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DarthSilious
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2/21/07 7:46am
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RE: Tragedy on the Landing Pad - Anakin/Barriss, AotC AU. (Short Story, possibly epic)
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Uh-oh! looks like Shmi, Barriss and Beru are walking into some possible trouble. 
Still, with Barriss with them there'll be some good old Jedi protection. 
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Raptor517
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2/21/07 12:35pm
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And tension mounts in the air...What's gonna happen now? 
Also, I love how you had Shmi inside the house. Definitely not what I was expecting.
Great update!
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LuminaraFan4Evr
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2/21/07 2:28pm
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Thanks for the PM. I enjoyed how you intertwined the original events and the new ones. It brought a sense of "this is how it should hav gone, I'm not just randomly changing the story" to the whole thing.
Nice family reunion, I felt so bad for Barriss!
Oh, so Barriss is coming, huh? Maybe that will help... I will definitely be watching to see how this unfolds...
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Jek_Windu
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2/21/07 6:03pm
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RE: Tragedy on the Landing Pad - Anakin/Barriss, AotC AU. (Short Story, possibly epic)
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You know, the more I read from you, the more I'm sure that, like me (hopefully), your strong suit is characters. You make them very real, and easily bring them off the page- but without having to restort to melodramatic angst or fluff that's worthy of supermarket romance.
In short- this is fic is FRAKKING AWESOME!
Also, please sign me up for the PM list.
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Daenarrah
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2/21/07 7:25pm
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RE: Tragedy on the Landing Pad - Anakin/Barriss, AotC AU. (Short Story, possibly epic)
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I'm so happy to see Shmi alive here and Anakin gets to see her so happy with Cleigg. Barriss is a good voice of reason too because he seems to need it a bit. I giggled when Cleigg referred to Barriss as Anakin's girlfriend. What I really loved, though, was your comparison between the two men. 
And now Barriss is joining Beru and Shmi in gathering mushrooms. I'm looking forward to how you take on that knowing what really happened. Having a Jedi with them will come in handy? Yes?
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Mira_Jade
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2/24/07 1:03pm
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Oh, I love this update, it was just so . . . cute! 
"She's free, Barriss!"
She laughed. "Did you honestly expect to come back here and find your mother was still Watto's slave?"
Anakin smiled sheepishly, looping an arm about her shoulders and guiding her back towards the space port.
I loved that part, I'm not sure why. It shows how young Anakin really is, and how we rarely ever see him. *sigh* The good old days.
I also liked keeping Shmi alive, that was a relief. I was just smiling the whole scene.
Great update, and I can't wait for more! 
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Jedi Trace
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2/25/07 12:28pm
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RE: Tragedy on the Landing Pad - Anakin/Barriss, AotC AU. (Short Story, possibly epic)
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I this story!!! 
VERY nice job working in the canon events while still maintaining the AU-ness. 
Barriss watched emotions flicker across his face; dread, longing, fear all mixed with the hunger of a child for parental approval. "I'm sure she still loves you."
He jerked, his gaze snapping to hers. "What?"
Barriss shrugged, slightly uncomfortable, not really understanding the deep emotional attachment he had to his mother. "I hear that mothers love their children no matter what."
Very telling - that last sentence. I guess it would be hard for her to understand the bond between a mother and son, since she never knew her mother. Well done!
Ani? My little Ani? Is that you?"
Both of their heads came up and Barriss caught Anakin's stunned look even as dissolved into a boyish grin of delight and wonder. "Mom!"
Barriss' gaze turned back to the woman but she only caught a glimpse as Anakin darted across the sandy floor and swept the older woman into a tight hug.
LOVED the family reunion!
But did we hear something about mushrooms... 
(Thanks for the PM!)
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dianethx
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2/25/07 1:52pm
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A really interesting AU. I loved that they arrived before Shmi is taken by the Tuskans. This puts a whole new light on Anakin's future.
Well done so far. Please put me on the PM list if you have one.
