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ginchy Registered: May '05	Date Posted: 6/25/08 10:40am Subject: RE: In Plain Sight: Luke's Story -- ANH AU - 6/24/08 --Final chapter up!
	Well, wow. I'm just not even sure what to say other than that. Wow. Just wow. You awe me with your writing, your plotting, the smallest ideas that leap forward. And I was very worried there for a moment about my Lukie, but luckily, he's okay--actually, probably better than okay at this point. So... there will be a sequel?? Excellent work!!! -----signature----- Positivity. ** Okay, seriously. It’s a Rebel Alliance t-shirt. It is NOT a fleur-de-lis.
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Rigil_Kent Registered: Jan '04	Date Posted: 6/25/08 3:57pm Subject: RE: In Plain Sight: Luke's Story -- ANH AU - 6/24/08 --Final chapter up!
	Frak, that was one kick ass story. Very well done and the twisted homages to the movies were so fricking cool... Come so I may strip your soul of darkness and scar you with light. <- What an unbelievably cool line. If you're doing a PM list for the sequel, I definitely want to be on it so I don't overlook that story like I nearly did with this one. -----signature----- An armed society is a polite society. Manners are good when one may have to back up his acts with his life. -Robert Heinlein Tyranny Reborn: http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/28516174/p1 Shattered Dreams: http://boards.theforce.
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Jade_Pilot Registered: Dec '05	Date Posted: 6/25/08 4:21pm Subject: RE: In Plain Sight: Luke's Story -- ANH AU - 6/24/08 --Final chapter up!
	furry, child! You are indeed a poet! Thank you for this wonderful journey. It has truly been amazing adventure and I look forward to the sequel. "They could grow up in a few years, grow strong and straight, unbent by the burden of another soul." Love the angst and the promise of a tomorrow together! Bravo and well done!! -----signature----- BOO!
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KELIA Title: The Pretty in Pink Fan Fic Manager Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 6/26/08 11:05am Subject: RE: In Plain Sight: Luke's Story -- ANH AU - 6/24/08 --Final chapter up!
	WOW that was some ending. I'm already looking forward to the sequel. I enjoyed this from beginning to end. Bravo on a job well done -----signature----- "Do or do not, there is no try." Master Yoda A Light In The Darkness: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28150602/p1/?8 NaNaWriMo Progress: 11,018
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divapilot Registered: Nov '05	Date Posted: 6/26/08 5:21pm Subject: RE: In Plain Sight: Luke's Story -- ANH AU - 6/24/08 --Final chapter up!
	I love how this story takes the familiar characters and makes them inversions and reflections of themselves. The scene at the end, of Obi-Wan waiting for Luke while Vader protests he shouldn't leave, he hasn't finished his training: Brilliant! Brilliant! Your writing is always thoughtful and thought provoking. It's like opening a gift that you already know is going to be really, really good. Can't wait for the sequel! -----signature----- Never tell me the odds. UConn: Huskies forever! RIP Jasper Howard, #6 "Focus on what matters. It's about the GAME, not each other. Dumb humans."
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Independence1776 Registered: Feb '06	Date Posted: 6/27/08 2:26pm Subject: RE: In Plain Sight: Luke's Story -- ANH AU - 6/24/08 --Final chapter up!
	Wow. Wonderful, wonderful story. Glad Mara killed the clone! Leia... married to Biggs. Makes sense, though. But her headaches- she needs training, doesn't she? His first untarnished sight was of his uncle flinging the body of his possessor over the edge of the tower. With an ear-splitting crack and a howl of blue energy, Palpatine’s body impacted with the garden far below. For the first time in a night of profound dark, light erupted as the gardens burst into flame. Good! “You know…you have to know that I can’t follow you. There’s something I have to do first. I don’t know what, but I’m not the person I was supposed to be. I need to find out who that is.” Smart. Oh, wow. Obi-Wan being cruel, determined to treat Luke in the polar opposite he treated Anakin. Duology! Good. Would you be willing to PM when you post it? Again, wonderful story! -----signature----- "Independence forever." John Adams Padawan to Luna_Nightshade Fics in bio Mostly lurking at the moment
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MsLanna Title: CR GSFF Central = Offizieller Burger Brater Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 7/2/08 6:20am Subject: RE: In Plain Sight: Luke's Story -- ANH AU - 6/24/08 --Final chapter up!
