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Author	Topic: Vadey's Drabble Thread - Round 2 - COMPLETE! Weeks 19 and 20 posted
VaderLVR64 Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 9/24/07 8:21am Subject: Vadey's Drabble Thread - Round 2 - COMPLETE! Weeks 19 and 20 posted - Date Edited: 2/21/08 6:28am (21 edits total) Edited By: VaderLVR64
	Week 1 (09.24.07) 1. Smooth When he thinks of her, shimmersilk and moonlight come to mind. She is all that is smooth and soft and cool. She is his redeemer. His love. The light that guides him along his path, despite all the obstacles. Padmé…the sound of her name soothes him in the night, gives him strength during the day. She keeps him sane and whole and righteous. Without her, he is nothing. With her, he can do anything. She comes to him, skirts rustling, the smooth silk of her flesh pressed to him. And all is right with him. He caresses her smooth skin… 2. Rough When he lets himself remember her, he recalls the gentle and loving touch of her rough hands. Hands worn by work and burdens too heavy for her to bear. Yet she bore them all without complaint, doing what she had to do and smiling as she did so. Even a mother’s love must know some bounds, he often thought. But hers never had. Now she was gone, lost to his own weakness and failure and he would never feel that rough, loving touch again. Could he find forgiveness? Did he want to? Shmi Skywalker – of callused hands and tender heart. 3. Dry His mouth was dry, burning, parched. He could still feel the hungry flames licking at him greedily as he endured the agony of the black sands of Mustafar. The heat had seared his flesh, his lungs, burned away delicate tissue as he writhed and cried out for mercy that would never come. Even now, as the droids worked on him, he longed only for the cooling reprieve of water trickling down his throat. Never had he known such thirst, such overwhelming need for moisture. It burned him, branded him, scalded him. He endured. Licked at burnt lips. Nothing. Just pain. 4. Wrinkled The scars were old and he had grown used to them years ago. No, they mattered little now, for his face – his shame – was hidden from those who might mock him. His flesh was pale and wasted now, strangely marked by the wrinkles brought with the passage of years. He was not an old man. Not really. But he had aged twenty years for every five. Strange how much the Dark Side took, though it promised so much. At least in the beginning. “I am old,” he said, flinching. “I am old.” The monster in the mirror could not disagree. 5. Weathered Obi-Wan glanced at the stranger in the mirror. It had not been an accident that he had not purchased one of his own. He could not bear to see himself…see his failure. So he had not known what he looked like for years now. Nor cared. Still, that glimpse was a shock. Obi-Wan Kenobi, Jedi Knight and Master had disappeared. Replaced by a weather-beaten stranger. An old man really, cast aside and past his usefulness. A warrior become a hermit, a man who had become a ghost. Weathered by life, by grief…by the harsh, demanding life of Tatooine. A stranger. -----signature----- R.I.P John, Alex, Jason, and Christian Never forgotten Soldiers' Angels http://soldiersangels.org/ 2114 soldiers waiting for someone to care
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earlybird-obi-wan Title: PT Scene Contest Winner Registered: Aug '06	Date Posted: 9/24/07 9:12am Subject: RE: Vadey's Drabble Thread - Round 2
	Great short glimpses into Anakin and Obi-Wan's lives. Will you continue this? If so will you give me a PM? -----signature----- writer and Star Wars fan FANART [link=http://boards.theforce.net/fan_art/b10020/25793899]fanart[/link] stories in my bio
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mavjade Title: Fan Fiction Manager Registered: Sep '05	Date Posted: 9/24/07 12:31pm Subject: RE: Vadey's Drabble Thread - Round 2
	Wow! These were powerful, MommaV! I loved them all, but I would say that Wrinkled was my favorite! I can't wait to read next weeks! -----signature----- Parent: I need a snot sucker! My coworker: Does she mean a bulb syringe or a Respiratory Therapist?? NaNoWriMo '09: Unto Itself, A Higher Law: 10,307 words so far
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Alexis_Wingstar Registered: Sep '06	Date Posted: 9/24/07 12:53pm Subject: RE: Vadey's Drabble Thread - Round 2
	From tender and sweet to tragic and haunting, you've made a wonderful start in this round of drabbles. There's no need to PM me, as I'll be keeping an eye out for updates. -----signature----- 3rd time NaNoWriMo Participant 3rd time's the charm, right? RIGHT?
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SilSolo Registered: Mar '04	Date Posted: 9/24/07 9:41pm Subject: RE: Vadey's Drabble Thread - Round 2
	so touching, especially the second and the third. I hope Anakin could understand that Shmi never blamned him in the first place -----signature----- http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/27517284/p1/?11 Like this quick sketch: http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/32848083/ ? Then commission me. Prices are negotiable.