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dark_jedi_lover
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2/25/07 10:55pm
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RE: Tragedy on the Landing Pad - Anakin/Barriss, AotC AU. (Short Story, possibly epic)
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Found this story browsing through the crackship thread, and I absolutely love it! I'd forgotten how much I liked Barriss and Luminara...I'm gonna have to go re-read The Approaching Storm and read the Medstar books now.
I love the way Anakin's and Barriss' relationship is developing in this story, with her comforting him and all. Very sweet and dramatic. When reading TAP I always thought they'd be cute together. 
Shmi being alive and well was a pleasant surprise, although the ending bit about going out for mushrooms made my heart skip a beat.
Cliegg thinking Barriss was Ani's girlfriend made me giggle.
I will definitely keep my eye on this story for future updates.
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Jade_Max
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3/21/07 2:52am
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RE: Tragedy on the Landing Pad - Anakin/Barriss, AotC AU. (Short Story, possibly epic)
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I’d like to take a moment and apologize for falling off the face of the planet with DRL kidnapping me so inconsiderately. I’ve been super busy – so much so I’ve had little time to write – or even read. A friend of mine’s getting married and I’m helping her plans. Needless to say, I think, is that it’s been hectic.
obsessedwithSW – I guess that stands to be seen, doesn’t it? *grin*
little_miss_jedi – I admit – I may yet kill Shmi, though Anakin has had the chance to see her and know her and that might just be enough to sway him away with Barriss’ help.
EverydayAngel – Indeed – Barriss might in fact be the key to saving Shmi – or I might be a witch and kill her off anyway. My Muse hasn’t decided.
HandmaidenVeme – Bad feelings abound! With good reason...
Valairy_Scot – I think Anakin’s been so afraid of not being able to return to his mother that he hasn’t a clue what to expect, or even dream. His perception of her stopped as a little boy so he hasn’t really moved beyond that idealistic vision of her.
CodyMonKenobi – I’m revealing nothing yet  Maybe the post after this one.
KELIA – Ah, everyone so continently forgets that Beru is out picking mushrooms too
VaderLVR64 – Good or bad is yet to be determined, my Muse hasn’t even decided yet lol! I’m glad you enjoyed the reunion with Anakin and Shmi – and his impression of Cleigg *grin*
DarthSilious – Yup, the three ladies are walking into danger and don’t yet know it – wouldn’t it be funny if nothing happened?
Raptor517 – Indeed, what is going to happen next, eh? I always love to surprise my readers!
LuminaraFan4Evr – I’m trying, I admit, to keep this close to the original plot line, but with enough twists and turns to keep it interesting
Jek_Windu – Comments like those ones humble me. I wish I was worth of such praise and will continue to strive for it, thanks for your kind words! I’d be happy to sign you up for my PM list 
Daenarrah – I couldn’t resist the comparison between a healthy and hale Cleigg and Anakin I admit I was looking forward to writing that about as much as everyone enjoyed reading it lol!
A Jedi to help never hurts
Mira_Jade – Thanks! Though I make no promises for Shmi’s continue good health *evil grin*
Jedi Trace – I want to keep it as close as possible to the plot without going completely randomly AU – though that will have to happen soon since the timeline’s now been tampered with.
Very telling - that last sentence. I guess it would be hard for her to understand the bond between a mother and son, since she never knew her mother. Well done!
*grin* I wanted to show that even though Barriss is trying to understand, she really can’t. Oh, she understands strong bonds thanks to the Master/Padawan bonds and her own forming bond with Anakin but can’t and never will understand the bond between a mother and child – not without having her own children that is.
dianethx – Welcome I’m flattered you’ve been enjoying my little tale thus far, I’d be happy to PM you
dark_jedi_lover – To be honest I’ve never read the Medstar books – but they’re on my to do.. Welcome, welcome, I’m flattered you’ve been enjoying my little crack!ship story *grin* I think you’re in good company when I say most everyone here believes that – without Padmé – Anakin and Barriss would have made a good couple.