	Wow. I mean - wow. Such a great story and now you manage to end it with answering as many questions as you give us new ones. At least nobody important is dead - yet. And Luke still doesn't know about his father, it's driving me up the walls. A really great story! I just hope you pm me when the 'sequel stuff' gets posted, because I might just miss it otherwise. -----signature----- "You will kill yourself trying to live up to their expectations." "That's okay for me." Cuyir adate jate, bal droten ori'dush Proud Master and buir'ika of Commander_Ducky. My New Title: Lords and Ladies of the Empire
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Gabri_Jade Title: Fan Fiction Archive Editor Emeritus Registered: Nov '02	Date Posted: 7/3/08 12:41am Subject: RE: In Plain Sight: Luke's Story -- ANH AU - 6/24/08 --Final chapter up!
	Ah, such brilliant work. First off, the summary was great. It was really helpful to be able to refresh my memory about the rest of the story before the final section, and it was just as well written as the rest of the story. I LOLed at the Palace having delusions of grandeur. Luke's despair over Mara's presence is great, and Palpatine's line about Luke's hand being the one to kill her was just chilling. Passing the training salles, a memory pushed at the edges of her serenity. In this room she beat him for the first time and nearly amputated his right index finger. They had to venture out into Coruscant for the services of a private physician—Mara wasn’t eager for her Master’s people to know of her little sparring sessions and Luke agreed wholeheartedly, for whatever reasons of his own. It was his first experience of the city without his handlers. They stopped at a stuffed nausage stand. Mara taught him how to pick a pocket (without the Force). They climbed a tree in a park; she’d never climbed a tree before. She remembered him stretching out along a broad limb, back comfortably settled into the trunk, eyes closed. He looked so different when he was relaxed. Harmless almost; young. She remembered the golden light on his skin, the way his hair fell across his forehead, the smooth long lines of his body against the clear air…She remembered the strange feeling she had, looking at Luke that way… This is excellent. Wonderful way to work a bit of exposition in without derailing the narrative, and such a subtle and realistic way to show Mara's growing feelings for Luke. “You don’t even know me.” A spasm of anger drew down his eyebrows. “What are you doing? Stop it! I am a Sith, Lord of the darkness, and your blood belongs to me!” “No,” Mara agreed. Her voice was hardly audible, even to her. “I don’t know you. The Luke I know would never stoop to such melodrama.” That's our Mara. “Leia, darling.” Biggs reaches her side and steadies her, blank terror on his face. “Is it the headache? Are you losing the baby?” Mutely, she twitches her head ‘no’. Even that small motion sends a kaleidoscope of agony spinning through her temples. No. This is different. The same…but different. She will not lose unborn Ilse. What, then, did she lose? Few stories throw me so off balance so often as this one has. I never seem to see your twists coming. How strange, to think of Leia married to Biggs. Because it was not Luke. When Palpatine came to us, he brought his new apprentice he created and trained in secret. The boy was called Darth Scelerous. My master created him from the body of nephew. I do not know how long this clone had been alive, but it was a sad, twisted thing. It is good that Scelerous has passed into the Force. again! For a long moment, there was nothing—and then, then Mara Jade exploded into the Force with a rocketing joy that burned. The Sith recoiled. He wondered for a moment what his apprentice had been doing all these months with the Emperor’s Hand. grins Great line, even if Luke and Mara hadn't quite gotten up to what he might be thinking. This time, Mara battled the Luke she knew. The Luke she could overcome. Palpatine’s shock was evident in the Force as she parried his every blow. In this form, her master could only use the skill and power of his host. And Mara was intimately familiar with the fighting form of this particular host. Hee! In that moment, Mara saw how to save him. She loved him. They had no past as lovers, only friendship. There would be no future. But in right now, in this moment, Mara Jade loved Luke Skywalker enough for all time. Enough to face her death at his hands. Oooh, really, really powerful section. “Back there…” he ventured. “What you said.” A short