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Author	Topic: Tragedy on the Landing Pad - Anakin/Barriss, AotC AU - Completed April 1
PadawanMom5610 Registered: Feb '07	Date Posted: 10/20/07 7:53am Subject: RE: Tragedy on the Landing Pad - Anakin/Barriss, AotC AU. (Short Story, possibly epic)
	Really nice. I really like this. I really, really like the relationship between Anakin and Barriss. She is so much better for him than Padme. Great revelation she had about how he is closer to the force because of his emotions. I'm so glad she forgave him. And how!!! Oh, and did I say I really, really like this story?
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Raptor517 Registered: Sep '06	Date Posted: 10/20/07 12:00pm Subject: RE: Tragedy on the Landing Pad - Anakin/Barriss, AotC AU. (Short Story, possibly epic)
	I like the explanation of Anakin's access to the Force. It makes a lot of sense. Raptor517 -----signature----- Piercing the Darkness http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28010631/p1/?1 His Brother's Words http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/26020497/p1/?3 Metamorphosis http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/24997946/p5/?7 Hunter's Vendetta http://
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Kevin_Solo Registered: Jun '07	Date Posted: 10/20/07 12:36pm Subject: RE: Tragedy on the Landing Pad - Anakin/Barriss, AotC AU. (Short Story, possibly epic)
	That was a great update! Now Anakin can have a proper talk with Barriss. A nice description of how she's looking, and Ani's understandable nervousness: Barriss was propped up on the bed in the med-lab when the door opened for Anakin several minutes later. She was dressed in a loose recovery jumpsuit, and her hair was down around her shoulders, giving her a softer, younger appearance. She looked fragile, still worn out in physical ways from the ordeal that would take time to heal. She didn't appear aware of his scrutiny and lifted one hand to her mouth, chewing absently on one finger tip as she stared at something in her lap. Anakin shifted awkwardly, nervously, as he watched her. A smile tilted her lips and she shook her head and bent to write something on the item in her lap. Her smile, wistful and tolerant, made him wonder if he shouldn't come back later lest he interrupt whatever he was doing. He stood, undecided for a long minute, torn between wanting - needing - to know she was alright, and the fear that she'd reject him, criticize him, for his decisions. Ones that had- "Anakin!" It's great that she forgives him! "Come here, Anakin." His feet moved of their own accord, one hand coming up, his fingers trembling as they reached for hers. The touch on her finger tips sliding across his palm - their warmth and vibrancy - and the way they transmitted her feelings immediately brought a half-sob to his lips. She bent her fingers, catching his and pulling with a strength he hadn't thought she possessed. Her other hand came around, gripping his wrist as he was brought closer and gave a vicious tug. Off balance, he stumbled into the side of her recovery bed and froze, one hand on the mattress, the other caught in hers, as she lifted the hand she'd had around his wrist and flung her arm around his neck. The strength in her embrace did much to relieve his fears as she released his hand and instead used both arms to hug him tightly. His arms went about her waist as he buried his face in her shoulder. Barriss stroked his hair; her fingers firm even as her force presence reached out to envelop him. "I forgive you." Her words were like a release and he clutched her tightly. She didn't cry out, didn't so much as twitch except to return the pressure of the embrace as he practically dragged her off the bed and into his arms. She went up on her knees before dropping her legs over the side of the bed. It aligned their bodies, hip to hip but slightly separated at the shoulder, as she gathered him closely. Anakin felt like crawling into her skin so deep and primal was the urge to possess her, to know she was safe, that he reacted without thinking. The Force flared between them as Anakin twisted his head and caught her lips with his, every ounce of his desperation and desolation communicated in the first brief moment. Startled Barriss reacted before she thought, not just to his kiss, but to the underlying insecurities. She soothed and comforted as only a Jedi Healer could. Reaching into his mind, relishing the feeling of power as he opened to her without restraint, she began a process she'd only recently completed on herself. Wow! If things weren't so well written, I'd be thinking some salacious thoughts when I saw the word 'comforting' in that context. It's great that she understands what he's going through: She searched for and located those pathways in Anakin's brain that had been altered during their stay on Tatooine. She sought and found several related to anger and training, reaching back to the Tusken raiders. She realigned these, shifting the anger focus and diminishing the responses. She didn't have long before Anakin reacted instinctively; trying to force her out and it took only moments before his will sprang to life. Yet she clung to him mentally as she did physically, only dimly aware of that physical connection and the way she responded to his demands. She felt each sweep of his fingers as they ran possessively down her back. Felt the strength in