MistiWhitesun posted: Fear leads to anger; anger leads to hate; hate leads to suffering. All true, when they're out of control. That doesn't mean that Jedi can't feel or produce them—even Master Billaba slaughtered who knows how many people in the Summertime War on… wherever she went insane. Every civil person has to learn how to control themselves. We were no different. If we controlled ourselves more than most, we were also more dangerous than most people, as well.
MistiWhitesun posted: The steady mechanical breathing is creepy, a form of enslavement in itself. The very concept of slavery used to drive him up the bulkhead. How does he stand it?
MistiWhitesun posted: So the suit has significantly dulled his Force sense, but it's still far better than mine.
MistiWhitesun posted: I screech with the rough abdominal delivery, expert only in Vader's handling of his lightsaber. He used to be better, but he does manage quite well even with all that added machinery.
MistiWhitesun posted: Abruptly, the living Hell before me doesn't seem so bad. As for after it—well, that's in the Force's hands. I took mine out of it years ago when I started putting them somewhere no Padawan's should go and ultimately made this baby.
YOU'RE BACK!!!
---and you wrote a Scout fic?! Absolutely lovely! The poor girl needs more attention, and you handled her down-to-earth toughness so well.
Oh, the ending of this fic was absolutely killer, though! Poor Scout, indeed! I was wibbling a great deal for her, and Vader being there---what a chilling parallel! I liked how you wrote that bit, in disturbing flashes like that, it was great technique. This fic was so very sad, but it captured the feeling of the Purge very vividly, and you had just enough future hope in there. Well done! You really did a great job with the perspective and writing on this!
I'm so glad to see you back! Stick around, please! I'd love to see more from you!
wow, this was a very good fic.
where can I start? Seeing your own death and embracing it... staring down the barrel of the shotgun moments before it's fired is scary enough, its psychological torture.
I liked the reference to my favorite Star Wars book, Shatterpoint. Scout's analysis and reflection on the Jedi and the Jedi Code in Part 2 was really deep and on-point. It inspires a lot of thought concerning the Jedi philosophy.
And part 3, well I liked best. Scout's little comments . . . reflect the attention to detail that I really liked about this piece.
Also, MistiWhitesun posted:Abruptly, the living Hell before me doesn't seem so bad. As for after it—well, that's in the Force's hands. I took mine out of it years ago when I started putting them somewhere no Padawan's should go and ultimately made this baby. hehe
MistiWhitesun posted:Abruptly, the living Hell before me doesn't seem so bad. As for after it—well, that's in the Force's hands. I took mine out of it years ago when I started putting them somewhere no Padawan's should go and ultimately made this baby.
Meep! Oh, this was beautiful. It's exactly the future I can see Scout making for herself after the Purge, and you wrote her SO well. I can definitely see the acceptance at the end. Oh MAN. ...Although now I'm wondering what happens to Tallis!
For some reason I kept missing things on the first few readthroughs, but, well, I kept coming back to it.
The Force-strong vs. Force-sensitive thing is throwing me off; I think I get a general idea of what you mean, but I'm not sure where you're getting it from -- there could easily be a reference I'm missing, and the difference is not very intuitive to me.
I'm sort of boggled by the idea that Scout is sleeping with Plagueis's grandson and figures she's learned more about the Sith by this point than Dooku ever did, and yet I can see it, in a strange way. If Plagueis taught his daughter enough "out of line," and if Sidious held back.... Heh, I liked Palpatine missing or overlooking Plagueis's relatives (I assume you're not using the recent revelation that Plagueis was a Muun...), even if it doesn't seem to have made that much difference in the end.
I like that Scout had connections, as a surviving Jedi, and was able to use them. I like that she is still in very many ways a Jedi even now -- the marks of her upbringing, the old habits. I love the way you use the Code, half and half, in chapters 1 and 3. (I think perhaps I would call 4 an epilogue, largely because of that and POV.)
I like it that Vader remembers her. I like I remember everyone!... and that sounds more like the old Anakin than Vader, somehow.
I am going to fall asleep over the keyboard if I keep this up. Might try composing more later, can re-comment or PM as you please.