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The Broken Shell -- COMPLETED (Epilogue added)
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FitJedi
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5/16 8:22pm
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RE: The Broken Shell (sequel to "The First Time" an A/P drama/romance/angst) COMPLETED
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Ohhh a happy ending after all, absolutely wonderful way to end a tremendous story. Great job!
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HeKilledYounglings
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6/26 5:43pm
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Epilogue
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EPILOGUE:
It was a quiet morning at the lakeside Naboo villa where Padme Naberrie Skywalker, and her husband, Anakin Skywalker lived. Many months had passed since her husband stepped down as emperor. But the trial of Senator Squeen, was fast approaching. She’d heard, a trial date had been arranged by the court.
Padme watched as the Millennium Falcon landed and docked in a field a short distance from the villa. Soon, Obi Wan Kenobi dispatched and walked down the landing platform. As he approached, she wondered if he brought news about the impending trial.
Padme met him at the door and Obi Wan greeted her with open arms. He crushed her with a joyful embrace before jumping back in surprise and alarm by the firm roundness of her belly.
“Leia and Luke will have a sibling to keep up with. Anakin tells me it’s a boy,” she offered.
“I’m… astounded,” Obi Wan said, blue eyes wide. “Anakin mentioned nothing of it.”
Padme smiled. “He’s superstitious, that’s all… what brings you to Naboo? Have we a trial date for Senator Squeen? Is Anakin going to testify?”
“Well,” said Obi Wan, his voice taking a grimmer tone. “I have good news and bad news.”
“What is it?” she gasped.
“Master Windu sends a message…. He said, the galaxy is at peace now, thanks to you.”
Padme, overwhelmed, clutched her heart. “I’m hardly responsible…” she insisted.
“He’s retired his suit.”
“But he’ll die without it!” she exclaimed.
“He said, there was peace in the Republic and his time has passed.”
“Is he gone now?”
“I’m afraid so. “
“And Master Yoda?”
“Is well. We’ve given him accommodations. A station close to the temple, a private home where he’s taken a vow to spend the rest of his days in meditation.”
“So he’s retired as well?”
“Not in the same sense, as Master Windu, of course.”
Padme looked grieved. Obi Wan laid a consoling hand on her shoulder.
“Dear Padme, do not grieve Master Windu. He’ll always be with us. In fact, I commune with Master Windu often.”
“You commune with him?”
“Qui Gon appeared to me several weeks ago and tutored Master Yoda, myself, and Master Windu, how to commune from the other side. Master Windu is at peace and sends his love.”
“Then I should see him again?”
“Perhaps,” Obi Wan smiled. “If the Force wills it, then it will be so.”
Padme moved aside, allowing Obi Wan room to walk into the house. He looked around, at the expanded arched ceiling, the windows near the peak of the roof, and at the stream of sunshine beaming in.
“You’ve a lovely home,” he said.
“I’m so happy, I’ve never been so happy in my entire life.”
It was almost hard to believe they were the same couple, who had been so miserable for so many years, Obi Wan thought.
“I’m glad to hear it, Padme. Is Anakin home?”
“He is. And Dorme, is she well?”
“She sends her love.”
“Please tell her I said, ‘hello’. I’ll find Anakin and tell him you are here to see him.”
Padme disappeared down a nearby hall and Obi Wan sat on the sofa and waited. A few minutes later, Anakin walked in. He wore a dark shirt, fitted brown pants, and black boots. He looked as tall and fresh as he did many years ago. Age had not made its mark on him yet. He was too muscular and too strong. Obi Wan imagined, Anakin would be as fit as Dooku had been, in fifty years.
“So… we have a trial date?” Anakin asked.
“The prosecutors have summoned you. They need your testimony to keep Senator Squeen behind bars.”
Anakin shook his head. “Padme is due any day now. I can’t leave her. Is it possible to delay the trial?”
“Unfortunately, we cannot. Senator Squeen could be set free on a technicality, I hear.”
