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mikanah Registered: Jun '05	Date Posted: 9/26/05 7:09am Subject: RE: Going Back to Yesterday: ROTS AU, V/P, Obi, Bail, Chapter 7! (25/09)
	OMgoodness ~~I love your writing style^~ I just found this Story today jumps up and down Keep up with the great work!~ Cheers~ P.S can you send me the unedited version + add me to your PM list!~thanksloads~~~~~~~~~ -----signature----- Jesus Christ is my Master and Lord!
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Anakin_Heartbreaker Registered: Sep '04	Date Posted: 9/26/05 9:50am Subject: RE: Going Back to Yesterday: ROTS AU, V/P, Obi, Bail, Chapter 7! (25/09)
	Thanks for the PM version!!!!! I loved it.
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Darth Padme Registered: Oct '99	Date Posted: 9/26/05 11:55am Subject: RE: Going Back to Yesterday: ROTS AU, V/P, Obi, Bail, Chapter 7! (25/09)
	Glad to see this updated! Could you add me to your PM list, pretty please? Looking forward to more soon!
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Kitten Registered: Jun '05	Date Posted: 9/26/05 8:24pm Subject: RE: Going Back to Yesterday: ROTS AU, V/P, Obi, Bail, Chapter 7! (25/09)
	Man, Vader seems to swing back in forth from being gentle to wanting to hurt her, or so he says. The shift in his thoughts make him unpredictable and even more scary. Sometimes I think he just might be saying these evil things to convince himself he can hates her, though he knows its not true. I feel so bad for Padme she is just an innocent victim in all this. I wonder if Vader will ever discover the truth. After all, Padme didn't betray him, it was Obi wan who stowed away on her ship. I hope that someone can save her from Vader's wrath. I am really starting to hate Vader more and more with each passing chapter he appears in, mainly because of the evil thoughts he has against Padme, who still loves him dearly.
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mixza Registered: Jan '04	Date Posted: 9/26/05 8:51pm Subject: RE: Going Back to Yesterday: ROTS AU, V/P, Obi, Bail, Chapter 7! (25/09)
	The wait was well worth it. Till he decides to kill her, in other words. But that will be quite a long time in coming. He has many ways to amuse himself with her, now. I hope Padme can turn him back before he decides to kill her. Also, I'd love to read the PM version. Thanks. -----signature----- "Does that mean there is a woman to be discovered in even Master Obi-Wan's past? Tall, I imagine, and dark-haired. Pathetically desperate to have anyone at all, THAT much goes without saying..." - Anakin Skywalker, Yoda: Dark Rendezvous
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Padlei Registered: Mar '03	Date Posted: 9/27/05 6:39am Subject: RE: Going Back to Yesterday: ROTS AU, V/P, Obi, Bail, Chapter 7! (25/09)
	Wow... Great chapter once again. Glad to see you didn't kill Padmé nastily... I was terrified for Padmé during the whole thing and at the same time, both hating and feeling sorry for AnaVader. I'm not afraid to die. She clings to the doors smooth surface, using it to support herself, cowering in fear, wet from sweat, shaking with trepidation. She doesn't dare turn to look at the figure with his back towards her. She doesn't dare do anything, but try to stand and try to regain face. That's my girl. I always loved her strength and she doesn't disappoint. There is no mistaking the black cloak he took to wearing during the wars. There is no mistaking the curls that fall to brush his shoulders, radiation bleached to a golden color. She would know him anywhere. He's hers. He's always been hers. Anakin. Aww... Anakin is here. Anakin will protect her. Anakin will save her. Anakin loves her. You evil... Without thinking he uses the Force to hurry and catch her before she falls. And it is there, cradling her in his arms that he stays, the thoughts tumbling together in his mind. His first reflex is to keep her from falling and he cradles her in his hands and all... For he has erased his love, erased his past, erased himself. He once loved her, long ago, when he was a man. But now he is only the darkness. And yet he cradles her in his arms. Does this mean his humanity still lives within him? Yes, Anakin, just wake up... grumbles She settles herself into his arms, seeking out his warmth. His presence has always soothed her and now it