p_stotts posted:You just had to stop it there, didn't you? Couldn't resist torturing your readers just a bit more. I love the building tension and how you left Mara's role in the eventual confrontation a question mark. I look forward to seeing how this all turns out. Hopefully with Luke and Mara coming out of this alive and free to be together.
Jade_eyes posted:Your Mara continues to be the most lovable and amazing--she's everything I love about her.
Ocelotl_Nesto posted:OOH that was nice. I like it when a good author will take a moment that was underexplained and relate it nicely. You melded cannon with AU very well. More important you did not get into tiresome dialogue and over analysis that put a drag on the storyline.
dancing_star posted:Absolutely amazing post!! (But when has one of your posts not been?
ccp posted:Wow!
baru_chan posted:Don't have much time to give a proper reply -- must dash off to school soon -- but I'm glad Luke knows Mara's real name now!
MiralukaJedi posted:Very nice. Looks like we're heading to quite the turning point.
wbsaw posted:Very impressive!! Darth Daddy approves of A Mara and Luke match??..Even if its for his own twisted reasons its still unexpected!! I have found canon not worth the powder to blow it away, so any and all AU are usually an improvement..Its just harder to be better than or to greatly ENHANCE the sacred OT...this does!! I much look forward to your confrontation scene.. At last count I have found 4 different versions of a similar AU. Up to this point you are are FAR more accomplished writer than any of the others..So I can't wait for yours, but will admit to an "academic" interest in comparing the earlier ones with yours..
DaenaBenjen42 posted:The twists and the turns as they get to know each other for real at last, as she finally let's him in, as she finds out that there isn't just ONE Emperor's Hand but possibly MANY... wow. Well done and wonderful post.
angry_bentu1 posted:Damn you Darth Vader! *shakes fist* Always ruining my mushy L/M moments.
mazlow01 posted:WOW! This is an awesome story. Well written and paced perfectly. Will the new variable(Mara) be enough that Vader will live on to become Anakin once again?
ginchy posted:Wow, that an update! I'm wondering how Mara being there is going to change everything and I love how Luke knows her real name now. Vader's reaction was very interesting in that he approves of L/M if only for his own ends. Mara and Luke's conversation was gut wrenching to read and Mara's realization that Luke also has feeling for her would have been so wonderful if only there wasn't so much deceit and so much to lose heading straight their way. I loved this update and am anxiously awaiting the next. Thanks for the PM!
AvenKiel posted:Fantastic Job!
Jedi_Liz posted:come on Mara, make the right decision, you have the ability to break free......He LOVES you.....isn't that good motivation?
dianethx posted:Wonderful. I loved that Mara was able to get past her training and tell Luke the truth about her mission. I'm also glad that Vader can see how the Emperor has manipulated Jade and himself to bring Luke back to him for turning. It should be interesting to see if Jade hangs back or helps destroy Sidious. Good job.
Spiritweaver posted:Great story! I can't wait to see what happens with Luke/Vader/Palps/Mara. I'm hoping for the happy ending! Wonderful job on this, I like how you slightly altered the plot to make Mara fit. Now I just hope she makes the right choice. applause Please PM me when you post the next part! Thanks!
JediXManSerenaKenobi posted:This story is absolutely fantastic!! I can't wait to read more - you portray the characters so beautifully. One of the best stories I've read. If you wouldn't mind, I'd love to be added to the PM list. - Serena
Jedi-2B posted:I have faith in her, too. And in the author. But unless Luke's previous faith in his father is restored and proven to be true, they're not going to having an easy time of succeeding.