“What? They can’t do that!”
“They can without your testimony.”
Anakin shook his head. “I have a terrible feeling about this.”
“About the trial?”
“About Padme.”
“Anakin…Anakin, Anakin! Padme will be fine. Luke will be here to protect her, I assure you he is more than capable. His Force abilities have doubled in the past few months.”
“Luke is reckless. Always on about an adventure and carrying on with that Mara girl...”
“Padme will surely give him one if he’s not careful.”
“That’s what I’m afraid of.”
“Bring her to Coruscant. At least, she’ll be under your direct protection.”
“No. Old political enemies, assassins. I can’t risk it. And Leia, I worry about her even more.”
“Leia?”
“Well, she’s been quietly mooning about that Han Solo character in her room.”
“Han Solo? He’s flew us here. He's with the ship.”
Anakin looked out the window.
“Then I'm surprised she hadn't sensed him by now.”
“He’s a good man, our friend Captain Solo.”
“He’s a pirate. I’ve contracted him more than once, and he double deals.”
“She’s like her mother then.”
Anakin quirked a brow.
“She has an attraction to dangerous men.”
Anakin groaned. “That’s exactly what I worry about.”
Anakin stared out of the window. Han Solo had his tool case out, and a side panel open on the side of the ship. He stuck his head inside and made repairs.
“Can I offer you something to drink, Master Kenobi?” Padme called. "It's almost noon. Anakin and I usually have drinks around this time."
"And dessert, too," Anakin said, a devious grin on his face.
Padme playfully slapped him on the shoulder.
“Thank you,” Obi Wan replied.
Anakin followed Padme across the living room and wrapped his arms around her waist, touching her belly.
“The courts have summoned me to testify,” he whispered in her ear.
Padme’s eyebrows rose. “That’s a good thing, isn’t it?”
She shrugged out of his grasp and walked into the kitchen. She poured spiced milk for Anakin and Obi Wan, and tea for herself.
“I’m worried. The trial could go on for days. Weeks, even. I can’t leave you here. The baby is due any day now.”
“Then I’ll go with you,” she said, moving close to kiss him on the lips.
Anakin returned the gesture, his back to Obi Wan.
“We have too many political enemies there on Coruscant. More than before, now that I’m not in office. Were it not for my regiment of troops, I’m sure our enemies would have made a move by now. And remember, our promise to have the baby here on Naboo and our promise to make him a natural citizen .”
“I know, but, I want to be with you. That’s all that matters, Ani.”
“When is the trial?” Anakin asked, looking over his shoulder at Obi Wan.
“Next month. You have twenty five days to prepare.”
“Anakin!” Padme exclaimed. “You worried me! The baby is due well before then.”
Anakin let out a relieved sigh.
“Have you decided on a name?” Obi Wan asked.
Anakin and Padme exchanged smiles.
“Just what we wanted to talk about,” Padme said. “We’re naming him…”
“Kenobi Skywalker,” they said in unison, happy expressions on their faces.
“Well, that’s a fine name, you have for your boy. I’m honored,” Obi Wan said.
He wasn’t one for emotion, Anakin thought. But he could sense the happiness Obi Wan felt.
The Jedi Master stood and walked toward the door. Upon opening it, he saw Leia and Han Solo standing next the Falcon and Han Solo, in a deep voice telling the “kid” to “beat it”.
“Are you leaving so soon?” Padme asked. “Won’t you stay for a while? We have a guest house in the back.”
“Dorme will miss me. We were just on our way to the Outer Rim, to Justice. We’re getting married. She’s waiting for me on the Falcon.”
Anakin could hear the urgency in his voice. “Married!” Anakin exclaimed. “But I thought—“
“Master Yoda gave his blessing. Dorme and I will be very happy together, I'm sure.”
“Well, what are you waiting for? Invite her inside. Anakin will marry you!” Padme beamed.
“What do you think, Anakin?”
Anakin smiled. “Of course, I’ll marry you. Naboo is a very special place to be married, after all.”