is no different. His tunics are rough, but she ignores the coarseness and focuses on the body inside the tunics. If she concentrates hard enough, she believes she can hear his heart beat- for her. Too cute... And he lets her of course. Holding her in his arms again, it is very hard to hate her. He hates the weakness it brings out in him. You loved her once. You still do. "No!" He roars, springing up. Yes... I'm a sucker for conflict... "Silas Roarke, sir." An over-eager Stormtrooper steps forwards and supplies the info- and then lands dead on the floor once Vader has finished choking him. "I asked him, you fool." Turning with disgust from the body, he again faces the man. "Now, your name." Gotta love Vader, choking the poor stormtrooper... Gotta love Padmé's friend too. He certainly has courage. And it is with absolute confusion of the others that the solemn Lord of the Sith throws back his head- and laughs. A bellowing laugh, deep and loud, for all to hear. A laugh that does not fit the Sith Lord at all. He scared me right there, I've got to admit. "Code 912, Paragraph A3 is what many call the property law, yet it really isn't. In it, it claims that a woman belongs to her father or eldest brother until she marries- in which case she belongs to the husband. There is no divorce or annulment, unless both parties wish for it. The woman becomes no more than a piece of property, hence the name of the law." WTH is this about? At first I was shocked to see something like this in the GFFA and then I remembered that this was the Empire. Damn Palps for his stupid laws... "Because I am her husband." And with those words, he bows his head down and slowly, deliberately runs his lips over hers in a searing kiss. Hehe, almost as good as "No, I am your father." I never expected Vader to do this but it completely makes sense. Now he can start on his last phase of his plan. Taking over the Empire for himself- and for her. Always, for her. Except that you hate her. It's almost like he forgot he was supposed to hate her along the way. And there he swears to never let her take control of him ever again. He will be her new master, her husband. She will be his servant, his wife and all it entails. He will rule her. And so he shall keep her alive. Wow. Creepy. And yet in character for Vader. He cannot show weakness in front of her. He will not show weakness in front of her. And the next minute you make me feel sorry for him. He wants to destroy her piece by piece. He wants to watch her die a bit every day, until all he has left to do is take the breath away from her. He wants her to be tormented- just as she has tormented him. No one causes Lord Vader displeasure and lives. And back to creepy... And then he does something very stupid. He presses his lips against hers. The transformation is instant. Instead of staying the limp doll, she awakens in his arms, molding her lips to his. Heh, I like my Vader better when he does stupid things then... And I like how he used to dream about killing her as he kissed her in the previous chapter and yet here his kiss awakens her. "We will not do this, Padmé," he orders, finally releasing her. She stares at him defiantly for a moment- or at least as defiantly as she can look, with the state she is in. Then, deliberately, she takes a step towards him, so they are flush up against one another. He freezes. Padmé sure seems to know what she wants and I love how he backs away from her, terrified that she can touch him, reach him. She owns him completely and he doesn't even want to admit it. I never thought they would be all over each other as soon as they'd meet but I'm not complaining. It feels so...right, holding her in his arms. She is his and he's never going to let her go now. He has waited so long for this and now that he has her, she will forever be his. Till death do us part. Till he decides to kill her, in other words. But that will be quite a long time in coming. He has many ways to amuse himself with her, now. He smirks. He will have much fun with her now. slaps AnaVader Argh. There, creeps me out all over again. Poor Padmé... -----signature----- 1-ROTS, 2-AOTC, 3-ROTJ/ESB/ANH, 6-TPM Jack: "Rose, you are worth fighting for. (kisses her) Wish I'd never met you Doctor. I was much better off as a coward. (kisses him) (to both:) See you in hell." -Doctor Who- Brazil world champions in 2010.
