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stormqueen874 Registered: Aug '05	Date Posted: 7/19/06 5:07pm Subject: Shadows of the Future: TPM, Time-travel AU- Obi/Ani/Qui bonding- complete, 6/6! - Date Edited: 6/6/07 3:50pm (30 edits total) Edited By: stormqueen874
	Shadows of the Future By: Stormqueen Timeframe: Starts out at the end of RotS, then shifts to about the middle of TPM Genre: Big ole fat AU, with lots of humor, angst, and family bonding stuff- I feel like it's a mix of everything. Characters: Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon, nine year old Anakin, and a touch of Mace, Yoda, and Padme. Disclaimer: Nothing belongs to me; it's all property of the Great Bearded One. I'm just borrowing the characters for a short stint; I swear to put them back when I'm done. Notes: It's been a while since I posted anything, hasn't it? Well, welcome to my epic. I started this thing over a year ago after I saw RotS and felt like my heart had been ripped out, which automatically makes me want to search for/ write fanfiction. I started to explore reasons why Anakin turned in the first place, and kept coming up with the same conclusion, which will be examined in this fic. It deals with lots of "What ifs?" and starts with the "What if Anakin had succeeded during the duel on Mustafar?" and then leads into the "What if Obi-Wan, instead of dying, found himself sucked back in time over ten years?" Hope you all enjoy it; I tried to put everything I had into this fic, and I'm extremely proud of the results. A very big thanks to Nienna, Wyn, and Alethia, who all helped me beta this monster in some way, shape, or form. I know it took a long time, considering the length, but it was worth every minute. So thanks you guys; you're the best! hugs Now, without further ado, I present for your enjoyment a trailer and the prologue. Shadows of the Future trailer * Prologue Time: 13 years after the Naboo Crisis Place: Mustafar * Why? Obi-Wan pondered the question silently, air rushing up around him and the wind roaring in his ears as he stared up at the receding catwalk. Ana- no, Vaderâ€™s face sneered down at him and the Sithâ€™s laughter rang out, sending chills down Obi-Wanâ€™s spine. It was sad, he decided absently. Anakin had been such a charismatic young man, and to see him reduced to something so vile, so twisted, was a true crime. Why did you do this? A crime against what though, Obi-Wan really didnâ€™t know. His mind was behaving oddly, which was why, he decided, he was moving so slowly. Gravity on Mustafar was no different from what would be considered normal, as the planet was the same relative size and mass as most populated worlds. Surely his mind was playing tricks on him, or he had to be defying a natural law. While the wind in his ears was awfully loud, Vader didnâ€™t seem to be getting any further away. What was happening to him? Why did you betray us? Obi-Wan decided that he was dying. Everything was slowing down because his brain had decided to draw out his last moments, to savor the few seconds he had still to live. Surely that was a rational thing for the brain to want to do; surely he was still being rational? Why did you kill everyone? Obi-Wan frowned slightly; why was he falling in the first place? Was he even truly falling? There was a catwalk above him that he dimly remembered standing on and he knew there was a river of molten lava somewhere down below him. But what had happened? Had he been pushed? Had Vader pushed him? Why didnâ€™t you spare anyone, even innocent children? Obi-Wan thought for a moment. Yes, he decided, Vader had pushed him, as theyâ€™d been dueling. It had been quite foolish of them, to do so near lava, completely exposed to the toxins it released and unprotected from the heat. Yet theyâ€™d been dueling just the same, taking out their anguish and frustrations in the only way they truly knew how. Neither of the two really talked to each other, after all, when it came to dealing with their emotions. Why do you hate us so? Someone was screaming. What did we do to deserve such hate? Just screaming and screaming, never to be silent and give him the peace he so desperately craved. I want to know. Obi-Wan started when he realized it was him; he was screaming. His mind tried shake himself out of whatever strange state heâ€™d locked himself in, telling him to do something, to fight back, to grab the Force and save himself from certain death in the lavaâ€¦ I want to know why. His mind was succeeding; he was returning to reality. The screaming grew louder, the wind howled as it tore at his tunics and scorched his skin. Vaderâ€™s laughter echoed off the volcanic rock, his yellow eyes piercing the dark clouds that billowed between them, and time sped up. Obi-Wanâ€™s throat was raw, his eyes burned, and his hand was out-stretched, reaching desperately for the catwalk, to the person who hated him with such sickening fervorâ€¦ Iâ€™m going to die, but before I do, answer this one question. Obi-Wan breathed in, his lungs protesting when noxious fumes filled them, the air scalding