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Inexorable Pain (Anakin/Vader viggie, post-ROTS, Response to The Reborn Viggie Challenge)
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Jaina_and_Jag
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Inexorable Pain (Anakin/Vader viggie, post-ROTS, Response to The Reborn Viggie Challenge)
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Title: Inexorable Pain
Timeframe: post-ROTS
Characters: Anakin/Vader
Genre: Drama/Angst
Summary: Anakin has re-emerged for a moment.
Notes: This was written for The Reborn Viggie Challenge. Big thanks to NYCitygurl for betaing this!   This is my first time writing Anakin/Vader and only my second time writing something in The Saga. I really hope that it turned out all right.
Disclaimer: Not my characters. Oh how I wish they were, but I think George might get angry if I tried to take them.
This was the challenge:
March Challenge
Submission Deadline: 29 March
MAIN CHARACTOR: Anakin Skywalker
Rules:
1) You must focus you’re fic around the main character given. (Any character or relationship is acceptable as long as the focus remains on the main character.)
2) You must include at least one flashback.
3) The main genre(s) can include angst, drama and/or mush. Your vig should be focused on one of these genres, but you can still have elements of other genres such as humor.
4) You must include (in bold) the words battered, relentless and disorienting. (I know…sooo tragic! )
This first challenge I will leave pretty open so that people won’t be limited and are more likely to get this thread off the ground.
(As those of you that participated in the previous version of this thread know, we had a problem of getting people to write vigs.)
(Necessary words are in bold and flashbacks are in italic.)
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Anakin awoke and found that everything was disorienting. Nothing felt right. He took a deep breath and was shocked by the sound. It was raspy and harsh. He took another breath and it was identical to the first. He opened his eyes and was surprised to find that he appeared to have some sort of mask upon his face. He lifted his hands, intent upon removing the offending mask, but his arms didn’t move. They were bound at his sides and a sudden panic gripped him as he struggled against the restraints.
The restraints didn’t budge and he began the Jedi calming techniques. When he thought the word ‘Jedi’ everything came back to him.
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Mace Windu’s body flew out the shattered window and Chancellor Palpatine turned to Anakin, but he was not the Chancellor that Anakin had remembered. Palpatine was the Sith Lord who was going to save Padme’s life, and Mace Windu’s death was necessary for his love to live.
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The younglings’ screams pierced Anakin’s soul, but he was relentless. These younglings needed to die to protect his child. As long as they were breathing, his wife and child were in danger. His lightsaber slashed through all who stood in his way. Tears filled his eyes, but they were ignored; this was necessary.
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His Master’s words reached his ears, but yet Anakin didn’t hear. His anger filled his senses and blurred his judgment. Anakin leap over his Master and slashed toward him, but his lightsaber found no purchase. Suddenly, he was lying on the bank and inhuman screams assaulted his ears. It took a moment for his brain to register that it was he who was screaming. The last thing he saw was his Master’s sad eyes before his battered body caught fire, taking him to the welcome blackness.
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Anakin would have cried if he could, but the mask didn’t allow for emotion. Where was Padme? He had done everything for her, but yet she was not with him. He reached out toward her familiar presence in Force, but he found nothing.
“Padme?” he breathed. He knew that it had been he who had spoken, but yet the voice that reached his ears was unfamiliar. This voice was harsh and mechanical, sending a chill to what was left of his bones.
His life had been forever changed and he vaguely remembered something Palpatine had told him. Something about his beloved, but the words were just out of reach. His consciousness refused to divulge its knowledge and instead, Anakin began to study his surroundings.
He was in what appeared to be some kind of medical chamber, but it was much more advanced than anything he had ever seen before. It was filled with unfamiliar items that had undoubtedly helped to transform him into whatever it was he had become. He knew even without looking at himself that he was no longer the man he remembered. He would forever be more machine than man.
