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Miana Kenobi Title: Pacific RSA & NSWFF Mod On Limited Time Registered: Apr '00	Date Posted: 7/26/05 11:37am Subject: RE: One Prick to Bleed - an AU beginning in AotC (Obi, Ani, Sabe, Yoda) - 7/26
	Cats hiss Ouch... Great job, babe! Ooooh... that explains a lot! -----signature----- President of San Diego FanForce He tini nga whetu e ngaro I te kapua iti. Dyslexics of the world, UNTIE!
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Yui-chan Registered: Jun '01	Date Posted: 7/26/05 2:14pm Subject: RE: One Prick to Bleed - an AU beginning in AotC (Obi, Ani, Sabe, Yoda) - 7/26
	Oh man, this is going to sound like lit crit, but I love your deconstruction of Amidala--how she puts away half of herself, the way you described that. And the shouting match! Very, uh, energetic! I loved it. Poor Sabé, though! hurries along to catch up with her favorite, albeit dismissed, handmaiden -----signature----- 4 years of S/O. <3 It must be love. AT THE END OF ALL THINGS - http://boards.theforce.net/message.asp?topic=20031707 Post Episode 3 - Featuring an outlaw Sabe, Obi-wan, and Sabewan!
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VaderLVR64 Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 7/26/05 2:17pm Subject: RE: One Prick to Bleed - an AU beginning in AotC (Obi, Ani, Sabe, Yoda) - 7/26
	Wonderful characterization of Amidala! Thank you so much for putting me on your PM list as I requested. It makes it easy to know when you've updated this wonderful fic! -----signature----- R.I.P John, Alex, Jason, and Christian Never forgotten Soldiers' Angels http://soldiersangels.org/ 2114 soldiers waiting for someone to care
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Amidolee Registered: Jan '00	Date Posted: 7/26/05 2:27pm Subject: RE: One Prick to Bleed - an AU beginning in AotC (Obi, Ani, Sabe, Yoda) - 7/26
	Whew! wipes brow I'm glad you guys enjoyed/approved of the post. I was worried about the reactions to Amidala. To me, she seemed to detract a bit as the prequels went on, like she really didn't have a grip on herself. Energetic? That's funny! -----signature----- Mar. 1 - One Prick to Bleed: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/20423905/p1 "You're like a walking encyclopedia of weirdness." Dean to Sam in Roadkill.
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AngelQueen Registered: Mar '01	Date Posted: 7/26/05 2:53pm Subject: RE: One Prick to Bleed - an AU beginning in AotC (Obi, Ani, Sabe, Yoda) - 7/26
	jaw hits the floor Holy Banthas on a stick... taht was some argument! Amidolee, you totally wowed me with this flashback! I almost felt as if I was in the room, watching Amidala and Sabé go at one another! Talk about tempers! Looking at the previous parts of the story in the context of this post, I begin to think that a part of Sabé is still in that room, calling for Amidala. As she said, her duty is everything to her and she is comfortable with that. But her bitter sundering from the Queen has left her a little off-center, I think. I wonder if Amidala still thinks about what happened that day and looks back with regret... Again, excellent post! AQ -----signature----- "Anakin, my allegiance is to the Republic, to democracy!" "If you're not with me, then you're my enemy." "Only a Sith deals in absolutes. I will do what I must." "You will try." Obi-Wan and Anakin
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bobilll Registered: Aug '02	Date Posted: 7/26/05 7:25pm Subject: RE: One Prick to Bleed - an AU beginning in AotC (Obi, Ani, Sabe, Yoda) - 7/26 - Date Edited: 7/27/05 6:26pm (4 edits total) Edited By: bobilll
	Wow! At first I thought it was going to be some brawl between two women that broke them apart... but that was anything but superfluous! I've always thought of Sabe and Padme as inseperatable best friends, but you really put them in a new perspective! Being best friends for so long... living and spending all that time together... Those two remind me of my roommate... -----signature----- You'll have to buy him a sweater.
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Senator_Lorena Registered: Oct '03	Date Posted: 7/27/05 11:00am Subject: RE: One Prick to Bleed - an AU beginning in AotC (Obi, Ani, Sabe, Yoda) - 7/26
	Bravo! I like how Sabe was able to focus on Amidala's problem of not taking care of her own needs. ~SL~ -----signature----- "Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll land among the stars. ~ Less Brown "For God did not send his Son into the world to condemn the world, but to save the world through him." ~ John 3:17 NIV
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MasterSareBabe Registered: Dec '04	Date Posted: 7/29/05 5:37am Subject: RE: One Prick to Bleed - an AU beginning in AotC (Obi, Ani, Sabe, Yoda) - 7/26
	Wow. Oh wow. Excellent update. Wow. So that's why Sabe didn't go to Coruscant with Padme. Somehow you fit this argument in very well with Padme's personality. Wow. Oh wow.