nod. “Was it just for…I guess what I’m asking…How much did you mean it?” Mara stilled. Unexpectedly, a hot flush singed Luke’s ears. He wished he hadn’t said anything. And then, the smile. It curled up one corner of her lips, then the other, then stretched out into something joyful and bright and impish all at once—a purely Mara Jade smile. “Well, Varewé,” she replied, curling up her legs and turning to face him, “I meant it as much as you believed it.” Hee, I'm grinning like an idiot even rereading it. I will not see him again for a long time, something whispered to her. Part of her rebelled at the thought—most of her did. But the rest, the part of Mara Jade that had been broken by betrayal and rebuilt by love, that part felt an odd sort of freedom at the realization. Life love is a heavy weight to bear, and neither of them was strong enough or old enough to carry it now. In a few years…in a few years. They could grow up in a few years, grow strong and straight, unbent by the burden of another soul. Exactly as it should be. Good for you for not giving in to the temptation of giving them an immediate happily ever after - and it is a temptation. But they need some time to become themselves first. I like the idea of Luke promising to find her no matter what. You never loved me. Even though he knew it was only animated vapor he spoke to, it wore his mother’s face. No, she said kindly. I never did. So sad, even now. Though they looked nothing alike, Luke didn’t doubt and knew he never would. This was his sister. He knew it with a conviction that sang up through his bones, that gloried with recognition and ached with joy. Such lovely, lovely writing. “My son,” the dark lord whispered hollowly. “My son.” I will find you, Luke Skywalker. And when we meet again, I think I will not find it within me to be as selfless. I will not lose you again. again!! I will be cruel to him, Obi-Wan thinks distantly. I will tempt him with the thing he craves and always keep him starving for it. I will never let him have it. I will never let myself love him, and he will never know Leia Darklighter. The coldness of the realization startles him a little. He thought he would feel…guilt, sorrow, anything but this calm sense of duty. “It’s for the galaxy,” he whispers. “For you, precious Leia, so you can live out your short life in peace and happiness. For the child Ilse and the Jedi Order she will found. For you…Anakin. My brother. So you may atone for your sins through him.” It is enough. It is worth the price. He will be cruel, and he will not regret it. The old man pulls the hood around his face and goes inside. Come, little Skywalker. Come so I may strip your soul of darkness and scar you with light. Come to be broken and shaped. Come, so you may become the terrible weapon I require. Come to me. Oh, my. A/N: What's Ben's plan for Luke? What's wrong with Leia, and how did she end up with Biggs? What awaits Mara in Ixilta? Unfortunately...that's sequel stuff. This was intended to be a short duology, Luke and Leia's Stories. Yeah. Right. IPS finished up at 37K, a baby epic. I love stories that wind up longer than they were meant to be. (Especially when I'm not the one writing them. ) Sequel . . . twitches longingly I hope your muse is cooperative, because I rather desperately want to read it. Regardless, though, this story is a marvelous accomplishment. I'm so very impressed with it on all fronts - such an intricate story and such lyrical writing. Thank you so much for writing and sharing it. -----signature----- Evil Twin of LadyPadme This concept of "wuv" confuses and infuriates us! - Futurama All I can do is be me. Whoever that is. - Bob Dylan Serendipity (Leia-Mara vig) - http://boards.theforce.net/b/b1/30178069 !!11!1eleventy
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Blue_Milkshake Registered: Nov '05	Date Posted: 7/6/08 7:54am Subject: RE: In Plain Sight: Luke's Story -- ANH AU - 6/24/08 --Final chapter up!
	Wonderful!!! I will absolutely be on the look-out for the sequel. At least Leia isn't a Sith, but a "short life"?!?!? So Luke's going to be a Jedi now? I hope he won't allow his love for Mara to be scoured away by his training. -----signature----- Not all chemicals are bad. Without chemicals such as hydrogen and oxygen, for example, there would be no way to make water, a vital ingredient in beer. --Dave Barry
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divapilot Registered: Nov '05	Date Posted: 7/19/08 3:32pm Subject: RE: In Plain Sight: Luke's Story -- ANH AU - 6/24/08 --Final chapter up!