As I mentioned above to another reader – I make no promises for Shmi’s continued good health – though things will get interesting from here on out.
Thanks for reading everyone! Update to Follow!
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Jade_Max
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3/21/07 2:54am
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RE: Tragedy on the Landing Pad - Anakin/Barriss, AotC AU. (Short Story, possibly epic)
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Heat.
Sand.
Wind-blown fire.
Blue lightning arced in powerful, deadly waves, deflecting and reflecting bolts meant to kill or maim. The eerie howls of enraged Tusken Raiders split the air, their weapons being brandished even as they continued to fire on the arc of blue-white lightning.
Chaos reigned.
Sand was blown, stirred into whirlwinds to race across the band of attackers. Pelted with tiny fragments, their call came again, this time mocking. Sand has no meaning to them, for their are fully shielded from it. The sand is their friend, their mentor. An integral part of their lifestyle. Sand is life and death.
The grains ignite as they touch the band of blue-white fire, a blazing trail behind a deadly path.
And still they come. Purple mixes with brown as a yell, clear as day, split the air, "Run! I'll hold them! Get yourselves to safety!" The clarion call is a break point as the wall of blue-white fire moves, stopping to coalesce into a single shining blade of light, the features behind the wall of fire bursting into sudden focus as the determination and confidence blazes from orbs as hard as rock.
Barriss.
Anakin hit the floor with a bang as his thrashing dislodged him from his bunk. He didn't feel it. Didn't feel the fall, or the impact; didn't feel the sting of his hands being abraded by the sand. He felt nothing. He was focused inwards, on his vision, cold seeping through him, radiating from his heart as it squeezed painfully in denial. "No."
No one heard his whispered denial as he fought through the mess of covers and found his feet, pausing only long enough to shrug into his robe. He darted from the room, padding on silent, bare feet in the pre-dawn gloom to the room that had been assigned to Beru and Barriss. He didn't pause to think, didn't pause to examine what he was doing or why, he simply acts.
The door flew open with a crash, echoing through the compound and waking both Cleigg and Owen, but Anakin was too preoccupied to notice. He took in both empty bunks, the lack of clothing laid out for the day. His gaze flashed to the bed he'd seen Barriss in and locked on the night table. The empty night table.
Anakin collapsed to his knees, his gaze focused on the nightstand and its glaring lack of evidence.
They were gone.
"They're gone."
Cleigg looked up startled from where Anakin stood in the doorway to the master bedroom. "Who's gone, son?"
"All of them. My mother, Beru and... and Barriss."
Cleigg's eyes narrowed as Anakin's voice cracked. "Don't be ridiculous, they can't have gone far."
"They're gone!" Anakin almost shouted the words, the frustration at not being understood resounding in his posture. "We have to search for them and we have to go now, we could already be too late."
"Too late for what?" Cleigg threw back the covers and reached for his trousers all in the same motion, tugging them on with swift movements. "What in blazes are you talking about?"
Anakin stopped, his fingers digging in to the doorframe with frightening strength. His voice cracked again so he swallowed, taking a deep breath, and looked his foster father full in the eyes. "The Tusken Raiders might already have them."
Cleigg, and Owen who'd come up behind Anakin, both reacted in the same manner. Alarmed. They darted to collect what they would need, and quickly, driven into action not so much by Anakin's words but the tone in which he spoke them.
Within minutes they'd jumped into Cleigg's speeder with Anakin at the helm, and were speeding off into the desert.
They came across Beru first. Barely five minutes out from the homestead they found her running full out across the dunes like her life depended on it. Anakin felt no terror coming from the stoic young woman, at least not for herself, as the speeder slowly and stopped beside her. Owen was out before the dust settled, pulling Beru into his arms. She had a scratch on one cheek and the back of her shirt was torn and bloodied.
"I'm fine Owen." The composed blonde told him firmly, even has her haunted blue eyes looked at Cleigg. "But Shmi and Barriss are still out there! We have to go after them."
"No." Owen was firm. "You're injured; you shouldn't be coming with us."