his muscles as she arched against him thoughtlessly. But it was all sensations she was only vaguely aware of as her Force presence touched his and counter pressured. His words, his arrogance in his powers pushed her. She pushed back and - as if realizing her intentions were only for his best interest - he suddenly stopped pushing. In her element, Barriss wrapped her Force presence around his, willing him to understand, to appreciate why she was doing this. To understand how she was doing this and accept her council. He fought it as she'd known he would, unwilling to let go of the unconscious arrogance of being the best in everything - being the Chosen One, but she didn't relent. She pushed and squeezed mentally, using that Force presence as a colliery to their physical bodies even as she was dimly aware of being lifted and pressed back into the mattress of the recovery bed. Anakin fought her, bringing his considerable access to the Force to bear - but after being immersed in it for days, Barriss now knew how to counter it and, more importantly, control its affect on her. She challenged it to where she wanted it to go, using it against him, turning his powers back on his perceptions and forcing him to see her way. She felt his body pause, felt her own struggling to find enough air even as he struggled against her conceptions. Barriss showed no mercy and didn't relent until she felt him pull back, suddenly loathe to continue, and only then did she draw back. Her consciousness returned completely to her physical being where she lay panting on the mattress of the recovery bed, Anakin braced on his forearms above her, his forehead touching hers and his eyes closed. Hot without being salacious. So now we know why Anakin's so special: Barriss not only understood his silent message, she heeded it. Picking up where she left off as if they hadn't paused to speak of anything else, she continued. "You have a much purer connection to the Force, Anakin. One that's based on emotion instead of concentrated effort. Jedi children are trained from a young age to avoid emotions, to resist them and suppress them. You weren't. While I have to work to call on the Force because of the discipline I learned as a child, because of your lack of discipline, it comes to your call more easily. You're an open conduit, almost as pure as can be because you weren't brought up as a Jedi." The question is: Did Obi-Wan see anything they didn't want him to see? She winked at him before schooling her face into a more passively interested expression. "Hello Master Kenobi." "Barriss." Obi-Wan was leaning against the door jamb as Anakin turned in surprise. "Anakin. I trust your apology was well received?" Anakin nodded mutely, the eye contact between he and Obi-Wan being broken as he couldn't hold the gaze. He wasn't about to tell his Master just how well his apology had been received - and the lesson Barriss had chosen to give him in return. They have to deal with the possible consequences if they become more than friends: He could have a close relationship with his Master, like father and son, but no romantic attachments which could be just as deep. He didn't understand why but even as a part of him rebelled, he was terrified too. Barriss finally let out an exasperated sigh. "They can't expel us for being friends, Anakin." "Is that all we are, Barriss?" She colored slightly but met his gaze head on. "That's all we can be." "According to the code, you mean." Her eyes widened at the bitterness in his voice. He continued even as she opened her mouth to speak. "It's not fair. None of it is. And it makes no sense." He hurtled to his feet and began to pace, gesticulating wildly. "Not when take in the light you just revealed. How can a Jedi expect to achieve their full potential if a part of that potential - a part of that emotion is never tapped?" Come on now, Ani, you could do far worse! At least she's not a politician with stupid hair! I had to read this again: "And mine," her eyes sparkled dangerously, as if he'd better not object. "I not only helped you save her, but you've taken... liberties with me." He snorted, amusement turning his eyes the color of the mid-day sky. "As if you objected." She settled herself primly and sniffed. "If I did, you'd be the first to know." "And in the med bay right next to you, I'd wager." He grinned. "How do you do that?" "Do what?" "Diffuse me like a time bomb?" "It's all part and parcel of being a Jedi Healer, my friend. There are aspects of the Force you don't have an affinity for you know." "Ha!" He threw himself back into the chair, relaxing into a comfortable lounge despite the scornful reply. "If that were the case, your Master would do the same." "Ah, but Master Luminara hasn't been inside your mind. I have." "If your Master ever saw the inside of my head I'd likely be committed." "Not for long." "What, would you rescue me?" Her expression turned suddenly and deadly serious despite the tease in his voice. "I'll always be there to rescue you, Anakin. No matter the distance, I will always come for you." There wasn't anything he could say to that as their gazes locked. With a promise like that he couldn't think of a more appropriate response than to lean forward as he rose to his feet and brush a soft, serious kiss across her lips. It was tentative but somber, a testament to her vow and a silent one of his own. This is way better than Episode II! Do keep it up, Jade_Max!