	Congratulations on your wins in the Saga Awards! -----signature----- Never tell me the odds. UConn: Huskies forever! RIP Jasper Howard, #6 "Focus on what matters. It's about the GAME, not each other. Dumb humans."
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Jade_Pilot Registered: Dec '05	Date Posted: 7/20/08 11:01am Subject: RE: In Plain Sight: Luke's Story -- ANH AU - complete -- Thanks for your support in the Awards! - Date Edited: 7/20/08 11:04am (1 edits total) Edited By: Jade_Pilot
	Congratulations furry!!!! -----signature----- BOO!
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bi0nic Registered: Feb '06	Date Posted: 9/9/08 2:30pm Subject: RE: In Plain Sight: Luke's Story -- ANH AU - complete -- Thanks for your support in the Awards!
	Wow. That seems to be a word that has gotten a lot of use in other people's replies, and for good reason. Just . . . wow. This was a brilliant read, Trish. From the expertly-handled pacing, to the characterisation of the Palace (Plagueis? ), to the clever use of the present tense in the cut-away italicised mini-scenes of Obi-Wan and Leia, to the constantly simmering relationship between Luke and Mara, to the will they/won't they find out about their true relationship of Luke and Vader's interactions, there were so many things to admire about this fic. And there were so many great lines, as well: His old memories are irrelevant, new ones not worth dwelling on. Sometimes he used to drag out faces, beautiful ones, noble ones, innocent ones, hang them in misty frames and allow himself to be miserable—just for the diversion. Now, even regret is worn out from overuse. Something…a gentle current, tugging at him, a whisper brushing his mind like late summer air Vader turned slightly away. His cape caught the wind and furled out behind, undulating darkness against a backdrop even darker. He wondered if his capacity for empathy and emotion had finally callused over. Some really funny ones, too: “Cagey already, huh? Okay, so, what’s this guy like? Can you tell me that much? Does he put on the freaky bathrobe one arm at a time? Can he hold spicy food? Is that one rumor about the mynocks and the Devoranian prostitute true? Can—” Lobbyists are guerilla fighters with blackmail instead of blasters. So far, her only specialties he knew of were courtly manners and a mean roundhouse. And the final chapter alone had a whole clutch of quotables: Palace to Varewé. Plageuris to Palpatine. Of what significance are names? I am hatred. I am envy. I am the rot that consumes all life. I am the whispering voice that turns brother against brother, nation against nation. I am the liar. I am the betrayer. Just as I have taught you both to hate, to envy, to consume, to tear apart, to lie and betray, so I do to you now. Mara Jade had sparred with Luke Varewé many, many times over the past year. Sometimes they fought fast and dirty and sometimes with a slow grace that was almost a dance, but however they fought, she could always remember it later. An archive of perfect holograms shimmering with crisply defined motions lived in her mind. From this cache, layer on layer of parry and lunge and riposte, she learned Luke. His strengths. His vulnerabilities. His style. How she could win, and when she would always lose. Tonight—tonight was something entirely different. Since she was fifteen years old, Leia has lived with the sensation that her skin is too fragile to contain her, that a strange mass of energy is packed into every hollow between every bone and organ and demands release. Demands to tear her frame apart. He was not meant for this. There was another Luke, another life that should have been only beginning where his was ending. If only he could live. If he could live, he would fly. He would see all the stars. Though they looked nothing alike, Luke didn’t doubt and knew he never would. This was his sister. He knew it with a conviction that sang up through his bones, that gloried with recognition and ached with joy. Congrats on having written a fantastic story, and on the awards you deservedly won for it. Now where's that sequel!? -----signature----- "I'm the sickest linguistically illicit lyrical misfit in the business And probably in existence, what's your consensus?" - Canibus Padawan to furrylittlebantha
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