"You can't spare the time to take me back and still get there. It might already be too late!"
"We'll make time." Cleigg's tone brokered no argument.
"We can't just-"
"I said," Cleigg pinned Anakin with a dangerous look, reminding the young man that it wasn't just his mother out there but this man's wife. Cleigg well knew what he was doing but, in good conscience, wouldn't put Beru's health in jeopardy. "We'll make time. Owen, Beru, get in the speeder."
Anakin stared at the older man dumbfounded. "But-"
"No."
Anakin hopped out of the speeder. "Fine. Take Beru back to the homestead, but I'm going after them."
"It's too dangerous," Beru argued as she was tucked beneath Owen's arm. "The Tusken's will kill you."
"They will try," Anakin replied grimly. "Catch up if you can."
He didn't spare his foster family another thought as he reached for the Force. Using it to enhance his speed and stamina abilities while stretching out for the Force signature that was Barriss, he sped off into the sand dunes. He didn't think, didn't dare consider what would be waiting for him when he arrived at the site of his vision. Would they still be there, Barriss fending off the Tusken attack? Or had she been overpowered and taken captive the way he'd feared his mother had been? Would he even find them?
He pushed the thoughts aside, letting the Force guide his feet towards his destination.
He skidded to a stop as the thread suddenly vanished. A look of horror crossed his face as his knees buckled and he sank to the ground in disbelief. No, he thought frantically, groping mentally for the strands and signatures of his mother and Barriss.
His vision blurred, focusing on a sole, singular patch of stained sand that was but mere feet in front of him. The horror of the encounter rushed up to grab him by the throat, choking him like a physical thing as he saw the conclusion; Barriss wielding her lightsaber, valiantly fending off the Tusken raiders only to fall to a surge from both sides. Something caught her on the side of the head, a glancing blow but costly, and broke her concentration. Blood gushed from the wound and hit the sand-
No, No, NO!
He threw his head back, a scream of primal rage and denial torn from his throat to echo across the dune sea as he pulled away from the image. He fell forward, his hands landing in the still damp sand, red coating his fingertips and palms.
"They're not dead." He bit the phrase out with a grimace of determination. He knew it. Knew it like he knew his name was Anakin Skywalker. Both his mother and Barriss were alive! Females were often caught and traded between the Tuskens, used as slaves or sold for ransom. Some were used for their sadistic games while others were used in lieu of a Tusken Raider female.
Anakin shuddered, closing his eyes against the images of his dreams that were suddenly very, very real - with on exception; Barriss. She had changed them by coming along with his mother. But had she changed them for the better? Bile rose in the back of his throat and he didn't resist, letting the sick feeling overtake him for several minutes and the contents of his stomach mingled with the edges of the blood stain.
He wiped his mouth with the back of his hand several moments later and took a deep breath. He was trembling; determined. The Tusken Raiders wouldn't have gotten far. And they wouldn't get much farther. His eyes flashed as he opened them, determination setting his jaw at a stubborn angle. He wouldn't fail. He refused to even think about the possibility.
But somewhere, in the back of his mind, he was terrified. If he did fail he was going to lose everything still worth living for.
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HandmaidenVeme
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Poor Anakin.
I hope he's able to get to them on time .
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Great job on the vision. I loved how it woke him up and he pushed the two other men to go after the women immediately. Even if the Tuskens have camped, Anakin should be able to get there in time to save them from death. Maybe not pain, but death. I hope.
Well done!
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what a twist, what a vision for Anakin.
It had me shaking.
"It's too dangerous," Beru argued as she was tucked beneath Owen's arm. "The Tusken's will kill you."
"They will try," Anakin replied grimly. "Catch up if you can."
That part gave me shivers, I so saw anakin in roTS, and just . . . wow.
Praying for everyones continued good health.
~MJ
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Raptor517
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I bet the Tuskens run into problems when Barriss wakes up. Things fall over, fly around, and other Force powers. And Barriss is also a healer... this is gonna be good. And Anakin on the rampage= 
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