize that he may have been the one to (mis)train Anakin Skywalker which results in the ultimate doom of the Jedi. And the bad poetry... "He's found the child," Obi-Wan said wisely. "I don't know his name. But I know him. He's been found." He paused, then, "My mouth is full of sand It tastes so bland No blood in my soul No heat in your kiss I can feel nothing." "Was that a poem?" Siri asked, still struggling, Obi-Wan still happily ignoring it. "A bad one," Obi-Wan said with a shrug. "That will be him. He'll never escape his past, as I cannot escape mine." More discreet refrences to Anakin Skywalker? It seems that Obi-Wan's secret Prophecy here still predicts that Anakin falls, with or without Cannon Obi-Wan's (mis)guidance... "I saw you here," he whispered. "I have no meaning. I am nothing in the vastness. I don’t want to be nothing." He paused, a still moment, an ode to a beginning. "I will be remembered." Remembered? Remembered for what?! Killing a Jedi? Killing his (?)lover? Ah, yes, and I must echo Altaira in saying that the cover is nice and chaotic to suit the story. You're quite good at making covers, Obaona. Good piece. -----signature----- "trickbind"
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DreamOfKenobi Registered: Jul '04	Date Posted: 10/14/04 8:04pm Subject: RE: nothing in the vastness (a dark, strange little Obi/Siri vignette)
	Slightly weird, very well written. I loved it! Definitely dark, but haunting. Postable indeed! -----signature----- Counting the days 'til Episode III "What happens in the cave stays in the cave." "You're going to be the death of me..." We are the Vaders and we plan to take over the galaxy!
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PadawanKitara Registered: Dec '01	Date Posted: 10/14/04 8:40pm Subject: RE: nothing in the vastness (a dark, strange little Obi/Siri vignette)
	Odd, but well explained. After all, insanity is relative -----signature----- Courtier of the Royal Order of Shambling Dufi We are Dufi...Resistance is Futile! UCLA BRUINS
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KatarnLead Registered: Oct '02	Date Posted: 10/14/04 8:47pm Subject: RE: nothing in the vastness (a dark, strange little Obi/Siri vignette)
	o0ooer! Me likies! It's a great characterisation of an insanely evil Obi, and well written! -----signature----- I am a penguin... Oba won my pants!
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JediNemesis Registered: Mar '03	Date Posted: 10/15/04 8:05am Subject: RE: nothing in the vastness (a dark, strange little Obi/Siri vignette)
	Weird but wonderful -----signature----- BeTS Best Author '08 NEW Bad Dreams - http://boards.theforce.net/a/b1/29893091 Eleven Summers - http://boards.theforce.net/a/b1/29657584 Into The Shining Day - http://boards.theforce.net/a/b1/29224914
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VaderLVR64 Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 10/15/04 2:34pm Subject: RE: nothing in the vastness (a dark, strange little Obi/Siri vignette)
	Twisted and beautiful. Your exceptional skills as a storyteller shine in this one! -----signature----- R.I.P John, Alex, Jason, and Christian Never forgotten Soldiers' Angels http://soldiersangels.org/ 2114 soldiers waiting for someone to care
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Odd-Thomas Registered: Jul '04	Date Posted: 10/15/04 3:56pm Subject: RE: nothing in the vastness (a dark, strange little Obi/Siri vignette)
	Creepiness x2! You're right, a dark and strange little tale. Very well written and beautifully done. -----signature----- Peculiar things happen to me that don't happen to other people with regularity, if ever. The dead don't talk. I don't know why. Elvis is restless...
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VadersMiharu Registered: Jul '04	Date Posted: 10/15/04 3:59pm Subject: RE: nothing in the vastness (a dark, strange little Obi/Siri vignette)
	Whoa! That was weird.. dark... really surprising! (Especially the end.) But very well done! -----signature----- Laya: "Mom, Dad: our cat's name is going to be Obi ." Moi: "Aww that's great, honey! " My husband: "Isn't Obi that little green Jedi Master of Star Wars? " Laya: " rolls eyes NO! That's Yoda, Dad!"
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obaona Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 10/16/04 1:38am Subject: RE: nothing in the vastness (a dark, strange little Obi/Siri vignette) - Date Edited: 10/16/04 1:39am (1 edits total) Edited By: obaona
	Jedikma: So we are left to assume. Yes, probably both. Thank you. I'm glad you like it. I wanted Obi-Wan to kill Siri just to get your reaction. dianethx: Thanks. I agree with you, it is odd. Actually, it was inspired by bad poetry that I wrote (some of which is included in the story). Altaira: It was surprisingly fun to write him mentally flipping out. I was also careful in my usage of words, to add to that overall effect. Thank you. I'm glad you liked the cover art, too - it just sort of fell together, and yes, it is very representational of Obi-Wan, and Siri as well, I think. JediMaster_Jen: Thanks. It was fun. Vivid_Scripts: I indicate in the story that Obi-Wan left while still an initiate, so more old friends/rivals. I really liked your attempt at exploring the 'Jedi Affair', and while you could read this story that way, I did explore that before at least somewhat in my Forbidden trilogy/quatrology (whatever ). Yep, I really wanted the reader to get the idea of this guy being totally off his rocker. You're quite right, that is a reference to Anakin. If you think about it, Yoda said that the dark side was clouding everything - well, Obi-Wan is using the dark side, so the 'clouding' isn't occuring for him. In the story, he rather realizes he's 'out of the game', and he wants to be remembered regardless, make his mark on the galaxy. And yes, the poem refers to Anakin again. Yep, Anakin still falls - but does he return? Remembered for being a serial killer of Jedi. Siri is only the beginning - I say somewhere that this is 'an ode to a beginning'. Anyway. Thank you. I'm glad you liked the story and cover art. I had fun doing both. Thanks! DreamOfKenobi: Hehe. Thank you. Weird but well-written is good. PadawanKitara: Thank goodness, or I'd be in a mental institution. I'm glad it's explained well, weird or not I wanted it to make sense. Thank you. Burkie: Thanks. JediNemesis: Thanks. I knew it was weird, no matter what Gabri says. VaderLVR64: Thank you. I spent a lot of time choosing the right words, the right phrases. Odd-Thomas: I hadn't thought it creepy. Interesting. Thank you! VadersMiharu: Surprising in what way? Just weird, or him killing her? Thank you. [edit - post 13 ] -----signature----- MS Word is designed by sadists with masochists in mind. - teh atty my recent Atton (KOTOR2) fic: http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/30335989
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leia_naberrie Registered: Sep '02	Date Posted: 10/16/04 2:54am Subject: RE: nothing in the vastness (a dark, strange little Obi/Siri vignette) - Date Edited: 10/16/04 3:18am (1 edits total) Edited By: leia_naberrie
	So who died in the end? Poor mad Obi. Edit - just read your replies. So it was Siri that was killed and Obi is now a serial killer. uh oh. I'd love to see what's happening with Anakin through all this. [face_hopeful] -----signature----- http://io9.com/5111680/avatar-casting-makes-fans-see-white Upset about the casting for the Last Airbender movies? Write to Paramount about it. http://aang-aint-white.livejournal.com/1007.html
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Jedi_Bant Registered: Apr '04	Date Posted: 10/16/04 3:21am Subject: RE: nothing in the vastness (a dark, strange little Obi/Siri vignette)
	This is more like the stuff I am used to from you. Don't ever try to be someone else. -----signature----- $To the Powers That Be - the truth is only bitter in the mouths of the unrighteous$ OBHWF
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