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My Front Porch Looking In (Prequel rewrite.) , 9-03-08: Obi-Wan's Alive!
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Alexis_Wingstar
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Sep '06
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5/27 7:58pm
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RE: My Front Porch Looking In (Prequel rewrite.) UPDATED 5\24
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I like this AU. I wonder now which Skywalker will wind up being a jedi. 
I'm so sorry to hear about your dog, Abbie. I've had to euthanize two dogs in my life. It's painful, I know. 
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PetraKenobi
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5/28 7:04pm
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RE: My Front Porch Looking In (Prequel rewrite.) UPDATED 5\24
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@Silverfighter: you never really know with me, lol.
@Alexis: thank you! I'm glad you like it so far.  yes, it's been hard to adjust to life without her but I'm glad that she's no longer in pain. I'm really looking forward to getting another dog within the next year or so. 
I didn’t want to go home; I wanted to wait for Anakin but I also knew I shouldn’t make him any madder. I nodded my head and started walking home, avoiding the busier streets and going the long way. For some reason, the four strangers weighed heavily on my mind. It felt like they would be involved in my life for a long time, yet I didn’t know why. I shrugged my shoulders as I got closer to home, really wanting nothing else than to climb into bed and go to sleep. Shmi, my mother, or rather my adopted mother, met me as I walked into the hovel.
“How was your day?” She asked cheerfully.
“It was fine, Mom.” I replied wearily.
She eyed me suspiciously. “Somehow I don’t think that is the case.”
“Mom, my day was fine.” I retorted, somewhat sharply.
“All right, I’m sorry.” She threw her hands up and walked back into the kitchen, cleaning up.
I rolled my eyes, annoyed with the day and annoyed at my mom for no reason. Shmi always told me I had a short temper and she was right; something I hated about myself but for some reason, today’s events were grating on my nerves. I went to the room that Anakin and I shared and sat down on my bed, looking over at the cloth-covered heap on the desk; Anakin’s new project, a protocol droid. I lay down, my hands on my stomach, looking up at the ceiling. I must have fallen asleep because I was roused by Anakin shouting that he was home. But it sounded like he wasn’t alone. I groaned as I stood up. I walked out and was surprised to find the four strangers in our hovel. Inwardly, I groaned again. I didn’t want company right now but I guess I didn’t have a choice.
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Alexis_Wingstar
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5/28 7:40pm
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RE: My Front Porch Looking In (Prequel rewrite.) UPDATED 5\28
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Just like brothers everywhere, Ani does something that annoys his already annoyed sister. 
Thanks for the PM, and yeah, I did want PM's when you update... just forgot to ask.
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KaraJadeKim
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Date Posted:
5/29 5:16pm
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nice update kenobi Anakin does like to annoy somtimes
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PetraKenobi
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Feb '08
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Date Posted:
5/30 1:22pm
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Alexis_Wingstar posted:
Just like brothers everywhere, Ani does something that annoys his already annoyed sister.
Thanks for the PM, and yeah, I did want PM's when you update... just forgot to ask.
Yes, I'm drawing off my own experiences with my older sister for Anakin and Petra's interaction. Though it's not the same, I get the sense it's pretty similar.  More will be up in a few days so stay tuned! *and I added you to the list*
also, feel free to point out any story inconsistencies and misspellings, punctuation, etc.. as I want it to be as easy to read as possible.
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PetraKenobi
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6/1 10:52am
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Anakin was busy introducing the strangers: their names were Qui-Gon Jinn, Padme, Jar Jar Binks, and R2D2, the astro droid. Anakin took Padme’s hand and showed her C-3PO. Anakin activated him and 3PO took some wobbly steps across the floor before introducing himself to R2D2.
Shmi was standing by Qui-Gon. When I entered the room, his gaze turned to me.
“This is my daughter, Petra.” My mom told the foreigner. He nodded silently towards me as Shmi started into the kitchen. “Petra, help me please.” I lowered my eyes away from his and followed my mom into the kitchen to help her prepare what little food we had.
“They’re staying here tonight.” Shmi said.
I looked at her. “Mom, why?”
Shmi turned and met my gaze. “Because they can’t get back to their ship tonight. The sand storm is too bad for them to walk through it.”
I was getting a little annoyed by now. “Can’t they stay somewhere else?”
“Petra, I’m surprised at your attitude. At least try to be sociable during dinner.” She turned back to the stove. I took that as my cue to be quiet; so I started fixing the glasses and setting the table. I was silent, thinking over my thoughts. In a few minutes, we all sat down to dinner.
“Every slave has a transmitter placed inside their bodies somewhere.” Shmi said as she went around the table pouring blue milk and water into the glasses. I placed a bowl of fruit on the table, avoiding Qui-gon’s gaze. It’s not that he made me uncomfortable; I just felt like he was reading my thoughts and knew why I was so quiet. Yet, I felt a connection to him; one I couldn’t explain. It bothered me greatly. It didn’t strike me as being a romantic gaze; just a watchful gaze.
“I’ve been working on a machine to try and locate mine.” Anakin said, unaware of how I was feeling.
Shmi finished the last of the glasses and put the pitcher up. “Any attempt to escape…”
“And they blow you up. BOOM!”* Anakin slammed his hand down on the table, making Padme jump.
Jar Jar looked at Anakin. “How wude.”
Padme spoke up, “I can’t believe there’s still slavery in the galaxy. The Republic’s anti-slavery laws…”
“The republic doesn’t exist out here.” I said without interest. Qui-Gon looked at me as if he was surprised I had spoken. Shmi sat down next to me.
“We must survive on our own” she said looking at me.
