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My Front Porch Looking In (Prequel rewrite.) , 9-05-08: The News
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PetraKenobi
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Date Posted:
5/7 6:32pm
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My Front Porch Looking In (Prequel rewrite.) , 9-05-08: The News
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the title is a little weird *especially if you consider the country song by the same name!* but I thought it was kind of appropriate. If you don't think so, feel free to suggest titles. Feedback and criticism is welcome and appreciated, but if all you can say is something hateful, don't post at all. It's in first person, but when describing other character's emotions, thoughts, etc... it'll be in third person *I think*; also, I've pretty much decided that part 1 will be in first person, parts 2-5 will be third person. It's a really restraining form to write in first person, I think. plus parts 2-5 are more important to the story.
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My life, as I knew it, was about to end. When Qui-Gon, Padme, R2D2, and Jar Jar Binks first walked through the junk shop doors, I thought it was just business as usual. Little did I know those four strangers would be involved in events that would forever change me, mature me, and scar me.
“Hi chuba de naga?” Watto asked the four as they walked into the dark, somewhat crowded, junk shop. Translated, the welcoming phrase meant “What do you want?” I knew Huttese fluently, as did my mother and brother, and I was a little taken aback that this man knew Huttese, or at least understood it, since he and his companions didn't look like they were from Tattoine. Most citizens of Tattoine spoke Huttese.
“I need parts for a J-type 327 Nubian.” He calmly replied. The man was tall, somewhat broad shouldered, and bearded with shoulder length gray hair. He was dressed as a farmer; but I had never seen him before, and in this town, you don’t see many new people.
“Ah yes, yes. Nubian. We have lots of that. Peedenkel! Naba dee unko!” Watto shouted. He was yelling at Anakin, my brother and 8 years her junior. “Coona tee-tocky malia?” Watto asked impatiently, wondering what took Anakin so long; which in reality, didn’t take him more than a minute.
“Mel tassa cho-passa” Anakin replied, a bit peeved at Watto’s impatience.
“chut-chut! Ganda doe wallya” Watto replied, telling Anakin to watch the shop. He must have forgotten that I was behind the counter, repairing a broken leg of a droid. However,I was sitting down cross-legged in front of it so nobody could see me unless they stood right by the counter and looked over. Watto turned back to Qui-Gon. “Soo, let me take thee out back. Ni you’ll find what you need.”
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KaraJadeKim
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interesting title Kenobi i like it though  only you would come up with something like that  nice job
Kara
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PetraKenobi
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want me to break your arm again Kim? I can certainly do it. *crosses arms and smirks*
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PetraKenobi
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Date Posted:
5/11 6:49pm
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RE: My Front Porch Looking In-UPDATED 5\11
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As Anakin jumped up onto the counter and sat down on it, Qui-Gon, Watto, and R2 went out back in the junk yard.
“Anakin, will you give me that?” I turned around slightly and pointed at a tool on the counter. He threw it to me and I caught it gracefully.
Anakin turned back to Padme. “Are you an angel?” He asked. I laughed softly to myself; a little embarrassed at my brother’s innocent question, but thankful I was somewhat hidden.
Padme turned to him, the question seeming to amuse her. “What?” she replied, keeping her amusement apparent only in a smile.
“An angel; I’ve heard the deep space pilots talk about them. They’re most the beautiful creatures in the universe. They’re from the moons of Iego, I think.”Anakin said, matter-of-factly.
“You’re a funny little boy. How do you know so much?” Padme replied, obviously interested in this little boy dressed in rags.
“I listen to all the star pilots who come through here. I’m a pilot you know, and someday I’m going to fly away from this place.” Anakin said as he fiddled with a piece of machinery.
“You’re a pilot?” asked Padme.
“Yep. All my life.” He said cheerfully.
A\N: more next week. 
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cliffie kenobi unless you want me to toss you I would think twice about breaking my arm
  pm list please even though i read it before
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Date Posted:
5/12 2:37pm
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well, I ran out of creative juices last night when writing the cliffie.
so, ha. *smirks then hides*
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5/12 4:49pm
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Fine this time i will forgive you kenobi
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5/13 7:46am
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you'd better Kim or someone's arm is going to be hurting. 
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Date Posted:
5/14 10:41am
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I won't be updating much this week. Our dog, Abbie, had tumors in and outside her body, as well as heartworms, and we had to euthanize her today, so due to that, Im' too upset to be posting anymore or writing. I was really close to her and it's very hard to believe she's gone.  Prayers would be welcome and appreciated.
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I will pray for you kenobi its hard to lose a pet i am so sorry 
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“How long have you been here?” Padme asked.
“Since I was very little; three I think. My mom, sister and I were sold to Gardulla the Hutt, but she lost us betting on the podraces.” Anakin said without shame or embarrassment.
“You’re a slave?” Padme said, horrified, though she didn’t show it.
“I’m a person and my name is Anakin.” The little boy said with a tint of anger in his voice.
“I’m sorry, this is a strange place to me.” Padme said, for it was indeed alien to her.
“Anakin, did you finish what I asked you to do earlier?” I said, my voice somewhat muffled.
“yes, why?” Anakin replied.
“Just wondering.” I said as I stood up, wiping my hands on a rag.
“Who are you?” Padme asked, somewhat surprised by the blonde seventeen year old appearing out of nowhere.
“Petra Skywalker; his older sister. And you are?” I asked Padme. I definitely knew that Padme and Jar Jar weren’t from Tattoine.
“Padme Naberrie.” The young handmaiden replied.
A\N: enjoy!
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nice update Kenobi
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This looks good. Add me to your PM list, please. 
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Jar Jar had found a little droid and activated it. It was running around the shop as Jar Jar tried to catch it. He caught it around the neck but didn’t know how to turn it off.
“Hey! Hit the nose.” Anakin said as Padme and I watched Jar Jar in amusement.
Jar Jar hit the nose and the droid folded up and lay on the floor. Qui-gon and R2 came back in.
“We’re leaving. Jar Jar.” Qui-gon said, obviously upset over something.
“I’m glad to have met you both.” Padme said as she walked out with the others.
“I was glad to meet you too!” Anakin shouted as he turned back to the piece of machinery he had in his lap.
Watto flew back into the shop, disgust evident on his face. “Ootmians. Tinka me chasa hopoe ma booty na nolia.”
“La lova num botaffa.” Anakin replied, not at all unhappy with having met Padme.
Watto growled then said, “Fweepa niaga. Tolpa da bunky dunko.”
Anakin jumped off the counter and ran outside to finish his job for the day. Watto turned to me.
“Are you done?” He asked, and I didn’t’ want to make him any madder by delaying a response.
“Yes.” I replied; his attitude always annoyed me but I couldn’t’ do anything about it.
“Good then you can go home.” He said, half-interested.
“But…”
“Go home, Skywalker. You’re done for the day.” He snapped angrily.
A\N: if there's no more next week, forgive me. It's sort of hard to find inspiration.
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Date Posted:
5/24 5:22pm
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nice update kenobi i understand i can't find inspiration much either.
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Very good! I wonder what will happen next...
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