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Nathalia Registered: Jun '05	Date Posted: 9/28/05 3:46pm Subject: RE: Going Back to Yesterday: ROTS AU, V/P, Obi, Bail, Chapter 7! (25/09)
	Wow. I couldn't help but bit my fingers along the way. That was fantastic and beyond what I expected! I loved this chapter and this is so far my favorite! Excellent job! When he kissed her the very first time to show he owned her, I loved it! Just the kind of dark I like. To tell you the truth, I wouldn't mind if it ended dark- with Anakin not coming back to the light and him and Padme ruling the Galaxy, hehe I'm strange that way, I guess. Although I must admit, I like dark fics, such as this, and finding a really great one, well-written, and having it go the way I'd like is rare. Then again, I also like happy endings. So which ever you go, I guess I wouldn't mind too much. As long as Anakin and/or Padme don't die. Please, can you send me a PM of the unedited verson of this? I'd appreciate it.
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Venus_Star2-com Registered: May '05	Date Posted: 9/28/05 5:37pm Subject: RE: Going Back to Yesterday: ROTS AU, V/P, Obi, Bail, Chapter 7! (25/09)
	JediMasterRev posted: Glad to see the update. So now they are back together, it looks as if their problems are about to begin. Seems Anakin/Vader is having personality issues and Padme is in denial of what her husband has become. I've heard of loving someone so much it hurts, but to want to kill them...Anakin is definitely having some issues. It will be interesting to see whether he continues to want to control her or will his true feelings for her prevail. Great post. Can't wait for more! I think his issues stem from his life as a slave but has been manipulated out of perportion by the dark side...although i smiled when parts of Anakin shone through "I am her husband"although it was vader talking it was part anakin too as he too wanted to tell the world that she was his wife... i am worried as to what kinda of horror Vader will put her though but so far their romance and effect on each other is explosive....as loved his thoughts about her as she was undressing him--torn between his feelings..... greta post.....i can't wait for more...please please please...more vader/anakin/padmaé parts rachel
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PeriwinklSummer Registered: May '04	Date Posted: 10/2/05 1:38am Subject: RE: Going Back to Yesterday: ROTS AU, V/P, Obi, Bail, Chapter 7! (25/09)
	Wow. I'm loving it. Bail always cracks me up, and it's such a shock (in a good way) to go from that to the twisted insanity that is A/P just now. I'd be more coherent if it wasn't 4:30 AM. May I please have the PM version of that last chapter? -----signature----- "...and those novels in which darkly handsome men pretend not to be interested in spirited green-eyed heroines until the last twenty pages, when they take them in their arms and all kinds of stuff happens." - Anna Quindlen
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Dally Registered: Apr '01	Date Posted: 10/5/05 3:01pm Subject: RE: Going Back to Yesterday: ROTS AU, V/P, Obi, Bail, Chapter 7! (25/09)
	This is an amazing, intense story. It's creepy, spooky, sad, tormented and sexy -- everything I love about A/P's relationship! :-)
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Mirrorstar Registered: Jun '05	Date Posted: 10/11/05 7:05am Subject: RE: Going Back to Yesterday: ROTS AU, V/P, Obi, Bail, Chapter 7! (25/09)
	Oh! Amazing! Brava! I'm so glad to see another post. I wasn't even expecting it, Alethia. I love this one. I almost think that this one was better than your last post. But I am really worried about Padme now. Please let her be all right. And don't let Vader hurt her.