His ears were finally adjusting to the sound of his breathing and he reached into the Force to find his center. His memories were slowly returning to him. He knew that he was no longer Anakin Skywalker, but at the same time he was. He felt like there was a war within himself. For the moment, Anakin Skywalker was winning, but soon the other presence would take over.
Anakin struggled against his unknown foe, but was far too weak to resist. In a matter of moments, Vader had taken control. Vader was much stronger than Anakin had been, and the lost memories of Anakin’s wife poured forth.
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Padme was clutching at her throat with fear and pain in her eyes. Her lips tried to form words, but no sound came. Finally, the pressure on her throat was release and she collapsed to the ground.
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“Lord Vader, can you hear me?”
“Yes, Master. Where is Padme? Is she safe? Is she all right?”
“It seems in your anger you killed her.”
“I… I couldn’t have! She was alive; I felt it!” And anguished scream followed the words.
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And with a final strangled cry, Anakin Skywalker was buried deep within the machine called Vader.
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Thanks for reading.
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And with a final strangled cry, Anakin Skywalker was buried deep within the machine called Vader.
 Heart...broken...tiny...pieces...
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I love it! How aching  I especially love this part: His Master’s words reached his ears, but yet Anakin didn’t hear. His anger filled his senses and blurred his judgment. Anakin leap over his Master and slashed toward him, but his lightsaber found no purchase. Suddenly, he was lying on the bank and inhuman screams assaulted his ears. It took a moment for his brain to register that it was he who was screaming. The last thing he saw was his Master’s sad eyes before his battered body caught fire, taking him to the welcome blackness.
And the last scream before Anakin was buried alive in Vader... yep, that's exactly how I thought of it ever since I saw that scene!
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great response to the challenge. And that final. awww Anakin was burried in Vader.
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He felt like there was a war within himself.
That bit just about sums up Anakin's story. To me, it always seemed he was battling between what he knew was right and what his emotions told him was right. Good work.
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That was brutal
But it serves Anakin right to be tormented by the painful memories of all he's done .
Great response to the challenge
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Great response. Very heartbreaking!
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VaderLVR: Heart...broken...tiny...pieces...
Aww! Thanks for reading!
SJ: I love it! How aching
Thanks!
I especially love this part: His Master’s words reached his ears, but yet Anakin didn’t hear. His anger filled his senses and blurred his judgment. Anakin leap over his Master and slashed toward him, but his lightsaber found no purchase. Suddenly, he was lying on the bank and inhuman screams assaulted his ears. It took a moment for his brain to register that it was he who was screaming. The last thing he saw was his Master’s sad eyes before his battered body caught fire, taking him to the welcome blackness.
When I thought of that scene in ROTS, this is how I imagined it from Anakin’s side. He’s so blinded by his own hubris that he just didn’t even consider that he might lose.
And the last scream before Anakin was buried alive in Vader... yep, that's exactly how I thought of it ever since I saw that scene!
Yeah… there’s the scream for Padme and then I always thought that that wasn’t truly when Anakin was gone… that he was still in there for a little longer, trying to take over again, but then when he realizes what he’s done he just disappears.
earlybird: great response to the challenge.
Thanks!
And that final. awww Anakin was burried in Vader.
I know.
slow_dawn: He felt like there was a war within himself.
That bit just about sums up Anakin's story. To me, it always seemed he was battling between what he knew was right and what his emotions told him was right.
I know! It always seemed that way to me too. It was his upbringing, I say. With his mother he was always dealing with things on a emotional sort of level, but then when he went to the Jedi he was supposed to be serene and such. He just didn’t know which to go by… and he ended up choosing poorly.  
Good work.
Thanks!
KELIA: That was brutal
But it serves Anakin right to be tormented by the painful memories of all he's done .
Definitely agreed here! It’s the least that can happen to him for all the bad he’s done. 
Great response to the challenge
Thanks!
Takianna: Great response. Very heartbreaking!
Thanks!
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Nice.
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