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Amidolee Registered: Jan '00	Date Posted: 7/29/05 7:49pm Subject: RE: One Prick to Bleed - an AU beginning in AotC (Obi, Ani, Sabe, Yoda) - 7/26
	Hi, everyone! Thank you so much for your comments! Right now they're something really wonderful to read, and I wish I had another post for you. But I'm swollen up like a basketball, the painkillers are not staying in my stomach, and I can't really open my mouth. So, haven't been up to writing much. I'm crossing my fingers that tomorrow will be better and I can get something to you by Sunday or Monday. Cheers, Ami -----signature----- Mar. 1 - One Prick to Bleed: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/20423905/p1 "You're like a walking encyclopedia of weirdness." Dean to Sam in Roadkill.
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Yui-chan Registered: Jun '01	Date Posted: 7/30/05 6:13am Subject: RE: One Prick to Bleed - an AU beginning in AotC (Obi, Ani, Sabe, Yoda) - 7/26
	Hope you feel better soon. -----signature----- 4 years of S/O. <3 It must be love. AT THE END OF ALL THINGS - http://boards.theforce.net/message.asp?topic=20031707 Post Episode 3 - Featuring an outlaw Sabe, Obi-wan, and Sabewan!
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Senator_Lorena Registered: Oct '03	Date Posted: 8/1/05 8:01am Subject: RE: One Prick to Bleed - an AU beginning in AotC (Obi, Ani, Sabe, Yoda) - 7/26
	Ditto! -----signature----- "Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll land among the stars. ~ Less Brown "For God did not send his Son into the world to condemn the world, but to save the world through him." ~ John 3:17 NIV
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Amidolee Registered: Jan '00	Date Posted: 8/1/05 10:36am Subject: RE: One Prick to Bleed - an AU beginning in AotC (Obi, Ani, Sabe, Yoda) - 7/26
	Aw, thanks! I think I'm finally past vomiting, passing out, and panick attacks. Vicodin and Darva-something do not work for me. I just got back from another round at the dental dude's, and I've got dry sockets. They packed this sticky medicinal gauze into my little holes, which hurt like, well, you know. I scared the intern washing pointy things. Feeling a bit better, especially because mum took me on a quick shopping trip that included Dairy Queen. Spirits are up. I did write most of yesterday. A lot. And while it wasn't bad, I felt like the flashbacks were purposeless. So, hopefully before I got back to the Grocery Store of Doom, I think I'm going to lengthen the non-flashback portion and maybe - big maybe - have something by tonight. If not, tomorrow. Because my new Tatooine boots and brown jacket are glorious and I'm sorry, but shopping is truly medicinal. ::hugs everyone and new shallow merchandise:: Cheers, Amidolee -----signature----- Mar. 1 - One Prick to Bleed: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/20423905/p1 "You're like a walking encyclopedia of weirdness." Dean to Sam in Roadkill.