sensitive tissue. He shut his eyes then, though Vaderâ€™s bitter face rose before him just the same, the yellow eyes taunting, accusing, hating. Where had he gone wrong? When had Anakin become this monster, and why hadnâ€™t he been paying attention? Would he have been able to stop it? Itâ€™s a simple request. Not that it really mattered, part of him added, because he was going to be dead soon anyway. He had failed; it was time to let everything go. Just answer this one question, and Iâ€™ll never bother you again. He had failed in nearly every way possible, and there was nothing he could do about it. Why did you do it? Part of him rose indignantly at that; hadnâ€™t he done what his Master asked and made Anakin into the best Jedi Knight in the galaxy? What made you do it? No, his mind countered, heâ€™d failed in that. What made you hate us so? Because Anakin had fallen. What have we ever done but love you? Heâ€™d meant to be the best possible Master to the boy, to help him curb his anger, to help him follow the Code, but Obi-Wan had failed there too. Is that why you hate us? Because Anakin had fallen. Because we donâ€™t show our love? Quite spectacularly in fact, a little part of him added, and now he was in the process of falling to his death. It was rather ironic, actuallyâ€“ a master falling to his doom because of a fallen apprentice. He would have laughed if heâ€™d been able. Because we arenâ€™t as blatant as you are? At least he wouldnâ€™t suffer when he finally hit. He still had the Force, after all. Obi-Wan stretched out his mind, pushing aside his exhaustion, and called upon as much of it as he could possibly handle. Because we donâ€™t wear our hearts on our sleeves for you to examine? Let it take his regret; let it take his pain. Let it erase everything so he could at least die in peace, so he could leave the galaxy to its fate and finally rest. Part of him felt he should care, but honestly, why should he even bother? Anakin had fallen. He had failed. He was nothing; he could do nothing. He couldnâ€™t change anything. Because we never said anything? After all, what had happened was the past, and the past was immutable. Why couldnâ€™t you see how much we cared? He wanted to die, he realized. He wanted it to be over. He didnâ€™t want to have to live knowing that the young man heâ€™d loved like a son, like a brother, had sold his very soul to darkness. Anakin had become a twisted monster, and Obi-Wan couldnâ€™t begin to fathom the reason why. I thought it was obvious; I thought you knew. The galaxy had been turned on its head and no one cared. No one had even tried to stop the genocide of the Jedi, standing on the sidelines as they were butchered, and Obi-Wan just wanted it all to end. No more chaos, no more Clone Wars, no more ambiguous sides and betrayals. Just him, the Force, and utter peace. You were my family; I loved you. He found himself smiling when the Force wrapped around him like one giant security blanket, its arms cradling him in their warmth. You donâ€™t care; you donâ€™t care if I love you. In a way, it reminded him of Qui-Gon. There was a kindness, a grounded feeling heâ€™d always associated with his late master that suddenly encircled him, gently touching his mind and soothing away any lingering anxiety. I poured my soul out to you, but it wasnâ€™t enough. It was then he knew. Answer this: why wasnâ€™t love enough for you? He knew he was ready to die. Why, Anakin? *** So there you have it, the prologue. Forgive me if that was confusing; I was experimenting with a different style, and I hope it was rather chilling, which was what I was shooting for. Anyway, please let me know what you think, and let me know if you want a PM! -Stormqueen -----signature----- Master to kenobiwanobi Shadows of the Future: TPM timetravel AU, Obi/Ani/Qui bonding http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/24413082/p1/?0
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Meredith_Kenobi Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 7/19/06 6:47pm Subject: RE: Shadows of the Future: TPM, Time-travel AU- Obi/Ani/Qui bonding- Prologue up, 7/19
	Oh, wow! That was FANTASTIC! I read it the first time all the way through, and it was very moving, very chilling. Then I just read the italics and it was very sad, distraught, heart wrenching. Then I read it without the italics. It was very intense, very emotive. And I must say it was very good all three ways. Stupendous job!!! Please please please give me a PM when you update! -----signature----- Proud to be ZaraValinor's Padawan Delighted to be brodiew's Master
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G__Anakin Registered: Apr '06	Date Posted: 7/19/06 6:58pm Subject: RE: Shadows of the Future: TPM, Time-travel AU- Obi/Ani/Qui bonding- Prologue up, 7/19
	Looks intresting PM me when you update if you're able to -----signature----- Master to tahiriveilax - - - My fanfic - - - Fate of the Jedi - Abyss : http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/30246540/p1/ Yeah, I used the real title for the next book. Beware Omen Spoilers.