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BigFatty Registered: Mar '05	Date Posted: 9/24/07 11:33pm Subject: RE: Vadey's Drabble Thread - Round 2
	Absolutely beautiful writing style. Loved them all. -----signature----- 1 Peter 3:15 My Fics: http://fattysfics.livejournal.com My BSG Blog: http://battlestargalactica.contentquake.com My Office Blog: http://theoffice.contentquake.com I make my own icons
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KELIA Title: The Pretty in Pink Fan Fic Manager Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 9/25/07 3:59am Subject: RE: Vadey's Drabble Thread - Round 2
	Wonderful!! Smooth was perfect for Anakin and Padme Weathered was so sad Obi-Wan put such a heavy burden on his shoulders, and he shouldn't have. Great response to the challenge -----signature----- "Do or do not, there is no try." Master Yoda A Light In The Darkness: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28150602/p1/?8 NaNaWriMo Progress: 11,018
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BigE Registered: Jul '02	Date Posted: 10/1/07 11:46am Subject: RE: Vadey's Drabble Thread - Round 2
	Very nice. Smooth was very sexy. Weathered...well this is why I hadn't read too many of the other drabbles just yet. I also conjured Obi-Wan. I wonder how many others have... Wrinkled - looking in the mirror, reflecting on the appearance - nicely done! -----signature----- Not charging for Awesomeness. Gentlemen's Writing Guild 'Shipwrecked' challenge: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/30481486/r30519170/ psst: It's "crazy good", says a source.
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VaderLVR64 Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 10/2/07 6:18am Subject: RE: Vadey's Drabble Thread - Round 2
	earlybird-obi-wan I hope to complete the challenge! mavjade Thank you so much! Alexis_Wingstar Glad you liked them! SilSolo You'd hope so. BigFatty Thank you! KELIA I had fun! BigE I'm a sucker for a suffering Obi-Wan! Week 2 (10.01.07) 6. Jedi He’s never wanted to be anything but a Jedi, never even considered another life. The Jedi life is the only one he’s known, and he wears it comfortably, at home in the demands of it. A Jedi’s life is not easy, his master used to say, and Obi-Wan long ago learned the truth of those words. But he finds pleasure in the duties, joy in the service. Nothing else could suit him so well. The Jedi life fits. Nothing more or less. Now the circle has turned again, and he is Master, not Padawan. Anakin Skywalker. Chosen One. His apprentice. 7. Sith Anakin Skywalker. Chosen One. His Apprentice. Sith. Even now, he finds it strange how the road has turned around up on itself and he is still a Jedi, though the Order has ceased to exist. Is he part of a whole now? Or just a part of nothing? He’s not sure he’ll ever know the answer. Or if he cares. The dark sun of the Sith has risen, helped to its zenith by the power of the Chosen One. Anakin. Lost forever? He must accept that truth, as painful as it is. Anakin is lost. Only death will free him. 8. Soldier Only death will free him. The Empire has claimed him and nothing short of death will set him loose. One conquered world after another. He has lost track of the names and the faces by now and can only be glad for it. Too many lives lost, too many worlds crushed in the Imperial fist. And he’s been part of it. Not willingly, but he doesn’t think that really matters anymore. The words “just doing my duty” have been worn thin…inadequate. It’s still his finger on the trigger. The galaxy had gone mad; nothing would ever be the same. 9. Civilian The galaxy had gone mad; nothing would ever be the same. She had watched in horror as the Jedi Temple burned, sniffed the smoke on the air. Her horror had turned to terror as she watched the new Emperor make an Imperial citizen out of her. She had woken up a citizen of the Republic, and gone to bed an Imperial. Strange how things worked out. The Jedi gone. The Empire flourishing. She was a simple woman with humble dreams. She turned to glance at the Temple ruins, so empty and forlorn. Like her. “Love live the Empire,” she whispered. 10. Politician “Love live the Empire,” she whispered. How many times would she say those words before she meant them? Her people had asked her to serve them in this new Imperial senate. A mockery, she often thought, a mere extension of Palpatine’s will. She dutifully signed her name to every document, swallowed the questions and protests before they could be given life. She was an Imperial citizen. How lucky for her to live in such an enlightened age! Bitter mirth rose up and made her laugh. It was Empire Day. Democracy’s end. The Empire. Palpatine’s creation. His jewel. His dark child. -----signature----- R.I.P John, Alex, Jason, and Christian Never forgotten Soldiers' Angels http://soldiersangels.org/ 2114 soldiers waiting for someone to care
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Alexis_Wingstar Registered: Sep '06	Date Posted: 10/2/07 6:44am Subject: RE: Vadey's Drabble Thread - Round 2 - week 2 up - Date Edited: 10/2/07 6:45am (1 edits total) Edited By: Alexis_Wingstar
	I love how you put the last line of each drabble as the first line in the next like a chain. Very well done! EDIT: First reply post! I told you I was gonna keep an eye out for this. -----signature----- 3rd time NaNoWriMo Participant 3rd time's the charm, right? RIGHT?