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Amidolee Registered: Jan '00	Date Posted: 8/1/05 11:50am Subject: RE: One Prick to Bleed - an AU beginning in AotC (Obi, Ani, Sabe, Yoda) - 8/1
	Ok, I lied. I'm going to post some of what I wrote yesterday up now. I didn't really want to change the 'present' portion, but I didn't want to give you so little. The flashback part is half of what I had, and it has its purposes, if just for my own mind. The part not here is what I wanted to get in, but I think my inability to click right with it at the time might mean it's just not supposed to be there yet. Tho, I want it in there, because I need some ground for later on when Obi comes into the story The gondola moved swiftly up the River Lau-Allhana, a mere phantom in the night fog. The soft, faint hum of its engines was muffled by the thick, intense misty blanket shrouding the deep, dark water and shadowed banks. Sabé could not see past the prow, the ghostly night was so thick. It brushed like spectral curtains against her face, dampening her skin and clothes as she sped over the water. The gondola’s navicomputer glowed green, illuminating the controls and allowing her to see the whispery arms caressing the passing boat. Without the computer, night passage up River Lau-Allhana would be next to impossible, but Sabé knew she could have done it. Not at this speed, of course, but she would not have gotten lost or hung on the rocks. The Force was singing to her. She sat deep in her seat, eyes half-closed, a drenching lull breezing over as the gondola traveled smoothly just above the water. The Force was everywhere, even in this beautiful but treacherous fog. She was in passive meditation, her thoughts and memories drifting with this serene flow of the mountains, air, and water. It did not matter that she was on Naboo, or that she was traveling upriver on a death mission. She was here, in the Force, and could be anywhere. She felt the scintillating thrill of a night long ago. Twelve years old and full of mischief and daring, she and Saché pushed a primitive canoe out into the fog. Cold and shivering from fright and thrill, they had drifted into the current, unable to distinguish direction, with only the river to decide their fate. Yet Sabé had guided them past rocks and bars to the next village and the next . . . Good instincts, she had thought then . . . The Force, she knew now. The navicomputer beeped softly, opening Sabé’s eyes fully. A fork in the river was approaching. She adjusted the controls to take her east into the Lake Country. Soon the river would become long, wide lakes cutting swaths of watery valleys through the mountains. Sabé settled back into her seat as the prow turned, barely leaving a curving wake behind. She felt the shift, sensed the change in direction, but to her eyes, the world appeared the same. The temperature had continually dropped since leaving Thasyin, due to the onset of night, fog, and altitude. Sabé pulled her cloak tighter around, now feeling the dampness as dampness, not an essence of the Force’s sweet lullaby. Her mind focused on the tangible after drifting for so many hours. Commandeering a gondola had been almost laughably easy. The Naboo did not travel the river at night. Navicomputers helped, but things could still go wrong, and the experience was spooky and disorienting. Sabé only had to employ the shadow game to get to the quay station guard, tranquilize him, and then do the same for the two workers inside. Free to access the computers, she rented a gondola and paid for it with physical credits, and took note that no gondola had been purchased under the Royal pass. Skywalker and the Senator were apparently staying in Thasyin for the night . . . or perhaps not. She only hoped neither was foolish enough to travel to the Lake Country at night. Not that it mattered if she or they arrived first. Sabé shivered under her damp cloak. Morning was approaching, she could discern a hint of light in the fog, tiny, slow whirls as it began to break apart. It would not be long now. She shivered again. Brushing away curling damp locks of hair, she tried to shake the cold. Dawn would come soon, drawing back the cloak over Naboo. Fresh mountain sunshine would pierce reality through this surreal curtain, and she would have to face it not under a soothing lullaby but in clear, unremitting light. Sabé stood, letting the cloak fall from her shoulders. Cool dampness immediately swathed her, prickling her skin. She shivered and closed her eyes, allowing the numbness to wash over her. ~~~ She awoke suddenly, as if from a disturbing dream. But she did not remember dreaming, only tossing and turning, and Eirtaé chiding her . . . Sabé shook her head and reached for the small blaster at her side as her eyes adjusted to the dim night lighting of the Queen’s private cabin. Rabé was fast asleep in one of the fold-out bunks, her slender form curled under a crimson blanket. Eirtaé was standing guard near the cabin’s entrance, her eyes glittering at Sabé. “What?” she whispered. Sabé moved quickly to Eirtaé’s side. “What’s going on?” “Nothing,” said Eirtaé, keeping her voice low for Rabé’s sake. “You sure?” Sabé couldn’t shake the uneasy