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Nienna_Narmolanya Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 7/19/06 9:00pm Subject: RE: Shadows of the Future: TPM, Time-travel AU- Obi/Ani/Qui bonding- Prologue up, 7/19
	(I'm going to keep this brief, as a huge storm came through not long ago and the power is less than reliable at the moment...) Yay! I'm so glad to see this up! This story is amazing through and through - just thought you should know that. This prologue especially is so haunting. I love the unique style with the italicized voice providing emotional punches between the action. My favorite: Why did you do it? So simple, yet so hard to answer - what you'll attempt to do in this fic! Wonderful, gripping opening! Now I want to read it all over again. -----signature----- "It is difficult to say what is impossible, for the dream of yesterday is the hope of today and the reality of tomorrow." - Robert Goddard The Padawan Chronicles - http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/27250281/p1/?54
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kenobiwanobi Registered: Jun '05	Date Posted: 7/20/06 7:53am Subject: RE: Shadows of the Future: TPM, Time-travel AU- Obi/Ani/Qui bonding- Prologue up, 7/19
	Wow Master, what a beautiful start!~ I now realize that I have quite a way to go before I come anywhere close to yours talents;at least you'll be here to help me along...I am the luckiest padawan on the boards! Please PM me with updates Master. -----signature----- Better to die on your feet than live on your knees-Dolores Ibarruri Moulin Rouge Freak- The greatest thing you'll ever learn is just to love and be loved in return check out my story ( link=my profile) Proud Padawan of stormqueen874
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Kynstar Registered: Mar '04	Date Posted: 7/20/06 8:01am Subject: RE: Shadows of the Future: TPM, Time-travel AU- Obi/Ani/Qui bonding- Prologue up, 7/19
	I so agree with the others! Wonderful start! Poor Obi Please add me to the PM list as well! -----signature----- Paddy sis to t_s & SarkaVrae/Master to hyperspace_police Member of Rebel Legion and Jedi Assembly (Kynstar Lans) Only thru fear, hatred, and pain will the true power of the Force be revealed. See stories/viggies in bio
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KELIA Title: The Pretty in Pink Fan Fic Manager Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 7/20/06 8:29am Subject: RE: Shadows of the Future: TPM, Time-travel AU- Obi/Ani/Qui bonding- Prologue up, 7/19
	Wonderfully done! You really captured Obi-Wan's character very well. Looking forward to more -----signature----- "Do or do not, there is no try." Master Yoda A Light In The Darkness: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28150602/p1/?8 NaNaWriMo Progress: 32,105
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Darth_Abtranor Registered: May '05	Date Posted: 7/20/06 9:08pm Subject: RE: Shadows of the Future: TPM, Time-travel AU- Obi/Ani/Qui bonding- Prologue up, 7/19
	Excellent! Please PM me when you update. -----signature----- "Wipe them out. All of them." "At last we shall reveal ourselves to the Jedi. At last we will have revenge." "Execute Order 66." "The brightest light casts the darkest shadow."
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Layren Registered: Oct '03	Date Posted: 7/21/06 7:45am Subject: RE: Shadows of the Future: TPM, Time-travel AU- Obi/Ani/Qui bonding- Prologue up, 7/19
	Ooooooh I'm so very glad you sent me a link to this one, especially since Qui-Gon is going to be in it later What a fascinating beginning! Very excellent portrayal of Obi-Wan's thoughts during the battle on Mustafar. Excellent job! If you've got a PM list, please put me on it -----signature----- Proud Master to Ara-gon The Triad Chronicles http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/25934993/p1/?177 (OC's) Into Another Day http://boards.theforce.net/before_the_saga/b10475/27926050/p1/?0 2008 Dear Diary Challenge I am Jinngerbread.
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Kestrel_Kenobi Registered: Sep '05	Date Posted: 7/21/06 4:24pm Subject: RE: Shadows of the Future: TPM, Time-travel AU- Obi/Ani/Qui bonding- Prologue up, 7/19
	Oh, I really enjoyed this stormqueen874 - I look forward to reading the rest! Could you please pm me with updates? Thank you! Wonderful start -----signature----- I had a baby girl! July '08! Drabbles of an AU Snape - http://boards.theforce.net/non_star_wars_fan_fiction/b10808/29704506/p1/?2
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CherryLightsaber Registered: Mar '05	Date Posted: 7/21/06 5:37pm Subject: RE: Shadows of the Future: TPM, Time-travel AU- Obi/Ani/Qui bonding- Prologue up, 7/19
	Wow, I'm glad I read this. The prologue adds a new, interesting layer of depth to the events on Mustafar. I can't wait for more! Can I be added to your PM list? -----signature----- Blarghity blargh. Minute Mayhem: UDC 4 - http://boards.theforce.net/t/b1/30249825 Transcending Chains - http://boards.theforce.net/t/b1/29645545
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EGKenobi Registered: Apr '05	Date Posted: 7/21/06 5:48pm Subject: RE: Shadows of the Future: TPM, Time-travel AU- Obi/Ani/Qui bonding- Prologue up, 7/19
