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Senator_Leia73 Registered: Dec '03	Date Posted: 3/11/05 3:24pm Subject: RE: Legacy of Light (OT AU -- L/M, L/H, Ben, Vader) COMPLETED 3/9
	takes a tissue sniff that was so good! Oh my gosh just wonderful! You ended it on a perfect note! -----signature----- Yeah I'm back. After a year I'm back.
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CommanderK23 Registered: May '04	Date Posted: 3/11/05 8:00pm Subject: RE: Legacy of Light (OT AU -- L/M, L/H, Ben, Vader) COMPLETED 3/9
	I'm very impressed Knight_Aragorn Loved the story. And Vader telling Luke not to turn was indeed the twist. Looking forward to seeing more from you. -----signature----- "...You realize tomorrow will never come." "What?!" "Because by the time we get there it will be today." --------------------------------- www.stmaryoftheangles.org - when I'm not in a galaxy far, far away...
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Gabri_Jade Title: Fan Fiction Archive Editor Emeritus Registered: Nov '02	Date Posted: 3/12/05 1:59am Subject: RE: Legacy of Light (OT AU -- L/M, L/H, Ben, Vader) COMPLETED 3/9
	I think that I owe you many, many replies, my dear. I can't even remember where I last left a comment , so let's just start at the first place I'm sure I didn't, shall we? The way was clear until he reached the corridor outside the throne room. Red-cloaked guards had stepped forward to impede his path; Luke had swept his hand and sent them all sprawling. This would be under his own power. It was his last and only dignity – a dignity that was his due. He would not be dragged before Palpatine in chains. That's absolutely excellent. I love seeing Luke sweep people away with the Force like that (well, I do! ), and I love his insistence on that last dignity. Luke stood under the malevolence of their combined gazes. shivers! Luke said nothing. Vader’s gloved hand darted out, grabbed Luke’s tunic front, dragged him to his feet. “Answer me,” the Sith Lord demanded. “Was it Obi-Wan?” “I chose,” Luke said. “My choice.” Good for Luke. Vader turned away, and Luke said, “Such power you have, Darth Vader. Such mighty glory.” The depth of contempt in his voice surprised even him. He stepped toward his father. “Milked for your strength in the Force by a crippled old man. Dependant on him, even as he drains the last inklings of humanity from your soul. Dreaming your miserable dreams of glory, when both of you know you have not the courage to rise against him.” Luke paused, and said, “What a fate for the man who was once greatest of all the Jedi.” Whoo! That's just awesome beyond words. Truly fantastic, eloquent defiance from Luke. Vader’s head came up. Luke hated Palpatine, suddenly, for stating so blatantly his father’s weakness. It was the same thing that Luke himself had told Vader earlier, but to hear Palpatine – to whom Vader clung to so desperately – say the words with such denigrating smugness… Oh, I love this. It's like how siblings usually feel free to insult each other as much as they please, but anyone else who dares to say a word against their brother or sister is an instant enemy. Very true to life, and beautifully worded. “I need no one,” he said. “The galaxy can tremble before me, and me alone.” Hee hee! Dark Luke! is giddy So much… So much that it made him want to drop to his knees for the glory and the honour and the power and the pain, oh, the pain… He could show them all. All those who had told him he was too weak, too gullible, too foolish for greatness. For all the times he’d reached for warmth and received coldness, for all the times he’d been abandoned in silences and turning away. For all the hurt, the hurt that never left him. For Ben, betraying him by not being his father; for the Force, making him its tool. For Mara, in all her contempt and coldness. Luke half-closed his eyes, lost in the rapture of the dark. Wow. “You…. cannot….survive this, Luke,” Vader said. “You give too much, hold nothing back. The darkness will eat you alive. It will subvert you, violate you. Enslave… you.” The words came with a strange awkwardness, as though spoken in an unfamiliar language. “Luke, I…. do not wish that.” This is so awesome. And I love how this time around it's Vader who refuses to fight. He thought of the little boy from the cave: the joy in those blue eyes, lit only for him. How can I betray that? Luke wondered, and felt the glistening emotions collapse. What a perfect portrayal of Luke's essence, that he couldn't betray the purity even of a vision that he couldn't be sure would come true. There was a long pause on the other end. How she hated being reminded of Vader. “I see,” she said at last. “Well, I’m glad, Luke.” He smiled without humour