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Valairy_Scot Title: PT Rewrite Winner Registered: Sep '05	Date Posted: 10/20/07 1:03pm Subject: RE: Tragedy on the Landing Pad - Anakin/Barriss, AotC AU. (Short Story, possibly epic)
	Whew - intense and wonderful. A lovely, lovely update. -----signature----- http://boards.theforce.net/fan_fiction_resource/b10304/25405090/p3/?52 Prolific Author thread: list & links there. Muse fueled by coffee. Often AWOL despite frequent sipping. Writes on inspiration, not a schedule. I'm a writer, not a storyteller.
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Jaded_Rose Registered: Nov '06	Date Posted: 10/20/07 1:22pm Subject: RE: Tragedy on the Landing Pad - Anakin/Barriss, AotC AU. (Short Story, possibly epic)
	I agree with Valairy Scott - this is amazing. Your description of Anakin as a time bomb is completely accurate - even in this context. I admit it, I really, really like Bariss. I take back all of the things I said about her earlier in this story. J_Ro -----signature----- The pen is mightier than the sword, if it has been sharpened to a fine point, dipped in deadly poison and thrown from ten feet away. But really, you're better off with a sword. -America, The Book
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EverydayAngel Registered: Sep '06	Date Posted: 10/20/07 4:45pm Subject: RE: Tragedy on the Landing Pad - Anakin/Barriss, AotC AU. (Short Story, possibly epic)
	That was a wonderful chapter I love what they shared between them when they kissed and the explanation of how he accesses the Force. And of course they are more than friends Looking forward to more.
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KELIA Title: Host: 20 Ques Bet Your Knowledge PT Rewrite Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 10/21/07 6:39am Subject: RE: Tragedy on the Landing Pad - Anakin/Barriss, AotC AU. (Short Story, possibly epic)
	That was lovely. The explanation for his connection to the Force makes perfect sense. It's a shame the Council couldn't/wouldn't have considered it themselves. I love how Barriss is able to handle Anakin. She, at least here, is the perfect partner for him. Great update -----signature----- "Do or do not, there is no try." Master Yoda A Light In The Darkness: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28150602/p1/?8 Undue Circumstances: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28530583/p1/?10
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obsessedwithSW Registered: May '05	Date Posted: 10/21/07 10:53am Subject: RE: Tragedy on the Landing Pad - Anakin/Barriss, AotC AU. (Short Story, possibly epic)
	Her words were like a release and he clutched her tightly. She didn't cry out, didn't so much as twitch except to return the pressure of the embrace as he practically dragged her off the bed and into his arms. She went up on her knees before dropping her legs over the side of the bed. It aligned their bodies, hip to hip but slightly separated at the shoulder, as she gathered him closely. Anakin felt like crawling into her skin so deep and primal was the urge to possess her, to know she was safe, that he reacted without thinking. The Force flared between them as Anakin twisted his head and caught her lips with his, every ounce of his desperation and desolation communicated in the first brief moment. Startled Barriss reacted before she thought, not just to his kiss, but to the underlying insecurities. She soothed and comforted as only a Jedi Healer could. Reaching into his mind, relishing the feeling of power as he opened to her without restraint, she began a process she'd only recently completed on herself. Anne this worked wonderfully! Anakin cannot not react to his violate emotions and I really liked how Barriss used that insight to help Anakin. Although with this connection how in the world is Anakin going to keep his hands off of Barriss, and how will Barriss resist? HE is quite a hottie. By the way if his Master isnt celibate who is he fooling around with or who are you suggesting he ahs fooled around with? Inquiring minds want to know! -----signature----- Yes Darth Maul -bring sexy back! http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JW8kOYvwVng Avid SiriWaner ! Stories in Bio
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Qui-Gina-Jinn Registered: Jun '03	Date Posted: 10/21/07 3:13pm Subject: RE: Tragedy on the Landing Pad - Anakin/Barriss, AotC AU. (Short Story, possibly epic)