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KELIA Title: The Pretty in Pink Fan Fic Manager Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 10/2/07 7:29am Subject: RE: Vadey's Drabble Thread - Round 2 - week 2 up
	Those were so sad! I loved how the theme of each drabble flowed together so effortlessly. Great update -----signature----- "Do or do not, there is no try." Master Yoda A Light In The Darkness: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/28150602/p1/?8 NaNaWriMo Progress: 11,018
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earlybird-obi-wan Title: PT Scene Contest Winner Registered: Aug '06	Date Posted: 10/2/07 8:40am Subject: RE: Vadey's Drabble Thread - Round 2 - week 2 up
	loved how you ended the drabble and began with the end to go to the next one and so sad. -----signature----- writer and Star Wars fan FANART [link=http://boards.theforce.net/fan_art/b10020/25793899]fanart[/link] stories in my bio
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BigE Registered: Jul '02	Date Posted: 10/2/07 9:15am Subject: RE: Vadey's Drabble Thread - Round 2 - week 2 up
	How you tied the five together (and in chronological order no less) was really, really net. -----signature----- Not charging for Awesomeness. Gentlemen's Writing Guild 'Shipwrecked' challenge: http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/30481486/r30519170/ psst: It's "crazy good", says a source.
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SilSolo Registered: Mar '04	Date Posted: 10/2/07 8:18pm Subject: RE: Vadey's Drabble Thread - Round 2 - week 2 up
	I wonder, is the politician and civilian Mon Mothma? I really like how you made this flow from one drabble to the next with your sentence structure/repetition and how you put it all into chronological order -----signature----- http://boards.theforce.net/beyond_the_saga/b10477/27517284/p1/?11 Like this quick sketch: http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/32848083/ ? Then commission me. Prices are negotiable.
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NYCitygurl Title: Manager of SFFBC, C&G, NSWFF, and Icons Registered: Jul '02	Date Posted: 10/7/07 8:34am Subject: RE: Vadey's Drabble Thread - Round 2 - week 2 up
	Wow, these are really good!! I especially like the way you started each one with the end of the last one. Very cool I agree with SilSolo; I kept picturing the politician as Mon Mothma. That one is my favorite -----signature----- I agree with RJ Officially Idri's Muse
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VaderLVR64 Title: Manager Emeritus Registered: Feb '04	Date Posted: 10/12/07 12:09pm Subject: RE: Vadey's Drabble Thread - Round 2 - week 2 up
	Alexis_Wingstar Thank you! KELIA Glad you liked them! earlybird-obi-wan Thanks! BigE I'm glad you enjoyed them! SilSolo Yes, Mon is the politician, though it really could have been almost anyone. NYCitygurl Thanks for reading! Week 3 (10.08.07) 11. Mother She was not his mother. No amount of wishing could make that so. Still, Beru found solace in holding the small, warm body close to her and imagining, even if only for a moment, that she had nurtured him within her own body. The privilege of raising him had been an unexpected gift, and she never forgot to pray for the woman who had died giving him life. His life had given her hope, and so the circle would continue. Luke sighed in his sleep and Beru smiled. It did not matter so much that she was not his mother. 12. Father He was not his father. A Jedi relinquished all such bonds and attachments. If forced to put a mundane label on it, Obi-Wan might have said that he was more like Anakin’s brother than his father. Still, there were moments when he looked at the boy, so bright and full of promise and his heart would expand with pride; surely no father could feel any more. It was best to remind himself that the bond between them was that of Master and Padawan. Anakin smiled up at him, his eyes lively…curious. He was not his father. But close. So close. 13. Sister She was not his sister. That Han Solo could not believe. The idea that Leia Organa, princess of Alderaan, was sister to Luke Skywalker, naïve and reckless farmboy was just too fantastic to even consider. Still, she seemed sincere in her declaration. Han wanted to believe. So badly did he want to believe. He looked into her eyes, seeking the truth, seeing it. It was true then. The princess and the boy who thought he was a Jedi. Funny how things worked out. She was Luke’s sister after all. Then he touched his lips to Leia’s…she was not his sister. 14. Brother He was not her brother! She stared into his earnest blue eyes, wanting to refute it, needing to. But he merely gazed back her calmly, his compassion almost her undoing. She didn’t mind claiming Luke as brother, but the darkness that came with him made her flinch away. Vader. To accept Luke as brother meant accepting the other as father. An unbearable choice, but not to choose… That was not possible either. To be alone or to be linked forever to the monster in black. Leia felt her heart break within her. “I know…I’ve always known…” The choice was made. 15. Friend He could never be a friend, not now. Too much had passed between them, too many lies had been told, too many secrets had been harbored. For a moment, Anakin longed to open up his heart, to lean on Obi-Wan’s enviable strength. But would he listen with the friend of a heart…or that of a Master? Anakin knew the answer already, knew that Obi-Wan Kenobi would always be a Jedi first and a man second. Anakin, however, was a man first and a then a Jedi. There was no one he could trust. No one at all. Except perhaps… “Palpatine.” -----signature----- R.I.P John, Alex, Jason, and Christian Never forgotten Soldiers' Angels http://soldiersangels.org/ 2114 soldiers waiting for someone to care
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