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SUGARBANTJINN Registered: Apr '07	Date Posted: 2/3/08 12:40pm Subject: Better than a Slave's Life (Shmi, vignette)
	Better than a Slave’s Life By SugarBant Jinn Disclaimer: all characters and places belong to George Lucas. No credits were made from this story – I do it purely for love. Rating: G Genre: Missing Scene The howling wind picked up the omnipresent sand and hurled it against the adobe walls of the Skywalker slave hut in a natural sand blaster, as the latest sandstorm ripped through Mos Espa. Inside, Shmi Skywalker sat down at her workstation and activated her aeromagnifier. Picking up a computer part, preparing to clean it, she realized it was already clean, and in better repair than she’d left it! She smiled and shook her head as she placed it with the finished ones and selected another. It wasn’t the first time that one or more pieces had mysteriously cleaned themselves; Shmi knew what had happened. Unable to sleep, Anakin had crept out of bed and started tinkering. Perhaps she should be unhappy with him for sneaking out of bed in the middle of the night, but he was so sweet and thoughtful that somehow she couldn’t. Her smile widened as she pictured Ani, cheeks and hands smudged with grease, hunched over his latest projects. And what projects they were! This time it was a protocol droid ‘to help out around the house!’ and, more to her chagrin, a podracer –both constructed entirely out of castoff parts, or pieces Watto deemed worthless. She didn’t think she’d mind the droid so much – might even welcome the help on days when she felt like the proverbial mother who’s work was never done. But the podracer. That was a bantha of a different color. She closed her eyes against the memory of the last crash. How easily it could’ve claimed her sons’ young life! He hadn’t even finished that race, but she’d been overjoyed when he’d walked away practically unscathed. Even so, she couldn’t bring herself to discourage him! Anakin had such an uncanny skill with all things mechanical it was almost unreal. And he wasn’t selfish with that skill, either. Apart from his duties at Wotto’s Junk Shop, and his projects, he had befriended Jira, an elderly fruit seller. He was helping her find a cooling unit for her booth. He also liked to help Shmi. How she enjoyed and treasured that bonding time with her son, when they would sit and clean and tinker with parts, talking and laughing and dreaming together. It was on one such occasion that he told her of a dream in which he’d been a Jedi and freed all the slaves on Tatooine. It wasn’t the first time he’d talked to her about the Jedi. She remembered the mixture of awe, reverence and excitement that had shone brightly in his blue eyes as they spoke of the famed knights of justice. His ultimate, secret dream was to become one himself. She wanted that for him more than anything! Maybe it was impossible, but so were the circumstances of his conception! After all, her Ani deserved so much better than a slave’s life. Shmi’s thoughts were interrupted by a familiar tingling sensation at the back of her neck that meant Ani was coming. With rag still in hand, she stood, and went to greet him. Feedback appriciated! -----signature----- Bant and Jonny. Forever one. Two hearts entwined God's Will will not take us to a place where His Grace will not carry us. Padawan Sunkisser 288days O my, my this here Anakin guy Maybe Vader someday later, Now he's just a small fry!
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Meredith_Kenobi Registered: Jul '05	Date Posted: 2/3/08 4:56pm Subject: RE: Better than a Slave's Life (Shmi, vignette)
	You wrote Shmi's character really well. Her motherly affection and love were so tangible in this story. How terrible she must have felt when Anakin's dream came true, and he left to become a Jedi! Beautiful work, SUGARBANTJINN! -----signature----- Proud to be ZaraValinor's Padawan Delighted to be brodiew's Master
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Alexis_Wingstar Registered: Sep '06	Date Posted: 2/3/08 5:59pm Subject: RE: Better than a Slave's Life (Shmi, vignette)
	You portrayed Shmi's love for her son very well here. Sweet viggie -----signature----- 3rd time NaNoWriMo Participant 3rd time's the charm, right? RIGHT?
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SUGARBANTJINN Registered: Apr '07	Date Posted: 2/3/08 9:07pm Subject: RE: Better than a Slave's Life (Shmi, vignette)
	thanks, everyone! I know it's not really my best, but I'm gad to see you enjoid it! -----signature----- Bant and Jonny. Forever one. Two hearts entwined God's Will will not take us to a place where His Grace will not carry us. Padawan Sunkisser 288days O my, my this here Anakin guy Maybe Vader someday later, Now he's just a small fry!
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silverfighter Registered: Apr '07	Date Posted: 2/4/08 9:56am Subject: RE: Better than a Slave's Life (Shmi, vignette)
	Alright Bant, why didn't you tell me that you posted another story?! This was wonderful, you really got into Shmi's head perfectly! She remembered the mixture of awe, reverence and excitement that had shone brightly in his blue eyes as they spoke of the famed knights of justice. His ultimate, secret dream was to become one himself. Those lines were really cool. Good story, Bant! ~Silverfighter -----signature----- "Today in the town of David a Savior has been born to you; he is Christ the Lord." ~~*~~ "Glory to God in the highest, and on earth peace to men on whom his favor rests."
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Gina Registered: Jun '03	Date Posted: 2/4/08 2:47pm Subject: RE: Better than a Slave's Life (Shmi, vignette)
	This is lovely! You portrayed Shmi's love for her son and her hopes for him beautifully. -----signature----- A long time ago in a house far away, there was a mother who was strong in the ways of the Force. She "forced" her sons to clean their room, she "forced" her sons to behave. - Part of a story written by my 9 yr. old sons I found while cleaning their desks
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SUGARBANTJINN Registered: Apr '07	Date Posted: 2/4/08 2:54pm Subject: RE: Better than a Slave's Life (Shmi, vignette)
	Gina posted: This is lovely! You portrayed Shmi's love for her son and her hopes for him beautifully. Thankyou very much! I think I might've hit on something with POVs... Alright Bant, why didn't you tell me that you posted another story?! sorry, sorry!!! I just PMed you about them! please don't eat me! -----signature----- Bant and Jonny. Forever one. Two hearts entwined God's Will will not take us to a place where His Grace will not carry us. Padawan Sunkisser 288days O my, my this here Anakin guy Maybe Vader someday later, Now he's just a small fry!
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celine Registered: Sep '07	Date Posted: 2/22/08 10:21pm Subject: RE: Better than a Slave's Life (Shmi, vignette)
	This is sweet...and so poignant because we know what fate has in store for Anakin. So sad, the future for such a sweet boy. -----signature----- Be bold and mighty forces will come to your aid. The Journal of Loch Thrindarr http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=27948751&brd=10476&replies=3
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arthurweasley Registered: Jan '08	Date Posted: 3/1/08 10:07am Subject: RE: Better than a Slave's Life (Shmi, vignette)
	I'm really impressed!! The writing is extremely good! You can tell more in a sentence than most. Very good!! -----signature----- I distinctly remember forgetting that. The journal of Orto Lann of Orto: http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=27981433&brd=10476
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Jaina_and_Jag Registered: Apr '03	Date Posted: 3/1/08 12:08pm Subject: RE: Better than a Slave's Life (Shmi, vignette)
	Very cute. I really liked Shmi's perspective here.
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SUGARBANTJINN Registered: Apr '07	Date Posted: 3/14/08 4:49am Subject: RE: Better than a Slave's Life (Shmi, vignette)
	thanks somuch,aurthur,and Jaina_and_Jag! Glad ya'll enjoied it! Thanks for reading! -----signature----- Bant and Jonny. Forever one. Two hearts entwined God's Will will not take us to a place where His Grace will not carry us. Padawan Sunkisser 288days O my, my this here Anakin guy Maybe Vader someday later, Now he's just a small fry!
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