The conversation continued, but I really wasn’t listening. Something about Anakin racing in a podrace and Qui-gon sponsoring him. Mom shook my shoulder slightly to let me know dinner was through and I helped her clean up. I absentmindedly washed the dishes and put them up.
“Petra, why are you in such a mood?” She asked me once we were alone.
“I’m just tired, mom. And I don’t feel like having company.” I answered wearily; I was tired, and I really wanted to go to bed.
“Fine. Go get Anakin please.” She turned back to cleaning the kitchen as I walked out onto the balcony. Qui-Gon and Anakin were talking; Qui-Gon cleaning a cut on Anakin’s arm. He scraped some of the blood off into something.
“Ani, it’s bedtime.” I said, standing in the doorway.
“Aw, Petra do I have to?” He said, somewhat whining.
I was trying not to be annoyed. “Anakin, no arguing.”
Anakin jumped off the balcony, somewhat reluctantly, and ran inside. Petra turned to go back inside but Qui-Gon’s soft voice stopped her.
“Do you have a cut on your hand?” He asked me, his soft gray eyes bearing into mine. I looked towards the stars and answered yes. He held out his hand to me, and I extended mine to meet his. He did the same thing with my hand that he did to Anakin’s arm.
“That’s all.”
A\N: sorry that this is a cliffie, but the post would have been longer than I wanted. Enjoy!
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KaraJadeKim
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Date Posted:
6/1 1:59pm
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nice update kenobi
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Alexis_Wingstar
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6/1 2:21pm
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Curiouser and curiouser. I can't wait to see more.
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PetraKenobi
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6/4 7:03pm
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“Mind telling me why?” I asked, somewhat curious.
“The same reason I checked your brother’s blood; for infection.” He answered calmly.
“I cleaned the cut; it isn’t infected.” I informed him before turning back inside. I didn’t realize though, that something was in fact out of the ordinary: I had a midi-chlorian count at exactly 9,875, 125 lower than Anakin’s chlorian count. When Qui-Gon’s apprentice Obi-Wan had received the reading, he didn’t’ believe it, but when he was told that it was a woman’s count, it blew him away even more. Something stirred in him, although he couldn’t figure out what at the thought of this mysterious woman.
I went into the bedroom that Anakin and I shared; he was already in bed with his back to me. I changed into sleeping clothes then walked over and placed my hand on his shoulder. He wasn’t asleep and rolled over to face me.
“What’s the matter?” He asked me.
“I’m just tired.” I replied, yawning.
He eyed me suspiciously with his blue eyes. “What do you think of them?”
I shrugged my shoulders; I really didn’t care about them.
“I like Padme.” He said, shaking off the curiosity.
“Goodnight Anakin.” I gave him a little kiss on the cheek, turned out the light, then walked back to my own bed and slipped in between the worn but clean covers. I really wasn’t as tired as I thought I was, but I soon heard Anakin’s steady breathing from across the room. I stared at the wall, trying to rid my mind of the four strangers. Three or four hours later, I finally was able to sleep, but with restlessness.
A\N: I was bored, so I decided to post a little more in order to end the cliffie!
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KaraJadeKim
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6/4 7:35pm
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Yeah you needed to kenobi you love cliffies girl *Tosses Petra*
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PetraKenobi
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6/4 7:41pm
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*dissipates it* I knwo someone else who loves them too. *tosses harry into kara*
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KaraJadeKim
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6/4 8:22pm
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Harry deflect it and shoves petra down
Kara: petra you know he might enjoy that to much 
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PetraKenobi
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6/4 8:42pm
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*petra shoved against harry* starfleet, you know I can break your arm.
OOC: don't get too weirded out; we RP over instant message and we tend to do it everywhere.
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PetraKenobi
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6/7 1:53pm
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The next morning was the morning of the race. Anakin and everyone else was awake and getting ready, although Anakin had gotten ready an hour or more ago. I reluctantly got out of bed and started to get dressed; I’d still have to work some today even though it was a racing day. I heard a knock on my door. I pulled on the overshirt I wore everyday and buttoned it; my hair was still down, but I picked up a brush and started brushing my hair as I answered the door. It was Qui-Gon.
“I’m sorry, did I interrupt something?” He asked, very sincerely.
I finished brushing my waist long hair. “No, I was just getting ready.”
“I was wondering, would you want to go to the arena early with me?”
“Why?” I asked in response to his question; not entirely sure why he’d ask me that.
“I was just wondering; you don’t have too.” He started to walk off.
“I’ll be finished in five minutes.” I closed the door and turned to the small mirror behind the door. I arranged my hair as usual and joined him and Jar Jar outside. We started walking to the arena, my mind elsewhere. It was Qui-Gon who broke the silence.
“I was able to convince Watto to give you the day off.”
I didn’t look at him; I just nodded my head in acknowledgment.
“Petra?” He asked me, stopping and putting his hand on my shoulder.
This time, I made eye contact. “What?”
“You just seemed preoccupied. Is everything okay?” those darn eyes of his bore into mine yet again but I didn’t have to tell a stranger my problems or feelings.
“I’m fine.” I shrugged his hand off my shoulder and started to walk on.
“I am a Jedi.”
I stopped and turned around. “That isn’t funny.”
His gray eyes twinkled as he laughed softly. “It isn’t meant to be, it’s the truth.”
A\N: I think I rushed the timeline a little and the podrace is barely in here but I hate writing it and it's just a big pain in the rear to write in everything. Part 2 will probably be in either script or third person form; but part 3 *Episode II* will be more than likely in script form because some of it is good enough that I don't want to change it or mess up.
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Alexis_Wingstar
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6/7 2:15pm
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I thought I responded to the last update!  That was cute interaction between brother and sister. So, are both Ani and Petra going to become jedi?
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