He turned and winked at Padme, who grabbed his hand and held tight... memories of their union, gave a twinkle to her eyes.
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ROTSFan
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That's sweet, I actually didn't expect the epilogue! And that's very nice that Dorme was able to redeem herself and be accepted again by everyone. I think she and Obi-Wan are hot together.
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HeKilledYounglings
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Date Posted:
6/27 8:41am
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RE: The Broken Shell -- COMPLETED (Epilogue added)
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yeah im thinking about writing a new story about that. dorme and obi wan with some anakin and padme thrown in. i'm not sure if i will start the new story here in this thread or if i should make a new thread for it.
NG asked for an epilogue a while back to tie up some of the loose ends. i finally got around to doing it. 
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I still want to see what happens with The Tower. The Dorme/Obi-Wan story would be a good idea! I'd be interested to see how he helped her get over her Anakin fixation. And you know I'm always game for the adult PM's. 
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I was thinking I'm not sure Dorme HAS gotten over that fixation bwahahaha.
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Oh, geez!  That is evil. 
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That was good, but it didn't answer what happened to Mara.
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I thought it did say in the epilogue that Luke had been "carrying on with that Mara girl" and that Anakin was wondering about it...
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Wow, I just read the whole thing from top to bottom! First of all, I want to say that it's wonderful how seriously you take your readers' comments. That said, it was a fascinating story with all the twists and turns. Anakin really had a hard time learning his lessons, and it was too bad that Padme felt forced to do what she did in order to bring peace to her family. I'm still shaking my head that Threepio was the one to actually save her...
And now, Luke is messing around with that Mara girl, and Leia is attracted to Han. Right, both are attracted to dangerous people, it seems, just like their mom. I just love when everything works out in the end, even Obi Wan is getting married. Good to see some of the changes in the Order, I agree that many of the restrictions led to their downfall. That was an elitist attitude, if you ask me.
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Leia can't be with Han now, he's still too old for her. She's only 15.
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powerfulforce posted:
Leia can't be with Han now, he's still too old for her. She's only 15.
Maybe they don't have statutory laws in this AU. I mean, if they can send little kids into battle...
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I believe I updated a few days ago, somewhere that Mara ran away if I'm not mistake. I'm not sure though, but I know that I mentioned Mara. In fact, I updated her age to 5 when Obi Wan is holding her for the first time.
Im not interested in her character much so it remains a plot hole for now lol. Leia will be 18 when she's finally with Han.
I think Han will be 28 though. Hm. Still a little too old. I'll have to think that through. I haven't even decided how much time this new story wll cover. But hopefully, at the end, everything will tie together.
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dm1 posted:
Wow, I just read the whole thing from top to bottom! First of all, I want to say that it's wonderful how seriously you take your readers' comments. That said, it was a fascinating story with all the twists and turns. Anakin really had a hard time learning his lessons, and it was too bad that Padme felt forced to do what she did in order to bring peace to her family. I'm still shaking my head that Threepio was the one to actually save her...
And now, Luke is messing around with that Mara girl, and Leia is attracted to Han. Right, both are attracted to dangerous people, it seems, just like their mom. I just love when everything works out in the end, even Obi Wan is getting married. Good to see some of the changes in the Order, I agree that many of the restrictions led to their downfall. That was an elitist attitude, if you ask me.
Well done!
That is so cool DM1, thanks for reading. I'm glad it held your attention. I'll have to piece this whole thing together one day, and figure out how many pages it is.
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HeKilledYounglings posted:
Leia will be 18 when she's finally with Han.
I think Han will be 28 though. Hm. Still a little too old. I'll have to think that through. I haven't even decided how much time this new story wll cover. But hopefully, at the end, everything will tie together.
Hmmm....1/2 your age + 7....wasn't that the socially acceptable range? LOL seriously though they're fine together. There's nothing wrong with 28 and 18, especially where Han and Leia are concerned.
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