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Gina Registered: Jun '03	Date Posted: 10/11/05 8:02am Subject: RE: Going Back to Yesterday: ROTS AU, V/P, Obi, Bail, Chapter 7! (25/09)
	shivers Yikes! Vader was deliciously eerie in this post. He refuses to admit that he is tormented by his inner conflict. I'm worried for Padme, but I'm also worried for Bail and Obi-Wan when they try to find her. -----signature----- A long time ago in a house far away, there was a mother who was strong in the ways of the Force. She "forced" her sons to clean their room, she "forced" her sons to behave. - Part of a story written by my 9 yr. old sons I found while cleaning their desks
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Bu-sanda Registered: Sep '05	Date Posted: 10/12/05 11:14am Subject: RE: Going Back to Yesterday: ROTS AU, V/P, Obi, Bail, Chapter 7! (25/09)
	Hello. My username is Bu-sanda. And, . . . . I'm a lurker. There, that was easy. I guess I'm well on my way to recovery now. I have to admit that the promise of an unedited version of the last chapter did cause me to un-lurk. Could you send it to me, please? And, since I'm here, I just have to tell you what a completely riveting story you've created. I just found it yesterday, read the whole thing through last night, and began re-reading parts of it today. I can't believe I missed this story up until now. I've got your "Shattered Mirror" on my notification list, but somehow I never looked at this one until yesterday afternoon. I've been toying with alternate endings to ROTS in my head since I saw the movie for the first time, and you seem to echo many of the same thoughts that I've had. I think that's what struck me about your other story, "Shattered Mirror" -- I too had been working through what would have happened if Obi-wan hadn't been able to use Padme the way that he did by stirring her up and hitching the ride to Mustafar. It's the same with this gem of a story. It simply didn't make any sense to me, given what we know about Padme, that she would just roll over and die as easily as she does in the film. You've touched a chord with me too because I particularly like to imagine a physically-healthy Vader (good looks intact), at the pinnacle of his Force-powers, marauding around the galaxy. For me, it's tantalizing having him whole (with the exception of the cool, gold arm of course), still handsome, and so remorselessly bad. In my humble opinion, it is also much scarier. I know that a little while ago, one of the questions on the Prequel Trilogy discussion board was something like: Who would you least like to meet in a dark alley? Immediately, I thought the hooded Vader with yellow, glowing, Sith eyes. There is something absolutely terrifying about somebody who looks that good, has such a sexy voice, and who will wring your neck without batting an eyelash. (I just re-read all this. See, this is what you get when you encourage the lurkers to join in.) All I can ask in regards to this story is please don't let Vader go all soft and mushy too quickly -- as unsettling as he is, I just love a powerful, evil Vader. Keep in mind, that despite her protestations on Mustafar, Padme had a good idea what she was getting into and what "path" she was going down when she agreed to marry Anakin. Besides, I've always believed, as Count Dooku concludes in the ROTS novel, that Anakin was probably part Sith long before he pledges himself to Sidious. BTW: I love Phantom -- saw the play many times. -----signature----- "Suddenly he smelled something--flared his nostrils, sniffed once more. Wildflowers, that was what it was. Just blooming; it must be spring." ROTJ
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laurethiel1138 Registered: Feb '03	Date Posted: 10/12/05 6:50pm Subject: RE: Going Back to Yesterday: ROTS AU, V/P, Obi, Bail, Chapter 7! (25/09)
	Wow! I just sat through all this read, and it's 3:45 AM right now. Splendid story, Alethia! I really, really love the way you write your characters. And Vader! Oh, my! He's on a par with the Phantom right now. Speaking of Phantom, I somewhat see Padmé and Ani doing a reprise of this stanza: "In all your fantasies, you always knew "That man and mystery (Were both in you) "And in this labyrhinth, where hight is blind "The Phantom of the Opera is there (here) inside your (my) mind!" MTFBWY, Lauré -----signature----- "You don't fall in love, you rise up to it." - Padawan Lunetta's 'Shadows' Lioness of Kele-en's Serenity-2 crew Elf of TKeira_Lea's Wraith Squadron A Jedi's Return, Vader/Ani ROTJ short story (link in bio)
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nabooromance Registered: Jun '05	Date Posted: 10/15/05 5:44pm Subject: RE: Going Back to Yesterday: ROTS AU, V/P, Obi, Bail, Chapter 7! (25/09)
	Been away, sorry it has taken me so long to reply. I have no words to describe the emotions you sent reeling. It was the perfect meeting for the two. Hauntingly sad and tormentingly sensual. The physical shock that they both had was completely fiiting. You wrote the mental anguish beautifully. Very skilled piece of writing. Looking forward to the next chapter. Bri -----signature----- I am haunted by the kiss you should have never given me. My heart is beating, hoping that kiss won't become a scar. You are in my very soul, tormenting me. What can I do? I will do anything you ask.
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