Author Topic: He Will Cry (future tense vignette - Luke, Padmé)
Jedi-2B  3751 posts
Registered: Nov '00
42320_Luke Skywalker
Date Posted: 3/25/05 5:20am Subject: RE: He Will Cry (future tense vignette - Luke, Padmé)
Sad and sweet. Beautiful job, oba.

 

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ShrunkenJedi  6403 posts
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Registered: Apr '03
41735_Fan Fiction
Date Posted: 3/25/05 8:52am Subject: RE: He Will Cry (future tense vignette - Luke, Padmé)
I like this! Interesting idea about an unknown seeress... and the bit at the end about Padme knowing that both Anakin and Luke's lives will be full of hurt, and the father will hurt the son!

Ah... sensitive Luke! Wouldn't be him if he didn't care so much... wink

 

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obaona  4725 posts
Registered: Jun '02
24174_Padme
Date Posted: 3/25/05 5:26pm Subject: RE: He Will Cry (future tense vignette - Luke, Padmé)
JediMindTrick000: Thanks. grin Eerie and foreboding is quite the compliment! wink

LizBennet: Thanks. grin I've always thought that Luke was probably the only one who cared that Vader died, in the sense of losing a person, not power or advantages. *shrugs* tongue

I'm glad you liked this, the future tense was definitely tricky at times. tongue And hey! Always nice to see someone delurk - I'm pleased to have you. hugs

bobilll: What can I say? I love Luke. batting But yeah, I had planned from the beginning that it was actually this woman speaking to Padme. tongue Hehe. tongue Thank you! rose

PadawanEmily: Thanks. blush

Jedi-2B: Thank you. hugs

ShrunkenJedi: Thanks. grin But the seeress, you know, also gives Padme hope - she says that Luke will cry, but that he'll have good moments too, and that at the end, he'll die well. Some comfort, anyway. wink And aye, I agree with you about Luke. tongue

 

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Gina  3879 posts
Registered: Jun '03
20886_The Final Duel
Date Posted: 3/26/05 5:22am Subject: RE: He Will Cry (future tense vignette - Luke, Padmé)
This one gave me chills at the end, obaona. It was eerie, the idea that an unknown woman was revealing all this to Padme before Luke was even born. It had to be unsettling for Padme as well. wink I especially love the last line.

Brilliant as always!

 

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obaona  4725 posts
Registered: Jun '02
24174_Padme
Date Posted: 3/27/05 1:11pm Subject: RE: He Will Cry (future tense vignette - Luke, Padmé)
Gina: Hehe, thanks! grin devil I'm sure it would be very unsettling, even if Padme didn't totally believe what she said. I'd be creeped out. tongue Thank you, again. blush




And cover art. happy

 

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ThePariah  2182 posts
Registered: Jan '03
40064_Luke Skywalker
Date Posted: 3/27/05 1:47pm Subject: RE: He Will Cry (future tense vignette - Luke, Padmé)
O prettyness! Angstyness! Lukieness! *sighs wistfully* love

*fangirls Oba* hugs kiss rose

 

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Healer_Leona  36812 posts
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8059_Qui-Gon Jinn
Date Posted: 3/27/05 3:48pm Subject: RE: He Will Cry (future tense vignette - Luke, Padmé)
Wow, Luke's life laid all out before us.

When he loses himself to the Dark, he’ll cry in remorse. Whaaa??? Granted I haven't read EU but when did this happen? And this.. He will cry when his son is born.

He’ll cry when he dies.
I'm not sure I want to know.


You've written a rich and detailed piece.

 

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Leia  338 posts
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22995_Carrie Fisher
Date Posted: 3/30/05 8:32pm Subject: RE: He Will Cry (future tense vignette - Luke, Padmé)
I said I'd write something happy next.

Well, yeah, but no one actually believed you. tongue

Interesting piece, oba. Of course, I'm a big fan of unusual structures, POVs, tenses, etc., so I much appreciated this. I don't see that kind of stuff in SW fic all that often, sadly. sad

He will cry.

Best line of the whole thing. tongue Just playin', but it does really grab me for some reason.

And he will cry ... because now he can leave, and never look back.

Yowch. (Or youch. Is there really a proper spelling for that? thinking ) Interesting with the dots and the slightly...just...yeah. *shrugs* You know what I mean. wink

because he didn’t know that adventure would be like that.

Spectacular! He really didn't know, back when he was just that boy on the farm. I used to think that way when I was little, too. Oh, so grand, and all that, ya know? But it isn't. It really, really isn't. "Some wars are necessary; some wars are just. No war is good."

And all will be as it will be.

I enjoyed this as well.

Great fic, oba. rose

 

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Miana Kenobi  26123 posts
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6130_Obi-Wan Kenobi
Date Posted: 3/30/05 11:39pm Subject: RE: He Will Cry (future tense vignette - Luke, Padmé)
Awww! Lovely little bit, Oba darling! grin

 

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KrystalBlaze  6050 posts
Registered: Aug '02
6008_Obi-Wan Kenobi
Date Posted: 4/1/05 11:07am Subject: RE: He Will Cry (future tense vignette - Luke, Padmé)
cry

Oba, I hate you. I'm finally able to sneak back in for a moment, and you give me this? You make me cry?

When he loses himself to the Dark...

That struck me deep for some reason I can't explain.

Great job, dearest. grin

-Krystal

 

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Jaina-Solo-1  782 posts
Registered: Jan '05
7891_Natalie Portman
Date Posted: 4/1/05 11:30am Subject: RE: He Will Cry (future tense vignette - Luke, Padmé)
Lovely. happy

 

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obaona  4725 posts
Registered: Jun '02
24174_Padme
Date Posted: 4/1/05 6:30pm Subject: RE: He Will Cry (future tense vignette - Luke, Padmé)
ThePariah: *giggles* Er, thank you. grin

Healer_Leona: Eh, it happened in a comic, actually. Most people ignore it. As a friend put it, good fanfiction, horrible canon. tongue And Luke hasn't died in the EU - yet. mischief Thank you! grin

Leia: LMAO. blush Am I really that bad?

I like to try new things. wink And I don't like being told I can't do something because good stories are only in a set structure (always write in perfect past my ... butt).

I didn't just want to cover Luke's life, I wanted to cover a specific kind of reoccuring event - crying. I kept thinking, what would a mother ask? What would Padme ask? Will my child know pain? And the answer is most definitely yes. tongue

Nice quote. wink Thank you for reading. hugs

Miana Kenobi: Thanks! grin

KrystalBlaze: shock blush hugs At least I didn't plan it! I'm not entirely evil. tongue Thank you. hugs

Jaina-Solo-1: Thank you. happy

 

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