to hear her tell so blatant a lie for the sake of his feelings. “Yes,” he said softly. grins Well, Leia tried. She really did. It took him three months to find her, amid the chaos of a dying Empire. bounces He did go to look for Mara! And he did find her! Sorry. Rabid L/M shipper moment. She turned to face him. After a long moment, she said, very softly, “It was a nice dream, if you didn’t look too closely.” She bowed her head then, and whispered, “Wasn’t it?” He touched her pale cheek. “It was,” he said. Perfect. He caught her warm fingers, gently lowered her hand. “Ah, Luke,” she whispered in sudden helpless despair. Her eyes rose, shimmering with a liquid vulnerability she could never speak. “How do we do this?” Vulnerable Mara is always tricky to pull off, but you accomplished it beautifully here. And the phrase 'liquid vulnerability' is haunting. She looked at him in silence for a long, long time. Then she smiled, and in her smile he saw the brilliant smile of a young boy with blue eyes and fine bright clothes. “Well,” she said, “Luke Skywalker. You had best walk me home, then.” grins like an idiot Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful. And overall (nope, not done yet ): Your writing style is truly masterful. You have such a subtle way of conveying things, and I adore it. Your characterization is dead on throughout. Even though Luke is so different here, being neither truly dark nor truly light, he's still undeniably Luke, and his motivations and emotions and thought processes are always believable and in tune with your interpretation of the character. Palpatine and Vader, you just get perfectly; I'm really impressed with how well you write Palpatine in particular. You get just the right balance of dignity and awareness of his own power and all the Sithly qualities that make him him, and you've got his speech patterns down pat. Mara is a character that even the profic writers have serious problems getting right, yet you managed it seemingly effortlessly - and as a huge Mara fan, I'm endlessly grateful for her balanced portrayal here. Luke's confrontations with Vader and Palpatine and his near turn were wonderfully believable and vivid. The love and loyalty that Luke and Leia managed to forge despite everything was touchingly portrayed. And the final post - well, that's just sheer perfection. This is definitely one of my favorite stories, and one I'll reread multiple times. Thanks for sharing it with us. And please put me on the PM list for that vignette, too. -----signature----- Evil Twin of LadyPadme This concept of "wuv" confuses and infuriates us! - Futurama All I can do is be me. Whoever that is. -Bob Dylan The Space Between Heartbeats - L/M AU vig http://boards.theforce.net/b/b1/28870280 !!11!1eleventy
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Knight_Aragorn Registered: Jun '03	Date Posted: 3/14/05 4:17pm Subject: RE: Legacy of Light (OT AU -- L/M, L/H, Ben, Vader) COMPLETED 3/9 - Date Edited: 3/14/05 5:01pm (1 edits total) Edited By: Knight_Aragorn
	The sequel is up, for anyone who’s missed it – Into Dusk. Onto replies… dianethx: Yup, Luke’s found peace. Thank you for reading so loyally! Thanks for reading the viggie as well! Jedi_BMK: Glad you liked it! Luke’s discharged his duty, finally… And that’s the good thing with open endings – they leave room for sequels. Not that I’m planning any beyond the vignette at this point, but the option’s always there. Thank you for reading! RebelMom: Yes, Luke and Mara have a journey ahead of them for sure. Lots of issues to work through on both sides. But if the inclination’s there… It’s been great to have you along! oldjedinurse: That was good timing! It’s good if you can work it that way – you don’t have to wait for updates. Thanks for taking the time to read! skywalker64089: Oh, speechless… Wasn’t sure if it was a good ‘gah’ or a bad one. Yes, Luke is darker here. Lots of pain and anger there to deal with, and now a healthy (or not) dose of shame and remorse in the mix too. Hopefully Mara can help him to heal. Having some idea of what it’s like, she’ll do so with aplomb, I think. And… five stars? Thank you! I kind of wrote it with re-reading in mind, so I hope you enjoy it the second time around. Thanks for reading! Webogirl: Thank you! Something a little different was my general intention with this story. Glad you enjoyed it. Sithspawn: That’s all right about missing some posts. DRL delays the best of us. Glad you enjoyed the story. And there is nothing wrong with your writing! I still can’t believe you’re only thirteen. You should see the rubbish I was writing when I was that age. shudders Thanks for reading! Jedithe skyisblue: I like open endings as well. Leaves more room for movement. Thank