feeling. Something had to have woken her up. Goosebumps crept up her arms. “Yes.” Eirtaé rolled her eyes. “I just got up about forty minutes ago to relieve Rabé. It’s almost dawn.” Sabé pressed her lips together. Eirtaé was never cheerful in the morning. “Have you done rounds on the ship yet?” she asked, hoping she didn’t sound bossy. “Yes.” “And?” “Everything is fine. The nightwatch was bored.” Eirtaé gave her an irritated look. “You tossed and turned quite a bit.” “Sorry.” The blonde handmaiden shrugged. “I did not sleep well, either.” Sabé smiled gratefully. Then she turned away, moving for the black cloak she wore earlier in the night. She could not shake this unsettling feeling; she was restless and agitated. “What are you doing?” Eirtaé hissed as Sabé also reached for the royal face paint. “I’m going to have a look around.” Eirtaé opened her mouth to protest, but Sabé plowed on. “Look—it’s not quite dawn yet. Almost everyone will be asleep and I’m putting the face on. No one is going to question why the Queen is having a nose-about. It’s to be expected, really.” Eirtaé raised an eyebrow. “Rabé told me about the Jedi.” Sabé frowned. Something was implied in Eirtaé’s tone and that eyebrow, but she could not discern what. “What did she tell you?” “That you went outside the ship, for one.” Eirtaé shook her head. “Are you insane, Sabé?” “Nothing happened. Rabé was with me. I was in no danger.” Sabé sighed. “And I needed fresh air.” She bit her lip as Eirtaé continued to stare levelly at her. “Look, Eirtaé, I know what you’re thinking. But believe me, I’m the last person who wants to fail. The Queen’s secret is safe with me.” She grinned a little. “Besides, if a rabid, wild bantha had clobbered me and word got back to the Trade Federation, they would presume the Queen dead and Amidala would be safe.” Eirtaé stared at her for a long moment, then rolled her eyes. “Your logic is not my logic.” Sabé held up the face paint. “Come now, Eirtaé, help me out. Or I’ll give you an executive order to do so.” The older handmaiden scowled but dutifully applied the royal paint to Sabé’s face. She worked quickly, expertly in the dim lighting, a small frown on her pale, pretty face. Something was obviously bothering her, and Sabé, already feeling on-edge, did not want to ask. But after Eirtaé finished applying the Scar of Remembrance, she gave Sabé a stern, probing look. “Rabé said you spoke to the Jedi.” “Yes.” Sabé scowled. “He refused to leave me alone.” “What did you say to him?” “Nothing of consequence. Look—Eirtaé, I did not say anything to give myself away.” At least, I hope not. Sabé squared her shoulders and raised her chin regally. Part of her resented Eirtaé’s suspicious doubt, but another part wavered anxiously, wondering if the older handmaiden was right. Was she acting unqueenly? Had the Jedi read her mind or sensed something last night? Was that why she felt so uneasy now? “Anyway,” she said briskly, covering up her uncertainty. “The Jedi did not divulge any useful information. I want to contact Padmé before day comes and hear what she has to say.” Eirtaé smirked as she pulled her hood up. “Knowing her, I bet she has a lot to say.” Wordlessly, the two handmaidens left the private cabin, Eirtaé falling a step behind Sabé’s shoulder. A chill crept up her back as she moved silently down the dimly lit lower level of the royal starship. The effect of the low-energy night lighting and the silence spooked her, unnerved her. She knew this ship well, knew its cargo manifest and the beings it carried. Yet she’d awoken in it feeling . . . disturbed. The curving bulkheads seemed to hold some unseen threat, some menace that had interrupted her tossing and turning. “You know,” Eirtaé whispered when Sabé paused just outside the common. “It’s a little . . . creepy.” Sabé nodded. The curves seemed threatening rather than soothing. She pulled her hood a little lower over her face and then peered into the ship’s common. In the dim lighting, she could see dark mounds of sleeping Naboo guards and pilots scattered in chairs and benches and along the bulkheads. One pilot had his chair tilted back against a bulkhead, his feet propped on the table, his mouth wide open in blissful slumber. “Quiet as a tomb,” Eirtaé said softly. Sabé gave a small shudder and passed by the common’s entrance. A few feet down the corridor stood a palace guard. He bowed slightly at her approach, and Sabé recognized him as Nic, one of Panaka’s favorites. “Have there been any disturbances?” she asked him quietly in her Queen’s voice. “No, Your Highness.” “Nothing at all?” Behind her, Eirtaé stirred slightly. “No . . . well.” Nic shifted his blaster, his dark eyes glittering under his helmet rim. “The Jedi was in the bridge for most of the night. But he left it about thirty minutes ago. Tyrin’s on starboard and saw him leave through the aft hatch, Your Highness.” Sabé could tell Nic was nervous. She supposed he’d never spoken to the Queen before. “Thank you, Nic.” A barely suppressed smile flitted across his face. Captain Panaka had given her the names of those aboard the ship shortly after landing. She and Amidala had agreed that while the Queen must remain aloof and steady, she should not