	Only just found this fic. I LOVE it! Killing Padmé is... interesting. And Anakin and Barriss?? Cute couple I guess Somehow I don't really like Obi-Wan here (you've written him wonderfully!) Love Luminara though Always loved both TAS, MedStar and Barriss I don't really know where to begin or end in commenting all this, so let me just say that I think it's wonderful and perfect! Could I, pretty please, be added to your PM list?? [face_prayer] -----signature----- Dark Lady of the DLC Fan Force Denmark I was there - FFEurope meeting, Stockholm 2005, Celebration Europe 2007, JediCon 2008 Not to worry - we are still flying half a ship! Ke nu'jurkadir sha Mando'ade
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Jek_Windu Registered: Jan '03	Date Posted: 10/22/07 10:32am Subject: RE: Tragedy on the Landing Pad - Anakin/Barriss, AotC AU. (Short Story, possibly epic)
	That was awesome! More soon! -----signature----- Tryanids: You don't have enough bullets! Imperial Guard: YES WE DO! R.I.P. Trini
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AnakinsFavorite Registered: Apr '06	Date Posted: 10/24/07 11:54am Subject: RE: Tragedy on the Landing Pad - Anakin/Barriss, AotC AU. (Short Story, possibly epic)
	I’m sorry it took me so long to get to this post- I’ve been so busy! Ah, good. All is well- Barriss and Anakin are alright, and she has forgiven him. They have finally realized how they feel about each other- and have confessed feelings. How long will it be until they can both admit to each other that they want- and need- to become more than friends??! Great post! I can’t wait to see what happens in the next one! AnakinsFavorite -----signature----- Supreme Mugwump of ACWDBTTCAOT "Gotta pay your dues if you wanna sing the blues, And you know it don't come easy. You don't have to shout or leap about You can even play them easy."
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Jedi Trace Title: • SouthEast RSA • Fan Fiction Manager Registered: Dec '99	Date Posted: 10/24/07 11:21pm Subject: RE: Tragedy on the Landing Pad - Anakin/Barriss, AotC AU. (Short Story, possibly epic)
	Woah...intense chapter, Jade_Max. I loved it! The dialogue and descriptions are woven seamlessly together and I really like how they came to terms with their past and present on so many levels. The Force flared between them as Anakin twisted his head and caught her lips with his, every ounce of his desperation and desolation communicated in the first brief moment. Startled Barriss reacted before she thought, not just to his kiss, but to the underlying insecurities. She soothed and comforted as only a Jedi Healer could. Reaching into his mind, relishing the feeling of power as he opened to her without restraint, she began a process she'd only recently completed on herself. Just beautiful!! With their combined flaws and strengths, they compliment each other perfectly. -----signature----- Captain of the Cade Brigade: "Always bringing up his rear" “In this world, you must be oh so smart or oh so pleasant. Well, for years I was smart. I recommend pleasant.” ~ Elwood P. Dowd
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VaderLVR64 Title: Fan Fic Manager Digging out from Fay Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 10/25/07 6:48am Subject: RE: Tragedy on the Landing Pad - Anakin/Barriss, AotC AU. (Short Story, possibly epic)
	Lovely! In a way, Barriss can understand Anakin better than Padme would be able to, though Padme loved him. In her element, Barriss wrapped her Force presence around his, willing him to understand, to appreciate why she was doing this. To understand how she was doing this and accept her council. He fought it as she'd known he would, unwilling to let go of the unconscious arrogance of being the best in everything - being the Chosen One, but she didn't relent. She pushed and squeezed mentally, using that Force presence as a colliery to their physical bodies even as she was dimly aware of being lifted and pressed back into the mattress of the recovery bed. Anakin fought her, bringing his considerable access to the Force to bear - but after being immersed in it for days, Barriss now knew how to counter it and, more importantly, control its affect on her. She challenged it to where she wanted it to go, using it against him, turning his powers back on his perceptions and forcing him to see her way. -----signature----- If you have to choose between tears and laughter, remember that laughter burns more calories. They call me NANA Vader. At least she doesn't lack confidence...