you for taking the time to read! Jadeling: I thought you’d like it. Thanks for reading! Katerina42: Well, that’s the best kind! RannOrgana: Why thank you! Glad you liked it so much. The vignette will have to do for the moment, but I’m not ruling out anything beyond that. Depends whether a plot bunny’s going to bite or not. RedGold: I can’t believe it’s over either! It seemed to go very quickly. Maybe I should have made the story longer. Thank you for reading! GreatOne: Oooh, nice point about the twins! You're absolutely right - I think Luke associates Leia too much with the Rebellion and all that he had to sacrifice there. I can’t really see him ever being completely at ease around her. Kind of sad, really. Anyway. Thank you for reading! Great to have you along. Apocalyptic_Jawa: Thanks, AJ! Glad you liked it. And the vignette’s up now… Hope you like that as well. JediFalcon: Thanks for reading, JediFalcon. Glad you liked the ending. Senator_Leia_73: I figured Luke deserved a break… finally. After everything he’s been through. Glad you enjoyed it. CommanderK23: Thank you! Well, I wanted to do something a little different with the throne room scene. I considered having Luke fully turn to the dark side (for about three seconds), but I didn’t think people would like that ending too much. This ending fits much better with the story, anyway. Thanks for reading! Gabri_Jade: Good to see you. And I’ll forgive you for the delayed replies – the extra-long one definitely helps. The ‘sweeping aside with the Force’ is always a nice gesture, isn’t it? And it’s very Luke in this story to insist on surrendering under his own power. Luke’s speech to his father had been a long time coming. It’s about time someone put it to Anakin like it is. Hehe. Admits to a slight Dark Luke partiality herself You should have seen the other version of the ending that I wrote. Now that was Dark Luke. And I think that no one was more surprised by Vader at his sudden reluctance to see Luke turn. In ROTJ, it was the prospect of Luke’s physical death that brought Anakin to the forefront. There are still elements of that here, but it was really the prospect of spiritual death to darkness that spurred Anakin in this version – something that Anakin knows all about and that is far worse than the physical end. The epilogue is probably my favourite part. I definitely had to fight the temptation to have them do something totally out of character there. And I’m glad you liked my Mara. I agree – she’s a tricky character to write. Here she’s very, very conflicted, and has been for a long time. But she was nearing the end of that, and all Luke had to do was choose his words carefully… Mara probably understands him best of anyone, given that she knows what it is to be manipulated by someone who cares for you. I have no idea what to say to that final paragraph. I’m very glad you like my writing so much. I had a great time writing this, so it’s wonderful to think that a few other people got some enjoyment from the story as well. I love books/stories/whatever that you can read a few times and still pull new meanings out, and that’s what I was kind of aiming for in this story. Probably drove everyone mad with the slowness, but anyway… I’m glad you liked all the characterisations. Mara’s one of my favourite characters too. She’s such an interesting person with so many contradictions and conflicts, and she really was a central part of Luke’s story, even though she had hardly any ‘screen time’ as such. Thank you so much for such a wonderfully comprehensive reply. It’s been great to have you reading. Hope you enjoy re-reading the story! -----signature----- Time is an illusion. Lunchtime doubly so. Pieces of Air (ESB short story, complete) - http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/27283200/p1
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kyp_durron_fan_2009 Registered: Oct '04	Date Posted: 3/16/05 8:01am Subject: RE: Legacy of Light (OT AU -- L/M, L/H, Ben, Vader) COMPETED 3/9 -- Replies 3/14
	Wooot!!! Sweet last 2 posts, Aragorn! Only sadness is that I just read the epilogue... -----signature----- Currently Reading: Droids Omnibus and Night of the Wolves
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Knight_Aragorn Registered: Jun '03	Date Posted: 3/17/05 7:32pm Subject: RE: Legacy of Light (OT AU -- L/M, L/H, Ben, Vader) COMPETED 3/9 -- Replies 3/14
	kyp_durron_fan: Thank you! Glad you enjoyed reading them. There's also a sequel viggie to check out if you want to... -----signature----- Time is an illusion. Lunchtime doubly so. Pieces of Air (ESB short story, complete) - http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/27283200/p1
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