dismiss the chance of boosting morale. Simple name-dropping often did wonders. Nic would be more favorable and supportive of the Queen during the breakfast mutterings. But her mind was far from Nic as she hurried to the bridge. What was Obi-Wan doing out of the ship? Jedi exercises? Or had he left to help his Master and Padmé? She’d woken with a bad feeling, and if Amidala was in danger . . . She wanted to race to the aft hatch, but the Queen certainly could not go chasing after wayward Jedi. It would look especially silly if she burst out of the ship to find Obi-Wan Kenobi meditating or doing something else not dangerous. A moment later the lift doors opened to the bridge. Sabé and Eirtaé stepped into the red glow as Captain Panaka swiveled in his chair to greet them. “One of the guards informs me the Jedi left by the starboard hatch,” Sabé said quickly. “You won’t even let me ask, will you?” Panaka muttered. Sabé gave him a tight smile. “You may.” Panaka rolled his eyes. “What are you doing up here, Your Highness.” “Couldn’t sleep.” Sabé did not feel like explaining her uneasiness to the Captain. She peered out the viewport. Stars were fading in a deep purple sky slowly bowing to the gray and pink dawn edging the horizon. Sabé absently wondered what a two-sun rise was like, but she had more pressing matters at hand. “The Jedi,” she repeated, turning to Captain Panaka. The man sighed and gestured at the viewscreen he was hunched over. “These Jedi . . . I don’t know whether they’re a blessing or a curse.” Sabé peered over his shoulder into the viewscreen. Obi-Wan Kenobi was pacing around the perimeter of the ship, his body facing away from Mos Espa out into the desert. She could almost feel the coiled agitation coming off him, rippling within his long robe. “He’s just been pacing,” said Panaka. “Had half a mind to go out there and scold him, but he left the ship secured. Used that hatch rather than the ramp.” Sabé dared not look at Eirtaé. Surely Rabé had told her about using the main hatch, leaving the ship wide open, even if guarded. She wondered worriedly if either handmaiden had informed Panaka, who, she’d made sure, had been sleeping at the time. “He seems to be searching for something,” Sabé said after a long moment. “I know. Well, he stopped pacing for awhile and just stood there. I think he was meditating.” “Maybe he’s contacting Master Jinn?” suggested Eirtaé. “But we’ve seen him use a comlink.” Eirtaé shrugged. “Could be to throw us off. Do Jedi not read minds?” Captain Panaka gave them both a narrow look. “Let us hope not.” “My shields are up, Captain,” Sabé said quickly. Her meditation master had often commended her ability to close and settle her mind. Still, she felt uneasy under Panaka’s stern gaze and the approaching dawn. And there was that thing she wanted to ask the others, but dared not . . . “Why don’t we wake Padmé up?” Pulling out her comlink, Sabé glanced at the viewscreen. Obi-Wan had not ceased his agitated pace. Amidala answered a few seconds later, sounding groggy and a little grouchy. “What?” “Good morning, Padmé.” “It better be. I have to be quick. Master Jinn is up already. I think he was talking to his apprentice.” Sabé threw Panaka a look. He mouthed back ‘I didn’t see him do that.’ “Fine. Tell us what you can.” They listened to Amidala’s hushed, electronic tirade. If not for the levity of situation, Sabé would have laughed. Amidala was dangerously close to having a fit over things not going her way. It was amusing—to a point. Sabé listened intently, but allowed Panaka and Eirtaé to give the proper exclamations of dismay. Outside, Obi-Wan seemed to give up his pacing and nimbly sprang up into the hatch. ~~~ -----signature----- Mar. 1 - One Prick to Bleed: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/20423905/p1 "You're like a walking encyclopedia of weirdness." Dean to Sam in Roadkill.
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VaderLVR64 Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 8/1/05 1:36pm Subject: RE: One Prick to Bleed - an AU beginning in AotC (Obi, Ani, Sabe, Yoda) - 8/1
	So much going on in this post! Wow! Now I'm nervous, too! -----signature----- R.I.P John, Alex, Jason, and Christian Never forgotten Soldiers' Angels http://soldiersangels.org/ 2114 soldiers waiting for someone to care
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AngelQueen Registered: Mar '01	Date Posted: 8/1/05 3:02pm Subject: RE: One Prick to Bleed - an AU beginning in AotC (Obi, Ani, Sabe, Yoda) - 8/1
	Padmé's complaining about the Jedi again. grins I suppose it helps ease the tension for her, and it is rather amusing. So, Sabé's preparing for her assassination of Anakin. I wonder if she'll go through it. What will happen? Will it be that by the time she gets there, she witnesses Anakin and Padmé's marriage ceremony and the Force prods her to stop and let them be? is especially curious Great post, Amidolee!! Much going on! AQ -----signature----- "Anakin, my allegiance is to the Republic, to democracy!" "If you're not with me, then you're my enemy." "Only a Sith deals in absolutes. I will do what I must." "You will try." Obi-Wan and Anakin
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