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little_miss_jedi Registered: Aug '05	Date Posted: 11/12/07 10:19pm Subject: RE: Tragedy on the Landing Pad - Anakin/Barriss, AotC AU. (Short Story, possibly epic)
	nice work! Very intense - but some of those lines really made me smile! Looking forward to more! -----signature----- "You power crazed, obnoxious, ludicrous little jerk." Don't Go: http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=28203894&brd=10476&replies=0 Jacen? Caedus? Doesn't matter! I love him anyway!
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Jade_Max Registered: Jun '02	Date Posted: 12/31/07 3:32am Subject: RE: Tragedy on the Landing Pad - Anakin/Barriss, AotC AU. (Short Story, possibly epic)
	PadawanMom5610 – I’m glad you like it – happy readers make my day! Raptor517 – I’ve thought a lot about why Anakin is stronger and, regardless of the Midichlorian count, I figured there needed to be another reason. I’m glad you liked it! Kevin_Solo – Thanks! And you’re right, Anakin and Barriss have to have another talk, one that’s coming sooner rather than later. I’m thrilled that scene came off as hot without being salacious – it’s exactly what I was going for Valairy_Scot – Thank you Jaded_Rose – LOL! I think you said those things about Barriss in “Lady Luck” so I’ll forgive you. grin EverydayAngel – Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it. And you’re right – they are more than friends, only Barriss is going to fight it until a certain point just like Padmé did – but for different reasons. KELIA – I know what you mean. I don’t think the council wants to believe it’s wrong and admitting this reason as to why Anakin would be more powerful would mean having to re-examine why and how they do everything. No council wants to do that! obsessedwithSW - Glad you agree, Sharon! I thoroughly enjoyed that particular kiss mostly because I got to work in a bunch of stuff with it without going overboard. Although with this connection how in the world is Anakin going to keep his hands off of Barriss, and how will Barriss resist? Barriss is a strong girl , but she is a girl so resist isn’t in her vocabulary lol! By the way if his Master isnt celibate who is he fooling around with or who are you suggesting he has fooled around with? LOL! Who do you think? I was implying Luminara, but you can take it in any context. Shaak Ti Maybe? Qui-Gina-Jinn – Welcome, welcome! Thank you for taking the time to read through to this point and I do apologize for long waits between updates. It completely depends on how motivated my muse is. I’m thrilled you’re enjoying this and would be happy to PM you when I update Jek_Windu – Thanks! And “soon” is a relative term, but I do update when the muse strikes AnakinsFavorite – Thanks AF! Ah, young love. We’re in the same timeframe as AotC so the arena scene is approaching where they consider themselves dead. Of course, there’s other parts of this we haven’t yet seen, and Anakin and Barriss are going to have to come to terms with a lot of things in the next day or so in-story. Jedi Trace – Thank you VaderLVR64 – Indeed, in a lot of ways Barriss is better equipped to deal with Anakin and his changing moods and emotions, though Padmé did love him, I don’t know if she ever understood him. little_miss_jedi – thank you Thanks for your patience everyone. I do apologize for the long waits between chapters, but my muse is fickle and only works on this occasionally. Of course, as a compensation, the updates are much longer than they would be otherwise. I appreciate your continued patience and will try not to leave ya’ll on a cliffie. That having been said, if anyone would no longer like to receive PMs for this story PLEASE let me know, either in thread or via PM. I don’t want to spam anyone and I promise not to take offense. Update to follow shortly. -----signature----- First Love, Last Love - http://boards.theforce.net/Fan_Fiction_Resource/b10304/20496232/?28 Don't think, write. And have faith that your subconscious mind is smarter than you.- lazy RIP my little Nibbler
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