	I love this!!! So far it's good, and trust me, you got me thinking!! Please PM me when you update. EG -----signature----- The Shifting Future: http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=24571153&brd=10476&start=25321338 Event Horizon: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/24429782/p1/?4 Proud master to CrystalSaber_1 and GeneralKenobi7
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bmwgurl17 Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 7/22/06 7:32am Subject: RE: Shadows of the Future: TPM, Time-travel AU- Obi/Ani/Qui bonding- Prologue up, 7/19
	Why Anakin? I want to know the same answer . Keep going -----signature----- From Red and Purple Memories(A/P,Obi, ROTS angst,) --http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/24888230/p1/?56 If I can catch your fall--http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/22898705/p1 Star Wars V.S LOTR
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Souderwan Registered: Jun '05	Date Posted: 7/22/06 9:44am Subject: RE: Shadows of the Future: TPM, Time-travel AU- Obi/Ani/Qui bonding- Prologue up, 7/19
	An excellent start, stormqueen!! Very intense and chilling! I really enjoyed the shifts between the self-recriminating questions and the tormented sensation of Obi-Wan's impending death. Definitely gave me the shivers. Obi-Wan breathed in, his lungs protesting when noxious fumes filled them, the air scalding sensitive tissue. He shut his eyes then, though Vader’s bitter face rose before him just the same, the yellow eyes taunting, accusing, hating. That's just plain powerful! I'm looking forward to more! Please put me on your PM list. -----signature----- "When we hurt each other we should write it down in the sand, so the winds of forgiveness can make it go away for good. When we help each other we should chisel it in stone, lest we never forget the love of a friend." ~Godefroy
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JediMormon Registered: Apr '06	Date Posted: 7/22/06 5:11pm Subject: RE: Shadows of the Future: TPM, Time-travel AU- Obi/Ani/Qui bonding- Prologue up, 7/19
	I'm going to enjoy this story! I like the way you've written Obi-Wan and what he thinks will be his final thoughts. Put me on the P.M list if you're making one! ~ The Mormon Jedi -----signature----- Zoe: Preacher, don't the Bible have some pretty specific things to say about killing? Book: Quite specific. It is, however, somewhat fuzzier on the subject of kneecaps.
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stormqueen874 Registered: Aug '05	Date Posted: 7/25/06 4:02pm Subject: RE: Shadows of the Future: TPM, Time-travel AU- Obi/Ani/Qui bonding- Prologue up, 7/19
	Wow! gapes at number of reviewers I’m so glad that people are enjoying this! Anyway, I suppose I ought to get down to business and write some replies, eh? For those of you waiting for updates, I’ll be sure to do so tomorrow, when I have access to my own computer again. Right now I’m on one at school. Meredith_Kenobi: Aw, thank you so much! Then I just read the italics and it was very sad, distraught, heart wrenching. Then I read it without the italics. It was very intense, very emotive. And I must say it was very good all three ways. That indeed was my intention! I’m glad it came through! I’ll be sure to PM you with an update. G_Anakin: Glad you’re interested! grins I’ll be sure to PM you! Nienna_Narmolanya: Yay! Nienna! Glad you’re here, my dear! hugs I’m happy that the prologue has you wanting to read the story all over again; that means I’ve done something right! does a happy dance kenobiwanobi: Ah, padawan, you made it! grins I’m glad you’re enjoying the story, and don’t worry, your writing is wonderful! I’ll be sure to PM you when I update, mmkay? Kynstar: Ah, Kynstar, my dear! So good to see you! I’m glad you’re enjoying this, and I’m adding you to my PM list! KELIA: Aw, don’t cry! hands a box of tissues I’m glad my writing was strong enough to invoke such a reaction; I must be doing something right! Plan for an update every Wednesday or so, and I hope the rest of the story lives up to your expectations! Darth_Abtranor: Thanks! I’ll add you to the list! Layren: Ah, Layren! So good to see you! Yes, this story has plenty of Qui-Gon in it; in fact, he’s just as much a character as Obi-Wan is. I realized how much I loved writing him; he’s just a squishy teddy bear, isn’t he? I’ll be sure to PM you when I update! Kestrel_Kenobi: Thanks! I’ll be sure to PM you, don’t worry! CherryLightsaber: Ah, Cherry! Long time to see, eh? I’m glad you liked the prologue, and I’ll be sure to add you to the PM list! grin EGKenobi: Thanks! I’m glad it got you thinking, and I’ll PM you, never fear! bmwgurl17: You’ll get an answer, don’t worry! Thanks for reviewing! Sounderwan: Ah, SW! I’m glad you enjoyed it; I felt like I was writing prose with the prologue sometimes, esp. at the part you highlighted. I’ll be sure to keep you posted with updates! JediMormon: Thanks so much! I’ll be sure to add you to the PM list! (looks over to make sure she got everyone) Yeah, I’m pretty sure that’s it. Look for an update with Chapter One tomorrow, everyone! -Stormqueen -----signature----- Master to kenobiwanobi Shadows of the Future: TPM timetravel AU, Obi/Ani/Qui bonding http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/24413082/p1/?0
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